Speech 04: Persuasive Speech

Megan Sirrine
Submitted to Professor Billington
COMM 1020-400-f14
Speech 4: Persuasive Speech
November 18, 2014
Persuasive Speech: Audience Assessment
Specific Goal: My audience will recognize they need to be more aware of what kinds
of deodorant they are using and try to look out for signs of hidradenitis.
Type of Claim: This is a claim of fact
Ethos:

Primary Ethos:
a) Competence: In 2011 I was diagnosed with hidradenitis and I
understand the consequences of it.
b) Fairness: I will offer up statistics of the reality of the disease and make
a point that this does not happen to everyone.
Secondary Ethos: I will cite three references.

Audience Assessment: Most of my audience members will probably have an attitude

toward my proposition that is uninformed.
Adaptation to Audience Attitude:
a. Common ground: I will explain my story in personal detail so that my audience
might understand my perspective and the researchers perspective.
b. Latitude of acceptance: I think my audience wants to remain healthy and they
want to be more aware on how they might be able to prevent this happening to
them.
Baby Steps: Because of my personal experience my audience will hear in simple terms
what they need to do to prevent this.
Pattern of Organization:

problem-solution

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Persuasive Speech: Key-Word Outline
Hidradenitis Awareness
Introduction
Hook: I never liked baseball. And when I woke up one morning with a baseball sized
lump in my arm pit I hated it even more. In 2011 I found out I had a condition
known as hidradenitis.

Proposition (or Hint at Proposition): Today I want to make you more aware of this
condition and what you can do to prevent this from happening to you.
Preview:
1. My personal story
2. Deodorant
3. Solutions/ Prevention
Transition: When I first went to the doctor to have them look at my lump I remember
how painful it was to even lift up my arm.
I.

Body
The first doctor I saw gave me some anti-biotic and told me I would need surgery
so he would have to recommend me to a new doctor.
A.
New doctor Dr. Hugh D. Voorhees
i. Diagnosis
b. Hidradenitis (i) Chronic Skin Condition
(ii) Pea sized to marble lumps
(iii) Infection
B.

Condition Worsening
i. Surgery
ii. Tumor
iii. Scars

Transition: When I first found out about this condition the very first thing my doctor had
asked me was, What kind of deodorant do you use?
II.
One of the biggest causes of my condition was because the deodorant I was using
was actually doing too good of a job at making me not sweat.
A. Clogging Pores
i. antiperspirant harmful Health Dangers of Underarm Deodorants article
By Victoria Parker
ii. aluminum free
B. Finding the right deodorant
i. Natural Resources
ii. Different Brands
Transition: While there is no official cure for hidradenitis there are many ways that you
can prevent this illness.
III.
Early detection - mayoclinic.org
i. Checking for Lumps
ii. Antibiotic
iii. Surgical Removal
Conclusion
When you become more aware of your health and start making the changes in your life
you can prevent this condition from occurring and live a happy and healthier life.
Works Cited:

Dr. Hugh Voorhees- General Surgeon

Parker, Victoria. "Health Dangers of Underarm Deodorants." LIVESTRONG.COM., 16 Aug. 2013. Web.
"Hidradenitis Suppurativa." Definition. Web. 25 Nov. 2014. Mayoclinic.org