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Friend The Civil War was a war between the Confederate and Union Armies that lasted for four very long years. The Confederate Army consisted of eleven states that had seceded from the Northern states that made up the Union. The Confederate states were also known as the Southern States. There were lots of events that made the Civil War continue for the long time that it did. One of the first events was the Confederacy trying to claim Fort Sumter which belonged to the Union. This event erupted into a battle. Aside from the battle at Fort Sumter, there were plenty more bloody brawls. Some of these battles were won by the Union while some were won by the Confederates. Eventually, one side did surrender and the 13th amendment was ratified. Believe it or not, the Civil War did have some similarities with the well-known play: "Romeo and Juliet." After all, "Romeo and Juliet" has a popular nickname being "The Civil War of Love". In the Civil War, there were two sides who wanted different things to be acceptable. The South wanted slaves to be acceptable to the North while the North wanted people with many different races, religions, and etc. to be accepted. In "Romeo and Juliet", the children wanted their love to be acceptable by their parents while the adults of the Capulet and Montague families wanted their hatred for one another to be accepted by many; especially the children. The Civil War was a war within the same country with people who should have gotten along or at least should have had a peaceful way to solve problems within their home. The Civil War of Love was between two families in the same village who should have been acquaintances at the least, but not enemies. They selfishly fought over something they didn't know the reason for. The South wanted people to do all of their dirty work for them while the Capulet's and

Student A 4th hour H. English I Mr. Friend Montague's were just fighting to show one was more superior than the other. The battle that initially started the Civil War was the battle of Fort Sumter. When the Confederate Army tried to take over Fort Sumter, Maj. Anderson stepped up and refused to surrender it to them. The next morning, the Confederate Army were the first to open fire. The Union was unprepared and did not have much ammunition, so they held back for the first two hours to try to conserve as much as they could. Eventually, however, the Union began returning fire. Shots continued for a staggering 34 hours. Amazingly, there were no deaths but on April 13th, Anderson surrendered Fort Sumter to the Confederate Army. Counting the battle at Fort Sumter, there were 10,455 military actions in the Civil War. Some of these actions were large and are well-known now and some were small and unheard of for the most part. They all played some sort of role to the outcome of the Civil War, though. Most all of the battles that occurred contained some type of casualties for both sides. The only sad part was that both of these sides came from the same country. Some soldiers had to fight against family members or people who were once their friends which is one reason that this war was such a hard thing for our country to go through. Even though everyone wasn't on a first name basis, they were still natives of the same country. This forever linked them into a brotherhood. The first of three battles to be explained is the battle of Bull Run, which began July 21, 1862. In this battle, Union troops gathered in Washington DC to seize Manassas, Virginia. Confederate troops aligned to make this one of the first large battles of the Civil War. The

Student A 4th hour H. English I Mr. Friend Confederate did defeat the Union in this battle, but it didn't stop here. In February of 1862, the Confederates attacked the Union army near the village of Shiloh to create one of history's bloodiest battles. This battle was called the Battle of Shiloh for obvious reasons. Although the Union had more casualties, they came out with the victory in this battle. The battle of Gettysburg lasted two days. It began with Gen. Lee from the Confederates leading his army around Gettysburg, Pennsylvania and driving the Union army to Cemetery Hill. This battle began on July 1, 1863. In the beginning, the Confederates had an advantage but in the end, the Union ended up taking the victory on July 3, 1863. The surrender at Appomattox was something very important in the Civil War because it's what ended this tragedy. While Lee and his army from the South continued to try to stop the Union army, the Union seized Petersburg and then Richmond the following day. Eventually, the Union army stopped Gen. Lee from leading his remaining troops to North Carolina and Lee's plan failed. On April 9, 1865, Lee stood atop a hill over Appomattox River waving a white flag of surrender. Gen. Grant later accepted this surrender in the Appomattox courthouse. On December 6, 1865, the 13th amendment was passed. This amendment stated: "Neither slavery nor involuntary servitude, except as punishment for crime whereof the parties shall have been duly convicted, shall not exist within the United States, or any other place subject to the jurisdiction." In short, the 13th amendment abolished slavery within the whole United States. The amendment was passed to modify the Emancipation Proclamation. The Emancipation Proclamation said that no slaves could be kept in states that were rebelling

Student A 4th hour H. English I Mr. Friend against the Union. Therefore, all of the states between the Confederates and Union were able to keep their slaves without trouble. The 13th amendment was passed so that none of these states could possess slaves any longer. This four-year long war was a hard time for everyone in the United States. It was full of many large battles won by both the Confederate and Union Army. In the end, however, the Confederate did surrender to the Union giving the North the victory of the Civil War. The ending of this war resulted in the abolishment of slavery.

Works Cited "13th Amendment Ratified." History.com. A&E Television Networks, n.d. Web. 02 Mar. 2014. <http://www.history.com/this-day-in-history/13th-amendment-ratified>. "Fort Sumter." Council on Foreign Relations. Council on Foreign Relations, n.d. Web. 02 Mar. 2014. <http://www.civilwar.org/battlefields/fort-sumter.html>. "Gettysburg." Council on Foreign Relations. Council on Foreign Relations, n.d. Web. 02 Mar. 2014. <http://www.civilwar.org/battlefields/gettysburg.html>. McPherson, James, Dr. "Civil War." Council on Foreign Relations. Council on Foreign Relations, n.d. Web. 03 Mar. 2014. <http://www.civilwar.org/education/history/civilwar-overview/overview.html>. Meador, Jennifer L. "1861-1865." The Civil War. Clemson, n.d. Web. 03 Mar. 2014. <http://biowww.clemson.edu/aged/dl/aged480/jennifer/keybat.htm>. "The History Place." U.S. Civil War 1861-1865. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Mar. 2014. <http://www.historyplace.com/civilwar/>.

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The Content Your content is almost exclusively background information. You have some analysis, but not a whole lot. You need to expand your analytical portion so that it dominates your paper. The Writing You writing is pretty good. Very few errors and your transition sentences were used well. The Product The organizational structure of your paper could be improved. Your introduction is only about the Civil War and your next paragraph contains your analysis. Yes, your intro does have some background information about the civil war, but in order for your reader to understand your analysis they need to know about the civil war first.

Based on these criteria: 39.5/50