Logan Swartz

Flash Fiction
October 28, 2016
Mrs. Irvin
Insert Your Title
Hi,the duck said.
The swan replied,Hi.
How is your day,the duck asked the swan?
Good,and how is your day going,questioned the swan?
The day has been going like...WAIT A MINUTE! I feel like we are in a story,and what im is
forced by a writer.The duck wondered.
What your crazy,the swan said in fear.
I dont know why but im sure that their will be a new character in the story,explained the duck.
HI,Im gosse,i just happened to be walking around (blind,deaf,and cant remember anything
until a few seconds ago).the duck whispered.
What do you wan.hey cut it out,HEY WHAT ARE YOU DOING.screamed the duck.

Oh great a new page,wonderful,i wonder what the story will be.explained the duck.
Wait,Im a limo,and somehow swan is eating words,yelled the duck
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/ words hurt ]
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Really why are swan,and goose pirate ships now,why a i the kraken?Wondered the duck.
Hold fire...i hear something,KRAKEN!Screamed the goose, in anger.

Forever remembering duck who lost his life as the kraken against the two bird boats.
October,21.2016-October,26.2016
THAT'S IT, IM WRITING THE STORY NOW!Wrote the duck.
The handsome king duck,took down and defeated the powerful dragon.Only using himself and
his diamond hard 36 pack of six pack abs.Taking the sacred book of books,from the dragon's
treasure room.That was too easy.chuckling the duck.Hey what is this?It seems
interesting.Wondered the duck.NO!NO!NO!NO!NO!NO!

Breathing his final breath the duck screamed.

This can't be happening,this can't be happening,........I will get my revenge,MY STORY will live
on.IT WILL!

FIN
Or is it?

QUACK!

Rubric rating submitted on: 11/8/2016, 5:36:22 PM by kari_irvin@southwesternsd.org

FOCUS (Small

Engage and orient

Engage and orient

Attempt to engage

Unable to engage

Moments
Leads, Ending)

the reader by
setting out a
problem, situation,
or observation,
establishing one
or multiple points
of view, and
introducing a
narrator and/or
characters

the reader by
establishing a
context and point
of view and
introducing a
narrator and/or
characters

and orient the

reader by
establishing a
context and point
of view and
introducing a
narrator and/or
characters

or orient the
reader due to a
lack of
establishing either
context, point of
view, narrator,
and/or characters

CONTENT
(Realistic
Characters,
Realistic Dialogue
tags, action
Monologue,Conflic
t,Show Not Tell)
Your score: 2

Uses the following

narrative
techniques to
capture action and
convey
experiences and
events in a unique
way:
dialogue(optional)
description
pacing (events,
characters)
sensory language

Uses the following

narrative
techniques to fully
capture action and
convey
experiences and
events:
dialogue(optional)
description
pacing (events,
characters)
sensory language

Insufficient use of
the following
narrative
techniques which
results in unclear
or vague actions,
experiences, or
events:
dialogue(optional)
description
pacing (events,
characters)
sensory language

Displays no
evidence of
narrative
techniques:
dialogue(optional)
description
pacing (events,
characters)
sensory language

ORGANIZATION

Skillful and
elaborate event
sequence
effective use of
transitions,
phrases and
clauses
conclusion reflects
on what is
experienced,
observed, or
resolved over the
course of the
narrative

Organize an event
sequence
naturally and
logically
use a variety
transition words,
phrases, and
clauses
provide a
conclusion that
follows and
reflects on the
narrated
experiences or
events

Some
interruptions/incon
sistent
Minimal use of
transition words,
phrases, and
clauses
provide a
conclusion thats
inconsistent from
the narrative
experience

Illogical and
unnatural
organization of
events
No transitional
words, phrases,
and clauses
Lacks a
conclusion

Consistent control
of literary devices
and sensory
language.

Appropriate
control of literary
devices and
sensory language.

Includes some
literary devices
and sensory
language.

Uses ineffective
literary devices
and sensory
language.

Your score: 3

Your score: 2

STYLE (Vivid
Verbs,
Sensory Details)
Your score: 2.5

Uses a variety of
sentence lengths
and complexities
that convey
experiences and
events.

CONVENTIONS
(Dialogue Format)
Your score: 1

Uses a variety of
sentences that
convey
experiences and
events.

Uses some variety

of sentences that
convey
experiences and
events.
.

Effective tone and

voice

Create tone and

voice through
precise language.

Attempt to create
tone and voice

Demonstrate an
above grade level
control of the
conventions of
standard English:

Demonstrate a
grade-appropriate
command of the
conventions of
standard English:

Demonstrate an
attempt of the c
conventions of
standard
English:

grammar
usage
capitalization
punctuation
spelling

grammar
usage
capitalization
punctuation
spelling

grammar
usage
capitalization
punctuation
spelling

Many sentences
are unintentional
fragments and/or
run-ons and need
to be rewritten.

Ineffective tone
and voice
Create confusion
with errors in the
conventions of
standard English:

grammar
usage
capitalization
punctuation
spelling

Comments:
Positives 1. Your voice shines through in this piece. I can almost here you reading this story!
2. Creative story with the characters figuring out that they are in a story!
Suggestions 1. There are places in here that need some more detail because they tend to be a bit confusing.
2. Adding some action between dialogue will help the characters come to life. All of the action
seems to be taking place in the dialogue, but it should be a good mixture of both inside and
outside the conversation.