Name: Paxton Wenninger

Date: March

Term 2 Image Prompt

Here are 2 examples of student best work. These submissions were chosen to
showcase some of their finest work. They have had one week to write the story and
additional time to edit and refine their work.

Begon Spidy Jan 22

It was late, almost midnight in my 1057 story building. I heard a weird clunking sound in
my kitchen. I knew exactly what it was! It was Spider Man, my upstairs neighbor, he
was eating all of my Chicken wings and Cheese! Every night he uses my fire escape and
makes noise. Then he comes in my Kitchen and eats all my Cheese and Chicken wings!
What really makes me go off the hook is his SMELL, he smells like Gas, Blue Cheese,
and farts. I tried locking my door, but the owner of the building gave him the master
key. [ If you want to know his real identity he is the creator of the poop emoji!!!] So I
went to Canadian Tire and bought some Raid, 3009 cans of Raid to be exact. Then I
called my friends Hannah, Tash, Joran, Diego, Vicky, Alexis, Natalie, and Ashton. Next
thing I know C.E.U.S was knocking at my door and asking why I bought so many cans.
Killing Spider Man I explained. My friends and I got all commando and started a stake
out. Well we got Spiderman! If you're wondering where he is he is totally not in my
closet! I sleep great, my apartment smells great and I live on the wild side with
Spiderman in my closet Oops

Tree Hugger Jan. 9

Human perspective: Theyre coming, theyre coming!
Get the castle walls up, give the knights youre sacrifice money. Archers, draw your
flame arrows. Tree perspective: Whoosh, Arrrgh, me down, me down ( Just so you
know trees have terrible grammar). Tony is down, everybody make a big line at the
front. Run very fast, saplingers fire at will, clouders get the clouds and water the
saplings. Ready, fall, ( Fall means they travel under ground). Boom, Hahahahahahaha
Its Tammy time! Human perspective: Hurry we have to get to the passages, nooooooo,
the Cheese Factory was hit, we're going to die!!! Stopppppp, the battle I need to go
potty Ok resume. Every man for themselves, Byeeeee, Meanwhile at the safe
haven: We need to get rid of the trees, wait I know what to do, call Leslie the Logger!
Attack the trees, Wait what are you doing Timmy.. Tree perspective: Ahh, hes
attacking me ahhhhh, hes hugging me. I love Timmy. What lessons did you learn. .( The
lesson we can all learn from this, is hug the enemy to stop the war.)

Rubric rating submitted on: 3/4/2017, 2:19:06 PM by mark.kinzel@wrsd.ca

4 3 2 1

Content Details of the story Details of story are The story is There are few
Your score: 3 are established, clear and make predictable. Some details or
specific and sense. The story is details may be descriptions. Does
consistent. The generally irrelevant or not flow from
story flows and straightforward from unnecessary. Tends beginning to end,
makes sense. beginning to end. to follow familiar illogical sequence.
Supporting details Writing generally patterns or ideas. Does not get
are consistent and holds the readers May keep the reader's attention
help to develop interest. reader's attention.
story. Writing holds
the reader's
attention

Origination The story has a The story follows a The story has a The story has no
Your score: 3 beginning, middle logical sequence beginning, middle clear beginning,
and end. There is a with a beginning, and end but can be middle and end.
connection between middle and end. difficult to follow. There are some
events, setting, and There is a There is some actions or events
characters. connection between connection between but are illogical or
Characters are well events, setting, and events, setting, and hard to follow. Lacks
described and characters. Story characters. Story connection between
developed. There is beginning beginning briefly events, setting, and
a well described establishes describes characters. Does
setting. There is a characters and characters and not describe
clear and well setting. There is a setting. There is a characters or
defined story clear and well story problemthat is setting, may just
problem or plot that defined story connected to the give character
flows logically. The problem or plot. The characterbuthas an names. There is a
story problem or story problem or abrupt ending. story
plot is connected to plot is connected to problembutthere is
 the character. the character. Story no character
Events, actions, has a logical ending development. Story
details, and/or that resolves the ending does not
characters are story problem. makes sense or is
consistently missing.
maintained. The
ending resolves the
problem and
satisfies the reader.

Sentence Structure Sentences are well Sentences include Simple sentences, Basic and poorly
Your score: 3 formed and flow one complete which do not include constructed
smoothly and vary thought. They begin descriptive sentences, that
in length. They with capitals and language. They often don't make
begin differently use appropriate end generally begin with sense and are
with the correct use marks. They are capitals and use repetitive in
of capitals and have logical, and make appropriate end construction.
appropriate end sense. marks
marks

Vocabulary Words are well- General words are General words are Words chosen are
Your score: 4 chosen. Phrases chosen and used chosen and are often wrong and/or
are purposeful. correctly. Words and used incorrectly at misused. Phrases
Avoids overusing phrases help times. Words and are misused or
words. Words and explain and phrases are simple missing
phrases are used to describe. and/or do not
create imagery describe well.
(mind images)

Voice The story has a The story has The story has some The writing contains
Your score: 3 definite personality personality and personality, but it is little or no
and highlight how shows how the hard to identify the personality. There
the character thinks character thinks and writer. The tone is is no evidence of
and feels. feels. The tone fits apparent in some tone in the writing.
The tone fits the the purpose and parts of the writing. The author tells
purpose and audience. The The author does about feeling
audience. writing is lively, more telling than without showing it.
The writing comes expressive, and showing feeling. The author does not
to life and is very engaging. The The author cares seem to care about
engaging. author cares about most of the time the topic or the
The author is the topic and about the topic and audience.
invested into the audience. audience.
story can cares for
the charactes and
that shines through
in the writing.

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