Assessment of Reading, Writing and Mathematics:

Primary Division

Released 2011 Assessment: Language 1, Writing

Rubrics and Sample Student Responses

with Annotations

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 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Topic Development
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Q13: Write a paragraph to explain why you liked a story that you read or heard this year.

Code Descriptor

B Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not written in

English
OR
I Irrelevant content: does not attempt assigned prompt (e.g., comment on the
task, drawings, ?, !, I dont know)
OR
Off topic: no relationship of written work to assigned prompt
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication

Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear.
Organization is random with no links between ideas. Response has a limited
10 relationship to the assigned task.

Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information.

20 Organization is minimal with weak links between ideas. Response is partly
related to the assigned task.

Response has a clear focus, adequately developed with ideas and

30 supporting details. Organization is simple or mechanical with adequate links
between ideas. Response is clearly related to the assigned task.

Response has a clear focus, well-developed with sufficient specific and

40 relevant ideas and supporting details. Organization is logical and coherent
with effective links between ideas. Response has a thorough relationship to
the assigned task.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Topic Development
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 10

Annotation:
Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear (e.g., it was
interestinghe had so many diffrent names). Organization is random with no links between
ideas. Response has a limited relationship to the task.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Topic Development
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 20

Annotation:
Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information (e.g., she make silly pigs
and some scary pigspigs are my favrite animal). Organization is minimal with weak links
between ideas (e.g., And I). Response is partly related to the assigned task.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Topic Development
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 30

Annotation:
Response has a clear focus and is adequately developed with ideas and supporting details (e.g.,
so exiting because there was alot of fighting and mysterysfunny because the pirets tricked the
bad geys). Organization is simple and mechanical with adequate links between ideas (e.g.,
There wasIt was). Response is clearly related to the assigned task.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Topic Development
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 40

Annotation:
Response has a clear focus, and is well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant ideas (e.g.,
I like the adventure they went onboth characters have something that they really like to do)
and supporting details (e.g., they got to fly to a different place in the worldthey got to use
magic on their adventureAnnie loves animals and Jack likes facts and reading). Response has
a thorough relationship to the assigned task.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Conventions
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Q13: Write a paragraph to explain why you liked a story that you read or heard this year.

Code Descriptor

B Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not

I written in English
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication

Errors in conventions interfere with communication

10
OR
Insufficient evidence to assess the use of conventions

20 Errors in conventions do not interfere with communication

30 Conventions are used appropriately to communicate

 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Conventions
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 10

Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g.,misspelled words: goswell; improper plural:
storys; incorrect subject-verb agreement: One of my favourite storys areSponge bob Play
a circus; omission of beginning and ending punctuation that creates a run-on sentence) that
interfere with communication. Response does not demonstrate the use of expected conventions.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Conventions
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 20

Annotation:
Response has errors in conventions (e.g., misspelled words: Wherfirendesbrotmodersil;
improper use of capitals in the middle of sentences: DadWentHotelWher; run-on
sentences; incorrect use of a homonym: tow for to) that do not interfere with communication.
Response demonstrates the use of some expected conventions.
 Scoring Guide for Short Writing Conventions
Paragraph (Why You Liked a Story) Question 13

Code 30

Annotation:
Response uses conventions appropriately to communicate (e.g., consistent use of beginning and
ending punctuation; uses a compound sentence; uses a variety of punctuation: periods and
exclamation marks). Some errors may exist (e.g.,misspelled words:
freaindsOnotherreson). Response demonstrates control of expected conventions.