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Language Features – Sentence Structure

Sentences have no evide nce of complex structures, no noun, verb or prepositional phrases.

Sentences have littl e evidence of complex structures that include one or two noun, verb and/or prepositional phrases. Sia , Adam

Sentences have soun d evidence of complex structures, including some noun, verb and prepositional phrases. Matt

Sentences have significant evidence of complex structures, with many instances of noun, verb and prepositional phrases.

Sentences have extensiv e evidence of complex structures with ample amount of noun, verb and prepositional phrases.

EN2 - 9B – uses effective and accurate sentence structure, grammatical features, punctuation conventions and vocabulary relevant to the type of text when responding to and composing texts.

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understand that the meaning

       

of sentences can be enriched through the use of noun groups /phrases and verb

 

groups/phrases and prepositional phrases

Language Features - Vocabulary

Limited to n o evidence of vocabulary choices to engage the reader in a narrative context

Little evidence of vocabulary choices, basic and non - basic, to engages the reader in a narrative context. Adam

Sound evidence of non - basic vocabulary choices to effectively engage the reader in a narrative context. Sia

Significant evidence of non - basic vocabulary choices to effectively engage the reader in a narrative context, including some complex words. Matt

Extensive evidence of non - basic vocabulary choices to effectively engage the reade r in a narrative, including a range of complex words.

EN2 - 9B – uses effective and accurate sentence structure, grammatical features, punctuation conventions and vocabulary relevant to the type of text when responding to and composing texts.

understand that choice of vocabulary impacts on the effectiveness of texts

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experiments with vocabulary choices to engage the reader

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Grammatical Features

S entences contain no adjectives to enhance meaning to the creative text .

Sente nces contain small use s of adjectives to enhance meaning to the creative text. Adam , Sia

Sentences contain sound use of adjectives to enhance meaning to the creative text.

Sentences contain s ignificant evidence of adjectives , including some complex uses , to effectively enhance the meaning to the creative text. Matt

Sentences contain extensive evidence of adjec tives, including complex uses throughout the text, bringing and enhance the meaning on an exponential level .

EN2 - 9B – uses effective and accurate sentence structure, grammatical features, punctuation conventions and vocabulary relevant to the type of text when responding to and composing texts.

identify and use grammatical features, eg. adjectives

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Punctuation

EN2 - 9B – uses effective and accurate sentence structure, grammatical features, punctuation conventions and vocabulary relevant to the type of text when responding to and composing texts.

Uses little to no punctuation, with no evidence of punctuation conventions to engage the reader. Adam , Sia

Uses punctuation with a f ew mistakes in the text, and some evidence of punctuation conventions to engage the reader.

Uses correct punctuation in the text, with one or two of mistakes, and sound evidence of punctuation conventions to engage the reader. Matt

U ses correct punctuation in the text, with significant evidence of punctuation

Uses correct punctuation in the text, with no mistakes, with extensive evidence of punctuation

experiment with punctuation to engage the reader and achieve purpose

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conventions to engage the reader.

conventions to engage the reader

Spelling EN2 - 5A – uses a range of str ategies, including knowledge of letter - sound correspondences

High - frequency words are often incorrectly spelled, with no attempt at

Mostly correct spelling of high - frequency words with little to no

Correct spelling of high - frequency words, with some attempts at complex words with a few errors Matt , Sia

Correct spelling of high - frequency words and complex words with 1 or 2 errors.

Flawless spelling with high - frequency and complex words.

and common letter patterns, to spell familiar and some unfamiliar words.

use a variety of spelling strategies to spell high - frequency words correctly when composing imaginative and other texts.

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complex words. Adam

attempt at complex words.

Handwriting EN2 - 3A – uses effective handwriting and publis hes texts using digital technologies

Handwriting is illegible and is inconsistent in size, spacing and slope

Handwrites in a manner that is somewhat legible and fluent, with NSW Foundation that has some cases of inconsistent size, spacing and slope. Adam

Handwrites in a legible and fluent manner with NSW Foundation font that has consistent size, spacing and slope.

Handwrites in a legibl e and fluent manner with NSW Foundation font or their own font that has accurate size, spacing and slope Matt , Sia

Handwrites in a legible and fluent manner with NSW Foundation font or their own font that has precise size, spacing and slope.

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Write using NSW Foundation Style cursive, as

appropriate, and explore joins that facilitate

 

fluency and legibility

 

Context – Text Type Structure

Does not include any development at all for an imaginative text.

Includes a development that is not particularly cohesive in the form of a complication for an imaginary text . Adam

Effectively i ncludes an interesting development in the form of a complication for an imaginary text. Sia

Eff ectively includes an interesting developme nt in the form of a complication for an engaging imaginary text. Matt

I ncludes a n interesting development in the form of a complication creatively, for an engaging imaginary text.

EN2 - 2A – plans, composes and reviews a range of texts that are more demanding in terms of topic, audience and language.

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compose imaginative texts

 
Feedback for Adam The task that was given was to write a story and yours

Feedback for Adam The task that was given was to write a story and yours was really exciting! You had interesting characters and a thrilling idea! You used some great sentences. However, we need to work on using correct punctuation in your work. A good strategy to start off with is to check over your work and figure out whether you need to add commas, full stops, question marks and exclamation marks. This will make it helpful for the people reading your work to understand what you mean. I also liked your work on the de scriptive words such as “powerful” and “mythical”. It really helps me as the reader to understand what you are talking about. Something else that might help you develop your writing skills is to work on your spelling. A way that you can work on this is to slow down and use our spelling techniques to try and improve on this. This will help develop your writing so that people who read your work will understand and be excited to hear what is coming next.

will understand and be excited to hear what is coming next. Feedback for Matt Matt, your

Feedback for Matt Matt, your creative story was eng aging, I was hooked until the end. The way you used your words to write what the Scottish man says was brilliant! I could imagine the way he talked in my head. I also liked the amount of descriptive words you used in your writing. It helped me imagine what you were talking about in your story. However, something we could do to improve your writing skills is to learn how to use bigger, more complicated words. A way we can do this is to look on an ICT devise what words we can use instead of the more basic words, such as “small” and “long”, which is called a synonym finder. You spelled most of your words correctly, even the word “remembered”! However, you made some errors you would not normally make. For example, at the start you wrote “opend”, which is the incorrect spelling, but later on you spelled it correctly “I opened it and saw…” A strategy to help you out would be to look over your

work and edit the e rrors. Your handwriting is excellent, and your story was really interesting. Well done Matt!