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THE PARAGRAPH
ALICE SAVAGE MASOUD SHAFIEI
OXfORD
MASOUD SHAFIEl
K ingw o o d C ollege K intjw o o d , Texas
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Acknowledgements
We would like to thank David Olsher. without whom we would never have started this project. We want to give a special thanks to the editorial team: Rob Freire, Kathleen Smith. Kenna Bourke, and Scott Allan Wallick for their insight and expertise, and Pietro Alongi for his endless positivity and support. We would also like to gratefully acknowledge the work of Susan Kesner Bland. Last but not least, our gratitude to the following reviewers for their contribution to the project: Sharon Allerson, East LA Community College; Frank Cronin, Austin Community College; Kieran Hilu, Virginia Tech; Peter Hoffman, LaGuardia Community College; Carla Nyssen, California State I Jniversity Long Beach; Adrianne Ochoa; Mary O Neill, North Virginia Community College; Maria Salinas, Del Mar College. I would like to thank the administration, faculty, and staff of North Harris College for making it an inspiring place to work. I especially want to applaud the students of the ESL program. Your papers are full of delightful surprises and interesting insights. Thank you for allowing your work to be used to assist others. Finally. I wish to thank my husband. Masoud, and children Cyrus and Kaveh, for helping me balance work and home. I always look forward to seeing you at the end of die day. A.S. 1 would like to express my appreciation to everyone at Kingwood College for creating a great environment for teaching and learning. I am especially grateful to the ESL faculty for their insightful suggestions and to the ESL students for their generosity in sharing their writing. Lastly, and most importantly, I would like to thank my wife Alice ten working with me on this project and our sons Cyrus and Kaveh for adding so much color to our lives each and every day. M.S.
Contents
I n t r o d u c t i o n ............................. .................................................................................... vii
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Descriptive Organization
Developing Your Ideas...................................................... U sing S pecific L an g u ag e Editing Your W ritin g .........................................................
Contents
PART 4: Editing Your W ritin g .......................................................... 65 Forming and Using the Simple Present Subject-Verb Agreement PART 5: Putting It All Together....................................................... 69
Narrative Organization
Developing Your Id eas......................................................130
Using Sensory' and Emotional Details Showing Order of Events in Narrative Paragraphs Showing Simultaneous Events
PART 4: Editing Your W ritin g .........................................................136
Forming and Using the Simple Past Forming and Using the Past Continuous
PART 5: Putting It All Together...................................................... 142
Appendices_____________________________________________
Appendix I: The W riting P ro ce ss.....................................................147 Appendix II: Elements of Pun ctuatio n ............................................ 148 Appendix III: G lo s s a ry .................................... .. ..............................149 Appendix IV: Correlation to Grammar Sense 1 .............................. 152
Contents
Introduction
Effective Academic Writing is a three-hook series intended to usher students into
the world of academic writing. The goal of the series is to provide students and their teachers with a practical and efficient approach to learning the skills, strategies, anil knowledge that arc necessary for succeeding in content coursework. A parallel goal is to provide opportunities for students to explore their opinions, discuss their ideas, and share their experiences through written communication. By guiding budding writers through the experience of composing various types of paragraphs and short papers, w e hope to provide students with the tools and the confidence necessary for college success.
The Paragraph
Book 1 of Effective Academic Writing, The Paragraph, introduces students at the high-beginning to low-intermediate level to the academic paragraph. The first unit provides a review of sentence structure and an introduction to developing and formatting an academic paragraph. Each of the following five units then addresses a particular rhetorical mode and provides user-friendly guidance to mastering the form. The hook also offers numerous opportunities for practicing relevant grammar points. All grammar presentations and practice are correlated to Grammar Sense I. Book 1 contains several features designed to support students in developing the skills that they need for college writing; Each unit contains an authentic text to provide ideas and context for the assignment. At strategic points in the unit, students read and analyze authentic student paragraphs to see how other students have written on the same or similar topics. Each unit contains concise and effective language presentations designed to develop students understanding of rhetorical modes and to improve their grammatical accuracy. Each unit offers useful writing outlines so that students can structure their writing and internalize the practice. Each unit offers collaborative learning activities allowing students to work together and share ideas. At relevant points in the unit, editing exercises and editing checklists are provided so that students can refine their writing. Timed writing activities com e at the close of each unit to prepare students for in class writing. A series of learner-friendly appendices are provided at the back of the book to encourage student independence. A glossary of common grammar terms for student reference is included.
Introduction
Unit Organization
Each unit introduces a them e and a writing task and then guides the writer through a five-pan process of gathering ideas, organizing an outline, drafting, revising, and ediung. As students write, they practice specifk 'kills and put language knowledge to work to produce a paragraph that follow.-, academic conventions. The rhetorical and language-related goals of the unit are identified on the opener page.
Part 1 Pan 1 opens with an image to spark interest as students begin thinking about the topic. This is followed by a short authentic text. Students answer questions about the text that will help them connect the writers ideas 10 their own knowledge and experience. They then move on to a freevvriting activity, an unstructured writing task in which they can explore the topic without worrying about organization or grammar. Part 2 In Pan 2 students are introduced to a specific rhetorical mode. They begin by brainstorming ideas and vocabulary that they will use to write their paragraph. They then learn about rhetorical organizational features and read and analyze a student paragraph. Finally, students produce an outline for the paragraph they will write later in the unit. Part 3 In Part 3 students develop the ideas from their outline and produce a first draft. This part opens with a second student paragraph for students to analyze. As they answer questions about the second student model, students review the organizational features learned in Part 2. They are then introduced to specific, level-appropriate language points that will help students shape and structure their writing. Students now write their first draft and. using a peer-review checklist, check each others writing for organization and clarity of ideas. Part 4 In Part I students edit their writing and produce a final draft. This pan focuses on particular grammar trouble spots relevant to the theme and the rhetorical style presented in the unit. Following the concise language presentation, students complete practice exercises to help them develop their grammar skills and build confidence. Students then move on to editing their own waiting, and produce a final draft. Part 5 The final part of the unit is titled 'Putting It All Together." This is the summary of the other parts of the unit. Through a series of skill exercises, students review the points covered in Parts 1 4. They are then given the opportunity to write a timed paragraph using a similar rhetorical focus, but on a different topic. Guidelines lor using their time efficiently are suggested. This part also provides students with a comprehensive checklist to review what they have written. The unit closes with suggested tasks for future writing thal can be used for more practice.
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Introduction
Language focus:
* simple semen: sirucwne * cip ltn listth in ;md end p u n ctu jtiu n
* Iragm enLs iind run-on sen [cnees
PART 1
S tim u la tin g Id eas
Exercise1
T hinking a b o u t t h e to p ic DLstu.s> ilit pictures with ;i partner. * Ijook ut the people writing. Wlut kind f wnimg is each pLT1 ' n
* Afl' tJiL*y wriEjn^ for rollers i> r fur themselves?
* W lut <xhtr kinds o f writing enn you think up Wlml kiild fif writing do vole u m u IIn do?
Rhetorical Focus
The Paragraph
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* In .1 p ro c c s s p a ra g ra p h thi' w rfrtr ex p tIins hiiw t<r dit som ething srep by step. *1 1 1 3 1 1 o p in io n p iim p rn p h lilt' writer expresses hiT- o r lier Ii'dinn-V danH iinJ opinions houl J lp:. m y narrative paragraph IJI-u ri-fi K -lUi -il ifliiry
Formatting a Paragraph
Margins A lunijir.iph mus h. V C a rnaigm on tH rn And ;i ni;L?ln on i Iff I This inean lhat t pai^nph begins Inch (If 1 I \ incht'ii ftum rliv
of ihf paper.
Spacing A paragraph riKd b t tlefUlik'-spaud.
indenting
Tlie first scnkTitc <]f. [wuyrujili must lie indctiktJ 'Mm rm-ans 131 it 'Xjpins fhv spates in from fhe lefi rnarHtn Tmdirttni slit the rt-utVtr dim new paragraph is b^flinnljifl On 3 computer you Clin indem
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- Red
-> I love i he color nidu No other color sym boli/es so many diffcrcnl em otions and experiences. Life would be very borinj; without (he color red. Fires would not bum in the same way. The sunset would not be interesting, and blood would not be so surprisingly beautiful, Red is powerful when iL appears in nature ami ir is llIsu ]Hjwerfui when ii
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appears in our em otions. Red is love. Red is mijjer. Red is beauty. I like to live life in a strung way, so t dunk I will always admire the color red.
PART 2
Developing a Paragraph
Rhetorical Focus
Paragraph Organization
A typical paragraph has concluding sentence. tropic sentience, supporting scnieneeii, and a
T h e to p ic sen ten ce infrtxhlees the iopk and iclls what ilit wriier will ijy about ihe i<ipie '[lie sentences tlul folJaw further explain ;ind support the topic sentence The\ ;iri-called su p p o rtin g sen ten ces * The c o n c lu d in g s e n te n c e i ilic-n repeats the im* sentence in j different way. in the topic
Exercise 1
Read the paragraph holt- and note the topic sentence, supporting sentences, and concluding sentence. What was it that scared [lie barcluui buy'!'
topic (rntcrarr
Barefoot Bov if
I had u scary experience lien I was a young boy. One evening while my parents were eating dinner. f was playing barefoot in the y<ml with my toys,. Even now t still remember ihe perfume oT Lhc flowers and the moisture o f the grass. While I was silting on the grass and playing with a truck. I looked up at ilte sky. and my attention was distracted by the beamy ot ihe stars. Then 1 felt *onielhing cold and smooth slide over my feefr I stayed perfectly still, but I looked down <u my feel. Then 1 saw a snake slowly slithering over my toes. I felt terrible and afraid. sli iny heart beat very fast. After the snake moved away. I streamed to my parents for help, and they captured (be snake and look ii away. The experience frightened me, and 1 never went outside barefoot again.
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Rhetorical Focus
The Topic Sentence
The- ropfc s tn l t n ic ; is u su a lly thy lir>L o r secL.snd 'lj[iLeik l 1 L.
paragraph It tn tn x k tco a new idea. li p itsen is ilie mpur ituLissr what the w rite r will a^y :tbtiLn the loplc. rrhls exp1;in:tiior; is . . . . c o n tr o llin g id e a
Read be following topic sentences, in (^ e hIi tint; i3 l- tupit i% hi] frien d . Tlie L/MiroHlng ideas explain whal t L i-_ - w riter :.! ya The Tnpic. 'IlieM.- Control] Inp idcflS M l r h f re a d e r W' I.M h ei*>ei : ;:' ' r C MjpfwjrTing sen ten w stnplc can ItdIm nn iidci My friend & < *n l-ionost person
M y friend s.m friurni^tjifESfln 1 l-no^y M y fi-EEnd m s a ternbb danowtms > ob.
A tii]>ii st-Tilence must not b e a simple fiict it .c *pei.-it'K ..'l'.-. controlling idiM must say w m vthing uJhilji Ltieiopu rj: .supixjrtL'd. developed, or derimriscTJTed In the -If= ;'" tT':- l -- " '[lie ' fnirf iliiFii- idea must atso not t>e too perietal. or V- iujkc sen itn o e w 1> ] Im ? uncEeaft
A surprise party is a kind of parly. I here were 14 guests at my surprise bidhdsy par* My d is m a l gavt me an unforgettable surprise ^n-. ra r ; ae- +'?~ r :) '
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Exercise 3
In cji;h topic sen ten ce b elo w circle th e topic and u n d erlin e die controlling Idea. ] i l i k i n g die Ln'si ^ my un?v>l(n-.r mmtre .kwlv.
2 My unt ]f hnd a frinlileninn experience * P ymunfl mu).
* , Test nii^sjjyn*: |iaa become p<iJuIjr pnu>njj (eenjjtuiv i Effective ctr ? in.iii.i^nifnr tuqUire* Jour cjsy se| 'y Every college 'iH idLn[ *huuEd rula1ri computer course Eaercisei__ identifying effective topic sentences Id eacli j J ffio r below, (irclc thi.Ltopic mid u n d erlin e th e conlrolJiciK dea. If the K fltence does not contain an effective controlling! i^ K1 w rite oil X in th e hliink. For th e effective topic sentence*, w rite wtaal yon think I lie su p p o rtin g s c itfc n c n -LU be nbont, ] ____i Sly tfuToiyi^viaaJfcijj-Ls^. hi^ p:M
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Exercise 5
t ie each w ord o r p h rase below to p riti a topic sentence w fih a controlling idea. I'litn s lu r e yimr sentences w ith n pinner. ; Pei* feta are iPod cJffpflTliOrls for alJgr pcpJ2l ______ ____________
2. k firsl date
\ Terrible TeaeJier
l. Tennis
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Rhetorical Focus
Supporting Sentences
Supporting ttitenccs mcUI inlbnnation jfxnit ihtr topic and the controlling k li-j suppurtin can int lucki d efin itio n s, explanatio ns, aniuS eJcamplcH Kc-jlI the Topk sentence lielow Then .study (he lytie* o supporting sentences i Im I ini^l li fnllc^^. it. topk rlfoJIing idra Young people are ion dependent on computers
Supporting definition
Dependency on computer* means that young people cannot peifofm trie normal tasks and (unctions of tfaiiy life without them Supporting explanation In the old days, people memorized important mformaron, out today'3 youth rely on their computers, cell phones, and PDA's to do assignments, tecord numbers, and save importan information. As a result they can fi^d themselves unprepared in an emergency sutfi as an electrical blactoui Once their bltefies die, ihew people will not be ble communicate
Supporting example
foi example, I do all my schoolwort on my comouier When ony compute1 craved Iasi w eel, I tost rny only dralt of an essay that was due thy nett ^j . As a neriult, l goi a bad giade.
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____c. My friend* and I like to kmitxhice each other to new hntcmaioitil artists we discover, __ il. I enjoy guinfi to cwKVtts by
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:i. 3 H Jcc die way jVetjpfe dec* irjte theEr homes and stores ____ I), I enjoy [filing shopping in cold weather ____ c. I eiijo\ tin.- parties ;md celebration* o f ilie winter holiday ____ d, I really like the winter holidays.
i ____ a. My new apcuuiKiii tus I>ig dosets h My new apartment is perfect for my roommate and me ____ c. My new apartment L s d ose to school and work ____ (I. My new apartment is ntrt tcx> expensive for students.
Rhetorical Focus
The Concluding Sentence
The con clu d in g or final, .sentence of a paragraph usually rem inds the reader o f the topic ami controlling idea o f the paragraph. The concluding sentence* restates he main idea.
Topic sentence
I love the cokx red.
Concluding sentence
\ like to Sue life in a strong way, so I thmk. I will always admire The color red.
In addition to restating the main idea, the concluding sentence may; warn the reader.
If you do not follow these steps, you may not get the grade that you want.
make a prediction
The automotive industry will change, and soon everyone will be driving pollution-free cars
.Sometimes w riters signal the condudinji sentence by using the phrase In conclusion. In conclusion, (earning a second language has many advantages
Part 1 9
Exercise?
Kl ' u< I th e lu p k ' s c n tc n c c s b elo w . W rite SS n e x t to llitr llire c s u p p o rtin g s c n lc n a 's and w rite CS n e \t to th e c u n cliid in g fit Atence. t. Tile hesr CS &5 55 55 way s w San Francisco is In wdiking.
.1, 'ft htfn |t nu explore S;m Francisco hy ftxx. you cun experience all the city has to lifer. b. When you w.ilfc, you experience due different wrueila dill*! rr.sUur.ints. the planl> and JindJUWS the ocean t You a n Mtop and U-rjk in ilir windows oj shop* or it on a bench for a s tu n while and l<x>kat intr^rc'^EiiiK people
d. In ;l car tir a bus. you cinnt rt .Mup easily if v i IW -S iwnvlliinfi Imcnadpft Ikxjukw parkin*; is diOkuli.
2 An cgn i.kii takes tmly file minutes c ____ ,1 Yinjr ddtdDiw tjiji into is muly 1 eat In just a few minings.
____ li. He4it a flour tortilla In a MOflll amount of ater
____ c. Scramble two ckh^ wiili u link' sakr and pepper____ cl When the t-jijt*' ate done, .slide diem into the Wiifm tOftUla 4tnd iold it over. 3, My paper lule because KOTlethmg happened lo nn cnmpUTer
____ j . ] wan almost f'inisheJ writing my paper, and I was checking it for tm>T>i. _____ h, Suddenly rm1i wnputcr sciem lM frH blank. Jiwl the ptiwvt was gone. ____ e. The .iceklent made itic In is*.- many hours of work, so I could not lum in rny e-ysiy on ii nut ____ d- Liter, Tlearned dial a squirrel ot on the power line and di>r-ap:td ihe elect rtdry I t enli* the rlverwnlk in San Amonio. ___ A The riverwalk is lower llian the streets of the o r\
___ h You tun svulk down .stain tit .1 uMiil with a M i iRe p.jiJ: ,tfld pl-ir> on r i l side,
____ (i T h a t ;tft many simps, restaurants and hotels alnn^ lie ____ d. The rivervi'nlk is ,i pleasant place to spend an aftem > uir everur.* in San Anionki.
