ENGLSIH 115

PROFESSOR KUBLER

DANAY DIAZ

What
Ive Learned...
As a journalism major, I knew that
English was a class I would have to
exceed in. In high school writing essays
always came easy to me, however,
CSUN has taught me so much.
Professor Kubler truly inspired me to
be the best student I could be. With my
first essay, I was confident that it was
an A paper. However, I received a B+.
Although that is not the end of the
world, that is not where I wanted to be.
He was able to point out my
weaknesses and show me where it was
that I had to improve. He pointed out to
me that many of my sentences were
incomplete, did not have a straight
point, nor did I have a thesis. All issues
I knew I had, but I never knew how to
fix it. With the comments that my
professor gave me, I was able to focus
on those weak points. I reprinted my
essay, read it out loud and made many
comments. Reading it out loud to
myself allowed me to see the multiple
issues I had within my essay. When the
second essay came around, I knew I
had to get an A. I worked hard on what
it was my argument was going to be, so
I could state a strong thesis. I also
printed out my essay before turning it
in, read it out loud, and made many
corrections. With everything that I had
done to prepare my essay, I was able to
get an A- on my second essay. Although
it is not a stretch from my last grade, I
was very proud with my improvement.

ABOUT ME DANAY :)
Im a new freshman at CSUN currently
majoring in journalism. Coming into CSUN I
was not quite sure what to expect. I was ready.

TUESDAY, DECEMBER 9, 2014

My Strengths and Weaknesses

As I mentioned, in my first essay I was able to see the many weaknesses that
I had in my writing. A large weakness I had, which I always have had an
issue with is stating my thesis. Although I feel my opinion is very strong in
most essays, it is difficult for me to fully state how I feel. I have fallen into a
habit of stating my opinion throughout the essay rather than stating it fully
in the intro paragraph. Another weakness I have noticed this semester in
my writing, is that many of my sentences do not have an end. I will begin an
idea without being able to finish it. With my new idea of printing and reading
my essay out loud, I have been able to catch it more often and correct it. I am
very lucky to have had a professor who was able to point that weakness out
to me, because it was not something I was aware of. On top of a few
weaknesses, I learned a few strengths. For example, grammar and opinion. I
always go into an essay knowing what side I support. I also have almost
masted grammar within most of my writing.

and eager to break my old high school habits. I

began with my academics. I knew it was
important to build a good relationship with my
classmates and professors. I was lucky enough
to have a very vibrant and exciting english

professor. English being my favorite and best

subject, it was truly something i appreciated
very much. I have been able to take advantage
of my first semester and I love CSUN so much
more than I ever thought I would!

Essay Numero
Uno: Human
Rights VS Bill of
Rights
In my first essay, the main focus is
the issue about the separation of
church and state. The essay
introduces three different court
cases dealing with similar issues.
The first case discussed in the essayElane Photography-a photographer
denied a lesbian couple from
wedding photos, because it went
against the owners religious beliefs.
The company was then sued by the
couple, the couple was victorious.
The second case is very similar, a
local florist would not cater to a gay
marriage, because it was also
against the owners religious beliefs.
The jury has not yet came up with a
verdict. The third was the Hobby
Lobby Case, a very large popular case
which was able to appeal itself into
the supreme court. The case
consisted of female employers who
believed they should be covered for
emergency contraceptives. The
company refused to allow this,
because emergency contraceptives go
against the owners beliefs. In this
case, the company won and do not

RIGHT OR WRONG?
Religion?

Gay Rights?
have to cover female contraceptives.
My view on this is not the popular
one, I believe that the owners are
entitled to turn away customers due
to personal reasons. ------------ In my
first draft of the essay, my stance was
quite unclear. I was unable to bluntly
state my opinion on the cases.
Granted the cases are very
controversial and difficult to choose a

side, rereading my essay I could tell

my mind was intensely scattered.
With that being said, I tried to revise
my approach into the cases. I openly
describe my opinion and state why I
believe that the owners should have
the right to their religious beliefs. In
my revised version, I hope to be able
to have drawn the reader into a new
light.

MY ARGUMENT
In the first two cases discussed in my essay, gay couples are suing a
certain company or business for being bias and denying service for
sexual-orientation. Although it is not right to turn away a certain
person or couple because of personal lifestyles, it can be dealt with in
many different ways. Personally, being turned away for being a
woman or a certain way would offend me very much, however, I
would not take it to the extent of suing the company, especially if it
is a small family owned company.
However, in the third case, the company denying employers for
coverage on contraceptives, the company wins. My question is why
would religious beliefs win in the Hobby Lobby case and not in the
other cases?
My argument is that state/house needs to set a law where one side
wins each time, going back and forth will not set justice.

Essay Numero Dos: What Sexuality Really Does

support and idolize many of these
woman, that does not mean that I am
blind to many other successful
woman such as Hilary Clinton.

My second essay focuses on our

hyper-sexualized society. The
argument is mainly focusing on if our
society today is good or bad. There
are many things in todays society
that are not perfect. Feminism being
one of them. I am a proud woman,
supportive, and in many ways a
feminist. However, like I mentioned
feminism is not perfect. There are
many different views and discussions
about what feminist should truly
stand for. For example, my ideas are
not the favorite amongst many old
fashioned feminist. Nonetheless, as a
young woman living in this new
hyper-sexualized society, I believe
that old fashioned feminist need to
begin to assimilate into this new
lifestyle.
As an 18 year old girl, I do look up to
many women in the spot light, such
as Rihanna, Beyonce, Selena Gomez,
and many more. It is sad to say that
many parents would cringe at the
idea of their child becoming like one
of those ladies. Even though, I do

The idea of the essay was to explain

why a hyper-sexualized society is in
fact not a bad thing for woman. I
discuss why it is in fact empowering
for women to use their sexuality for
power. For example, in the photo on
the right of Beyonce spurred conflict.
Many people believe that it is a
degrading photo and that she is not
giving a good example to younger
girls. Hearing these conversations is
upsetting, because it is as if people
have forgotten what she has
accomplished. She has become one of
the most powerful people in the
world.
Woman have been fighting for a very
long time to get to the freedom and
respect that we have today. In fact,
there are still countries where
woman are not allowed to even show
their hair. We may live in a hypersexualized society, but I believe that
it is empowering, because it shows
how far we as women have come. It
shows that women have something
that mean do not.
In my first draft I have a lot of opinion
statements and not enough sources
and quotes. In my revised draft, I
quoted more women on the feminist
movement.

Each of these women represent feminism in their own way