C Paired Poem Comparison Kim Soyoon

by Soyoon Kim

WORD COUNT

1196

TIME SUBMITTED PAPER ID

16-OCT-2013 01:30AM 362368509

CHARACTER COUNT 5875

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Steven Shin

10 / 10

QUESTION 1 - CHECK THE TITLE. IS IT INTERESTING? DOES IT MAKE YOU WANT TO READ ON?
1 = Boring, 4 = Very interesting

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QUESTION 2 - AT WHICH POINT DID YOU FEEL MOST INTERESTED BY THIS PIECE? WHEN LEAST? EXPLAIN.
SS The most interesting point in this writing would be the introduction and the title. The title seems to grab the reader's attention since the reader would start wondering what this writing would be about. The hook of the introduction seems to get the reader even more persuaded into reading this type of writing. It would have been better if you had made the differences between the two poems more clearer in the body paragraph. I admire of how you organized your paragraphs, but I generally think that it would have been better if you separated the paragraphs into similarities and differences so that the reader would be able to identify these more easily

QUESTION 3 - DOES THIS PAPER SUSTAIN A COHERENT POINT OF VIEW? WHY OR WHY NOT?
SS This paper does an excellent job of sustaining reasonable point of view. First, I see no changes or usage of "I, we or you" The general voice of this paper lets the reader know that it is the point of view of the writer.

QUESTION 4 - COULD THE READABILITY, CLARITY, OR STYLE OF THIS PAPER BE IMPROVED? HOW?
SS The style of the introduction and conclusion seems to be good. But the body paragraphs could have been more clear if the similarities and the differences were more easily identifiable. In the 3rd body paragraph you start off talking about the differences and then you suddenly start off talking about similarities. I believe that you do this also in the 4th body paragraph where you start off talking about similarities and then you suddenly begin with "however" and talk about the differences. This tends to confuse the reader.

QUESTION 5 - RATE THE STRENGTH OF THIS PAPER'S THESIS.

1 = very weak, 5 = very strong

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QUESTION 6 - CAN THE CONCLUSION OF THIS PAPER BE CONVINCINGLY DRAWN FROM THE THESIS AND THE ARGUMENT MADE IN THE BODY OF THE PAPER? WHY OR WHY NOT?
SS The conclusion seems to do a good job in concluding your points overall. The rewording of the thesis is good and I believe that the overall conclusion is strong and you end this paper fairly well.

QUESTION 7 - DOES THE LOGIC OF THIS PAPER'S ARGUMENT EVER FALL FLAT? WHERE? WHAT MIGHT BE DONE TO CORRECT THIS?

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The logic of this paper's argument tend to tends to fall on the point of view of the writer. The logic is consistent.

QUESTION 8 - DO YOU FEEL THIS PAPER RELIES ON EVIDENCE, OR ON OPINION OR INTUITION? IF THE LATTER, CITE EXAMPLES OF WHERE THIS PAPER RELIES ON OPINION AND INTUITION AND GIVE SUGGESTIONS AS TO HOW THE WRITER CAN WRITE MORE OBJECTIVELY.
SS I believe that this paper relies on both evidence and opinion since there is quotation from the poem itself and the different points of view of the writer.

QUESTION 9 - HOW SMOOTHLY DOES THIS PAPER INTEGRATE EXAMPLES INTO ITS OWN ARGUMENT? DOES IT CLEARLY ILLUSTRATE CONNECTIONS BETWEEN THE EVIDENCE IT CITES AND THE IDEAS THEY SUPPORT, OR DOES IT MERELY ASSUME THEM? EXPLAIN.
SS This paper puts in examples between paragraphs fairly well and places these example in good spots. They support the writer's point of view.

QUESTION 10 - DOES THIS PAPER ADEQUATELY ADDRESS LOGICAL COUNTERCLAIMS?

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This paper adequately addresses logical counterclaims.

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1. Nice beginning for your topic sentence!! 2. to take action???

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3. You start off with "on the flip-side" which hints that you will start discussing the differences, but you suddenly being with "similar" at the next sentence. I think you should change the sentence order a bit.

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4. Suddenly "however" <br>?????

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5. repetition 6. Nice Concluding phrase.