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Writing Project 2
Writing 2: Zack De Piero
effects the writers structure, concepts and data as well as the readers perception of it. By
using a non-academic source as well, it will show how the two types of sources can
accomplish different things.
The first scholarly reference that I found was Stress, Motivation, and Drug
Addiction by Nick Goeders. Since the article was published in a psychological journal,
Goeders formatted in in APA style which included an abstract to get you in the correct
mindset, keywords for easy search results, and in text citations with footnotes in order to
give credit and allow access to background information if desired. Focusing on the
psychiatric aspect of drug addiction, the paper discusses those who are most at risk for
addiction, why they are more susceptible to addiction, and how they experiment with the
idea without abandoning research ethics in terms of human subjects. Throughout the
length of the research paper, Goeders uses elaborate language such as, The CRH
receptor blocker CP-154,526 also attenuates cue-induced reinstatement (Goeders), that
emphasizes that this is in fact a research paper written by professionals in their field.
Simpler moves or conventions of this paper included the department name on the top near
the paper title in order to somewhat tell the reader what the dimensions of drug addiction
will be focused on. There were also recommended reading at the bottom in order to give
other researchers the opportunity to double check and do their own research.
The overall purpose of Goeders paper seemed to be to provide the general
population with new information regarding how stress can potentially be a cause of drug
use and eventually addiction. Likely, the audience would mostly be other researchers who
are interested in this area of study, those who support it and those who do not support it
in order to find counter claims for their own work. Being a scholarly article, the
expectations from the reader are generally easy and clear, to be clear, informative,
unbiased, and as accurate as possible.
discussing the data, the authors write, Time effects are also included by means of yearly
dummies that control for statewide changes affecting crime rates from 1996 to 2000.
Failure to include significant cross-section and time-series effects would yield biased
coefficient estimates. (Edward Shepard) Without implying personal beliefs on the topic,
they simply report what the states do and why they do it leaving it up to the reader to
make an informed decision on what they wish to think about it. Toward the end of the
academic article, the authors identified the research gap by stating that The findings also
suggest possible directions for further research (Edward Shepard). The move is essential
to any research in the social science field in order to provide other researchers
opportunities to build upon your ideas.
As my second scholarly article, the purpose of this paper as well is meant to
inform and provide information regarding drugs and drug addiction. The framework for
this piece however is focused on the legal aspect and is meant for those who are currently
trying to uphold or overturn certain laws pertaining to substances. When first reading the
title, audiences expectations, or mine at least, was that the author would not only go into
specific laws and regulations but also specific statistics for the state of New York.
Vice is a Mainstream media news outlet that reports on things that are often go
unreported form regular media outlets. The very first thing I noticed different from the
academic sources were the use of academic and colloquial language, particularly in the
title. Not only does Vice use words and phrases that are more easy to understand and
typically heard around day to day conversations, but it also uses vulgar language, which
is very divergent from typical new sources as well as academic sources. For example, in
the arguable most important aspect of the article, the title, This Neuroscientist Argues
That Addiction Is Not a Disease and Rehab Is Bullshit. Neil Sharma uses the word
bullshit when words such as irrational or simply dumb would have sufficed.
Furthermore, this article was styled in a question & answer format, interview style, rather
than just a normal article. For the questions, Sharma has bolded them followed by the
Dr.s answers in normal text right underneath. The questions asked by the Vice author are
seemed to be written in order to trigger a specific response in order to get the point across
as soon as possible. For almost all questions however Sharma gave a little bit of
background at first, I've never been to rehab, so I don't know much about the ways in
which they treat patients (Sharma). This aspect of the vice article I feel is particularly
important because it lets the Dr. make a more informed reply, and also gives us a stronger
insight to the author. Lastly, different from the two academic sources, Vice uses a
different type of font that gives readers a more informative and less informal type of
mood while reading.
The primary target audience for the vice article I say would be those who are
interested in the issue of drug abuse but not generally experts in the field. Based simply
on the website Vice itself, finding information on a news website is generally not what
expects normally do. Furthermore, I do not believe that experts would be willing site this
article because of the language used. Though the article may have some valid points, by
using vulgar language in the title of all things may capture the attention of everyday
people who like to see the norm challenged, but it takes away from the professionalism.
One main difference that I found between the scholarly articles versus the
mainstream vice article is the use of hedged language that we talked about in lecture.
Defined by my group during our activity, hedged language is Hedged language is a way
for writers to show readers that they dont know everything about a given phenomenon. It
gives the reader some leeway on what they are saying. (Class Discussion). The scholarly
articles, in order to gain and keep their credibility, will often use statements such as
These animal studies typically investigate (Goeders) or There are numerous
potential links between drugs, drug enforcement, and crime (Edward Shepard).
Compared to the vice article in which the doctor blatantly addresses things as improbable,
Treatment is inadequate. Opiate substitution doses are wrong (Sharma)The differences
between these two types of genres are evident throughout the entire paper and by simply
adding one or two words, the scholarly articles are definitely more reliable. Another
difference between the two types of articles is how relatable they are to the reader.
Although the scholarly articles do offer more information and better analysis of data and
comparison of theories, the Vice article is relatively easier to ready and flows better
based on the font and sentence structure. The length of paper has a big impact on how
relatable it is. Based on the nature of research papers, they generally need to be longer
containing lots of technical information to provide other researchers the opportunity to
reproduce their experiments. However, the Vice article is essentially an opinion piece
about drug addiction so all the author has to do is express the doctors view on the subject
with no extra technical experimental information.
Structure along with writing concepts all depend upon the area of study a writer is trained
in. Whether it be an academic discipline like legal studies or psychiatric studies or a nonacademic study such as the Vice article, the writer accomplishes their goals of getting
information out and expressing their viewpoint. In respect to their individual field, a
writer can shape the audiences viewpoint of a topic and potentially shape their frame of
thinking as well.
References
Edward Shepard, Paul Blackley. "Drug Enforcment and Crime: Recent Evidence from
New York State." Social Science Quarterly (2005): 323-344.
Goeders, Nick. "Stress, Motivation, and Drug Addiction." Current Directions in
Psychological sciences (2004): 32-35.
Sharma, Niel. "This Nuuroscientist Argues that Addiction is Not a Disease and Rehab is
Bullshit ." 4th December 2015. VIce.com. <https://www.vice.com/read/this-
neuroscientist-argues-that-addiction-is-not-a-disease-and-the-rehab-industry-isbullshit>
Thesis Statement
Use of Textual Evidence from Genres
Use of Course Readings
Analysis
Organization/Structure
Attention to Genre/Conventions and
Rhetorical Factors
Attention to Moves
Sentence-level Clarity, Mechanics,
Flow
Comments and Grade
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Expectations
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Junior,
Back from our first intro day in Writing 2
together, I think I remember you saying you
were interested in becoming a drug/substance
abuse counselor. If my memory serves me
correctly, Im really happy that you chose a
topic that means something to you. :)
OK, so to improve this paper for your portfolio,
my #1 suggestion is to tell me more about these
pieces -- what specific data did they collect?
Whatd they find? Whats going to be done
with their work? I dont feel like I learned
anything new about drug addiction from an
pychiatric or legal perspective -- help me
understand what theyre trying to teach us about
this issue. Get into the data. Get into their
RQs. What does it seem like each perspective
values with regard to understanding this topic?