Writing Task 1:

Dubai Gold Sales

The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in
millions of dirhams. There were two main seasons for gold sales.
The main season for sales is in the December to May period. Sales were consistently
above 200 million dirhams per month, rising sharply to a peak of 350 million
dirhams in March. However, for the next four months, sales declined steadily,
reaching an annual low of 120 million dirhams in July.
In August, there was a sudden increase. Sales almost doubled, rising from 120
million dirhams in July to 210 million dirhams in August. This was followed by a drop
in September, back to the July figure.
From September to October, sales recovered, from 120 to 180 million. In October
and November, sales remained steady, and there was a small increase in December
to 190 million dirhams.
In conclusion, the main sales period is in the early part of the year, slumping in the
summer, except for a sudden increase in August.

Writing Task 2:
Band 8
IELTS Essay, topic: Computers instead of teachers
As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role
for teachers in the classroom.
There is no doubt that education and the learning process has changed since the
introduction of computers: The search for information has become easier and
amusing, and connectivity has expedited the data availability. Though experts
systems have made computers more intelligent, they have not yet become a
substitute of the human interaction in the learning process. In my opinion; what can
be expected, is a change of the teachers? role but not their disappearance from the
classroom.
Nobody can argue that the acquisition of knowledge is more fun and easier with
computers. The mere activity of touching and exploring this device constitutes an
enjoyable task for a kid. This, accompanied with the relaxing attitude and software
interactivity, usually conduce to a better grasping of new knowledge. At a higher
educational level; the availability of digital books, simulator and other academic
materials, provide the student with an ever accessible source of information, that
otherwise would not be at hand.
But, besides the increasing complexity and behavior of intelligent software, which is
usually embedded in the academic digital material, the need of human interaction
in the learning process will always be present, at least in the foreseeable future.
There is the necessity for a human being to be able to determine what the specifics
needs of each individual are. The expertise of a teacher in how to explain and adapt
complex concepts to different individuals can hardly be mimicked by a computer, no
matter how sophisticated its software is.
As computers are becoming a common tool for teaching, teachers should be more
aware of their role as guides in the acquisition of knowledge rather than
transmitters of facts. They have to be open minded to the changes that are taking
places, keep updated and serve as a problem solvers in the learning process, thus
allowing students to discover the fact for themselves.
To summarize, in my personal view, teachers play and will() play an important role
in the classroom, especially at the primary level. No matter how complex computers
become, there will be no replacement for the human interaction, but in the way how
this interaction takes place.
Excellent essay! Are you a native English speaker? Well done. The only problem: too
long, 365 words instead of 250-265 maximum.

Band 7
IELTS Essay, topic: Popular events
Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions
are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a
safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great
national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the
idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national
unity. In this essay, I will think about the effects of these popular sporting events.
First of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing
tensions among different nations. For example, South and North Korea have football
games regularly which give two nations a chance to understand each other deeply.
In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with
the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it
sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when
North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were
very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through
the sports, two divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions
and could feel the patriotic unity.
On the other hand, some sports matches can make international relations worse.
For instance, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big
matches in two countries where full of tensions overflow. Sometimes, after the
matches, the two rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an
aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing
games affect the players directly. As far as I know, a couple of Korean players in
Japan are suffered from invisible discrimination after the match between two
countries.
In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one of the good
ways to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely. However, I believe that games
can not be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful international
relations.
This is an excellent essay! Very well done!

Band 6
IELTS Essay, topic: Globalization
Even though Globalization affects the worlds economics in a very positive way, its
negative sides should not be forgotten, discuss.
Everything has tow sides in the world, and so has the prosses of globalization too.
The effects of globalization for the world economy are diverted.
We must acknowledge that the negative effects are from a different kind than the
positive ones.Therfor the negative sides, like low paiment in less developed
countries are important to conciderate.
If we take the Euro zone for example, the economic-changes according to the
gloablisation process are huge. Many companies have transfered their factories into
cheaper production earies to compeat at the world markes. The results are rising
unemployment rates in the old industrial countries
In regard to the other countries on the world market, like China, this job transfer is a
big oportunity. But no one can denie that the consequences for the less developed
countries with flurished economy, based on availability of cheap employees are
highly important: globalization based on this facts brings enviromantal problems.
Nevertheless there are also posive reasons for globlaistaional effects. In general it is
remarkable that there is a new tendency in Thinking Global. For instance people
are willing to leran more languages and about othe cultures. Countries fromaly
knowen as undeveloped, like India, getting chances to be the main leader in a
certain field.
All in all it can be said that the effects of globalization are huge. The unerstanding of
economic processes have changed completely. It is important to think in bigger
terms, not just about the owen country. The positive things that this globalization
process have brought must sensible us for the negative sides. The all over aim
should be a world in balance, but this will be a long way.
This essay needs work. There are multiple spelling errors and unclear expressions
(see comments underlined in blue). Also there are many words that are formed
incorrectly (diverted instead of diverse, etc). There are too many paragraphs, all you
need is 4 5 well-structured paragraphs, not 7 poorly structured ones. On the bright
side, the task is covered and there are enough words (275), which is good. The
paragraphs are logically connected and there is good usage of linking words.
Overall, looks like a Band 6 essay.

Acing IELTS
Everything has two sides and home schooling is not an exception. In the past it
seemed like the most natural way of educating the children, but today many people
criticize it.
We must acknowledge that parents know their children best. That gives them a good
chance of knowing how to make child understand certain concepts. Using childs
interests, parents can make a process of learning more enjoyable and effective. In
addition, being at home makes child feel safe, which contributes to his ability to
concentrate on studying.
Nevertheless, many people believe that teaching should be done by professionals.
There are many proven scientific approaches that produce good results and without
those techniques parents who teach their kids at home have no chance of success.
Associative learning is a good example of such a technique. Showing the child images
while learning the alphabet (apple for a, boy for b) makes him
or her remember the letters faster and easier.
Also not every parent is capable of teaching his or her child at home because the blind
can not lead the blind. Parents can not teach the children something they dont
know themselves, and lets face it not all of us have profound knowledge of history
or geography even on a school textbook level. Eventually, even those mums and
dads who had succeeded at school could forget the material as the time went by.
In conclusion, I have more trust in abilities and experience of professional teachers
then I do in my own.