Circle the word i I ilu best d e s c rlx s each o f the a^nduding sentences below.
1 . If v 3 U rttlJow Lliew: M tfT.-, VIHi vriWnever 1 osc yOUf keys :i$yin. a. (pfwlkriinn) b, opinion c. warning
2. Sutdenbs whu a a; not careful *iidi L'redit curds enn go into tlefcn quicJtty a. predktion b. opinion c. warning
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PART 3
Rhetorical Focus
Unity within a Paragraph
A pjjapraph muSf liave unity \ paragraph has unity when all flic stTtfencvs sup|x)n a single idem T he paragraph niusi have one eontrnJJinj; iilea in ibe (<.ipic sentence, OihiirwLsc the pjia^niph losu foens* T1> * s u p p fu tin ji .' etiiences m t^ i s y p p u n t e s p la in th e tw n ln u llin ^ id e a w ith
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I m m ii o n e s ir ijje id e a
* The concluding sentence should restate the idea in the topic senifriLe. Otherwise the main idej might not be clear.
T o p ic s e n te n c e
My friend
Is generous.
Supporting sentences
She oiten lees travelers stay in her home She has hosted many stucent* temporarily. S*ie sends money io her Umiiy m Chile every mcnih to r-plp hem with their bills. Site always br-rigs flowers or food to her v pros when they are sick or have a need
Concluding sentence
Mata^n* is one of the mosi generous people I Vnow
Nqhf (hut j ]] the sentences are about Macaremis jienerosiu. A sentence alxnjt the way slie looks or atxiut Ih l t iLih w ill noi support the unity of the paragraph unless it ^Mnehtnv relates tiMacarvrui's generrwlty.
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Many years uu;u. a yil'L came lo me in an imcrcsiing way.
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1 Aftur you read Lhf controlling idea, Jwhat did yc m ir\pt-ei tin.' supporting idww
t o e x p la in . U r iie y tiiL r J f m W e r i n y o u r o w n w o id s .
,5 OiKrscntenot:m the paiajtraplt is olF-tople and doe* ne* jsupixnr the? unity ni iIII- p jn ^ ju p h (Jkiw j IIiill through ft> Why doe* lhis s e m e n hurt (he unity o l rhe paragraph!* tonic your explanation below
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Read (he loEluwinf; lo p k sen ten c es, h i l ;i t k t k i / J m j.\t [u N t h le n ie n c e below chat m ippQ rts th e to p ic acnti-ncc. 1, t am .m ocRanJzcd perxjn / S ,.i M)1 d isk l dlw^t .4 nth aifd tic^t b. i hrWe ,i iysirrrt i" * ' H^urtLZinH ^I1^ p-ipct*, atk\ 3 can jlw;iy> fintl whai l ntsed.
____ C . I Feel uii( i niil'i rJuh:L- when I .im in J *itTJ n^tLem ironiiKiil / _ (I My friends always watil mu- l * .? Iit.-Ipi Them pm lEiL'ir l ' w rt.-is rn order
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____ b Sometimes people [ravel by car. <md sometime* by train tw ulqilane. ____ c. It is very important 10 travel wUh pptrfAe that you (l.h along w ith. ____d. The other players tik e lurrts J^kln^ ijU ^ io n ^ Ihill O il only !*-answered with "ves or "no." 3 Tea anti coffec an- very d lftb tn l from c h other. ___ ___ h L . Ci jffee lias intm.- caETdne i h;i n i^.j dr us. 11. CofFee and tea hath have otflfcine'
E n rny opinion. people fl[*end [*) filUi'h tlKKVrj, cn m ____ j. Some drive spend a fourth til' iheir tnm rne fr*r ;i car payment, which i* unnecessary. ____ h. CaiTi d<) n < in c re a se in *jlu e. o they .Tie not;l tvjHinwSDnttil. ____ l . Cjv unpanuTH .in.1ata .ky* Look in tar w jy$ lu n u k e * eJikJe* o n line rocnJ. ___ d. People who d o not pay cash muM also pay Interest. even rnore money. suier
lltey lose
____ h. I! Ltnnej> h iflt n lliive problems wilh their .Lnkles :ind knee*. ___ t Basketball p L iyens can break 1 1it it another pt.iycr. dr ^:t tilCKktxJ ave( l*y
____ d. JE;iny people rruke ihe simple mistake o f oiniflg 1 et\tll. :lrld lllcn t h ^ 1never t o there lo eseri isl-.
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ft. My city rs fan&OU* Ixt '.ILIA.1 o f iis aTChiteetUn? ____ u. We State andem rtd-tiled bultdinjp around the main .squire ____ h. f lic restaurants near (he Ixrocb serve great seafood. ____ i It bus esp in sivf tree-lined Iwiuletards wi<h beautiful limestone buildings and monument-^. mountain
___ d. A famous uitivnsjiy 1is located on the side of l'.tine 4 Editing fo r u n ity
Read the psrsfifapl' bekrtf. Cross out the two sen ten ces ihai arc not about ih c con trollin g Idea.
Exercise 5
DeveEoping unity
Write tw o s u p p o rtin g sen ten c es fo r each o f th e follow ing topic sen ten c es. T h en ex ch a n g e b o oks w ith a p a rtn e r an d ch ec k y o u r p a rtn e ri s tu ir n c f s fo r unity. I Computers anc useful in many ways.
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H Tllfne JIR .1 K 1iv ilL t'fi in .i park for fiimlH members o f jll ages
ft, W hen ytiu ;irv KiN-ng campfnji ( here are n im f 11 with yim.
Rhetorical Focus
Coherence w ithin a Paragraph
A paragraph murit jiIjm i hatte ltj] kefellCU. Tills mean l 3kisl [he supporting details are oi'giinlzttd so Ihut information Uial ftO O -s fijjtdher jppeitns lugelher. Wi irers nirL'n iLse lim e , s p a c e or o r d e r o f I m p o r ta n c e m prraen i ih c su p a r t i n g inform ation in .i [xirj^rapJi coherent!} T he FnlUnvin^ fx jiiip le is ory&ilzed l>y spacc.
When you dfive into the airport, you will many signs for the different terminals. After you pass the sigrts, you will drive over a hill fhe report is an (tie other side of the hill. Oil your nghi, you will see the mtemationaf terminal Ttiii tenmrr'a: Is two stones tall. Die franc is all g:ass On the left, you will see ?he domestic terminals ..
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Exercise &
P.i.nri l|u- p a n ^ p l i s beltm-. l'lie ii c ir ele llic WufxI [lint l w i dH CflhS (he Wffy tti l1 |>jrnKni|>Ji >
Paragraph J
My ravomi restauran! i-s in an od Hchim.-. Ti s veiy Lonviienl bccau it is in m> rtd^lilwr+iHid. We can driv. ov tf ihc cvcrtin^ i* pkasoni, wc l'11 walk, I] has i nice atnnophere and ncndly sen i ,
We liuw Ootc of thc wlil^ and waiiT^sses. so v e enjov takidg m
th iir tweause they anlc os jthuut our nhiklren. We lisfet,'i^ill^ likc ie dc^urdii uris. The waJEs are soft ydlow , and i'imdltn and J'riih Flowers
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tul ihe luhlen iEistde and L'id. Rnally. thc food h e^tellcni.
The utnk is ihc [vtner a:id he make deliciou duhtrs wiih l'r^^h ingrediente. We alway&eiljoy uUT IHeaK Tim e Space O rd er o f im portan*
Paragraph 2
Mv ruvorin reLjurani is. in a od houw. My Eiuvhand ;ind enjuy easing thc re on sumnucr tvcniryjs, We uuudly wjlk Fajn oiir hou se su we can enjoy our ^e^hbor^, garden nnd gci 3 linte bii of ejcrc,trTlie efiemoan iun hhics ibrou^ti ihc troes bul il s nol too bri^ht. We arrib e ai dusk. Lintl il u ll are hKk\. ft can sil uisidt, Tll- waiKf bri^ li hiiskci f wanm bread and li coid drink. We have iti appcli^er nr n slIi wttiJe she u n stL -K is. divn, The ihe waiier Itjhi lie candiel while u c erjdy rhe main toure, Bv dieciint we Finili desen, ii i niuhi time, We v !k lime i]tnvly,feelirti full bmliapfry in ihe n&onghL Tim e Space O rtler u f lilip u n m o :
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Exercise 7
Paragraph 1
Soccer brings ihc w'orld together in many ways, During iSe World Cup, people from all over the world an.- luncd in. Il ihcy con not sec il in person, ihcy watch i) on television. Many couniries participate in the world cup. People Icam aboui ihc teami from 4 .1i1tirrcFic countries. and ihty learn something! about those countries. Whtfl people arc waiching ibe World Cup. Ihcy do noi care if the same is nn ai lour im , in their country. The} will siuv up 10 waich il. They letfm about ihe fla^s from different count rie.s because ihcy will see [hi; fun..
Paragraph 2
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lo
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everyone sees each other every time the class metis, so there are many
o p p o rtu n itie s
10 uet lo know people. Kv the ettd of the class, n is. hard not in know
your classmates.
PART 4
Verb The verb refers lo an action or a state. It indicates tense or time, Two common tenses are present and past.
Jared sings 'present tense)
Exercise 1
Underline the subject and circle the vcrttfs) in each sentence. 1. ili_iiMlMlnttset.l)seven children. 2. she cooked anti cleaned all day long 3. My rather and liis brother luve a small business. -i My three sixers live in Vietnam V 1 help m\ aunt during the day and go to school in the evening. 6. My parents bought a new car
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Exercise 2
A nsw er each q u estio n bcltm in a co m p le te sen ten ce. W hen yciu finish, tx clu n j^ t; hook* w ith y o u r partner* T h e n u n d e rlin e th e su b ject and c lrc k 1 th e v e rb In each o f y o u r p a rtn e r's s c n itn tc s , 1 Wliat spivns L c >>ou mp;y?
tigfilovlwcogr and _____________________________________________
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O a jtlo n a lh writers use an vxclamution mark rt i give emph:isls to ,j ACntenraI looked down and siding dtross my tare foot was a giant green mjmbal
Exercise 3
Read the paragraph, In each scatcocc, underline the subject and circle < he verbis). Then draw a 1 k>\ amimd cadi end punctuation.
Language Focus
Fragments
livery sentence must have :i subject ami ;; verb and express a complete idea. A sentence that is missing a subject or .1 verb is inctiriipletc. Il is tjlle tl .1 frag m e n t. Incorrect I like Minneapolis is a cfean city. (subject is misstng) They successlul. (verb is mn&ng) Correct I like Minneapolis, ft is a clean city, They are successful.
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Exercise 4
Identifying and correcting fragments Decide whether each fragment below Is m issing a subjeci o ra verb. Then rewrite it SO [hal it is c o r r m .
I Some J 'i hxI t cry spicy, &t?ma food a ugrv apicv.______________________________________ Qifii cm- Favtnile vejje[jl>kj
Language Focus
R u n -o n Se n te n ce s
Two w flic iiiii tli.nl mn together wiihoui c o n ta purijmuilton betwevn [hem J if called n in o n s c n lc d . One ro oorrei.r .. nm-on sentence L s Ut put :i period k n v e e n the st'nlcm vs Armther wuy is to add n com ma und :i conncctinii w oitl
Incorrect
Correct
I received a le:tFr 'T w*as from my s>ster (no punctuation between ftf/o sentences) They laughed, I felt better. (comma alone bertveen Two senieriMSj
(peood ddcfed
the sentences)
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id entifyin g and co rrectin g run-on sentences C!urr .1 the ftjMowing mn-un w nEi nCi's by rew riting Jic m utk I hi: blanks belon-.
I ] Jin : full-unwi situdtriT, t live in .1 _j_gm j fnjh -r-ma ^tuJcnt-. and I lii/g in a
2. "1K -A: :i(t' mic.f living tmdetneath myhtjuse they m a tp s Iru ofnr m m ;.11 nijju i 1 us^-dtn l-1! ritv -incl vegem IjIl -s for hrtM kf:LSI niM11 lmLCelV.iliiml milk I Ju nrrt drfV'L\ 1 ride (Ik- bus.
5. ] ;HH w i n j j m o n e y fi w a h ic y e k Lt a h ' Warn Hj Ihiv :L t:iiils:r.i
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My Hotel Job
My molhers cousin owned ;i holek and I worked there us 1 young man, I enjoyed ihrs w o it very much. mnny tmcrc+iiins |\:oplc.
One lime ;i family CHrtlt to stay In the hotel- Th.i;y 1 djuiiihtLr, she tvas my j*gc. We met often anti tulked abuui our lives. I invited her to my house lo meei my family, She lold us ahoul her life in the Unhed Himes. We shared eiur a x io m s uith her, Later m> mother told me something unfoFgjeltab-le. She said. ,rl know that you ate going to live in America." My mother a vetv smart woman, she was ri^ht. 1 uatne America 10 search 1'or my friend, i am still looking.
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PART 5
Bead tin; jjarag rap h . T h en l.dR-l th e lo r n u ttin g elem en ts o f th e p a ra g ra p h . L'sc th e w o n t in th e b o \ , a. margin b. double spacing t. huJenL d tille
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ihe age o f 13, He learned many recipes. The most delicious and secret recipe uses oatmeal and other ingredients th;u only he know.';, This 4.
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bread made him famous. Nowjidays he makes some bread only once in a while because his legs bother him. and he get> tired easily. Instead, he sits at a table, und the people o flh c town come to buy bread and to pay tlicir respectv Even m e admires him very much because he is an honest and hardworking man.
Exercise
For each set o f w n l c n n i, w rite 7S' next to the topic sen ten ce Uiitt states th e rople and prov ides a con trollin g idea. Wrlic,W next to tlitr supporting sentences. 1_____ _
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____ h, The weekend starts on Friday Instead o f Syturiby, ____ C, "(lie lime is diJTvft-il Iwcaine my country drv* no) MKnv Gavnwich time ___ 2. d. Then.1:ire wnK' very specific dJffarvrvce.s between tny p:m of die world jml die weMetT counLrit'S a. I \vu> Ir.iwhny in Irw Angeles to visil my cousin, ___ h. My plane was dcbyed. _ 24
____c. 1 experienced a strange tolncklw cc J.ist year. d. T heard my math teacher from my o)d hnm ctnun calling m* name
Hotel ?uok.
___ tl Sonieiimes WV pUy SPmci ^nd kiu^h during the L'Liss (jit*:
i ___ a You can im r The IntcoKl to find n grail .hu I of infrjrmatuiti, but ji
y o u tin ncfl h a v e Llm- rij^ln skills, y o u r j n w a ste :i M o r liifle.
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. c. There are (ippoitumlies tn buy anil .sell products on 1b L " Internet, bin yati have to lcnow the proper way in send money, ____ d. The Internet is a (-riod plucc ttJ find a Job ftff people wbu know how to use search engines.
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[ dkl. However, they always relumed for vacations and holidays. M\ mother and father arid I were always ai die irjin "nation to yreei them.
I enjoyed the smell o f the irain ami Lhe rqjiirjmj; noise it made us the bi^
black engine pulled into the Matjon. I would jump up and down Lr\ine to see while everyone crowded round [be rlrjt.irv Tberc lhev are! rny rum her would cry. I would ran to jump into the arms of im beloved
brother or siste r _______________________________________________
... In cmtcliusii in ] ;ih\ay; ii,id an enjoyable hisii wiih my brother and sis:crs. " In vr melus ion. my 'luile famih likes irtin st.irtnrs Vow 1 ;itn ?il adult, hut ! still feel j<iy Wheel 1 fttilo train station to meet NtHikxjili I love.
