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In summary, travelling with others prevents loneliness, helps you save money and is safer than
travelling alone. For these reasons, I believe that having others with you when you take trips is the
best way to enjoy your time. [Then you’ve restated the reasons but very very briefly, and you’ve
restated your position.]
Coherenc Your essay is very clear and logical. You used some good expressions for linking:
e and -first of all, secondly, finally, in summary,for example
Cohesion
Try to use some more linkers within your paragraphs, such as:
-In fact… In my experience… A good example of this is… Because of this… As a result…
For example, you wrote: “For example, I remembered when I visited New Zealand, I was so lonely
because I didn’t know anybody. I was very homesick.” Try to link those sentences. Like this: “… I was
so lonely because I didn’t know anybody. As a result, I became very homesick.”
Also here are some useful expressions for presenting your own opinions:
-I tend to think that… -In my view… -I would argue that…
You wrote:
“Travelling alone is not a good idea at all.” Be careful! You are writing it as though it’s a fact. But some
people disagree with you, and they love to travel alone. So present it as your opinion!
“Some people believe that travelling alone is more enjoyable than travelling with others. However, I
strongly disagree. As far as I’m concerned, there are significant benefits to taking trips with others.”
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Lexical Your words are generally well-chosen and spelled well. But there are very few idiomatic or uncommon
Resource words and expressions. Try to take a few more risks with vocabulary.
it’s way cheaper [‘way’ is very informal! Don’t use this in your essay]
it’s much cheaper (Another good word is ‘significantly’)
It’s significantly cheaper
or it’s noticeably cheaper
Try to use ‘also’ only once. You can use ‘furthermore’, ‘in addition’, ‘as well’, etc.
Grammar Most of your sentences are grammatically error-free. This is good and very important!
Range &
Accuracy Here are a couple of your complex sentences that are really good:
The point of travelling with others is to make it more enjoyable and full of fun.
When I traveled to Panama with my friends, we saved a lot of money by sharing the costs of our
groceries for cooking.
Having someone with you when you are away from home will make you like you’re in home.
Having someone with you when you are away from home makes you feel like you’re at home.
To be a traveller is enjoyable.
Being a traveller is enjoyable. [Use a gerund at the beginning of a sentence, not an infinitive]
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