Cloud Article ALA: Reading and Analyzing the Language and Grammar By Mohammed Alalshaikh Professors Duetch-Kidder and

Brady English-121-AC6 George Mason University

Cloud Article ALA

For this article we will read and analyze the language and grammar used in the article Taking Account of Privacy when designing Cloud Computing Services. Siani Pearson who is a research scientist in the Security and Cloud Research Lab who graduated from Oxford University wrote this article. In a world of growing technology also called Technological Boom it is inevitable that developments take place in all parts of technology and mostly to increase convenience. Cloud technology, as a result, is the future if computing as it helps provide storage, which can be accessed from any device with an Internet connection. However, despite its ease and convenience it raises many privacy issues since the database is online. In this article however, Pearson provides us with possible solutions to this privacy issue.

The articles main focus is on analyzing different scenarios and the threats each of these scenarios create. She describes the scenarios as different sub points and each sub point has bullet points which each describe a risk and a possible explanation or solution to it. After separate analysis she gives a detailed description of privacy risk for clouding as a whole followed by ways to prevent this risk. Each preventive measure is provided as a sub point, which seems to be logically ordered in descending order of importance. This is followed by three more paragraphs describing designs used to make these preventions, their implementation and assessment to measure success. She has a consistent, easy to understand yet professional tone and usage of words through out these paragraphs.

Pearsons language is professional yet easy to understand. She uses basic grammar which is straightforward, precise and to the point. Her thesis, body and conclusion are very clear and are organized into a well-defined and categorized structure. There is an introduction paragraph containing an abstract. She has broken the paper into topics. Each topic has a background and detailed description. For more convenience she has created sub topics. In order to present an opposing view she explains risks and then how they can be solved.

Overall, after reading and summarizing the paper it is easy to see that the paper has a good flow and organized structure to it. Her qualifications and professionalism can be seen through the logical and structural steps given to her paper. The paper starts with a strong introduction, has strong evidence, solutions and opposing views evenly and logically distributed throughout the body and is followed by a strong conclusion that recaps the thesis while leaving the reader with a thought. She uses general and common English not making it to hard for the reader to read yet keeping it impressive in order to catch the readers attention. Overall it is a well-written article worthy of a read and shows the ethos of the author.

Reference: Pearson, S. (2009, March 6). Taking Account of Privacy when Designing Cloud Computing Services. www.hpl.hp.com/. Retrieved December 1, 2013 from http://www.hpl.hp.com/techreports/2009/HPL-2009-54.html.

c a. Introduction is logically arranged and contains the article title, the publication, the authors name and credibility information, and the articles main/central idea

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k. Reporting verbs clearly show where ideas come from and accurately reflect original authors tone and purpose l. All verbs are correct, including subject/verb agreement and verb tense m. Grammar is correct, including article choice, pronouns, plurals, singulars & possessives n. Sentence structure is varied, sentences are formed correctly with no run-ons or fragments o. Punctuation and spelling are correct p. References list and in-text citations are complete and formatted correctly No colon after the word Reference. Where are the page numbers? OVERALL: Word count needs to be more than double. Failure to analyze both STRUCTURE and LANGUAGE and to answer the questions set out for you (see note above near your thesis) No analysis of specific data, no examples of language elements. This half of the analysis missing.

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