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A Wise Shopper
A consumer can save a lot o f money by top p in g wisely, This means he i.s always looking for sales and collecting coupons, but ii :ilso means 1hc person is not a compulsive shopper In other wolds* the wi.se consumer does his search and makes a plan so thai he knows whai lie is looking I'or. Me ]\ 1101 templed by attractive products that arc not necessary. Sometimes he goes home without purchasing anything. He mi^ht ibink lie wasted ItLi time hut he knows he did not waste his money.________________________ _ _________________________
a, In conclusion. a compuhivc shop[>er can never Ix: .1 wise chopper 11 In l . l inclusion. a wLw shopper :lImj kee|to a budjjet so that lie kntfW-i how much he can spend. l . In conclu.MOn. wisc shopper finds wfiys lo save money OR the price LOd to ,ivoid buying what lie docs not need
My Red Couch
I acquired 1 new couch in an interesting way. t was walking L o the bus stop, and ] ^;nv 3 yard sale. The family was selling a beauiiCul hut heavy red couch at a very good price, I really liked the couch, ami 1 wanted lo buy h. However, there was a problem. I did not have a truck, and my apartment was five block** away. Suddenly. 1 saw my classmate across Ihe street. She usually sal nest 10 me in a computer class, t told her my problem, aiul she offered lo help. Then f paid for the couch and my frieiKl and carried it down the street. When we got tired, we sai down to rest on the sidewalk. Finally, we brought ii to my door, and
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my neighbor helped carry 1 upsiairs, I really like to buy old ihiiujs because I live in an old huitding. U wba a j'ujiEhy day J'or me, and [ like to remember iliis day whenever ] eome home anti see my beautiful red couch.
Exemsg 5
3 . E[oiifl Knnji lu* cmm Jmrtesdry nejlihijirhcjidii I, My hroiher sm ritt and drink nmilk at ev^ry rrm .il yorc'se 6 Practicing w ith end punctuation.
Add th e eorreel cud puu{.iu:itir to [he rolli>wfn|> x n ln K ts > I How do men ;ind HVnflicfl mt-vl tJfh ofhvr____
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IlL-eidc whrfrfKT c u l l fr o m e n t b elow Is iUls>iJ)K^ suhjtcl Or a verb. Then rewrite it correctly* E Sunkierdy fell down
Exercise B
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w ith h is b u s in e s s .
i Rice putkHnji i? i delicious and tsy to make il is tfntal fi > r piirttes, loo.
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Descriptive Paragraphs
Unit Goals Rhetorical focus:
' descriptive Qnygpfefltton
PART 1
Stimulating ideas_______________________________
In A descriptive paragraph, lhe writer uses word-, that create an Image and help ihc reader sec, toik'h, frvl, sm ell, or taste the mpic il i lie or she is describing-
Exeflnso 1
Where i%she?
Have ytiU ever st-en someone i !r s h I Ihis way? II >>. where?
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F rap u llai* a. yoiniH Indian bride, She an d h e r husband, Shekar, arc niuviii^ to New York, w h ere be has a job w ith si 1 ^ . com pany. PrnpuUa m ust decide how she will d ress in h e r new country: in w estern pants a n d skiriKH or in a sari, the traditional dress For In d ian w om en. Why Is th e sari so special to FmpuJIa?
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Exercise
Und ersta n d in g th e te x t
W r it e
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T f o r tr u e o r F F o r fa ls e f o r e a c h s ta te m e n t.
1 . P r :i p y ]| j w e n t H t io p p u ij' f o r h e r w e t k J i n f i s j r i w i t h h e r f a m ily .
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w e d d in g suri w a s m a d e b y h a n d w h ite .
w e d d i n g 7^ n i t o l d h e r ^ Ih : w a s L u c k y
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Exercise A
Responding to the te *t
Write y o u r a n s w e rs for e a c h q u e s tfn n in lull s e n te n c e s . T hen d iscu ss y o u r a n s w e rs w ith a p artn er ] Prjpullfl is jy.imj? t<3 live in New York w ith h er i>l-w huslrand. How d o es her husband w:mt hei 10 dress? Vtliy tli>yuo ihink m u?
2. W hat d o you think Ampulla will w ear Jn N ew York? W hy d o you tliink so?
Exe.rcise 5
F re e w r it in g
Write for ten minutes on (he topic below, Express yourself as well as you can. Dont worry about mistakes,
PfcpuHa lias speeial nwmorivs and I H ln p .ilviut her wedding Sli n <in a sepaiile
piece rvt piper, write jIxjue ;l piece of clntliinH llui is >ix\ial to you.
- Wliat does it Itiok tike? HOw' did you iiet it? \\ hy is. it important loyiiu?
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PART 2
possession.
Exorcise i Brainstorming ideas
A. Review- ynur frccwrEl mg a o d K W rite the piece o f clo th in g you fretm rfllt abuul in ih r tllilrt bffow . Then th in k o f som e Ofh e r ite n ^ yo-u (ra n th&T llnvc a ggpecifll iitL'Jciiniu fitr ynu. Add [jitni to Lh(h(lia n as well.
Mechanical electronic devices
ck
Jewelry
Photographs
Art or music
Clothing
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it Qrdfc two or three items that you might like ro write about. iJeserihe these items to a partner.
Exercise 2 _
A. Vi'Idi a partner, think o f wnrdii tlial ynti immid use In describe items in H iecaleporiw Ix-luw. A few descriptive word* have already been added to the chart.
Mechanical Of electronic devices
useful
Photographs
Art or music
CPOlhing
colorful
faded
serious
Cbtftfrfijl
drama He
convenient
prsct*sal
warn
Bilk
h^ppy
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B. Select som e d c H iip t lit w ords from Ihe t h a n 11 pafje 35 and n w them io ^vrile ftvc fc n ic n c e s ahom tin* iiviiw you circled.
My ana nd mother a aoU vjstcn i& dsi\C3itc,_____________________________
Rhetorical Focus
Descriptive Organization
A , tlcM-npLUe paragraph describes y xtmjii. place, or iliinp; su tli.it the redder t i n picture 1 in liis <11 her mind,
Topic Sentence
The topic sentence In a descriptive paragraph introduces the item that (tie writer will describe
* It may alio include the writer's genera) feeling or opinion about the item.
Supporting Sentences
- Thfr supporting sentences give some background information about the item. * The supporting sentences also give descriptive details about the item these details describe how the item look;*, smells, feels, or tables. The supporting sentences may also describe in more detail how the writer ieefc about the item.
Concluding Sentence
The paragraph ends w^(h a concluding sentence tbat restates the idea m the topic sentence using different words.
Exercise 3
Read the paragraph. Wliat d o ts the writer plan 10 do with the cari
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h;is
grandfiUhcr. When he
b e a u tifu l
he saved money m he
Ih e
could buy ii
bouchi a Cadillac convertible. T l was white and blue with j^iIt.cr trim. There were
w h ite
The
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b la c k .
had
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care of ihe cm. and after he died my uncle eave i: id tnc. 1 uni very happy because it still has ihe original motor, and
the h o d y
is intacl. 1 1 '
jt has problemsf 1 will fix it myself, 1 plan to lake very gtrod care of my grandfather^ car because someday [ will use il to travel mall the stales :nd cities lhat my grandfather visiicd when be was a young man,
parjpr.iphi1
a I) vp p ean n ce sm d l
c. sound i. According uj ihe lant sentence. why in (lie cur inifw mailt to the author' a. It tw utK B the wfiWr Iti hi* flnwdfather h, The wriler tikes expensive cars, c. The wriler tikes t<nwork <)n cjr- and icpittr engine*.
H. Examine the orftatii^iliun o f ihe paragraph by answering (lie questions below. Then compare your answers with a partner.
7 - W h .it n o rd ? ur p f c iis t s J d ie
d ie a u U v sr u s e t o d e s c n h c h is ic e Emits a b o u t
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Com pleting an outlin e Look back :it the paragraph on page 35- Then fill in the missing information in ihe outline below.
Topic Sentence
Item the author describes:______ __________________________________
Supporting Sentences
Background information about the item
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W riting in outline
to
Supporting Sentences
Write some notes about ihe background or history o^ (Ke possession
What are some netaiis you can use tu tft-icribEf ifte possession?
W hat a re some Lieiails you tan use to describe your feelings about the possession?___________ ___________ _________________________________
Concluding Sentence
Rebate the dea In 'he to yc sentence
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PART 3
Rc.id [Jit p arag rap h . H ow due* th e lrc w o rc " m ake th e uittm r feel?
My Special Treasure
My special treasure is 1 picture o f my mother on her fifteenth birthday. This picture whs; always in my house when I was growing up. Year', later, when I nt married and mnved m Montreal, my mm her gave it 10 me so that 1 would always remember her. Now it sit* on the table nexl 10 my hed. I ltok at it and imagine my moiher's life nn that day, I think she was excited because twreycti are shining with happiness Her smile n shy as il she were ihinkinti about a secret, She is standing next to a rose bush, and the roses ate taller than she is. She ts wearing a beautiful white lace dress and black shoes Her hnir is lonu and curly, She look lovely in this peaceful place, and I feci calm
when 1gaze into her eyes al the end of my busy day. This picture of my mother is my most valuable possession.
Exercise 2
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B. Exam ine ih e organization o f the paragraph by answ ering the q u estion s b elo w . Then coin pare you r an sw ers w ith a partner. Underline the topic sentence. \\ Itat will the writer describe?_______
_ t)oe> the writer give details about how she got the picture in the first pan. the middle part, or die Iasi part of the paragraph?______________________
3. Does tlie writer describe w hat the picture looks like in the fir*t part, the middle part, or the last part o f die paragraph?________________________
I. Does the writer describe her thoughts and feelings alxuit the picture in the first pan. the middle pan, or die la.st part o f the paragraph!'______________
t nderiine the concluding sentence rw ice. l>oes it restate the tdea in the topsc >enlence?______ How many sentences jre there In the paragraph?
jage Focus
Using Specific Language
1 sing specific language in descriptive writing helps give the reader a clear mental image o f what som ething looks, fuels, sounds, or smells tike Read the following exam ples Which set o f sentences has a stronger effect?
General Sentences He bougnt a vehicle. We heard a notse Suddenly, I smelled food. Sentences w ith Specific Language He bought a 1965 Cadillac We heard the sound of breaking glass Suddenly. I smelled steak and onions,
In the first column, die words are general and could b e used to describe a variety of vehicles, noises or food. In the second column, he w riter h a s replaced the general term s with more specific words ! > r the topics being described 13> doing this, the w riter has made the ' 'pic specific and clearer for the reader.
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Exercise 3
Id en tify in g S p e c ific la n g u a g e Read ihe fo[loviiijt pairs o f scjilenicsu Put a check t / ) next to ihtr sen ten ce flint is m ore spccillc1. ____ a. THke to w ear m y giuncfmiKbcrsjewelry / j 1 likf 10 wear my ftrjmlanlhi-r -'i ix.-jH necklace. j, Mj- liest friend ipive me a novelL > y ClianR-Rafi Lee fr>r my birthday. birthday
2. ___
____ lv My lxit friend gave me J book for my 3. _ _ _ j, Someone lew her an umbrella. ____ h Hit father knt her an umbrella. l. __ _ a. ! inherited sonic Alftflure. ___ b. 1 inlumted my giandrm (tiler's rhair. 5- ____ a Steve has a new laptop, ____ h > , Steve haj> a new computer. 0. _ _ a. Jordan received a toy.
____ b. Jordan received a teddy l^ar, Exercisejl A d d ing s p ecific d e ta ils Rewrite the follow in g ^cntcrices. Replace tbe im dertini'j words and phrases with w ords lhat are m ore specific. 1. Ll>nu;i;hl a njirof I bought a pair of running ah oca.________________________________________ 2 Maria found soiiur lcwdn~ in the basement.
1, I like my tk-% k.
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opened it. ii rlaj'J-'d ft pretty song- f kept thi^ Ixix on my dresser and
I used 11 to store my things. Unfortunately, I Iohi my heuuiifui ho*
I . __________________________________________________________________
4 - _____________________________________________________________________
5 . ____________________________________________
G . _____________________________________________________________________
B, Kew fine Tluh p arag rap h on a separate ph-ee o f paper, changing th e underlined m i n t an d [illrase* to m ake llicm nifirt specific, V heh yoti Hni^li. com pare y o u r p arag rap h w ith a p a rtn e r's.
Exert se6
Exercise 7
Alter you r ite your H n t draft, exclian^e It Willi a plrtiLtr, A ilsw it the {[motions on the checklist on paye 42. You may also w rite com m ents or question* oil your p a rtn e r's drafl. Then rtm l your p a rtn e r's eom tncnts o n )X)Lr draft, an d revise it as n c c s x a ry 1 .
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Editor's Checklist
Put a check {/) as appropriate. Write answers in complete sentences in the lines provided.
L ] 1 Does ihe paragraph have a topic sentence? Can you identify ihe possession the writer w ll describe? H
3. Does the paragraph have er>ough descriptive detail to make the desenption clear to the reader?
L . 5. Does the paragraph have a concJudmg sentence that restates the idea m the topic sentence?
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descriptive writing
* learn to use the verb be to describe and ielino. edit your first draft fo/ mistakes.
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PART 4
Language Focus____________________________________________
Using Adjectives in Descriptive Writing
Adjectives art- words [Jut de.sc.-nbe no u m frite n , u* a d je ttiv ^ in^Evidie reader a iimn,- complete ])ic[ure of the people,. places, .Lnd dtLng* they want u> desenlie. Djitpare the following pains o f phrases. Nolicc how the adjectives help you v-Lstalizi- the objecta bicycle a racing bicycle, a desk --- * a large, metal desk
* An adjective can COJIV? before :t noun. E i' tlic noun is ^in^ut;!, use ti nn or the Iw fW (he adjective.
t own
My mother gave me a big hug. Adjectives )i:HL-on]y one form. I'm; the s in if adjetive with Angular
* An adjective Ljn cptne .ilier 6t>. When two adjectives com e Jtter ber w p a rjie them with and.
Tlie hM arp comfortable Mv faltier's expression r . wise and serious
* Nouns can also Junction as adjectives. In die following examples. ihe first noun describes (Jr - second mum
a rose garden
a pocket knife
A Wlten .1 noun functions as un adjective, ir i> jIwii> Miiyular two kitchen tables two fcrtchem, lab? (mcoRHCi)
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Excrcisg \
Id entifying adjectives Read the following sentences and underline itlt adjcftiTCs.
1 I take eaic of my stmnk. cjjd bicycle. 2. 1 ant fond of my house plam. 3 If has baw d green l e s m and delicate, white flowers.
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m usk fotivnl.
5. it was not expensive. Itlu I liked ii Ik-c:ulsv it w;is practical jn d attract ive, 6. I Ixhi^Iit rru muR A t a small touri>[ shop at th e Phoenix airport
Exercise 2
Using adjectives
CIuiikc the rollowLnft sentences by aiidin^ tw o or three adjective^ to each one,
1 My umbrella is like a friend,
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Language Focus__________________________________________
Using Be to Describe and Define
Use the verb be ro descrilx- die suhfert if a sentence. You can use either a mmn m sn adjective after toe. * You can use he + ad[ective 10 describe conditions. physical characteristic*. ape, and personality.
P h y sical
Condition
Age My daughter- is ad *
He is neadv
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* You t.tn us*1 l.\< + m . 11: u.h riL vun p h rjv . ' let LLkiitify m define
It fc s a map.
A In
He ft j&aiuy:.
We are classmate
S c w it h A d jectives
r
suBjicr I H e She fou m
Sf with Nouns
B E NOUN PHRASE
ADJECTIVE
healthy.
is
Knot
ath letic.
b ro th e r;.
Jnfjcise 3_ Using be with adjectives Finish the fnllim inn S iiitcn i t s w ith n fn m i o f th e verb be and o n e o r m onj w ljectlvt to describe people you know .
1. M y tcMLcher
'&
Crtfatwe__________________ _
2. My tLwsmatca_________ _______________ ,
3. My paren ts__________ ___________________ _,
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Exercise 4
| _____________________________ _
Using be wtth nouns HnisEi cat'll HfinvrKu below. Make sure th ere is a n o u n lit yo u r answer.
1 There is an Inhater______ fo r n r,- asthma in m y backpack-
2, There 1$______________________________ on my dcak. 3. My Either is _________ _______________ _ ^ Someone whn wnlcs nci'V'ds is ________________
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T1icft* is _____
6 S u t K O f K w h o d
ExmtseS
Editing a paragraph
Read the paragraph. Correct the mistake1 * with adjectives, Then: arc five m ina kev lJ or heip rpvJcw ihc rules on paf(c -*3, 1 have a new digital camera, and I a n very excited atioul using it because ii has so many feuturcN useful. I do not need ro spend a lot of lime iocusini; L . Il tins j u t a l k focus. People do ntii have (o wait a lony lime for me tci lake their picture. In addition, its Irn* is powerful. I can photograph a person and scenery. and both ate clc;ir wlien I print ihc finals picture?.. Another feature allows me to delete pictures blurry, I .save a lot of money bccau.se I do not liavc lo prim ugly pictures. I am very e\citcd about my new camera because il is convenient easy, and 1 can lake nreirsiings, pictures wiifi it. T expect to have a lot of fun uith it.
