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A.
Soren Williams
Debra Jizi
UWRT 1104-014
11 February 2017
Separation
Have you ever been caught in the middle of something you have no power over? You
have this feeling of not being able to escape and constantly have thoughts of what life would be
like if things were different. I am caught in this type of situation every morning I wake up since
my parents separation when I was younger. I look around at those with both parents under the
same roof and constantly wonder how amazing it must feel to wake up every morning and have
them both there laughing, cooking, playing around, and in love with one another. Today,
however, there is an increasing rate of young adults having children when they are completely
unprepared to even be in a relationship with one another leaving their children caught in the
middle of the mix. Although I understand my parents separation was better for them mentally
and physically, I have the thoughts everyday of what it would be like if they were still together
Since I can remember, I have always had to go back and forth through my parents homes
weekly. Having to do this takes a physical toll on me as I must pack and drive to each house
every single week. I would stay at my mothers Monday through Thursday, and then go to my
fathers home for the weekend. Things began to get even more complicated when it came to
holidays. My parents would constantly bicker through the phone, letters, and in person. This
eventually led to them not speaking at all and leaving one individual directly in the middle of all
the problems: me. I am the source my parents come to when they want to talk down on one
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another, when they want hatred messages to be passed along, and when they feel the need to try
As I have grown older and began college, I still have the dilemma of trying to spend
equal time with both of my parents when I go home over breaks. I sit and look at my two
younger brothers, who have both of their parents in the same household since my mother
remarried, and have a feeling of envy knowing they will never have to experience the pain of
constantly going back and forth between homes. They have both parents there to go out to dinner
with, sit together to support them at sporting events, and wake up each day knowing they will all
be at the dinner table later to share their daily adventures. This causes me to have a horrible
attitude while at home that I immediately regret when it is time for me to leave once again.
Because I have such a busy schedule at school, I only go home on breaks limiting the time I have
with my family. I know they want to see me and miss me desperately when I am away, and it can
cause them to have unsettling emotions when I come home with an attitude and act as if I do not
want to be there.
My younger brothers are always curious as to why we have different fathers. They have
asked my mother questions related to the subject before and she always tends to avoid them or
beat around the bush. I have never spoken to my brothers about the situation because I feel out of
line. If my mother wanted them to understand the situation she would sit down and talk to them
like an adult. Although my brothers are still young, this type of situation is very common with
young teens and in my opinion they should have an understanding before it is too late. As they
grow older I know they will be able to understand the complexity of the situation, but I would
never make them uncomfortable and throw all the information on them at once.
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Although I feel as if I have been through a lot in this situation, I tend to keep my
emotions and thoughts bottled up as I think of those who are even less fortunate than me. I am
blessed to even have both of my parents, and have a learned a great deal from their mistakes. My
situation has allowed me to grow stronger mentally and physically. I push myself hard in the
classroom, sports, and any extracurricular activity I participate in because of the strong drive I
have in my heart to be successful. I want to reach every goal in life from having a well-paying
job, a family, and a nice home. Furthermore, I want to set an example for my future children as
they grow older. By keeping my old yearbooks, awards, pictures, and classroom notes I will be
able to show my children how important it is to stay involved and enjoy life while they are young
before having to take on the hectic role as parent when they grow older.
During my high school career, I witnessed one of my best friends become pregnant and
have a child as a sophomore in high school. We both had big dreams of leaving our small town
and going out to see what the world is really made of. Her dreams, however, were put on hold.
She constantly tells me how hard it is and how she wishes she would have waited. She is no
longer with the babys father, and her son will now live in the same situation I am in for the rest
of his life.
Overall, I believe my parents separation has had both a positive and negative effect on
me. Although I always have the negative thoughts of what if, the situations revolved around
their separation have shaped me into the person I am today. It encourages me to constantly want
more in life than living in my small town. I want to be able to travel the world and go on
adventures in the future, which starts with the decisions I make now. Although having a large
family is one of my goals in life, I know I must first handle my business and become a successful
woman before I can take on the responsibility of raising another individual. I am stronger, wiser,
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and most importantly hungry for success. Following my dreams in life is my number one priority
and I will never be satisfied until I am at the top. Rob Siltanen once said The people who are
crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do. So, call me crazy, but Ill
never stop working until I have left my mark on this world to help change the lives of others for
the better.
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B.
