Catcher in the Rye Essay

by Yonah Vang

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Catcher in the Rye Essay

GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor
Yonah I like that you spent a great deal of ef f ort explaining
the possible benef its that the novel can have on
readers. You really went into detail about these
ideas. Some may be a a little unrealistic, but I
appreciate the optimism. It does f eel like we could
use more inf ormation f rom the text to support these
possible benef its. What exactly in the novel will allow
f or this? Let's be clear about these examples.
Overall, you did meet the requirements of the essay
though, so good job.

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Comment 1
Nice quote

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Comment 4
T his seems dangerous and risque

Comment 5
I like this point

Comment 6
What negative consequences happened to Holden in this situation?

Comment 7
T his might be overdoing it a bit

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Comment 8
T his is true, but Holden does not speak the truth 100% of the time either, so he might not be
the best example f or this argument.

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Comment 9
no comment

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with the verb.

Comment 10
I like this

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Comment 11
T hey also get a bit of a mirror ref lection that helps them see what they may sound like

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Comment 12
T his seems too general and simple. Is is that easy to f ix?

Comment 13
T his is an interesting aspect to consider the role of the teacher

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Comment 14
I like the general nature of this, but I think we need more specif ic detail f rom the novel that
shows Holden's story leads to this. What does he do or not do that makes these strides
possible?
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Comment 15
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