Exercise
Editor's Checklist
Put a check (yr) as appropriate. 1 I>id you include adjectives in your sentences to give your reader a more L'oiTiplete picture?
i l 2 Did you use adiectiw s aFi#>r articles and before nouns?
be
J Did you capitaltoe the first letter of each sentence and put end punctuation at the end?
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Exercise 2
Identifying adjectives
R tad the follow ing sentences, L n d erlin e th e adjectives* 1 We planted n vegetabie girden behind t lie house. 1. Krendl} |vop[e;irc usually happy 3- She has a different Idea. i, My lavunte bnotw ;ire hLMimcjJ jiovds,
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Exercise 3
Using adjectives
Rewrite the following seolciKia and add two or three ^djittivcs to each one.
I. My toother owned j car. My friend lias a Msler. TIkj man was a leather n iis -niTjeti L s actually j computer 1 have a plant and a cai. Tlieie L % j tree next tollie house
Exercise 4
Editing ajjaragrajjh
HtM(l the p im gniph, Corrcct tlie mistakes with adjectives. There are m \ mb-iakes. My most valuable possession is ;i handmade Persian carpet, My parents gyve ii to me is redding gift right before I married my husband This carpel is made of wool and silk. U is rectangular in shape*, and it hrts a cold fringe along lhe borders. The colors o f my carpet arc mostly dark red tm a cream colored background. but there are also blue L U id browns designs woven inio iL In the center of the carpet, a round medallion is decorated with exquisites lines and curves. The carpet is nal thick soft, but it is lovely to look at. I keep it in my living Tiiom bccause u reminds me of my parents wonderful, and the country beautiful where it was made.
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Write a descriptive paragraph about yt>ur favorite place to vtailL Before you begin to write, review the following lime management strategy.
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Step 1
BRAINSTORMING: 5 minutes
Wriie d im ii so m e irttfi's iin jj p b o s you h:rve visited. Then w rite tiuWn so m t spi-iidc (Iculls ilxiul each p b c c . W hen you llni>hLdlooiR' [he place you w ould like to w rite a (k scrip tiv e p arag rap h abmiL
S:,p2
OUTLINING: 5 minutes
VTritC an oil Iline for j o u r p:ira_iir;! ph. Topic SErrtence
Topic _________________________________________________________ _ ______
S u p p o rtin g S e n te n c e s
Background inform ation:_________________ _________________________________
C o n clu d in g S e n te n c e
Slep 3
WRITING: 25 minutes
l:sc your Iir;f j nvorrtiliifc notes and ciutilne to w rilr your flfM draft on :i sep;imte pitcc o f paper.
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5tep 4_ EDITING:
minutes
W hen you h a v t finished your first draft, ch ec k it fo r m isiakcs, u sin g ific checklil hctCHV.
describing?
3 Did you include descriptive details about how t t e thing looks, iroelis. tastes, sounds, feeli, tc? 4 . Cud yon use specri* words as pan of v&ur description7
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Did you use adjectives *> part of your description T Are adjectives usea corredtyi (Refer Eo th e rules on p 43)
~ 7 D oes the paragraph ha^e a concluding m e n (hat restate? the 'flea irr the ;opi< nter>ce?
* Your favorite room in your hume *, way 1 Intel Ut inti.-Ti.-Nls >uli O'V bkyiic, iryin, hoi air balloon i
2.
Interview j friend, dassniatr, or relative about his o r her view* on ont of the topics above. l'alttL n o lo during thu interview. Then write a descriptive p arag rap h on the topic, but from y o u r friend's point o f view.
Unit
Example Paragraphs
Unit Goals
Rhetorical Focus
* example organization * using ex am p les as su p p o rtin g details
Language Focus:
* forming and using the simple present
* subject-verb agreem ent
PART 1
Stimulating Ideas______________________________
W riter1 use exam ples to h elp read e rs u n d erstan d w b i they m ean. A Kuod ex am p le supports a m ore idea w ith sonirthiiiB specific. In th is unit. you will w rite a parag rap h Lhui use* exam ples as sup|H>rtin^ details.
Exercise 1
* Where c J < tjnu think toe might lie jicwiijt? * Wiiai do vtm dunk her diiiJy activities m|ghi lie?
* Wvmld yrHi d e jn iilx f h e r IHe as I k i ^ v ?" W I a < _ > r w hy cH)t^
E xercise 2
R eading about the t op ic Thrce-y ear-old OlivJn [h-t s In busy New York City an d has an ImapEnary friend. W hat is iltt* m ain pro b lem w ith this Imaginary fHcnd?
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shak es he; h ead "I alw ays get Ins m ach in e." she says. Or sh e w n I spok e Raviol loday." 'D id y o u h a w fu n ? ' my w ife a n d i ask "No. He w a s busy w orking On a television" (leaving ;t up m the air if ?ie repairs electronic devices or has his o w n tafk show f.
t n L iiH t r u r ^ -! L-ici^Linn n :n lv in ( h e ( jn n p n t U k U l
p la y c u , a l l ^ J t l l l l U ' i C D f n ^ n K m HI p lu y If
LrjJlv features, lIu r.k tL 'n .'-i il'i d in ool ran Ete^ise 3 Understanding the text
_ J. Gtarik1 JU'iuli L s ;l real person _ _ 3 t >ln ia Wien plays with G&dic kavinEi
\ ChiirlJe iLlVidli is Virt different frum niuM NfW Yorkis. S 0!ii'Jj H it'tk'n Ulksiu Ctiartie l^irioli in peninv Exercise 4
Respondingto the text Write yo u r answ ers for each q u n tin n in full ie n lin c t's . Then tlistiiss >Our Answer* with :i partner* 1. M i bu Lt Olivia?_______________________________________
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------------think mi?_______________________________________________
* , Whar docs Charlie Knviuli eat and drink? Why do you think the author in dudes these details?___________________________________ _ _ ____
Exercise 5
Freewriting
Write fo r ten m inute o n ih c ro p k below. n x p rtss y o u rself as well as you til. D ont w o rry about m aking m istakes,
Till;- w rite r dcstrflics ChariSt1KaviiolJ J-s ,l busy |>L'ison. lo w TmwUJ you d ^ ilS K yuunfdl? O n * separate p t u f pJpWi m ake j Ihr o f four nr fi vu jdjociiveN
that \ o il
w ould llm.1H de-vcnlx.1 y n u js d t Then w rite jllXAJt w hy L'iich ont- destribi'i; you You may c Ik x m In n the list l*l< rt\ <w use o th er adjcctiVe*
tu u k
in
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Brainstorming jdeas
A. RCricw ;\ iu r fre en rffin a CTClse: T h e n choooe o n e LliljeCtive from yrmr freew rlni' e x e r d ie Ui;n you u u u ld like to r ite ntniut. Utc that adjective Tu co m p k -u iJie s a r t t t c hti -, T h h will h t u m r tnptu' sentence. pcrcm
B. Complete {|iie3tiori?< 1 and 1 bttiiw with tbc same Kljntire. Then Wflit your uisw iirs (o I he qu^iimh.
t w h a t e x p c r it m c t i yum Ei-10 i l i a r s h o v y o u a k y.- i m _________________
ptiTsoni?
2,. Vl1i;ii nit a i| iL _ -h tltJ jtKJ nF lt^do (lull slmw yrsu litv |ier>i in?
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Brainstorming vocabulary
*. Heail ilie follcin iit h ats o f adjcctii-e*. Adri any new words yoi] can Thinh d f to ilnLL'hjri. t s t > w r dieliimary for http. Pefjonality thiirful. outgoing, oiLniiTic, icv*n Lurnuj.
Fiwi.ng^ Appearance
peaceful, nervous. errnja ratted, gJoomy. excited. SlOCky, petuy. sreiul,. har r^cme.
C na^ct eristics
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U, C hoose four rd s from th e ch art tli.it you m ight use .-ls example* ill yo u r paray rap lu Wriie a practice m hIHKV vr [i h cach w ord you choose, ] Jam shy. Far cKamplg. t fS rcarvaue whgn I meet rew pgcpif .___________ 2 , _______________ ____________ ______ ____________________________ .V ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------4. __________________ ______________________________ _______________ 5 . _______________________________________________ ______________ _
The first sentence introduces (he topic. * It also includes the controlling idea, or what the wriier will say about Ihe topic
S u p p o rtin g S e n te n c e s The middle sentences give
* These exampEet, give -jctear picture of the writer's specific meaning C oncluding S e n te n c e
- The last sentence of ihe paragraph resta: Ihe Lopic anti wha the writer has said about k.
Exeruie 3
f te a d in g ji s tu d e n t p a r a g r a p h Head th e student paragraph. Wl} is I he title Like a M ille'? W ho in the p arag rap h Ls Like ft mule?
Like a Mule
I am a stubborn person. My Mends and relatives ure sure about iht* because ihcy have experience with me, For example, I do not lake advice from other pt-ople, When I wa^ looking for work. I had to make a choice between iwo johs. My mother and my husband wanted me
I nit 3:HarajirJphs
siubb<jm,
and ] did ikh rake their advice. ) [mfc a different job ill a bookstore. AEm , I do n[ i-h^nge my mind ca*iEy. For example. when I bought inv. e,Lr, I warned ii in while. 'Hie car dealer had all the oilier colors. j^il-^ti, gold- blue. even net!. I said tin. and wc weni to a different dealer on llit freewav almut miles away, They had [be ear m white. Now I am
driving a while car. Alsu, t always defend my opinions. For example. 1 do not lilc-c ihe wife of my husbands friend. She is a mean person, and I Edkl Ih.t whin I
lK lm i
couples. My life is not always easy, hut I am proutl to Ik a strong and stubborn woman.
E*erose 4
A nalysin g th e s tu d e n t p a r a g r a p h
WAVs in
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It. E xam ine ihe organization o f th r p^ragriiph by iJUWrnJlj! ih e questions below. n j r n co m p are answ ers w-iih a partner. 1 . Carvle ilhi te-p i-L ' .md underline the i.'nriojIM t ij idea 2. Ke,id tilt: sett>rnJ teniente IKhut dh)TH! |u.-l.i ilk' ivlippCjriJng deuils If
>, [Jo all the suppnninp svtiteatvs .sU|t]>h'H die tnpk sfmtnt'c?_____
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ii. t. ntkfUnc the eonvludinf; Nifflcoo.1 twice. L>oe* it restate iIil- topk ^vlE^-rlL^, ,
H. In your opinion, does tlK- uitlmr like hcJnn >luhlxim? Explain Vfujr answer.
Exercise 5
Writing an outline
Review your brainstorm ing ideas anil your free w riting c x rrc ist. Then use (he form to w rite an outline for ynur exam ple p;ifS(traph - You do not in-Ltl to w rite in full stnttMices, Lise only the word* dial a tv iw c a w r y for rtm tm b e rlilg th e inform ation you wUrtt to Indlidc in your piirj^niph,
Example 2:
example 3:
C o n clu d in g Sentence
fiestatr? 1h4? idea in (tie topic sentence
* learn more abtHJt using examples as * w riie a first tfrafi of your exam ple paragraph.
PART 3
Read this studeni paragraph, H'hai Is die game the audior ic f e n to in the title?
My Game
) am an iitMelic guy. I like w uateh ^poit^ on television, but 1 lovi piayinn sports even more. My favorite sport is soccer bccause il requires team work. 1 enjov working with ocher player? as a leant I am in two leagues. On both teams, I play forward hedm*e 1 am uggrrxsfvt .m d can scoic ^oals. One of the leagues is just for fun. so I can mess jjniund with my cousins and friends. The olber league is more wrious.
[ have to keep myself in gL.mil condition. There arc regular pnitiiees and we vujrk on special plays. Sometimes wc iratvd 14 other cities, in the state. I am also j sludtau. so it is tlifHcuJi [q wiifc around my school schedule. Basketball is another one of my s|ion.s. [ often jnj^y at the i^ark with my friends. Basketball L s fun even thuugh I am noi in skillful. My friends and I joke white uic pliiy and have a gL >l time, I also like swimming, Inn 1 l! l> nm swim in ciwnpctiiions. M&mly
I
sivjiti
to stay in shape loi >otcer. Playing spans is the Lbing dun I enjoy mosL anti 1 GS]>eejalfy like speetr bccausc J feel happy when nty team and I play well together.
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4.
'tt'tui examples tloes the author ^ e that show hew the two sorter leagues jirt* difierentf ^ _ _ ---------------------------------------------- -------------------- -----
B, Exam ine the organization of the paragraph by answ ering llic questions below. Then com pare your answ ers with a partner. 3. Circle the li 'pic and underline the contniQiflft Idea in the topic .sentence 2. Read llie second sentence. %1ui do >ou expect the supporting details to describe? _________ _____ ________________________________
a u th o r t.s -LihletiiJ*___________________________
-t Du nil ihc dentils support the topic sentence?___________________ ______ ^ Underline the (.'oavlndLnfi sentence Does it restate ihe lOpK?_____ _______ < } What due* the author jdd ti> the concluding .sentence ihat is m it in the topic scnlencx1 ? __________ _____________________________________________
Rhetorical Focus___________________________
Using Examples as Supporting Details
Kftectfve examples have ihe folk>winft features: * They are specific. * 'Fhey re kite dearly rn the cnnudling idcM They do n- Msimply restate Ilie topic sentence.
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Sow rt-ad the following ,suppontiig itment.'cH Thi.-y ku h support ihi.L\)nr r nsti ini; iif by giving corhTett, apedllt: iixample*
She always invites people from our neighborhood over lor di-nner. Every year ih e Iwstj a badc'to-KtiOCt party for the children on our block. X o w rt.nl i Im -.^flL fitcn tw , which are? mu effectiv e example^
ro rfte tonfttuV/j^
.rfsaJ
An c^nmplc often begins wilh 1lit: phrase For example, or For irpilanw, irt]](jwcd hy a commit,
Ke i k to slay in shape For example, h e runs six mi es every day before w ort
'itTTm.iime* writers uat; .1 -Jtml LLiJon to . nnrttscr j ^nLT-Ll s tu t e n w^ih a specific xiiiip le iy^ i nn ing with fr/r nijjh1 , i ir fo r instance.
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te a t er i s e n r e r t a r ir-.L?; f o r i n s t a n c e W rx e ljrrie s h e u se i p u fo e rs te a c h g ram m ar.
Exe^iii1 3
Id e n tify in g s p e riff c ex am pi es
hciid th e fo llo w in g to p ic K n tc n c c fl. T h e n p u l * rltc rh uxam pfes t i u l Niipjm n flic Inplc O l H I in die m ost
I To hccHjmc :i gim d writer. a student sh o u ld w riLt vitim .
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to die way,
____ a- Ftw L-sarnphi, she should try lu Write CYtr} dav because w riting
is im portant.
/ - h. For rsjm plc. slit: *lH>uld fceep.i ourrul ,md wrUe in n every evening Ix'icsrv b ill
(L c. T -i .resam ple she can Htid jft tn u il frtertd and w rftt
messages fivquenik
2. Living in itu: rily
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L . C-i<y cJv. L'llfih usually pay L | loi ciFmimcy to Iivll In iillaU OpjniUcM.
____ 3' [r is 4 J1lllk L i h lo live in ^ Lity Imx-j li * - s .t |]k- IttwitjrJe ill CiltCS
_ t'. I \ i pk' who live irt [he City Ji.n v in ck-at with pollution
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M y simt-r is e a s y to te:Lse.
____ a. For Instance. many people Like Lu pike with her ___ h. For nuance, 1 often tell ller than i am f i l i n g married. and she
a lw a y s h e iit ie * m o.
____c. For inst.i in.e. slie lu s j cheerful personality mint she dut?, nrH gel angry wlien t make Icdi^s jlTout her hoyfttend* t. This school often; 3 lo< of opportunities to students ___ a, There ire many clubs and or^m i virions ^tudenr.s cun ioln. ___ It, The sclionl Tries tu lidp student*. ___ c. Tile School has a career cnutodintJt center rhal olfers id v ift and w o r k s h o p fo r students.
T fw w o rld b b K O itiid {t liin ille r .
