Black

By: Prae 8D

Im hatred and depression torment and deprive. I hear peoples sorrows and taste their weeps and tears. Feeling sad, hurt or pointless? Ill devour your gloomy mind whole! I turn flowers into knives, rainbows into storms. Smiles into frowns, and sweet into bitter. Im hatred and depression, I feel your dispirits and upsets. WHOOSH! Ill suck you in a hostile hole because I am black.

Wow, what an intense poem! Good job creating the mood using dark and depressing diction. I like the way you personified black and make him the speaker. Also the second stanza is particularly effective in showing his character and effect on things. Great onomatopoeia in the end and alliteration as well!

Criterion A: Content Your poem uses poetic techniques to create a deeper meaning. It is imaginative and sensitive. 0 You do not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors given below Your poem shows very limited imagination and sensitivity. 1-2 You rarely use poetic techniques to create a poem with a deeper meaning

Criterion B: Organization Your poem is structured in a way to convey your message effectively. You do not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors given below

Criterion C: Language and Style You can use appropriate language in your poem. You do not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors given below You have very frequent errors in spelling that persistently hinder communication. You show little or no evidence of appropriate poetic language.

Your poem is unclear and lacks coherence. You do not use poetic conventions.

Your poem shows limited imagination and sensitivity. 3-4 You attempt to use poetic techniques to create a poem with a deeper meaning

. Your poem lacks coherence . You attempt to use poetic conventions.

You have frequent errors spelling that hinder communication. You show some evidence of appropriate poetic language.

5-6

Your poem reflects some imagination and sensitivity. You use poetic techniques to create a poem with a deeper meaning.

Your poem is clear and coherent. You are beginning to understand and use poetic conventions.

Spelling is generally accurate. Occasional errors sometimes hinder communication. You often use appropriate poetic language.

7-8

Your poem reflects imagination and sensitivity. You effectively use poetic techniques to create a poem with a deeper meaning.

The structure of your poem helps to convey the deeper meaning. The ideas in your poem build on each other. You understand and use poetic conventions.

Spelling is accurate. Occasional errors rarely hinder communication. You consistently use appropriate poetic language.

Your poem reflects a lot of imagination and sensitivity. 9-10 You use poetic techniques, in a way that is sophisticated and effective, to create a poem with a deeper meaning.

The structure of your poem complements the deeper meaning. The ideas in your poem build on each other in a sophisticated manner. You understand and use poetic conventions with insight.

Spelling is accurate. Very infrequent errors do not hinder communication. You demonstrate a mastery of appropriate poetic language.

In order to succeed you need to:

Use your imagination Represent an idea with an appropriate metaphor Use poetic techniques to create and enhance your idea

Your poem needs to make sense Present your poem in a way so that the ideas build on each other You take poetic conventions such as stanzas and line breaks into consideration

Use poetic language (i.e. similes, personification, metaphors, strong verbs, imagery, alliteration, onomatopoeia) Use accurate spelling