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No. English text string Explanation Suggested Edit

Location
1. she could develop 3rd para., "Force" is rather a word for she could
unbelievable page 5 physical constants. Also an develop
force/konnte sie unusual collocation here. unbelievable
unwahrscheinliche strength
Krfte entwickeln
2. always gawked 2nd para., Idiom is out the window always gawked
out of her window page 6 in Am. Eng., and weve out her window
been consistent.
3. Hucky peered 1st para., through door is missing Hucky peered
through door page 8 the definite article through the
door
4. They talked about 2nd para., fuses which requires a They talked
the fuses which page 11 preceding comma in Am. about the fuses
constantly English, or a that that constantly
5. Lilli stood up and 4th para., disappeared is overused. Lilli stood up and
disappeared page 11 When someone suddenly vanished
disappears, to vanish
better conveys the
concept.
6. Falk looked to the 2nd para., The correct preposition is Falk looked at
spaz page 14 at the spaz
7. Maybe you'll just 2nd para., stop by couple of times is Maybe you'll just
stop by couple of page 14 missing the indefinite stop by a couple
times for article. of times for
breakfast breakfast
8. Hucky stood in the 1st para., In Hucky stood in the Hucky stood in
kitchen, doing the page 15 kitchen, doing the comma the kitchen
dishes, should disappear before doing the dishes,
doing as it creates a
parenthetical text
9. an open shirt/ein 4th para., open shirt sounds vague. an open-neck
offenes Hemd page 16 The piece of garment is shirt OR an
mostly known as an open- open-necked
neck shirt and variants. shirt.
10. it matted to 3rd para., it [hair] matted to it became
dreadlocks/und page 17 dreadlocks doesnt sound matted into
sie verfilzten zu idiomatically well dreadlocks
Dreadlocks conveyed
11. Especially since he 3rd para., since here sounds mainly because
owed her 250 page 18 ambiguous as from the he owed her 250
marks. date or because. It is marks
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No. English text string Explanation Suggested Edit
Location
the latter.
12. He had come to 1st para., to get is incorrect here He had come to
get the piano and page 20 because he had come to get help to bring
had brought get help to bring it, not the piano with
carrying straps to take it anywhere. the aid of
Actually the original uses carrying straps
the prep. wegen. To not OR similar
combine two instances of
to bring, a periphrasis
would help.
13. Need to stop by at 2nd para., welfare should add Need to stop by
welfare page 20 Admin or Services for at Welfare
clarification, or at least be
capitalized to match the
brevity of Sozi.
14. and mathematics 7th para., mathematics is known in and math
page 22 the U.S. simply as math
15. she had forgotten 5th para., the text is a literal she had
the text page 24 translation forgotten the
lyrics
16. It started to 7th para., and as a conjunction for It started to
drizzle, and they page 24 simultaneous actions drizzle as they
tried to hoist should be replaced by as tried to hoist
without a comma
17. vegetables, fruit, 1st para., bread and knick-knack vegetables, fruit,
eggs, bread and page 31 require the Oxford comma. eggs, bread, and
knick-knack knick-knack
18. Hucky looked out 2nd para., out of the window as out the window
of the window page 31 explained in 2.
19. Hucky still stood 1st para., Am Fenster stehen can Hucky still stood
at his window page 35 take either preposition by his window
at as in at ones
window or by as by
ones window. The latter
stresses adjacency as is
usually the case
throughout the book.
20. a stand with 1st para., sanding machines are a stand with
sanding machines page 51 most commonly known in sanders
industry as sanders
21. A salesman 3rd para., salesman is nowadays An associate
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Location
walked through page 51 referred to as associate
22.
23. "My God," said 1st para., My God is usually Oh, my God
the granny page 69 interjected Oh, my God
24. she stood five feet 7th para., and waited is better she stood five
away and waited page 70 conveyed by a progressive feet away while
form. waiting OR
25. others on crates in 4th para., the hold is more for others on crates
the hold page 74 ships. Cargo bay ot in the cargo area
cargo area will do.
26. had been taken 1st para., into custody, some of had been taken
into custody, page 77 them requires a period for into custody.
some of them the pause. Some of them
27. Suddenly, sirens, 1st para., Not a series. Second Suddenly, sirens
and flashing lights page 82 comma may go. and flashing
lights
28. the compartment 4th para., and panted is taking the
wall and panted page 83 place at the moment. compartment
wall, panting
29. gentle as a lamb 1st para., and caressed is in gentle as a lamb
and caressed page 85 progress. as she caressed
30. He sat the water 4th para., The verb to put is more He put the water
canister down in page 89 natural. canister in
31. Hucky sat down in 4th para., Paragraph reads very Hucky sat down
the rocking chair page 91 repetitious. Some in the rocking
and rocked back rearrangement could help. chair. This
and forth which motion had a
had a calming soothing effect
effect on him on him
32. A baking tin with 5th para., baking tin is more known A baking sheet
apple page 91 as baking sheet or with apple
cookie sheet in Am. Eng.
33. It would be a riot, 5th para., Perhaps a young American It would be
to find them page 95 rocker would say kickass kickass fun to
fun to come up with find them
Mordsgaudi
34. then came a 1st para., photo should be then came a
photo on page 113 picture as a syn. picture on
sometimes
35. Diagonally behind 1st para., The adverb diagonally as at an angle
Falk sat Plum page 116 in schrg setzen is less behind Falk sat
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idiomatic. Plum
36. and crystal clear 1st para., crystal clear is one crystal-clear
solos page 117 concept that needs
hyphenation
37. from the second 1st para., shop should be store from the second-
hand shop where page 119 for consistency hand store
38. then she would 3rd para., alright is wrong spelling then she would
look alright page 122 look all right
39. Hucky stopped 1st para., A period is required for the Hucky stopped
playing, Kugelblitz page 129 pause with some playing. So did
and Plum as well rephrasing also Kugelblitz and
Plum
40. Cause it sucks 7th para., Cause might use an 'Cause
page 136 apostrophe
41. reading a 1st para., newspaper, beside him reading a
newspaper, page 146 requires a period for the newspaper.
beside him pause in between Beside him
42. the store and 3rd para., and looked annoyed is a the store,
looked annoyed page 151 progressive form. looking annoyed
43. Youre crazy 4th para. Adjective crazy is Youre nuts
Page 155 overused. Some synonyms
replace it here and there.
44. He had also never 3rd para., After a negation comes He had never
eaten truffles page 156 either eaten truffles,
either
45. their emergency 1st para., bell which requires a their emergency
bell which could page 161 comma bell, which could
46. gnawing on a 5th para., Because we all know a gnawing on a
drum bone page 165 duck was served, wouldnt crispy leg OR
roast leg or drumstick gnawing on a
be better than drum duck leg
bone?
47. and eyes closed, 3rd para., closed, otherwise and eyes closed.
otherwise page 166 requires a period for the Otherwise
pause
48. Hick 2nd para., The onomatopoeia for Hic
hiccup is not hick which
is a rustic peasant, a
country bumpkin