;i fo r Instance, it is easy to see dial many ihkn^ utv changing fn [lie W X Jrrid___ b hc.n1InsKtncc, new forms of comnflinicatlon make it easy for people frtiin dlflvreni countries to work together on projects c. For instance. many Asian people can s:x.-nd pnrr oE llie year ill tile l.l.S. and pari of the year in Asia Ix-iniLtse ii L s easy ro Havel Ixack and forth Extfrose4 M aking ex a m p les sp ecific Read the passa^ei below. Underline the exam ple. Then revise each exam ple to make it more specific.
1 1 h a v e .1 v e r y p a u e n t cut. F o r m ^ l:m ce . s h e
a iv e s t ip .
doaiff
is a
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3. The nei^hlxiis in my apartment buiktLrtK are noisy Fur example, I can't sleep at nipht hei-aube they are making a itn of flense
-t. My friend has a yftal sense of humor. For example, she always makes me laugh.
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Exercise 5
5 h a alwa y s P rin ts
2 I Jjn a Ihjm1person.
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Exorcise 6
Hevirt- your online. Then w rite th e first draft o f ui exam ple paragraph about yourself,
e x e rc is e
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Editor's Checklist
Put a ilintk { /) as appropriate Write answers in the linos provided.
_ 1. Dees the paragraph haw < * titJe* W its the litJD he*.? If tte re ts
no title,
suggest a t i t l e . ____________________________________________________
?. D ies The paragraph have a topic senietice Snai m irp d u ifi the and has i controlling -deai ii the (op* sentence does nol h s w s controJing idea, suggest a Mmirolling -,^h
3. D p
J. Are all liie supporting examples relevant? w rite down ar.jr th.it seem u n r a te d to the io p ic .____________________ ______
_ i 5. D oes the eoniludifitl w nrence rcstati; the idea in the lop;c sentence? _ l 6. Arp you cpnv.nced rlia; the inain deseripti word Thai th ew m er tries j s t h t con trebling idea describes thewrLtei vne^P
* icaro about
subjed-verb agreemerrt.
PART 4
Language Focus____________________________________________
U&ing the Simple Present
( ' l j the *rrtp3f p rire n t rtrflst? to expres tuh][s jjjlI routines I waits up dT &:0 w wy day AJso use 11ic iiivipk- p a re n t i:i v/nte .il kjur jfiifK il truths and scientific facts. Batnts a*e a great responsiiuiity. The ia n h revolves around the sun
*l< L'r sb tt iH, .1 sin>^jbr rtame \Milribti. Lux Ajihclv), tir a r^uLir iiuim my/rteutl tbc faA')_ add h>i s s to c ltL - kise form o f the ,trb. *" JO ft mi t i]c:y Lvu si lH-lti ;l- iits iislj dwtit \ f + t i ( K+ 1 1il- Im e li inn t" |jlLl VeH. We exercise lvo v -M y. He works in Manhattan. E^na d o not go to school.
S p eak er often L'cmintLt tfo not jn d titn.n not L i i dam t imd h*.r,u : Htimrv'cr, contraittions Jie nor appropriate for written academic Lji^lsIi.
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Affirmative ita tcm en b s u it e r BASE FOAM OF VEflB OR 8ASE f<WM OF VtRB + -S/'fS
SUBJECT
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OF VERB
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1 My oou& i________________________ _____________________________ i . Mow. of mjr ctassraMii______________________________________________ 4 My lx*r friend______________ ________________________________ ______ _ S. The children kn my rtritftiboihtxxJ___________________________ _________ .
Language Focus____________________________________________
Subject-Verb A g r e e m e n t
xttb mitsi grvx- in number with its subject. consider d*? examples. In the fir.sj sc m tiK t, a plund verb form f a rt) frttkjws j plural pronoun i u c) Hi >wever. in lhc se o m d sentence, a fiinjiiiiur form i 0 follows rhe plural subject This sentence Is incorrect. We re tired. We is tired. GncotrectI Uic ,i plural verb folltnvinj; two or more noun* ttwl are joined Iv ^ 1and Man/ and her sister live m L di, Vegas I ;se singular verti follow inn '3 Kioup as a whole. nnun when it talks olxnit the
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I Min Blnpulitr verb follnwJnjj ;i noun rn ^xprt^slons rh;n r^ilvr n> ,t single memlx-Tof^t jiriJLip. One-of ihe siudenLi owns a restaurant
IhE- Pif<Jh'r []i [he w oirtfS sviiyv e a t s iirsC.
Exerciser
_ -ii ilk' stadium each morning. __________ __j brarhl new cat
5. Itachet anil Julia _________ ' \U sister und her Imyfnend V H it fun c lu b ____________
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Editing a paragraph Krnd liic ^rn p jJi . O ir r c d ill? iu iM :io with piW cul Hiim - Vb I m .
T b t f t are ICO iiiisla k i.'s.
My Talented Sisters
My &isiers arc- hoih r^ifc^nidi people, Vanessa und Rita is musicians. Vanessa is a piiino player and Rila play ihe iuiinr. They are students at The High School tor the Performing Arts. Van&ssa and some other girl* in her cJii.ii> is
p e rfo rm e rs
nearly every weekend Jim jnc good pract^c for them tsjcHuse Ihey wanls bo ptay professionally one day. My oilier sister. Kila, is yoinicer lhan Vanessa, She
is
vcr\ welt. She usually perform at family panic*. They works hard. Every <Liy when ihey eonies home, 'hey nie
p la y m u sic: tir e d .
hm somelimes they
tor
u& al
home.
We
feels
lu e k y 10
in our family.
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Exercise 5
Review yo u r p arag rap h fa r mistakes* I.'ne the f h if k lls t .k m . Then w rite a final draft.
Did y^u capitalize the first letter o f each sentence and put e<d punctuation at tiie end?
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PART 5
Read the to p ic uem ences an d the exam ple* iha[ follow. Then pm A chtv next to i h t exam ples [hid iUp|H)rt th e fopfc KiitciKC. I . Computer* tux t' ni-itkutu JmLw" Iive* ir.1sicf ____ d. They can iiH Ji ([LLVMii'n1 . (if ihcir in?iiut.iur> ___ b They 1-jn (itiil dwir papers caslv hy (IddinK their fjin> and typing new words tH- st-ntL-rtC ___ t. They can ftmll Mudy groups ilfKl discuss lopiL-s in live liixnlrv.
_____ (L The1 ,' c t ji njMfUTb in/orm 2ik>n i>n <1*7 [nerrkt
p an to
___ h, For rxyniplL, she Is witling to IrnJ her frteflds mond)' it lliev for It___ c For tMimpV. she takes timcofT Ui u k e L"jn_ of J .sick lir.mtlrin x h tT , .___ ik For CKHnp](.hshe inlw:tyj. itiiics rf there IS SEsythLTtjj .she cun dfi Fur her friends. 3- Shopping online num.1t'OrtVeniem Than stjtK )>pin> Jt a dcpartmenl Ktijfr. ___ a Y (M J can shop online at any titrv oJ thi? day. ____ h, V(KJ cun c a m iw t prices 31 iXiVtral store* when \hopptny ininc.L . _ _ _ c VfHi cvinntjt luvch the fabric o f die dothe* you Uftlct. 0- StaLt? stnj dll nfH I t n t siuiiliTW,
(J leu V CV T JL K huuMi*
I. Reading is an important way |t> practice J nfft lanpuagt. ___ _ a For tnsunw. n s d h it linprtmcs M Kihulin'. ___ b For tnsunoe. it is tdifiojlt lo Icam a new bnguLv ___ c. ro r tm u n a:. n a tlb ii fKlp^ peopli- b m cntciv-t; iMinrtv.
____ tl For Insismee, ivadinR iiitfjus you to praiiH.v II .W hngu;tge.
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my son helped esil11 lx.vtJiriLj more puiienL J exffiiw i! frill Arum'S uitwt (d N s.iy healthy for my so/i M llS for bow s holding hLru in. ni>r Jmi' unlilhe tell ileep J IttJ If) spend up to IWU \mum trying tn Feed turn.
____ J. when ht M S older. ] .vent (ft illi^'ic* ft'iih him. Fxgrrise 2 W riting sp-edft^ ex a m p les li'rilc two exjjiipies a* sup porting deiaila for Cdtll o f Ilit fol!(fflinfi topic sen ten ces J (JiJkTie Mutlenrs h:nv :j stuvAifiil Itfe.
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3. A tourist._______________________________________________________
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.J*
llte
S I . U r f :tir
V H i e p r e s id e n t cjf ih t- c w jj^ n iy n ik tm
6. H e __________________________
the university,
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Editing a paragraph
Head th e p in ij^ ip h , f o r r e tl [lie m istflji w ith p resen t tense vfrhs.
Trust
The most important quiiliiy o f a friend is honesty. An honest friend never lie itioui anything. She id i you, for csanrpk^ if she i;rt:c-
v-iiK vliu on an issue. When you ^sk for artvice, she tel is vou ihe truth even when it is difficult. When you usk\ an honest friend's opinion about the clothes you are wearing to a p;my, she tells you if they ure inappropriate. If you docs something bad, iihe do noi hesitate to give you sincere feedback. Thi>* honesty result in trust between you and your friend. In -hurt, honesty iire ihe most important characteristic that I took for in a friend.
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t|MED WRITING: 4S minutes Ul'rttc 311 cxam pk paragraph nn the to p k below . Before you begin ti> wrilt, review llic following time manajicmeni mrattg). !X*crlbe your ideal Knjilish ((.-.tL'llel Whal is lu^ rir her most import JM characteristic?
Step 1
B R A IN S T O R M IN G : ^ m i n u t e s
What characteristics must a good Entijish t c a d w have? Urite down as many o f these d u n ctcfiiitjk s you con In the b o \ or on a separate piece of paper. Ilien chtKwt one characteristic tliat is die must Impiirtant to yon, and w rilr four specific c x s n ip l for die ch>HCftH$(ic.
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Step 1
Supporting Sentences
Example l ________
Example
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Eiam plfc 4:
C o n c lu d in g S e n te n c e
Step 1
WRITING: 25 minutes
Hat: your brainstorming nolts mul Oinline lit write your firsl drafl on a separate piccc o f paptT.
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Step 4
EDITING: 10 minutes
W hen you have fin ish ed y o tir firsi draft, ehcck It for m falakes, Lisinn th e fhtrklLM hckrvv. M ike u iy cb njtt-' nccesMry.
Put a check { / ) 35 ap p rop riate. 1. Does the t a p s sentence introduce tne topic 3Hri contain a controlliftg ides?
2.
D oes the paragraph irKude ip ecifit examples to Irelo Ih rM LULT u nteivand ii'O L ir point of view?
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1. Write an exam p it paragraph on one o f the following topk>, A good physician Y u u t (avixrtte rc(;ivc A prtMdeni prime minuter >ou would voie for The worst w.iiler 2, interview a frkiid, iLiism atc, or ir U th r aboul hi* or her vltw s on o n e o f the topics above. Jake notes during ihe interview to use for your pitr^M ph. Then write ;in exam ple paragraph on one o f the topics above, hut from a friend's point view.
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Process Paragraphs
Unit Goals Rhetorical focus
proccss organization
Language focus:
using time order words in proccss paragraphs using imperatives modal* o f advice, ncccssity, and prohibition
Stimulating Ideas
A pfQCCfl |)ra^rjph explains turn lu do som ething step by MtL p. Tlie reader should be able to follow Ihe sie|is to get a desired result.
Exercise I
* \Fhat tk> you liunk lit person should do r a ' Why? Hn e v'ui evL-r hecn frightened by another cit-ailllc? F ajjIuhi whj' ,ind what happened Exercise 2^_ Reading about the topje Sharks som etim es Attack swimmers or Cuba divers In the ocean. What is the most important thing lo do if a shark attacks you?
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Exercise 3
Sliark> l t Hilt d o * : n.] Ijnti w | urn Hi try ure In i n ^ n . Shark?, ahvay* jfueJi p e o p le w h o a te for i w i y innn ih t lic*idi-
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3, Vflien y o u are cli<^ins ,i pl.ice to wjm or >*uki dive. v I lit .soft of places should you
m ay
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Freewriting
Write for leu minutes on the topic below, Express yourself .* well a> you eon. Don't worry about making mistakes.
to jjer out of j M [u;sri<m . Thinfmi .^Niieitiniffihat you Etnmv hem to do ttui mijiht Ixhelpful Irj someone else, li does ntH Imc tt) Ik: Jil emeiltcncy 'itualiori It can lxsomeihing .simple sudi packing a suitcase or i.li_i njcin>: die oil in a car. ConskkT the ft i|l<n\ mu question* a* y<u w ile
How ic Rglll Off a Murk" expblin* the Steps you shtiukl wke
\x IM l is the liwk? What wi|] >he ie>ull l*v Whui tltj> vou need to do fin? Second? 'Child?
W hal n h o uld y<3U a vokl d u in j'*
learn about procevi organization brainstorm idea* and specific vocabulary to use in your writing. create an outline for your proce paragraph.
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PART 2
S ra nstormingjdeas
Review y o u r freew ritln g ex ercise. T hen d o th e follow ing, A. T hink o f winH1 task s :tnd activities th a t you d o often . W rite th em in th e c h a rt below . Then select o n e o r tw o that a r e prot$vs th a t re q u ire >Tcp<. Finally, p u t a ch ec k n e x t to th o se activities th a t m ight be good limpies fo r a p rtn 'ess p arag rap h .
Time
Morning
Afternoon
Evening
W eekends
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Exercise 1
ftrainrtorming vocabulary
A* Circle the words that you might Like to il In your writing. Then add two or three words to each list.
Measure a loot, a pouna, a tablespoon,
Use
fill
rnsen
Remove
H, On a s i-p ira ti p ic te o f pa per, m r v n r o b u k r y from (he t h a n to wriiu five KOtvnoes about y o u r p ro tfs^ .
Rhetorical Focus
Process Organization
A pm ccH |'.ii,Lnn;Lj>h iltstiilx 's the steps neccssary to perform a prnccss or task. Topic S e n te n c e * The topic sentence iniroducei the process lhat the writer will explain,
S u p p o r t in g S e n te n c e s
* The middle sentences describe a sequence o1 step-, that give detailed mftjrmation about trie stages of the proctss. Toese sentences may also give bdckoround details, rhat help define the process for [he reactor or explain why ttics p n x e si is useful of rnxessary Supporting sentences may also include ihe tool? needed for the task
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Limn i h o i c .\ i rarJKraph>i
Concluding Sentence
* Tilt* paraarapti e n d * W ith a concluo'ing sentence itia r Testa;es The topic
* Th -. sen ieru e
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easy u> yio vt. All you need is a shovel and a few simple steps. In faL-tr ^rowing rosts tail actually be fun. l-'irst, go to a nursery to (Hjrgliest die rose pi inis. Vou wilt probably see man} beautiful varieties, hail il i* best Lo thoose Lsnly iwo or thra: ioia; I m l m to ^tan with. You should liIso purchase potting s<ti| jtrwl rose food, Aftur you bring your rose plants home. look for a vumiy -.pot in your garden because rosesi tovc sunshine. Then dig a deep bole wiih a shovel and lllL lL j tittle polling toil and rose food, Ncm. transplant y o u rro s fi from th^ pot
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garden. Co^er (be rooi> with mote polling soil and then give jo u r nev roses a big drink of walor. A,> long a* They have Minshine and water, jo u r io>c> will stay healthy all summer. When winter comes, your noses will lose Their howers and leaves and look dead. As a result, you might iliink about discarding llieni. Do not do thal. Instead this b the best tim e io prune lhem. Cul o il Hie thin stems with garden shears so Lhat Jhe bush ceui become stronger ihe next spring. If you continue to iplic L-;ine of your tu scs er ibis simple way, they will produce beautiful flowers ye?r after ycfl.r.
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Exercise 4
i Do you Jcel cwifidcil! that t, oil cnutd raise mtie* :ifter reading this paiagrjph? Why or why run?_______________ ___________________________________ _
ft, F xainine [lie o rganization n f die p arag rap h by an sw erin g d ie qufStlon> b cltm . Then c o m p Jf l - yo u r an sw ers w ith ii p artn er. 1. i ndeftlne the topic sentence. Which of iln.- following tfiitenients l>esL describes ILie m;tin Idea of rhe paragraph? (Check one.)
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____h, Crowing mscs Is easy. ____ c. Hoses arc difficult to grow, 1. Wlikti nr' ihe following type-. cl deiaih does the writer intlude in the paragraph? (Clieck all that apply. I ____ a ihe loots lh:U are ncofrttury 1 1 If growing rose'. ____ h. warnings about what nut to do when (PDwing n^ses ____ v Meps dxa gardener* nhmitd u k c when growing rose* ____d. die result of (he task 3. [Underline ilte tondudingseniencc twice. Which statement hdow 1h;m dcM rilx*s die concluding sentence? (Check t me k ____ ,i h h a w j mtog alxml what can go wrong when growing r o w . __ _ h. h tells llie expected result of (he procL's.1 ____ C- ll is J summary of the main isteiis.
