Dear Roberta,

It is a great honor to write this letter to you as a closure of this great course. This course is
an effective course about writing. I have learned many writing skills through three writing
projects (WPs). Through these writing processes, I have learnt a lot about the genre and the
writing skills which could apply to different genre writing process.
In my WPs drafts, there are still many problems. In my WP1, the thesis statement is not
clear enough. It is confusing how the genre conventions develop from the readers interests in
order to appeal to more audiences. Instead of using showing that different genre conventions are
adapted, evolved and developed from the readers interests in order to appeal more audiences, I
use showing that in order to establish closer bond with audience, different genre conventions are
adapted, evolved and developed because of the readers interests and reading habits.
The topic sentences of some paragraphs are missing. Some paragraphs have topic
sentences but are not related to the topic which is discussed in the paragraph. For example, in my
first body paragraph, I wrote Newspaper articles have a long history as a specific writing genre
which is not related with the topic of the paragraph. Thus I changed it to Newspaper articles
have a long history as a specific writing genre which traditionally uses simple and attractive tiles
to draw more attention from audience. The sentence is much longer and pointed out the topic I
am going to discuss in the following paragraph. Some topic sentences need to be clearer about
how the genre convention helps further the goal of the genre. I tried to link the topic sentences
with the thesis statement.
Another big problem is that the conclusion sentences for all paragraphs are missing. Thus
I added many conclusion sentences at the end of the paragraph, such as Thus, the construction

of short paragraph makes the newspaper article more understandable and Thus, quotation is an
important convention and technique which could make the newspaper article more dependable.
The conclusion sentences could help readers to understand each paragraph.
I was told to push analysis further as well. In some paragraphs, there is only summary of
the evidence but lack of analysis. It is time to link the evidence to ideas and explain why the
genre convention is important to the genre. In the paragraph talked about quotation as a
convention of newspaper article, I added a lot analyze after summarize. First, the quotation
presents a vivid interview scene to the audience These peoples experience and reputation
make their words dependable; also make the article more credible. I learned that there is always
room for further analysis if you ask yourself so what.
In WP2, I also have several problems. First, the statement of significance and the claim of
thesis statement are not close related. It is necessary to link them together. Instead of given that
Financial Crisis of 2008 had effect the world significantly and the measures which could avoid
crisis in the future, I wrote given that how Financial Crisis of 2008 effect the world
significantly and the possible measures and policies which could avoid next crisis in the future.
The topic sentences are clear. However, the topic sentences are not leading the discussing
in the following paragraphs. Also, some topic sentences are not support the large argument which
is economics is more effective than history on topic of financial crisis of 2008. In third
paragraph, I added Mathematical tools are easy to find out the patterns between data, and could
analysis the problem more effective to explain how mathematical tools make economic
discipline more effective than history discipline.

Some paragraphs are discussing disciplinary strategies that are not distinguished. These
paragraph need to be rewrote as the topic of the paragraph should be changed. For example, I
wrote Pham writes about his research using the convention of writing in economic discipline,
opening with a short and compact introduction which said short and compact introduction is the
distinguish convention of economic discipline. However, it is unlikely true. So I rewrite it to
Pham writes about his research using the convention of writing in economic discipline,
spending lots of times to introduce the techniques he used in his research.
Also, there are many grammar errors occurred in both WPs. These errors should be
corrected in order to make the sentences more clear.
Although I revised both WPs several times, there is still space for improvement. If I have
more time, I would like to revise them again. However, the experience learned from WPs
writing process is very valuable. These experiences could guide me how to write in the future.
Thank you for your time and your wonderful lectures.

Sincerely,
Binghao Guo