Teacher: Meg Strauss Date: February 15th, 2016

School: Holyoke Junior High School Grade Level: 8th

Content Area: English
Title: Draft 1 Lesson #:_13_ of _16_

Colorado State Standards Addressed:

Standard 3.3.d: Produce clear and coherent writing in which the development,
organization, and style are appropriate to task, purpose, and audience.
Standard 3.3.e: With some guidance and support from peers and adults, develop
and strengthen writing as needed by planning, revising, editing, rewriting, or trying
a new approach, focusing on how well purpose and audience have been addressed.
Understandings:
Students will add revisions to their writing circle members personal memoirs.
Inquiry Questions:
How can peer edits be used to enhance your writing?
Evidence Outcomes: (Learning Targets)
I can: add revisions to my peers personal memoirs.
This means: I can also get feedback from my peers on my draft in order to
enhance my writing.

List of Assessments:
- Students will be given a completion grade. Students must have their first
personal memoir draft completed.
- Students will be graded on the depth of their peer feedback.

Planned Lesson Activities

Name and Purpose of Name: Draft 1
Lesson
Purpose: Students will add revisions to their writing circle members
personal memoirs.
Approx. Time and
Materials Duration of Unit: 50 minutes

Materials: Computer, Google Docs, Peer Evaluation Form

Anticipatory Set Students will be given a completion grade on their first personal
 memoir draft. Students will be asked to get into their writing circle
groups.
Procedures Teacher Actions Student Actions

1. 5 minutes- 1. 5 minutes-
Announcements Actively listen to announcements.
Question Answer attendance question
attendance:
What is your
favorite state? 2. 5 minutes-
2. 5 minutes- Show my teacher my first draft of my
Give completion personal memoir to receive a
grade for completion grade.
students who
have completed
their first
personal memoir
draft

3. 10 minutes
Get into my writing circle
3. 10 minutes- Share my personal memoir with
Tell students to members of my writing circle through
get into their google docs
writing circles Read the person to my left personal
Tell students to memoir
share their Answer evaluation questions on google
personal memoir docs
draft with their
writing circle
Tell students to
edit the person to
their left person
memoir via
google docs
After five
minutes, have
students answer
evaluation 4. 10 minutes
questions on Read the next person on my left
google docs personal memoir
4. 10 minutes After five minutes, answer evaluation
Tell students to questions through google docs
read the next
person on their
left personal
memoir
After five minutes 5. 15 minutes
have students Review peer revisions and evaluation
answer questions
 evaluation Spend the remaining time editing my
questions on first draft
google docs.
5. 15 minutes
Tell students to
review revisions
and evaluation
questions
Tell students to 6. 5 minutes
spend the next Write a one dollar reflection where
few minutes each word is ten cents
editing their first This reflection should answer the
draft question, Why are peer edits
important?
6. 5 minutes- Turn in reflection
Tell students to Pack up belongings and get ready for
write a one dollar my next class
reflection where
each word is ten
cents
This reflection
should answer
the question,
Why are peer
edits important?
Closure Students will write a one dollar reflection where each word is ten cents
This reflection should answer the question, Why are peer edits
important?
Assessment - Students will be given a completion grade on whether or not they
have their first draft of their personal memoir completed
- Students will be given a grade on the depth of their
feedback.
Differentiation - Students will be placed in their writers circles
Notes to Self - Im not sure if two peer edits will be enough
Peer Review:

You are required to read and edit two peers personal memoirs. These peers will be from your

writing circle. As you edit your peers work, fill out this sheet:

Did the introduction immediately intrigue you? If not, how can it be improved?

Did the story follow the personal narrative plot, and was it easy to follow? If not, how can it be

improved?

Did the writer stick to the theme? Was it evident that their narrative was about a time of personal

adaptation?

Does the writer state the moral of the story? If so, what is the moral of the story?

Is the conclusion reflective? Does it tie the whole narrative together? If not, how can the

conclusion be improved?