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tae^ise i
W riting an outline
Ht'vlew villirtirjiitMurilLil); iiUvLv am! valif I n w r itin n c ic r c lw , t'tltn use tlit t h a n below to w rite m (mtllm- f w y o u r process parflKnjplL
Topic Sentence
S u p p o r t in g S e n t e n c e s
Background informal*!
Step 5; ______
Concluding Sentence
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your item^ before ytm leave, Next, uather the items you will need for your activities. Remove any item that is not necessary. Try Jo mix and match fewer pieces of clothing and shoes by choosing a color or colors thai match. Third, you are ready to pack. Start with large items such as books or shoes.. Stuff your shoes vuih extra socks to save spare. Then place shties in plastic bag* and fit them into the comers ot ynur suitcase. There should be plait) of room for the clnthcs. To avoid wrinkles, layer yuur clothcs and rol! them up. Pul the rolls o f cloth mg into the suitcase. Then pul in the smaller items, Finally, before you d ose your suitcasc. cheek your list. Make sure you bave uni forgotten your swimsuit! Many people like to swim while they are on vacation, h is worthwhile to lake your time u hen \ ou pack your suitcase because a ^ell-packed suitcasc is the secret to a good travel experience.
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A nalyzing th e s tu d e nt p a raqraph A. R espond to th e p arag rap h by answ ering th e qu estio n s below in hill sentences. 1. is it impcjftjril to vtew travel plans?__________________ ____
vt II.Il smIk- L Ili iih lTS snit^y for piLL'kinK "n" :i (i."w |1dcLj.Hlu'ckrthinfl?
3. \V]i;Li items does [he author suggest pulling in due jiuUcaw first? Why?
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'S'? ;H k ilkli* u i
d>e pfOOiS?
. Hind (.T h.: scflicnrc that s unrelated to the ljrpk nmd <Jrcv J lne (hnnigSi 1 1 .
6. I m k-rlini: the L 'iriL-JutUnt; scnth-iiLL-1 me. [Vn;s n I fh(.i HM h f I o ll Svntuiee?
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language Focus
Using rim e Order Words in Process Paragraphs TlnM; order words k-l! ihe order o f step.'; in a p ro test. Vou c a n use first and second uj indicase the first w o siL-ps in a p ro e e ^ . Lsc next, then* taler, nr (tfi^rtbax to add m ore steps, Fi) tatty m arks the last siep In ihe ymjetiss.
First. make list.
medication*.
A fte r th a t, roll the clolhes to void wnnM ts Finally, check your I or any forgotten i[em s
ConnecUiii link tw o d m se * toi-cthei Q jnneetors like before and aft or can also function as time order w ords w hen they link two srepts Ln j
p ro cess. B efore you ctosu your ctiecV- youi list.
Exercise 3
____ it Nexi, make u list tif people llul yuu woukl like to invite ___ h. After ymtr house Is dean, >411 chopping for RkkI. flowers and tIet.Knotion* ____ c. Then make j funny or pretty Inviliiikin and email ii to your friend* ____, d. Ftruilh, tum tin the nliKlC, and waft for the fun to Ixgin. _____ c . Before die gue^s amve. dccncute the house, ^ t the mWe, and take
j shower,
____ f. After you have everything you need plan u inu-al and make surt you ean eook most Lif it beforr your guests arrive. ____p A few days before die party, snirt eleanmg your lKXise. ____ h. Firs*, choose an approprime date .it least rwo weeks before s3iv party
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you drink plenty of water when ynu go on longer runs because it is important for your muscles. When ihe day of the nice is close, cheek your shoes. Ynu might need a new pair. The ni^hi before you race, eat a lot of carbohydrates, They will stive you energy for the tig day. ____________ on Lhe day o f the race, get up early and drink plenty of water. You shmild feel confident, \tmng. and ready to ao.
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Exercise 5
Head the following topic. With a partner, write some important steps in the process. l x appropriate time order word*.
Trjpk\ ] tow to Ijiiv j used tvr
_ _____________________________________ Stop ] : ________________________ _
Step
Slep i:
Slirp i
Exercise 6
Exercise 7__ Peer editing a first draft After you write your (trst draft, cschaiiRc it with n partner. Answer the questions on the checklist on pjge B!i You may also write com m ents or questions on your partner's draft. Then read your partner's com m ents on your first draft and revise It as necessary.
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Editor's Checklist
Put a check W ) as appropriate. Write answers in complete sentence* in the lines provided.
1 D o ih e paragraph have a topic sentence? Can you identify the process the vvnter will describe?
_2. D oes the writer provide background inioim aiion about the process? If
so. w /ite i| here. __________ _________________________________ _
3. Dotfi. The paragraph have tim e or-der word; to help clarity she orrier o< tne steps in The p r o js 1 If 50. winch tim e order words d oes the w rier
use? .
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D o IN? wr iter ejtpiain w hy thu process is useful or necessary and include the tools n ^ d t'd ? If not, w n ie the mformation that is missing h e r e .______________________ ____________________________
_ 5. Does Lhe concluding sentence restate the mam idea m Ihe topic sem ence or give a suggestion or warning
* le a m a b o u t im peratives.
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PART 4
Language Focus_____________________________________________
Using Imperatives
Use Imperative .scnicnutbt to lve Instructions. dircctifns, or to tell step in 4 process. * The verb m an Imperative iddre.vse.s the redder w listener dirccily.
lr or ji negative imperative, iio not. Do nol let you - fir.ijer g et Mughrt in (he strirvy
____ 1. ll L > ini|>jn:in[ in .sun early in llw mommy 10 avoid tlic lte-ji.
___ 3. tiei down on your luncll ukI knees and crawl uniter the .smoke. ____ 1 . Try not to >;et chili powder in your eyes. ____ S. You should .isk j prafcssjuruL 10 dispose of ilic used motor otl ___ < ). 'Wish i^mr left Jurtd. Krjl' UlO tvd handle J.fhJ pull il
_____ " G e ttin g < > vu o f j tra ffic
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not
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fo llo w
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Exercise 2
You sh^nti dress ifl tt.uslftimbLc dohsrtp: jrid sneakers 11r KinhJaU.
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p
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Affirmative Statements with Shoufd indlH uil SUBJECT J VftJ He She It Wf Y O U ^Thev
N eg ative Statem ent* w ith H ave to SUttfECT
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Exercise 3
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Exercise 4
N^it bulb
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Exercise ^
Editing a paragraph
Read die pa rajjrapJ i and rorrpct any mistake* with imperative?, or with .In m ill or Wit St. There are seven m is t a k e People who ant scriuii> about managing tlieir titne better .nliuuld foltCwiny ihis pafOceduTie. [1 win hi:Ip you to have mure control ovtr
your lime. First, you need to figure oui how you actually spend your time. You make 1 1a> t o f all tlie dungs you dn daily, Wniin^ down how
ninth lime you spend on each diitiy. Include activities like latkm^on
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the telephone or buying a cup i>f coflFec, Your list will be quiio long. Tlic-n find iltc activities thill you cun eliminate from your daily routine. It may tv hard to ^ive up a trip to the coffee shop. boil you can do ft. You must Eoinii to work, su v< hi cannoi eliminate that item, but you will probably find other items that are not nceosary, Yn-u sfwuld Jrojjpcd those unnecessary activities to mate tune for more important Things. Nc\t, prepare a schedule for yourself. Beinj: realistic about 1he lime of day you choose for certain activities. Make a schedule ihm you can follow, Nol try110 clo too much. If you follow Llie^e steps and manage your schedule carefully, you will have :t happier, more organized life.
Exercise 6
Editing you r first draft Review y o u r p arag rap h fo r m istakes. Lise th e checklist below . Then w rite a final draft.
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Did you use imperatives to give instructions or directions? Did you use sfiouto' to give tips and advice? Did you u w m utt to explain rules or necessities? Did you use
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BRAINSTORMING; 5 minutes
['E i ink about som eon e that you h aw bntighi a spot Lai gHt lor. Write down tb*-- glO tli-it you c h o w Lind limv ;on decided lo buy ft. Try- to Uilnk o f Uiree o r fo u r s ic p s thai djcsrrilK the prooc;,;;. Think o f r e a iM fj) ibnt l-j c I i step k L i i ] | ) o i i a j L [ and w r J c e down (he reasons,
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W rttr iin o JtU llC for ) W r paragraph.
Topic Sentence
S u p p ortin g S en ten ce
Background information-
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Unit i Ph jc o s ftirjjiraphs
Opinion Paragraphs
Unit Goals
Rhetorical Focus
o p in io n o rg an izatio n using reaso n s to s u p p o rt an o p in io n
Language Focus:
u sing there is/there are to in tro d u c e facts u sin g because o f an d because to give reaso n s
PART 1
Stimulating Ideas
In a n o p in io n p a r a g r a p h , th e w r ite r e x p r e s s e s a n d s u p p o r ts a n o p in io n o n a p a r tic u la r to p ic o r issu e. T h e w r ite r m u s t g iv e r e a s o n s th a t h e lp p e r s u a d e th e r e a d e r to a g re e w ith h im o r h er.
Exercise 1
Would you like to live in a place like this? Why or why not?
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glaciers: rivers of ice pioneer: early .settler in a natural area per capita: compared lo the rest of the population
lumberjacks: workers who cut down trees for wood hard-pressed: challenged poke up: lo stand shim m er: to shine with a soft light
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Exercise 4
2. What did you learn ab o u t the history of Seattle from this text?
Exercise 5
Freewriting
W rite fo r te n m in u te s o n th e to p ic b elo w . E x p re s s y o u r s e lf as w e ll as y o u c a n . D o n t w o rry ' a b o u t m a k in g m ista k e s . In City with a Grey-Green Heart," the author writes about a city with natural beauty and youthful energy. What do you look for in a city? Describe the features of a city that wOuld be perfect for you. W hat practical conveniences does the city have? (e.g., housing, jobs, transportation?) H ow d o es it look o r feel? W hat entertainm ent, sports, o r opportunities for fun are there?
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PART 2
WRITING TASK
In th is u n it, y o u w ill w rite a n o p in io n p a r a g r a p h a b o u t a c ity o r to w n th a t y o u th in k p ro v id e s a g o o d q u a lity o f life.
Exercise 1
Brainstorming ideas
A. R eview y o u r f r e e w r itin g e x e rc is e . T h e n b r a in s to r m a list o f th r e e p la c e s w h e r e y o u w o u ld lik e to live. G ive tw o o r th r e e r e a s o n s f o r each one.
Ideal places to live 1. Reasons
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Exercise 2
Brainstorming vocabulary
A. W ith a p a r tn e r , d is c u s s th e m e a n in g o f th e p h r a s e s in e a c h c a te g o ry b elo w . If y o u d o n o t k n o w a w o rd , u se v o u r d ic tio n a r y fo r h e lp . T h e n b r a in s to r m a d d itio n a l w o rd s fo r e a c h c a te g o ry .
Attractions
tem perate climate beautiful scenery interesting architecture
Opportunities
low unem ploym ent excellent colleges world-class museums
Cost of living
inexpensive restaurants convenient public transportation affordable housing
People
talented cooks diverse com m unities colorful personalities
B.
S elect w o r d s fro m th e c h a r t a b o v e, in c lu d in g th e w o r d s y o u a d d e d , a n d u se th e m to w r ite five s e n te n c e s a b o u t th e p la c e y o u w o u ld lik e to live. San Francisco has convenient public transportation.
Rhetorical Focus
O pinion O rgan ization
In an o p in io n p arag rap h , th e w riter p re se n ts an o p in io n an d tries to p e rs u a d e read ers th a t the o p in io n is a g o o d o n e. T h e w riter tries to m a k e read ers ag ree w ith him o r her.
Topic Sentence
The topic sentence introduces the topic and states the writer's opinion about the topic.
Supporting Sentences
The middle sentences give reasons that support the writer's opinion. W riters often use facts, explanations, and personal experiences to support their opinion.
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Concluding Sentence
The last sentence restates the writer's opinion in different words. It also com m ents on the opinion in some way. The concluding sentence som etim es summarizes the main reasons for the writer's opinion.
Exercise 3
A Vietnamese Paradise
In V ietnam , the best place to spend a honeym oon is the beautiful m ountain city called Da Lat. For many reasons, this rom antic city has the perfect atm osphere fo r a new husband and wife to celebrate their m arriage and plan their future. First o f all, the scenery provides a beautiful setting for w alking and talking. The clim ate is pleasant all year round because it is high above the ocean. S om etim es fog com es in and the city becom es m ysterious and private. At other tim es, the sun shines, and Da Lat is cheerful and lively. T here are beautiful gardens and lovely French colonial architecture. Young couples can w alk along the boulevards in the shade o f tall pine trees. They can sit on benches in the flow er parks and hold hands. In addition. Dal Lat is fashionable. T here are excellent hotels that have special room s for honeym ooners with candles and beautiful decorations. A lso, the streets are full o f activity, so the new lyw eds can go out to one o f the stylish restaurants that are open until late at night. The lights are soft, and the m usic is rom antic. T he new lyw eds can eat delicious food, listen to m usic, and m eet other young couples in love. Da Lat is the V ietnam ese people's first choice for a honeym oon because it has lovely natural scenery, many rom antic places to stay, and exciting things to do.
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Exercise 4
B. E x a m in e th e o r g a n iz a tio n o f th e e s s a y b y a n s w e r in g th e q u e s tio n s b elo w . T h e n c o m p a r e y o u r a n s w e r s w ith a p a r tn e r . 1. U nderline the topic sentence. Which of the following statem ents best describes the main idea of the paragraph? (C hoose one.) ____ a. Da Lat is the perfect place to have a honeym oon. ____ b. Da Lat is a po p u lar place to have a honeym oon. ____ c. Vietnam is a great place to live. 2. Which of the following reasons d o es th e au th o r use to support her opinion? (C hoose all that apply.) ____ a. the climate ____ b. the reasonable cost o f food and hotels ____ c. the scenery and architecture ____ d. die nightlife ____ e. the transportation
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3. U nderline the concluding sentence twice. W hich statem ent best describes the concluding sentence? (Choose one.) ____ a. a description o f how the climate of Da Lat is romantic ____ b. a suggestion that the reader have a honeym oon in I)a Lat ____ c. a prom ise that Da Lat will not disappoint the reader ____ d. a sum m ary o f the main reasons w hy Da Lit is a great place to have a honeym oon
Exercise 5
Writing an outline
R eview y o u r b r a in s to r m in g id e a s a n d y o u r f re e w ritin g e x e rc is e . T h e n u s e th e fo r m b e lo w to w rite a n o u tlin e fo r y o u r p a r a g r a p h . R e m e m b e r to w rite y o u r o u tlin e in n o te fo rm .
Topic Sentence
State the topic and your opinion about the topic.
Supporting Sentences
W h a t are some reasons for your opinion? Include notes about some of the following: attractions, opportunities, cost of living, and people
Concluding Sentence
Restate your opinion and com m ent on it, or summarize the main reasons.
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2. What three main reasons does the author give to support her opinion?
3. What are some things that the author must do that she does not like to do?
B. E x a m in e th e o r g a n iz a tio n o f th e p a r a g r a p h b y a n s w e r in g th e q u e s tio n s b e lo w . T h e n c o m p a r e y o u r a n s w e rs w ith a p a rtn e r. 1 U nderline the topic sentence. 2. How many main reasons d o es the w riter g iv e ?____________________________ 3. I inderline die concluding sentence twice. D oes it restate the idea in die topic sen ten ce?_______________________________________________________________ 4. Do you agree with any o f the points the writer makes? Explain.
Rhetorical Focus______________________________________________
Using Reasons to Support an Opinion
T here are often m any different o p in io n s a b o u t a certain topic. T herefore, w riters must give reasons for dieir o p in io n s in o rd e r to co n v in ce their readers. T hese su p p o rtin g reaso n s are often in the form o f facts, ex p lan atio n s, o r ex p erien ces. A fact is a p iece o f inform ation that p e o p le generally ag ree is true. In an op in io n parag rap h , a w riter m ight u se scientific, historical, or o th e r ty p es o f facts. An explanation c a n n o t be p ro v en (like a fact can) but it still helps th e read er u n d erstan d w hy th e w riter h o lds a certain opin io n .
