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Requirements
The entire text is justified
Interesting Title
The Font is Arial size 12
All paragraphs are tabbed
Spoken in 3rd person, not in 1st
There is an outline
Thesis statement is present
Good arguments for the topic
The topic sends a persuasive message
The topic is original, it means a necessity
to humanity
The beginning of the introduction talks
about the topic and not the arguments
The Body has 3 paragraphs
Each argument has more than 2 good
examples, well explained
Excellent grammar usage: verbs well
conjugated, words spelled correctly
Appropriate use of punctuation marks
and capitalization rules
Complex and elaborated vocabulary
Good conclusion, great ending message
Essay was turned in on time
Final grade according to rubric (sent
through Phidias)

Julieta F and Maria Jose R

Met or not met?
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Yes
No
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No
Yes
Yes
Yes
Yes
Yes
Yes
Yes
No, the first argument is missing one
example.
Yes, very good in general, there are some
observations that need to be fixed.
There are some punctuation marks
needed in your text.
Good and complex vocabulary, I wish
there was more information!
Yes
Yes
5/8

Julieta Fernandez, and Maria Jose Rodriguez

Persuasive Essay
The Future Of Words
Outline
1. Price
They are expensive
We have to buy a lot of books.
Missing one example.
2. They are practical
You only need a tablet, phone or computer.
You cant lose them.
Books in physical get wet and ruin the paper.
You wont have the weight of your bag.
3. Evolution
Helps the students, for evolve and get used to
technology
Helps the students develop new abilities in
technology.
Knowledge in technology

TABSince the begging beginning of times time we

have used the books as a source of knowledge and
entertainment; books help us think, but we think it is
time for us to evolve and start using technology so we
can improve our society of young people. We support
the use of digital books because they are not expensive
they are practical and they help us evolve.(add commas
to separate each argument)
TABFirst of all comma we want to talk about the
prices of the books, books are really expensive, and as
we live in Colombia the books are three times more
expensive than in the United States, also the books
they ask for in school are expensive repetitive, use
synonyms or rephrase it, and they ask for a lot of books
too, since high school, our teachers try to avoid first
person start asking for more materials, as some of the
books they ask ask for are written in other countries, is
its difficult to find them too, and after reading these
books comma we never use them again, with digital
books we dont need to pay anything and it is the same
material. This word doesnt make it clear that you are
talking about a book.
TABThe problem about physical format replace
with another word books is that they can get damaged
or lost, they can also get ruined because of the rain and
they make your bag pack backpack heavier, another
advantage about digital format books is that they are
easier to find comma also there is the advantage that
you can also listen to audiobooks comma which will
help you improve your pronunciation. You only need a
phone, computer or tablet to find them, also you wont
forget them at home what are you talking about? This
isnt clear. As your books are in a computer comma
they wont make your bag uncomfortable.

TABWe believe that avoid first person physical

format books are great but, comma goes before but
we also think it is time for us to evolve, and get more
involved with technology, which after all, is our future.
Since we were kids comma we were told to read with a
physical book, but times have changed and now we
have other ways of doing things, such as reading, also
now we have audiobooks repetitive from last
paragraph, replace with other words which are useful
for people who need to improve in pronunciation. We
cant use we can also develop new abilities in
technology, which will help us a lot for our future.
TABFinally comma we want to say that digital
format books will be a good idea for young people;
students will be more calmed and relaxed, parent
parents wouldnt (use wont instead of wouldnt
because the rest of the sentence is written in future
tense) need to waste money in books that we are not
going to use later, and it will be easier for teachers to
be organized with their materials period???