+ with rapid economic development

With rapidly rapid economic development, an increasing number

amount of pollution that has international
impacts has aroused motivated people to pay more attention
to environmental protection. People excessively exploit the
natural resources due to the big gap between economic
development demand and naturalsource supply. I am amazed
when I heared (this is too informal) Some people saying that
individuals have no contribution to make to cope with
international pollution. As for me, In my opinion, nothing is
further from the truth than this view.
In the first place, everyone can help to reduce pollution and
do their bit for the environment. In other words, if every
individual has the sense of environmental protection, we can
make a great contribution to environment protection (don't
repeat nouns like this) protecting it and controlling pollution
(this has been changed to make it a gerund and therefore parallel
with 'protecting it') control. For example, turning lights off
when you're you are (don't abbreviate) not in the room can save
a lot of energy. Not leaving televisions, stereos and computers on
standby with the little red light, even though they might look
like they are turned off. Dont look down on these actions. (this
last phrase is too informal).
(There is not really much support in this paragraph - just
the bit about 'lights' and 'leaving things on standby'. You
waste too much time at the beginning with those first two
sentences which are saying more or less the same thing).
In the Secondly place, environmental protection needs
everyones attention. A green environment is the system which is
run made possible by two important links- governments and
citizens. Governments are taking major steps in
environmental protection, such as introducing strict emission
norms, penalties for industries which would cross emission
limits, and strict automotive regulation. But all these
efforts would will fail if we dont cooperate with governments. If
one link is active but the other link is inactive then the whole
system cannot run properly. Both have to work together
for an efficient system.
(This paragraph would be better if you could be more
specific about what individuals can do to make sure they
cooperate together).
Above all, a conclusion can be made It can be concluded that
everyone should take responsibility for
environmental protection. Thus, I am firmly convinced that we
are an important part of the link. If you understand this you can
act as a cardinal link (not sure what you are saying here?).

+ has international impacts

+ pay more attention to
+ exploit the natural resources
+ natural supply
+ have no contribution to
+ have the sense of environmental
protection
+ make great contribution to
+ on standby = ready to do sth
immediately if needed or asked ( put
on standby ) = person or thing readily
available
+ take major steps
+ SPECIAL STRUCTURE :
-

In the first place

In other words
It can be concluded that
I am firmly convinced that
MAIN IDEAS

on u : gii thiu l do con ng cn

phi quan tm n mt nhiu hn ( pay
more attention to environmental
protection )
on 2 :
Mi ng c th lm gim nhim bng
vic lm nh nh.
Mi c nhn c thc bo v mt ( has
the sense of environmental protection )
Cho v d : tt n khi k c trong phng,
k TV, computers ch ch,..
on 3 :
2 mi Whats
lin kt gia
chnh
more
: ph v cng
dn
on kt :
Trch nhim bo v mi trng ca mi
ng l quan trng

+ Usage of energy has dramatically increased over few decades, resulting in depletion of
energy sources like fossil fuels, oils, petrol.
+ In turn when these energy sources are used, they emit various gaseous substances
which pollute the air => lead to global warming
+ Global warming is further worsen by deforestation. Gases like aerosols from air fresher,
air conditioner and cars should be replaced by new non-polluting substance.
+ it is the inadequate facilities that force people to make improper choices.

You can add some useful phrases like :

+ deteriorate the environment
+ the significance of protecting our living planet
+ inadequate facilities
+ impose/place a restriction on sth

Our earth is the only planet in the universe which has an

environment suitable for life. Air and water is needed for
survival. Earth provided these essentials and man used
them. This usage over the period has led to serious
pollution problems that can be hazardous.
Many industries have come up owing to rapid
urbanization. Furthermore, there is an ever increasing
demand of petrol and diesel for running various means of
transport. As a result, a heavy amount of carbon
monoxide, hydrocarbon, sulphur-dioxide and many more
gases are polluting the air. The major threat to humanity
comes from the development of nuclear sciences.
The nuclear experiments worldwide are destroying the
atmospheric balance. The poisonous gases, chemicals and
dust released into the air fall back on earth as acid rain
harming crops and life. This has caused various harmful
diseases.
Rain water is considered as the purest form of water. Water
pollution in lakes, rivers, ponds and other water bodies is
caused by surface water which carries a large amount of
chemical discharge of industries and inorganic
discharge of city sewage. Such impurities are a serious
threat to the existence of mankind.
Our country faces one more problem i.e. noise pollution.
Loud horns during traffic chaos, screaming
loudspeakers at different occasions and blasting
crackers that almost make one deaf are killing the
peaceful silence. Use of silencers, abiding by proper
traffic regulations and checking excessive use of public
speaker systems can help in reducing noise-pollution.
This is the time of implement the steps for environmental
Protection. It has been rightly said that there is something
in this world money cant buy, such as beautiful scenery
and fresh air.

+ essentials = something that is necessary or

fundamental
+ hazardous = of potential danger: potentially
dangerous to human beings or the
environment
+ owing to = due to
+ inorganic chemistry: ha hc v c
+ discharge = emission of substances
+ impurity = lack of purity = contaminants
+ implement = carry out or fulfill: to put
something into effect or action

MAIN IDEAS :

+ nc v khng kh l cn thit cho s sng con

ngi ( air and water is needed for survival )
+ hin tng th ha nhanh chng ( rapid
urbanization ) => xut hin nhiu ngnh cng
nghip ( many industry have come up = emerge )
+ nhu cu v xng du gia tng ( increasing
demand of petrol and diesel ) => cc phng tin
giao thng thi kh gy nhim mi trng
+ mi e da chnh l s pht trin ca khoa hc
hc nhn ( nuclear sciences)
+ nc ma b nhim do cc cht thi ha hc
t cc x nghip ( a large amount of chemical
discharge of industries ) v nc thi ha hc t
thnh ph ( inorganic discharge of city sewage )
+ nhim ting n ( noise pollution ) : kn to, loa
pht thanh tp git i s tnh lng thanh bnh.
( kill the peaceful silence )
=>cn phi tun th lut giao thng
( abide by proper traffic regulations )
+ n lc hnh ng bo v mi trng ( this
is the time of implement the steps for
environmental protection.