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An e x p e r i e n c e is so m eth in g rhut h a p p e n e d to you o r s o m e o n e else. Writers o ften u se e x p erien ces to s h o w h o w Lhey w ere in flu en ced to [hink a certain way.
You have to be tough to live in Chicago W in ters in C hicago are very cold. It is not easy to deal w ith those cold, w indy days. M y cousin once got frostbite w hile w aiting at a bus stop.
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3. T here is no better city to visit than Istanbul. __________________ a. P eople in Istanbul are friendly and alw ays willing to help their neighbors. __________________ b. Bridges connect the n eighborhoods o f Istanbul so that it can exist in both E urope and Asia at the sam e time. __________________ c. I had th e best meal o f my life in a small caf in Istanbul. __________________ d. Istanbul has a historically im portant location as a port city on the only route betw een the M editerranean and the Black Sea.
Exercise 4
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Exercise 5
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Exercise 6
Put a check ( / ) as appropriate. Write answers in complete sentences in the lines provided.
1. Does the paragraph have a topic sentence that expresses an opinion about the topic? 2. Does the paragraph include any facts to support the writer's opinion? W h a t facts does it in c lu d e ? _______________________________________________
3. 4. 5.
Does the writer provide explanations that support the opinion? Does the w riter tell any experiences that support the opinion? Does the w riter need to provide more reasons to support the opinion? W h a t kinds of re a s o n s ?___________________________________________________
6. Does the paragraph have a concluding sentence that restates the writer's opinion and com m ents on it in some w a y ?
PART 4
Language Focus____________________________________________
Using T h e r e I s / T h e r e A r e
Wriiers o ften use
T h e re a re harvest festivals every autum n. T h e re is a picturesque village in the m ountains near Mexico City. T h e re a re no mosquitoes at this altitude.
In statem en t, a n o u n o r a n o u n p h rase follow s there is/there are. U se there are w ith plural n o u n s. U se there is w ith all o th e r n ouns.
T h e re a re tall nine trees lining the streets of Da Lat.(plural noun) T h e re is a large lake near M aracaibo, (singular noun) T h e re is w a te r beyond the m ountains, (noncount noun)
Use
Exercise 1
Practicing w ith t h e r e i s / th e r e a r e
W rite is or are in the blanks to complete the sentences below. 1 . T here
le a p arad e o f children holding flowers.
2. T h e r e ___________ a lot of m usic in the streets. 3. T h e r e __________ m any nightclubs. 4. T h e r e __________ not m any cars on the road, but you might 5. T h e r e __________ no airport in my city. 6. T h e r e __________ not much w ind, so p eo p le prefer this beach. see bicycles.
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Language Focus____________________________________________
Using B e c a u s e O f an d B e c a u s e
Use because o r a n o u n p h rase.
People spend a lot of tim e outdoors because of the mild clim ate.
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4. G ardening is popular th e r e ______________________ th e valley has ideal conditions for roses. 5. Il is easy to gel around die c ity ______________________ lhe governm ent has im proved lhe public transportation system. 6. A lot o f p eople go t h e r e ______________________ die gourm et food.
Exercise 4
Using b e c a u s e
of
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Exercise 5
Editing a paragraph
Read the following paragraph and correct mistakes w ith there is/there are and because o f or because. There are seven mistakes.
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the Atlantic Ocean. There is a lot of beaches, and they are full of activity every day. The scenery is spectacular as well. You can see great geological formations, such as the granite mountain called Sugar Loaf, and on another peak named Corcovado, you can see an enormous statue that looks over the city. Brazil also has many varieties of music because the many cultures and traditions. Finally, there are also a place for people who enjoy tranquility. The botanical gardens are filled with exotic varieties of plants and animals. So Rio de Janeiro is a place with many different faces, it can be beautiful, crazy, and peaceful depending on your mood.
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PART 5
Read each opinion and the reasons that support it. W rite Fact, Explanation, or Experience next to each reason.
1. The Guggenheim museum is the most interesting building in New York City. __________________ a. The tilled corkscrew shape o f the building is unlike anything else in the city. __________________ b. It was designed by the architect. Frank Loyd Wright. __________________ c. The first time I saw the Guggenheim. I was so amazed that I spent an hour just looking at the building from the outside. __________________ d. Many visitors have trouble focusing on the artwork because they are distracted by the intensity of the architecture. 2. People spend too much money on personal appearance. __________________ a. People spend billions annually on cosmetics. __________________ b. People want to look good, but they are spending money that could be used for more important purposes such as education or a home. __________________ c. Cosmetic surgery is becoming more and more costly as the variety of procedures increases. __________________ d. My brother-in-law had to work overtime because his wife spent a lot Of money on clothes, and jewelry, so he ow ed a lot of money on his credit cards. 3. Water is our most important natural resource. __________________ a. What would happen in your house if you lost water for one day? __________________ b. The human body is 98 percent water. __________________ c. Lick o f fresh drinking water causes major health crises in som e countries even,' year. __________________ d. Not only is water important for drinking, washing and badiing, it is also important for growing food.
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Exercise 2
t h e r e is / t h e r e a r e
Rewrite the following sentences using sentences w ith there is/there are.
1. Whales arc in Puget Sound in the summer.
5. Many stories exist about the first blue-eyed tribes that lived in Argentina.
Exercise 3
Using b e c a u s e
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Step 1
BRAINSTORMING: 5 minutes
W rite down tliree or four ages that people get m arried. Then think o f reasons w hy each might be good. Then choose the best age for your paragraph.
Step 2
OUTLINING: 5 minutes
W rite an ouUinc for your paragraph.
Topic Sentence
State the topic and your opinion about the topic
Su p p o rtin g Sentences
F a c ts :____________________
Explanations:
Experiences:
C o n clu d in g Sentence
Restate your opinion and com m ent on it, or summarize the main reasons.
Step 3
WRITING: 25 minutes
Use your brainstorm ing notes and outline to w rite your first draft on a separate piece of paper.
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Step 4
EDITING: 10 minutes
When you have finished your first draft, check it for errors, using the checklist below.
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4. Did you use there is/there are to introduce facts? 5. Did you use because o f and because correctly w h e n giving reasons?
_ 6. Did you capitalize the first letter of each sentence and put end punctuation at the end ?
Topics for Future Writing 1. W rite an opinion paragraph on one of the follow ing topics.
Whai is the best job for you? Why? Is it a good idea to live with relatives? Are pets gocxl com panions? What changes w ould yoti like to see m ade to th e educational system?
2. Interview a friend, classmate, or relative about his orher views on one of the topics above. Take notes during the interview to use for your paragraph. Then w rite an opinion paragraph on one of the topics above, but from your friend's point of view.
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Narrative Paragraphs
Unit Goals
Rhetorical Focus
n arrativ e o rg an izatio n
Language Focus:
s h o w in g o rd e r o f e v e n ts in n arrativ e p a rag rap h s sh ow in g sim ultaneous events fo rm in g an d using th e simple* past fo rm in g an d u sin g th e p ast c o n tin u o u s
PART 1
Stimulating Ideas
In narrative w riting, the w riter tells a story that sets the background for an event, describes the event, and often comments on the event. In this chapter, you w ill w rite a narrative paragraph that tells the story of an event in your life.
Exercise 1
W hat do you think he is doing? What mighi hap p en to him? D o you think peo p le are brave if they feel fear w hen they d o som ething difficult or dangerous?
Exercise 2
Reading a bout the to pic The author, who Is working in West Africa, describes a frightening experience at a dinner party. A deadly poisonous snake called a Green Mamba has entered the house and chased the guests outside. The host has summoned the snake-man to come and take the unwelcome visitor away. What happens next?
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The Snake-Man
"T h ere's a goo d boy,'' the snake-m an said softly. "There's a clever boy. T h e re s a lovely fellow . You m u stn t get excited. Keep calm and everything's going to be all rig h t." As he w a s speaking, he w a s slow ly low ering the end of the
tw e lve inches above the m iddle o f th e snake's body. "There's a lovely fe llo w / ' he w hispered. "There's a g oo d kind little chap. Keep still now , m y b eau ty Keep still, m y pretty. Daddy's n ot going to hurt y o u ." Then w h a m , th e rubber prongs ca m e d o w n right across the snake's body a b o u t m id w a y alo n g its length and pinned it to the floor. All I could see w a s a green blur as the snake
th rash ed around
furiously in an e ffo rt to free itself. B u t th e snake-m an kept up the pressure on the prongs and th e snake w a s trapped.
pinning it d o w n , and at th a t point the snake-m an reached forw ard w ith o n e g lo v e d hand and grasp ed th e snake very firm ly by the
neck. He th re w a w a y the pole. He took th e sack off his should er w ith his free hand. He lifted the great still tw istin g length o f the d e ad ly green snake and pushed the h ead into th e sack. Then he let g o th e h ead and b u nd led th e rest o f th e creature in the closed sack. The sack started jum p in g a b o u t as th o u g h there w e re fifty an g ry rats inside it, but th e snake-m an w a s n o w totally relaxed and he held th e sack casually in o n e hand as if it co n tain e d no m ore th an a fe w p ounds o f potatoes. Dahl, R Going Solo New York. Farrar, Straus & Giroux, LLC, 1986
pole: a long slen d er rod prongs: p o in ted ends o f a tool thrash: m ove aro u n d wildly
pin: hold firmly against ilie ground gloved: vvidi a glove on grasp: hold firmly
Exercise 3
Understanding the te x t W rite T for true or F for false for each statement.
____ 1. The snake-m an talked to the snake. ____ 2. T he snake-m an pinned the snake to the floor with his bare hands. ____ 3. T he snake w as m oving around as the snake-m an held it in his hand. ____ 4. The snake jum ped aro u n d alter it w as in the .sack. ____ 5. The snake-m an seem ed afraid as he held the sack with the snake in it.
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Exercise 4
Responding to the te x t W rite your answers to the questions in full sentences. Then discuss your answers w ith a partner.
I. What did the snake-m an do to k eep the snake calm while he w as preparing to catch it?_____________________________________________________________
3. H ow d o you think the snake-m an felt w hile he w as catching the snake? E x p lain ._______________________________________________
Exercise 5
Freew riting W rite for ten minutes on the topic below. Express yourself as w ell as you can. Don't w orry about making mistakes.
In The Snake-Man the author describes an experience that required courage. Have you ever done something that challenged you? It does not have to be something dangerous: it can be something that simply made you nervous, such as speaking in front of an audience. Think about the following questions as you write: W hat did you do? Why did you do it? How did it m ake you feel? W hat did it teach you ab o u t yourself?
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PART 2
1. W h e n did the experience take place? H o w long did the experience last? 2. W h e re did the experience take place?
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B. Choose one experience from the chart that you would most like to w rite about. Often a single event in a single place is easier to describe than something that took place over a long period of time or at many places. Describe to your partner the event you chose. Exercise 2 Brain sto rm ing vo cabulary
A. W ith a partner, brainstorm additional descriptive words to complete each sentence. 1. I was in a/an____________________ place. (scary, elegant, enormous,_______s t range__________________________ , _____ faraway_____ ) 2. I felt___________________ . (nervous, important, numb,___________________ ____________________ ) 3. I ___________________ (ran, cried, fe ll,___________________ ____________________ ) 4. The experience___________________ me. (thrilled, matured, motivated,___________________ . ___________________ ) 5. I gained a lot o f___________________ from this experience. (confidence, knowledge, friends,___________________ . ___________________ ) B. Choose five words you wrote in Part A and use them to w rite five additional sentences about your experience. 1 . Mv body felt numb.___________________________________________________
2. _______________________________________________________________________
3. . __________________________=__________________________ _____________
4. _________________________________________________________________________________________ _
5. _____________________________________________________________________ 6.
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R h e to ric a l Focus_____________________________________________________________ N arrative O rganization A narrative paragraph tells a story. Like other kinds of paragraphs you have learned about in this book, it has a topic sentence, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence.
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Topic Sentence
The topic sentence tells the reader w h a t the story will be about. It may also tell w hen and w here the story took place. The topic sentence should capture the reader's interest.
Supporting Sentences
The supporting sentences tell the details of the story, including the sequence of events. They also include sensory details, such as w h at the author saw, heard, smelled, or tasted. Supporting sentences may also tell about the writer's feelings during the events.
Concluding Sentence
The concluding sentence "w ra p s u p " the story It may include a com m ent about w h y the experience w as important or h o w the w riter felt after it.
Exercise 3
Exercise 4
3. W hat kind o f challenge did the w riter face? Was it physical o r emotional? E x p la in ._____________________________________________________________
B. Exam ine the organization of the paragraph by answering the questions below. Then compare your answers w ith a partner.
I. Underline the topic sem ence. Whai inform ation ap p ears in the topic sen ten c e?_______________________________________________________
2. Read the following events from the story. N um ber them in the order in which they occurred. ____ a. The w riter o rdered a ham burger. ____ b. The w riter w as very nervous and his hands w ere shaking. ____ c. The w riter asked the soccer player for his autograph. ____ d. Sergio Verdirame invited the w riter to have dinner. ____ e. T he w riter overcam e his fear and enjoyed his dinner. 3. In ihe concluding sentence, the w riter explains w hat m ade him happiest. Which sentence best describes his final com ment? a. He w as able to eat a very g o o d ham burger. b. He was able to sp en d tim e with his favorite soccer player. c. He w as able to overcom e his Fear o f sp eak in g to h is heroes. d. He finall) goi an autograph from his favorite player.
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Exercise 5
Writing an outline
Review your brainstorm ing ideas and your freew ritlng exercise. Then use the form below to w rite an outline for your narrative paragraph. Remember to w rite your outline in note form. Topic Sentence
W h a t is the story ab o u t? W h e re and w hen did it take p la c e ? __________________
Supporting Sentences
W h a t happened f ir s t ? __
W h a t happened next?
W h a t else happ en ed ?
Concluding Sentence
W h a t w as im portant about the experience? H ow did it affect you ?
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S om eth in g W ild
For my 25th birthday, my favorite uncle gave me a gift certificate to go skydiving at a special place near M iam i. I w as happy because I w anted to do som ething wild. On the day o f my ju m p , 1 w oke up with a crazy feeling in my stom ach. I could not eat breakfast because o f the nerves. A fter we arrived at the place. 1 had to sign a lot o f papers because o f the risk involved. I signed them quickly because I did not want to think about the danger. Before I knew it, I w as on the plane with my parachute on my back. The only thing I could think was, "W hat am 1 doing? O ne o f the staff opened the door o f the plane and told me to get ready. I pul my right foot o v er the edge and w aited for the signal ... three, tw o, one . . . and then I was free falling, going dow n at alm ost tw o hundred kilom eters per hour. 1 w as shouting, and I could feel adrenaline running through me. Nearby, there w as another guy taking photos. I like to take photos too. Then the parachute opened, and the next five m inutes w ere the most incredible m om ents o f my life. 1 was floating com pletely free, like a bird. All my problem s w ere gone, and I could see the curve o f the earth, the ocean, and faraw ay clouds o ff the shore. It was aw esom e. Those w onderful m om ents helped me to realize that I am the kind o f person who likes to take risks, and I hope 1 alw ays will be.
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B. Examine the organization of the essay by answering the questions below. Then compare your answers w ith a partner.
1. U nderline the topic sentence. W hat background details does it include?
2. H ow d o es the author feel ab o u t jum ping out of an airplane? Why do you think he feels this w ay ?_________________________________________________
3. D oes die event lake place in o n e location?________________________________ 4. Cross out o n e sentence that is n o t directly related to the topic sentence of the paragraph. 5. Underline the concluding sentence twice. W hat did the au th o r learn from his experience?____________________________________________________________
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Rhetorical Focus
Using Sensory and Emotional Details
In o rd er to m ak e a narrativ e p a rag rap h interesting, w riters in clu d e sen so ry details an d em o tio n al details that h elp d ie re a d e r sh are the e x p e rie n c e o f th e story. Sensory details give in fo rm atio n ab o u t h o w so m eth in g looks, sm ells, tastes, feels o r w h at it so u n d s like.
M y teeth w ere chattering, and my legs felt like jelly. The m orning sun w arm ed my back.
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____ 2. We w ere very nervous, so w e called the police. ____ 3. I had nev er felt such happiness. ____ 4. The dates w ere sticky and sw eet, and they w ere a delicious com plim ent to the hot. bitter tea. ____ 5. I felt a sharp pain in my ankle, and I recognized the sting o f a jellyfish. ____ 6. We could hear die roar of th e waterfall for a long tim e before w e actually saw it.
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4. The alley had not been taken care o f for many years and it w as in bad shape.
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3. At first. I did not like the new puppy, but after aw hile I changed my mind.
