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initial WP
submission:
An observation or
question I received
from De Piero or a
classmate:
The change(s) I
made to what I
initially wrote: (ie,
the change[s] I made
to column 1)
non-scholarly article
from collectiveevolution discussing
musical benefits in
general,
The scholarly
publications and the nonscholarly article, all
discussing benefits of
music, possessed
conventions that differed
with respect to tone.
(a phrase, sentence,
paragraph, idea,
move, punctuation,
piece of evidence,
etc.)
So, I decided to
analyze two scholarly
publications, one
discussing the benefits of
music from a
psychological standpoint,
Practicing Shouldnt
Don't you think it'd help Feel Boring, and the
to know this stuff from other from a sociological
standpoint, The
the get-go? That way I
can make more sense of perceived benefits of
the finer points of your participative music
making for non-music
argument?
university students: a
comparison with music
students, as well as a
non-scholarly article
from the website
collective-evolution
discussing musical
benefits with a more
general frame, 7 Ways
Music Benefits Your
Heart, Brain, & Health,
and compare their
rhetorical features to
understand how they are
similar and different.
Example/evidence for
this? Help me see it.
The publication
with the psychological
discipline began with a
story from the authors
childhood and had a
more-casual tone, giving
the reader a sense of
personality. The author
introduces, I started
figure skating at the age
of ten. It strays from the
conventional tone of its
genre, however, because
according to the article
Navigating Genres,
scholarly pieces will
possess more formal
tones(course reader).
The psychological
publication provided
proven facts about the
benefits of music...
The psychological
publication provided
facts about memory
improvement related to
music, proving that they
go hand-in-hand, and
presented the reader
with...
It included the
surveyed responses of
test victims, and
furthermore discussed
how music can
positively impact
people personally and
socially.
Victims? Of what?
In contrast, the
sociological publication
presented an experiment
on the different social
benefits related to music
with a methods and
results section included
to prove its validity. It
included responses of the
test victims from the
experiment who were
surveyed on how music
had benefited them, and
furthermore discussed
how music can positively
impact people personally
and socially.
Initially, my topic
sentence was a bit
ambiguous and didnt
possess direction. My
paragraph solely talks
about the structural
similarities, so stating that
these articles have
structural conventions
that are fairly similar
gives the reader a clear
idea of what they will be
reading about in the
paragraph.
For Example,
the article informs,
Music is capable of a
number of health
benefits including
lowering stress levels,
raising states of
consciousness, changing
moods, accessing
different states of mind,
developing the brain and
is useful in meditation
-which has a ton of
health benefits. Here, It
talks about the
capabilities of music
without bringing in
sophisticated health
terms
Including an example of
the moderate language
and explaining it adds
credibility to my
statement and shows the
reader that it is, indeed,
moderate language. This
ties into the readers
understanding of the piece
as a whole without being
left wondering how or
why the the audience is
who it is.
To complement the
authors moves
embedded in each of
these pieces, the way
they are constructed
plays a key role in their
effectiveness.
To complement the
authors moves
embedded in each of
these pieces, the way
each article is
constructed plays a key
role in their
effectiveness.