Soren Williams
Debra Jizi
UWRT 1104-014
28 January 2017
Past Authoring
Have you ever been caught in the middle of something you have no power over? You
have this feeling of not being able to escape and constantly have thoughts of what life would be
like if things were different. I am caught in this type of situation every morning I wake up since
my parents separation when I was younger. I look around at those with both parents under the
same roof and constantly wonder how amazing it must feel to wake up every morning and have
them both there laughing, cooking, playing around, and in love with one another. Today,
however, there is an increasing rate of young adults having children when they are completely
unprepared to even be in a relationship with one another leaving their children caught in the
middle of the mix. Although I understand my parents separation was better for them mentally
and physically, I have the thoughts everyday of what it would be like if they were still together
Since I can remember, I have always had to go back and forth through my parents homes
weekly. I would stay at my mothers Monday through Thursday, and then go to my fathers home
for the weekend. Things began to get even more complicated when it came to holidays. My
parents would constantly bicker through the phone, letters, and in person. This eventually led to
them not speaking at all and leaving one individual directly in the middle of all the problems:
me. I am the source my parents come to when they want to talk down on one another, when they
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want hatred messages to be passed along, and when they feel the need to try to make me choose
As I have grown older and began to attend college, I still have the dilemma of trying to
spend equal time with both of my parents when I go home over breaks. I feel as if I can never
keep one satisfied, and it kills me on the inside. I sit and look at my two younger brothers, who
have both of their parents in the same household since my mother remarried, and have a feeling
of envy knowing they will never have to experience the pain of constantly going back and forth
between homes. They have both parents there to go out to dinner with, sit together to support
them at sporting events, and wake up each day knowing they will all be at the dinner table later
to share their daily adventures. This causes me to have a horrible attitude while at home that I
Although I feel as if I have been through a lot in this situation, I tend to keep my
emotions and thoughts bottled up as I think of those who are even less fortunate than me. I am
blessed to even have both of my parents, and have a learned a great deal from their mistakes. My
situation has allowed me to grow stronger mentally and physically. I push myself hard in the
classroom, sports, and any extracurricular activity I participate in because of the strong drive I
have in my heart to be successful. I want to reach every goal in life from having a well-paying
job, a family, and a nice home. Furthermore, I want to set an example for my children as they
grow older. By keeping my old yearbooks, awards, pictures, and classroom notes I will be able to
show my children they can achieve anything they want in life if they remain focused and know
their life will be much easier if they wait to have children of their own.
As I was extremely involved with school and sports, I was able to witness one of my best
friends become pregnant and have a child as a sophomore in high school. We both had big
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dreams of leaving our small town and going out to see what the world is really made of. Her
dreams, however, were put on hold. She constantly tells me how hard it is and how she wishes
she would have waited. She is no longer with the babys father, and her son will now live in the
These situations in my life have made a difference in the person I am today. It encourages
me to constantly want more in life than living in my small town. I want to be able to look back
and say I made it out with a well-knit family and job. I am stronger, wiser, and most importantly
hungry for success. Following my dreams in life are my number one priority and I will never be
satisfied until I am at the top. Rob Siltanen once said The people who are crazy enough to think
they can change the world are the ones who do. So, call me crazy, but Ill never stop working
until I have left my mark on this world to help change the lives of others for the better.
My Concerns:
C.
Tierra Williams
Jizi
UWRT 1104
6 February 2017
Do you feel like your parents separating has had overall more of a
positive or negative effect on you?
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2 Feelings
- Heartwarming
- Empowered
- Touched
- Engrossed
3 Questions
- Do your step-siblings have any feelings about the divorce?
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D.
My peers gave me a lot of feedback that helped me further develop my essay. They gave
me new questions to ask myself that I could incorporate in my essay to allow it to flourish more.
These questions varied from the emotions and thoughts of my younger siblings regarding my
parents separation, the toll this situation has had on me, correlations between the separation and
my extracurricular activities, and my attitude toward the overall situation. By using these
questions as a guide I was able to include more on my emotions that I had not thought about
previously. I incorporated all my feedback from my peers into the revision process. Whether this
consisted of adding new information to develop my paper further, or take out some of my
When giving feedback to my peers I focused more on the things they did well and should
add onto in order to allow their papers to flourish. One of my feedback responses was You did
well in this paragraph by going into deep detail about the events that occurred while at school. I
felt as if I was there while it happened. By providing this feedback I encouraged the writer to
continue writing in a way that allows readers to feel as if they were reliving the event by reading
his essay. Another example of feedback I gave to one of my peers is, Your opening paragraph
can kind of confuse a reader on whether or not you're writing an essay about a dream or if this
event happened in real life. The writer did a good job with description later in the essay that
could allow a reader to understand this was a real event, but I wanted the writer to know the
opening paragraph is one of the most important aspects of a paper and they do not want to throw
the reader off track as soon as the essay begins. Furthermore, I provided another peer with a
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question as feedback. This question was Have you and your mom always had a good bond or
was it somewhat rocky before you experienced this situation? By using a question as feedback,
I wanted the writer to go more in depth on the situation and really tap into her emotions based on
the relationship she had with her mother before this event occurred.
E.
1. I sometimes have a problem with run on sentences. What can I do to improve this?
2. I often feel as if I use a certain words too many times. For example, I tend to say individuals