Language Focus
Showing Order of Events in Narrative Paragraphs
W riters o f narrative essays u se s e q u e n c e w o rd s an d ex p ressio n s to clarify th e o rd e r o f ev en ts in a story. T h e follow ing s e q u e n c e w o rd s are u se d w h en ev en ts h a p p e n in ch ro n o lo g ical (tim e) order. T hey often b eg in sen ten ces. n ex t finally after that ev en tu ally afterw ard s a little w h ile later d ie n so o n later
W e unpacked the car and set up our tent. cooked our food.
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M eanwhile, my brother tried to distract our mother. at th e sam e tim e that I w as getting
Exercise 6
Identifying order of events Read the following sentences. Then number them in the order you think they occurred. Use the sequence words and phrases as clues.
J ___ a. A few years ago. my tw o older brothers and I went trekking in the mountains. ____ b. Finally. I found the m uddy trail, an d w e m ade it back to o u r b ase camp. ____ c. Soon w e w ere hiking through thick pine forests. ____ d. We set out from o u r base cam p on a bright w inter m orning. ____ e. After that experience, I realized it is very im portant to b e careful w h e n hiking in the m ountains. ____ f. A little w hile later, w e sto p p ed to eat. and my oldest b ro th er said w e should turn aro u n d because w e w ere losing the trail in the snow. ____ g. Eventually, it b eg an to snow , and visibility becam e poor. ____ h. G oing back dow n the m ountain was harder because it w as icy and slippery, and w e could not find the way. We becam e tired, cold and diirsty.
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Exercise 8
Editor's Checklist
Put a check ( / ) as appropriate. Write answ ers in com plete sen ten ces in th e lines provided.
1. Does the paragraph have a topic sentence that tells w h a t the story will be ab o u t? 2. Do the supporting sentences tell the details of the story?
3. Does the w riter use sensory and em otional details? If so, w h a t sensory and em otional details are in c lu d e d ?______________________________________
: 4. Does the w riter use sequence words and transition words to explain the order o f the events in the story? If so, w hich o n e s ? _____________________
5. Does the paragraph have a concluding sentence that "w ra p s u p " the story? Does it include a com m ent about the experience? If so, w h a t is the c o m m e n t ? ____________________________________________________________
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Language Focus_________________________________________________
Using the Simple Past
U se th e sim p le p a st to tell a b o u t actio n s a n d ev en ts lhat started and finished in die past.
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To form a neg ativ e statem en t in the sim p le past w ith a reg u la r o r irregular verb, use d id not follow ed by th e b ase form o f th e verb.
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not fall off the cliff. did not w a ste any money.
T o form negative statem en ts w ith be in th e sim ple past, u se not after was o r were. w a s n ot nervous. They w ere not generous people.
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Affirmative Statements
SUBJECT
I You He She It We You ^They
Negative Statements
SUBJECT DID +NOT BASE FORM OF VERB
waited
patiently.
did not
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Negative Statements
W A S 1W E RE +NO T was not were not was not
Affirmative Statements
SUBJECT
I You He She It We You vjhey
SUBJECT
I You He She It We
beautiful.
beautiful
were
You Ijh e y
were not
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Exercise 2
Editing a paragraph
R ead th e fo llo w in g p a r a g r a p h a n d c o r r e c t m is ta k e s w ith th e s im p le p a s t te n s e . T h e r e a r e te n m ista k e s.
Two years ago, my friends and I decide to go to a special temple in my country. We wake up very early in the morning that day. We brought some fruit and drinks for breakfast. After we ate our fruits, we want to climb the mountain. We got to the temple about 10 a.m. It was very beautiful. We stay there and talked, but after a while, we wanted to hike some more. We did not brought food, but we had some water, and we started climbing. We become tired, but we did not wanted to stop. We was thirsty too, but we did not had enough water. Finally we met some people and they gave us drinks and helped us. That day. I learn to be very careful when 1 go hiking in the mountains.
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Using the Past Continuous
U se th e past co n tin u o u s to d escrib e an event th a t w as alread y in p ro g ress w h e n a n o th e r ev en t o ccu rred o r in terru p ted th e first event. w ere w atching TV w h e n w e heard a crash. The car w as m oving slowly, so I had plenty of tim e to cross the street.
M y brother and I
w a s running w hile talking on the cell phone. Som e teenagers w ere splashing and shouting at each other.
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not usually use stative verbs ( be. know, understand, see, believe) in die past c o n tin u o u s. Lise th e sim p le p ast instead.
Affirmative Statements
BASE FORM OF SUBJECT
Negative Statements
BASE FORM OF SUBJECT
WAS/ WERE
w as
VERB I-ING
WAS/WERE + NOT
w a s not w e re not
VERB + ING
I You He She It We
You He She It We
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w atch in g .
w a s not
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Exercise 3
5. W hat w ere you thinking ab o u t w hile you w ere com ing to school today?
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5. We drove to the hospital w hen mv w ife told the taxi driver to stop the car
6. In those days I w o rk ed and w ent to school, so I didn't have m uch free time.
Exercise 5
Editing a paragraph
Read the following paragraph and correct mistakes w ith the simple past and the past continuous. There are nine mistakes.
W hen I w as a university student about tw o years ago, 1 enrolled in a scuba diving course. M y scuba diving teacher was having a big surprise: I w asn t know ing how to swim. In fact, I had a big fear o f water. W hen I w as a child, my parents tried to help m e. so they make me take many sw im m ing courses. A lthough 1 try hard. 1 did not learning to sw im . W hen I enrolled in the scuba diving course, I was still afraid o f water. Every day w hen I entered the sw im m ing pool, I battle w ith my fear. Fortunately, my courage won every time. Finally, one day w hile I practicing my dive, I realized that I w as do very well. So, finally, after six m onths o f hard work. I com pleted the course. It is true that 1 w as alw ays the worst o f the group, but in my ow n evaluation. I w as a cham pion because I conquer my fear o f water. For me. this experience w as very im portant. It was a test o f courage, and I passed it.
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Grammar Checklist
Put a check ( / ) as appropriate.
1 Did you use the simple past to express events that started and finished
in the past? 2. Did you check for correct irregular verb form s? . 3. Did you use the past continuous to sho w sim ultaneous or interrupted actions? 4. Did you capitalize the first letter of each sentence and put end punctuation at the e n d ?
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Exercise 2
Identifying order of events Read the follow ing sentences. Then number them in the order you think they occurred. Use the sequence words and phrases as clues.
____ a. For years, I did not know w h at lo d o with my life, but after I decided to becom e a helicopter pilot, I becam e very d edicated to my goal. ____ b. At the beginning, I delivered groceries in my truck. ____ c. After that, 1 had to get a visa and p rep are to com e to the U.S. ____ d, Next, 1 m ade a plan to get the m oney for my training. I becam e a truck driver and drove all over Jap an for live years. ____ e. First, I did som e research and found out that it w ould cost a lot o f m oney. ____ f. Finally, I w as ready to take my training. S om eone advised m e to do a program in the U.S. because it w as not as expensive, so I decided to com e here even though I n eeded m ore English. ____ g. Now. 1 am in the U.S. 1 go to school to study English. At the sam e time. I take flying lessons. ____ h. Later, I got an o th er job delivering fuel to gas stations. I lived in my truck to save m oney. ____ i. Finally, I am learning to pilot a helicopter, and soon I will b e ready to fly solo. I know that I will reach my goal in tw o years.
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Editing a paragraph Read the following paragraph and correct mistakes w ith the simple past and the past continuous. There are ten mistakes.
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TIMED WRITING: 45 minutes W rite a narrative paragraph about something that happened to you w hile you were on a trip. Before you begin to w rite, review the following time management strategy.
Step 1
BRAINSTORMING: 5 minutes Make a list of recent trips you have taken. W'rite down some of the tilings that you did on those trips, people you met, and tilings that you saw. Keep adding to your list until you decide on a specific incident that you would like to w rite about.
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Step 2
Supporting Sentences
W h a t happened f ir s t ? __________________
W h a t happened next?
Concluding Sentence
W h a t w as im portant about the experience? H o w did it affect you ?
Step 3
WRITING: 25 minutes Use your brainstorm ing notes and outline to w rite your first draft on a separate piece o f paper.
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Step 4
EDITING: 10 minutes
When you have finished your first draft, check it for mistakes, using the checklist below.
Editor's Checklist
Put a check ( / ) as appropriate.
L 1. Does the paragraph 2. Does the paragraph will be ab o u t? 3. Does the paragraph 4. Does the paragraph have background inform ation? give the events of the story"? have a title? have a topic sentence that tells w h at the story
5. Are there sensory and/or em otional details? C - 6. Does the paragraph use sequence w ords and/or other transition words to sho w the order of events? 7. Did you use simple past and past continuous verbs in the correct form ? 8. Did you include a concluding sentence that "w ra p s u p " the story? Does it tell h ow the experience affected you ?
Topics for Future Writing 1. W rite a narrative paragraph on one of the follow ing topics.
How you met so m eo n e w h o is im portant to you
The last time you celebrated a special holiday A special m em ory from your childhood A funny o r em barrassing incident
2. Interview a friend, classmate, or relative about something interesting that happened to him or her. Take notes during the interview. Then w rite a narrative paragraph about your friends experience.
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Appendices
Appendix I Appendix II Appendix III Appendix IV The Writing Process................................... Elements of Punctuation............................. Glossary....................................................... Correlation to G r a m m a r S e n s e 1 ............ 147 148 149 152
2. Creating an Outline Decide which ideas you will use in your essay. Cluster ideas into logical parts. This may be in the form of a chart, a web. or a list of main ideas. Write an outline or plan for your paper.
Strategies: Look at models that are similar to the writing that you want to do. Learn ways to organize and sequence your ideas Create a visual plan for your paper.
3. Writing a First Draft Expand your outline into a draft by rewriting your notes into full sentences. At this stage, d o n t worry about mistakes. When you have finished, ask a classmate to read your work and give you feedback.
Strategies: Evaluate your outline as you write. Take out ideas that do not support your main idea; add clarification or examples. Check your work to make sure your writing is clear and accomplishes the goals of the assignment.
4. Editing Now apply your knowledge of grammar and mechanics, and correct any mistakes that you notice. Review the feedback you received from your classmates,
S trategies: Separate yourself from the ideas so that you can focus on clarity at the sentence level. If possible, put your paper aside for a few hours before you edit. Read your essay sentence by sentence. (Some writers read a paper backwards so as not to be distracted by content.)
5. Writing a Final Draft and Submitting Your Work Rewrite your draft so that it looks neat and has all the features of a finished college paper. Some writers type their papers: others write by hand.
S trategies: Make sure your paper has the correct format. Make sure your name and the date are on the paper, and that there is a title.
3. A com m a is used to separate tw o sentences w hen there is a conjunction such as and, but, o r so that show s a relationship betw een them.
The temperature was below freezing, but w e were warm.
2. W hen a noun is plural, put the ap o stro p h e after th e plural s. In the next exam ple, the writer has m ore than o n e cousin.
W e w ent to my cousins' house.
3. When a noun ends in s. You may add the ap o stro p h e + just the apostrophe.
M y boss' car was ridiculously expensive. My boss's car was ridiculously expensive.
after th e final s o r
4. A postrophes are also used to show contractions. (Note, however, that contractions are not appropriate in academ ic writing.)
Scott doesn't have any hair.
Quotation Marks Quotation marks are used to show that you are repeating or quoting someone elses words.
Put quotation marks around only tiie exact words you take from som eone elses speech or writing. Use a comma to separate the quote from the rest of the sentence.
I heard him say, "D o n 't worry about the rebate, Mr. Noor. I will take care of it."
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actio n v erb \ verb that describes a thing that someone or something does. An action verb does not describe a state or condition.
Sam rang the bell. It rains a lot here.
b a se fo rm The form of a verb without any verb endings; the infinitive form without tv
sleep be stop
clau se A group of words that has a subject and a verb. See also d e p e n d e n t clau se and m a in clause.
If I leave,.., . The ram stopped. .. when he speaks. . . . that I saw.
activ e s e n te n c e In active sentences, the agent (the noun that is performing the action) is in subject position and the receiver (the noun that receives or i.s a result of the action) Ls in object position. In the following sentence, the subject Alex performed the action, and the object le tte r received the action.
Alex mailed the letter.
co m m o n n o u n A noun that refers to any of a class of people, animals, places, things, or ideas. Common nouns are not capitalized
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c o m p a ra tiv e A form of an adjective, adverb, or noun that is used to express differences between two items or situations
This book is heavier th an that one He runs m ore quickly than his brother A CD costs m ore m oney th a n a cassette
com plex s e n te n c e A sentence that has ,t main clause and one or inore dependent clauses.
When the bell rang, we were finishing dinner.
co n d itio n al se n te n c e A sentence tlxat expresses a real or unreal situation in the if clause, and the (real
or unreal) expected result in the main clause.
If I have time, I will travel to Africa. If I had time, I would travel to Africa.
c o u n ta b le n o u n \ common noun that can be counted. It usually has both a singular and a plural form.
orange oranges woman women
a potato
an onion
th e supermarket
auxiliary v erb A verb chat is used before main verbs (o r other auxiliary verbs) in a sentence. Auxiliary verbs are usually used in questions and negative sentences. Do. have, and be can act as auxiliary verbs. Modals (may, can, will, and so on) are also auxiliary verbs.
Do you have the time? I have never been to Italy.
The car w as speeding I may be late.
d efin ite article The- word t h e in English It is used to identify nouns based on assumptions about what infonnation the speaker and listener share about the noun The definite article is also used for making general statements about a whole class or group of nouns.
Please give me th e Key.
d e p e n d e n t clau se \ clause that cannot stand alone as a sentence because it depends on the main clause to complete the meaning of the sentence. Also called subordinate danse
I'm going home a fte r he calls
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m o d al The auxiliary verbs c a n , co uld, m ay, m ight, m u st, s h o u ld , w ill, and w o uld. They
modify the meaning of a main verb by expressing ability, authority, formality, politeness, or various degrees of certainty Also called modal auxiliary'.
You should take something for your headache. Applicants m ust have a high school diploma
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fu tu re A time that is to come. Th e future is expressed in English with w ill, be g o in g to, the
simple present, or the present continuous. These different forms of the future often have different meanings and uses.
I will help you later. David is going to call later. The train leaves at 6:05 this evening. I'm driving to Toronto tomorrow.
Skiing is fun.
n o u n clau se A dependent clause that can occur in the same place as a noun, pronoun, or noun phrase in a sentence. Noun clauses begin with w h- words, if, w h e th e r, or th at.
I don't know w here he is. I wonder if he's coming I don't know w hether its true I think th a t it's a lie.
If I have th e tim e. I'll paint the kitchen, If I had th e time, I'd paint the kitchen
m ain clau se A clause diat can be used by itself as a sentence. Also called independent clause.
I'm going home.
p a s t c o n tin u o u s A verb form that expresses an action or situation in progress at a specific time in the past. The past continuous is formed with w as or w e re + verb + -ing. Also called past progressive.
A: What w ere you doing last night at eight o'clock?
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p h ra s e A group of words that can form a grammatical unit. A phrase can take the form of a noun phrase, verb phrase, adjective phrase, adverbial phrase, or prepositional phrase. This means it can act as a noun, verb, adjective, adverb, or preposition.
The t a l l m a n left. Lee h it t h e b a ll She spoke t o o fa s t. They ran d o w n t h e s ta ir s
p re s e n t c o n tin u o u s A verb form that indicates that an activity is in progress, temporary, or changing. It is formed with be + verb + -ing. Also called present progressive
I'm w a t e r i n g
p re s e n t p e rfe c t A verb form that expresses a connection between the past and the present. It in d ic a te s indefinite past time, recent past time, 01 continuing past time. The present perfect is formed with have + the past participle of the main verb.
I'v e s e e n that movie. The manager h a s just re s ig n e d . W e v e b e e n here for three hours.
tim e clau se A dependent clause that begins with a word such as w hile, w hen, before, or after.
It expresses the relationship in time between two different events in the same sentence
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p ro n o u n A word that can replace a noun or noun phrase I, y o u , h e , sh e , it, m in e, and y o u rs are
some examples of pronouns.
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u n c o u n ta b le (n o n co u n t) n o u n A common noun that cannot be counted. A noncouni noun has no plural form and cannot occur with a . a n . or a number.
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v erb p h ra se A phrase that has a main verb and an\ objects, adv erbs, ur dependent clauses (hat complete the meaning of the verb in the sentence.
Who c a lle d y o u 7 He w a lk e d s lo w ly .
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