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Adam Chase

Dr. Miss

UWRT 1104

February 7, 2017

In my rhetorical analysis, I am focusing on analyzing my paper with the five analytical

moves and discourses that show up in my paper. In exercise is medicine I think there are a bunch

of different external influences on people that make them think who they are is not good enough

or tell them they are worthless in todays society. I think you can trace a plethora of different

external influences that impact the way you are, how you end up discovering who you are today,

and different discourses that shape who you are today.

I think the different discourses you are in influence you in big ways because the

discourses you are apart of act and talk the way you do. One big external influence can be traced

to your parents because they are the ones teaching you what to do in life and your parents are

who you are around all the time at a developing age. The second big external influence can be

connected to the group of friends you hang out with growing up because the way they act and the

way they talk are going to be very similar to how you do these things. The discourses you are in

will directly influence the decision-making and the way you act will be directly attributed to

what kind of discourse you are in, like the time when I was about five or six years old with my

mom and grandparents. I would call this my primary discourse because my grandparents and my

mom were the ones influencing my life at the time. My mom and my dad got divorced at a young

age so that is the reason my grandparents and mom were my primary discourse. Ever since those

few years my mom was unmarried and I have always strived to please her because she strived to

get us what we wanted even though she was the only one supporting my brother and me.
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Not all external influences are benevolent influences. Many influences can be hurtful like

when I was listening to Story Corps and heard about the story of the garbage man/pastor. The

garbage man/pastor had received a concerned look from a parent when a child waved at the

garbage man and he waved back. It shows that someone's negative influence is making the kid

think that being a garbage man is seen as being inferior to other jobs and not wanting the kid to

not have that low life job. The second example of a negative influence shown by the married

couple and how before they were married the husband lost his son's life. The husband says when

her first gazed upon his soon to be wife preaching one day and when he told her about what had

happened to his son that devastated his life, he started to feel better about what had happened. He

says when they are together he has a way to cope with his son's death. The influences I was

listening to were very surprising to me because these types of external influences did not come to

mind when thinking of different types of influences in peoples lives. It did not come to my mind

because I have never had something that devastating happen to me.

In the exercise is medicine I needed to learn how to suspend my judgement on the case

of how exercise can be like medicine in many ways. Instead of just saying that these different

exercises help with certain medical problems, I should put more quotes showing evidence of how

exercise really helps. If I put more of these quotes into my paper it will show that with proof of

statistics that exercise could really act as medicine. I have been fit most of my life and really

have not had any medical problems so I need to not put my input into how exercise is a medical

solution and put more facts and statistics showing how exercise could be a medical solution. In

the exercise is medicine paper it had been broken up into two significant groups and the two

groups are: how exercise can help with mental problems and how exercise can help with physical

problems. The ways these two are connected to each other is that exercise in both of these groups
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shows that exercise helps the patients as if it was medicine that is treating them. In exercise is

medicine I suggested that exercise could be a replacement for medicine and when I did this I

backed these statements with quotes from reliable websites and one quote from a reliable website

was: They feel more energetic throughout the day, sleep better at night, have sharper memories,

and feel more relaxed and positive about themselves and their lives. And exercise converts a

powerful medicine for many common mental health challenges. (Robinson 1). The patterns I

see in this paper are the quotes and the explanation of the quote like On this website, it is telling

you that people who tend to exercise act in this way and how exercise improves their life.

(Chase 3). The quote from my paper was explaining the quote that is just above this one and

what you see there shows the type of patterns I see in my paper.

I have a few questions to ask about this paper that might give more information in my

paper. How often do these people need to work out to start feeling better about themselves? Will

exercise help everyone that has a health problem in their life or will it only be able to help a few

people that try this out? In my paper, I illustrate a lot of places where I made implicit/explicit

examples because you would say how exercise could help you then would proceed to show

quotes that back this and explain the quote after. The best thing in this paper was the pattern of

the quotes and the explanation after the quotes because you need specific details to be able to

back up what you are saying and so you do not lose the reader and the reader does not believe in

what you are saying. The point of my paper would have failed if I did not provide specific

details.
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Citations

Chase, Adam Exercise is Medicine Paper for HAHS 1000 Prospect for Success.

University of North Carolina at Charlotte. Charlotte, NC. 10/20/16. Print

Robinson Lawrence, Segal Jeanne, Ph.D., and Smith Melinda, M.A. The Mental Health

Benefits of Exercise., December 2016. Web.