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100% true only richer people live longer. I mean you should not assert based on only their
research.People not only die of diseases but also from other things like accidents, poisoning
regardless of whether they are rich or poor. This research does not give us enough info why
rich people live longer. I suggest clarifying your inference.
Comment: I am finding it a little confusing when you use this word. The question will be,
requirements of what? I would suggest changing this word or add more words around it to
help readers understand what you're trying to say.
But I also cannot understand about the economy issues them angry about. I think the
economy has developing in Xinjiang, this is great. So in my opinion, this is because
they are selfish. And they not only killed Han Chinese, they also killed more Uighurs.
Until now, there are about a dozen times different degrees of terrorist attacks
happened in Xinjiang and nearly a thousand people deaths, the most of them are
Uighurs. So I do not think they have any reasons let others sympathetic. These
things happened in Xinjiang is that most people do not know because the Chinese
government control the news media. Many people feel dissatisfied about this, but I
think this is a kind of way that the government protect us. Because it does not caused
peoples panic. So what the Chinese government also did about the anti-terror."
comments:
1."What are the differences between these two groups?" (Han and Uighur)
2."I would like to know more about a reasons that made them to do all of these stuffs.
I think you need to be more specific in the opinion that you are writing."
Task: Answer the question in the first comment. Insert your answer into the current
paragraph.
Then reorganize the paragraph and then split it into two or more smaller paragraphs
so that it becomes clear what the various motivations are for the Uighur separatists.
Comment 5
All one impacts others in their relationship, homeless people doing so. When
homeless people taking drugs and alcohol, the others will effective too, how
does those things impact their life? To find the answer for this question from
the homelessness living in the shelter is much easier than people living on the
street, due to homelessness in the shelter are living as groups. What people
are believing that the shelter is much comfortable and less drugs and alcohol,
whereas, it definitely a wrong idea. According to the research source from NY
Times, Drug Addicts Among the Homeless: Case Studies of Some Lost
Dreams, the author Gina Kolata said that Mr. Parmenter said the shelter
where he lived was infested with rodents and pests and there were drugs all
over the place. Mr. Parmenters personal experiences told us the shelter
does not change the rate of drugs abuse of homelessness. Why are there
drugs all over the place? It is sort of chain reaction among homelessness,
they are actually influencing others as well as themselves. Mr. Parmenter also
recalled, I saw one man stabbed to death and another man beaten to death.
Eighty percent of the shelter population and 50 percent of the staff were doing
drugs.
COMMENT FOR: "Why are there drugs all over the place?
Good question! But I can't see any logic answer to that. "Why are there drugs all over the
place?" You should research more to find an answer to that question.
Task: You need to use your imagination and logic to make a few
guesses to the answer to this question. You might also be able to
guess an answer by looking at the second quote. Then I want you to
insert your answers into an appropriate place into this paragraph.
Finally, I want you to reorganize this paragraph and split it into two
smaller paragraphs, one with the They Say (what most people
think about homeless shelters) and an I Say paragraph (what is
actually true about the shelters).
Comment 1 revised: