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Communicating
for Results
A Canadian Student's Guide
Carolyn Meyer
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Achieving Conciseness 81
Tone 86
Tune in to Word Connotations 86
Keep Your Style Conversationa l 87
Select the Right Level of Formality: Personal and Impersonal Styles 87
Be Positive 88
Stress Reader Benefits and Relevance 89
Be Polite 90
Use Inclusive Language 90
Write with Confidence 92
WORKSHOPS AND DISCUSSION FORUMS 94
WR ITING IMPROVEM ENT EXERCISES 94
ONLIN E ACTIVITIES 98
E-mall 135
General E-mail Guidelines 136
Reading and Processing Incoming Messages 138
Formatting and Writing E-mail 139
Replying to E-mail 140
E-mail Style and Tone 141
Routine Messages: Positive and Informative Memos and E-mail 142
Routine Messages: Request Memos 144
Routine Messages: Reply Memos and E-mail 145
Goodwill E-mail Messages 145
Follow-Up Memos and E-mail 146
Instant M essaging (IM) 148
WORKSHO PS ANO DISCUSSION FORUMS 150
WRITING IMPROVEM ENT EXERCISES 15 1
CASE STUDY EXERCISES 152
ONLI NE ACTIVITIES 154
NOTES 524
INDEX 532
Active Listening 21 - 2, 31, 65, 299, 454
Audience Analysis 50, 51 -4, 183, 205, 235, 251, 315, 390, 426- 7, 441
Collaboration 8, 16, 64-6, 392, 395, 444, 446, 449-51
Ethics 6- 7, 23- 6, 53, 79- 80, 166, 237- 8, 251, 284, 322, 473
Indirect Approach 32, 207- 13, 238, 315, 333, 356
lntercultural Communication 16, 27-32, 33-4, 90-1, 157
Revising/Editing 61 - 3, 318- 20
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LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Identify the llnk between effective business 7. Examine the flow of communication wlthl n
communication and personal career success. organizations.
2. Recognize key changes and trends In the 8. Identify the goals of ethical business
workplace, especially those Influenced by communication and apply standards to avoid
technology. ethical lapses.
THE ABILITY of businesses to manage and adapt to change Is currently a popular topic
with communicators. For example, at a 2012 International Association for Business
Communication (IABC) event, former International president Julie Freeman stated: current
market forces such as economic uncertainty, globalization, a more diverse workforce, Innov-
ations In technology and demands for transparent and socially responsible behaviour are
compelling organizations to change the way they do business. And when organizations
change, so must th e communicators that serve them."' For Freeman, the better employees
communicate, the more they are engaged and the stronger a company's financial results
tend to be. Understanding company goals and strategies and being able to b ring that
strategy to life Is one of the roles of communicators, but the challenges don't stop there.
Globalization has made It more important for communicators to position their messages for
multiple audiences worldwide and to understand how their organization's finances Impact
their communications.
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Whatever the answer to raising Canada's pos-
~: The COTY Award is presented annually to ition as an innovator might he, communication is a
aToronto-area leader who demonstrates crucial part of it. Good communication matters-
[!]: . . excellence in communication. Judging now more than ever in business. In todays diverse,
criteria include success in developing wired, global business enviro n menL~. e veryone
communication strategies, effective use of internal and communicates for a living. It L~ impossible to work
external communication, and communication with diverse in an office setting without havi ng to write a report,
audiences. For more details, visit http://toronto.iabc.com/ dash off an e-mail message, compose a fom1al lette r,
award/coty/.
partici pate in a meeting, carry on a telephone con-
versation, network and collahorat.e wi th colleagues
and associates, make a presentation, or use Weh
2.0 and .1.0 technologies to cany out any or these
1 I GETTI NG THE MESSAGE ACROSS
h.mcli.011s. Spoken and written communication that is focused, reliable, and disciplined
has the power to influence opinion and shape perceptions on which an organization's
competitiveness, productivity, and success depend. Good communication plays a crucial
role in building credibility and upholding standards of accountability in a global busines.~
environment, where relationshi ps thrive on trust. How you write, speak, and listen on the
job reflects who you are professionally, how you treat others, and how you do business.
Done well, your communication can empower you and he the means to promotion
and success. Language is, after all, a powerful tool worr.h the effort of learning to use well.
Effective communication can cut through the complexities of business, clarifying h.izzy
concepts and making masses of data both meaningful and manageable for those who must
use it and make decisions based on iL
Successful communication on the job doesn't merely happen by chance. It is the result
of learning how to structure your infom1ation strategically-of using text, desib'll , and tech-
nologies to achieve an intended purpose for a clearly defined audience. Delivering informa-
tion effectively can depend on a fine balance between you and your audience, between a
commitment to your business goals and an awarenes.~ of your audiences needs. Delivering
information at Internet speed, as so many jobs now require, may demand a little more than
simply familiarizing yourself with the basic rules of grammar, spelling, and punctuation. It is
also a matter of keeping up with changes and developing an accessible, functional style that
is fleidblt: enough to he applied to the many fom1s of communication in your workplace.
Good communkation makes good business sense. l:ven though the ability to com-
municate effectively is thought of as a "soft skill"- one o f the social and self-management soft skill a social, Interpersonal, or
behaviours that help people take action and get results--as opposed to a "hard s kill"- the language skill that complements a
person's technical skills.
know-how, tools, and techniques that equip people to work in a professional capacity-
research has shown that communication is important to success. In a 200.'i publica- hard skill a technical skill that a
tion entit.led SUCCESS, the Canadian Advanced Technology Alliance (CATA) revealed that, person requires for a specificJob.
among 100 Canadian business leaders, communication was a top attribute linked to
leadership skil l~. Communication capabilities are not just a pathway t.o career advance-
ment but also a route to a healthy bottom line. Terry Matthews, founder and chairman
of Wesley Clover, a private equity and investment management firm, sees new graduates
with specific skill sets as part of I.he formula for corporate success in the future economy:
"It's not always the ones with the highest marks. Rather, lt's the people with the hard work
ethic, c reativity and good communication skills."3
According to a survey of 120 human resources directors, American businesses spend
$3.1 billion annually training their employees to write. With the enom1ous cost of poor
communication, the ability to communicate effectively is now a top-ranked skill among
Canadian employers. The Conference Board of Canada argues that progress in the work
world depends on t.he ability to do the following:
Besides heing a hase ror further development, these skills bring lasting benefits to those
who can apply them, the organizations where they are practised, and- more i11directly-
the stakeholders who must interact with them. Advantages include enhanced problem-
solving and decision-making; increased efficiency, workll ow, and productivity; and
improved professional image, business relatio11ships, and group dynamics.
Communication is the cornerstone in the new and rapidly evolving workplace, bringing
together core functions.
T he knowledge economy. Whereas Canada's economy used to he based on 1.he
products people made from raw materials through manual labour, the information age
has mad e it knowledge-based. The knowledge wo rker makes and sells some kind of
idea-based product: software, consulting and financial se rvices, music, design, or phar-
maceuticals. The advantage that knowledge products have over those produced through
manual labour is that their value can dramatically increase as the global market expands;
the challenge in a knowledge economy Ls to ensure continued funding for research and
development (R&:D), to continue to draw on an educated workforce trained i11 critical
thinking, and to fight the problem of "brain drain," the loss of ex-perts to other countries.
Richard Florida, an urhan studies theorist and head of the Martin Prosperity Institute at
the University of Toronto's Rotman School of Management, believes that creativity is the
driving force of economic probrress and source of competitive advantage. He claims that
"the creative age" has seen the rise of two social classes: the creative class-comp rised of
workers in science and technology. arts and culture, entertainment, health care, law, and
management- and the service class.6
Spurri ng the spread of Lnfom1ation , utilities
and search engines such as Google and open-
access husiness information engines have become
equalize rs, helping to make the acquisition of
Watch Richard Florida explain "Why knowledge more democratic so that everyone can,
Creativity is the New Economy" in this potentially, know almost anythi ng they want at any
video address to the Royal Society
given time. It is understood that workers should
for the encouragement of the Arts, Manufactures and
have both the skills to utilize such resources to
Commerce: http://goo.gl/KwtJuO.
find and evaluate information and the kl.low-how
to process and communicate it effectively. The
infonnation age makes researchers of us all, no
matter what our occupation or job profile. Shared
1 I GETTI NG THE MESSAGE ACROSS
workspaces-or areas hosted hy a web server where colleabrues can share information and ICTs tochnologles, such as
document.So-and company intranet.s--where employees can share insider information in mobile phone systemsand the
a protected web environment- are prime examples of how tbis era ls radically reshaping Internet, used for transmitting,
manipulating, and storing data by
business environments.
electronic means.
The concept of the risk society. With its forces of modernization, our society is one
that sociologists Anthony Giddens and Ulrich Ileck have called a "risk society." 7 Dangers piracy the ur)authorlzed
reproduction and distribution or
include not only environmental rL~ks, such as natural dL~asters, hut al~o manufactured
copyrighted material, Including
risks that are complex, catastrophic, and can affect ma11y people. Examples of risks in vtdeo games, software, music,
ICTs include piracy, cyherwarfare, and identity theft. Sen11ity breaches result in lost and fllms.
or compromised data, as well as a loss of trust, that can hallll commerce and a companys cyberwarfare a form of
credibility, reputation, and bottom line. Institutions such as governments and businesses Information warfare, usually the
au.empt to control risk hy building t.rust, establishing cross-border co-operation , and conducting of politically motivated
sabotllge through hacking.
forging n.etworks.
Managing risk is essential for the active risk-taking that allows a dynam ic economy Identity theft the act of acquiring
to continue. Preventive measures and regulation are part. of this effort, as are the special- and collecting an Individual's
ized protocols of crisis and risk communication. Data security, cyhersecurity, and defence personal Information for
criminal purposes.
against a spectrum of threats to comm unication from com puter viruses, hacki ng, and
other fom1s of cyhe rattack continue t.o he I.op concerns for o rgan izations. risk communication an
Interactive exchange of Information
Ffatter organizations. Organizations are hy tradi ti on layered and hierarchical.
and opinion on risk among risk
Manage rs from the top down at. many levels are entrusted with making the decisions assessors, risk managm, and other
and setting the strategies for action to he carried out by front-line employees \vith whom Interested parties.
they may or may not he in direct contact. As organ-
izations strive for great.er cost savings, efficiency,
competitiveness, and sustainability, management
hierarchies may he flauened , with fewer divisions.
This decentralization and democratization of the
Watch Ulrich Beck discuss living in
wo rkplace, with fewer middle managers to pass
and coping with world risk society:
along an.cl interp ret directions, makes for shorter
http://goo.gi/Kn5jJ3
commun.kation chains; therefore, every individual
must he a skilled communicator if company prod
ucts and services are going to make it into the mar
kel. As husiness guru Thomas J. Friedman, author
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
human rights
labour standards (such as bans on forced and child labou r, recogn ition of collective
bargaining rights, and elimirnat.ion of employment discrimination)
the environm ent (adoption o f environmen tal protection initiatives and environment
ally friendly technologies and use of precaut.ionary approaches to environm emal
challenges)
anti-conuptio n (zero tolerance for all forms of corruptio n, includin g bribery
sustainable development and extortion)
economtc development that
maintains natural resources Communicating these values to st.akeholders has become more important as int.erest
for future generations and in sustainable development and relat.ed concepts of CSR, corporate ethics, citizenship and
recognizes the relationship
between economic, social, and accotmtahllity, and the t.riple bottom line of environment, economy, and society brrows. 12
envtronmental Issues. According to the Certified General Accountants Association of Canada, 80 per cent of
companies listed on the Toronto Stock Exchange
in 2008 reported some type of sustainability prac-
tice. i:i Reporting st1st.ainahle development is more
than a PR exerdse. Through a combination of vol-
untary and mandatory disclosures, sustainability
Canadian Business for Social reporting can accomplish many objectives:
Responsibility offers links to more than
60 resources on sustainability and CSR: strengt.hen the link hetween a company and
http://goo.gi/UVKvtd. its stakeholders and increase stakeholder value
hoost financial performance
showcase efficiency in production and lead to
better use of company assets and innovative
technology
1 I G ETTI NG TH E ME SS AGE ACRO S S D
increase the com pany's appeal to socially
respo nsihl e investo rs
build industry credihiHty, set an example, and
enhance company reputation
Watch Professor Mark Schwartz of York
Busiiness o n a global scale. The world's
University discuss business ethics and
economy is hecom ing increasingly global- to
CSR in this video: http://goo.gi/RrpwdA.
the point where, since 2000, the world seems to
have shrunk. This is d ue, in large part, to seve ral
key factors:
auto responders; t.ahlet computers; smartphones and or.her hand-held wireless devices;
Bluetooth technology; instant messaging (IM); t.ext messaging; voice mail; proprietary
Voice over IP services (VoIP) such as Skype; podcasts; mohile apps such as Basecamp
and WehEx; space-defying video con rerencing and weh conferencing; presentation soft-
ware such as PowerPoint, Prezi, and Keynote; interactive software that can change the
sequence of information; wehlogs; wikis; virtual worlds; cloud computing; and, on the
horizon, wearahle computers such as Google Glass. Not only do these technologies allow
us to communicate farther and faster, hut they also enable us to communicate around the
dock- to the point where we are always using one technolob'Y or another. 10 As Michael
Sandel comments in The World ls /:lat, "Developments in information tech nology are
enabling companies to squeeze all the inefficiencies and friction out of their markets and
business operations."20
Connectivity through the World Wide Web. Web 1.0 (the read-only web) was
invented in the early 1990s and continues to enable users t.o find information through
tools such as browsers, search engines, and portals and to exchange infom1ation through
applications such as e-mail. Weh 2.0 (read- WTite) applications such as hlogs, wikis, peer-
to-peer file sharing, social networking platforms, and virt.ual worlds represent a great leap
forward hecause they allow users to communicate, collaborate, and socialize, as well as
to create, distribute, and share content. Web romiats such as Really Simple Syndication
(RSS) feeds allow frequently updated wo rks to he puhlished and new content to he
syndicated automatically.
he connected to the Internet hy 201.5, with products such as the Nike Fuelhand,
a wearable monito r, rep resenti ng the leadi ng edge of this technology. 2' Companies
that have already embraced Web 3.0 include Dell, which has created a community
of one million online users to test products and provide feedback on design, and
Amazon. whkh uses Al to provide customer recommendations based on h1dividual
browsing histories.2
Mobile apps for business. The 2012 lpsos Canadian Interct.ive Reid Report states
that 37 per cent of Canadians have mobile Internet access. Of the 31 per cent who
0\"'11 a smartphone, .57 per cent have downloaded a mobile application.21 As a result,
businesses have been quick to take advantage of mobi le apps. Business-to-business
(B2B) apps are used to suppo rt an o rgartization's internal business processes such as
customer-relations hip management, warehouse management, and sales-Co rce auto
mation. Business-to-consumer (B2C) apps fulfill different needs: 28
Content-oriented apps, such as Twitter and IM, answer the need for information,
com munication, entertainment, and socialization.
Marketing-oriented apps promote brands and excel in targeting them to a younger,
digitally native demographic. A 2010 Leger Marketing study found that 90 per
cent of Canad ian organizations utilize social media as a public engagement r.ooL
Canadian companies such as Molson-Coors use mobile apps as mainstays o r their
com mimications planrting, with well-knowi1 apps such as a branded pat.io finder
helping to build brand awareness. 20 Worldwide, companies such as Debenham\;
UK have capitalized on this trend by offering customers a dedicated app ror vis-
iting virtual pop-up stores across the country. Shoppers can then view d resses
available at a specific location, try them on using augmented reality technology.
and purchase them at a 20 per cent di..~count. 30 Paramount Studios creat.ed mohile
media ads for Trnnsfonne-rs J that allowed users to download wallpaper for t.heir
iPhones and view exclusive trailers.
Service-oriented apps allow users to perform tasks such as online hanking. shop
ping, or consulting schedules.
COMMUNICATION DEFINED
The term wmmunicati<m derives from a Latin root wo rd meaning "common." Having
something in common through the transmission of ideas, emotions, and skills-through
sharing knowledge and exchangLng inrom1ation- lies at the heart of the act of comm uni-
cation. Comm unication has hee n defined as "a transactional process of shari ng mean
ing with others"12 and as "a human process through wh ich we make sense out of the
world and share I.hat sense with others." 33 More simply, communication is the sharing
of synlhols--words, images, gestures--to create meaning. Through communication we
assign meanings based on our social and cultural contexts and reb'1.1late the world around
us hy the stories that we make up about it and share. T.f storytelling, as narrative theorists
believe, is one way to view communication, then it is also a means by which we act on the
world, whether to persuade or dissi.1ade or si mply provoke a response from others.
1 I G ETTI NG TH E ME SS AGE AC RO S S
Communication and technology psychological and sociological issues related to computer-mediated communication, human-
computer interaction, social interaction and networking, and other impacts of technology
Health communication the role of communication theory, research, and practice in health promotion and health care
lntercultural communication the theory and practice of communication between and among different cultures
Intergroup communication the ways in which communication within and between groups affects social relations
Interpersonal communication small-group processes and relationship development
Mass communication the transmission of messages through mass media, such as print and cinema, and the differing
impacts of those messages
Organizational communication the processes of communicating and organizing in global society and its contexts, such as
government and non-government agencies, profit and non-profit organizations, health care
co-operatives, and global corporations
Public relations the understanding of communication between organization and target groups or publics
Visual communication the meaning and function of all forms of visual representation, including still and moving
images in print and digital media, film, television and video, and art and design
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
Communication isn't simply something that is done to or.hers; it is cond ucted together-
a process in which both sender and receiver are involved in a necessary if not entirely
equal partnership.
ln concept1.1al t.erms, comm unication can he thought of not as a thing hut as a process
of transfening dat.a from a sender to a receiver as efficient.ly and accurately as possible.
This exchange takes place through the use of a code- a language or a set of sib'l1S and
symbol~ (e.g., words or gestures)- that transm iL~ a thought through a channel and carries
an agreed-upon meaning within a particular cont.ext, with t.he aim of eliciting a response
from the receiver. The receiver must he ahle to understand, with certainty, what is signifi-
cant about the data and make meaning out of it in o rder for this active, ongoing, and ever-
changi ng process to be truly effective. Through communication we assign meanings and
take possession of the world around us, though the realities we create are shaped hy our
different cultural expe1iences and individual knowledge.
depends on the ext.mt to which a message received corresponds to the message trans-
mitt.ed or to which the input and the output correlate. The goal is for the message to he
understood as it was intended. The process, unfortunately, is not always as simple and
st.raightfonvard as i.t sounds. Difficulties wi.th transmission, reception, and interference
have 1.he potential to disrupt the process.
Sender
The sender, also known as the transmitter or communicator, is the person or group with sender the parttclpant In the
a particular idea or purpose in mind and an i.ntention to express that purpose in the rom1 transactton who has an Idea and
communlCiJt~s It by encoding It
of a message. The fom1 that the idea ultimately assumes- its content, tone, emphasis, In a message.
and orga nization- is shaped hy the sender's context, knowledge, attitudes, background,
and other assumptions based on the senders experience. The act of taking ideas and put- encoding the! act of converting
Ideas Into code In order to convey
ting them into a code is known as encoding. The message can he encoded verbally or a written, oral. or non verbal
non-verhally-in writing. speech, or gestures-with the goal that it will eventually he message.
understo od. For this to happen, however, the sender must consider the receiver's context,
knowledge. attitudes, and comm unication skills and then choose the right code to convey
the intend ed meaning; otherwise, the commmticati.on transaction can fail.
Channel
The channel is the medium by which the message is physically transmitted. Delivery can channel a communlcatlon
he by spoken word, letter, memo, report, telephone, computer (e-mail), voice, or ges- pathway or medium over which
a message travels.
ture. Choosing the optimal chan nel depend.~ on a variety of factors discussed later in thi..~
chapter. A medi um can he synchronous (i.e., enabling the com mi.mication t.o take place
directly, at the same time or in real time) or asynchronous (i.e., allowi ng for a transfer of
informal.ion that L.~ stored or archived and accessed later, so that sender and receiver do
not need. to he present at the same time). Face-to-face conversations, telephone conver
sations, synchronous text chat, and audio and video conferencing involve synchronous
delivery and allow for the most spontaneous interaction and rapid feedback. E-mail, faxes,
wehlogs, and discussion hoard.~ allow for asynchronous delivery. which allows for more
time to reflect on a message.
Receiver
Sender Receiver
encodes decodes
message
message message
and reacts
Noise Noise
Receiver
receiver the pe1son for whom The receiver is the pe rson or group at whom the message L~ directed. The receiver is
a message Is Intended and who responsible for decoding the message- extracting meanlng from its symhols. The receiv
decodes the message by extracting
er's life experi ences, knowledge, attitudes, and context can infl uence how he or. she will
meaning from It
lnterpret and respond to the message.
decoding theactofextractlng
meaning from spoken, written, and
non-verbal communication. Feedback
Feedback is the receiver's discernible response to a sender's message. It can be non-verhal,
feedback the receiver's response like the nod of a head during a face-to-face conversation; oral, like the "umms" or "ahhs"
to a message that conflrms If the
ortglnal message was received heard d uring a telephone conversation; or written , like the reply e-mail that conveys the
and understood. receiver's reaction. Feedback is a vital part of communication , allowi ng for clari fication
and ensuring that the message has been properly understood . Making no provision for
feedback and choosing a medi um whereby reedhack is delayed when it is immediately
required can bring the communication process to a frustrating conclusion.
This t)'Jle of misunderstanding is known as bypassing. Shifts in meaning, raulty dic- bypassing misunderstanding that
tion, and misplaced emphasis can all lead to miscommunication. results from the 1ecclvcr Inferring a
Physical and technical interference. Every so often, technical difficulties arise- different moaning from a mossage
based on the different meanings of
phone lines jam, computers crash, and cellphone connections fade.
the words that are used.
Mixed messages and channel barriers. Some mes.sages give off conflicting signals,
resulting in misunderstanding when I.he receiver can't decide which signal to observe. physical and technical
Interference Interference external
A speake r might say that he agrees with an idea hut raise h L~ eyebrows as he speaks,
to the sender and recelver.11
suggesting that he still harbours a few doubts or reservations. Likewise, choosing the
wrong comm unication channel-for example, by e-mailing a contentious message mixed messages conmcttng
perceptionsof a signal or
or u:ansmitting a message through too long a communication chain-can lead to a
message that may result In
breakdown in communication. mlscommunlCiltlon.
Environmental interference. People diffe r from one another in their demographics,
channel barriers Inappropriate
attitudes, and perceptions. Their frames o r reference--or ways of seeing the wo rld
choices of channol ll'lat lmpeclc
hase d on their own experiences, culture, personality, and education-can he miles communlcanon.
apart. Age and cultural gaps can create differences in pe rcept.ion that innuence how a
environmental Interference
message is interpreted.
lntcrfcrcnc<l that results from
Overcoming these harriers is a matter o r becoming more reflective about your own preconceptions and differing
frames of reference.
com munication practices and more responsive to the needs and expectations of your
receivers. A few guidelines can help you :
Be tim ely and time-sensitive. ln routine situations, respond as soon as you have the
infom1ation you intend to pa~s on; in emotionally charged si tuatioll..~, choose the right
time, when others will he receptive l.o your communications. Ease tensions by giving
others the opportunity to cool down.
Be purposeful. In all hut the ve ry hridest message, state your purpose for meeting,
talkLng, or writing at I.he beginning.
Be a good listener and a careful reader. Give your full attention to the message and
to the message's context.
Be context-sensitive. Consider t.he comm unication situation and if t.he channel is
right for that situation and audience.
Be proactive. If you are in doubt about what you have heard or read, verify the facts
and get more information as needed before proceeding. Being an effective commtmi-
catm means reducing the margin for uncertainty.
Communication Contexts
Commun ication can he thought of in terms of several forms o r contexts that involve dif-
ferences in the numbers and proximities of interactants, the relationships between roles of
the sender(s) and receiver(s), the nature and amount of possible feed back, and the degree
to which messages are adapted to thei r audiences. Effective comm unication on the joh
relies on skills related to Ave forms-the central issu es of which will he explored in this
and subsequent chapters:
Non-Verbal Communication
Communication involves more than just spoken and written words. Messages are also act
ively conveyed through a subtext of non-verbal language, both unwri tten and Ul1spoken.
As communication.~ researcher and UCLA professo r Albert Mehrabian found , the impact
of spoken communications containing an emotional or attitudinal element comes largely
from non-verbal elements:
While this finding is intriguing, if somewhat misleading, other research has shown that
non-verhal cues had over four times the effect of verhall cues. 2 This alone suggests that
non-verhal communication is a system of great importance in social interaction. non-verbal communication
Non.-verbal messages communicate emotions, attitudes, gree ti ngs, and cues or communlCiltlon that docs not
use words but takes place through
status.+:i Effective non-verhal skills and abilities can therefore play an important role in gestures, eye con tac~ and
building an d maintaining interpersonal relationships and managing impressions,+! key facial expressions.
components in successful careers. How a message is encoded according to any of the fol-
lowing non-verbal displays can influence how that message is interpreted or decoded :
These non-verbal cues have the power to intensify what an individual is trying to
co nvey and to work at cross-purposes to a message's primary aim. Some non-verbal non-verbal behaviours
behaviours, as well as some vocal ones, are obvious-a veritable source of uncensored communication that takes place
through gestures. facial expressions,
data- while others are much more subtle, often defying detection. A nod of the head, a aye cont.1ct, and posture.
point of a finger, a steady gaze, a slumped posture, a rmwn-these signal~. like all non-
verbal cues, are powerful indicators of feeli ngs and attitudes in ve rbal communication.
No n-ve rb al com munication cues can play five roles in relation to verbal
communication:
1. Repetition. Non-verbal di..~lays can repeat a message that is being delivered verbally
in the same interaction. Instructing a computer tech nician to repair "this computer"
while pointing at the computer is an example or repetition.
2. Contradiction. Non-verbal messages can conflict with the message an individual is
trying to convey verbally, resulting in mixed messages and additional challenges for
the decoder. A joh candidate who says she is "confident" hut rarely makes eye contact
during the interview sends contrad ictory messages that are difficult to reconcile.
3. Regulation. Non-verhal displays can also reb'Ulate conversations. Tapping a person
on the shoulder to initiate a conversation is an example of regulation.
4. Substitution. Someti mes a non-verbal display can st.and in for a verbal message as
the sole means or communication. Decoders with expressive sensitivity can "read"
facial expressions, gestures, and hody posture, which sometimes "speak" louder than
words. Team members might b'lless that an important contract has been lost if the
team leader enters the meeting room with a sad, downcast expression.
5. Accenti11g and complementing. Non-verbal displays can underline, ampli fy, or tone
down a verbal message. Pounding the table while exclaiming "We have to cut our
budget, now!" is an example of accenting. Complementary non-verbal cues reinforce
or affirm a message, making it easier to remember. A boss who shakes a junior
associates hand while praising him or her uses touch to increase the impact of the
verbal message.
Non.-verbal cues are easily misinterpreted and can be particularly misleading when
taken out of context. Because their meaning is often cU1lturally determined, it is impos-
sible to interpret them in unive rsal terms. Developing an awareness of intentional and
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unintentional non-verhal signals can help you not only to decipher them hut also to regu
late their impact on your own communication. Non-verhal skills and abilities fall into three
general domains, all essential to achieving competence as a non-verhal communicator:
Tuning in t.o the signs and signals of human behaviour can help you "read" people and
their attitudes, not just the wo rds they speak or write, and make you a more effective and
conJident communicator. Non-verbal cues are also an important source of feedback that
can tell you how successful you are in your communications- what the mood o f a group
is, when the group has heard enough, and whether someone in the group woullcl like to
speak or raise a question. Non-verbal cues enrich ve rbal messages, as it is not always what
you say but how you say it that people will remember.
Intimate distance 46 centimetres for interacting with family and close friends
Personal distance 46 centimetres- 11 metres for communicating among close business associates
Physical environment, owing to ractors such as lighting conditions and interior design,
can also affect the behaviour of communicators during Lnteraction. The size of an office,
iL~ colour, even its arrallgemrnt o r furniture conveys a variety of illformation ahout the
occupant that can ill tum influence how people feel and respond . Prod uctive and efficient
business communications depend on how well respectful workplace distances are main
tained and how well approachahllity and interaction are en hanced.
Use of time (chronemlcs). Chrnnemics rders to the study of the use and illter- chronemlcs the study of tlrne In
pretation of time in non-verbal communication. For professionals, time is a valuable non verbal communication.
commodity, uniquely conllected to status in our culture. The timillg and frequency of
an action- how punctual a person is, how long someone is willing to listen or wait for a
reply, the pace or speech OT tempo of a conversation- are ractors that innuence the inter
pretation of that interaction.
Paralanguage (vocalics). Paralanbruage refers to the acoustic or non-verbal vocal paralanguage (vocalics)
qualities of verbal comm unication, the way a message is spoken in terms of three classes non-verbal vocal qualltles or
comrnunlcatlon.
of vocalic cues:
vocal qualiti es- the properties that make each voice imique, including intonation,
pitch , volume, speed or tempo, rhythm, emphasis or innect.ion, intensity, resonance,
nasality, and articulation
vocal characteristics- sounds that may be recognized as speech hut that primarily
express emotion- such as laughing, crying, and yelling
vocal segregates-pauses or Allers- the "umms," "ahhs," and "you knows"- that
punctuate hut get ill the way of fluent speech
Because they can reveal ullderlying emotions and are used to infer personality traits,
these voice patterns sometimes come across more strongly than the actual words that are
spoken , at times creating mixed messages when the words and vocal cues clash. Shifts in
meaning can occur with the suhtlest changes in volume :and emphasis. A change in vocal
inflection can turn a general observation, such as "Oh, really," into an expression of sar-
casm. "We can't fill your o rder" is a factual statement when delivered at normal volume
hut may have the potential to terminate the customer relationship if it is shouted. "I'm
very concerned about this problem" delivers a different message than when you say "l'm
very concerned about this problem" (other people may not he); 'Tm very concerned about
this problem" (my concern L~ strong); or 'Tm very co11cemed ahout this prohlem" (there
are other problems). Becoming an effective speaker L~ a matter of learning to capitalize on
paralanguage and the specific qualities of your own voice to complement and reinforce the
words you use.
Body language (kinesics). Kinesics is a field of research that examines communica- body language (kinesics)
tion through hotly movements, based on the assumption that all humans-consciously or non verbal communication
conveyed by gestures, e'j(! contact,
unconsciously- act and react 1.0 situations both verhally and non-verbally. The meaning posture, and facial expressions.
o r these sibrnals and their positive and negative value can shirt depending on the receiver's
culture, pe rsonality, and experience.
1. Gestures. Vari ous hand and arm movements and specific body positions ei..11ress
special meanings- o rten culturally determined ones--that may both complement
and contradict other forms of communication. Psychologists Paul Ekman and Wallace
Friesen suggest that gestures can he categorized into five types:
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Communicating in Organizations
INTERNAL AND EXTERNAL COMMUNICATION
To stay in business and ht: successful, today's companies nnust communicate with two main
audiences: the organizations internal audience-employees and owners- and its external
audience- customers, government official~, suppliers, and tbe general public. Internal Internal communication
communication stays within an organization and involves the back-and-forth sharing communication through the
channelsof an organization.
o r ideas and inrormation among superiors, co-workers, and subordinates. Although the
speed, instantaneousness, interactivity, and relative informality of e-mail messaging make
it the most popular and logical choice for use within a company, internal communica-
tions sysr.ems are al~o supported by other pathways such as memos, department reports,
in-house newslette rs o r magazines, face-to-face conversations, group meetings, opinion
surveys, speeches, and telephone conversations. Functioning together, they provide the
means for organizations to detect and solve problems, coordinate activities, foster deci
sion-making and policy-setting, introduce and explain procedures, and persuade employ-
ees and managers to accept change.
Through external communication, organizations establish themselves in the market external communication
place, foster good public and media relations, and work to keep their operations func- communication with audiences
who are part of an external
tional, efficient, and productive. Some of the functions of external communkation are environment.
to influence consumer decisions through advertising and promotion , process orders and
collect payment, an..~wer customer service inquiries and handle complain ts, respond to
government. agencies, and carry out purchase l.ransactioms. Though communkation with
custome1s and outside stakeholders can take a variety of fo rms, such as newsletters,
e-mail, social media blogs and messages, press releases, financial and corporate respon
sibility reports, and information about products and services posted to company web-
sites, a good deal of this communication still consists of letters and direct mailings on
company letterhead. Wh ether an externally directed message is written or spoken, it
carries its company's reputation and corporate values witl1 it. Today's husinesses recognize
the importance of using communication with outside stakeholders as an opportunity to
huil d prestige and a favourable puhlic image hy fostering goodwill and establishing solid
business relationships. While the general functions of business communication are to (a)
inform, (b) persuade, and (c) promote goodwill and create a favourable impression, it is
the third function that assumes increasing importance in external communication.
formal communication
channels official Internal THE FLOW OF INFORMATION
communication pathways that
facilitate the ftow of Information Among workers within an organization, infom1ati.on flows through formal communica-
through an organization's hierarchy. tion channels in three direct.ions ; upward, downward, and horizontally.
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Upward communication flow. Communication that takes this route, from subordin - upward communication flow
ates to superiors, can he enormously beneficial to organizations that t.ake it seriously the movement or Information rrom
enough to foster a cHmate of openness and trust in which opinions and ideas can be subordinates to supmlors.
voiced freely. Whether in the form of solicited feedback or unsolicited suggestions, th is
kind of co mmunication can help insulated upper rnai.1agement to stay in touch with
workplace reaHt.ies and give suhordinates a valuable opportunity to provide input. While
subordinates may feel they are part of a company team, they may also And that differences
in status make it more difficult to communicate.
Downward communication flow. Directives are sent downward [wm top decision - downward communication
makers via the chain of command to subordinates. This rot1te is used to clarify corpo rate flow the movement of Information
from superiors to subordinates.
strategies, explain policies, outline job plans, and give perfom1ance feedback. Sometimes
the downward flow st.rateb'Y takes on the added purpose of instilling loyalty and im proving
the morale of employees. Downward communication is serial, travelling from person to
person through various levels of an organization. As with most fom1s of serial communi-
cation , the longer the chain , the great.er the chance the message will undergo distortion ,
develop flaws, or change meanjng in trans!1Ussion through a simplification, reordering,
or rephrasing of its details. Unless messaging is properly monitored, this reinterpretation
and resulting distortion may occur several times, as the message passes through the proper
fom1al channels, from the CEO to managers and from managers to employees.
Horizontal communication flow. Also called late ral communication, ho rizontal flow horizontal communication flow
involves people at the same organizational level. Conducted by e-mail, by telephone, or the movement of Information that
enables lndlvlduals at the same
through personal contact, it h.as a variety of functions: Lo share information, solve prob- organlzatlona I level to share Ideas
lems, and coordinate and harmonize activities so each department knows what the other and exchange Information.
is doing in order to avoid duplication of initiatives. Companies with "flattened" hierarch-
ies, ln which t.here are rewer levels of man.agement, need to make the most productive use
of horizont.al communication.
Ethical Communication
ETHICS AND LEGAL RESPONSIBILITIES
OF BU SINESS COMMUNICATION
When you communicate on the job, you not only represent your organization, but you
also assume responsibility for its actions. Every document (letter, e-mail, or report) you
write is in reality a legal contract acceptable as evidence in a court of law. Signing a letter
means you agree to its cont.ent. It makes yom promises and agreements legally binding
and makes retractions next to impossible to carry out without proof of altered circum-
stances. For the good of your company, its image, and the bottom line, communicating
legally and ethically L~ oft.he highest importance.
Business ethics stipulate that senior executives as well as employees at every organ- business ethics the socially
izational level "do the right thing" in regard to bot.h the relationships \vith stakeholders accepted moral prtnclplcs and rules
of buslnass conduct
(employees, customers, invest.ors, and the public) and the administration of products and
services. It involves an awareness of how the choices you make affect and influence others,
for better or for worse. Corporate codes of ethics--upholcling equal commitment to values
such as honesty, intebrrity, fairness, social responsibility, accountabllity. and respect- sensi-
tize managers and staff ali ke to how they should behave. The grmving emphasis on busi-
ness ethics is more than just a trend or bandwagon effect. In 2002, roughly 80 per cent of
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public- and privat.e-sector firms that responded to a KPMG survey had instituted a code or
policy or had adopt.ed initiatives to deal wit.h matters such as confl ict of in terest, external
and customer relations, the handling of company assets, relationships with competitors, and
employee workplace issues.
Having moral and interpersonal ground rules in place in the fonn o f polki.es, train-
ing programs, and ot.her initiatives helps companies weather crises and controversies by
allowing them to distinguish rig.ht from wrong in t.imes of fundamental change. A com-
pany's ethical p ractices speak for its social responsibility and integrity- an in valuable
asset that makes perrect sense in the corruption-weary, post-Enron, dot-com age. Ethical
business conduct and comm unication creat.e a marketplace advan tage, en hance employee
performance, promote a strong public image, prevent legal challenges, save thousands o r
dollars in legal fees, and provide incent.ive for leniency in legal proceedi ngs.
Use a layout that doesn't hide information. Style elements such as List~, hullets, and
spacing should he used lo spot.light important info rmation, not hide it.
Know what you can and cannot d isclose to certain parties according to c.orporate
disclosure practices, privacy law, and confidentiality agreements. Careless puh-
Lication or misuse o f your company's intellectual property and confidential informa-
tion, even in the form of an offhand remark, can be detrimental to your organization
and might result in charges of wrongdoing. Not advising investors of major corporate
events that affect such things as share prices can, on the other hand , expose compan-
ies to lawsuits und er new Legislation.
Be especially careful communicating in cybers pace. Cyberspace is an ethical mine
field. Rememher that e-mail and text messages are easily forwarded. Once they are
sen t, you have virt.ually no control over where they end up. Many companies now
have rebrulations in place regarding the type of information their employees can trans-
mi.t via e-mail. Others insist on archiving e-mail messages for up to two years. A
general rule is to not transmit by electronic means anything you would not want your
employer, colleab'l.tes, o r friends to see or to find in the newspaper.
Don't claim authorship of documents yon have not written. Disclose how you
ohtained your information and used it in making your arguments. The consequences
of plagiarism- not giving due credit for harrowed words or ideas--are serious.
Always acknowledge your sources by using qi10tation marks, notes, or citations.
Cross-Cultural Communication
COMMUNICATING IN A GLOBAL ECONOMY
The pace of business has increased rapidly in recent decades. Fast travel, the Internet,
technological advancement, and interna1fonal media have made it not just possible bm also
necessary for us to communicate and do husiness glohally. Through the growth of economic
globalization, market borders and boundaries are now less significant than they once were.
Canadian companies, in their quest for success, may become parn1ers in a global economy
and exp;,md through acquisitions, alliances, and mergers. They may look beyond home
to an inte rnational marketplace, relying on the import and export of goods and services
and conducting business with suppliers, t't1stomers, and distributors around the world. ln
today's business environment, Canadians may work for homegrmvn multinational corpora
tions, such as McCain Foods, or for Canad ian hram:h planL~ of multinational organizations
headquartered in other countries; they may also work abroad or through inte rnationally
distributed virtual work teams.
Functioning in isolation is no longer an option. Businesses must interact with the rest
of the world for survival. The need for interconnectivity demands that employees learn
to comm unicate effectively, in spite of the obstacles presented by differences in culture
and language. To alleviate the latter, Business English has become the vernat't1lar of th L~
new global economy. BELF (Business English as a Lingua Franca) is a variety of EnglL~h for
specific task-related purposes, learned as a second or eve'.11 th ird language world wide. lt is
simple, clear, and fTee of idioms but anchored in a serviceable business vocabulary.
benefits. Because culture has the power to in nuence behaviour, it also has the potential
to create clashes and rnisundersta11dings in the workplace. Leaming to resolve difforences
and close cultural gaps is therefore now essential. Successful businesses are adept at cap-
italizing on the strengths of a cl iverse multinational workforce and reducing misunder-
standing in order to benefit consumers, promote hamrnny, forge high-perfom1ance work
teams, and gain a competitive edge.
eiqilidt verhal and written mes.~ages, sheds light on cultural differences according to the
beliefs, practices, and comnrnnication styles of each particular group. Developed by Edward
T. Hall, this system, with its general categorizations of complex cultures, is not meant to-
nor should it ever he misapplied in order to-create or rein force stereotypes or to distort the
trnth about individuals, who may in fact act independently of their cultural group. lnstead,
it simply serves as a useful analytical tool in preparing for cross-cultu ral interactions and as
a means of making broad assessments of national styles of communication and negotiation.
As such, Hall\; model has special relevance to any dialogue and correspondence you con-
duct with international vendors, suppliers, and operators. 11
Cultures tend t.o differ in several import.ant respects:
O f these, Geen Hofstede ' 2 idenr.ified five key "dimensions" of culture- or the ways in
which cultures differ from one another.
1. Power Dist..'lnce, or the degree to which less powerful members of a group expect
and accept that power is dis trihuted unequally. For example, an employee new l.o
Canada might be so used to the top-down chain of command decision-making system
in her country of origin that he or she may he uncomfortable in taking the initiative
whrn asked to do so, even vie\ving th L~ as insubordination.
2. Uncertainty Avoidan ce, or a soc:iety\; tolerance fo r amhiguity and comfort level with
situations that are new, unstructured, or unknown. Differences in r.he need for rules,
for example, may lead to a dispute or mlsunderstanding between a customer and the
business owner who, in h L~ or her hirth country, sealed an agreement with a hand-
shake rather than a written contract.
3. Individualism vs. Collectivism, o r the degree to which people are integrated into
groups. For example, a new employee recently arrived from Iraq tells his employer
that he must he absent from work for three hours so that he can escort several female
members of his extended family from the airport.
4. Masculinity vs. Femininity, related to the dL~trihution of emotional roles and values
between genders. For example, a female employee trying to maintain a life- wo rk
hala11ce might ask to leave work early to attend he r daughter's ballet recital but be
refused by her male supervisor, who is intent on completing the department\; project
aherud of sched ule.
5. Short-Term vs. Long-Term Orientation, or the degree to which societies are future-
focused (long-term orientation) or anchored in the past or present (short-term orien-
tation). For example, a Japanese manufacturer, part of a shorl-tem1 oriented c."ulture
where social spending is significant and customary, may insist that a Canadian certifi-
cation inspector accept. lavish gifts.
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COMMUNICATING INTERCULTURALLY
Communicating interculturally is something you may do in many settings:
In these contexts, written, spoken, visual, and non -verhal communication can require
you to rethink the ingrained habits that govern how you express yourself. It demands
the exercise of what is known as cultural intelligence, , 3 an individuals capability to func-
t.ion and manage effectively in culturally diverse settings. Adapting successfully to diverse
audiences and situations also requires knowledge, motivation, enhanced awareness, and
changes in behaviour. Showing respect for your readers and listeners and learning what-
ever you can about their cultural expectations are the fiTst steps in achieving clarity and
mutual understanding in your communication .
preferences of your audience. Use appropriate diacritical marks (the symhols added
to letters t.o indicate their pro nunciation), especially for proper names (Dube,
Muller, Cura~ao) .
2. Address readers using their professional titles, not their first names. Direct
address is usually too informal ror international correspondence, especia.lly in an
initial contact.
3. Use only those terms that c~m be found in English-umguage dictionaries. Words
classed as slang or colloqt1ialisms are t1sually specific to one context o r country
and don't necessarily translate well to others. Readers whose first language is not
English- and even English speakers in another country- may not know what you
mean by suits (referring to husiness executives) or the 411 (referring to information).
Similarly, it is hest to avo id unnecessary jargon, idiom.~ (blut: moon, fmits of your
labours), unusual figures of speech, abbreviations, and sports references (it's a slam
dunk , a ballpark fi&'llre). If possihle, try to avoid words with double meanings.
4. Keep sentences as direct and simple as possible. Communicate using complete but
not complex sentences, arranging your thoughts in short, coherent paragraphs. Add
relative pronouns (that, which) ror clarity and check ror correct pronoun reference
(readers should be ah le to jt1dge what this or that refers t.o). Avoid contractions.
5. Use correct grammar. Never insult ym1r reade rs intelligence hy writing in second-
rate or hahyish English . An overly simplified style can offend readers. Instead use
language that is literal and specific.
6. Include politeness strategies where they are required. Show courtesy hy thanking
the reader when it makes sense to do so and by using the words please and thank you
where requi red. An indirect approach, which delays a direct request, gives you the
chance to estahlish goodwi ll and build a business relationship.
7. Avoid humour, irony, and sarcasm. These features rarely translate well to other con
texts and can be easily misunderstood.
8. Use international measurement standards. Using these standards, such as the met-
ric system, ensures t.hat the majo rity o r your audience will understand the re rerence.
name, age, ID numbers such as a Social Insurance Number (SIN), income, ethnic origin
hank account number, credit records, loan records, transaction histories, tax returns
medical records, employee personnel fi les, and even voiceprints and fingerprints"
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There a re several ways to bridge the gap between different cultures, whether you are
writing for an international audience or just helping to make diversity work for everyone in
your workplace. Gaining awareness, building knowledge, and adjusting your behaviour are
fundamental in meeting this challenge.
D Show respect. Acknowledge respect for each other's languages, values, and behaviou rs.
Be yourself without having to be defensive in justifying your culture. Realize that
differences do not inevitably lead to conflict. View them .s imply as differences, not as a
matter of right or wrong.
D Gain knowledge and develop awareness. Become aware of your own thinking and
assumptions. Educate yourself and seek information about other cultures as a means
to overcome prejudice and stereotypes and take advantage of the diversity-training
program your company may offer. Learn about the legal, economic, and marriage
systems of other cultu res as well as the rules of grammar and non-verbal behaviours
that apply. Be conscious of values and religious beliefs of other cultures. Recognize the
richness available to you through other cultures and the synergy of different viewpoints.
D Avoid negative judgments. Do not express damaging assumptions or views based
on your own cultural heritage. Suspend judgment until enough information becomes
available about the other person in a cross-cultural interaction. Consider the perspectives
of other cultures, be open to developing a sympathetic understanding while upholding
your own ethical values, and attempt to understand how your own cultural conditioning
or ethnocentrism has the potential to influence your behaviour. Ask yourself if your
perceptions and judgments are correct. Curb any impulse to let negative opinions or
defensive attitudes dictate your conduct and communication. Aim for objectivity.
D Cultivate a work environment that values diversity. Make sure the diverse voices,
cultures, and expertise in your workplace are heard and capitalized on. Values of tolerance
and sensitivity, if given enough emphasis, can allow your organization to foster harmony
among employees and build high-performance international and multicultural teams.
D Ask quest.ions. Foster openness in your communications and encourage feedback and
constructive dialogue. Exercise sensitivity in the way you ask others about themselves.
When communicating globally, consult with someone from your intended audience's
culture to determine acceptable usage and style elements.
D Prepare to be flexible. Adjust your tone, volume, rate of speaking, and use of pauses
and silences in verbal exchanges and alter your non-verbal behaviours and facial
expressions to suit the needs of the situation when communicating face-to-face. Make
allowances for simpler, idiom-free vocabulary choices an.d shorter sentences when the
interaction requires it.
D Sllllk common ground. Where there is potential for cult,ural conflict, look to what you
share by emphasizing compromise and solutions. Being adept at cultural understanding
does not mean that you have to adopt the entire cultural style of others but that you are
open to meeting others halfway and making some necessary adjustments.
D Tolerate ambiguity and uncertainty. Communicating with someone from another
culture can create uncertainty and sometimes make you uncomfortable. Accept that
you may face difficulties in communicating and overcome uncertainty by facing it rather
than avoiding it.
D Listen to others, not to the voice of your ethnocentrism. Pay attention to the cross-
cultural situation and rely on feedback from multiple cues to monitor the level of an
individual's understanding.
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Cl Bridge cultural gaps. Demonstrate your culture's positive characteristics and speak
positively for the strengths of other cultures. Rather than simply memorizing facts about
other cultures, live the values of greatest importance to you and those you share w ith
others through consideration and sensitivity. Think of your communication as a dialogue
between equals.
Cl Encourage your employer to commit to a harassment- and discrimination-free
workplace. If such a commitment has not been made, a human rights policy and set
of procedures can be instituted to resolve problems related to diversity issues quickly
and fairly.
With technology now affecting almost all aspects of husiness activity and posing
unwarranted intrusions and techno-threats, concerns ahout privac.y- and the hest way
to protect personal or privileged information- have never been great.er. Despite the hest
efforts o r most companies to safeguard the personal information or customers and. employ-
ees, privacy hreaches are hecoming more common. Here are just a few cases:
Jn 2004, top officials at CIBC went into damage control after the confidential infom1a-
tion of hundreds of Canadian customers was mistakenly faxed to a junkyard in West
Virginia. The error resulted in a review of the company's communication strategy
Three years lat.er, the company again disclosed a security breach, t.h L~ time involving
the loss of 4 70,000 customers' account information, the result of a computeT Ale that
went mL.~sing in transit hetween company offices.
In 2007, discount clothing retailer l:JX Company, the parent company of Winners and
HomeSense, revealed that up to two million Canadian credit cards had possihly heen
accessed hy computer hackeTs.
The Ontario Court of Appeal case of Jrmes v. T~ige hegan with a love affair and ended
in 2012 with a landmark decision that created a new remedy for privac.'Y invasion.
The defendant, Winnie Tsige, was in a common-law relationship with the ex-husband
of the plaintiff, Sandra Jones. The two women had never met, hut hoth worked for
the Bank of Montreal (BMO). Tsige was involved in a financial dL~put.e with her part-
ner and was determined to And out if he was making support payments to Jones.
She used her office computer to access Jones's personal accounts 174 times over a
four-year period. She admitted to her actions when confronted hy BMO and received
a one-week un paid suspension. Jones made a claim for invasion of privacy and dam-
ages, hut the motions judge held that no right to privacy existed under the Canadian
Charter of Rights and Freedoms. This decision was overturned when the courts rec
O!,'llized the tort of lntrusion upon seclusion. This refinement to privacy law involves
three elements: intentional or reckless conduct, intrusion on privacy, and the percep-
tion by a reasonahle person that this action would cause distress or humiliation.
ln late 2012, the popular photo-sharing website lnstagram was rorced to rescin.d contro-
versial changes in its 01iginal tenns of use after thousands of users, including National
Geographic, protested the sites apparent right to sell photos and threatened to stop using
the service. lnstagram had faced controversy before over set.tings governing user p1ivac.7,
hut this time the polic.')'S wording would have allowed advertisers to show user photos
without compen.~ation . CEO Kevin Systrom issued this apology: "lt hec:ame dear that we
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fai.lecl to fulfill what I consider one of our most important responsibilities--to communi-
cate our intention..<; clearly. I am son y for that, and I am focused on making it right."'6
In January 2013, news broke of a privacy breach involving the disappearance of a
Human Resources and Skills Development Canadru (HRSDC) hard drive containing
personal information about people who had applied for student loans between 2002
and 2006. Names, dates of birth, loan balances, and SINs of nearly 600,000 people,
along with personal contact information fo r 250 of the department's employees, went
missing. A multi-million-dollar class-act.ion suit was launched.' 1
To combat problems of this kind , P!PEDA and the Privacy Act set down rules for the
management of personal infom1at.ion . Under the law, personal infom1ation should be col-
lected, used, and disclosed only for the legitimate purposes for which it is intended and
with an individual's knowledge (and sometimes consent). P!PEDA's privac.y principles fom1
the cornerstone of most corporate privacy agreements and state that organizations must
meet ten criteria:
provide accountability
identify their reason for collecti ng personal information
gain consent
collect only necessary info rmation
use the information for the intended purpose only
maintain accuracy of the information
provide safeguards
inform individuals of what the information will be used for
give individuals access to their own information
develop straightforward procedures for complaints
Because governments and businesses collect such a wide array of information, compli-
ance with P!PEDA has implications for communications practices at every level. Adopting
new protocols is a step in the right direction , and problems- such as the one C!BC experi-
enced in 2004-can he minimized or avoided altogether with a few simple safeguards:
faxing personal information only when it must he transmitted immediately
taking steps to prevent unauthorized individuals from seeing a document that con-
1.ains personal information
checking the recipient's fax number and ve rifying it in the machine's display \vind ow
hefOTe you send the document
identifying the sender and receiver on the fax cover sheet and including a warning or
disclaimer that the document is int.ended for the rechpient only
calli11g the recipient to verify succes.<;ful transmjssion. of the document
There are also several s teps you can follow, as an employee, to help ensure your
organization meets privacy standards:
Learn about the federal privacy laws and provincial privacy legislation that apply to
you and your organization.
Identify what constitutes "personal information" in your workplace-what can he
legitimately collected, used, and disclosed by fair and lawful means. Many organ-
ization..<;, such as TD Financial Group. have their own privacy agreements (see www
.td .com/privacy/agreement.jsp).
Obtain written, verbal, electronic, or (in some circumstances) implied consent from
customers for the collection, use, and disclosure of a11y of their personal info rmation.
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Be accountable for the personal infomiation you collect, use, and disclose and he
proactive in protecting it with security safeguards to prevent unwarranted intrusion ,
release, or misuse.
Giving up some privacy is something you can expect on the joh hecause the premises
and equipment you use belong to yom employei-, the company's human resomces depart
ment needs your personal in formation to manage your pay and heneBts, and your em ployer
needs to ensure I.hat work is bei ng done properly. Infringements on employee pri vacy,
however, are becoming much more common. Video surveillance, on-the-job drug testing,
web-browsing records, and keystroke monitori ng are part of an employer's need to know,
hut this need must he balanced with respect for employees' 1igbts to privac.1.'R Fair. employ
ers have clear policies in place that tell their employees exactly what personal infom1ation
can he collected and how it will he used. Employees should he well advised of weh, e-mail,
and social media policies, random surveillance, and any monitoring of their Internet use.
1. Brainstorming Elements of Effective Communication. Contin ue the class. How do the dynamics of the
As a class or in small groups, discuss the skills and j,'foup change according to the seating a rrangement?
characteristics essential to effective husiness com- S. Experimenting with Personal Space. For this activ-
munication and, from your discussion, devise a list of ity, first work \vitb a partner and then take part in
words that accurately describe it. Rate each skill on a a small group session . Detem1ine the dividing line
scale of 1 to 10, \vith 10 heing most important, and between comfortahle and uncomfortable distance by
provide examples to support each characteristic. saying "contim1e" or "stop" as your partner or group
2. Analyzing Barriers to Communication. Working in members move toward you , starting from a distance
large groups, play a variation of Broken Telephone. of three met.res. Vary the experiment hy pretending
Nominate a group leader t.o compose a message of that your partner and group members a re (a) friends
no more than 12 words. The group leader \vill then and family memhers and (b) co-workers. Keep a log
whisper this message to the person seated t.o h L~ or of your reactions, according to what is an allowable
her immediate left or right, who \vill in turn pass it distance hetween you and your group members. At
on to his or her neighhour, and so on. Anyone who what point did you hegin to feel uncmnfortahle?
is uncomfortahle \vit.h the process may opt out at any 6. Taking Stock of Non-Verbal Communication. Working
time. Once the message has made its way through the in a small group, discuss examples of non-verhal
entire group, ask the last person t.o say the message communication (paralan guage, gestures, facial
aloud. Repeat the process, only th L~ time ci rculate a expressions) that typically eiqmss each of the follow-
longer or shorter message or write the message on a ing emotions, sentimenl~. or actions:
scrap of paper and ask each memher of the group to happiness or celebration love or flirtation
copy it and pass it on. Once again, ask the last person anger sympathy
to read the final copied message aloud. what hap- sadness praise
pens t.o each message in the course of its transmis- shame hello or goodbye
sion? Does the message transmit more successfully in hailing a cah clishdief
oral or written fom1? Discuss what you have learned showing respect "good luck"
ahout the nature of serial communication. "come here" agreement
3. Observing and Analyzing Non-Verbal Cues. Record a "over theren clisagret"1nent
five-inimite conversation between you and a partner. "this one" like
During video playback, note the use of non-verbal cues friendship or warmth dislike
that repeat., contradict, substitute for, complement, or Identify at least one example in each case and com
accen t each partner's spoken message. Note any dis- pile a list. To what extent do group members agree on
crepancies between your verhal and non-verhal com- the meaning of each gesture or expression? ls there a
munication. Variation: Watch a .5- 10 minute speech or universal language of gestures, or is t.he meaning of a
busi111ess presentation on YouTube or Google Videos. gesture culturally determined?
Note the speakers use of non-verhal cues and discuss 7. Comparing the Meaning of Gestures. In a small
how they contradict or enrich his or her message. group, have each person work on his or her own to
4. Experimenting with Proxemics. In a classroom with assign a meaning to each of the following gestures.
moveable furniture, work in a small group a nd shaki ng one's head (side-to-side)
rearrange the furn iture in the following positions: nodding ones head (up and down)
in a circle and half-circle \vinJdng
in standard classroom style, with all chai rs facing waving
one direct.ion looking down or averting one's eyes (gaze aversion)
in a random fom1ation raising ones thumh
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14. Considering Privacy. ln small groups, review each does not include her name. Realizing I.hat you have
of the following scenarios and discuss whether they only 45 mimll.es left for lunch, you rush out-
constitute hreaches o f privacy according to the ten without logging off your computer- and leave files
principles set out in PIPEDA (see p. J5). and loose documents on your desk.
You work at the reception desk in a local han k You are a ban k teller who processes a transact.i.on
branch. A customer rushes in and says that her for a casual lahourer-tradesperson who does not
boyfriend has lost his last account statement and have an accoun t at your han k but who frequently
desperately needs to review it. She explains that comes in to cash cheques from his clients. As you
he is attending a two-day conference out of town finish the transaction and count out his cash pay-
and the ban k will he dosed on Sunday, when he ment, he asks if he may open an account. You dir-
returns. You ask her for he r boyfriend's name and ect him to a financial service rep resentative, who
access and print I.he monthly statement for her. a~ks for his SIN. He returns to your service area a
You are a financial representative ahout to go on few minutes late r, angrily questioning the need to
your lunch break. Before leaving, you phone a show his SIN and taking exception to the financial
client to set up her pay for direct deposit. You are service representatives insistence that this informa-
not ahle to reach her directly hut leave a detailed tion is required by law. Hint: Refer to the Office of
voice-mail message that includes the account infor- the Privat')' Commissioner of Canada's fact sheet at
mation , despite the fact that her out.going message www.priv.gc.caffs. fi/02_05_d_02_e.cfrn.
1. Establishing Your Goals in Business Communication. social networking through hlogs, Facehook, and
Write an introductory memo to your instruct.or in micro-biogs such as Twitter (presmting yourself
wh i.ch you explain your reasons for taking the course, to others)
the outcomes you hope to achieve, yom strengths Jn a few paragraphs or as a brief e- mail to your
and weaknesses as a writer, the role communication instructor, outline your communication preferences
will play in your chosen profession, and the type of and descrihe how your commurticat.ion. style, behav-
writing you currently do or expect to do on the joh. iour, and self-presen tation change according to the
2. Identifying Your Communication Channels and tech nology or channel you use.
Choices: Always On. Linguistics professo r Naomi S. 3. Analyzing Your On-the-Job Communication. If
Daron claims that online and mohile tech nologies you currently have a job or have recently heen
such as instant messaging, ce ll phones, Facehook, employed, analyze your on-the-joh communication
biogs, and wikis are transforming how we com- hy answering the following qi1estions:
municate, creating an environment in which we are a) What channel(s) do you principally use to com-
"always on" one technology or another.' 0 These tech municate on the joh?
nologies offer users the power to control who they b) How importan t is communication to the duties
communicate with- with the option of hlocking you must perform?
incoming !Ms, creating alter egos in virtual worl ds, c) Jn what direct.ion does your com1m.mication pri-
and screening cellphone calls. Analyze the percent marily now- upward, downward. or horizon-
age of your day you devote to communications and tally? With whom do you primarily communicate
estimate the amoun t of time you perform each of internally and externally?
the following: d) What types of messages/dol'tlments do you typ
face- to-face and telephone conversations, e-mail, ically create or generate? What types of messages/
and IM (communicating with individuals) documen ts do you receive?
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e) What barriers to communication exist on the job? d) Goran Garabedian, while being i.nt.erviewed for a
f) How does your organization facilitate communi- job, crosses his arm.~ over his torso and. looks at
cation in the workplace? the floor.
g) How formal or informal is it necessary to he when 7. Identifying Forms of Internal and External
comlilltuticating on the job? Communication. Distinguish between the following
h) How easy is it to communicate on the job? types of comm un ication according to whether t.he
i) L~ t.he grapevine in your organization accurate? message rernai ns inside the organization or goes out-
When you have answered these questions, draw a side the organization:
diagram lru1l illustrates the flow of communication in a) a response to a request for proposals (RFP) that
your workplace. tenders a hid on a plumbing contract. for a muni-
4. Assessing Communication NHds for Employment. cipal housing project
Rder lo the classified or careers section of any daily b) a group e-mail to staff members who have sib'1'led
newspaper or to an employm ent website. Review up for a series of telecommuting trai ning sessions
several advertisements and note the communica- c) an announcement of changes to the company
tion skil l~ that are required for each position. Write a pension plan
memo or e-mail to your instructor summarizing the d) a press release announcing the hiring of a corpor-
skills em players want most. Variation: Create a word ate legal representative
table (or matrix) in which you provide examples a) an annual report for shareholders
from your own work history and experience that cor- f) an adjustment lette r settling a claim aga inst your
respond to the skills employers seek. company
S. Assessing Barriers to Communication. Recall a recent g) a formal report on the outsomcing o f human
evelll or situation that made you very angry (e.g., resources functions
a parking ticket, a missed transit connection, an 8. Assessing the Flow of Communication. ln each of the
incidt:nt of road rage, an unfair grade, o r a ruling or following situations, conside r whether cmmnunica-
school/government policy \vith which you strongly tion is channelled through an upward , downward, or
disagreed). Write two messages, each seeking restitu- horizontal flow:
tion or set.1.lement of the problem. ln the first mes- a) an e-mail message to a co-worker in your depart-
sage, vent your grievance and sense of frustration ment asking for clarification of the lat.est sales
according to what you felt in the heat of the moment. figures
Allow at least several hours to elapse-enough time b) a recommendation report to the president of your
for you to gai n perspective on the situation- before company suggesting t.he development of a staff
you write your second message. Compare the messa- incentive or awards program
ges you have wri tten on the basis o [ their tone, con- c) instructions to new hires in your department on
tent, and! coherence. DL~cuss how emotional harriers the operation of the photocopier
affect the communication process. d) discussions with co-workers over revisions to a
6. Analyzing Non-Verbal Cues. Although it is sometimes report written collaboratively
diffi cult to interpret gestu res, body language, and e) a policy state ment outlining the firms position on
other non-verbal signals, consider what each of the client privacy L~sues
following scenarios communicates: Discuss the special demands of each message.
a) Olivia Visconti, human resources direct.or, places 9. Recognizing Cultural Differences. Large multinational
visitors' chairs across the room fTOm her desk and corporati ons, such as McDonald's, create websites
an artges a coffee table in front of the chairs. for every country or region in which they- operate.
b) Paul O'Donnell averts his eyes when bis team Visit the following sit.es and note the similarities and
leader asks him if he has fi nis hed his part of differences in language, content, and desi!,'11. Write
the report. a memo, accompanied by URLs or a printout of the
c) Bev Saunders places her bands on her hips as she applicable sites, that summarizes and analyzes those
conducts a training session. similari ties and differences.
1 I GETTI NG THE MESSAGE ACRO SS
1. The Ethics of Job Blogging. Worlq1lace-relat.ed social term inated \vith cause. The arbitration panel upheld
media use, an employee's right to freedom of speech., the termination on the grounds of the hlog's destruc-
and an employer's right to protect its reputation and tive impact on work relationships.
earnfog ability are often at odds. The recent case a) What issues explored in the chapter does this
of Alberta v. Alberta Union of Provincial Employees case raise?
is one instance where social media use crossed the b) Do you agree with the decision in th is case? What
line from unethical to illegal. In 2008, a bereaved ethical breaches was the employee guilty of? At
Alberta governmen t employee attended therapy pro- what point did she cross t.he line?
vided through her employee assistance program. HeT c) Is it ever acceptable to discuss work experien-
therapL~t advised her to deal with feelings of anger ces and colleagues via social media platforms?
and hopelessness by writing them down. Ove r the What are the limits to Free speech when express-
follo\ving months, she vented her emotions through ing personal opinions may damage professional
publicly accessible personal biogs, some of which relationships?
attacked management and ridiculed supervisors d) What could the employer do in terms of best
and co-workers. lt was clear from the postings that practices, regulatio11s, and policies t.o prevent sim-
the employee Lived in Edmonton and worked for a ilar occurrences? In terms of ethical practice in the
department of the provincial government. Although workplace, what could be considered reasonable
she used alia~es to refer to her co-workers, they could constraints and levels of ethical achievement?
easily identify themselves and were certain they 11) What are the lessons to be learned rrnm this ca~e?
could never work with her again. The employee was
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2. Ethical Dilemmas in Fundraising. As an assistant a design firm specializing in certified high-end kitch
advancement officer, your job 1s to help your univer- ens and baths, regarding a three-tower, 1,500-unil
sity wtth iL~ capital fundraising campaibrns and its leg- project. This deal would mark the first time that
acy, bequest, and planned-giving mllialives. One of Evolution would do business in a foreign market.
your prospects is George Salemo, aged AA. Salerno is Four months ago, a Shuangxi delegation indud
an alumnus and pensioner with a modest income and ingjohn Yi, chier architect, visited Halifax. Yi 1ome<l
lim ited savings, yet he is deLemiined to endow a large Evolution's s howroo m a nd manufacturi n g plant,
scholarship in memory of c:lassma1es who were killed had a Ave-hour consultation with designers, viewed
in World War ll. This commitment, as he envL'iions it, developments for which Evolution had received pres-
would require him to make a monetary gift in excess tigious international awards, and met \vith manage
of $500,000 during his lifetime, which would likely ment regarding the project's needs and specificauons.
leave him and his 73-year-old wife m financial dis- He was also honoured at two formal dinners, hut not
tress. Since Salemo first met with you a month ago all Evoluuon executives could attend due to travel
to discuss his options as a major gift donor, he has conflicts or illness. Yi seemed impressed with the
telephoned you every day to re-affirm his intention to company hut disappointed that the dinners were not
endow the scholarship. Respecting his generosity of better atLen<l ed.
spiriL, you gen Lly hut repeatedly suggel>l that a planned Three monlhs or extensive online comm un i
t rlbute gift-arranged in his li fetime hut not availahle catio n followed , durin g which Evolution sought
10 the university until after his death-would he a bet- the advice o r the Canadian Chamber of Commerce
ter opLion, as would briving al a lower level, hut he and the Canadian trade commissioner in Shanghai.
won't hear of it. He wants to see big results right away, Then Jack Fullerton, Evolution's vice-president,
to honour and commemorate his fnends. and Iona Campbell, its chief designer, were tnVltt:d
When you e-mail the vacationing chief advance to Shanghai to negotiate the final details and sign a
ment officer about Salerno's intentions, he is over- nouce of intent. Both felt that the negotiations had
joyed. The rate of scholarship endowment and major already taken a great deal of time and effort and were
giving has dropped dramatically during 1he economic eager to get started. When they arrived, they were
downtu rn and your institution has failed 10 meet tar- greeted hy Shuangxi CEO Viet.or Zhu, chauffeured Lo
gets ror five successive years. Your unit has lost two their luxury hotel, en1ertained lavishly at a banquet,
memhers to downsizing as a result. S1ill, you're not and for the first two days toured ci ty landmarks with
su re he app reciates the complexiLies or Lhe situaLion. five Shuangxi representatives. On the third day, they
Today, you receive a panicked phone call from believed that negotiations would begin in earnest,
Mr~ . Salerno, who tells you that her husband has hut the sight seeing continued. Through his inter-
put their house up for sale without her knowledge. preter, Fullerton asked, "Look, weren't we supposed
Lately, she said, he has been behaving oddly and has to get down to business today?" Yi and his colleagues
been uncharacteristically forgetful. Before today, he said nothing hut appeared upset.
had never mentioned the scholarship lo her. She When talks began the next day, a large group
thinks that he may he showing signs of dementia. As from Shuangx.i au.ended, including Zhu. Through 1he
a rundraiser, you must abide by an eslahlished eth- interpreler, he complimented Evolution on its com-
ical co<le, but you al~o face pressures 10 meet defined pact, forwar<.1-look ing desib>nS and commi Lm ent Lo
Fundraisi ng targets. sustai nability; however, as soon as each item on the
a) Whal are your options for acting ethically in this agenda was resolved, he seemed determined to return
situation? to earlier items. Fullerton was confused: "l laven't we
b) What communication failures contributed to this already addressed that issue?" ln all previous discus-
situation and how could they he addressed? sions, Z.hu had been happy with the quoted prices, but
3. lntercultural Communication Non-Startu. Shuangx:i he suddenly began to say, "Too expensive. We ask for
Development, a builder of luxury apartments in a 30 per cent discount." Fullerton and Campbell were
Shanghai, is negotiating with Halifax-based Evolution, outraged hut did their best to remain conciliatory. Zhu
1 I G ET TI NG THE MES S AGE ACROSS
then asked about Evolutions special patented hinge agreed on the price of some components or on a
and wanted t.o speak to the engineer who had designed final project schedule. Two weeks lat.er, they were
it, even though the part had heen fully explained in astonished to receive an e-mail from Zh u stating that
the opening present.at.ion. Concerned that th ings we-re Shuall.brxi would he supplied by a Scandinavian inn.
going hadly, the Evolution team called in an assist.ant a) What caused Evolution to lose the Shuangxi deal?
trade commissioner. However, Zhu was called away to b) Think ahout this scenario as you read "Doing
or.her husiness and Yi, who expressed his appreciation Business in China the Streetsmart Way" at www
for Evolution\; work and his faith in their continued . in te rn ati ona l. gc. ca/dsi.-icse/dl-cai/magazine/
co-operation, assumed his role. v06n01/l-2-eng.asp. What could both sides have
Fullerton and Campbell left Chi na with a signed done differently to build a mo re L1nderstanding
notice or intent, even though the two sides hadn't and successful relationship?
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l ONLINE ACTIVITIES
1. Best Practices and Winning Strat11gi11s of Leading wehsite and find infom1atio11. related to v.he company's
Communicators. In a small group, go to the COTY sustainability or corporate social n:sponsibili ty
Award wehsite, review the evaluation criteria, and reporting. What measures and practices contrihute to
select a name from the l L~t of past \vinners. lnfoml sustainable development in each case?
your instructor of your choice. Perform an o nline www.thegloheandmail.cmn/report-on-business/
search to find one or two articles in which the award - careers/top-employers/list-of-canaclas-top-100
willners approach to communication is reported or -employers-for-2013/article4598442npage all
disrnssed. From the article, identify t.he winner's most 4. Employability Skills Quiz. Take the quiz offe red on
import.ant strategies and prepare an informal two- or the Government of Canada's Service Ca nada website.
three-minute presentation in which you share those Answer each question hy rating yourself at one of
strategies with the class. At the end of everyones three levels: 1) I'm not as skilled as I'd like; 2) I'm
presentation , draft a list of the top ten strategies and skilled; 3) I'm very skilled. The quiz takes approxi-
practices that are shared by all COTY winners. mately five minutes to complete.
http://toronto.iahc.cmn/awarcl!coty/ http://jobsetc.gc.ca/toolbox/checklists/
2. Corporate Social Responsibility. Watch these corporate employahility.jsp?lang=e
CSR videos and make a list or the values each company S. Canada's Bast Diversity Employers. Report on Bu~iness
associates with its practices and the initiatives that holds an annual competition, sponsored by BMO
demonstrate them. How does each tell its CSR story? Financial Group, t.o identiry Canada's best diversity
Bomhardier employers. Individually or in a small group, choose
www.youtube.cmn/watch?v.,qlvKwzfvxkg&:list three companies from the list of 201J winners and
PlETczq09_ZCxsHeFw5vDaVAo3UKhxbb8m ind out why they won by clicking on the corres-
&:indexcl6 ponding links. Prepare a short presentation in which
Coca-Cola you summarize the measures employers h.ave begun
www.youtuhe.cmn/watcb?v ByHcNZ2c8Mo to adopt in order to address diversity and inclusion.
KPMG www.canadastoplOO.com/diversity/
www.youtuhe.com/watch?v=m-SW2S9j IJE 6 . Body Language Activities. These exercises are desib'l'led
3. Sustainability and Corporate Social Responsibility t.o help you tune in to the subtleties of body language.
Reporting. Individually or in a small group, select Along with warm-up exerdses, you will find activities
three companies from The Globe and Mail's 201.1 list of that involve mirroring the body language of others.
t.he top 100 employers. Visit each company's corporate http://truecenterpuhlishing.com/t<:p/hodylang.html
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7. Privacy and Your Workplace. Individually or as a 14. User Privacy on Social Networking Sites. Many users
group, watch the following video summanzmg pri rely on default seuings when it comes to their social
vacy principles as outlined in PIPEDA: networking practices and most do not pay close
www.youtuhe.com/watcb?v kwoN8e9sl[I attenLion to terms of use agreements or privacy poli-
Discuss how your knowledge of lhe lt: n prin- cies. How much privacy do these agreemen ts, poli-
ciples could affect your own praclices o n 1he joh. cies, and seLLings guarantee you? Review your privacy
8 . Active Listening Games and Exercises. Tes t Quest: setting and any agreements you have accepted. Note
Active listening is a weh page maintained hy your concerns. Do 1he privileges of using the site out
Northeastern Educational Television of Ohio. O n it, weigh those conce rns? What aspects of your privacy
you will find quick-reference listening tips as well as have you traded away in exchange for your right to
links to online listening games and exercises. social network?
http://westemreservepuhlicm edia.orwtestquest/ 15. Facebook as a Business Tool . Find a company that
listen.htm has a Facebook profile. How does this company
9. Listening Skills Quiz. Read Maile fosters article "Back use the site to promote tlS products and services or
to Basics Part 2" on how to improve your listening to pul forth i1s mission statement and inc rease i1s
skills, 1hen try the 25-question self-scoring quiz to market share?
find ouLIliow your listening skills measu re up. 16. Corporate Mission Statements. Analyze the follow
www. hasis.cmn/advantage/v1On4/markeli ng ing co rporate mission state ments from prnmlnent
_matters.html Canadian companies. What values are mos t com
10. The Business Culture in Other Countries. Select a coun- monly represented? What does the organization in
try from the menu on the Centre for lntercuhural each case promise to do for stakeholders (customers,
Leaming website. Note the political, economic, and cul- employees, owners, and society at large) m exchange
tural considerations for doing business in that country. for their loyalty and commitment?
www.intercultures.ca/cil-cai/ countryinsights Gildan Activewear Inc.
a p ercu~ pays-eng.asp www.gen uinegildan.com/en/company /
11 . PIPEDA. Wa1ch the video or read the prinl version of ouT>approach/
an overview of the PIPEDA as discussed hy Privacy Lockheed Marlin Canada
Commissione r Jennifer Stoddart. When you are www.locl<heedmartin.ca/ca/w ho-we-are/misslon
clone, write a two- or three-paragraph s ummary. -statement.hi.ml
www.prlvcom.gc.ca/speech/2 004/vs/index_e.asp lululemon
12. Privacy Quiz: How Well Do You Know Your Privacy www.lululemon.com/about/m anifesto
Rights? Try the interactive quiz, which covers issues RBC
such as e-mail privacy and the tracking of your trav- www.rhc.com/ahoutus/vision andvalues.html
els on the World Wide Web, on the following site. TELUS
Chck on an answer and receive an explanauon of the http://intouchmobility.com/m ission.htm
question-related issue. Tim Horton's
www.priv.gc.ca/youthjeunes /quiz/index_e.asp www.timhonons.com/ca/en/a bout/mediacompany
13. Company Ethics Codes. Read the ethics codes for 1he -facts.html
followi ng companies and look fo r similari1 ies among 17. Personal Mission Statements. Read the ins tructions
them. Summarize your findings on the Fundamental from "Creating Your Personal Mission Statement" and
srnndard s of most organizational ethics codes. create a stntemem that renects your values and goals.
Merck &:: Co. Inc. www.uoguelph.ca/cera/PDFs/ Creating%
www.merck.com/about/cond uct.html 20Personal%20Mission%20S tatements.pdf
Motorola
http://responsibility.m otorola.corn/index.php/
overview/husconduct/#ethic s
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
MOST PEOPLE know a good letter, report, or e-mail message when they read one, but
saying what makes It work or writing one them selves can be a different story. Getting the
words out and onto the page takes skill, planning, and some problem-solving ability. Any
message Is, after all, a structure of logical relationships. It demands serious thought as to
how words, sentences, and paragraphs are merged Into a comprehensible and focused
statement that achieves Its goals with style, clarity, and convincing argument and meets
the needs of readers, Including stakeholders and decision-makers. These days, written mes-
sages rarely go the route of word-processing pools, where they could be refined and cor-
rected. With computer-equipped workstations and mobile devices, business professionals
assume greater responsibility for their messaging, and a lot relies on how well the finished
products work In maintaining trust and credibility.
A recent Conference Board of Canada study reported that 30 per cent of employers
rated new workforce entrants with a four-year degree as deficient In written communica-
tion.' This lack of skill can affect both an employee's and organization's success. For Elizabeth
Short, a major events and show manager for some of the world's best-known brands,
"one Ill-conceived email can spell disaster for contract negotiations, equipment orders,
or client expectatlons:2 Organizational and communication skills, as well as attention to
detail, are crucial In Short's business, where taking a ca sual approach can have un1lntended
side effects, such as appearing unprofessional and
Inexperienced.
The Communications Polley of the Government
of Canada Is a good place to look for the qualities
and practices of effective communication. Although
To read the full Communications It Is Intended for use In the public sector, this docu-
Policy of the Government of Canada, ment also applies more generally to all types of
visit http://goo.gi/bxlicH. professional communication and to the multiple
considerations of the writing process-providing
timely and accurate Information, considering read-
ers' concerns, working collaboratively- that we will
explore In this chapter.
CONTEXTUAL FACTORS
Communkation never takes place in a vacuum. It is embedded in and emerges in response
to specific sill.1ations and is linked to what members of an o rganization must feel , know,
or believe in order to accomplish their goals. 3 Though much wri ting in the workplace is
contextual factors elements of a done independently, wTiting overall involves and in turn shapes social interactions. Power
wrlttng task. such as the situation,
conflicts, coll ahorations, and the giveand t.ake of negotiations can therefo re he expected.+
organization's procedures. and
readers, that Influence the Writer's Contextual factors such as the writing situation, an organizations procedures, and the
choices at every step. documents readers are fo rces t.hat. influence the writ.er\; decisions at every step., Writing
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theorisl~ Lisa Ede and Andrea Lunsford describe writing as "socially constructed." In
other wo rds, it is I.he product or hy-product. of human choices. Wri ting effectively is thus a
matter of makillg logical and strategic choices ill a given situation.
GENRES
Genres are various agreed-upon forms of writl llg that develop in respollse to recur- genres the agr<ledupon formsof
rent situations. For instance, the resume, with its distinctive formatting, categories of writing that develop In response
to recurrent situations and that
information, and conciseness, was an answer to applicmits' and employers' needs in the allow users to act purposefully In a
job-search process.7 Developed and made coherent over ti me, genres I.end to differ in particular acuvlty.
fomiat (the visual or spatial design of the document) and structure (the arrangement of
topics). Genres allow things to get done. They are tools used in ce rtaill situations that let
users act purposefully in a particular activity." Learnfog ahout husiness genres and the
situation in which each one applies is an important step in managing the challenges of
workplace wii ting.
DISCOURSE COMMUNITIES
No maller what posi tion, responsibilities, or profile you have in your organization, you
st.art gai njng ei..11ertise as part of one or more "discourse communities" the moment you
write or s peak on t.he job or prepare and train for that work. A discourse community is a discourse community a group of
group of communicators who share a goal or interest in adopting a way of participating in communlCiltors who share agoal
or Interest In adopting a way of
a puhlic discussion." These ways, known as dL~cursive practices, involve using particular participating In a public discussion,
genres and t.emi inology. Depending on your career pat.Ji, you \vill find yourself part of Including the use of particular
many discourse commmtities of varyi ng size all.cl specialization. For example, you might genres and tc rmlnology.
he a cont.ributor to a corporate hlog, an editor of and cont.1ibut.or to a medical journal, or
part of a group of municipal government workers and representatives working to establish
brreen-living guidelines. Workplace practitioners may in fact belong to several discourse
commun it.ies, often at the same time and sometimes requiring them to write in many dif-
ferent wuys as part of a day's work. According to genre theorist John Swales, 10 discourse
communities have six defining characteristics:
RHETORICAL SITUATIONS
Rhetoric is a term that can be defined in many ways. At its most basic, it describes the
effective i.1se of language to achieve certain , often persi.iasive, goals ending in a change of
perspectives held hy others. Rhetoric can also refer to a111 awareness of the choices made
in wTitin:g. Writing that is intended to change opinions, attitudes, o r behaviours requires
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special thought to what theorist Lloyd Bitzer has called "the rhetorical situation," or the
circumstances in wh ich individuals commtmicat.e. There are three components to t.he
rhetorical situation:
Being ahle to analyze a rhetorical situation can make your writing stronger, mme organ-
ized, and more reader-Friendly.
Not all situations are rhetorical, however. For instance, powerful natural phenom-
ena, such as d roughts or storms, are not in themselves rhetorical situations hecause they
cannot he changed or prevented! through the t1se of rhetoric. But what can be altered is
the human response to or preparntion for such disasters. A true rhetorical situation is an
insurance agent writing a letter to remi nd and convince a client to renew his or her policy
hefore it expires.
Organizing and outlining entail~ mapping out the most stratebric and logical arrange
metlt. of ideas and details.
Draf ting is the writing of the actual message by choosing the precise wording and the
style: of organization that delivers information most strategically.
Revising and editing represent a last chance for improving your document, but these
steps include more than just getting rid of mistakes. In this stage, you evaluate your
draft. from your readers' point of view and check for completeness, coherence, accur
acy, consistency, conciseness and appropriateness of language, and organization.
MESSAGE PLANNING
In wTiting a document or making a presentation, you usually have only one chance to
get your message across accurately and \vith impact. There are no second chances to cor-
rect mistakes or misunderstandings, no opportunities to "get it right" the second time.
Planning and preparation are forms of rL~k prevention- your best insurance against mis-
commur1ica1.ion. ln helping you get it right I.he first time, these steps ensure that your
communication achieves its intended purpose and meets the needs of its audience while
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PREWRITING
Thinking a message through is the best thing you can do to simplify the communica
tion process. The longer and more complex a message, the more that can be gained
from proper preparation and planning and the less you can afford to simply say or write
whatever comes to mind. Thinking critically about your subject, the reason for your
communication, and its intended audience hrings the brreatest bendits to written cor-
respondence and reports, hut it also applies to any sizable oral presentation. Planning or
prewriting involves analyzing the writing task and its context. Each time you write, take a
few seconds to analyze the context in which your message wi ll he received by performing
the following actions:
Doing these thlngs will help you adapt your message to the sitllation and tailor it to the
readers' needs.
Purpose
Business communication ls purposeful and results-oriented. For every message you write
and for every rhetorical situation, you must first understand your reason for communi-
cating and what purpose your message is meant to achieve. Once the goal you need to
accomplish is clear, you will have an easi.er t.ime organizing and composing your mes
sage and be ahle to shape how its readers will receive it. Forgetting the reason ror writing
increases the chance that a message will fail- for example, the writer of a claim letter may
describe a faulty product but neglect to ask for an adjustment, or a conbrratulatory e-mail
may fail to foster goodwill.
Most business communication has only one of two broad purposes: to infom1, which
is the most common purpose, or t.o persuade. Commonly, messages may have multiple
purposes-a primary and a secondary. A letter infom1ing customers of new stOTe hours,
for example, can also be used as an opportunity to convey goodwill and e11courage
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future business. ln business, people communicate with each other for one or more of the
following reasons:
ln defining the reason ror writing or speaking, also consider what you want your
receivers to know and believe when they have read the document or heard you speak
and what their purposes for reading o r listening may he, for instance, to receive instruc-
tion or not.ice or to evaluate. Keep in mind the particular result you are seeking from your
audience-a general response, a specific action, approval for an initiative, or a decision.
Scope
Scope refers to the breadth and depth of detail in a document relative to the subject that scope the breadth or llmltattons of
must he covered. Understanding the scope o r your message can help you weed out irrel- a document's coverage.
evancies that can otherwise bore receivers and bury your most important infom1ation.
After all, why write a three-screen e-mail when all the receiver really expects is a few com-
pact but inrormative sentences? Too little detail, on the other hand, can make ror a trivial
or pointless message. Ilefore you begin to compose your document or launch your oral
presentation, consider how detailed or technical it must be to achieve its purpose, answe r
people's quest.ions and concerns, and enahle them to a.cl on your message. Familiarize
yourself 'vith t.he level of detail I.hat is norm ally considered accept.ahle for similar doLU
ments or deliverables in your workplace. Carefully follow th.rough on instruct.ions and
he mindful of corporate and industry standards while taking into account the receiver's
expectations ahout length, fom1at, and visual elements.
Audience Profile
Acts of communication are perrom1ed with an individual or group in mind, and we desii:,'ll
our messages in order to connect with those specific audiences, even if they are large or
dispersed . In business today, it is common to communicate with people you may never
meet face to [ace and about whom you can only make a. series of informed assumptions.
Even so, it is useful to focus your message hy thinking about the members of your audi-
ence beforehand and evaluating their needs within the context of their organizational
culture (what they do and where they work) and cultural environment (what their back-
grounds are). No other single factor can have such an impact on the success of wri.u.en or
oral communication as giving serious thought to an audience and its needs and resources
in the cm1text of the rhetorical situation . 12
You may he lucky enough to have communkated wit h a particular audience hefore or
to have gained k11owledge through your organization's previous dealings with an individ-
ual. If your cont.act with t.he receiver has heen limited, however, it is still possible to learn
a great deal from an initial contact. Speakers have the advantage of having their audience
right in front of them, hut writers have Lo "construct" their audiences more often. While
you should guard against false a.,<;sumptions, you can also make a few educated guesses
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hased on the receiver's professional posit.ion and responsihilities. 1l Applying this analysis
through audience adaptation ca111 influence how a message is received and increase it.s
chances for success, especially iI you are able to put yourself i.n the receiver's place and see
beyond your own perspective. In fact, knowledge or an audience's needs, beliefs, expect.a
tions, and attitudes is essential to successful wri ting. 14 An audience foL1.1sed message has
immediate and unmistakable relevance and works toward reversing the mass-produced,
rL1hber-stamped hoilerplat.e quality for which routine business communication oft.en gets
a bad reputation.
audience analysis the process Audience analysis and adaptation is sometimes done unconsciously, almost out of
of assessing the needs and habit, hut in other cases it may require serious consideration to determine w hat your
knowledge of reader~ and
listeners and adapting messages receive r is like. Asking the following questions may help:
accordingly. l. What are the receiver's responsibilities and position? Understanding the receiver's
responsibilities will help you detemiine how the infomiation you pass on will he used.
Also ask yourself if you are communicating with a superior (for instance, a supervisor),
a subordinate, or a co-workt-:r. Considering the receiver's position relative to your own
can help you select the approp1iate level of fonnality and L1.llt.ivate a tone that balances
dererence and authority. A message to a long-time business associate may he more
easy-going and familiar in its tone and language, hut using the same style in a memo to
your supervisor may risk offence through the lack of respect it conveys.
2. What are the receiver's attitudes, interesL~, and questions? Think about the level
of importance the receiver will assign to the message. A lack of interest on the receiv
ers part may require you t.o compensate by giving additional emphasL~ to key points,
highlighting the relevance in a subject line, or making the action the receiver is sup-
posed to take easier. Shaping a message to the receivers needs can also involve antici-
pating the questions that the person might ask.
3. What is your experience with the receiver? Based on personal or professional
expelience you or your colleagues may have had wit.h the receiver, you can predict
possible areas of need or conflict that you should take into account when shaping
your message. Consider the situational and organizational influences on your receiver.
when you must communicate with someone who views you or your organization
negatively, it may require extra effort on your part-and careful control of tone and
emphasis-not to let reciprocal hostility or defensiveness interfere with your ability to
get the message across tactfully and professionally.
4. How much does the receiver know about the subject? Th e readers level of know-
ledge will determine the amount and type of detail, background, and explanation
included in the message. Estimating exactly what to include can he difficult, as it
carries the rL~k of patronizing, confusing, or annoying t.he receive r. Receivers bring
differing levels of knowledge and understanding to a given subject, depending on
whether they are laypersons, managers, or experts. Refrain rTom telling receivers with
technical expertise or specialized knowledge too much of what they al ready know (for
example, don't define key terms they use daily). The same applies to managers, who
may have a low tolerance for technical details but a general concern for findlings and
recommendations. On the other hand, avoid overestimating the knowledge receivers
may have and failing to define key terms or concepts or neglecting t.o interpret spe
ciaHzed infom1ation they will need to follow instructions. Build on the know ledge the
receiver may already have hy lin~king it with new facts.
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5. What is the receiver's likely response? Anticipate what the receiver'.-; reaction t.o
your message will he-neutral, receptive, or resistant. If the receiver is unlikely to
abrree with you, he prepared to use pe rsuasive strategies or structure your message
according to an indirect pattern that presen ts an explanation hefore t.he main message.
6. What words define your relationship with the receiver? Be deliberate in your
choice of pronouns (I, you, we), as these words can define or change yom relation
ship with the receiver. Pronouns can al~o make a significant difference to your tone.
Con..c;ider the point o r view that represents the most effective way of addressing or
appealing to the receiver.
7. ls there more than one receiver? Receivers with whom you must communicate
to achieve your purpose are your primary audience. Primary audiences are key primary audience the Intended
decision-makers, usually managers, team memhers, or clients. Anyone else who may, rccclVcr of a message; the person
or persons who will use or act on a
ind irectly, happen to read or listen to your message forms your secondary audience. message'sInformation.
Secondary audiences include
em ployees who need to know how changes hrought ahout hy managerial decisions secondary audience anyone,
other than the prtmary audience,
will affect them
who Wlll receive a message and be
people removed from or wi thout authority to make final decisions hut with some affected by tl\e actlon or decision
in fluence over or input into them It callsfor.
gatekeepers who may conr.rol the flow of information
Because electronic messages can be rorwarded and documents can be called as evi-
dence in legal cases, there is no way to know for certain where the messages you send
may end up. For this reason, it makes good sense to uphold ethical and legal stan
<lards in all communication.
8. Do you need to adapt your message for an international receiver? Consider
what you need to take into account ahout the receiver's hackbrrotmd, environ ment,
and beliefs.
9. Does the receiver have particular expectations? Tihe receive r may int.end to use the
document in a particular way, which will influence his or her expectations ahout the
document's length and fom1. Consider how and for what purpose th e receiver will use
the document and what the receiver must be able to do, decide, or understand after
reading it. Give thought to how the receiver will learn from or interact with the text or
how it can he used in problem-solving. Adjusting sentence length, chunking in.forma
tion, changing the organization and level of detail, adding or omitting information,
inserting list headings, strengtheni ng transi tions, and amending word choice are all
options for making your document more user-friend ly.
To make the I.ask of answering these questions easier, try to envision your reade r
hy imagil1ing that he or she is sitting across from you as you write. Performing audience
analysis can also help you define reader benefits for infonnat.ive and persuasive messages
by uncovering facto rs t.hat wi ll motivate readers. Reader henefits are the advantages the reader benefits the advantages
receiver stands to gain hy complyi ng with your policy, supporting your idea, huying your the reader gains by complytng with
what the writer proposes In buying
product, or using your se rvice.
products. following policies, or
endorsing Ideas.
Medium or Channel
The medium or channel for a message is its vehide of transmission. Given t.hat several medium or channel the physical
channels may o rten suit your needs, choosi ng the hest one depends on its appropriate means by which an oral or wrlncn
message Is transmlned.
ness to the messaging situation and your purpose in communicating-to solve a probl em,
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collahorate, pass on in rom1atim1, or estahlish rapport. It also has to do with how well
you understand the receiver's preferences. You have a choice of traditional means such as
memos and letters, face-to-face meetings, and telephone calls or more recellt technologies
such as e-mail, voice mail, text messaging, and video conferencing. To assess which chan-
nel is best for your purpose, consider the follO\ving factors:
CHANNEL BENEFIT
Letter on company stationery For initial contacts with customers, suppliers, and outside associates, or when you need a written
record of subsequent correspondence with them
Memos For internal communication, when you need a written record to issue reminders, outline policies,
explain procedures, or gather information
Email For less formal communication replacing letters and memos; when you ask for feedback, solicit
opinions, start discussions, collect data, or send information with or without an attachment; useful for
communicating with large, decentralized groups; not appropriate for sending private or emotionally
charged information
Fax For recipients who do not have access to email, when information must be received quickly and
viewed in its original form
Telephone call For gathering or sharing information quickly, or for negotiating and clarifying contracts when it is
impossible to meet in person; for meeting with three or more participants via conference call as a less
expensive alternative to a facetoface meeting
Voicemail message For leaving a brief, uncomplicated message- a question, answer, request, or confirmation- to which
the receiver can respond when it isconvenient
Text message For brief messages containing important or routine information; only when your organization
authorizes the use of instant messaging
Facetoface meeting For establishing initial contact and rapport with clients, customers, and associates; for negotiating,
brainstorming, problem-solving, or any other group communication where consensus is required
Facetoface conversation For delivering a personal message or negative news, or for communicating persuasively
Video conferencing For meeting when travel is impractical; like a face-to-face meeting, it allows participants to both see
and hear each other
The medium or channel you choose has the power to influence how your message is
interpreted. Each channel has its own specific advantages and drawbacks.
Content Generation
Good content con.tributes to effective communication. Collecting all the information you
need hefo re you start to wri.t.e, whether hy researching data or sim ply generating ideas,
L~ essential. Keep in mind that the facts you gather should warrant your efforL~ and your
readers' atten tion. Formal research methods, required for formal repo rts and presenta-
tions, are detailed in Chapter 11. Many types of husiness messages (e.g., routine memos
and e-mails) require only informal idea-generation strategies, such as the followi ng:
1. Brainstorming. Brainstorming is a free-association exe rcL~e that helps to stim ulate brainstorming amethod of
crea1.ive thin.king, unlock ideas, and reveal hidden connections. If you have reached generallng content by listing Ideas
asthey come to mind.
a point of stalemate in planning your document, brainstom1ing can put a fresh per-
spective on a stubborn topic. Start with a blank com puter screen or a fresh sheet of
paper and write down your topk keyword. Set aside ten uninterrupted minutes and,
while suspendingjudgment about how good o r had your ideas are and without stop-
pi ng, jot down any thoughts that come to mind. When I.he ten minutes have elapsed ,
sort through and analyze what you have recorded, saving only your best ideas and
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discarding the rest. lf a single attempt doesn't yield enough idea~. repeat the process.
Next, group the it.ems that a re relat.ed or arrange them in logical order according to
the purpose of your document and the needs of your reader. This process will yield
a prellminary outline. A further brainstorming session can help you fill in any omis
sions and correct any weaknesses. For example, brai11storrning t.he topic of prohlems
with office e-mail communication might yield a list like this one:
- overstuffed in boxes
- shouting
- flaming (angry messages)
- rampant cc-ing of bosses and colleagues
- poorly written messages
- overly telegraphic style
- grammar mistakes
- spam
- lack of e-mail protocol
- inappropriate and/or offensive messages
- unnecessary/irrelevant messages
- rambling messages
- misleading/inaccurate subject lines
- incorrectly addressed messages
- lack of formatting
- incomplete information
Grouped items:
- poorly written messages
- mistakes in grammar, spelling, and punctuation
- rambling, poorly formatted messages
- incorrect address
- overly telegraphic style
- misleading/inaccurate subject lines
- overstuffed in boxes
- rampant cc-ing of bosses and colleagues
-spam
- unnecessary/irrelevant messages
- lack of e-mail protocol
- flaming (angry messages)
- shouting
- inappropriate and/or offensive messages
mapping or clusterlng a 2. Mapping or clustering. Mapping. also known as clustedng. is a fom1 of hrninstorm
method of generating content by ing that involves a visualization of the main topic and its related clas.'1.fications and
vlsuallzlng the main topic and Its
subca1cgorlcs.
suhtopks. A cluster diagram is useful for defining the relationship hetween idleas. St.art
with a fresh sheet of paper and put a keyword t.hat best characterizes your topic in a cir-
cle at the crntre of the page. Draw lines, like spokes radiating from the huh of a wheel,
to connect your topic word with related ideas t.hat come to mind. Circle each new idea
you generate and allow each suhtopic to stimulate additional suhtopics. Continue the
process, without stopping to critique yourself, until you have exhausted the many pos-
sibilities of the topic. The resulting map will show cli1sters and subcli1sters of ideas
grouped around the central concept. Figure 2.1 provides an example of mapping.
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3. Asking questions. The five Ws--who, what, why, when, and where- not to mention journalistic questions tha
essantlal questions (who. what.
how, are productive journalistic questions to ask about your topic and its major
why, when, where, and hoW) that
ideas, especially if you int.end t.o write a dear and compelling document. Frame )ournall sts'lnqulrles as they
Prewriting exercises supply you with the raw material for t.he next st.age of the focus and prepam their stories.
composition process: outlining.
organizing and outlining the
process of arranging Information
ror clarity and Impact.
ORGANIZING AND OUTLINING
sequential development a
Once you have gathered your material, it needs to be structured in a coherent way so read- method of organization that
ers will u nderstand it. Based on your purpose and your readers' needs, select a met.hod desc~bes the arrangement of steps
o f development that orders your subject from beginning to end. There are four methods: In a process.
cause-and-effect development
a method of organization that links
events with the reasonsfor them.
outline a framQWOrk ror a
document, showing Its divisions
and elements.
,... - ....... ,
/ Job '
\ description )
'
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I
,,. ... -- '
Non-compet: J
clause
' ......... ___ _.,,,.,
FIGURE 2 .1
detect errors ln logic and coherence. It plots out your document from beginning to end
and gives you t.he opportunity to experiment with the arrangement of ideas before you
commit 1.hem to the written page. Once you begin to write, 1.he work of deciding how to
organize yom document will have already been done, leaving you to concentrate on tone,
word choice, sentence structure, :and accuracy. A short, basic topic out.Line, such as the one
below, includes concise phrases that describe the hreakdown o r your topics presentation,
ananged in tbe order of your primary method o r development.
I. Primary Research
II. Secondary Research
Ill. Research Strategies
Usually an outline breaks I.he topic down into three to five major categori es that can
then he divided into smaller segments that rep resent minor points and supporting evidence.
I. Primary Research
A. Direct observations
B. Interviews
c. Surveys and questionnaires
II. Secondary Research
A. Books, articles, and reports
B. Web documents
c. E-mail discussions ) Classification
For more complex documents, use alphanumeric and decimal outline templates,
which can be found in most word-processing software. You can find examples of these
outlining systems in Chapter 10. In Chapters 5 to 8, which cover the most frequen1.ly
written types of messages, you will be introduced to basic writing patterns for receptive
and unreceptive audiences-sometimes known as good-news and bad-news patterns for
busi ness correspondence.
DRAFTING
drafting the preliminary writing of When you write for business, you cannot always wait for inspiration. In fact, drafting a
adocumQnt. message L~ a task hest viewed as a necessary means to an end, like any other business func-
tion. Rely on good preparation to get the job done and begin by expanding your outline
without wo rrying too much about creating a perfect copy on your first try. Remember,
you can usually refine your language and make corrections later. With practice, writing
and revision can become simultaneous activities. Write continuously, not stopping once
you have gained some moment.um. You may want 1.0 begin with the part of the message
or document that seems easiest to write. If you are writing a sizable document, such as
a report, you may want to write yoiir introduction last so it will more accurately reflect
the overall cont.ent. ln longer documents, an introduction will serve as a lens to focus the
detai led inform ation that follows. In shorter routine messages, the opening may either
reveal the primary purpose for writing or prepare the reader for the details to come.
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1. St.art early. Give yourself enough time to think through a writing task and complete
it according to your goals. Remember that good writing is easier to produce when
you are relaxed. Stress is heneficial only when it gives you that extra push to get the
job done.
2. Work on a computer. Drafting Ls considerahly easier when you have the ability to
add, delete, and move passages of text. From a rough draft produced on a computer,
you will have a fairly good idea what your finished document will look like.
3. Talk it out.. Many people are more experienced talkers than writers and may be able
to articulate their thoughts more fluently in spoken as opposed to writ.ten language.
Verbalizing your ideas or dictating them into a voice recorder can help you get your
thoughts down in some form. Ask yourself, What am I trying to say here? and answer
the question as directly as possible. Ease up on self-criticism for the time being- there
will be time to polish and perfect your draft later. Wlhat you want to do at this stage is
capture the essence of what you mean. If you won-y that you might earn a reputation
for talking to yourself, especially if you work in a crowded office, you can internalize
your verhalizations and make this strategy work for you in silence. Just write down
your thoughts once they are fully formed.
4. Skip around. The advantage of working with word-processing software L~ that sec
tions of a document can he prepared in any orde r and then cut and pasted accord
ing to an outline. Don't feel you have to start at the heginning and work your way
through to t.he end of the document. Capitalize on your inspiration hy starting with
the sect.ion you feel most comfortable ahout. Leave the section you are unsure ahout
until you've had a chance to build your confidence.
5. Take a break. Obviously, if you are at work, you won't want to fritter away company
time, hut switching to another activi.ty- filing, tidying up your desk, answering a tele-
phoT.le call, listening to voice mail-can give you I.he ohjectivity you need to return to
the writing task refreshed.
6. Practice freewriting. Freewriting is an exe rcise in dedicated , non-stop writing. freewrltlng a method of
Basically, it involves forcing yourself to write on a particular suhject for a period 0 ten gcnoratlng contont based on
unstructured Witting and tho
uninten-upted minutes so that idea.scan he unlocked and translated to the page. Not racordlng of Ideas as they come
everything you write will he useful, hut you may want to keep some parts of the draft. to mind.
Repeat the process until you have accumulated enough material on which to hase
your document.
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7. Adopt a positive attitude to writing. Practise writing rebrularly and ask colleagues
and hosses for feedhack. Thrnugh interaction you can learn about the corporate cul-
ture in which you are writing and det.ermine exactly what readers expect and what
certain situations demand. Th ink of writing as a means toward achieving your profes-
sional goals and he positive ii.n thinking that those goals are achievable.
1. Allocate your time. Consider how much time and energy you need to invest in wTit
ing your message relative to its purpose and importance. Spending an hou1: drafting
a brief e-mail may not make sense if you have fifty more messages to write that day.
Develop a mental timetable for accomplishing your writing tasks.
2. Keep distractions to a minimum. Tune out office banter and organize your writing
area by setti ng out all the tools and resources you will need.
3. Get the most from word-processing software. Use the outline feature to hrainstom1
and organize an 01.1tline, then cut and paste to organize alternative ways of pTesenting
information.
4. Take a few seconds to plan the structure. Every document has a begin ning, a mid-
dle, and an end. Quickly select a method of development to keep your information
under control (seep. 58).
5. Remember your reader. Visualize your reader. Explain difficult concepts hy relating
diem t.o what is familiar and already known to your reader.
6. Go \vi.th the flow. St.art with the section of your document that is easiest l.o write and
resLst the temptation to take a break once you have momentum. Plan to reward your-
self in some way- with a break or a cup of coffee- once you have finished your task.
7. leave refinements for revision. Your copy doesn't have to he perfect until it is time
to send it.
Before you start the revision process, take a hreak to ensure that you can look ohject-
ively at the document you have written. Clear your head by doing something different for
a few minutes or a few hours (what.ever the time frame fo:r your document and its deadline
allow for). A cooling period is essential to the revision of any import.ant document- with-
out it you will be too close to the draft to evaluate it effectively. For brief, routine letters or
e-mails, you can usually carry out a quick hut careful pmofreading on the spot or revise
onscreen as you go, checking for the effectiveness of organization, approp riateness of style
and tone, and the acl1.1Tacy of both language and content.
For all o ther documents, especially for important external or upwardly directed
communication, the revision process needs to he taken very seriously. Follow a few
basic strategies:
1. Work from a paper copy of your draft. Print out your document rather than first
making changes onscreen. You will want t.o have a re.cord of what you originally wrote
in case you decide that the first version was preferable. Mark up the copy (which is
best double-spaced t.o make room for comments) using stand ard proofreaders' sym
bols (see Fibrure 2.2). Alternatively, use the Simple Markup or Track Changes func-
tions in Word to mark-up, delete and add text.
2. Reduce your reading speed. It is unlikely you will find any errors if you speed-read.
Take your time.
3. look at your document from the reader's perspective. Because a shift in perspec-
tive is essential to good revL~ion, put pride aside and pretend you didn't author your
document, remembering that it is always easier tn find errors in someone el~es copy.
Give yourself credit when you find an error. lt means you are doing your job well and
perfom1ing a valuable servi.c e for your reader.
4. Make several passes over the draft. No mat.ter how careful and scrupulous a
reader you are, you won't he ah le to spot every error or analyze every need for global
revision on a single reading. Simplify the editing task by reading for one specific set of
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5. Read your draft aloud. Errors and instances of awkwardness are detected more easily
when you hear them rathe r than read them silently. Making a recording and playing it
hack is sometimes a useful method for clearing up problems wi th sentence structure,
tone, and foggi ness in documents that have to he perfect.
6. Use spell- and grammar checkers, hut respect their limitations. Diabrnostic soft-
ware has great capabilities, hut it may not flag every error. Sometimes, it may isolate a
proper noun and suggest an incorrect spelling for it or fail to detect a misspelled tech-
n.ical te rm, so look carefully at each highlighted word and he prepared to use your
own judgment. Unless your organization tells you to do other.vise, ensure that your
spell-check program is set for Canadian English. If you opt for US English, be sure to
use its distinctive spellings consistently. There is no substitute, however, for reading
the document yoursel f, even if you have to do it two or three times.
A critical read -through requires that you pay close attent.ion to t.he foll owing factors,
many of which are discussed in C hapters :> and 4 and can he grouped into three steps:
Step One:
Compl eteness. Ensure that your document achieves its purpose and meets readers'
needs. Adequate information should he provided without causing information over-
load. Check that essential material enables readers to take action, make a decision, or
know what do to when they are finished reading the document.
Step Two:
Structure and coherence. The elements that make up your document. sl1ould be
organized logically according to the rhetorical purpose you \vish to achieve. Related
ideas should he linked thrOL1gh logic and appropriate transi tional devices.
Step Three:
Accuracy. You must he able to veri fy the accuracy of the information you present.
look for inacmracies and ensure you r information is free of distortion. Compare
names and numbers \vith their sources.
2 I G ETTI N G STAR T ED: P LANNIN G AND WR ITI N G B US I NE SS M ES SA G E S
Conciseness. Prune deadwood phrases and red undancies and tighten your style to
create a lean, reader-friend ly doL1.1ment.
Sentence and paragraph cons truction. l ook for awkwardness in sentence con-
struction. Give impact and directness to your writi11g hy using the active voice and
replacing weak verbs and noun phrases with precise, force ful verhs.
Consistency and format. The use of language, style of visual~. and overall design
should he consistent. Check for lopsided formatting hy making si.ue your document
is balanced on the page. look for possible problems with lettered items, head ings,
bulleted and numbered lists, capitalization, underlining, bold prin t, and italics.
Readability, word choice, and ethics. Decide if tl1e documents level of difficulty
is appropriate ror the readers. Replace vague or pretentious words wi th specific and
fam Ll iar ones. Keep biased lanb'Uage oi.1t of your document and ask yoursel f whether
you would mind if someone other than the intended receive r read your document.
Grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Check fOT possible grammar errors-for
example, unbalanced sentences and verbs that migh t not agree with their subjects-
that can undermine the pro fessionalism and readability of your document. Scan for
spelling mistakes and punctuation errors that can make your document look sloppy.
Typugraphical errors. Check for any inadvertent errors (e.g. transposed letters and
misplaced punctuation) that may have crept in to your d rart.
Revision becomes easier with practice. Make the most of the constructive feedback
you receive from instruct.ors and always use it to help you evaluate I.he success of your
commun ication relative to your goals. Review the ad vice and comments you receive and
assess the types of faults and errors most common to your writing. From this assessment,
devise a customized checkHst you can refer l.o when revis ing and proofread ing your docu
ments. The end of Chapter 4 offers additional tips on proofreading.
Collaborative Writing
Most successful businesses rely on teamwork to hri ng their projects and initiatives to
fruition. Teamwork, though, is possihle only when a spi rit of co-operation exists in the
workplace and when ind ividuals are willing to share responsibilities and decision-making.
EmployeTs screen applicants partly on the basis of their ability to work as a team. This
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Collaboratively wri tten domments generally take longer to write and edit/revise and
involve a more complex process than individual documents do, partly because a high
level of coordination is requi red.
Participants may have different WTiting styles, leading to inconsistencies and the need
for ham1onization in the final edit, which may continue through multiple iterations-
especially if participants are not properly briefed by senior staff on what they want
and procedures for resolving disputes are not agreed upon. 11
lack of sensitivity and/or di plomacy, poor personal communication , and personal
conflicts arising from differences in power and status can interfere with receptivity to
each others id eas and lead to control issues and an unequal ability to add, edit, and
remove text.
Und erstanding the pitfalls and challenges of collaborative wri.t.ing before you start can
help you avoid them and make the process a rewarding one where mutual support and
respect, motivation, clear goals, and timely and valuable feedback allow participants to
learn from each other and produce a well -received, high-quality document. 18 Engagement,
involvement, and the feeling that each writer can contribute and make a difference are key
to a successful collaboration.
Consultation hetween team members may or may not take place during planning, draft
preparation, or final editing and revL~ion.
Here are some key poi nts t.o keep in mind when working and writing collahoratively:
Prac tise active listening. Take other viewpoints seriously and consider them impar-
tially and open-mindedly. Be attentive to the nuances and inferences of discussions.
Make sure you und erstand what you've heard before responding to it.
Designate a team coordinator. This person may not have authority over the entire
project hut can coordinate plann ing and activ-
ities. He or she keeps track of progress on the
document and consolidates draft segme nts
into a mast.er copy.
Do lllp-front planning. Meet to discuss the doC1.1-
ment hefore anyone hegins t.o wiite. Brainstorm A tutorial on Google Drive and Docs is
ideas for the project, conceptualize the docu- available from The Goodwill Community
ment, evaluate il~ content, and create an outline, Foundation's website: http://goo.gi/
documenting the planning proces.~ as you go. cFSKO.
that, planning and virtual meeting software can help members collaborate over dis-
tances. Members can e-mail documents to each other and use Google Docs or instant
messaging software to share files and carry on live text chats or use a virtual white-
board (a helper application tlhat allows a document to be shared by two or more users)
to write as if they were in the same room.
Determine who is responsible for each segment or the document. Equalize work-
loads as much as pos.<;ihle. Allow others to work according to their strengths or where
they will learn the most. Each i,>roup member is responsible for researching and writing
a segmen t but should not hesitate to ask for help when it is needed.
Foster a s pirit or co-operation. Everyone should feel that he or she is makh1g a con
tribution and can be heard. To do this, you may have to be flexible enough to com-
promise on your attachment to particular words and phrases and go with the flow
of the project. Even when you check your ego at the door, expect a certain level of
disharmony. However, c reative differences can be a good thing; under the right condi-
tions, divergent viewpoints gradually meld into productive consensus.
Harmonize writing styles. Exchange and review writing segments while remaining
diplomatic in your criticism of others. Leave it to the i,>roups best writer or editor
to do a final check for consist.ency and integration of wri ting styles. The final copy
should read in one voice arnd have a continuous style, not look as though sections
have simply been pasted together. Ask seve ral people to check the document to make
sure all the pans are properly integrated and error-free.
Cl Consider contextual factors, genre differences, your discourse community, and the
rhetorical situation when you are writing.
Cl Approach the writing task as an achievable process consisting of four overlapping
and repeatable stages: prewriting, organizing and outlining, drafting, and revising
and editing.
Cl Plan for a message that will be purpose-driven, audience-focused, and concise.
Cl Make pre-writing part of your writing routine by first identifying the purpose, the scope
of your message, the audience and its needs, the most logical and time-appropriate
channel, and the required content.
Cl Organize content strategically and coherently by creating an outline showing topics
according to order and level of importance.
Cl Draft the message by using techniques to reduce writer's block.
Cl Revise and edit your message using the content, organization, and style (COS) method.
Cl Ensure your message is reader-ready by checking for completeness, structure,
coherence, accuracy, conciseness, sentence and paragraph construction, consistency,
readability, and correctness.
Cl Recognize the benefits and challenges of collaborative writing and prepare for them by
understanding the different types of collaboration and applying strategies for effective
group practice.
Cl When critiquing writing by peers, identify the purpose of the critique, be sensitive in
your communication, and follow any pre-set guidelines.
1. Selecting the Most Effective Communication Channel. i. Send a fax to his department and hope he will
Decide which communication channd would he most read it in time.
effective in each of the following si tuations. Be pre- ii. Telephone him and leave a hrief message in
pared to defend your choice in each case and discuss his voice-maiJ hox.
why the options you rejected would be ineffective. iii. Write a detailed e-mail message although
a) Your manager has j ust rewarded you for a joh well you know he checks his e-mail only twice a
done with two tickets to tonight's hasehall game. day, once when he arrives at work and again
The first pitch is in three hours and you would after limch .
Like to invite a colleab'lle in another department iv. Send a text message because you know he is
to go with you. How do you contact him? never without his IllackBerry.
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b) As a d epartme ntal manage r, you have j ust c) Although you hold a junior posi tion in yo u r com-
received a d irective from the company CEO advis- pany, you have a few suggestions t.o improve tbe
ing you of a new and ve ry detailed sexual harass efficiency of operations and would like to run your
ment policy that wilJ go into e ffect shortly Which ideas by the COO. How do you approach her?
method do you use to explain tb e policy's terms i. Prepare an in formal recommendation report
to your departmen t? in wh ich you out.line your ideas h ased on
i. Call a fi fteen-min ute meeting and tell all staff evidence you have gathered from company
members that they are responsible fo r record- d ocumen ts.
ing details of the policy ii. Tap her on the should er in th e ha llway as
ii. write a <let.ailed department.al memo claii fy- she's rushing to a meeti ng and ask if you can
ing every aspect o f the policy and o ffering to bend her ear.
add ress potential questions and concerns. iii. Book an appoi ntme nt \vi th he r to discuss
iii. Post an annou ncemen t of the new po licy your ideas in a face-to-face meeting.
0111 the deparm1en tal message board and tell 2. Revising. Working togethe r as a group, read the text
d epartme nt membe rs to read it when they o f the foll owing extract from a press release and con
h:ave a chance. sid er how it can be im p roved th rough ed iting and
iv. Tal k the new policy over when you meet revising. Keep in min d the facto rs fo r s uccessful
d epartment members in the coffee room . revision summarized on pages 61- 3.
WINNIPEG, MANITOBA, MAY 10, 2013 ... Gordon Wong has joined Superior
Plastics as vice president- marketing. Superior Plastics, headquartered In
Wini peg, produces polymer tubing and coils. Since 1991 Superior also been pro-
ducing tubing for U.S. distribution through the firm of Reliable Plastics, Chlcagoe.
Wong will coordinate overseas distribution through, the company's Jakarta office.
Wong will travel extensively In the Far East while developing marketing channels.
For Superior.
3. Writing Collaboratively. Assemble a group o f up to preferences, and assi&rn responsibilities (e.g., re'Searching
eight classmates and appoint a team leader. Assume current courses, identifyi ng potential needs, establishing
that you have been a~ked to desi&rn three new college course outcomes and outlines, wiitjng course desL1ip-
or unive1sity courses for programs in which you are tions, revising and polishing draft material). Once each
now sntdying. Meet to brainstorm ideas, establish style member has completed his or her portion of t.he draft,
2 I GETTI N G STARTED: PLA N N IN G A N D WRITING BUS I NESS M ESS A GES
meet again to discuss problems and harmon ize writing similar to t.he kind found on sites such as TripAdvisor.
styles. When you are sati..<;fied wit.h t.he final version, Exchange messages with another student (either
submit it 1.0 your instructor for feedback. Each team through a dfrect exchange or through a platfom1 such
member should then write a hrief one-paragraph assess.- as Blackboard). Following the COS method for edi-
men t of the collaborative Wtiting process. What were its ting and guidelines for peer critiques, provide feed-
benefits and advantages? What were it<; <lrnwhacks? back to your classmate. Review the reedback you
4. PHr Editing. Drawing on you r worst hotel or res - receive and apply t.he aspects that \vill most help you
taur:ant experience, write a social media message improve your message .
c) lnforming a clalmant of the advantageous terms When the time has elapsed, stop and analyze what
of a settlement you have written. If the exercise bas not helped you
d) notifying a long-time, soon-to -he terminated uncover at least three to five major ideas, repeat the
employee of the company's decision to downsize process and use the points you generate as the basis
a) convincing a potential customer to purchase a for an outline. Has the process helped you uncover
line of software your company manufactures new ideas?
f) presenting findings and recommendations related 9. Creating a Cluster Diagram. Assess a problem you
to your organization's need for a new health have encountered on campus or at your workplace-
lnsurance provider inadequate or faulty equipment, inefficient or under-
g) notifying five department members of a training staffed services, or inconvenient scheduling. Prepare
seminar scheduled for two weeks from now a cluster diagram to explore the problem and analyze
8. Freawriting. Select one of the fo llowing tasks and possible solutions. Use the diagram a.~ the basis for a
write about it for ten minutes, \vitbout stopping. three- to five-point out.line.
a) Explain the registration procedure at your college. 10. Creating an Outline. Assume that a friend i.$ inter-
b) Describe the technical requirements for your ested in your program of study and has asked you to
current job. write a letter or e-mail describing its prerequisites,
c) Describe the communication skills required in annual cost, and course requirements. Create an out
your currt-ii t Joh or in your program of study. line for your message.
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L.. ONLINE ACTIVITIES
1. Business and Professional Writing Quiz. This online at the Unjversity of Wisconsin-Madison is intended
quiz, from the University College of the Carihoo, for writers of expository essays, it offers useful prac-
tests your knowledge of business writing hy asking tice in brainstormjng and composing online. Fill in
you to answer a series of questions as if you were each field hut pret.end that your task is to compose an
a member of the business community. Enter your e-mail message. At any point in the w1iting process,
numeric choice, then click to check your answer. you can e-ma~ your writing to yourself by filling out
www.tru.ca/disciplines/hiz.html and submitt.ing the form at the bottom oft.he page.
2. Online Brainstorming and Drafting. Although this http://writing.wisc.edu/Handbnnk/apessay
Application Essays web page from the Writing Centre _tutorial.ht.ml
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Choice, Conciseness,
and Tone
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Use plain, precise, and famlllar language to 4. Identify strategies for writing concise
make your point, prevent misunderstanding, messages.
and write with Impact.
S. Develop a conversational and confident
2. Identify and eliminate problem words that do tone and adjust It to suit a range of writing
not convey your meaning clearly and directly. purposes, professional situations, and
readerships.
3. Choose accurate and appropriate words
to create constructive, Inclusive, reader- 6. Differentiate between personal and
oriented messages. Impersonal styles.
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A FEW DECADl!S AGO, legal contracts, from the most detailed business agreements to the
most routine mortgage form s, were written In a formal style full of twisted sentences and
difficult language (called legalese) that often made key concepts, obligations, and rights
Impossible to understand. In Canada, banking and Insurance Industries were at the forefront
of the transition from this type of writing to a plain language style.' In 1979, Royal Insurance
of Canada was producing the fi rst plain-language insurance policy and Scotlabank was
working with lawyer Robert Dick to redesign and rewrite Its loan forms. Through the man-
date of the Canadian Bankers Association (CBA), Scotlabank has maintained Its commitment
to plain language:"We know that plain language makes sense for our customers. And It also
makes sense for us-saving tim e by ellmlnatlng confusion and Improving communication
within our organizations and with our customers:2
Developing an effective busl ness writing style Is the key to reaching your readers and
to conveying your Intended message. Style comprises the ru les, conventions, and options
you need to consider whenever you write. These practices apply to the words you choose
and combine to form sentences: how correct they are, how well they support the substance
of your Information and Ideas, and how right they are for particular situations and audi-
ences. Effective business style also Involves thinking about how words "sound" and how
your readers are affected by the words you use. With practice, you can learn to vary your
style to suit a variety of situations.
Good style creates a good Impression, not just of you but of the company you repre-
sent. By paying attention to the language you use, you can eliminate the fru stration caused
by communication that Is hard to read, confusing, or uninformative and thereby build and
sustain business relationships. Sawy communicators know that a clear, cri sp, adaptable
style kept as tight, lean, and factual as possible can simplify everyday tasks and make Infor-
mation manageable. In the long term, good writing supported by an effective business
style Is a major contributor to career growth and a vital factor In building personal and cor-
porate credibility.
Word Choice
PLAIN STYLE
The need for clear, understand able, concrete language is not unique to the age of high-
speed comm unication. Centuries ago, when people first hegan to write for science and
husines..<; and ind ustry, demands were heard for the ki nd of sim plicity and economy that
plain style or plain language a is now the hallmark of plain style or plain language. Plain style makes i.t acceptahle for
styte or wrttlng that places value on you to write in the same everyday language that you use when you speak and helps you to
slmpllclty, dlrectnoss, and clartty.
reach your read ers instead of putti ng your audience at a distance. One of the aims of plain
style is to hanish dead and empty words in favour of lively, expressive ones that readers
connect with immediately and remem ber easily. Because it saves time, puts readers fi rst,
and makes ideas and information meaningful, plai n language is good for business. For a
sense o r the impact plain language can have, note the difference in the following sentences:
If you suspect your own writing L~ more pretentious than plain, u se a readability index
(such as Robert Gunning's fog formula) to measure its level of difficulty.
The following tips will help you avoid common word traps:
1. Curb your use of words ending in -ize and -izcttion. Verbs end ing in -ize and nouns
end ing in -izatfrm may sound rich and soph isticated, hut they can also lead to an
inflated, heavy-handed style that grinds comprehension to a frustrating ha lt. Some
words that fi t this category (such as priva/:iz1:, hospitalize, unionize., maximize, author-
ization, and spedalization) are common and irreplaceable enough to he used without
compromisi ng readability. However, many other words ending in -tion, -ment, -att:,
and -h111 can boggle the mind with their obscurity and obfuscation, so it is import.an t
to remember that bigger isn 't always better, especially when it comes to these so-called
Latinisms that owe their origins to the ancient language of the Roman Empire. The
chart below offers some simpler substitutes for bigger, more difficult words:
2. Use words derived from F rench s paringly. Words that the English language has
borrowed from French can sound prestigious and distinctive wh en used s paringly,
adding formality t.o your writing. lf overused, though, they can sound con.tr.ived and
affected when compared with sim pler English alternatives.
3 I BUSINESS STY LE : WORD CHO ICE, CO NCIS ENES S, AND TON E
3. Avoid foreign words and phrases. Phrases such as ad hoc (for a particular pur-
pose) and pm bono (for free) are used in legal documenLs and formal writing, where
they are part of an estahlished idi om. Otherwise, use foreign expressions only when
ahsolutely necessary.
4. Use only job-related jargon. Jargon is the special vocahulary for a group, trade , jargon a term lhat describes
profession, or sphere of activity. Termi nology of this kind is essential ror conducting (1) the spcclallzcd terminology of
a technical ncld or (2) ou1daLcd,
business and describing soph Lsticat.ed concepts and activities accurately and concLsely. unnecessary words used In a
Certain types o f jargon once thought of as speciaHzed-such as computer jargon- are business cont ext
now the stuff o f common knowledge. Once-ordi na ry words such as import, export,
and cookie have taken on meanings unique to computing, which in turn have come
to he understood hy almost everyone. Similarly, many business-related terms, such as
fixed rate, intangible assets, scalable technology, ddtst, and buyback describe actions and
concepts that cannot he summed up easily in any oth er way.
Jargon is pemiissihle when it is purposeful and transparent. Because jargon is a pri-
vate lanbruage of the "inner circle," anyone who uses it must he sure that its special tenns,
abbreviations, and acronyms \vill he mutually understood. To ensure that one persons
jargon won't he another person's gohbledegook, size up your audience first and define
any special terms you may have used in documents intended for a broad readership.
5. Bypass buzzwords. Buzzwords are fashionahle, o ften technical-sounding pieces buzzwords fashionable, technical,
of jargon. Known as trendy attention-getters, buzzwords sound fresh, current, and or computer Jargon.
suit.ably corporate. Thei r trendiness is part o f their appeal, but it is also a large part
of their drawback because they tend to go out of style quite quickly, o rten through
overuse. Some better-known buzzwords include
dlch~s overused, tlrc,d expressions 1. Replace cliches. Cliches are descriptive ex11ressions that have heen drained of mean-
that have lost their ablllly to ing through overuse. Once vihrant and full of impact, they are now trite. UnJess a
communicate affoctlvcly.
cliche adds uniqueness or, by way of analogy. sums up something t.hat is otherwise
impossible to describe, replace it with fresh and direct language. Here are some of the
better-known business diches:
3. Eliminate slang. Slang is t.he term for colourful, highly informal words or figures of slang coined words or existing
speech that have meaning specific Lo a particular era, locality, or occupation. Words words that are Informal and have
meanings sp<'!Clfic to particular
that Rt t.h L~ category may he new words or familiar words used in new and someti mes groups or localities.
humorous ways (for example pony up, which means "to hand over a sum of money").
Most slang has a short shelf life and may have meaning for only a small audience.
Slang Translation
greenback US dollar
schlepp carry, haul
suit a business executive
serious coin a large sum of money
blow off disregard, ignore
confab a conversation
slugfest an intense quarrel
SINK single, independent, no kids
Because slang is extravagant and street-smart in its appeal, it has the power Lo
shock readers who are unprepared for it, making it unsuitable for most professional
communication. An exception is slang that is specific to business and management,
including widely accepted terms such as telephone tag, team player, wal/1 (resign from
a joh), and spot (a radio or TV commercial). Slangier t.em1s such as tire llicker (a pro-
spective customer who demands a lot of attention hut doesn't buy anything) are fun
and unique hut may he Loo info rmal for general i1se.
limit your use oflntemet ahhreviations and emoticons (punctual.ion used t.o create emotlcon a symbol conslsllng
sideways faces conveying emotions: :), :(. :-<, :-0, and so on) to the channel for which of a soqucnrn of keystrokes that
produce a sideways Image of a
they are intended- IM communication- and leave them out of office e-mail and for- face conveying any one of a range
mal correspondence. (Appendix A, under the heading "Ahhreviat.ions and Acronyms," of emotion'-
coveTs ahhreviations and acronyms suitable in professional communication.)
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1. Provide s p ecific details that h elp readers act on information and r equests.
concrete nouns things knowable Concrete nouns (things knowable by the senses-computer, annual report. , rt:sume)
through the senses. are easier to grasp than abstract nouns (intangible things knowable throl.tgh only
abstract nouns things nol the intellect- integrity, loyalty, justice). Use concrete language as much as possible
knowable through the senses. to support and explain abstract words and show readers exactly what you mean.
Because the language o r business is foll of intangible abstracts- security, prestige,
profitability, leadership- hard data can be used to make difficult concepts meaningful
to readers.
2. Quantify facts and avoid vague qualitative statements. Tell readers how much,
how many, or what type you mean, specify when something happened or happens,
and identify by tit.le o r name the agents and recipients of parr.icular actions.
Readers, though we might wish otherwise, are not mind readers. They may not
underst.and what descriptive terms such as soon, later, good, bad, nice, numerous, ~11b
stantially, or a majority really mean. These are t.em1s that. are oft.en used out of polite-
ness, as hedbring devices that sound less harsh and demandi ng than specific words.
Vague: A majority of employees indicated they would sign the agreement soon.
Specific: Close to 75 per cent of employees indicated they would sign the
agreement by Friday.
Vague: The stock is performing poorly. (Which stock? Performing lww poorly?)
Specific : Shares of Grocerynet.com lost 1S per cent of their market value in 2013.
mult.iple meanings and keep in mind that readers like consistency, thus making i.t
import.ant to avoid using two or more names for the same thing.
Using idiomatic eiqnessions can also reduce confusion. Idioms are word group- Idiom a word or phrase that Im
ings that "sound right" to a typical reader and have special meaning distinct from a meaning dllfemnt from Its l~eral
meaning.
their literal meaning: hand in (suhmit), look up (search for information), and find out
(de1.ermine or discover information) Used correctly, these phrasal verbs add punch to
your writing, hut they can also he difficult for anyone new to English to rememher or
decipher. Idiomatic usage also applies to the pairing of prepositions with adjectives
(different from) and nouns (use for) . For instance, the phrase "to have confidence in" is
correct hut "to have confidence rm" is not. When you need to know which preposition
to pair with a particular word, it is always wise to refer to a college-level dictionary or
an icliomat.ic dictionary, such as the Oxford Advanced learner's Dictionary.
1. Be reasoned, factual , and moderate in your j udgmen ts. Keep personal biases out of
your workplace communication and use only inclusive, non-discriminatory lanb'1.1age
(see the following sections).
2. Consider the impact your communication has on others as well as yourself.
Make sure the actions you endorse are legal and that your communication would
renect well on you if it were disclosed publicly. Bending I.he rules, even ror a trusted
colleague, might compromise your integrity.
3. Consult qual ified colleagues. If you suspect that what you are writing is conten-
tious o r incrimi nating, seek out experi enced co-workers to help you navigate eth-
ical minefields and find feasible solutions to t.he wording of important messages
and documents.
4. Avoid libellous language. As stated in Chapter 1, common law protects every person
against libel (printed character defamation). Words that are harmful and potentially
libellous include drunk, lazy. crazy, mmked, corrupt, Incompetent, stupid, maniac, drug
addict, junkie. thief, and crippled.
5. Be timely and accurate in your communication. Avoid unjustified delays in replying
or processing information. Retain print or electronic copies of important documents.
6. Avoid untrue, deceptive, or misleading statements. There are stiff penalties for all
rorms of misrepresentation, including false advertising. It is a good policy to hack up
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9. Don't claim authorship of documents you have not wdtten. The conseqi..1ences of
plagiarism- not givi ng credit where credi t is d ue- are serious. Always acknowledge
your sources through not.es o r citations, and never take credit for ideas that aren't
your own.
For effective writing on the job, opt for language that has the following features:
Cl Plain a nd Familia r: Use short and common words that are meaningful and easily
understood.
Cl Fresh a nd Current: Match you r language to the image of your profession and
organization, avoiding stale and outdated expressions.
Cl Specific a nd Functional: Show readers what you mean through specific details and
precise wording, and key language to your reader's understanding.
Cl Factual and Ethical: Avoid angry, exaggerated, irresponsible, and libellous statements.
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Achieving Conciseness
It may come as no surprise that the origin o f the term business is bu~y-ness. Time constraints
and pressing deadlines are t.he nom1 for most h usiness people. Therefore, they expect to
receive workplace documen ts that get to the point directly, with an economy of words and
a mi nimum of clutter. A modest amount of time spent in crafting a concise, easy-to-read,
well-organized message is time saved for your readers. In turn, time saved translates not
just into m oney earned or saved hut into goodwill from the busy people you communicate
with on a regular basis. Compare the following messages--think about how long it takes to
read each one and how the choice of words affects coheren ce and readability:
Original: This is a just a very brief memo to inform you that it is the opinion of the
employee council that at the present time it is expedient to undertake an
investigation of the possible institution of a proposed on-site fitness centre.
Kindly be advised that anytime up to August 31 you should make your views
known to your employee council representative.
Revised: The employee council invites your input on the proposed creation of an on-site
fitness centre. Please contact your employee council representative before
August 31 .
long, ind irect ways of expressi ng things are a major source of wordiness. While concise-
ness is a virtue in business communication, the same cannot he said for conciseness that is
overdone, leading to messages that sound uneven, too bh.mt, or too rude. A little terseness
or even abruptness--like th e kind that occurs naturally in a quick e-mail as you move
from one thought to the next-can be expected occasionally and is usually excusable.
Readers may begin to have problems, th ough, when they encounter a writing style that
L~ so telegraphic I.hat there is not enough detail or development to make a message lucid,
understandable, or complete. After all, readers should not be expected to supply or men -
tally fill in missing words.
Conciseness means using the fewest words t.o say what you need to accurately and
completely Weighing the need for conciseness against sim ilar concerns for completeness
and politen ess is impo rtant once you pass the draft phase, where wordiness is under-
standable. Kn owing what you can eliminate without sacrificing your intended mean ing
or ignoring your read ers' needs is key to answering the triple demands of conciseness,
completeness, and politeness.
Wordy: Please note that you are requested to read and offer your
comments on the attached file.
Concise and polite: Please review and comment on the attached file.
once admitted to a friend, "l made this lette r longer than usual because ! lack the time to
make it short." Here are nine ways to keep your messages concise:
1. Eliminate long lead-ins. 13asehall pitchers warm up in the bullpen before th ey head
to th e mound. Many writers prefer to "limber up" in the same way hy starting their
sentences with an introductt.ory phrase or two before th ey get to the point. While
soften ing a message in this way is a common politeness strategy. lead-ins are mostly
unnecessary because they add nothing to a sentence except ror information that is
already obvious (e.g., This message is to inform you that ... ). Readers in a hurry want
in formation conveyed to them as directly as possible. Unless extreme politeness is
required, delete any opening ph rases ending in that or because. ln brief messages,
such as routine e-mail, make sure you get to the point before a count o f three.
Wordy: I am writing to inform you that parking lot C will be closed for maintenance
Monday, September 30.
Concise: Parking lot C will be closed for maintenance Monday, September 30.
verbs words that describe actions, 2. Revise noun conversions. Each type of word has a different purpose. Verbs are
occurrences, orstates of being. "doing" words that convey act.ions, conditions, and stat.es o f being. Nouns name
nouns words that name people, people, places, things, and abstract concepts. When verbs are converted into nouns,
places, things, and abstract often with the addition of a -tion or -ment end ing, they lose th eir power and agency,
concepts. like an engine run ni ng on empty, and in tum require weak supporting verbs to
convey their actiorL~ fully. All the attention is then focused on the converted noun-
words such as establishment, approval, d1:cisio11- instead of on the p1imary action of
the senten ce, wh ich is hidden in the long noun phrase. As you review the chart below,
note how affected and formal noun conversion phra~es sound when compared with
the verbs from wh ich th ey a~e derived:
noun conversions or Noun conversions (or nominalizations, as they are sometimes known) may sound
nomlnallzatlons vetbs that impressive and can even slow d own the pace of your writing, hut they will also make
have been converted Into nouns
wtth the addition or -mentor
your writing weak and wordy, so it is best to avoid us ing them.
rlon ending~
Wordy: Can Pac undertook a revision of its full-year earnings forecast.
3. Eliminate redundancies. Redund<Ulcies are unplanned repetitions-word pairs that redundancies unplanned
express the same meaning twice. Avoid the following "douhled-up" expressions hy mpalltlons.
eliminating the italicized word:
4. Eliminate or revise empty words and phrases. Rid your sentences of imprecise,
inexact language. Clear away the deadwood-words that lack meaning-and trim
padded expressions.
Replace With
am of the opinion that believe
as a matter of fact actually (or nothing at all)
at a later date later
at t his point in ti me now, currently, at present
by an act of coincidence coincidentally
despite the fact that althe>ugh, though
d ue to the fact that becau se (of), since
during t he course of during, in
during t he t ime that when, while
for the purpose of to
for the reason that becau se, since
in addition to the above also
in light of the fact t hat becau se
in the amount of for
in the event t hat if
in the process of now, currently
in view of t he fact that becau se (of), since, as
in spite of t he fact that even t hough
it is probable that probably
it has been brought to our attention we have learned
I wish to call your attention to note, please note
make t he necessary inquiries look into, investigate
notwithstanding the fact t hat even t hough, although
t he point I am trying to make (noth ing)
t he question as to whether whet her
to all intents and purposes in effect, really
with the exception of except, except for
Articles such as the, a, and an are sometimes overapplied. Omit the hefore plural
nouns expressing generalizations.
Unnecessary Article: The human resources specia lists review the applications.
5. Use strong, precise, accurate verbs. Opt for clear, precise, instructive verbs rather
than extwded verb phrases.
Wordy: The learning centre placed an order for materials for the courses.
Eliminate the need for intensifiers and qualifiers-words such as really, e.-xtremely,
fncredihly, definitely, rather- by finding a verb that is an exact fit for the meaning you
wish to deliver.
Avoid poorly defined, ambiguous verbs whose meanings are open to interpretation.
Substitute strong verbs ror -.~ion and -tion words.
Replace weak verbs, such as have and he (am, is, an:, was, were) when they occur
alone, with strong ones.
Weak Verb: The CEO is of the opinion that the company will survive the current
crisis that has to do with dot-com instability.
Precise: The CEO believes the company will survive the current crisis caused by
dot-com instability.
Replace c:ould!would!should with strong verbs when you do not need to show that an
action is conditional.
Weak Verb: In her previous job, she would write to charitable foundations.
active voice awriting style In As much as possible, write in the active voice (as opposed to the passive voice; see
which the grammatical subject of a Chapte r 4), which is usually the most concise way to con vey an action.
sentence performs tlie acnon.
Passive Voice: The script of the speech should be edited and double-spaced.
passive voice awriting style In
which the grammatical subject of a Active Voice: Edit and double space the script of the speech.
sentence Isacted upon.
6. Revise prepositional phrases. Prepositions-common words such as in, to, at, of,
prepositional phrase a phrase
beginning With a preposition and after, with, between- combine \vith other words to rorm prepositional phrases.
functioning as a modifier. These modifying phrases show relationships in time and space, indicating how, when,
where, or how long something happens. The wordiness of some prepositional phrases
can make sentences sound awkward and overWTitten. The phrase can usually he
replaced with a single-word modifier.
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Wordy: An error in computation was discovered in the report from last spring.
Concise: A computational error was discovered in last s pring's report.
Prepositions are useful in breaking up long chains o f nouns used as adjectives. They
clarify relationships so readers can tell which nouns are modifiers and which nouns
are being modified.
growth management executive training - j growth management training for executives
petroleum diesel replacement fuel - j replacement fuel for petroleum diesel
climate change mitigation technologies - j technologies to mitigate climate change
7. Eliminate fillers. Avoid beginning sentences with empty filler words such as there isl
are and it is/was (when it has not been defined) that force readers to wait fo r the sub-
ject t.bat the entire sentence hinges on. Expletive constructions, as they are called, expletive construction a phrase
act as a comm on delaying tactic that makes sense only when extreme politeness or such as tl1ere is/ore or It /;/was at
the beginning of a clause, delaying
emp liasis is called for. Otherwise, delete the eirpletive and craft a straightforward sen-
the lntroductl on of lho subject.
tence that begins with the subject, followed closely by verb and object.
9. Combine s horter sentences, reduce clauses and phrases. Use pronouns (that,
which, who, as well as personal pronouns) to combine shorter related sentences and
eliminate monotonous repetition . Reduce sentences to clauses, clauses to phrases,
and phrases to single words.
Wordy: She is a sales representative. She specializes in commercial real estate.
Concise: She is a sales representative who specializes in commercial real estate.
(second sentence reduced to a clause)
Concise: She is a sales representative specializing in commercial real estate.
(second sen tence reduced to a phrase)
Concise: She is a commercial real estate sales specialist.
(second sen tence reduced to desc1iptive words)
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Tone
Read between the li nes of almost any husiness message and it is possihle t.o detect the writ-
er's frame of mind, inklings of demand or respect, arrogance or modesty, or indifference or
tone the Implied attitude of the concern. Thjs impression is a product o r tone. Tone refers to the mood of a message- the
author to the reader, as reflected by implied attitude of the writ.er to the suhject and readers. In the absence of vocal inflect.ion
word choice.
and visual cues such as body language, I.one in written communication creates an impres-
sion ba~ed purely on the words that are used and the length and structure or sentences the
writer happens to choose.
The tone of a message should support iL~ content and remain fairly consistent from
beginning to end. A wide range o r tone is possible in workplace communication, meaning
that a casual tone appropriate fm- an e-mail message to an associate will he unacceptable
in a fom1al report, which demands a more serious and professional tone. Ultimately, much
depends on the writing situation, purpose, and chmmel of communication . O nce you
have determined the tone you want to use, it should remain consistent throughout a docu-
ment, mainly hecai1se erratic, "Jekyll-and -Hyde" shifts in tone give mixed messages that
unsettle readers and leave them confused ahout your attitude and intentions. Make sure
the tone you establish supports your content and creates the right impression.
cheap/inexpensive/cost-effective/low priced/thrifty/economical
artificial/faux/synthetic/sham/fake/man-made/imitation/mock
flexible/changeable/fickle/adaptable/compliant/resilient
Implied meaning has the power lo shape percept.ions, which accounts for why a
"pre-owned velucle" may sound like a hett.er investment than a "used"' or "second-hand"
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car, even though the producl~ these terms label may he virtually the same. Tuning in to
the con notations of words can help you anticipate your readers reaction to the words you
choose. The right words may not just he the ones with the more accurate denotations hut
the ones with the most appropriate connotations.
0 single-word verbs and phrasal verbs (look into instead of investigate; throw out
instead of discard')
specifically at readers, this style sometimes seems biased or slanted, even when it is not.
Personal style is characterized by the following elements:
short sentences
personal pronouns
first names and personal references
active voice used throughout
Impersonal style a style of An impersonal style uses only th ird-person pronouns (he, she, it, one, they) . It soun ds
writing that seems objective and d etached yet objective, emphasizing facts and concepts rather than the writers perspec-
dNacllcd based on Its use of third
person pronouns.
tive. For th is reason, impersonal style is com mon ly used for announcements an d policy
statements. Warmth gives way to efficiency, but the result is not necessarlly stuffy or p re-
tentious. Impersonal style is characte rized hy the following elements:
Please let me know if you have any Employees should submit all inquiries to
questions. their supervisors.
BE POSITIVE
ls the glass half empty or half full? The answer to th is question separates the optimists
from the pessimists. Readers usually like to think o f their glasses as half full, wh ich means
they are more receptive to good news or neu tral news that is free of negativity. Although
you should neve r knowingly d istort facts or ideas just for the sake of put.ting a positive
spin on th em, it is worth remembering that positive wording makes messages reader-
friendly and lnviting. Unless you are issu ing a warni ng meant to stop or deter certaln
actions, it L~ useful to emphasize what the reader can do instead of what the read e r can't.
Negative attitud e: You cannot use Verified by Visa until you have been issued a
password.
Pos itive attitude: You may begin using Verified by Visa once you receive your
password.
Negative wording: You will never be sorry you purchased a three-year extended
warranty.
Positive wording: Your three-year extended warranty covers all parts and on-site
repairs.
Weigh the impact nf hlatan t o r h idden negatives such as wifortunately, allege, careless,
n:gret, mistake, oversight, overlook, negligence, neglect, unable, reject, deny, and fail (ure) before
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you use them. Used the wrong way, these can he harsh , innexihle words that antagonize
readers by painting them as adversari es or inferiors.
l&J By failing to park in your assigned space, you caused our visitors a terrible
inconvenience.
IZf Parking spaces adjacent to the entrance are reserved for visitors.
Rely on tl1e suhordinating power o f grammatical structures such as dependent clauses and
the passive voice (see Chapter 4) to reduce negativity and depersonalize un favourahle facts.
Less n egative: Although credit cannot be extended to you at this time, we look forward
to serving you on a cash basis.
A since re you-attitude L~ one that. doesn't ove ruse second-person pronouns to the
point where readers feel um:omfor1.able or man ipulated. Do not use the you-attitude
nega tively, as readers could feel singled out, criticized, or accused:
we-attitude a wrlt1n9 style Lhat A good way to involve readers is by using a compliance-boosting we-attitude- a com-
focuseson th<i shar<ld goalsand mon feature o f managerial comnrnnications -that hreaks down authority aT.ld u nit.es
values of the writer and reJder(s).
writer and reader in common "we're-all-in-th is-together" values, goals, and initiat.i.ves.
3. Emphasize benefits to readers. Put yourself in your readers' place. Appeal lo readers
and their interests hy indicating what they stand to galn. This may he all the lncen-
tive or motivation neces..<;ary t.o encourage a favourable, act.ion-ori en ted response. Thi.s
technique is especially well suited to service-oriented messages.
BE POLITE
A little common courtesy can make readers feel uncommonly good . Politeness creates a
humane environ ment of mutual respect and consideration where work gets don e more
easily. Rudeness, pushiness, sarcasm, and abruptness -whether actual or perceived- can
alienate reade rs. Being courteous involves more than just adding a simple please or thank
you to brief or routine messages: courtesy is a mindset with zero tolerance for sarcasm ,
cond escension, presumptuousness, or anger. Emotional language can provoke h ostile
reactions, so avoid ph rases of demand or advisement that he little or talk down to readers.
Rude: Obviously, if you had the slightest idea of our policies you would have known
that unless you want to be fired, you should never use company-issued
cellphones for personal calls.
Polite: Please reserve your company-issued cellphone for business calls so that
customers and associates may contact you without delay.
Extreme politeness, on th e other hand, can be mistaken for coldness or insinceri ty. It
can also undennine your assertiveness or authority. especially if you suppress or censor
what you need t.o say for fear o f s oun ding impolite. Do your hest to st.rive for a courteous
tone that sounds natural, friendly, and unforced.
Too Polite: Kindly be advised that, if even the smallest question arises, we will be only
too happy to help.
preb>L1ancy and childbirth), sexual orientation, religion, race, colour, national or ethnic
origin , marital stat.us, family status, physical o r mt:nt.al disability (including past/present
alcoh ol dependence) , and pardoned criminal conviction. Discriminatory and gender-
biased language, even when it is unintentional, demeans and offends readers, leaving them
hurt and unreceptive. Such language is actionable, open.ing the way for harassment suits
and legal proceedings. Using inclusive, b ias-free language that treats all groups equaUy
and fairly shows sensitivity, consideration , and respect, all of wh i.ch build goodwill and
better business relations.
1. Don't make d iscrimin atory cmmnen ts. Avoid prohibited references when writing
about groups and individuals. Such infom1ation , even when it is offered in a positive
spirit, is irrelevant and can contribute to negative ste reotypes.
IEI Hassan, who fasts throughout the day during this month's observance of
Ramadan, will nevertheless be available to answer your questions.
IEI Please contact Piotr, who has a nice Polish accent but speaks English well.
2. Use only gender-neu tral j ob titles and s alutations. Substitute correct and neutral
job titles-ones that do not suggest that only men or only women can h old a particu-
lar job- for traditional, gender-specific ones:
Gander-Biased Gander-Neutral
salesman salesperson, sales representative
spokesman spokesperson, company representative
businessman business person
chairman chair, chairperson
workman worker
man-hours working hours
female manager, male nurse manager, nurse
man and wife husband ancll wife, spouses
deliveryman courier
Sexist salutations such as Dt:ar Sirs and Gentlemen are like\vise considered outdated salutation a greeting at the
because they exclude a female audience. Revise any sentences containing sexist terms boglnnlng ora letter (e.g., "Dear
Ms.Giii").
and automatic gender assumptions about jobs:
3 . Use Masculin e Pron ouns Rea sonably. Avoid using masculine pronouns (ht:, his, him,
himself) to refer to groups or individuals of un known gender. The old grammatical
rule of "common gender"- with its blanket use of mascuHne pronouns to refer to
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men as well a~ women- no longer applies and now comes across a~ sexist. Consider
the exclusionary nature of the followi ng sentence, in which all executives are assumed
to he male: Each exerutive has his own parking space. There are several ways to make
your writing gender-neutral when it comes to pronoun use:
0 Replace the offending pronoun with an indefinite article (a, an): Every
executive has a parking space.
0 Recast the sentenc11, making the singular pronoun plural: A// executives have
their own parking spaces.
0 Use both masculine and feminine pronouns when t hey do not recur
throughout the sentence: Every executive has his or her own parking space. Multiple
pronoun pairs can be awkward and impractical when revised this way.
0 Choose plural pronouns: They and their are non-standard replacements for
he and his-common in spoken English and increasingly acceptable in written
English but still not necessarily the best choice, especially in formal documents:
Every lawyer has their own parking space.
0 Two courses in risk management for my recently completed MBA degree will
allow me to contribute to your mutual funds division.
Use helping verhs of qualification, such as seems, amid, might, and may, only when
you need to express conjecture, doubt, or uncertainty.
2. Don't make unnecessary apologies. Apologies weaken your perceived authority,
especially if you find yourself apologizing for routine requests you must make to do
your job effectively Understand when apologies are needed (i.e., when something has
gone wrong) and when they are not.
l&J I am so sorry to have to ask you to confirm the time and location of our n ext
meeting.
3. Use strong, assertive phrasing rather than "weasel words."' Deferential and well-
intentioned phrases such as I hope and l tru.~t can sometimes sound weak and tenta-
tive. With overuse, phrases such as perhaps if you have time, maybe if it's not too much
trollble, if you could possibly, or l find it probable that can slowly drain the power and
a~sertiveness from your writing. Other hedging words to watch ror and use selectively
include tend, in some ways, perhaps, seems, seemingly, possibly.
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5. GuaTd against overconfidence. Too much confidence can make you sound egotis-
tical. Try not to cross I.he line between firmness and blatant arrogance. Remember that
boasting not only affecL~ credibility but also lllms readers off.
Boastful: You will undoubtedly agree that my marketing genius makes me more
t han qualified for the job.
D Select the right level of formality. Decide how formal or personal you want to be and
choose words in the right register for your reader.
D Be positive. Use constructive language and avoid dwelling on negatives.
D Stress reader benefits and relevance. Cultivate a sincere you-attitude and interpret
facts and information to appeal to the reader's point of view.
D Be polite. Show courtesy and consideration.
D Use inclusive language. Don't discriminate. Use only bias-free terms.
D Write with c;onfidence. Be firm and decisive but never arrogant.
D Use plain, precise, and current language to make your message clear and meaningful
to your reader.
D Be ethical and purposeful in your choice of words to reflec t good public relations for
your company and good human relations with colleagues.
D Be brief and use as few words as possible to express your thoughts and pass on
information.
D Use a personal or impersonal style that's appropriate to the type of message you write.
D Make your messages constructive, relevant, reader-focused, and inclusive.
D Adopt a tone that's conversational, confident, and courteous.
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Tuning into Word Choice and Tone. ln each of the following i. Please let head o ffice kn ow o r your travel
exercises, compare the sentence options and id entify the plans in advan ce so that suitable arrange
factors that make one sentence preferable to the other(s). ments can he made ror you.
a) Which style is more readable? ii. H you fall to notify head office of your travel
i. When new safety measures for plan t employ plans, you will cause terrible inconvenience
ees go into effect March 1, machine operators for all concerned.
v,..;ll he required to wear protective goggles at ) Which writing style L~ more likely to win over a
all times in the assembly facility. potential customer?
ii. The March 1 effectuation o r amended plant i. We are proud to be opening our new loca-
em ployee safety measures institutes a require tion, with the largest square footage or any of
ment applicable to all machine operators who our five stores.
v...;ll he expected to wear protective eyewear ii. Come celebrate the opening o r our n ew loca-
devices whether or not they are engaged in tion in Ilonaven ture Mall and enjoy tax- free
mach ine operation in the assembly facili ty. shopping on Friday, October 18.
b) Which wri ting style is more decipherable? iii. You are invited to our convenient new loca
i. A prestigious con sulti ng firm reach ed the tion in Bonaventure Mall
conclusion that a specially formed committee f) Which wTiting style is more likely to attract the
should un dertake an investigation o f corpor favourable at.t.ention of an HR job specialist?
ate asset mismanagement. i. No twithstanding my lack o f an y fu ll -time
ii. A prestigious consulting fim1 concluded that work experi ence and the fact that I am still
a special committee should investigate th e trying to get my college diploma, l probably
m ismanagement of corporate assets. could he the "dynamic and progressive intli-
c) which senten ce co nveys its info rm ation more vidi1al" for which your company advertised.
positively? ii. With five years o f part- time work experience
i. Our systems will be down until 4:00 p .m. today. ln a related field and a soon -to-he-completed
ii. Our systems will he operational as of 4:00 p .m . dip loma in logistics managemen t, 1 woi1ld
today. like to be considered for th e pos ition of
d) Which sentence makes a better impression on inventory specialist offered by your company.
the reader? How would you describe the tone in
each case?
Recognize the Need for Plain, PrecL~e, and Current a) It is incumbent on our organization to pursue
Language radical debt reduction th rough the implementa
1. Using Familiar Words. "Translate" the following sen - tion o f a corporate asset divestment program.
tences by replacing long, imfamlliar words, jargon , b) Please acquaint yourse lf \vit.h the plans for th e
and noun ph rases with plai n English equivalents. optimization o r plant- level infom1ation systems.
c) ln lieu o f a full refund , might we suggest a
Sample: Please ascertain labour costs pertaining to
suitable qu id pro quo or a complimentary pro
the Corbin project.
hono service.
Revision: Please estimate labour costs for the Corbin
project.
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d) By rormulating a timeline, we will facilitate noun phrases, long lead-ins, expletive constructions,
production and accomplish our goals more prepositional phrases, and relative clauses.
expeditiously.
Sample: The company undertook action that
e) We provide assistance consistent with yom
was decisive despite the fact that the
requiremen ts.
resources it had were limited.
2. Using Fresh and Current Language: Eliminating
Revision: The company acted decisively despite its
Slang and Clich9s. Revise the following sen tences hy
limited resources.
replacing slang and updating old-fashioned business
expressions. a) It was a clerk from accounting who located the
spreadsheets that had been missing.
Sample: Here's the 411 coming down the pike on
b) This is to fully apprise you o r the fact that there
our latest corporate meltdown: everyone's
are only six more work ing days in which to
gonna be sacked unless the top guns
submit your claim for reimbursement fo r travel
upstairs pony up and come up with some
expenses ror 2011.
megabucks.
c) By and large, it is our assumption that share prices
Revis inn: The workforce will be downsized unless
have been sagging due to the fact that there is hy
management secures new funding.
all accounts weakness in this particular sector.
a) Don't knock the head honcho: he may not have d) In response t.o your letter of August 16 that was
deep pockets hut he never blows his cool. received Aub'llSt 18, we cannot act in accordance
b) Hey, office dudes and fellow paper pushers, check \vith your exp ress wishes in making a refund due
out this most excellent report. to the fact that the warran ty of the product you
c) Please rest assured that if we tigh t.en our belts purchaed from us has expired.
and stay true to fom1, we should see a change fm e) For each and every customer who is dis..>atisfied,
the better. there isn't only a sale that is lost, there is a life-
d) As per your request and for your perusal, please time value of that customer that is lost as well.
find enclosed our newest home ownership saving S. Achieving Conciseness by Eliminating Noun
plan brochure. Conversions. Revise noun conversions and imprecise
e) FYl: a directorship is up for grabs but apparen tly verbs in the follO\ving sen tences.
the joh pays peanuts.
Sample: The budget chief endeavoured to make
3. Using Specific and Functional Language. Revise the
an elimination of expenditures that were
following sentences hy replacing vague words and
unnecessary.
ahstrnct nouns wi th purposeful, concrete details.
Revision: The budget chief tried to eliminate
Sample: Please contact me sometime soon. unnecessary expenditures.
Revision: Please phone me tomorrow.
a) A senior engineer wi ll make an assessment of the
a) Past perfom1ance reviews show that Vanessa is a safety requirements and , if necessary, make chan
good employee. ges to them.
b) Five of our cu rrent top salespeople are young. b) Our claims specialists are responsible for giving
c) Our real-est.ate b rokerage firm has low commL~ assessmen ts o f coverage, liability, an.cl damages.
sion rates. c) We gave consideration to how the company
d) A majority of shareholders think a hostile take would he affected before we made the decL~ion
over hid will affect share prices substan tially. to undergo conversion to clicks -and -mortar
e) Our high-speed Internet service is really fast. retailing.
d) The marketing team saw to the finalization of the
Ide:ntify Strategies for Concise Messaging branding agreement.
4. Achieving Conciseness by Eliminating Clutter. Edit e) Many analysts have a preference for a layered
and revise the following sentences by elim inating approach to security.
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Revision: For only S175 (per person), you can enjoy Sample: John is the best handicapped IT specialist
a night's accommodation at our deluxe we've ever had.
resort, a full spa treatment, and dinner at Revision: John is one of the best IT specialists we've
our award-winning restaurant. ever had.
a) I will allow you to take your vacation duri ng the a) Although shes just a young thing. harely out of
Last two wee ks of August. business school, Jessica has shown considerahle
b) We are currently seeking individuals to he part of leadership and acumen in her eight months as a
our highly focused and dedicated team. junior analyst.
c) We are pleased to announce a new rewards program b) The suspension of mandatory retirement means
that guarantees d iscoun ts on future purchases. that old folks can stay in their johs as long as
d) I am enclosing Forni C52, which must he com- they like.
pleted hefore we can reimhurse you ror your edu- c) Jennifer suffers rrom houts of clinical depression,
cational expenses. hut her mood never seems to adversely affect her
e) Because we won't assume responsihility for per- joh performance.
sonal injuries that occur on our premises, we ask d) All executives and their wives are in vited to our
that you refrain from using the fron t lohhy while ann ual Ch ristmas party. Every exeL1J1tive will have
lt undergoes renovation. his choice o r seating arrangement.
12. B111ing Polit. Revise the following sentences to reduce ) Alt.h ough Mei Lin came to Canada from China
their harsh ness and hostility and improve courtesy. only a few years ago. she is an ahle s11okesman for
the agency.
Sam ple: You had better get moving on that draft
proposal.
Develop a Conversational and Confident Tone
Revision: Please begin work on the draft proposal as
14. Writing with Confidence. Revise the following senten-
soon as possible.
ces to elimi nate any douhtful tone and tentativeness.
a) U you honestly expect me to meet the Novemhei-
Sampl e: I'm sorry to have to ask you when we
21 deadline, I need the latest sales figures and l
might receive our new software.
need them now, so hand them over!
Revision: Please tell us the delivery date of our new
b) If you had heen paying attention, yo u wo ul d
software.
undoubtedly have known that without excep-
tion all requests for temporary personnel must he a) Perhaps you could send me the latest figures
made through the h uman resources departmen t. sometime, that is, H it's not too much trouhle
c) We have far hetter things to do here at Apex for you.
Ind us tries than speak with customers who could b) Although l don't have m uch related work
easily find the same inform ation on our wehsil.e. experience, I'm attempting to complete an MBA
d) Have the decency to let me know how the meet- degree.
ing went. c) I hope you won't find rault with my investigation.
e) Since you're the team leade r, motivating team d) Apparently. the missing laptop you asked ahout
members is your prohlem, not mine. doesn't seem to he on our premises.
13. Using lnclusiv Languag. RevL~e the following sen.- ) In some ways, decentralization is possihly the
tences so that they are hias-free, gender-neutral, and best thing we have ever tried to do.
non-cl iscrimi natory.
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L ONLINE ACTIVITIES
Rrcog11lz;e tl1e Need for Plain, Precise, and 6 . Avoiding Clich's in Writing. Visit the University of
Current Language Richmond\; Wri1ing Cent.er web page and rework the
1. Writing in Plain Style. Visit 1he resources page of 1.he exercises two paragraphs to elimi nate trite, overused,
Plain Language Associa1.ion lnterna1ional website and tired expressions. Compare your revision with
and dick on "Business." Read the original excerpLS those of several of your classmates.
from an insurance company form le11er and travel http://writing2.richmond .edu/writinFfW\veh/
agent correspondence. Without peeking al the sug- cliche.htm l
gesu:d revisions, rewrite each message in plam style.
Afterward, cross-check your revisions with those pro- ldentif> Strategies Jot Concise Writing
vided by the site. 7. Writing Concise Sentences. Visit Purdue University\;
www.plainlanguagenetwork. org/Examples/ Online Writing Lah a nd examine the "Eliminating
samples.htm l Words" examples. Revise each "wordy" sentence or
2. Learning about Plain Style. Select 1.h ree exampies from phrase, then co mpare your revision with the "con-
I he Plain la11!-,'1.13ge website and make a lis1 or tips fo r cise" version on the web page. 13ring your revisions
writing in this style. Share the list wi lh your class. to class and compare and discuss them with 01.her
www.plainlanguage.gov/exam ples/in dex.cfm members of you r group.
3. Identifying GrHk and Latin Roots. Visu the follow- h ttp://owl.english.purdue.ed u/owVresource/
ing site, which includes a printable RooLS Dictionary, 572/02
and complete the six-section quiz and muhiple-
cho1ce review. Create Con..stt uctivc, Inclusive, Reader-Oriented
hup J/english.glendale.cc.ca.us/ro ots.html Messages
4. Revising Abbreviations for Readability. Visit 8. Recognizing Word Connotations. Go to Thesaurus.
lleuer-English.com and comple te the in terac tive com and enter three of the following words: ambi-
abbreviation exercises by co rrectly iden1ify1ng t.he tious, intelligent, carel ess, advanced, aggrcssiv1.
ablm:vii11.ion in each case. Jn a small group, discuss Compare the sy nonyms and, in groups or three o r
how recognizable each abbreviatio n is and consider four, discuss their con notations and suitahili1 y ror
iLS sui1ahility for professional communication. business messages.
www.hetter-english.com/voca hulary/ http://thesauru~. re ference.com
1. Recognize the bulldlng blocks and the basic 7. Distinguish between active and passive
types of sentences. voice.
2. Improve sentence variety by matching 8. Eliminate sentence errors that Impair clarity
sentence style and length to purpose. and unity: sentence fragments, run-on
sentences, misplaced and dangling modifiers,
3. Phrase basic types of questions effectively.
mixed constructions.
4. Improve sentence clarity.
9. Develop logical, coherent, and focused
5. Use parallelism to write with consistency paragraphs.
and Impact.
1o. Apply strategies for proofreading different
6. Emphasize Important facts and Ideas; kinds of messages.
minimize less Important ones.
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FOR USERS OF TWITTER and other social media sites, a mistake such as misplaced punc-
tuation Is usually not much cause for concern. In the high-stakes world of business, how-
ever, seemingly minor writing errors can cause serious misunderstanding and be extremely
costly. The case of the million-dollar comma Is one example. The story first grabbed head-
lines In 2006, when telecommu111lcatlons leaders Rogers and Bell Allant clashed over the
meaning of a sing le sentence In a 14-page contract. Rogers believed that It had an Ironclad
five-year deal to rent utility poles in New Brunswick, with an option to extend the agreement
another five years. However, Bell Allant raised Its rates and attempted to cancel the agree-
ment a year early. The placement of a comma In a crucial clause of the contract allowed Bell
Allant to justify Its actions. Rogers protested, saying that It would never have slg ned such
an agreement. The Canadian Radio-television and Telecommunications Commission (CRTC)
settled the dispute by referring to the French version of the agreement, which stated that
the contract could not be terminated early.'
As this case shows, correct grammar Is important In business communications. Kyle
Wiens, CEO of IFlxlt and founder of Dozukl, gives such weight to grammar that he tests
every prospective employee. He believes that those who are mindful of grammar tend to be
equally thorough about everything else they do:
Applicants who don't think writing is important are likely to think lots of other important
things also aren't important. And I guarantee if other companies aren't issuing grammar
tests, they pay attention to sloppy mistakes on resumes. After all, sloppy is as sloppy does.
That's why I test people who walk in the door looking for ajob. Grammar ismy litmus test.
All applicants say they're detailed-oriented. I just make my employees prove it.2
One way to demonstrate your writing abilities and other professional skills is to master
sentence structure. Clear, error-free, and context-specific sentences and coherent para-
graphs accelerate the exchange of Information and win kudos from readers who know you
by your precision and the ease of communication.
Effective Sentences
Your ahllity to exp ress your thoughts de pend_~ largely on how well you can c:rafL sen-
tences and use their huilding hlocks t.o your advantage. While there isn't exactly a for-
mula to sentence construction in a scienti fic sense, there is a simple logic to it. The next
sections explore the ph rase, clause, and sentence types that give you the versatllity to
write effectively:
After negotiations, the company offered a new bonus plan to its employees. By
contacting our customer service representative, you may learn more about
this program.
A clause is a group of words containing a subject and a verb. There are two types: clause a group of related words
containing a subject and a
1. Independent clauses are grammatically complete and can stand on their mvn as complete verb; aclause can be
sen tences: either Independent (delivers full
meaning) or dependent (does not
The program cost more than we expected. dcllvor full moaning).
2. Dependent clauses are grammatically incomplete and reliant on independent clauses Independent clause a clause
that functions on Its own as an
for their meaning. Dependent clauses bebrin in one of two ways: with a dependent
Independent grammatical unit.
marker (a word such as if, as, because, since, or alth<1ugh) or with a relative pronoun
(that, which, or who) Any combination of subject and verb loses its grammatical com- de~ndent clause (or
subordinate clause) aclause that
pleteness with the addition of one of these simple words.
cannot function on Its own as an
Although the program cost more than we expected, it has improved company morale. Independent grammatical unit.
The program, which cost more than we expected, has improved company morale.
Clauses and phrases are the building blocks of sentences. Therefore, make sure
that you combine and punctuate them carefully.
TYPES OF SENTENCES
A sentence is not just a group of words hut a method for full and accurate communication.
To be complete and effective, a sentence must have two things: a suhject and a complete
verh, which carry the core of your meaning. For a group of words to qualify as a sentence,
these elements must make sen..~e together and express a complete thought.
The way ideas are linked affects your reader's un.dersl.anding of the relationship
between and among those ideas and their relative importance. There are four types of sen-
tences, each with its own distincl.ive quality and purpose .
Silwple sentences are straightforward and emphatic. The short.er I.hey are, I.he more simple sentence a sentence
emphasis they have, although simple sentences may have up to twenty words. There are containing one main or
Independent clause.
two pot.emial drawbacks. Wi.thout t.he connecting words typical of other sentence types, a
simple sentence may not fully show relationships among ideas. A string of simple senten
ces can he flat and monotonous:
Tax season is approaching. I would like to update you on1some details.These details relate
to allowable deductions.
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compound sentence a
Compound sentences join related sentences with coordinate conjunctions such as
sentence containing two or more for, and, nor, hut, or, yet, and so. Compound sentences stress the equivalence or equal
lndepcndont clausos joined by ona value of the ideas they express. It is important to use I.h is connecting tech nique- known
or more coordinating conjul\Cllons.
as coordination- only for related sentences. Over-coordinated sentences skew lobric and
lack un ity:
As related clauses: I look forward to our next appointment, when you may
choose from a number of investment options.
complex sentence a sentence Complex and compound-complex sentences are hest at showing the relative
containing one Independent clause importance of ideas and encompassing details. Any o f the following suhordinate markers
and one dependent clause.
lessen the grammatical value of th e word groupings they're added to:
compound-complex sentence
a sentence containing one although even if though
dependent clause and two as even though unless
or more Independent clauses. as if if until
as soon as ifonly when
because in spite of where
before rather than whereas
despite since whether
even that while
Keep in mind that the longeT your sen tences are and th e more clai1ses they have, the
harder it is to find the subjects and verbs essential for delivering meaning. Sen tences with
more than th ree clauses can be difficult and confusing to read.
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Make sure every sentence you write passes the "completeness test.
D Is there a verb 7
D Does the verb have a subject?
D Do the subject and verb make sense together and express a complete thought?
0 If the sentence contains subordinating words-relative pronouns (that, which, wha) or
subordinate markers-does the sentence also contain an independent clause?
If the answer to every question is yes, the sentence is comp lete.
Please complete and return the enclosed survey [short sentence). Your answers to our
questions will help us review our current practices so that we may provide the highest
standard of customer service [l ong sen tence) . By completing the entire survey,
you will also receive a 25 per cent discount coupon that you can apply to your next
purchase from Software Plus [long sentence).
Senten ces of ten or fewer words have the greatest impact and readability; how
ever, sentences o f up to twenty words also have a high rate o r reader compreh en-
sion. Beyond that point, readers' ability to easily brrasp a sentence's meaning falls oIT
sharply. Your word-processing software will usually flag sent.ences that are too long to
he comprehensible.
2. Turn a clause into a prepositional phrase. A prepositional phrase is a group of prepositional phrase a phrase
words beginning with a preposition (a word such as with, at, 111, of, by, against, toward, beginning wtth a preposition that
sets out a relatlonshlp In time
from, above, 011, or in that relates a noun or pronoun to another word in the sentence). or space.
Another way to convert two or more sentences lnto one is to use a sen tence
huild er known as a relative dause (a clause heglnning with that, which, or who). The
new clause, which replaces an entire sentence, acts like an adjective hy adding infor-
mation to deflne or descrihe a particular word or group or words.
Sentence with relative clause: The plan, which has thasupport of upper-level
management, will include extended health benefits.
closed question a question 1. Closed questions can be answered with a simple yes or no or, when you are fact-
with a limited number of possible checking or seeking verification, one or two words. Closed questions follow inverted
responses.
word order and do not featme question-fom1ing words such as why, what, and how.
open question a question with 2. Open qnestions call for a fuller, more thoughtful response than Ls possihle with just a
an unlimited number of possible single word.
responses.
How can we reduce production costs?
3 . Hypothetical questions ask readers to suppose that circumst.ances are different from hypothetlca I question a
what they actually are. These "what iP' scenarios are useful for brains torming and con question that poses a supposition.
tingency planning.
If you were given creative control of this project, what would you do7
A well -phrased question wi.11 elicit a useful response without putting read ers on the
defensive o r causing confusion.
1. Avoid broad references u sing this , that, and it. W hen you use this, that, and it hy
themselves, make sure th e reader fully understands what the pron ou n renames and
repl aces. Check that the pronoun reference isn 't amhibruous (i.e., that the p ronoun pronoun reference the
doesn't refer t.o more than one thing). If necessary, repeat the noun aft.er the pronoun relationship between a pronoun
and the antecedent to which
that renames it. It refers.
Vague pronoun reference: She helped to negotiate the recent settlement and this
makes her a n asset to the organization. [This can refer
to hoth the negotiations and the settlemen t.I
Clear pronoun refe rence: She helped to negotiate the recent settlement, and this
experience makes her an asset to the organization.
(See also Appendix 13, imder the heading "Using Pronouns wi.t.h Precision.")
3. limiil multiple negatives. Multiple negatives are sometimes used for rhetorical effect
or as euphemisms (bland terms suhstitu t.ed for blun t ones), hut the range of meaning
a multiple negative may have sometimes results in con fusion.
Unclear: He was not unhappy about not failing to meet the criteria.
number a term that refers to 1. Number. Don't switch rTOm si%'11lar t.O plural when referring to a particular thing.
whether aword Is singular (one) or
plural (more than one). Women have made considerable strides in their lnot h er) chosen fields.
person a term that describes 2. Person. Don't shift I.he frame of reference from first person l to second person you or
who or what Is performing or
third person he!.1he!one.
cxpcrtcnclng an actlon In terms of
the noun or pronoun that Is used: Before you apply for a permit, you In ot one) must show proof of Canadian citizenship
nrst pm on (/, we), second Jl<lrson
(you), and third person (he, she,
or landed immigrant status.
It, they).
3. Verb tense. Show time changes on ly when logic requires them.
verb tense the form of averb
that shows time (past, presen~
When the CEO entered the auditorium, the crowd applauded Inot applaud:s) wildly.
or future).
4. Voice. Don't sh ift unnecessalfily from active to passive voice.
Financial analysts expect continued growth in the third quarter but anticipate
w11akness in the tourism sedor In ot weakness in the touris m sector
is anticipated ).
Unbalanced: Britannia Capital's chief analyst proposes three strategies for debt servicing:
slowing spending, issuing equity to pay down debt, and to sell assets.
Parallel: Britannia Capital's chief analyst proposes three strategies for debt
servicing: slowing capital spending, issuing equity to pay down debt,
and selling assets. lparallel construction matches -ing nouns)
Un balanced: Our priorities are to improve employee morale, reduce absenteeism, and
enc;ouraging professional development.
Parallel: Our priorities are to improve employee morale, reduce absenteeism, and
enc;ourage professional development. lparallel construction matches
verb infinitives)
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Unbalanced: To qualify for funding you must submit an application and three letters
of refenmce must also b11 provid11d. [sentence switches from active to
passive voice]
Parallel: To qualify for funding you must submit an application and provide
thr1111 l11tt11rs of r11f11renc11. [active voice is matched with active voice]
underlining
boldface
italks
modified font sizes
All CAPS
I text hoxes I
colour
Use dashes-the most emphatic of all punctuation marks- in place of commas and
paren theses whm introduci ng or enclosing facts that demand special attention. Another
way to make important details
Among the countless apps
stand o ut is to format them in available on the IPhone or IPad
horizontal. or vertical lists. These are ones designed for writing
mechanical devices are effect and editing documents. Apps
ive as lo ng as they are used in such as Doc2, Tiny Editor,
moderation. lf it is overused, the and Pages allow you to
customize fonts and colours;
device can he distracting. A mes-
use boldface, Italics, and
sage typed in all caps, for example, undertlnlng; and Insert Images,
is hard to read and "shouts" its tables, and text boxes.
infom1ation. (This heavy-handed Source: Mikdam/Dfeam.st:imt.coml
Thlnkstod<
practice is actuall y kn own as
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shouting th<! larg<!ly unacceptable s houting.) ln addition, ton many holded letters, italics, and rollt sizes and styles can make
practice of typing an <'!ntlm a se rious documt:nt look crude a11d amateurish, much like a cut-and-paste ransom note.
massage In upparcaso latters.
Add Emphasis through Style
Style adaptations for emphasis require more planning but are generally worth the extra
effort in terms of their impact on readers. Techniques ror creatillg emphasL~ through style
involve three bask principles:
placement
sentence length and structure
word choice
Here is a closer look at techniques that give power t.o your wTi ting 1.h rough emphasis:
1. For maximum impact, put important facts first or last. The most emphatic, "high-
wattage" placements are first and last in a sentence. Avoid creating an "information
sandwi ch" that embeds crucial facts and details in the middle of a sentence: or para
graph where surrounding words may cloud or lessen their impact.
Unemphatic: A new deadline of March 18 has been set for all funding
applications.
Unemphatic: No one can deny that the bear market has had a substantial impact
on pension funds. [No one can deny is an empty phrase given
emphatic initial placement. The most import.ant idea, the bear
market has had a substantial impact, is slotted in the middle
where it is less noticeable.]
Emphatic: Undeniably, the bear market's impact on pension funds has been
substantial.
Generally, placing the subject word at the beginning establishes a focus for the
remainder of the sentence. Changing the subject allows you to change the int.ended
emphasis of a sentence.
Focus on ~-urvey: The survey indicated that most employees support the
adoption of staggered work hours.
2. Use short, simple sentences to spotlight key ideas. The fewer words I.here are in a
sentence, the more impact each o r its words has. A short, uncluttered sentence, con-
sisting of a single independent clause, rewards readers instantly with information.
Readers also like sirnp le sentences because the "start-with-the-subject" word
order allows information to accumulate in a way that mimics human thought pro
cesses. A short sentence after seve ral long ones has even greater impact because it
breaks the pattern and adds an element o f surprise.
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Short and emphatic: The on-site fitness centre opens next Wednesday.
l ong and unemphatic: The on-site fitness centre opens next Wednesday, at which
time all e mployees will be invited to try out top quality
equipment that includes exercise bikes and rowing machines.
3. Use tags and labels to Oag important ideas. Simple word -markers such as most
importcmt(ly), most of all , ctbove all, particularly, o r crucially alert reade rs t.o an idea's
significance.
4. Present important ideas in list form. As previously mentioned, horizontal and verti-
cal lists give extra emphasis th rough their distinct formatting. Horizontal lisL~ that num-
ber i terns within a sentence are less emphatic than ve~t.ical lists that. tahulat.e it.ems.
The newly created Employee Integrity Website has Iinks to several vital resources:
Haskell Networks Employee Code of Conduct
professional development semi nar information
citation guides
5. Use precise and specific words to identify the main point. Avoid generalization
and obfuscation. If something is good, descrihe the way in which it is good. Specifics
are more involving b ecause they sh ow rather than tell.
6. Repeat key words in a series for rhe torical effect. Advertisers and marketing spe-
cialists sometimes rely on repetition t.o persuade customers of the value o f a product,
concept, or service. Because thi_~ technique can easily induce boredom instead of
acceptance, it does not necessarily work well in other, more subtle forms of writing:
Look how far we've come. We were the first Canadian company to receive the Gold
Award from the International Customer Service Association. We were among the first in
the world to introduce service breakthroughs like voice dialling, Internet access from your
cellphone, and 1Xtechnology. We simplified the prepaid world by making cellphone
minutes available at bank machines, and we simplified the banking world by facilitating
cellphone transactions. We're working hard to continue to earn your business.
Bad news emphasized: Although the q uality of the applications has never been
higher, the number of applications is down .
Good news emphas ized: Although the number of applications is down, the
quality of the applications has never been higher.
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1. To state good and neutral news clearly and directly. Ily comparL~on , the passive
voice can result in awkward, convolmed constructions.
Active: John completed his expense report before the April 1 deadline.
Passive: John's expense report was completed by John before the April 1 deadline.
2. To emphasize the doer of an action. The active voice tells the reader in no uncertain
terms where actions originat-e and who is responsible for them.
The passive voice is less vigorous and fo rthright. To some readers, it sounds nat,
weak, and evasive because it is not always clear who or what perrom1s the action of
the sen tence, only that t.he action is done to the suhj ect. Passive constructions invert
the order of the active voice: The changes [RECEIVER] wm: approved [ACTION] by the
4 I BUSINESS STY LE: SE NTE NCES AND PARA GR APH S
~-upervisor [ACTOR). Emphasis falls on the action itself, not on who o r what pe rforms
it. look for three common elements t.o check for passive constructions:
the verb TO BE (am, is, are, was, were, be, bflfln) +past participle + by . . .
The term institutional passive refers to the practice of concealing the performer
of an action (by omitting the word or words afte r by). Use the passive voice in the
following situations:
3. To sl10w tact and sensitivity. The passive voice is one of many "politeness strategies"
in husiness writing. Its natural "weakness" is an alternative to the bluntness of the
active voice and allows you to pass on lnfom1at.ion without. allocating hlame, finding
fault, or making readers feel needlessly singled out.
Active: You must return all materials to the resource centre.
Passive: All materials must be returned to the resource centre.
The passive voice in this case allows you to emph asize the study rather than who
authored it.
5. To maintain consistency nr avoid awkward s hHts in focus. Stick with the passive
voice if a shift to the active voice results in awkward11ess.
Active: When the new shipment arrived, the sales associates unpacked it.
Passive: When the new shipment arrived, it was unpacked by the sales associates.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
Run-on: Most companies reported moderate growth this year some anticipate
similar growth next year.
Revision: Most companies reported moderate growth this year, and some
anticipate similar growth next year.
Revision: Most companies reported moderate growth this year. Some anticipate
similar growth next year.
3. Comma splices. In a comma splice, ind ependent clauses are st.rung together with comma splice the error of
nothing more than a comma to separate them. To eliminate the splice, add a conjunc connecting two Independent
clauses with a comma.
tion or change the comma to a period or sem icolon.
4. Misplaced modifiers. A modifier is a word or word group that d escribes another modifier a word or group of
word or words. Modifiers that end up where they do not belong can he unintention words that describes or gives more
Information about another word In
ally funny and make your meaning ambiguous. To eliminate the misp laced modifier a sentence.
and its poten tial for embarrassmen t, position modifiers as close as possible to the
word or words they describe. Do this hy asking yourself what goes with what. misplaced modifier an
Incorrectly placed descriptive word
Misplaced modifier: The changes in personnel taking place recently affected or phrase that anachcs Its meaning
Illogically to another word In
productivity. [Jn this case, recently could refer to the changes a sentence.
in personnel or when those changes affected productivity.]
Revis ion: Recent personnel changes affected productivity.
Revision: Changes in personnel recently affected productivity.
Dangling phrase: Sent by overnight courier, you will receive your package by 9:00
a.m. the next day. [This sentence says you arr sent by overnight
c:ourier.)
Revision: Sent by overnight courier, your package will arrive by 9:00 a.m.
the next day.
Dangling phrase: To qualify for our points program, your mother's maiden name
must be provided. [Th is sentence says your mother's maiden
name will qualify for the program. ]
Revision: To qualify for our points program, you must provide your
mother's maiden name.
elliptical construction a 6. Elliptical constructions. Ellip~is means "omission." An elliptical construction leaves
sentence structure that deliberately out words that have already appeared in a sen tence hecause their meaning is inferred
omits words that can be Inferred
from the context. from the context: Private-sector administrators t:amed on average $80,000 a year, their
public-sector counterparts significantly less. Don't automatically assume that a word
appearing elsewhere in the sentence wi ll st.and in for I.he omitted word in the elliptical
construction. The implied word has to he exactly the same as the one already used for
the construct.ion to he correct:
Word omitted: The new treatment was intended and administered to patients
who had not responded to conventional therapies.
Word added: The new treatment was intended for and administered to
patients who had not responded to conventional therapies.
Faulty predication: Direct channel is when you sell and distribute products
d irectly to customers.
The expression the reason ... is because is redundant (akin to saying because ...
bt:caiUse); replace it with the n:ason is that:
Faulty predication: The reason he can't travel overseas is because he has family
obligations.
ln a sentence of mixed construction, the sentence starts in one grammatical form, mixed construction tha
then. shifts to another. Comm on culp ri ts in mixed construction sentences are intro error of palrln9 mismatched
grammatical structures In the same
ductory phrases such as the following:
sentence. resultlng In unclear or
Illogical meaning.
I The fact that I
Mixed construction: The fact that more job seekers submit t heir resumes
electronically than they do by more t raditional methods.
Revision: The fact is that more job seekers submit their resumes
electronically than they do by more t raditional methods.
Effective Paragraphs
paragraph a group of scntcncas A paragraph is a unit of meaningful thought, a group of sentences that introduces a sub-
that developsone main Idea. ject and makes one or more points about it. Paragraphs are the building blocks of effective
writing- tidy infom1at.ion packages held together by a cont.rolling idea and a clear sense
o r development. The white space that separates paragraphs alerL~ the reader to a change
in subject, paving the way for new ideas and mapping out infom1ation so it L~ easier to
understand and remember.
PARAGRAPH LENGTH
There is no ideal paragraph length. The length is regulated by what you need to say and
how you need t.o say it. For most types of husiness messages, though, short paragrnphs are
usually best because they promise easier readjng and retention. long, ove rloaded para-
graphs fom1 uninviting hlocks of text that are visually intimidating. A series of them, just
by their dense appearance, can lessen readers' receptivity even hefore they hegin t.o read.
A well -constnu:ted message usually relies on a natural mix of paragraph lengths.
Therefore, choose From a range of short, moderate, and long paragraphs t.o match your
purpose and support your content:
TOPIC SENTENCES
Most paragraphs-not just ones with complicated informal.ion to pass on- henefit from
having a topic sentence. A topic sentence, usually the fir.st sentence, announces I.he para topic sentence a sentence that
graph's purpose. lt previews the paragraph so readers can decide on the relevance and use- summarizes the main Idea In
a paragraph.
fulness of what follows. Documents that feature topic sentences are easy to scan hecause
the most important infom1at.ion is front-loaded into each hl ock of text.
Placed at the beginning, the controlling idea also prevents paragraph sprawl and helps
maintain focus. Once it is clear that a sentence in the grouping is no longer related t.o the
first one, it Ls time to start a new paragraph.
However substantial, the rights of authors to receive compensation for their efforts
are limited by the doctrine offair use. According to law, fair use gives writers a limited
right to use brief sections of copyrighted material without asking for permission. For
instance, quoting a single sentence from a
magazine article is considered fair use, whereas
quoting a page or more is not.
PARAGRAPH DEVELOPMENT
A paragraphs form depends on how you develop the main idea introduced at the begin-
ning. Typically, your purpose may be to do one of the following:
Identifying your subject and purpose are the first steps in writing a clear, effective
paragraph. While it may not be possible to get your whole message across in a single para
graph , these met.hods of development can be sustained 011er as many paragraphs as it takes
to accomplish your purpose thoroughly.
All except the shortest paragraphs of one or two sent.ences require supporting sen
tences that explain and amplify. A typical paragraph should follow a logical pattern that
builds and expands on the topic sentence in a relevant aDd meaningful way.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
PARAGRAPH COHERENCE
Good now"- the free and continuous movement of sentences from one to the next- is
coherence the logical and a quality many writers strive for. Flow is really a matter of coherence, the logical and
semanttc links between sentences. semantic links between sentences. ln other words, the sentences in a grnup have to make
sense in sequence and sound as though they belong together. Coherence is lost. when
logical gaps and unrelated sentences appear within a paragraph. Lack of now is tolerated
only in very short e-mail messages. To make your sentences fit together seamlessly, focus
on linking and bridging techniques that enable you to b'l1ide your readers through a para-
graph from bebrinning to end.
The climactic order of this senr.ence leads to 1.he main idea-decline in profi.t- at the
end. lf the paragraph were to continue, the next sentence, according to logic, would offer
reasons for the decline or a statement of its degree.
1. Carry over a topic from sentence to sentence. To prevent redundancy, use syno-
nyms to stand in for the sentence subject or put a phrase or clause in front of the
sentence subject to reduce its impact. An especially effective technique is to connect
an idea at the end of one sentence to an idea at the beginning of the next.
2. Use pronouns to carry over a thought from a previous sentence. For clarity,
combine this, that, these, and those with 1.he si ngle word to which each refeTs. Other
prnnouns, such as some, they, and it, can be used alone when they clearly refer to
the nouns they replace. The following paragraph combines met.hods l and 2 to
improve coherence:
Their company offers an outstanding flexible payment plan. This plan permits deferred
payments of up to two years. Its payment schedule can be customized to suit the needs
of individual clients. Customers can choose from a range of payment options. Some
may even decide to make their payments online with just a few simple keystrokes.
3. Use transitional words and phrases to segue from sentence to sentence. Because
transitional expressions words transitional expressions show logical, temporal, and spatial relationships, they act
and phrases that show logical, as help ful signposts, preparing readers for what comes next and b'lliding them with
temporal, and spattal relationships
and connect Ideas
precision through the twists and turns of yoi1r train of thought. For every rdationship-
to create coherenc<l. contrast, contrndiction, consequence, development, illustration, concession , conclu-
sion- there are expression.~ that reinforce that particular meaning. Some are more
workable than others, so choose the word or phrase that fits the exact context. Use them
in moderation as aids to comprehension instead of predictable and unwelcome distrac-
tions rrom your message. Adding them where they don't belong can lead to gaffes in
logic and odd non sequiturs. Transitional expressions can play a number of roles:
4 I BUS I NE SS STYLE : SENTEN CES AND PARA GRAPH S
To add a point
also, and, as well, besides, for the same reason, furthermore, in addition, likewise,
moreover, similarly
To illustrate
for example, for instance, in fact, in particular, namely, to be specific
To show cause and effect (or ei.-plain a previous point)
as a result, because, in this way, in view of, since
To show similarity
in the same way, likewise, similarly
To summarize or conclude
accordingly, consequently, for this reason, hence, in short, so, therefore, thus
To concede a point
certainly, granted, naturally, of course
Proofreading
Accurate documents are ones that writers have taken the trouhle to read and review. lt
proofreading a process of is important to get in t.he hahit of proofreading messages hefore sending them, even if it
checking the final copy of means just casting your eye over a quick e-mail on-screen or a prin tout of a routine mes
adocument for error~ and
Inconsistencies. sage. Effective proofreading is reading with a difference. ll involves reducing yom reading
speed, reading word fo r word, and gaining the ohjectivity you need to spot errors hefore
they cause you emharrassment. The point is to read what is actually written on th.e page or
screen, not what you think you have written. To give you the objectivity you need to read
impartially and analytically, it always helps to have a "cooling period" between the com-
posing and proofreading steps- as liule as a few seconds for a hrief e-mail o r consider-
ahly longer for a formal report. tr a careful, silent reading isn't enough lo hel p you catch
all your errors, try reading your messages aloud or even taping yourself as you read. The
time and enerb'Y you devote to proofreading depends on the length and importance of the
format a term for th~ parts of the
document and the way they are document. lt may he necessary to make several passes over an especially significant doLu
arranged on a page. mentor message, each time reading for two or three potential problems:
Grammu-Checking Software: Help or Hindrance? The many different diversification options, had a new
following message contains multiple faults and errors. gourmet food category launched. The reason we are
Working together in a i,rroup, Oag and count the total nllm embarking on this new cross-merchandising venture is
her of errors, then correct them to improve the messages because the annual turn rate for food is far above the
overall accuracy and precision. Once you are satL~fied with industry average of two times a year.
the fi nished product, retype the original and your revision Wanting you to attend an information session and
on a computer equipped with grammar and spell-check- see the new line of products, the information session
ing software. What errors did you miss that the software will be next Monday from 7:00 in the eveni ng to 9:30
has flagged? Has the software inadvertently lahelled cor at our downtown location. Come and sample such
rect usage as incorrect? Discuss how usefu l d iagnostic soft- delicacies as caribou pate, pepper jelly, chi li-infused olive
ware can he in improving your wii ting pro ficiency. oil, and cherries that have been infused with amaretto.
From several gourmet food purveyors, we will have
During the last several months. Our company, after we representatives on hand to answer questions about their
undertook extensive market research and considered products. A product and price list on line.
COM M UNICATING FOR RESULTS
Rccogttite tl1e Building Bloclis of Sc11tct1ces c) Will CSA approve our newest model hefore pro-
1. Building Sentences. Combine each list of words to duction is scheduled to begin?
create a l<>gical sentence, inserting punctuation where d) ln what way is our competito r's product hett.er
necessary. than ou r own?
a) turned e) How many similar products has CSA approved in
into the pa.~1 five years?
the merger f) Have you considered seeking approval from
two companies with two specialty channels each UnderwriLerl; LahoraLories in Lhe United States?
one company with four 4 . Asking Questions. lmagme that you are a Learn mem
b) studied her who must do research for an upcoming repon.
business school With your research task 80 per cent complete, you
Connie must make an unscheduled out-of-Lown business
the trip related to another high priority project, leav-
risk management ing you no lime t.n complete the research as prom-
CFO ised. Draft several types of questions-closed, open,
at and hypo1he1ical- 1n determine the hest way t.o ask
your fellow team memhers to help you comple1e
Improve Sentence Variety by Matching Sc11tc11ce your research.
Stylr and Length to Purpose
2. Improving Sentence Variety. Revise the following lmprovt Senttttet Clarity
paragraphs by varying the sentence structu re and S. Improving Sentence Clarity. In the following senten
reducing the prominence of personal pronouns. ces, correct problems such as vague pronoun refer-
a) I joined R.H. Rayburn's marketing team in 1997. I ence, embedded dependent clauses, and multiple
provide marketing information for companies that negatives that interfere with clarity.
make consumer-packaged goods. I have had several a) The proposed changes, while they do 1101 enlirely
responsibilities. I collected point-of-sale data from solve our personnel shortage, will help t.o
stores, analyzed the data, and then passed the infor- improve morale.
mation on to corporate clients. I have learned that b) We do not douht that harrowing from home
employees are key to strong revenue growth. equity 1s not an unrealistic way for seniors lo
b) We ma intain an ongoing relationship with our cli- source extra cash.
ents. We train one or two client staff members. They c) Counney is familiar with debt-reduction initia
train the rest of the staff. They provide immedi- tives. Thal is her primary focus.
ate on-site assistance on routine matters. They d) The committee recommended the adoption
can contact us when they need help with more of a cost-cutting plan , hut this has not heen
complicated matters. impleme nled.
e) The plan, whe n he first ope ned his doors six
Pltrnsc Basic Types of Questions Effectively years ago, was tn, in part, pitch their services 10
3. Recognizing Types of Questions. Identify 1he follow- small businesses.
ing questions according to type: open, closed, or
hypothetical. Use Parallelism and Otl1er Tecltnlques to \Vrite
a) llow must we improve our product so that it witlt Comisttncy artd In111act
meets CSA specifications? 6. Parallelism: Writing Balanced Sentences. Revise the
b) lf we were to improve our product, what modifi- following sentences to improve parallel structure.
cations would you suggest?
4 I BUSINESS STY LE: SENTENCES ANO PARAGRAPHS
Sample: I believe that employee satisfaction drives ) Which sentence puts more emphasis on the date
client satisfaction, which the satisfaction of the meeting?
of shareholders is in turn driven by. i. On AU!;,'USL JO, a meeting will he held to dis-
Revision: I believe that employee satisfaction drives cuss stock opuons.
client satisfaction, which in turn drives ii. A meeung wtll he held on August 30 to dis-
shareholder satisfaction. cuss stock opuons.
f ) Which sentence places more emphasis on risk
a) RenovaLing our currenL location is less expensive
management?
than Lo huy or renL a new propeny.
i. Risk management 1s a primary concern for
b) Japanese and Korean carmakers are gaining in
investors.
every market segment with products that offeT
ii. Investors are primarily concerned ahout risk
reliahllity, performance, designs that are alluring,
management, although other concerns may
and prices tha1 are compe1itive.
enter ln10 1heir choice of funds.
c) Fahiola Cor1ez, of our R&:D division, will now
g) Which sentence de-emphasizes the joh refusal?
head our Regina facility ; and our head offke in
i. We Siled this position months ago. Our com-
Toronto wil l now he managed hy Lu Huang, for-
pany cannol offer you em ployment at this time.
mer chief of our consulting depa rtment.
ii. Although oL!r co mpany can not make an offer
d) Good security is based on a comhina1.ion of 1.h ree
o f employment at 1his I ime, we wish yoLl suc-
I ypes of ident ifyi ng infom1ation: something you
cess in your future career.
know, usual ly a password or PTN; something
8. Adding Emphasis. Revise the follow ing sentences to
you htve, such as a pfastic card, key, or security
emphasize key facts and concepts.
token; and what you h;1ve on your person.
a) Emphasize the date:
) Most hiometric systems are expensive to huy and
The deadline is March .'H for requesting transfers
using Lhem is awkward.
to the Toronto sales office.
f) A radio spol will air contest details, where pro-
b) Emphasize indiVJdual depanmenL~:
motional events \viii he held, and what products
Three departments, namely Marketing, Sales, and
are new.
Distribution, are participaung m the pilot project.
c) Emphasize the appointee:
E11111ltaSitt Imt>ottanc Facts and ldtas; Minimizt
Our current operations manager, J ohn O'Reilly,
Less Important Ones
will now head up our Montreal office.
7. Writing with Emphasis. Assess the following
sentences. Disti11guislt bttwun Active and Pa.~~lvt: Volu
a) Which sentence is more emphatic? 9. Using th Activ Voic. Conven the following senten-
i. Our hanking services are good for youT ces Lo the active voice. Add suhject words if necessary.
business.
ii. We offer highly compe1i tive commercial rates Sample: Substantial career rewards are provided
and 24-hour onli ne services Lo meet all yoUT by this challenging position.
Revision: This challenging position provides
huslness needs.
b) Which sent.ence is more emphatic? substantial career rewards.
I. We re<luced invenwry hy 40 per ce nt. a) It was fOLmd hy the comm iltee 1ha1 proAts had
ii. We red uced inventory suhs1an1.ially. been affected hy the new industry b"l.lidelines.
c) Which smtence is more em phatic? b) Cred it derivat ives are used hy hanks to ofnoad
i. Alberta's workforce L~ smalle r than Ontario's troubled loans.
ii. Alberta's wo rkforce is hair 1.h e size of Ontario's. c) The pack is led by heavy-parts manufacturers
d) Which sentence is more emphatic:? who show innovation.
i. His supervisor was able to take decisive d) A recommendation was made that all advertising
action. and promotion must he handled hy senior mar-
ii. Hts supervisor acted decisively. keting specialists.
COMMUNICATI N G FOR RESULTS
) After approval was sought, the new sue was Sample: Her co-worker told her on the first day no
approved by city building inspectors. one eats in the cafeteria.
f) Your personal information is nol sold or other- Revision: On the first day, her co-worker told her no
wise marketed to third panies. one eats in the cafeteria.
10. Using the Passive Voice. Conver1 Ihe following sen-
a) A sh ipment was forwarded from the warehouse
tences to 1he passive voice. Decide whether 10 omit
Lhat cost more 1han $12,000.
the doer of the action.
b) Mouse pads were given to conventioneers featur-
Sample: Last year, the township issued an advisory ing the company logo.
on the illegal disposal of yard waste. c) The computer was returned to the manufacturer
Revision : Last year, an advisory was issued on the that was defective.
illegal disposal of yard waste. d) To apply for 1h1s position, an updated resume and
the names of three referees must be submitted.
a) When the hiring committee has concluded its
e) Outsourcing its printing jobs, substan1ial
search, we will notify you.
amounts of money were saved by the company.
b) Tiffany over-budgeted for the team -building
f) Complain1s from customers must be taken ser-
retreat in Muskoka.
iously by all sales associates, regardless of thei r
c) If yo u do not remit your full 1.em1 premium hy
triviality.
Ju ly 2 5, we will cancel your Ins urance coverage.
13. Eliminating Mixed Constructions, Faulty Predication,
d) Marjorie, Tom Chrysler's assistl.lnt, has resched-
and Over-Coordination. Corr ect the followi ng
uled tomorrow's meeting Lo Friday.
sentences.
) We have added the following exclusions lo your
policy. Sample: One reason spam e-mail is unpopular is
because most people find it time-wasting.
Eliminate Sentence Errors that Impair Clarity Revision: One reason spam e-mail is unpopular is
and Unity that most people find it time-wasting.
11 . Eliminating Sentence Fragments and Run-Ons. Fix
a) The purpose of I he program was es1ab lished to
fragments, comma splices, and run-ons in the follow-
reduce job dissatisfac1ion.
ing senten ces.
b) When 1he demand fo r industrial goods increased
Sample: Our new line of hi gh-resolu tion copiers is was an Indication to expand our operatio n.
affordably priced it will be Introduced in c) We look forward to speaking with you and you'll
the fall. find additiona l infomialion in the enclosed
Revision : Our new line of high-resolution copiers is booklet.
affordably priced. It will be introduced in d) We're proud of our services and you should call
the fall. when you need help.
e) The mam reason that supervisors are concerned
a) All our branches have extended hours, some even
that staff members consider the request to be an
offer weekend banking.
invasion of privacy.
b) Before the Internet was developed and before it
bega n to have such an im pact on marht research.
One of the most effective techniques for building
Develop Logiral, Coherent, and Focused
Paragraphs
mailing lists was sweepstakes.
14. Adjusting Paragraph Length. Revise the fo llow-
c) The president and CEO embarked on a spending
ing memo by dividing it into several manageable
spree. Resulting in a higher debt load.
paragraphs.
12. Correcting Misplaced and Dangling Modifiers.
Correct dangling and misplaced modifiers m the fol- Please answer the questions below about the possibility
lowing sentences. of instituting an in-house daycare at Resource
4 I BUSINES S STY LE: SENTE NCES AND PARA GR APH S
Management Plus. Many employees and some managers time sheets and submit them to the project manager.
have inquired about the possibility of providing The time sheets will be used to update the forecasts.
company-sponsored daycare services on the premises. A monthly, consolidated report will be presented to
In my opinion, on-site facilities, similar to the recently the directors for review. The new procedure will not
opened fitness centre, increase job productivity, morale, improve efficiency immediately. It will allow us to take
and job satisfaction. Employees are at ease knowing advantage of current methods in project management.
their toddlers and preschoolers are close at hand and 16. Paragraph Coherence: Identifying Transitional
well cared for in a fully accredited and supervised facility. Expressions. In a newspaper, magazine, or trade-
They enjoy the convenience of dropping off and picking rt:lated publication, find a sample passage o r approxi-
up their children with no additional commuting time. mately two hundred words and make a photocopy.
On the other hand, an on-site daycare facility might be a Highlight and list the transitional expressions used .
distraction from business. Your answers to the following Would the article st.ill make sense wir.h the transi
questions will help us make an informed decision on tional expressions removed? Why or why not?
the issue.
Apply Strategies for Proofreading Diffe-rent Kinds
1s. Paragraph Coherence: Using Transitional Expressions.
of Messages
Add transitional words and phrases to im prove the
17. Proofreading Checklist: Correcting Sentence Errors.
coherence of the following paragraphs.
Draft a lis t of your ten most frequt'llt writing errors
a) Our Small Parts Division needs to improve its qual-
(look for feedback on you r previously graded assign-
ity control. Complaints so far have been few. Spot
ments). Before handing in your next th ree messages
inspections revealed serious defects that could have
or assignments, refer to your customizt:d checklist as
an impact on long-term contracts and result in legal
you proofread. When your graded assignmenL~ are
I iability. We need to hire more quality control speciaC-
returned to you, see if using a checklist has helped
i sts. We need to foster better work habits.
you achieve greater writing proficiency. Work toward
b) We will soon introduce a new procedure that will
the goal of gradually reducing the numher of i.tems
allow us to project resource costs more accurately.
on your list.
Team members will be required to complete weekly
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Eli111l11ate St11te11ce Errors that Impair Sentence 6. Combining Sentences. Complete these quizzes from
Clarity and Unit) Capital Community College by comhining groups of
4. Eliminating Sentence Fragments. Test your knowledge sentences into effective single sentences containing
o r complete sentences with this exercise rmm Purdue only one independent clause each.
Uni versity's Onli ne Wri ting Lah. Act as editor of http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/
1hese examples From student. papers, then check your quizzes/com bin i ng_q uizl. htm
answers ui.i ng the address at the ho11om or the page. http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/
http://owl.english.purdue.edu /exercises/5/18/38 quizzes/comhinlng_quiz2.htm
S. Improving Modifier Placement. Try th is interactive
exercise from C,apital Community College for prac- Develop LogLcal, Colterrnt, and Focused
tice in identifying sentences with effective modifier Paragraphs
placement. In groups of three or four, discuss your 7. Improving Logical Coherence in Paragraphs. Visit the
answers and compare results. following page from the Using English for Academic
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/ Purposes (UE[AP) wehsite and complete the four
cgi-shl/quiz.pl/modifier_quiz.htm interactive exercises that require you to reorganize
Fo r mo re practice, visit the fo ll owi ng site and sentences for logic anti coherence.
check fOT dangling and misplaced modi fiers In t.he www.uefap.com/wrltlng/exer cise/paraglparagex5
se ntences provided. .htm
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LEARNING OBJECTIVES
Memorandums
memo a specially rormattcd
document that Is sent to readers Memorand ums, more commonly known as memos, can he many things- reminders,
within an organization. instructions, records of act.ions and decisions, data-gathering tools, and aids t.o prohlem
solvi ng. Sent to people inside your organization, they are a fast, efficient way of putting
e-mail (electronic mall)
messages distributed by a information in the hands of people who need it and getting answers from the people who
computerized mall service. can provide them. The paper mem o, with its distinctive style and structure, was once the
pri mary means of inter-office communication. It has left its mark on e-mail, the channel
for hoth internal and external m essaging that has essentially re placed it, thanks in large
part to o rganizations' need to conduct their husiness more sustai nably. In fact, e-mail
brings the best of memo style to internal and external communication, adhering to the
time-savi ng forn1at and straightforward approach of a hard-copy memo hut elimh1ating its
wasteful pape r trail. Even a quick glance at the information at the top of the screen or page
can tell a reader what the message L~ ahout, who it is from., for whom it is intend ed , who
else received it, and when it was w ritten.
Memos and e-mail are the workhorses of husiness comm unication, indispensahle aids
to the tasks of gathering, sharing, and analyzing information about products, day-to-day
5 I MEMORA N DUMS, EMA IL , A N D ROUT I NE MESSAGES
operatiom, services, stakeholders, and personnel. Bringing corporate levels together, the
paper memo and its elect.rm1ic counterpart are t.he most common ways for managers to
inform employees of policies and decisions and for employees to stay informed and offer
their input. Everyone from upper management down uses memos and e-mail. Writing
them well can win kudos for employees eyeing the road to advancement. It therefore pays
to perfect the e-mail style through which your managers and co-workers will come to
know you and to always review your messages before you send them. Learning about your
receivers' e-mail preferences and deciding when it is appropriate to use e-mail can help
you become a more effective communicator.
The advantage of a typical memo is its simplicity. It is designed to be read quickly,
even when it is organized like a report or conveys vital information. Usually less fom1al
than a standard letter, a well-written memo opens with its purpose- the main idea o r
primary action- and is presented so that it makes sense even to secondary readers. Any
hard-copy memo or electronic message should he clear, concL~e. and informative, sharing
the following common traits:
1. single-topic focus
2. brevity
3. two-pan structure, consisting of a header (Date,
To, From, S~ject guide words) and message
Watch David Taylor's"How to Write a
(divided into an opening, body, and closing) Perfect Memo for more information on
llecause corporate e-mail systems vary and a memo's audience and format: http://
style b'ltidellnes are constantly evolving, there is 900.91/ziFVmH.
some variation in the way writers treat e-mail and
in the form some messages may take. Some writers
use salutations; others don't. In some instances, a
complex o r critically important memo might he
more than a page, or an e-mail message might fill
more than a single screen. However, the longer or more complicated a message happen..~ to header a block of text appearing
he, the more it requires additional formatting techniques such as headings, subheadings, at the top of a document.
boldfaced elemenl~. bulleted items, and list~.
headings vtsual mar1<ers
consisting of words or short
phrases ttlat Indicate ttle parts
MEMO FORMAT of a document and signpost Its
As we've just stated, a memo has a no-fuss, two-part structure. The Date, To, From, and organization.
Subject headings or fields tell readers exactly what they need to know about a message's boldface a thick, black typeface
cont.mt and distribution. ln replacing standard letter elements such as the inside address, used for emphasis.
salutation, and complimentary close, these guide words save time and make formatting
bullets vtsual cues, usually large
easy They can appear in horizontal or vertical format, and their standard order can he dots or squares, that set off Items In
altered to suit a companys needs. a vertical list or emphasize lines.
It is common practice to type guide words in capitals, leaving a douhle space
between headings and three lines before the hody of the memo. The fill-in informa-
tion follmving each guide word should he aligned, usually two to three spaces follow-
ing the longest guide word (SUBJECT). Many companies provide memo templates, as
do '\vizards" in most word-processing programs, that simplify the tas ks of fonnatting
and alignment.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
DATE: Provides the complete and current date. To reduce conrusion, follow
company practice in choosing between North American (May 1, 2014)
and European (1 May 2014) styles.
TO; Identifies the destination or the person(s) to whom the message is
addressed. The job title of the addressee is optional, except when the
name alone isn't enough to ensure that the message reaches its des-
tination. Courtesy titles (Ms., Mr.) and professional titles (Rev., Dr.)
may also be omitted unless you a re addressing a superi or. Dispense
with surnames only if you are on a first-name basis with the addressee.
If your memo is directed to several people, list their names alphabetic-
ally or in descending order of importance in the company hierarchy.
Crowded address lines can he avoided hy simply using a group designa
tion ("Claims Processors," "Marketing Group," etc.).
FROM: Identifies the author or origin of the message. Joh titles and t.he depart
ment name ca11 he used if your name alone is not sufflcient to iden
tify you as the writer. Courtesy titles generally aren't used because
they're too fom1al to suit this relatively infom1al mode of comm unica-
tion. The practice of initialling the end of the line applies to hard-copy
memos only.
SUBJECT: Identifies the topic and/or pi1rpose of the message for reading a11d filing.
The more old-fashioned "RE" (from the Latin for "about" or "concern-
ing") is sometimes also used to designate the content o r the message.
Ideally, the subject description shoi1ld not exceed one line. It does not
have to he a complete sentence and can be abbreviated (leaving out
art.icles- the, a, and an). Nevertheless, it must be specific enough to
give readers a full and accmate idea of what foll ows (i.e., h1stead of
"Estimate" write "Cost Reduction Estimate") or how they are to act on
your information ("Cost Reduct.ion Est.imat.e for Review").
CC: This abbreviation stands for "carbon copy," an obsolete term for the gen-
eric "copy." Insert t.he name(s) of anyone who \vill receive a copy of the
message hut is not an addressee. ln the case of e-mail, avoid unneces-
sary copying that will dog receivers' inhoxes and e-mail systems. Learn
what or.hers want and need to be copied on.
MEMO ORGANIZATION
Even though print and electronic memos tend to be short and sometimes fairly informal,
opening the flrst par.agraph they still require fo rethought and planning. Before you begin to write, consider the facts
of a memo; contains the most
and issues you must cover and ant.kipate your readers' needs. Then choose a writing plan
Important Information regarding
the subject matter, the purpose for that meets those requirements. Observing the pri nciples of good writing \vill help make
wrttlng, and/or the action required your memo focused and informative. Most positive and neutral messages conveying rou-
by the reader. tine or non-sensitive infom1ation can be organized in the followi ng way:
subject line tha part of a memo To write an effective memo, use the opning for your most important information1,purpose
or e-mail that Indicates the
document's tltle, topic:, purpose, for writing, or required action. Don't waste time mechanically restating the subjct lin.
and Importance. Instead amplify it by filling in the who, whot, where, when, why, and how that can't be
5 I MEMORA N DUMS, EMA IL , A N D ROUT I NE MESSAGES
supplied by the subject line alone. Get to the point as quickly as possible. As an option,
include a few words of context, giving a reason for your request or telling readers why they
need to know t he information you're sharing:"To maintain productivity levels during power
outages, our company has leased an on-site power system from Energy Now." One to three
sentences are usually sufficient to summarize your central idea.
In the body of the memo, move on to particulars and more detailed information. Expand body the middle paragraph(s)
on, discuss, or explain the problem, assignment, request, or action you wish the reader to of a memo; provides necessary
background and more
take. Pare down details to include only the ones your readers must know to act on your detailed Information about the
information. If you are relaying a sequence of actions or several requests, put them in a subject matter.
grammatically parallel list prefaced by a summary statement that gives readers an overview
or glimpse of the"big picture~ Points may be presented in the following ways:
Make sure the middle paragraph(s) provide sufficient background, bringing readers up to
speed on preliminaries and clearly identifying deadlines and people involved.
In closing, summarize your request or call for action, clearly indicating who should do closing then nal paragraph
what, by when, and for how long. If compliance isn't assured, point out alternatives or of a memo; summarizes the
content and Indicates next steps,
benefits to readers. It may be appropriate to end-date requests, cite reasons for them, invite
lnvttes focdback, offers further
feed back, provide contact information, tell readers where they can get more information, msourcos, and/or provides
or state what happens next. Avoid canned or mechanical phrases that do not suit the contact Information.
situation. Show courtesy and appreciation as the situation merits.
Double-spacing between paragraphs marks oFf one topic from another and reinforces
good organization. Graphic highlighting techniques can help emphasize key infom1ation,
hut he aware that some e-mail systems may not allow you to use boldface, italics, or other Italics sloplng lcttcrs used
more sophisticated typographical features, only plain text. For memos longer than a page, for emphasis or to distinguish
foreign words.
open \vith a summary statement (a condensed version of the memo highHghting purpose
and action sought). Organize the rest of your information under headings--even ones
as basic as "problem," "situation," and "solution"-so ideas and initiatives can be under-
stood and easily acted on. To simplify messaging and ensure uniformity, some companies
provide templates for different kinds of memos: ones delivering information, a_~king for
action , or demanding urgent action.
When you must deliver had news or write persuasively, use an indirect start-with-the-
evidence strategy. Readers are more likely to accept a decision , even a negative one, when
they are prepared for it and know it is logical and well justified.
a lead-in introducing, explaining, and putting in context the it.ems that follow
at least three and, ideally, not more than eight it.ems
parallel phrasing for every item
semantic and grammatical continuity between the lead-in and items (in other words,
every item must read grammatically with the lead-in)
adequate transition to the sentences that follow after the list
lists are formatted in two ways: horizontally (or in-sentence) and vertically (tabu-
lated). Horizontal lists give minimal emphasis but are also less intrusive:
We will discuss the following items at next Monday's meeting: the need for new quality
control measures, the performance of our customer service hotline, and the proposed
switch to voice-recognition phone technology.
As director of commercial real estate finance, you will monitor market trends, provide
information and support on our lending programs, and recommend refinements to
existing programs.
A colon is required before a list if t.he lead-in fom1s a complete sentence (as in the first
example above). For additional im pact, individual items can be introduced with a brack-
eted letter or number.
Please bring the following items with you on retreat: (1) walking shoes, (2) a raincoat, and
(3) sunblock.
Restrict yomself t.o a maximum o f four or five it.ems per horizontal list. J items exceed that
limit, a vertical list is your best choice.
Vertical lis ts, whet.her they're bulleted or numbered, are among the best-Im.own and
most frequently used design elements. With their high visual impact, vertical lists break
up imposing blocks of texts into manageable, "bite-sized" segments.
To bebrin, create a strong explanatory lead-in that reads logically and grammatically
with each point that follows . If your introduction is complete, you will not need t.o repeat
explanatory details in each point. Punctuate the lead-in with a colon i it can he read as a
complete sentence; use no punctuation if the lead-in depends on the point that follows to
complete its meaning.
When each point rom1s a complete smt.mce, capitalize and punctuate each item as
you would a sentence. H you are giving instructions o r issuing directives or polite com
mands, begin each item \vith an action verh:
Among listed it.ems, try not r.o mix clauses and sentences that requi re different ter-
minal punct.uation. Any item expressed as a complete sentence or as a phrase that com-
pletes the lead-in requires t.ermlnal punct.uat.ion, as does any item consisting of two or
more sentences.
Apply t.he principles o r chunking- a yardstick for list design- to <let.ermine the chunking tho grouping of Items
numher of items that a vert.kal list can accommodate. The average persons short-term of Information together to be
remembered as a unit.
memo ry can store seven pieces of data, plus or minus two, depending on the complexity
o r t.he in.formation. The more complex each it.em, t.he fewer items a reader can reason-
ably be expected to remember. Ideally, a list should be brief and kept to a maximum
o r seven or eight items. More than that and the list can lose its rocus and purpose, at
which point it is best to find a way to subdivide points and consolidate them under
appropriate l ead-in.~.
FIGURE 5.1
Enc. 5
E-ma il
Few technologies have had such dramatic impact on the business world as e-mail has
in recent years. Few are as loved and hated as this essential medium of communication
bas come to he. E-mail is now an unavoidable fact of ht1siness life; it is an indispens-
able, multi-use tool of management work and the most common means of transmitting
workplace documents and flies. It<; advantage- and ironically iL-; disadvantage- is that
messages can be produced easily and quickly and transmitted instantaneously. E-mail's
versatile capabilities and wide availahili ty make it an ideal productivity tool- a cheap and
convenie11t way to access, exchange, and process infol"mation. Collaborative work can
he carried out more easily than before, due in no small part to the interaction and more
equal participation that e-mail fosters. E-mail has revolutionized the workpl ace in other
ways too. helping to improve customer service, boosting the quality and quantity of ideas
employees share wi th their colleabrues, and giving mamigers an effective way of dealing
\vith their staff.
Only recently has e-mail become a source of corporate embarrassment- a smoking
gun that can offer incriminating and permanent proof of companies' wrongdoing. Because
e-mail can end up anywhere and compromise co11fide11tial and classified information ,
many organizations have hem forced to clamp down on e-mail use and to regulate and
moni.t.or it closely. even goi ng as far as requiring employees to save their messages for sev-
eral years as proof of ethical conduct.
While e-mail has certai nly changed the way compan ies do husiness, many of t.he
e-mail prnctkes that are meant to hoost efficiency can result in poor, lazy hehaviours that
waste time and energy and leave recipients frustrated and vexed by unwanted messages.
Not surp risingly, e-mail has its own special set of prohlems: clogged inhoxes; indiscrimin-
ate distribution lists; serious privacy violations; uncooperative serve rs; unsolicited, sloppy.
inflammato ry, or undeliverable messages; and difficult-to-follow "thread" e-mails. The
urge to check for incoming messages or to hit the "Send" hut.ton without first reviewing
a message can stri ke even the most disciplined e-mail user. An ever-increasing portion of
a typical day at or even away from the office involves the necessary hut sometimes tedi-
ous work that e-mail demands. The fact that it is
possible to access e-mail almost anywhere at any
time has created a round-the-clock virtual work-
day. A 2012 survey revealed that 68 per cent of
Americans check their work e-mail hefore 8:00
In July 2013, Ferrari implemented a
a.m. and 69 per cent check it. before goi ng to hed. 1
new e-mail policy to reduce the number
E-mail is now inescapable. According to a
of group messages and to improve
2011 Pew Internet survey, 92 per cen t of adult
employee efficiency. Read "Stop
Internet users use e-mail. 0 O f the J 1 per cen t of Emailing and Start Talking, Ferrari
Canadi ans who own a smartphone, 70 per cent Orders Employees to learn more:
use their device ror sending or reading e-mail. 1 http://goo.gi/Jr0240.
Even mill ennials, the t.exting generation that has
grown ur using apps and technologies that all ow
for collahoration and connectivity, use their mohile
devices primarily for e-maiJ.R
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
Some people are compulsively preoccupied hy their e-mail and can't live without
it, while others consider it a hall and chain , a source of anger and st.ress. Part of the
problem is that e-mail is a relatively new technological frontier, an evolving medium
with practices that still haven't heen f1.1lly standardized. Although users may love the
technology, they should also stop to consider e-mail's relevance and suitability to a given
task. Because e-mail is a hybrid form of speaking and writing, users also sometimes have
trouhle deciding exactly what it replaces- an infom1al chat or a fonnal hard-copy letter-
which accounts for the range of e-mail styles and quirky tonal variations that characterize
today's e-mail traffic.
Some organizations have come to the rescue by instituting e-mail guidelines regarding
what their employees can say and how to format that information. Though these gui de-
lines vary from organ ization to organization and though e-mail style varies from docu
ment to document, savvy com municators recognize t.he value of smart e-mail practices.
netlquette the Informal code of Knowing your netiquelle and being proactive in managing your messaging makes e-mail
conduct governing polite, efficient, a channel that is fast, functional, and efficient.
and effective use of the Internet
1. Keep it brief. A short message (one screen or less) stands I.he hest chance of heing
read fully. Long messages may end up heing skimmed, marked to he read later, or
simply forgotten. Scrolling down to the end of a long message can be time-consum -
ing, so make sure each message merits its word count and consider usin.g attach-
ments. Include only as much infom1ation as is needed for recipients to take action
and make decLorions.
2. Remember that e-mail is not your only option. Strive for a halance between the
convenience of technology and the rapport or human contact. Don't L1Se e-mail
sim ply to avoid face-to-fact: contact, especially if you only wish to distance your
self from conflicts, argume nts, or bad news. Match the situation to 1.he correct
comm unication channel.
3. Compose crucial messages offline. This process allows you to review messages and
reduce the chance that they will he lost as a result of a technical glitch.
4. Follow organizational rules for e-mail. Some companies have standardized pro
cedures for e-mail; some have only unwri tten or loosely applied guidelines. If rules
haven't heen estahlished , allow the most effective messages you receive to guide you.
5. Don't use company e-mail systems for personal communication . Your organ
ization's resources shouldn't he used recreationally (e.g., to swap personal photos,
shop, or send personal messages). Some companies allow their employees "reason-
ahle personal use" of e-mail while others prohihit it. Sending personal e-mails and
using the Internet ror matters unrelated to husi ness is risky and may have professional
repercussions for you. Protect your inbox from spammers hy havi ng your address
spam an advertising message- removed from spam and junk lists that can expose you and your company to racist,
elcctronle junk mall- sent Widely sexist, or seirually explicit messages. Exe rcL~e caution in opening any file attachment
and lndlsc11m1natcly.
you suspect has been corrupted. Computer rnalware and viruses can have a devastat-
ing impact on data security, with implications for the entire organization.
5 I MEMORANDUMS , EMA IL , AND ROUT INE MESSAGES
6. Aim for a balance of s peed and accuracy. Speedy e-mail writing and the errors it
can cause make for slower e-mail reading. E-mail readers are generally more tolerant
of wTi ting errors, but there are limits to allowances for incorrect spellings. poor gram-
mar, and misused punctuation. Careless messages can result in lost credibility and
clients. Ensure that your spell-check software is set to the correct language. Glan ce
ove r your messages to catch errors in spelling. grammar, and punctuation before
you hit "Send." Give im port.ant, non-routine documents close and careful reading
and employ the same kinds of strategic planning mn.d range of writing skills as you
would for non-electronic documents. Because e-mail involves the rapid exchange of
information, let your readers' needs be your guide, but don't double or triple your
composition time by putting every single word under the microscope. After all, e-mail
shou ld boost your productivity, not reduce it.
7. Keep your messages professional. Think of you-r credibility and professionalism
before using emot.kons--such as,, and :-)- that are intended to communicate
the tone of a message. Their cham1 and whimsy may go over well with close friends
but not wi th business con tacts, who may take their t'1.Heness for a lack of professional-
ism. Instead, state your business plainly in standard English. Use please and thank you
fo r the sake of politeness and adjust your tone if you want to sound friendlier. Use
your e-mail system~ setti ngs to add an electronic signature contai ning your name,
professional title, and, if you like, other contact information or even a photo. Decide if
you want different signatures for different situations (e.g., internal or external mail).
8. Understand that e-mail is not guaranteed to be p rivate. E-mail is easily deleted,
but even deleted e-mail can he retrieved, providing a permanent record of action.~
and decisions. It can be saved, archived, forwarded, and even used as legal evidence.
Some companies make a practice of monitoring employee e-mail o r instruct that it not
be used for certain types of comm unication. While "Big Brother" may not necessarily
be watching you , avoid send ing gossipy. incriminating, disparaging, or inflammatory
messages. Refrain from making jokes, sarcastic jabs, or facetious remarks. Don't write
anythi ng in an e-mail message that you wouldn't be comfortahle writing on a postcard
or seeing puhlished i.n the company newsletter.
9. Don't "write angry." Avoid flaming- the act of firh1g back and venting emotion via flaming ttie act of sending
e-mail. No matter how good letting off steam feel~ at the time, it can have serious out an angry c-rnall rncssagc
In haste without considering
repercussions. Quick, anh'TY responses flare tempers and usually resolve nothing.
the lrnpllcatlonsof airing
Instead, communicate contentious matte rs and sensitive issues through other chan such emotions.
nels, preferably ones wi.th visual o r tonal cues. If you have to deal with an angry
e-mail, give yourself enough time to cool clown and conside r yoiu response befo re
you respond. If an immedia te response is not requi red , save the draft overnight,
review the document the next day, and then decide w hether to trash or revise it.
10. Don't send unnecessary messages. The more you bombard readers with unneces-
sary e-mails, the less attention they'll pay to the ones that really count. Don't send
trivial messages o r ones that say merely "thank you" o r "you're welcome." Respect
your fellow e-mail users by putting a stop to the nuisance of time-wasting spam or
bulk junk mail from cyberspace. You can fight spam by using anti -spam soft.ware that distribution list a group of emall
blocks unwanted messages and by not posting your e-mail addresses on web pages, recipients addressed asa single
recipient, alloW1ng the sender to
where they can be easily copied in to the mailing lists and databases of hulk e-mail crnall rnany usersWithout entering
companies. Review the distribution list before sending an e-mail to ensure that it their Individual addresses.
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In September 2013,
professional networking site
Linked In was sued for allegedly
hac.klng users' emall accounts.
The lawsuit claims that the
company pretended to own
these accounts, downloaded
the contact lists, and sent
marketing materials to the
addresses. Llnkedln denies
the accusations.
Source: Cl Robert Wllkin'n/Alemy
has been properly updated and that your message will reach only those recipients to
whom it is relevant.
11. Protect yourself and your company. Be aware of ownership and copyright issues
and safeguard your organizations intellectual property. Add a copyright symbol ()
to all corporate material intended for Internet posting. Keep your password and user
ID confidential to ensure secure applications aren't compromised.
1. Schedule time for reading and writing e-mail. E-mail can be intrusive and dL~
tracting, hut don't allow it lo ruk your workday. Urgent messages excepted, set aside
a few times a day to read and respond. Be systematic, first scanning for impo rtant
messages from stakeholders and superiors and leaving personal messages for last.
Check for incoming messages regularly, especially before sending out anything signifi -
cant, just in case a new incoming message necessitates a reply different from the one
you had in mind. After long absences, open your most recent mail first, then scan for
earlier messages from critical stakeholders and superiors.
2. Do regular inbox clean-ups. Learn what your company expects you to file OT archive,
then get rid of the clutter by deleting unwanted, irrelevant, or outdated messages and
checking for ones that may have escaped your attention. Assign messages you want to
save to project files. Update your e-mail address book.
3. Scan the entire list of new messages in your inbox. Read all current messages
before writing follow-up responses.
4. Use filtering options and anti-spam software. Ensure the mail you get is the mail
you want. Most companies make ample provision for this in their e-mail systems.
5 I MEMORANDUMS , EMA IL , AND ROUT INE MESSAGES
1. Type the e-mail address correctly. Ensure your message won't he lost in cyberspace.
Rely on your electronic address hook if you routinely leave out or mistype characters.
As a111 option, include the recipient'.<; name i.n angle brackeL~ (e.g., <David Schwarz>).
Dett:rmine distribution and mailing lL~ts beforehand so you can tailor messages to
recipienL~' specific needs. Add "CC" (copy feature) and "BCC" (hlind copy feature)
addresses accordingly. Send copies only t.o people who have a legitimate need for your
information and keep some e-mail addresses anonymous if recipients are likely to
object to their circulation. Your program will usually insert your e-mail address and
the date automatically.
2. Compose an action-specific subject line. Subject lines help readers decide how
relevant, important, and urgent a message is. Together, the senders name and the
subject line help recip ients prioritize their reading. Labels such a..~ "URGENT" can he
used from time to time when companies approve of them. The best way to command
attention for your message is to create a descriptive subject line, like a newspaper
headline, that tells readers what the message is about in as few words as possible.
Ile s11ecific- for example, instead of "New Statement" (too general) write "Revised
Quality Assurance Statement." If an action is needed, use a verb (e.g., "Complete
At.I.ached Survey"). Ile sure to revL~e reply subject lines when they no longe r reflect
the content of I.he message. E-mails without subject lines stand the greatest chance of
hein g deleted without being read.
3. Wrap text after 70 characters. Short lines can look ragged and disjointed. Line
length settings are found in the preferences option of your e-mail program\; toolhar.
4. Use a regular mix or upper- and lowercase letters. Text messagers use all lower-
case, hut business write rs should avoid this practice. Capitalize I.he first letter in each
sentence and use correct punctuation. The practice of writing messages in all caps
(sho uting) is forbidden hy many organizations. Not only is it considered rude and
oppressive, it is also difficult to read . Headings and subheadings may be useful in
organizing long messages. lf you use hold and italics, be aware that some platfomis
won't accommodate them. Jn such cases, use asterisks() around a word to show ital-
ics and underscores(_) to show underlining.
5. Keep paragraphs and sentences short. You should aim to keep text sho rter than
in regular word-processing documents. Use double-spaced paragraph breaks for
emphasis and readability Design your message so readers can skim it easil y, not-
ing shi fts in topic with each new paragraph. Smart organization means less read-
ing time per message, helping reade rs cope with the ever-increasin g volume o r
inbound e-mail.
As you begin t.o compose your message, keep in m ind t.he follO\vi ng strategies for
shaping its content:
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
REPLYING TO E-MAIL
Many of the tips di..~cussed in the: previous sections also pertain to e-mail replies, but here
are a few more guidelines to consider when wri ting responses:
5 I MEMORANDUMS , EMA IL , AND ROUT INE MESSAGES
1. Reply as promptly as possible. Develop a response game plan, deciding how best
to juggle this and other tasks. If you can't reply immediately, write a quick message
indicating that you will send a full reply lat.er (e.g., "Will reply Friday").
2. Modify your distribution list. lf you receive a group e-mail, you may need to send
your response to the entire group or only a few m embers. Think twice before you
automatically hit "Reply All." Prune the distribution list so that only individuals who
have a legitimate need for your message receive it. Indiscriminate use of "CC" and
"Reply All" tops the list of e-mail users' biggest complaints, so take a few seconds to
decide who needs the contents of your reply and who doesn't.
3. Don't automatically include the sender's original message witl1 your reply. How
much of the origi nal message to incorporate in a reply is a common e-mail dilemma;
therefore, consider the context in which your own reply should he placed. Fo r short,
routine messages, the original can he included with your reply, hut he sure to pm the
latteT at the top to save readers the trouble of scrolling down. If you decide not to
return the senders message, provide a reply full enough (not just "OK" o r "No prob-
lem") for readers to know exactly what you're referring to. For lengthy or complex
messages, type your response next to the relevant portions of the original message,
hut always make sure the distinction between your words and those of the original
is clear. Choosing the right reply style can help reduce major irritants, such as chain
e-mails, now bmmed by some organizations.
4. Avoid indiscriminately forwarding e-mails. Consider whom the message is relevant
to and who really needs the inrom1at.ion.
5. Make pmvision for your absences from the office. Let people who are trying to
reach you know you are out of the office, when you will return , and who m they can
contact in your absence. Arrange ror automatic receipt of incoming messages and out-
of-office m1tgoing messages.
6. Pmtect and respect authorship. Select a read-only status for critical documents that
could subsequently he altered without your knowledge and retain a time-stamped
copy o r the origi nal. Always credit the o riginal author o r forwarded documents. The
rules of plagiarism apply equally to electronic communicar.ion.
FIGURE 5 . 2
Figm es 5.2 and .5.1 are two versions of a message explaining the adoption of new
order proced ures for office catering se rvices. Numerous fai1lt.s red uce the effectiveness of
the message in Figure .5.2, whkh begins with a vague subject li.ne that doesn't accurately
describe the purpose or content of the message. A sloppy, weak, and negative opening puts
a com.plaint first, well before important information. It isn't immediately d ear what the
message is about. Random, out-of-sequence steps aren't itemized , making the instructions
FIGURE 5.3
As you know, Clicks 'n' Mortar, Inc. recently awarded Gusto Fine Foods, Inc. a
contract to cater all board meetings, on-site training sessions, client consultations,
and receptions. Gusto Fine Foods specializes In offering health-conscious Explanation highlights benefits
busI nesses low-carbohydrate and low-calorie alternatives to traditional office fare.
Durl ng the six-month Introductory period ending July 31, you may choose
from a specially priced product line that Includes fruit platters, hot and cold hors
d'oeuvre, light lunches, fresh juices, specialty coffees, and VQA Ontario wines.
You can ensure prompt and efficient delivery of your order by placing It 24 hours
In advance and following this procedure:
Hyporll nk makes additional
1. Visit the Gusto Fine Foods website: www.gustoflnefoods.com. Information available
2. Ciiek on "Orders."
3. Enter your department number and password.
4. Make your menu selection.
Procedure outlined In
5. Fiii in the time, date, location, and guest-number fields.
llstform
6. Submit your order and print out a hard copy of the requisition.
The cost of each order, plus applicable taxes, will be automatically deducted from
your departmental hospitality allotment, up to a maximum of $400 per month.
To learn more about Gusto's extensive catering services, you and members of
your department are Invited to an Information session on January 17, from
5:00-7:00 p.m. In the Central Atrium. Giorgio Delmonico, president of Gusto Fine
Foods, will be on hand to answer your questions and offer you the best from his
tastl ng menu.
Following the order guidelines established through this new partnership will -c Reader benefits emphasized
Improve the quality and efficiency of our In-house amenities and client hosting.
Call me at ext. 211 If you have any questions about the new procedure.
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difficult to follow. The tone is alternately breezy and accusatory, creating incoherence, and
many key details are left oiit- the effective date of t.he new ordering proced ure, the time
and location oft.he tasting session, and contact information.
Fib'lm: 5.1 creates a focus for the message with a specific: and descriptive subj ect line.
The direct opening tells readers exactly what the message is about, and the exp lanation
in the paragraph that rollows indicates why the new procedure mus t he implemented
and what its ad vantages are. The numbered list shows the steps in the new procedure in
sequence, simpli fying instructions for easy reference. The hyperlink to t.he catering com-
pany\.; website allows readers to access information that can't he provided in a short mes-
sage. To encourage compliance, the writ.e r reminds readeTs o r the new procedures benefits
and invi tes their questions by offering contact information in the Bnal paragraph . Readers
are left knmving when the new proced ures go into effect and what they are supposed to do.
The purpose of an informative message can also be to confirm a change in plans o r
schedule or to ackn owledge recei pt of materials. Wri ting an acknowledgement is usually a
matter of courtesy and requires no more than one or two sentences.
FI GURE 5 .4
E-mail that Requests Subject: Your Reaction to Proposed Power Conservation Plan
Data: Fri., Apr. 18, 2014, 8:30 AM
Subject clearly Indicates From: Derwin Waters <dwaters@aerosport.com>
that a response Is required
To: Sandy McPhee <smcphee@aerosport.com>
Opening combines
statement of benefits To help us meet new government guidelines for workplace power conservation,
with polite command
please answer the follow Ing questions regarding your energy consumption and
preferences on the job.
Multiple requests presented
In a numbered list - --+- 1. Would raising summer office temperature to a maximum 24 degrees
Celsius be acceptable?
2. Could overhead lighting be reduced In well-lit work areas?
3. Based on your use of office kitchen equipment, could you do without
the refrigerators and automatic coffee makers located on each floor?
The recent blackouts and power outages have put the Issue of energy conserva-
Explanation establishes the
necessity for the request -- tion high on our agenda. Our aim Is to create an environmentally responsible
yet still comfortable workplace by reducing power consumption by as much as
15 per cent.
You attitude, active voice
verbs, and reason for end Your answers to these questions will assist us In establishing new
date help to encourage action
recommendations to reduce power consumption and related costs. Please
respond by May 12 so we may compile data and act on your Input when the
Health and Safety Committee meets on May 16.
5 I MEMORA N DUMS, EMA IL , A N D ROUT I NE MESSAGES
paragraph what you are asking for and what action they must take. This directive is usu-
ally expressed as a polite command (Please explain the procedure for orde1ing a transcript of
ont: of your broadcasts) or a direct question (What is tht: procedure for ordering a transcript
of one of your broadca.~t.~? How may I obtain a transcript of one of your broadcast~?). Multiple
requests can be introduced by a summary statement and then listed as numbered or bul-
leted questions. For ease of response , readers can be invited to reply within the original
message. Explanations and justifications belong in the body of the message. While polite-
ness is key to gaining compliance, citing a reason for the request, reader benefits, and an
end date c:an build goodwill and help to ensure a useful and timely response. A consisten t
tone thats not too apologetic or demanding reduces the chance reade rs will overlook or be
resistant to your request.
Requests that make sizable demands on the reade rs time and resources sh01.1ld follow
the indirect plan that includes a reason for the request. If you think the reader may not
readily comply, reduce resistance by persuading with reasons and justifications.
FIGURE 5.5
FI GURE 5.6
FI GURE 5.7
The course will Include grammar review but will focus primarily on how
to write letters and e-mails In a plain-language style. A fu ll course outline
will be distributed to registrants by February 28.
recall" or hy inviting feedback that verifies the information you have passed om ("Please
reply if you agree that this message accurately reflects our conversation"). Writing follow
up messages protects you and your reader, lessening the chance of later retractions, falsifi-
cations, or broken commitments. The more important an oral agreement is, the more vital
it is to have proof in the form of wri tten confim1ati.011.. For especially crucial or sensitive
agreements, print out a copy of your follow-up e-mail or send a hard-copy letter.
style, tty to make your messages as readable as possible by avoiding practices such
as shouting.
3. Keep conversations to a few people al a time. More than four or five participants
in a conversation can make fo r an interactive free-for-all. Notify participants before
distributing the contenL~ 0 a thread conversation.
4. Inform people about your availability. Set status flags r.o "away" or "busy" if you
don't wish to he rngaged.
Composition
Cl Be brief, putting your main message in a strong opening so readers won't have to scroll
down through multiple screens to find it.
Cl Remember that e-mail is permanent and public-be careful what you write.
Cl Write with speed and accuracy by obeying the rules of good writing but not agonizing
over every character or line.
Cl Be conversational by writing "talking messages.
Cl Insert responses into the original message whenever possible to avoid creating chain
e-mails.
Cl Use hard-copy memos sparingly; use e-mail messages for internal and informal external
communication.
Cl Apply correct formatting rules and writing plans for memos and e-mails by using
accurate headers, providing clear subject lines, and organizing messages with an
opening, main body, and closing sentence/paragraph.
Cl Incorporate horizontal and vertical lists for clarity and conciseness.
Cl Elimi nate common e-mail problems by avoiding dubious practices and observing
proper netiquette.
Cl Follow common-sense steps in processing and managing e-mail.
a Use the direct approach for most memos and e-mail messages that inform, request,
respond, convey goodwill, and follow up.
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Rrcognlze the Nature and Characteri~tlc~ of over forty years' experience in the industry. The altered
Memo.~ and E-mail procedures Garrison has recommended wi II go Into
1. Evaluating Mamo Subject Lines. Mark each of the fol. effect September 15 and help ensure a safe working
lowing subject lines as V for vague or S fo r specific. environment and the protection of company property.
a) Holiday Celebration Please access the building by the Wilcox Street entrance
b) Cancellation of Holiday Celebra1ion and present your photo ID badge for security inspection
c) Casual Dress at the reception desk. All other doorways will remain
d) Proposed Casual Dress Day Program locked from the outside and are to be used only in the
e) Complete Attached Questionnaire event of emergency evacuation. Visitors will be issued
f ) Questionnaire security badges and must sign in and out at reception.
g) Your Request for lnfonnation on Corporate Media While on premises, all personnel must wear their photo
Relations ID badges.
h) Mee.Ila Article
4. Composing Strong Mamo Openings. Rt:vise the fol-
I) Customer Service
lowing paragraphs t.o front-load and summarize t ht:
j) Introduction of Customer Service lloLline
main message.
2. Writing Subject Lines for Memos and E-mail. For
a) Many of our employees have indicated that they
each of the following scenarios, write a focused and
favour adjusted work hours throughout the sum
acuon-specific subject line.
mer. After careful consideration, we have decided
a) You are writing to all employees to ask them to
that new hours will go into effect from June 2 to
complete an attached questionnaire on proposed
September 2. The new hours are 8:30 a .m.-4:30 p.m.
changes to the pension plan.
b) Our association holds its annual conference in
b) To promote a more positive and inclusive work
August and we are interested in your hotel and
environment, your company will be hold -
conference centre as a possible venue for this year's
inj.( a diversity awareness se minar on June 9.
event. We require a hosting facility to accommodate
Allenclance is mandatory.
our five hundred members from August 15- 18, 2014,
c) 13ecause many sta ff mem hers wear clothing
and need information about cost and availability.
inappropriate for the workplace, including mid-
c) We have recently received numerous complaints
riff-baring tops, micro minis, and T-shirts with
from points program members indicating that they
offensive slogans, your company \vill mtmduce a
have been prevented from applying their accumu-
dress code to take effect on July 2.
lated bonus points for discounts on recent purchases.
3. Getting to the Point. Unscramble the followmg memo
I am asking customer relations to conduct a study of
so that it starts with the main message and reserves
and make recommendations on the efficiency of the
the explanation for the body. Eliminate unnecessary
points program.
<letails.
d) We have noticed recently a steady decline In the
Trespassing and vandalism have become Increasingly quality of our high-speed Internet service. As our
serious problems for our organization. Following three contract with our current provider expires next
reported security violations in the past month, we have month, I am asking you to investigate the rates and
hired Garrison Safety Consultant Services to redesign service records of its chief competitors.
building access and entry procedures. Garrison Safety
Consultant Services has a proven track record and
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Format Horizontal and Vertical LMs for Clarit> Eliminate Common Problems and Dubio1ts
and Conciseness Practices in E-mails
S. Creating Effective Lists. Reorganize the followmg 6. Extinguishing "flaming ." Revise the following mes
information into list form, tabulating steps and sup- sage to n eutralize its angry tone and improve its
porting points. Compose a lead-in that suits each item. professionalism.
a) Please follow these packaging procedures to ensure
Iabsolutely have to have the latest sales figures
that all shi pped items arrive undamaged. First of all,
by Friday- no Ifs, ands, or buts. I fi nd it difficult to
ensure that the item does not exceed weight restric-
understand why so simple a request goes unnoticed
tions for the type of packaging used. Fragile items
until the deadline has passed, especially when the
should be shipped in special protective packaging.
survival of our retail clothing division depends on
Larger items should be shipped in customized crates
ongoing analysis of this important data.
and containers. Always ensure that the package is
properly sealed.
Develop Corrrct E mail Sty le and Tone
b) Setting up your new HT printer involves only a few
7. Adopting a conversational e -mail style. Revise the
steps. You should start by plugging the unit in and
following message between two long-time co-work-
making sure the printer cable is connected to your
ers to eliminate stirfness and undue formality.
computer. Then you should follow printing software
instructions and align print settings, but before you Dea r Mr. Harry Singh:
commence your first print job, you should run a test
Please be advised that you are instructed to review the
sample in case settings need adjustment.
revised procedures for sending courier packages to the
c) The new direct-deposit payroll system has several
United States. Please find attached a copy of the revised
advantages. Employees will no longer have to wait in
procedures for your perusal. Substantial savings will be
bank lineups to deposit their cheques and there is no
realized if all personnel comply with the new procedures
risk that paycheques will be lost or stolen. Employees
and Iwould be most grateful if you complied with them
can enjoy the added security of knowing that their
as well.
salaries go directly into their bank accounts on bi-
monthly paydays. Respectfully,
Paula Wittington
- - - - - -
Wrltt Memos and E-mails that Inform, Requtst, from around the world showcase innovative products
RCSJJOnd, Convey Goodwill. and Follow Up and trends in furniture, textile, and home accessor-
Analyze the following writing cases and select relevant ies design, residential interior design, and landscape
details to include in your messages. architecture. In your three days at the show, begin-
1. E-mail that Informs. As an assistant buyer for Space ning with Trade Day, you noted many new trends
One, a new Vancouver-area furni ture and home acces hut were most impressed hy the innovative use of
so ri es sto re, write a message 10 Marcella Ponti, pro materials in furnitu re design . Stan douts in cluded a
prietor and ch ief huyer, summa ri zing Lhe top 1rends collect.ion of ott o mans and chairs in leather, for, and
al the Interior Design Show. Marcella is currently o n chrome priced in the $1,000-$2,000 range from the
a buying trip in lt.aly and has sen1 you to the show Montreal design team Verile. "Clear" was another hm
in her place. The Interior Design Show in Toronto is trend 10 furniture and accessory design, seen in an
(..anadas largest residential desibrn show, attended by array of glass, Lucite, and acrylic products and best
8,500 design professionals and over 50,000 visitors exemplified by Philippe Starck's interpretation of a
every year. lts exhibits and presentations by designers classic Louis XV armchair and th e use of glass tile and
S I MEMORANDUMS , EMA IL , AND ROUT INE MESSAGES
countertops in kitchens and hathrooms. In textile 4. Goodwill E-mail. As a colleague of Gerald Dwyer (see
desi1:.rn, I.he most noticeahle trend was toward textural the previous case study), wri te him a congratulato ry
and richly emhellished fahrics in silk and synthetic e-mail conveying your best \vishes m1 his retirement.
blends, notably in a colour palate of golds, browns, Gerald was yo ur supervisor when you first joined
and corals. Having carefully reviewed product litera the company ten years ago. Although you found
ture and pricing information, you believe a strong his attitude somewhat paternalistic, especially when
case could he made for stocking several Canadian he referred to remale coworke rs as "my hest gals,"
items that re nect Space One's design sensibility. you appreciated his fairness and guidance, both of
2. E-mail that Informs. As director o r loss prevent.ion which contrihut.ed Lo your career advancement. A
for a small chain of grocery stores, write an e-mail to long-standing family comm itment prevents you from
store managers advising them of a surge in the use attending his retiremen t dinner.
of counterreit Internet discount coupons. In recent S. E-mail that Requests. As associate vice-preside nt
months, the problem has grown more seri ous. In for information technologies at Kelso Community
July, for example, retailers were hit with a nood of College, compose an e-mail to faculty asking them for
hogus coupons promising free ice cream hars from their feedback on a proposed v\IL\N (wireless local
Hiiagen-Dazs, a hrand represented in Canada by area network), part of the college's comprehensive
Nestle. With this in mind, ad vise store managers to e-strategy. For you, the advantages of "going wire-
mon itor the siwation closely and warn cashiers to less" are ohvious. Instructors will be ahle LO manage
closely inspect coupons offering free or heavily dis- their course workload, schedules, and student needs
counted items and to decline coupons without bar online, leaving mo re time for them to he actively
codes and expi ry dates. Of course, you realize that engaged in research. Students will he ahle to access
some bogus coupons are difficult to detect because brrades more easily, e-mail assibrnmenL~ to instructors,
tech nophiles can easily alter manufactu rers' cou- and interact \vith fellow classmates. You would li ke to
pons or create their own from scratch with the right know if fac.ulty members agree that wireless technol-
tools. The Food Marketing Institute, an international ogy will create a more effective way of teaching and
association hased in Washington, DC, estimates that a more efficient way of learning. Will it make their
frauds cost the sector up LO US$800 million annually. work easie r? Do I.hey have the skills--for example,
Make it clear to your readers that the cost of these knowledge of computer troubleshooting- to make
downloaded forgeries is a cost you prefer LO avoid. good use of the new technology? Can students he
3. E-mail that Informs. As your company's office relied upon to hring their laptops to class and use
events coordinator, write an e-mail to all employ them consis1.ent.ly? Do they have other concerns?
ees informing them of a retirement dinner party fo r 6. E-mail that Responds. As chair of the Early
Gerald Dwyer. Gerald joined the company in 1967 , Child hood Education Program at Kelso Community
first working as a mail clerk and steadily earn ing pro- College, respond to the proposed WLAN (see the
motions to become manager of operations. Known as previous case study). Having heard that most other
a team playe r, he spearheaded the company's United academic institutions have adopted wireless tech
Way fundraising dri ve for live record -breaking years nologies, you would like to see Kelso gain a similar
and streamlined office procedures for greate r effi- "electronic edge," though you still have a few reser-
ciency. Retirement parties are usually dreary affairs vations. Primarily, you are concerned about online
but you'd like this one to he different. Include infor- anti-virus security and related privacy iissues. Would
mation ahout when and where the party will he students' marks he secure? What would happen if the
held, how formal i.t will he, what type of food will be system crashed? Another issue that con cerns you is
served, whom to contact for tickets, cost per ticket, sll.ldent access to laptops and available funding fo r
whether guests are permitted, additional charges fo r those unable to meet the technological requirements.
a gift, and venue parking and accessibility details Many o r your students cannot afford to buy a laptop,
(con.sider a hype rlink for this fin al item). Use appro so you would like l.o see fonding set up before such a
priate fom1atting techniques for easy readability. program is implemented .
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7. E-mail that Informs. As marketing coordi nator or your and the structure and memhership or the teams. The
company, wri te to members of the marketing div program has been established to promote friendship,
ision advising them of the venue change for the r.eam- co-operation, and healthy lifestyles among employ-
huilding retreat scheduled for August 8- 10. The ees. Six co-eel teams will he open to employees only
sudden closure of Cedarcrest Resort and Conference and will offer them the opportuni ty to p;;irr.icipate
Facility d ue to a health alert has ldt your division in non-body-contact hockey, soccer, and softball.
without a veni1e. Rather than cancel the event, you Everyone ls welcome to participate in m ore than
have negotiated with the resort operator, Riverwood one sport and \vill be notified by e-mail of game
lnc., to move the event to Huntingwood, a nearhy el ates and cancellations. Registration will commence
lux-ury resort in the Riverwood chain. The health alert immediately and end one week prior l.O the season
has not t11Efected Huntinl,l\Vood, nor is it expected to. opening games. You will he responsible for notifying
The ai m of the retreat remains the same: to foster het team members of game dates and cancellations and
ter relations among your sometimes-combative team for booki ng are nas and diamond times. To ensure
memhers. The program of events is also unchanged. employee safety, Garincler has a.~kecl you to arrange
From 8:30 a.m. to noon each day, the group will for volunteers with refereeing expe rience who in tum
make presentations and discuss marketing strategy. could he offered a small gift o r honorarium for their
From 1:00 to 4:00 p. m., the l,'foup will participate in services. A $20-per-person rink fee applies to hockey
fun and challenging team-huilding exercises such as participants to cover hooking and rental charges.
three-legged races and obstacle courses. Hockey players are expected to provide tlheir own
8. E-mail that Follows Up. As coordinator of you r equip ment, including sticks, skates, hel mets, and
organization's newly established intramural sports mouthguar<ls. Softball players must come to games
program, write a message to Garinder Singh, vice- equipped with gloves and appropriate footwear. All
president of human resources, confirming the details other softhall and soccer equipment will he provided.
worked out in a meeting several days ago. Since it is During the program's inaubrural season, teams will
your responsibllity to organize events for the upcom- play every two weeks. There \vill he prizes for win-
ing winter-spring season, you want to he sure that ning teams and certifi cates for players wh o attend
you and Garinder agree on the terms of participation throughout the season.
r
1... ONLINE ACTIVITIES
Recognize the Nature and Characteristics of Recognize Steps in Processing and Managing
Memos E-mail
1. Reviewing Memo Guidelines. Take the quiz cre- 3. Writing E-mail Subject Lines. Visit the Royal
ated by the El Paso Comm unity College to test your Melbourne Institute ofTechnologys Study & Learning
kn owledge of memos. Centre website and complete the subject line exercise:
http://starl.epcc.edu/Student!Tutoria\_Quizzes/ www.d\sweh.m1it.edu.au/lsu/content/4
Writing_quizzes/memo_quiz..htm _WritingSkills/writing__tuts/husiness
2. Writing Memos. Visit the Weh Writing that Works! _%20english_LUernails/subject_line.htm1
"Challenges" web page and complete the exercises. For 4. Reducing Spam. Review the spam you receive over
each of the four paragraphs, also add a subject line and a two- or three-day period, then visit the Spamhaus
introd uctory statement. Project, a database on the history and methods of
www.wehwritingthatworks.com/ spammers. Dis<:uss ways to reduce and eliminate spam.
eGuideS can2dChallenges. htm www.spamhaus.org
s MEMORANDUM S, E MAIL , ANO ROUT I NE ME SSA G ES
s. Analyzing Websites. Read lhe Wolfram Memorial 6. Tracking Internet Use. Visit Stauslics Canada's The
Lihrary's "How to Recognize a Business/Marketing Dally from Wednesday, May 25, 201 I for a rcvtew
Web Page." of the 2010 Canadian Internet Use Survey (CIUS),
www.widener.edu/lihraries/w ol fgram/evaluale/ which ou11ines personal computer access according
hu~marketing.asp to public- and private-sector industries:
Use the checklist to evaluate one or more of the www.~Lalcan.gc.ca/daily-quotidien/11052 5/
follc>wing Canadian retall wehsites: dq 110525h-eng.htm
http ://canada.roots.com Then refer to the following analysis oft.he data:
www.chapters.indigo.ca www.convurgency.com/hloW-2011-canadian
www.leevalley.com -internelu~agestati~tics.html
www.danier.com Write a hrief summary of what you have learned
www.canadiantire.ca ahout e mail, then e-mail your assignment to your
www.hhc.com instructor.
www.marks.com
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
HIGH -PERFORMING organizations and their leaders know the role that communications
plays In building a culture In which trust-a quality vital to credibility and loyalty-can
thrive. David Moorcroft, former senior vice-president of corporate communications at RBC
Financial Group, states: communication Is the critical link to stakeholders. Not just to pro-
vide information, which Is Just the table stakes. Building trust Involves managing communi -
cations and creating the right channels that give employees more of a say In things and
encouraging discussion around what needs to be done: His advice to senior executives Is
to "do a lot of location visits and a lot of direct e-mail communication. And always provide
opportunities for feedback. Communication can't be left to chance. 1
Opening- delivers the main message fi rst. It answers your reader's most import.ant
questions; st.ates the good news; makes a direct, specific request; or provides the most
import.ant information (from the reader's perspective whenever possible).
Middle- explains details of the news or inquiry and supplies hackground and clari
fication when needed. If there are further points or questions, they are presented in
parallel fom1 in a hullet.ed or numhen:d list (maxi mt1m five or six items).
Closing- ends pleasantly in one or more of the follO\ving ways: provides contact
information; asks for action, input, or a response, often hy a deadline; tells the reader
what happens next; commun icates goodwill.; or shows appreciation.
Straightforward and versatile, this writing plan L~ one that can he used for most routine
correspondence, including requests and responses.
Requests
The first step in getting something you need--data, merchandise, a product replacement,
refund, action, or assistance- is knowing how to ask for it. The direct approach puts your
request memo a message that request (often in the form of a request memo) hefo re the reader right away and helps to
asks tho rcador to perform a speed the exchange of infom1at.ion and pace of transactions. Keep in mind t.he following
routine action.
tips as you draft your direct-approach requests:
Put the main idea first. Emlbedded request.~ are easy to overlook. Phrase your request
as a question (Will you please provide recommendations on technology purchast:s that
would help reduce turnaround time on document production?) or a polite command (Please
provide recommendations on technology purchase.~). St.ate exactly what you wan.t- vague
requests only encourage vague responses.
Give a reason for the reque st or state its hene6t. Unless you can incorporate this
information into tbe opening paragraph in one sentence or less, put it in the second
paragraph: Please assist me in preparing an artic:lefor Accountants Monthly by answering
the following que.1ticm.1 abrmt. your C:PA work-study program.
Introduce multiple requests or quest.ions with a summary statement. Ph rase your
request as a polite question th.at requires no question mark: Will (or Would) you please
answer the following que.1tions about your exec:utivt: search services. Another option is to
phrase it as a polite request: Please answer the following questions about your executive
st:arch services.
Anticipate required details . Consider what the reader will need in order to process
or act on your request.
Strike a tone that is right for your reader. Be Ami hut respectful. Don't apologize
or he afraid t.o ask for something to which you are entitled, hut don't hrowheat tbe
reader to do as you say. Show courtesy, especially in an externally directed message.
Keep minor points to a minimum. Unnecessary infom1ation bltmts t.he impact of
your request. Edit out unrelated facts. If you want to give your reader additional
lnformation, enclose supporting documents.
Use a layout that focuses attention on your n:quest. Incorporate hulleted. or num
bered lists, surround specifi.cs with white space, and boldface or italicize key points
for emphasis.
6 I ROU T INE AN D GOO DW I LL ME SS A G ES
Close in a courteous and efficient way. Focus on the action you want the reader
to take and use positive language to com municate goodwill and show appreciation.
Avold closing with canned expressions, such as Thanking you in advanct:, or ones that
make your req uest sound unfocused, such as Thanh you for any in.formation you can
provide. Opt for something that is fresh and relevant to your partk1.1lar message.
FIGURE 6 . 1
Ineffective Information
Dear Ms. O'Connor: Request (extract)
The r ecent relocation of our company offices to smaller premises has forced us --- -+-- B!!glns with an explanation
rather than a dlrnct rnqucrt
to consider off-site document storage and upgrades to our flllng and records
system. I have been entrusted with the Important task of researching options
and finding a solution to our current document storage and retrieval cri sis. Your
company was recommended to us by one of our suppliers, but we could not
locate your website, hence the necessity of writing to, you now. I hope you will
be able to answer some questions I have about the services you provide.
Rambling second paragraph
Our chief Interest Is cost. We are Interested In finding t he safest and most cost- ..,. makes It difficult to Identify
effective way to store documents that have been on flle more than two years. lndlvldual questions
First of all, we need to know how expensive your services are. Perhaps you offer
discounts based on volume. Can we retrieve documents Immediately or would It
take several days to process a request? What sort of security does your company
guarantee for our most confldentlal documents?We also need to know what sort
of support you provide your customers. We have many other questions, but thi s
should be enough to give us a rough Idea of whether your company Is the right
flt for us. What other services do you offer?
Closing makes request less
I need any Information and recommendations you can provide regarding the spedRc. Inviting response not
storage and retrieval of documents. tailored to the Inquiry
Sincerely,
Ope:ratlons
COMM U N I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 6 .2
January 6, 2014
ones, be guaranteed?
Makes reason for the request
secondary to the request Itself
S. What support do you provide to your customers?
Refocuses request at the Our company must find a suitable document storage solution before June 30,
end, bettering the chances of
~ when we will move to smaller premises while our permanent offices undergo
obtaining quallty Information
a year-long renovation. We would appreciate answers to these questions and
End dates request lo motivate
prompt response .,. any other Information you can provide on your document services by May 1S.
Sincerely,
Sasha Mistry
Manager, Operations
6 I ROUTINE AND GOODWI LL MESSA GES
benefits can sometimes encourage a more favourable reply. End with a paragraph- even
a short sentence-specific to the reader and the request. Make a point of refocusing your
request, end-dating it if necessary, and ei.'Pressing appreciation for compliance.
ORDER REQUESTS
You may decide to write an order request for merchandise when it isn't possible to order order request a request for
something by catalogue order form, telephone, fax, or website or when you need a record merchandise that Includes a
purchase author12at1on and
o r having placed an order. This type or letter should supply all the details needed for the
shipping Instructions.
order to he filled: s pecific product names and descriptions, quantities, order numbers,
units and total prices, desired method of shipment, preferred date of delivery, and mer.hod
o r payment. Don't forget to factor in applicable taxes and specify the delivery address ir it
is different from the billing address. Careful formatting of the message can make the order
faster and easier to process:
1. Authorize t11e purchase and specify t11e preferre:d method of shipment. Merely
expressing interest in certain merchandise may not communicate your intention to
purchase it. Your request should he explicit rather than implied. lndica1.e 1.he source
of m.erchandL~e infom1ation , especially if you lack a current price list.
2. Itemize requested merchandise, using a list form.at. Use tabulation, tidy columns,
and white space to create a readable summary of details about multiple items. Alibrn
dollar figures (unit prices and totals).
3. Close with special instructions and thanks. State how you intend to pay for the
merchandise- ask to be hilled, refer to credit agreements, or enclose a cheque.
Specify t.he dat.e by which you expect to receive your order and end with appreciation
for the processing of the order.
FIGURE 6 .3
January 6, 2014
Subtotal $865.00
Estimated taxes 60.55
Shipping s 36.00
Total $961.55
Preforred method of payment
Included with special _ __,__,_., Our newly expanded tax preparation centre Is scheduled to open January 20
Instructions
and we would appreciate receiving these Items promptly In preparation for that
event. Please charge this order to our account no. 590 837 428. Should you need
to discuss any of these Items, please call me at 905-751 -2240.
No complimentary dose Is
used In simplified style letters
...
Ashanti Achebe, CA
6 I ROU T INE AN D GOO DW I LL ME SS A G ES
CLAIM LETIERS
\.Vhen, as a custome r, you seek a correction of a problem or compensation fo r losses
incurred , the type of letter you write is called a claim . Filing a claim means you are wri t dalm a demand or request for
ing as a customer about something that has gone wrnng- merchandise has tun1ed out to something- often a replacement
or a refund- that Isconsidered
he raulty, goods haven't been delivered, a delivery has contained the wrong me rchand ise,
one'sdue.
a hi lling error has heen made, or the service you received has been unsatisfactory. Your
claim is j ustified and relatively straightforward if a prod uct is stiJl under warranty or a
service Le; guaranteed. In 01.her words, there is every reason the complaint should he easily
resolved. However, you must explain in a written letter why your claim is justified if you
hope to receive a refund, replacement, correction, or apology. Namrally, you may he anbrry
about what has happened, hut you shoi1ld avoid ex11ressi ng anger and refrain from adopt
adjustment a written response
ing a complaining or accusatory tone. Your best chance for success lies in staying objective to a complaint that tells the
and stating clearly what you expect the company to do. To put yourself in the right frame customer what will be dono about
of mind, allow yoursel f a cooling-off peri od before you WTite. Focus on providing details the complaint In terms of solving
the problem, correcttng an error,
the company will need to assess your problem and motivating 1.he reader to work on your granttng a rafuncl, or adjusting the
behalf and grant. you the adjustment you seek. amount due.
FIGURE 6 .4
When I joined your health club In January, I never suspected that I would expend Angry, accusatory Lone has
more energy dealing with red tape than burning calories on a treadmill. I am ..,. potential to destroy rapport
with reader
Incensed and outraged that your company made an unauthorized withdrawal
from my bank account after I cancelled my membership. Under the Prepaid
Services Act, automatic charges of this kind are Illegal. I backed out of the Clouds Justification for claim
contract within the 10-day coollng-off period, so I feel It Is unfair for me to be on ..,. - request with emotional
the hook for an Initiation fee and an addition al $19 to cover the cost of a plastic language
membership card that I will not have occa sion to use.
No wonder health clubs routinely make the Canadian Council of Better Business
Bureau's Top 10 Complaints list. May I remind you that companies like yours that
do not abide by provincial regulations are at serious risk of prosecution.
Ends with threat rather than
I demand to know when something will be done to correct this situation. Even expression of confidence In
thol.!lgh the amount Is relatively small- $69- lt Is the principle that Is at stake the adjustment
here. I want my money refunded- and I want It now. Unless you respond
immediately, I will not hesitate to register a complaint with the Ontario Ministry
of Consumer and Business Services and put the matter In the hands of my lawyer.
And I won't stop there.
Angrily,
Sean Acheson
COMMUN I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 6 .5
I first visited Atlas Fitness on January 12 and signed up for a $789 one-year
Provides a cohcront,
,. membership. After touring your faclllty and consulting fitness experts on
unemotional explanallon
January 14, I realized that your programs are geared to advanced fitness
enthusiasts rather than beginners like myself. Because the contract I signed
followed provincial guidelines that allow for a 10-day cooling-off period, I
understood that I would be entitled to a full refund If I backed out of the
agreement within the trial period. Enclosed Is a copy of the letter sent to you
Supplies supporting
documentation
- -1--. by courier on January 15 In which I give official notification of the cancellation
of my membership.
When I received a statement from your company at the end of January, I was
surprised to find that processing and card fees totalIIng $69 had been charged to
me under the prepaid agreement that Is now void. These unauthorized charges
also appeared on my monthly bank statement. According to the cancellation
terms In the contract I signed, members who withdraw within the 10-day period
are not liable for processing and card fees.
Ends courteously with request
,. I Joined Atlas Fitness on the basis of Its fine reputation and standards In the
for specific action
fitness Industry. I am confident that this billing error can be corrected and that
you will honour my request for a refund without delay.
Sincerely,
Sean Acheson
Enc.
6 I ROU T INE AN D GOO DW I LL ME SS A G ES
1. Make your request for an adjustment. State what you expect the reader to do to
solve the problem. You might expect t.he reader lo give you a refund, provide you
with a replacement, process a new order or cancel an existing one, repair or inspect a
prod uct for free, co rrect a hilling error, or review policies or proced ures that contrib-
uted to the problem you expe1ienced.
2. Iden tify th e faulty item or problem and ei.i>lai n logically and specifically why
your claim is justified. State what the reader needs to know to assess 1.he situation
and include pert.inent details and documents: place of purchase, date of purcha..~e.
part names, model number, warranty number, invoice num ber, names and dates
relating to previous calls about the problem, and a copy of the receipt, bill , or con-
tract. If you are uncertain about the cause of the problem, avoid guessing. Si mply
explain why the situation ls a problem for you and work on the assumption that
the company will want to do i.ts best to retain yo u a..~ a customer. Use objective,
unem otional language to motivate the reader by sh owing how reasonable you are.
Keep in mind 1.hat the person reading your request may not be responsible fo r the
problem, so avoid succumbing to anger. You may wan t to consider an alternative
solution if you suspect the company that you're writing to won't be able lo do exactly
as you ask.
3. End positively and pleasantly. Restate the action you have requested and ei.'Press
confidence in the settlement of your claim. End-date your request if you require a
speedy response. Keep a copy of your lette r in a file with other documents related to
your claim.
O Have you phrased the request so the reader views it posit ively?
O Is your request straightforward and specific? Have you stated your purpose at the
beginning rather than embedding it?
0 If there are multiple requests, are they introduced with a summary statement and then
presented individually in a numbered or bulleted list?
D Have you kept the number of questions to a minimum?
O Are the questions specific, concise, and phrased so the reader will know immediately
what you are seeking?
O Have you selected details that will help the reader respond more promptly and
completely?
O Have you told the reader how to and by w hen to respond ? Will t he reader know what
to do? Have you provided contact information?
O Have you expressed appreciation to t he reader for taking the trouble to respond?
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
Responses
response a message that answers A response is usually most effective when it is prompt, infom1ative, and gets to the point.
a rcqucsl or query. When you can respond favourahly to a request for information or action, you should
waste no time conveying the news and huilding goodwill when it is necessary to shape
readers' attitudes to policies or husiness practices. A routine response provides focused
details of a decision, answer, or action so readers can make infom1ed decisions, follow
through, or know what happens next. Here are a few tips for writing a good response:
Determine if you are the right person to handle the response. lf you do not have
the knowledge or authority to process a request, refer it to someone who does.
Rep ly as soon as you possibly can. A prompt response shows that you have taken
a request seriously and that you uphold good se rvice standards. Delays, especially
when they are unexplained, test reade rs' patience and strain business relationships.
Begin with good news or the most important piece of information. When you can
provide what t.he reader has requested, you should say so in the first sentence.
Design your response to be useful. Anticipate information your reader may need.
Respond within your company's ethical
guidelines. Disclose only the infom1at.ion your
reader has a right to know. Don't share legally
sensitive, potentially contentious details in an
effort to make yoin response ahsolutely com
Read Kim Garst's s Qualities of plete. Your letter is, in effect, a legal contract,
Companies with Outstanding Social and all facts and figures contained within it
Customer Service to learn how some
must he act1.Hate.
companies use social media to handle customer inquiries
Make your closing work for you. Avoid diches
and complaints: http://goo.gi/vH54Fs.
and expressions such as "l hope" or "l trust" that
might convey a lack of confidence . View your
dosing remarks as an opportunity to cement
relationships if they are in need of reinforcement.
INFORMATION RESPONSE
Inquiry a message that asks for or A response to an inquiry (o r infom1ation request) should supply requested infom1ation
seeks Information. (An Inquiry or first wi thout the need for an introd uction. lt is unnecessary to confirm the receipt of a
lnrormatlon response Is a message
that supplies Information)
request- which is evident from th e response itself-or to begin hy than.king the reader for
having written or having made an inquiry. Instead, include words of thanks afr.er the main
response or at the end, where they help to huild goodwill.
Cluttered: Thank you for your letter of July 14, received July 17, in which you requested
information on day trading.
When replying to multiple requests, answer questions in the orde r they were asked
and use headings, huller.eel or numhered lists, or other graphic highlighting techniques
to arrange information logically for maximum readability. lntrodm:e your answers with a
summary statement. Writing a complete and useful response may require you to interpret
6 I ROUTINE AND GOODWI LL MESSAGES
FI GU RE 6 .6
unqualified success.
1. Why did we introduce the program? Employees appreciate being noticed for a
job well done and for an idea that saves t ime or money. Like many organizations
today, we realized we could improve business and boost team spirit by giving
employees a public pat on the back. Our program was instituted to attract, retain,
and motivate people.
2. For what types of achievements do we give rewards? We give rewards for ..,. _ Answers each Inquiry
loglcally ancl fully In llst form
effective management, visionary leadership, outstanding creative ideas, and
initiatives that lead to cost savings.
3. What is the scope of our recognition program? Over the past year, we awarded
more than $65,000 to 76 winners, ranging from $450 to an employee who
noticed misleading wording in one of our brochures to a top award of $25,000
to a team of eight employees who designed an automated transaction system.
Roughly three hundred ideas are submitted each month, with awards given
monthly and annually. In the three years of the program's existence, there have
been close to four hundred award winners.
Sincerely,
Enc.
CO MMU N I C ATI N G FO R RESU LTS
FIGURE 6 .7
Ineffective Information
Response (extract) / Thank you for your letter of Inquiry dated March 12. This Is to advise you that
Opens with obvious we are now In receipt of this message. We are always glad to receive requests
Information-that the request of thi s kind and are happy to assist you with the research for your article on
has been received. Language employee recognition programs. I belleve your specific question s relate to
Is stiff and formal
,.. the Impact of our program o n employee morale. There are many Issues to be
First paragraph padde!d addressed, but we will try to answer what question s we can.
with Irrelevant detalls
Second paragraph falls lo ~ Our program Is good for our employees. We give rewards-some nominal,
provide concrete details. No others quite substantial-for all ki nds of Initiatives, Including good Ideas and
evidence Is offered to prove leadership. Since the program was establlshed, many employees have seen their
why the program Is good"
good work rewarded.
Closing remarks sound Insincere
because little Information has - - 1 -+ We are glad to have helped. Good luck with your research.
been offered
hard-to-grasp facts and statistics and to anticipate questions your readers still might have
once their original inquiries are answered.
FIGURE 6 .8
(Current date}
We appreciate your Interest In the construction of our new Top Food Lakeview
superstore. The enclosed brochure highlights the superior shopping experience
that begins with our grand opening In June 2014.
Please drop by for our open house on (date) to tour the store, sample our newest
product lines, and see for yourself the many ways In which we are committed to
making your shopping experience enjoyable.
We appreciate your patronage and look forward to offering you the best at our
expanded superstores and our Lakeview location.
Suzanne Wong
Customer Service Specialist
Enclosure
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
1. Acknowledge when and hc,w a shipment will be sent. There is no need to mmtion
that you received an orde r. Readers are most interested in knowing that a shipment is
on its way. Preface the 6rst paragraph with a personal salutation:
Your industrial air conditioning unit and invoice forms have been shipped to you by air
freight and should arrive by April 2.
2. Give details of the shipment and convince readers they have made a wise pur-
chase. As you specify individual items, build confldence in them hy refening to their
features or confirming their popularity. Mention any irregularities in the order (i.e.,
products currently unavailahle o r to he shipped later):
The air conditioning unit you ordered features a humidity-control mechanism that
allows you to regulate the amount of moisture in the air. Customers say that this
dehumidifying feature has kept their offices and residences comfortably cool while
helping them to reduce their summer energy costs.
3. Use discretion in pushing additional products. Gently suggest similar or related prod-
ucts and emphasize their benefits, hut avoid agbrressive sales tactics and the hard sell:
For your interest, we are enclosing a price list of Northwind Air Conditioning filter
attachments. Customers who have already purchased a customized Northwind Air
Conditioning unit from us receive an automatic 20 per cent discount on the purchase
of any anti-allergen or aromatherapy attachment.
4. Close pleasantly. Express appreciation for the readers business and include a for-
ward-looking, personalized remark:
We genuinely appreciate your order, Mr. Vukovic, and we look forward to serving
you again .
The goal of a confirmation message is to confi m1 and explain details already estab-
lished in a related document or to put an oral agreement into writing. A message con-
fim1ing a contract helps lo ensure that t.he meaning of an agreement is shared by all parties
who enter into it, so that there is no confusion between the parties or any misunderstand-
ing that could lead to disputes. Confim1ation of an arrangement, including time-specific
events such as travel, meetings, conferences, and appointments, keeps planners and par-
ticipants onside so that they can properly coordinate their activities and ensure that those
activities have the int.ended outcome.
6 I ROUTINE AND GOODWI LL MESSAGES
FIGURE 6 .9
December 1, 2013
Thank you for agreeing to take part In communicating for Engineering Success:
Industry Standards, Practices, and Licensing;' a five-member panel session to take
place at Lakeside Polytechnic, S353 Richardson Hall, on Tuesday, December 17,
from 10:00 a.m. to 12:00 p.m.
As we discussed over the telephone this morning, this session will Introduce the
350 undergraduate students enrolled In "Perspectives In Technical Communication"
to Professional Engineers of Ontario's licensing standards and collaborative
approaches to engineering communication. This letter confirms that you will speak
for 20 minutes, beginning at 10:30 a.m., on the topic "Globallzed Communications
In the Engineering Industry: A full program for the event Is attached.
A luncheon for all participants will follow at 12:30 p.m. at Verdi's Restaurant,
located at 54 Elm Street, between Dundas and Gerrard Streets.
SI Merely,
Dlma Al Said
Coordinator, School of Communication
Enclosures
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
highlighting the key tem1s and condi tions or a contract, includi ng the offer, obli-
gar.ions, rules for acceptance, and effective date, or the details of an arrangement,
including date, time, place, nature or purpose, and length or the event
showing appreciation to the reader for agreeing to participate in or helping to set up
the event o r arrangement
specifying and delegating tasks to he completed and identiFying administrative tasks
providing dear word ing that allows the reader to point out anything in the agreement
that is contrary to what he or she thought it should he
setting out actions the reader must take, such as signi ng and returning an agreement
Some letter agreemen ts, in w hich the recipient's signatme is required on the letter
itself to show agreement to the stated terms, can have the legal effect of contracts, so it
is always hest to check with a la wyer to detem1ine whether to use a contract or a letter
of agreement.
CLAIMS ADJUSTMENT
Consumer protection laws and the need to retain customers prompt most husi11esses to
grant claims and make swift adjustments in all hut those cases where claims are fraudu-
lent. Claimants typically want to learn the good news about a refund, replacement, or
other compensation at the begi n ning of your message. From the start, a claim response
rights a wrong resulting from poor service, poor product performance, or a hilling error.
Its purpose is threefold: (1) to inform a customer that his or her claim has heen successful,
FIGURE 6.10
with a reminder of difficulty - - Let us say again how very sorry we are for this problem. We sincerely hope It
doesn't happen again.
6 I ROU T INE AND GOO DW I LL MESSA G ES
(2) to show how you intend to rectify the prohlem or resolve the complaint, and (1) to
repair customer relations, rehuild goodwi ll, and restore confidence. A prompt response
that reflects a thorough investigation of the problem and sounds happy ahout maki ng the
adjustment helps to repair the relationship with the customer and promote favourahle
at.t.itudes to your company.
FIGURE 6 . 11
Sincerely,
Meredith Anderson
Manager, Customer Service
Enc.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
messages should he
THANK-YOU LETTERS
If you or your company has henefited from what another person or organization has pro-
vided, such as hospitality, husiness, a gift, or a favour, it is important to ex11ress your grati-
tude with a brief but sincere letter. A good thank-you letter doesn't overplay or underplay thank-you letter (or letter of
expressions of gratitude. Its words of thanks are honest and meaningful, not just part appreciation) a message thanking
someone for his or her help,
of a hollow exercise. Skip generic statements and canned phrases and instead foc:us on hospitality, or business.
the reader:
1. Thank the reader for what he or she has done, given, or provided. Recall what it
consisted of by identifying the situation or your purpose in writing.
2. Include a few details. Show that you are not just standing on fomiality. Detail the
benefits you derived and why you are grateful. If you are expressi ng thanks for hos-
pitality, compliment your host on r.he food, company, or surroundi ngs. If you are
sending thanks for a brift, tell why you appreciate it and how you will use it. Express
than.ks for a favour by stating plainly what the favou~- means to you.
3. Close with goodwill or a forward-looking remark. Consider ending with a compli-
ment, funher thanks, or good wishes.
COMM U N I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 6 .12
Sincerely,
Susan MacDonald
President
6 I ROU T INE AN D GOO DW I LL ME SS A G ES
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COMMUNICATING FOR RESULTS
FIGURE 6 .14
SI ncerely yours,
Aaron Grey
6 I ROU T INE AN D GOO DW I LL ME SS A G ES
LETIER OF CONGRATULATIONS
A letter or congratulations expresses happi ness at a readers good fortune. Because your letter of congratulations a
good wishes should seem genuine, it is important to avoid lanb'l.lage that might sound message corwaying plaasuro
at someone'sllapplness or
patronizing- such as a put-down masquerading as praise (e.g., it seems only yesterday good wisheson someone's
you were a struggling young writer from the wilds of lilkrm, hungry for that elusive byline)- or accomplishment
anything to suggest that an honour isn't dese rved. Show that you share in the reader's hap-
piness hy using words that correspond to the occasion, not ones that sound falsely effusive
or hollow.
FIGURE 6 . 15
Dear Vincent:
Commends recipient on well
deserved honour, using Its exact
Your Creativity In Advertising Award Is long overdue and well deserved. I can title, and reflects on Its meaning
think of few Individuals who have contributed as much as you have to the and the actlvltles that merited It
advertising Industry. With their unique combination of humour and brand
enhancement, the campaigns you spearheaded always reflected the Ingenuity
for which you are now being recognized. Members of the department Join me
In expressing our heartiest congratulations upon your achievement.
You were greatly missed when you left to establish your own agency, but we
take much pleasure In offering our good wishes for your continued success.
- Closing relte rates personal
good wishes
Cordially,
Sonia Vargas
Vice President, Creative Division
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
LETIER OF SYMPATHY
letter of sympathy (or Responding to loss is always difficult. A letter of sympathy lets your reader know you
condolence) a message expressing care and are ready to offer help and support, if required. The message should be hand
sadness at someone's bereavement
and offering words of comfort. written and sent as soon as possible afte r you learn of the be reavement. Your purpose in
writing is to express your sadness at learning of the reader\; loss and to offer sym pathy.
Your first sentence should refer to the loss-and your reaction to it- in a tactful way. If
you knew the deceased as an acquaintance or personal friend, recall positive auriibutes for
which that person will be rememhered. Offer something you can do, such as personal help
or business-related assistance. The reader may find it difficult to absorb more than a few
paragraphs, so keep the message brid and its sentiments sincere. After all, a sympathy let
ter should be a source of comfort and support.
FIGURE 6 .16
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6 I ROUTINE AND GOODWI LL MESSA GES
Informative Letters
Some types of informative letters are neither requests nor responses. Their purpose is Informative letters messages
explanatory-to simply let readers know what somethi ng is or to keep t.hem up to date on that provtde lmportant/mlevanr
lnformallon and ro which the
changi ng policies, personnel, or circumstances. reader w111 react neulrally.
ANNOUNCEMENTS
Announcements keep readers inrormed of company policies, events, and personnel announcement a message
changes-something as sim ple as a change of address or as major as a company merger. that makos something known
about a company policy, event, or
When the news you have to deliver is positive or neutral, use the direct approach and personnel ch<inge.
keep in mind that announcement leuers are opportunities not only to pass on informa-
tion but also to promote goodwill. A typical announcement gives its most im portant news
first and then moves on to clarify details that answer questions readers are likely to have.
If there are negatives, make them clear hut try to present them as positively as possible.
Explain any read er benefi ts, pointing out how a product, policy, or dealing with the com-
pany is good for the reader.
Goldsmith Press is pleased to announce the appointment of Jocelyn Harwood as its director
of marketing. Ms. Harwood has more than ten years' experience in the publishing industry
and most recently worked as assistant marketing director at Manticore Publishing. She joins
us as we expand our business publishing division and brings with her extensive experience
in marketing texts to colleges and universities.
1. Iden tify what you are sending. Your phrasing depends on how fri end ly or fom1al
you want to he:
Enclosed is a proof copy of the article you recently wrote for us.
I am pleased to enclose a proof copy of the article you recently wrote for us.
Here is a proof copy of the article you recently wrote for us.
"Minding Your Periods and Commas is a welcome addition to Vol. 7 of Resources far
Business Writers.
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3. Point out important details. Help the reader understand the document or give
instructions on how to use the materials. Have all t.he items the reade r requested heen
sent as promised? ls the document a draft or a final ve rsion? Will other documents
or materials he forwarded lat.er? Are there recommendations or findings the reader is
likely to support?
The proof copy you received reflects minor editorial changes, including the
abbreviation of some subheadings.
4. Offer further assistance or tell the reader what happens next. State what you wi ll
do or tell r.he reader what to do if you expect action or a response. Give a deadline if
needed, then close in a friendly or helpful way, perhaps hy expressing hope that the
material will fulfill its purpose.
INSTRUCTIONAL LETIER/MEMO
lnstructions systematically explain a process, activity, or operation and make it doable for
the average reader. Directives sh.are important in rom1ation abont what employees nrnst
do as a result o r changes in regu.lations, policies, or day today procedures. Anyone who
works responsibly will read and/or write instructions and directions on a regu lar basis.
Because staying competitive and working responsibly involve keeping pace with new tech
nologies and regulations, instructions and directives help organizations ensure that those
technologies can he used effectively and that new rules and procedures are complied \vith.
Written as e-mail messages, memos, or letters, these types of routine messages enahle
work to he carried out legally, eth ically, and safely, without costly mistakes. It is generally
nnderstood that readers have no trouble accepting instructions and directives, so use a
direct approach when writing instructions.
Without instructions, it would he impossihle to learn how to use or operate office
equipment, industrial machinery; or any other device; it would he difficult to learn a new
task, for example, how to use a new software application or hold a web conrerer1ce. Good
instructions display the following characteristics:
Clear and accurate: There should he no amhiguity or guesswork involved iii follow
ing the instructions. Because inst.ructions are used on the spot and lead to immediate
action, there is no margin for error. The logically ordered steps into which a proced-
ure is divided should he ohvious and self-explanatory.
Precise: lnst.rnct.im1s should include no more and no less than what readers need
to know. Attention to phrasing is essential. Positive phrasing t.bat emphasizes what
readers should do is easier to follow and understand than negative phrasing, which
emphasizes what readers must not do. Exact times, amounts, and measurements
should he used to quantify details.
6 I ROUTINE AND GOODWI LL MESSA GES
1. Be sure you understand the procedure well enough to explain it, either from having
perfom1ed it yourself or having seen an expert demonstrate it.
2. Assess your audience's familiarity with the proced Ul'e and determine the right levels
of technicality and explanation. Think about. how and in what. circumstances the
instructions will he used and whether you must persuade readers that the instructions
are beneficial or necessary.
3. Include an introduction, a lLst o r equipment and materials, a description of the steps,
and a conclusion.
4. Provide warnings tr there is a risk of damage or inji1ry.
5. Explain the purpose (the what and the why) of tl1e procedure or activity in the
introduction.
6. Organize your inrormation in short, manageable numbered steps, each beginning
with an action ve rh and an anged in chronological sequence, or in paragraph fom1,
usin.g 1.rnnsitional words and signal phrases. Note tl1e relationship or impact of one
step on another.
7. Use headings to divide long lists of steps into shorter sections.
8. Give warn ings, hut only when necessary, to show how mistakes can lead to damage or
injury. Note the consequences o r missing a step or performing a step incorrectly
9. Use visuals to repeat or reinforce prose descriptions.
10. Put the procedure in perspective hy commenting on the result or outcome it L~ meant
to ac.:hieve.
Hello everyone,
To help us in selecting dates and times that can accommodate the most people in attending all future
project planning meetings, you will now be asked to vote using the free online scheduling tool Dood le.
Doodle makes it easier for groups to find the right day and time for a meeting by enabling users to vote
democratically and transparently for their preferred meeting times and activities. No registration or
software installation is required.
Please follow these instructions to participate in the poll for the May project planning session:
The poll will be closed on Friday, April 25, and at that point we will choose the date and time that
works best for most of you.
Thanks,
Ella
FIGURE 6 .17
Letter Formats
The appearance of a document is a re nection of the professional standards of the writer
and the organization to which that person hdongs. Well-prepared letters are accurately
typed and use standardized formats that make them app ear attractive, well proportioned ,
and halanced on the page. They follow standard practices and conventions--many of
them cen.turi es old- accordi ng to how th eir elements are arranged and styled.
xxxxxxxxxxxx
xxx.xxxxxx
xxx.x.xxx
xxxxxxx
xxxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx
Dear:
Subject:
XXX)CXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX)CXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
XX)(J(XXXXX)(:X)(J(XXXXXX)(J(XXXXX)(:X)(J(XXXXXX)(J(XJ<X
xxxxxxxxxxxx.xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.xxxxxxxxxxxx
XXXXXXXXXXX)(J(XXXXXXXXXXXXXXX)(J(XXX
xxxxxxxxx
xxx.xxxx
xxxxxxx
xxxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx
xxxxxxxx Return address, dateline, and
complimentary close begin
Subject Linc just to the r1ght of the centre
xxxxxxxxxxxx.x.xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.xxxxxxxxxx of the page
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx.xxxxxxxxxxxxx
xxx.x.xxxxxxxx.xxxxxxxx.x.xxxxxxxx.xxxxxxxx.x.xxx
Wrttert. Name
Letterhead/Return Address
The 81/i by 11- inch (21.6 by 27.9-centimetre) stationery used by most businesses is usu-
ally printed with a letterhead that features the following in romiation: company name, full letterhead a p~nlcd heading on
address, telephone and fax numbers, and, if applicable, a wehsil.e address and company company sratJonery, con raining
the addressof an organization
logo. When a letter extends beyond one page, use letterhead for the first page and plain
or lndlvldual, bur nor the
sheets for the subsequent pages. For personal letters-when it isn't possible to use printed lndlvtdual's name.
letterhead- type your return address immediately above the date, avoiding abbreviations
except for the two-letter provincial code. In full-block style letters, the return address is
aligned at the left margi n and no line of the address should extend beyond the centre of
the page. ln modified-block style letters, the return address block starts just to the right of
the cent.re o r the page and alib'TIS with the complimentaly dose. Neve r include your name
as part of the return address because it is typed at the end o r the lette r.
Dateline
On company letterhead, the dateline appears at the left margin two r.o three lines below dateline Identifies the date on
the last printed line of the letterhead. Usually, this corresponds to line U, 2 inches which a message was written.
(.5 centimetres) from the top of the page. In modified-block style letters, the date appears
on the next line after the return address, alii,'Tled with rit at the centre of the page. The
most common date style L.~ Month Day, Year (February 22, 2014). Ordinal~ (1st, 1rd,
14th, et.c.) should not he used, and the months should not he represented as abbrevia-
tions. ln European correspondence, the dateline assumes the Day Month Year fomiat
(22 February 2014)
Delivery/Confidential Notation
Delivery/confidential notations identify the method o r transmission-SPECIAL DELIVERY, dellvery/confldentlal notation
FAX TRANSMISSION-and who is authorized to open the letter-PERSONAL, CONFTDENTIAL. an optional lettor tllemcnt
Identifying how a message Is
This information is typed in capital letters or italics two lines above the inside address. transmitted and who Is authorized
ro open and read It.
Inside Address
The inside address identi fies the person and/or company to whom the letter is being Inside address a standard letter
sen t. Plac:ed flush wi.th the left margin, it consists or two to five single-spaced lines that use clement supplying the name and
full address of the recipient.
both upper- and lowercase letters. Depending on the length of the letter, leave anywhere
from two to ten blank lines between the dateline and the inside address (two to three is
usually sr.andard). No line of the address should end with a comma or extend beyond t.he
centre of the page. If an item is long, continue it on the next line and indent two spaces.
Obtaln accurate information for the inside address from the addressee's company letterhead
or the receivi ng company's human resources departmen t. Copy this infomiation exactly.
spell it correctly, and avoid abbreviations. The first line begins with the person's courtesy
title- Ml'.'., Ms. (applies to women unless a preference for Mrs. or Miss is known), Dr., the
llonourable. Omit the courtesy t.itle only if the addressee's gender is unclear or unknown. A
business or professional title-Chair, Trr.asun:r- may follow the surname on the same line
or on the next line if the tit.le is long. Abhreviat.e the names of provinces and territ01i es (AB,
BC, YT, etc.). Leave two spaces, then type the postal code (e.g., Toronto, ON M5S 3K7):
Attention Line
attention line an optional lcncr An attention line is used when you are directing your correspondence to a department
clement Identifying the Individual, within an organization or to the holder of a particular position rather than t.o a specific per-
officer, or depa1tment to whom or
son. It helps to ensure that someone in that department- not necessarily the person to whom
which the lener should be directed.
the letter is directed- will open the letter and deal with it immediately An attention line
should he placed flush with the left margin, two blank lines above or below the salutation:
Web Hosting Enterprises
50 Rossiter Avenue
Toronto, ON M4L 3G9
Reference Line
reference line an optional A reference line identifies a file number or policy number. It appears two lines above the
lmer clement Identifying a me or salutation.
policy number.
Salutation
salutation a letter greeting The salutation- a greeting that is used with all letter styles except the simplified style- is
Identifying the Individual for whom typed flush wi th the left margin one blank Line below the inside address or attention line.
the lotter Is lnlcndcd, Including
the recipient's personal titieand
It can take the following fo rms:
surname (e.g., Dear Ms. Gil~.
Dear Mr. Chisolm: (coiirtesy tit.le, s urname, and colon are standard)
Dear Ms. Vasari: (courtesy title for women regardless of marital status)
Dear Francesca: (when you are on a first-name basis with the recipient)
Dear T. Sutherland: (when you are unsure of the recipient~ gender, use an
initial and surname or fi rst name and surname)
Dear Sir or Madam: (when you don't know the name of the recipient and
have used an attention line)
Ladies and Gentlemen: (when you don't know the names of the reci pi.ents and
have used an attention line)
Dear Sales Representatives: (when addressing a group)
Dear IT Professionals:
Dear Customer: (when addressing a member of a group)
Dear Colleague:
Subject Line
subject line an optional lener The subject line can be placed flush left two lines above or two lines below the salutation,
element that Identifies the content depending on your employers letter-fom1atting preferences. Written in capital letters, regu-
or focus of a message.
lar font or italics, this optional eLement briefly identifies the content or focus of a message
and rarely exceeds one line. A good subject line is specific and concise, like a well-written
headline. lt summarizes information that is neutral and highlights news that is good:
Message Body
The body of the message begins two lines below the salutation. The message is sin-
gle-spaced within parabrraphs and double-spaced between them. It should occupy the
middle o f the page, not the lop or bottom . With the exception of modified-block style,
which allows you the option of indenting paragraphs. begin each new paragraph at the
left margin .
Complimentary Close
Typed two lines helow the last line of the letter, the ending Sincerely (followed by a comma)
Ls standaTd. Some employers prefer Yrmrs sincerely or Yciurs truly. Less follllal expressions,
such as Cordially, Best wishes, and Regards, are also common, especially if the recipient Ls a
friend. Only the first letter of a complimentary close Ls capitalized. The simplified style complimentary close the word
letter omits I.his element. Generally, the complimentary close Ls followed by a comma, but of formal closing (often Sincerely)
after the body of the letter and
this punctuation is omitted in open-punctuation style.
before lhe slg natum.
Slgnatu re Block
After the complimentary dose, leave four blank Lines (room for your signature) and type
your name. This part of a leu.er is known as the signature block Your title may appear on signature block the part of a
the same line, separated from your name by a comma, 01 he placed on the next line. Add letter that Includes the writer's
name, title, at'ld organizauon In a
a courtesy title in parentheses before your name if it is not readily distinbruishahle as male neatly formatted arrangement
or female :
H~ T{)./<CM<.oi o
PL INDUSTRIES Harry Takamoto, Sue Roth, Manager
Project Manager Technical Services
(Ms.) Pat Quinn
Executive Assistant
Identification Initials
There are two types of identification initials. Capitalized initials, followed by a colon, Identification Initials the part
ind icate who wrote the letter; lowercase indicate who typed it. Wh en a personal sib'Tlature of a letter that Indicates the
wrller (capital letters) and iyplst
Ls shown in the signature block. the writer\; initials are omitted : (lowercase letters) of a message.
GB:hw
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Enclosure Notation
An enclosure notation (ahhreviated Enc:. or Encs. or spelled out as Enclosure or Enclosures) enclosure notation the part of
lndicates enclosed or attached material- a hrochure, invoice, ari.icle, etc.- accompanying a letter that lr'ldlcates enclosed
or attached material that
a letter. It may tell the reader something about the enclosed item(s) or specify the number accompanies a document
of enclosures:
Enclosures (3)
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Copy Notation
copy notation the part of a letter A copy notation (c or cc) indicates that copies of the letter have been sent to individuab
that lndlCiltcs that copies of a letter other than the addressee. When several individuals receive the letter, their names are
have been sent to lncllvldualsother
than the addreSS<le.
stacked one on top oft.he other:
c R. Pettigrew
J. Espinet
FIGURE 6 .19
Can the Frontenac Language School provide intensive language training and
accommodations for 20 Magnate! employees from April 28 through April 307
Double spacing between _ _ __,__...
paragraphs
Your language school was recommended by several of our suppliers. Our company is
currently expanding Its operations In Quebec and New Brunswick and must be able to
ensure that our regional sales and customer service representatives possess a high level of
speaking, reading, and writing proficiency in French. Employees who have been selected
for our Quebec and New Brunswick operations have a minimum six years of French
language training but require a "refresher so they may communicate with confidence. Will
you please answer the following questions regarding the Frontenac Language School.
I would be grateful for answers to these questions by February 17. Our Quebec operations
committee meets at the end of February to finalize our start-up details.
Sincerely,
Signature block (ldentlfles
- - --1-...
author and title)
Harry Ferguson
Manager, Human Resources
ldentlflcatlon Initials (Indicate
author and typist) - - HF:sr
3-6 spaces at the bottom of
- -- -1-..
the page -
6 I ROU T INE AN D GOO DW I LL ME SS A G ES
On envelopes without a pre-pri nt.ed return address, the return address should he
formatted in the same way as the desti nation ad dress and located in the upper
left-band com er.
ln both the return add ress and the add ress block, the municipality, province or terri -
tory, and postal code should appear on the same line.
Postal codes should he printed in uppercase. and the first three elements should he
separated from the last three by one space.
Affix the stamp(s) in the upper right-hand corner.
O Use the three-step direct writing plan for positive and neutral messages that request,
respond, convey goodwill, and inform.
0 Begin request letters with a purpose statement, then introduce multiple requests with
a summary statement, arrange your questions in list form, use details that will help the
receiver respond, and close with an end-date, request summary, and appreciation.
O Determine if you are the right person to respond to a message; if so, answer promptly,
begin with the most important information or a summary statement, answer each
inquiry logically and fully in list form, include additional information based on an
analysis of the receiver's needs, disclose only the information you can give, and show
sincerity and goodwill in closing.
0 Use confirmations to clarify terms of a contract or agreed-upon course of action,
summarize transactions that have taken place or decisions that have been made,
and document shared understanding of activities requiri ng coordination and
equal knowledge.
O Write a claims adjustment to restore goodwill and inform a customer of the actions
your company intends to take to correct a problem he or she has justifiably brought
to your attention.
O Use a three-step writing plan in making an adjustment: grant the adjustment, explain
how you will make it, and close without reminding the receiver of the problem.
O Write goodwill messages to establish rapport and build business relationships by
showing empathy, respect, and consideration.
O Write cover or transmittal messages to explain or describe accompanying materials and
identify the reason for their transmission.
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1. Applying the Direct Approach. Rearrange tb e paragraphs in t.he following extract from a request letter accord ing to
the d irect-approach \VTi ting plan.
I would be grateful for answers to these questions by July 15, when our
transportation committee must meet to decide.
Please answer the following questions about car leasing options and
vehicle features:
2. Analyzing a Request. Discllss whet.her the following ext.met meets the b'llidelines for an infom1ation regllesl and
how easy it would he to respond to this inquiry.
What can you tell me about your banquet facllltles7 A few weeks ago, my boss
asked me to find out as much as I could about upscale banquet facilities In the
area. Our company Is hosting an event to celebrate Its twentieth anniversary. We
expect that the event will be held the week of June 9-13, although June 10 Is
our preferred date. Any other week would be unsuitable. Of course, we are only
Interested In booking a facility If It Is air-conditioned. ls your banquet hall air-con-
ditioned? We anticipate having two hundred guests. Do you have a banquet room
that would accommodate two hundred guests? I would also like to know If your
banquet centre Is wheelchair-accessible. Because our workforce Is quite diversified,
we would like to offer menu selections that appeal to many different tastes. Do you
offer International menus? Thank you for any Information you can provide.
6 I ROUT I NE AND GOODWI L L MESSAGES
3. Analyzing a Letter of Congratulations. What mistakes does the writer o f the following letter make? How would
you feel if you recEived this message?
Dear Imogen:
Talk about overnight successl I find It hard to believe that someone who has
been with the company for as little time as you have could rise through the ranks
so quickly, putting us all to shame. It seems that only yesterday you were our
eager office assistant, fetching us coffee from the local Starbucks. Well, times
have changed-and It couldn't have happened to a nicer person. No doubt your
pleasant smile and excellent telephone manner will help you with the many
challenges that lie ahead In your new job as assistant district manager. I would like
to know what a person has to do to climb the corporate ladder as fast as you have.
Cheers,
~ e;/; o.J
Larry and the gang
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4. Revising an Announcement for Clarity. What common errors make the message below ineffective? Focusing on
clarity, rewrite the announcemt:nt.
Announcement
The National Write On Association herewith wishes to Inform you that It Is seeking
presentations concerning the Impact of electronic communication on business
writing efforts for Its annual national conference scheduled for March 18th to
21st, 2014, In Halifax, Nova Scotia.
Joining the NWOA In sponsoring the conference are the Canadian Jargon
Association, the Nation al Society for the Prevention of Obfuscation, the
Stop Flaming Now League, and the Canadian Anti -Spam Federation. The last
conference, held In 2013 under the sponsorship of the National Save the Comma
Society, drew over 750 participants from every province with the exception of PEI
and saw representation from various branches of Industry, business, government,
academia, Industry, and business from across the country.
All proposals must be postmarked no later t han November 1, 2013, and directed
to the attention of Dr. Lyle Mudd, NWOA Executive, St. Sebastian University,
Halifax, NS D4A 2E1.
6 I ROUT I NE ANO GOODWILL M ESSAGES
s . Changing Letter Style. Rewrite Lhe following full-block style letter in simplified style. When would a simplified
style be appropriate?
Enclosed Is a cheque for $1,682.98 In payment for the Deluxe Genron Gas
Generator, Item #7753 In your Winter 2,013 catalogue.
As arranged, I will pick up this Item at your Selkirk Road service depot when I am
In Prince George on August 6.
Sincerely,
Brad Hutchinson
Enc.
6. Arranging Letter Elements. Retype the following letter using your computer softwares letter wizard and note the
resulting changes in style and formatting.
FAX TRANSMISSION
18 Belgrave Street
Toronto, ON M9M 3H7
Please answer the following questions about the student outreach tour packages
offered by your company this summer.
1. Can you recommend a tour of Central America that combines volunteer work
with adventure vacationing?
Along with a group offrlends, I plan to tour Central America this summer. Whil e
there, my friends and I would like to contribute what we can to the communities
we visit. We are therefore looking for a tour that would allow us to do volunteer
work, similar to our past work for Habitat for Humanity, while also giving us the
chance to pursue extreme sports and explore some of the region's best-known
ecological preserves.
I would appreciate answers to these questions by May 30, when my friends and I
will meet to discuss our summer travel destination.
Justin Littleton
6 ROUTINE AND GOODWI L L ME SS A GES
1. Revising Direct-Approach Openings. Make the fol- printed on the packaging? I am also interested in
lowi ng openings direct, professional, and speci fic. finding out if you have any gluten-free-and organic
a) Hello I My name is Wayne Dum ont. I am a juniOT products. And are your snacks suitable for diabetics
account.ant at Hammond Financial and I have a and people with food allergies? Of course, I would
number of questions for you 10 answer. Let me like to sample products from your new line before I
first explain that all of these questions have to do commit to purchasing them. Can you send me some
with import and excise taxes. samples to try? I already have your price list.
b) It is my pleasure and privilege to write to you As an operator of tours for experienced cycling
today to ask about your retirement planning edu- enthusiasts, I would like to offer complimentary
cation pro1:.JTams. I am most interested in finding premium sports snacks on my one- and two-day
out if your educational package includes a focus excursions.
section on financial plan ning for early retiremen t.
I would appreciate answers-in fact all the
c) Give me any information you can on your confer-
Information you can provide- by April 1S, when
ence-hosting services. 1 need to know how much
our tour planning committee meets to finalize
it costs to hold a half-day confe rence for thirty
purchasing details.
people at your conference facility.
3. Writing Subject Lines. Below are opening sen1ences
d) We always appreciate hearing from customers
who have experienced problems with products from request and response messages. Write a concise
under warranty and have the courage to ask for a and specific subject line that corresponds to each.
a) The enclosed cheque for S365 represents our
refund. While your claim seems valid, and there
doesn't seem to be a strong reason why we should quality commitment to our customers and our
not do as you request, let me first explain com- desire to earn the ir confidence.
b) Please answer the following questions about
pany policy on this issue.
e) In response to your letter of int1uiry, received
the role of mediatio n service companies in the
Septemher 29, in which you asked ahout the avail- lahour- management relationship. 1 am wri1ing an
a bility o f price discounts on our weh hosting servi- ar1kle cm this topic for Busines.~ Weekly.
ces, I am pleased to tell you that the answer is yes. c) Here are answers to your questions ahou1 ou r
corpora1e gift services.
f) Pursuant to your letter dated August 28, we
4. Revising Letter Closings. Rewrite the following clos-
would like to advise you that you can take the
PowerPoint projector with which you have appar- ings to make them more specific and polite.
a) Please gel hack lo me soon. My boss really needs
ently had so much trouble to Prism Servicing foT
inspection and, if necessary, free repair. this mformauon and I don't want to get into
trouble for missing our April 7 deadline.
2. Itemizing Parts of a Request or Response. lmprove
b) Because we wa.nt lo keep you satisfied and hecause
the readahility o f the following request hy organizing
we would like to resolve this prohlem once and for
i1s various q uestions in.to a lis t.
all , we are offeri ng you a complimenu11y repair on
Please answer the following questions about your
your au1omat.ic door. We hope the inconvenience
new line of high-nutrition sports snacks.
and minor injuries your customers experienced as a
First, I would like to know if individual food items are resuh of our malfunctioning door will no1 discour-
vacuum sealed. I conduct guided cycling tours of age you from domg husiness wilh us in the future.
Prince Edward County and I nee-d assurances that the c) I trus1 1hat 1 have provided the informauon you
products Isupply to tour members will be fresh and require. If you need information m the future, I
appetizing, even at the end of a hot summer day. recommend that you direct your inquiry to my
How long do products remain fresh after they have assistant, who has time to handle minor requests
been opened? ls dietary information for each item o f this kind.
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
1. Information Request. As assistant to the vice- the opportunities with in your organization. Having
president of Excelon Investments, you have been read the information on the program's wehsit.e, you
asked to research business etiquette agencies. Your understand that your company will be facilitating
boss, Francesca Franca, has noticed that many of t.he development of professionally relat.ed skills, as
your company's top managers and investment coun- defined by the Conference Iloard of Canada. The
sellors are conscious of the etiquette gaffes they make school asks that you develop two or three measurable
while attend ing corporate functions and formal din- goals hy which to monitor and evaluate internship
ne rs. Entertaining important clienL~ L~ customary, progress, as well as a flexible leanung plan. You are
hut it is a part of the job that many talented senior not sure, however, how detailed the learning plan has
personnel seem reluctant and at times unwilling to to be and if having the intern sib'll a leanu ng contract
do. Which fork is used fo r the fish course? Why is it would he a good idea. You know that an Internship
wrong to whL~tle for the cheque? Ms. Franca would Fair is to take place and that, in advance of this
like to ensure that senior personnel know the answers event, you will have to identify a supervisor/mentor
to these questions and, without causing them embar- to coach each position; however, you have had some
rassment, see to it that company representatives have recent personnel changes and are wondering when
good tab le manners and can do business with savvy t.hls information has to he finalized and when the fair
while eating a meal. She has proposed that an eti- will t.ake place. In fact, a timeline would be helpful as
quette course he made available to int.erest.ed person- you would also like to know when internships could
nel. You 11ave heard that Decorum Business Etiquette begin/end and when you would need to submit cop-
Services offers a one-day semi nar on telep hone ies of you r intern al application, recruitment, and
man.ners, dining etiquette, and interpersonal skills selection schedules. As your company has a grO\ving
for clien t retention. You are wondering if Decorum online presence, you are also wonderi ng if students
could accommodate a group of up to twenty. Ilecause would have a background in social media marketing.
t.he social functions your employees attend include You would like to have answers to your questions by
casual lunches and fo rmal dinners, you would also t.he end of the month so that your management t.eam
like to know if students have the opportunity to test can discuss options at an upcoming Octoher meet-
their new ski.lls in a supervised restaurant-style meal. ing. Write to Elenajacohek, Coordinator, TR.SM Retail
Will students, fo r example, learn to use each piece of In te rnship Prob'Tam, .5.5 Dundas St.reet West, Toronto,
cutlery properly? You would prefer that the trai n.ing ON MSG 2C3.
take place within the next th ree weeks because seni or 3. Order Request. Rewrite the foll owing order req uest
employees are set to attend the premier fundraising so that details of each item are formatted for quick-
dinner next month, an event for which Ms. Franca and-easy reference. Clearly ind icate the products you
has already hooked two $10,000 tables. int.end to buy, your planned method of payment, and
2. Information Request. As a Ryerson grad and the how you would like your orde r shipped. Eliminate
president/owner of Edgerton & Smith, a hricks-and- parL~ of the letter that detract from the effectiveness
mortar fashion retailer with five stores in the GTA and of the request..
a strong online presence, you are interested in get-
My small home-decorating business has an account
ting involved with the Ted Rogers School of Retail
with your company. I am interested in several items
Management Retail Internship Program. You are con-
that were featured on your website last week.
sidering providing at least one paid internship for
Because your website is currently down, I have
a third-year student in the upcoming summer. You
chosen to send my order by conventional mail. I
would like to be ln a posit.ion to provide dear expect-
hope this is acceptable.
ations to student.s before they app ly to and accept
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I am most interested in the deluxe paint sprayer that to be invoiced for this purchase. Because you need
was advertised as your monthly special. I believe it these Hems for a trade show to be held in ten days,
was manufactured by Craftline. Its unit price was you want this 10 be a rush order, with shipment by
around S175. I would need two of them. You also overnight courier. You would like immediate nol ifi-
advertised a cordless sander manufactured by cat.ion if, for any reason, Your Name Here is unahle to
Precision Master. Its unit price was approximately process th e order as stipulated. Write lo Your Name
$80. Please send me three sanders. Another item Here, 21 'i Grand Prairie Boulevard, Moose Jaw, SK
caug ht my eye- a virtual decor software program 5611 Jl8.
that would allow my customers to preview a room s. Claim Request. Write a claim letter based on a prohlem
in a variety of colours and finishes. I would require you may have experienced with a product or service
the version for Windows 8. I believe it cost S95 and that was under guarantee or covered by a warranty.
went under the name of Samtex Color Options. 6. Claim Request. As office manager of lnukshuk
Mming and Exploration in Yellowknife, NT, you have
By the way, my company's account number
received a shipment of mismatched modular office
is 551 H27. Please notify me if the prices you
componen ts from Cuhicle Junction of Vancouver.
advertised are no longer in effect. Because we have
When you telephoned Cuhicle Junction's customer
many contracts to complete in the next few weeks,
service hot.line to complain, you were told that th e
please ship my order as fast as you can.
faulty components could he replaced, on cond ition
4. Order Request. As marketing director o r Amhianl, that they be relurned to the warehouse. However,
a new lighting design firm and retailer o r electrical Cuhide Junction could not promise to cover sh ip
fixtures, you have heen appointed to represent the ping cosLS-the charges for which would be passed
company at a number or upcoming desib'll and trade on to you. You feel these charges are unwarranted
shows. Because the market for lighting products and unfair, as Cubicle Junction was at fault for the
and services is extremely compelillve, you would irregulanties in the original shipment. Write Lo Maya
like prospective customers Lo keep your company Sutcliffe, manager of customer service at Cubicle
in mind for their next lighting project. To help youT Junction, asking that the company cover the esti
nedgling husiness gain a fool hold in I he marketplace, mated $100 in shipping charges.
yo u plan to distribute novelti es beari ng your com- 7. Follow-up Letter. As owner of Get lt Write, an edit.or
pany nam e and logo at the upcoming trade shows. ial and tutoring service, write to Giacomo Giancarlo
You have heard that Your Name llere, a supplie r of confirming lhe details of yesterday's telephone con
corporate b>ifts and novelties, can customize any item versation. Mr. Giancarlo, a marketing expen with a
from a product line that includes LED nashlights, high profile in the business community, is writing
glow-in-the-dark pens, pen lights, and illummated a senes of anicles for a business publicauon and is
pens. Because your instructions are more detailed also working on a book-length manuscript that he
and specific than whal Your Name I lere's wehsite plans lo submit to publishers in Canada and the
allows for, you have decided to fax an order request. United Stales. He has asked you to review his writing
You would like fifty mini LED nashlights, item num and make necessary changes so his academic style
her 62-J, in red iJ possihle, lisled at $9. You also want will have broader popular appeal. You agreed on an
two hundred glow-in-the-dark pens, it.em number hourly rate of $80 and discussed the type of style
98-K, with hlack ink, listed at $2 per unit. Finally, ror which he L~ aim ing. You also agreed to meet next
you would like one hundred pen lights, item numheT week to discuss hL~ projects in greater detail.
'i'i-R, again in red, listed at $4 per unit. You would 8. Information Response. When you graduated from
like the company logo to be reproduced as acc.-urately high school, you volunteered for a mentorship pro
as possible, so you are attaching an enlarged sample. gram desib'lled to help students in the next gradual
Each item should also be stamped with the slogan ing class choose colleges and universities best suited
"Amb1ant-Lighting the Way" together with the web to Lheir needs and career objectives. You agreed to
address, www.ambiantlighting.com. You would like write hrieny to your former guidance counsellor with
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detail~ otf academic program.~, standards of in.~truc assem bled correctly. When only a few co mpo11 en t.s
tio11 , student se rvi ces, residen ce accommodation s, require replacement, your company policy is to sim -
extracurricular activities, and overall college life at ply ship the replacement parts free of charge, not to
the academic institution you attend. Although you demand the return o ft.he en tire order at the custom-
prefer not to include p ersonal in form ation, you er'!;; expense. In investigating the cau se o f the problem
would Lik e to record your impressions and provide with the shipment, you discovered that a ch.angeover
helpful details that supplement what prospecti ve st.u to new so ftware had temporarily disrupted inventory
den ts can find on your college's or university's web - control at the ti me the order was processed. By bring-
site. Write to your guidance counsellor wi th brief ing the matter to your attention, the customer has
comments on the topics listed above. Offer to b'feet a allowed you to implement a b ackup system so prob-
small b'foup of stud en ts from your former high school lems of th is kind will not recur. Th e customer can
when th t:y tour your college/university next mon th. expect to receive the new shipment in 011e week and
9. Order Response. As sales director of Your Name can fi nd tech nical supp ort at www.cub iclejunction
Here, you have just received Ambiants order by fax .com o r at 1-888-288-48.51.
(see Cast: 4). The only negative elemen t you must 11. Letter of Appreciation. A.s a jun ior accou11ts execu-
include in your message ls that the mini LED nash- tive for an asset-management firm, you and a small
light.s ordered are availahle in black onJy due to high group of your colleagues were invited to an afternoon
deman d. A new shipmen t o f red mini LED flashlights of golf and diLmer at a private country dub. The host
is expected ln one week. Although you cannot guar- was your d ivision manager, Roh Stockwell. Although
an tee that the red LED flashligh ts will he ready for the you had to miss your daughter's first ballet recital,
company's first trade show, you would like to offer to the day produced some impressive golf scores and
fill the orde r partially or folly with black LED flash- gave you the opportun ity to bounce arou nd some
ligh ts, availahle al a substantially discounted price of creative strategic planning ideas. The meal i tself was
$5 per unit. All other items on o rder can he custom- outstanding- far more than you had expected. Write
ized as requested and shipped immediately. to Mr. Stockwell expressing yoiir app reciation for
10. Claim Response. As Maya Sutcliffe, manager o f cus- h is hospitality.
tomer service at Cubicle junction, respond t.o the let- 12. Transmittal Letter. As p reside nt o f an arch itectural
ter from Case 6 an d grant the request to waive $.100 fim1 speciali zing in historical restoration, you have
in shipping costs . In reviewing th e customer servi.ce heen asked hy real estate developer Jay Delmonico to
reco rds, you immediately determin ed that th e prob- develop a proposal fo r restoring a heritage building
lem with the prefabricated office system resulted h is company L~ thinking of huying. Mr. Delmon ico
from the inc 1usion of Bve mismatched pane ls in the plans to convert the four-storey heritage prop erty to a
shipment.. The bolts provided were com patihle only multi-purpose commercial space that will still retain
with th e orde red panels, not \vith th ose shipped its h istorical designation. Write a letter of transmittal
in error, making it impossible for the parts to he to accompany the draft version o f your proposal.
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LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Identify the speclaI demands and 4. Organize bad news messages with an
characteristics of bad news messages. Indirect plan: writing buffers, citing reasons,
and d~emphaslzlng the bad news.
2. Apply direct and Indirect writing plans
for bad news messages. S. Politely refuse requests, claims, and credit;
turn down job applicants; announce bad
3. Organize bad news messages with a
news to customers and employees; and
direct plan.
decline Invitations.
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WHEN 1100 Future Shop and Best Buy employees In five provinces arrived for work on
January 31, 2013, they were greeted by security guards, locked doors, and notices announ-
cing that 15 of the chain's outlets had been closed. About 5 per cent of the company's staff
lost their jobs that day. Only after the Initial shock of the downsizing did the workers learn
the reason for the closures: a press release described an effort "to reduce unnecessary costs,
eliminate redundant operating systems and optimize the real estate strategy to reflect a
changing retail landscape."' In the months that followed, Janice Antaya-Finlayson, vice-
president of HR at Best Buy, and Chris Taylor, vice-president of HR at Future Shop, responded
to the media attention and scrutiny by defending their plan for one-on-one consultations
and on-site counsellors to help employees deal with the news.2
Doug Stephens, founder and president of consulting firm Retail Prophet, Is critical of
catching such a large employee population off guard with something as distressing as a
mass downsizing:
There's enough shock to learn you are losing your job, even when you suspect it, but
to walk up to the front door one day and have it be padlocked is really adding insult to
injury.... When employees are informed, "Look, things are not as good as we had hoped,
it is conceivable we may have to close some locations, we don't know which ones yet,
but it is conceivable; it just prepares the employee population, psychologically at least,
that there's the possibility here of trouble.1
Once the decision to lay off employees has been made, It Is up to the organl:zatlon to
develop a communications plan t hat, according to Stephens, ensures that affected parties
"hear It at the right time and In the right way." Clarity In the explanation Is lmportan1t: "It can't
be just some nebulous statement that says, 'Sales are not where we need them to be: HR
managers have to be prepared to brief employees thoroughly on all the reasons why this Is
happening, and they need to understand they are the ones being thrown out of the lifeboat
and not someone else:
when they feel llmits have hem unfairly imposed on them and the ir freedom- a phenom-
enon known as psychological react.ance- is a common n:sult when had news is handled
poorly or tactlessly. Writers who routinely antagonize their readers when they must deliver
had news get reputations for heing thoughtless and insensitive, a perception that can dam-
age relationships with colleagues, suppliers, customers, and other stakeholders. Writers
therefore need to take more care and strateglze smartly to preserve the organlzation's good
image wh en a message must lndude unfavourahle lnfom1ation.
However, communicating unfavourahle news or saying no doesn't have to result in
had feelings. Stratebric negative messages are unique in their special attention to content, negative message a message
structure, context., and tone. These elemen ts work together to preserve goodwill and that commun lcates negatlve
Information that may upset or
ensure that the recipient finishes reading the message and accepts the had news without disappoint the reader.
feeling hilt.er, hostile, or resentful. The following are some impo rtant goal~ to keep in mind
when communicating bad news:
Primary Goals
To b'live the had news in a dear, hrief, and respectful way, and st.ate it only once.
To help readers accept the had news hy showing the fairness and logic of the decL~ion,
offeri ng an explanation when it is possihle to do so, and eliminating unnecessarily
negative language.
To maintain and hi1ild goodwill toward the reade r and the reader's organization
despite the unpleasant facts the message must communicate.
To get your purpose across the first time, wi thout amhiguities that may create a need
for clari fication, follow-up con espondence, or ongoh1g dispute resolution.
Secondary Goals
Refusals tum down invitations, suggestions, proposals, and requests for information,
action, employment, and credit.
Announcements dL~dose price increases, policy ch anges, delivery delays, cancella-
tion of services, and product defects or recalls.
Assessments or appraisals offer negative assessments of employee joh performance
or personnel issues.
A positive emphasis, as long as it doesn't mislead readers into expecting good news,
can compensate for t.he sense of limitation a reader may feel in heing told you cannot do
what he or she wants. Sinceri ty ai1d politeness are the best ways lo let readers down gently
and help them adjust to negative information.
The subject Line sets the tone for a message. For negative responses, you can sim-
ply add "Re:" to the original suhj ect line. You will need to type a new suhject line only
if the negative information you pass on is crucial to action-taking and decision-making.
It is possible to drop the subject line altogether from a lette r if it states the bad news too
hluntly. lf you decide to use a subject line, select the type that best suits your purpose:
Neutral subject lines signal the topk but without referring lo the bad news. Use
them in routine memos to peers and subordinates, especially when the had news is
minor or expected.
Negative s ubject lines are uncommon hut can he used to command attention for
serious inte rnal problem.<; and issues t.hat might otherwise he ignored. They some
times headline hri ef e-mails alerting readers to situations for which t.he readers are not
at fault.
Closings, too, should he in keeping with the balance of your message. Readers who
have just been let down can he easily upset hy an upbeat complimentary close such as
Cheers, mistaking i.ts friendliness for sarcasm o r flippancy.
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By carefully examining these fact.ors, you will he ahle to decide how to compose your
had news message. Several useful plm1s are discussed in the following sections. Keep in
mind that no plan is complete without equal consideration of channel choice (e.g., e-mail,
voice mail). ln recent research, participants judged e-mail to be more comprehensihle,
while voice mail, with its amped-up social cues, was viewed as more persuasive and better
for maintaining a personal customer relation.~hip . 6 This insight, while not a general rule,
shows the importance of making the right channel choices t.o help ensure that the bad news
is communicated clearly and with limited impact on a continuing professional relationship.
when you know the reader well enough to unclerst.<.11ncl his or her preference for dir-
ectness (readers who expect conciseness and immediacy in their messages may not
have the time or patience to read a lengthy lead-in)
when the bad news is expected or related to a known problem or minor delay
when critical information might otherwise escape notice (organizations commonly
use I.he direct approach to announce price increases, disrupt.ions in service, or chan-
ges in polic.y; if you embed this information somewhere in the middle of the message,
you may not succeed in bringing it to the reader\; attention)
when the bad news is not serious, significant, or detrimental to the reader
when it is company practice to \'l'Iite all internal messages straightforwardly
when you int.encl to terminate a business relationship
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FIGURE 7.1
Ineffective Direct-Approach
Message (extract) Dear Registrants:
Opening expression of sympathy
also announces the bad news - - - Unfortunately, the course you registered for has been cancelled.
Gives no reason for the - It looks like we may not be able to make this course available to employees
cancellation and does not -- for at least another few months.
Identify the cancelled course /
Offors no alternatlve- another / We hate to disappoint our registrants, but I am sure you understand our
course or possible rescheduling
budgetary constraints.
Closlng an afterthought that/
reminds readers, somewhat
facetiously, of their
disappointment
FIGURE 7.2
Effective Direct-
Approach Message FROM: Ahmed Khan <akhan@eureka.ca>
TO: learnlng@eureka.ca
Dear Registrant:
Delivers and explains the
bad news directly In the Ors! --1-
~ The Outlook 2007 Level 2 course, originally scheduled to begin on March 24,
paragraph has been cancelled due to insufficient registration levels.
Quickly moves on to an In Its place, please consider one of several self-directed e-learnlng courses
alternative and tells readers ... available through the Learning and Employee Development Centre. Rooms
how to act on this Information In the centre can be booked for up to two hours at a time, and each course
takes four to eight hours to complete. Staff members who have opted for our
e-learnlng program say the experience compares favourably to traditional
classroom instruction.
Closes with a nnal reminder of
the alternative, which Is reader - ... Please let me know If you are Interested In self-directed learn Ing so that
centred and phrased politely
suitable training times can be arranged for you.
Thanks,
Ahmed
Ahmed Khan
Learning Centre Coordinator
Tel: 416-631 -7710
Fax: 416-631-7785
Ema II: akhan@eureka.ca
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The direct writing plan for delivering had news is similar to that used for good news
mes,,<;ages with 011e notable difference: it follows up the explanation with the offer of an
alternative. Use the following four-pan approach when writing a direct had news message:
1. Begin with a simple, well-phrased statement of die bad news. Give the had news
only once.
2. Provide an explanation tliat the reader can reasonably accept. Keep the explana-
tion brief and make it dear. Tell readers only what they need to know and what you
need to say to justify a decision or relay basic facts.
3. Offer an alt.emative if it is possible to do so. You cannot do as I.he reader asked, but
perhaps you can offer the next best thing. Promise only what is legally and realistically
allowable for you or yom company to do.
4. Close with a goodwill statement that doesn't refer to the had news. Avoid words
and phrases such as difficulty, mistake, problem , or regrettable error.
Instead of beginning with a blunt announcement o [ the had news, the approach of
an indirect writing plan gradually eases the reader inl.o the news and I.hereby reduces its Indirect writing plan a method
impact. The main message is embedded- delayed until the reader has heen prepared for of organizing a document so that
the main message Isdelayed and
it. This unique organization makes I.he message readable and easy to tolerate from begin presented toward the end.
ning to end . The advantage of such a plan is clear: a reader who grasps the reasons for a
negative decision or assessment is less Likely to react negatively, toss the message aside,
or take 1.h e had news personally The following simple four-part fom1ula can he modifled
depending on the specific type of message and how sensitive you need to he:
1. Begin with a buffer. Use a short statement that wi1J grab attention, cushion the had
news, and guide the reader to the expla11ation.
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2. Provide a solid, reasonable explanation. A cmcial part of any had news message,
the explanation est.ahlishes background and reasons that will later help tbe reader
understand , adjust to, and accept the had news.
3. State the bad news. Phrase the bad news to minimize its impact and, if possible, bal-
ance it wi th an alternative.
4. Close with a good,vill statement. End the message pleasantly, showing considera-
tion for the reader.
The next sections offer a closer look at each of these four elements.
1. Stick to the facts and avoid editorializing. Focus on your strongest reason or reasons
for saying no, being careful not t.o divulge confidential, legally sensitive infollllation
that may he damaging t.o you or your company. It is also im portant. to avoid. express-
ing a personal opinion that might be mistaken for the view o f your organization or
cri tidsm of its policies (e.g., 1 know how senseless this policy must seem, but it must he
enfrm:ed). Your goal is to clarify your or the company's decision and put it in perspec-
tive brieRy and tactfully, wi.thout taxing a reader\; patience or making the situation
worse with accusations. Statements that imply you doubt a reader\; honesty (you c:laim
that, you state that, we are surprised at your request) should likewise be avoided.
2. Refer to company policy as need ed but don't hide behind it. Unless you want to
distance yourself from negative information hy using an o fficial tone, avoid mechanic-
ally restating company policy to justify your decision (Our company polily forbids the
conver~ion of lease payments to purchases). Instead, tactfully point to the reason why
7 I DELIVER I NG UNFAVOURABLE NEWS
Appreciation Thanks readers for their inquiries, contributions, applications, business, feedback, or interest: Thank you for
a/lawing us ta review your application for the position ofaccounts executive at Pendleton Management. It is best
to avoid expressions of gratitude that might seem illogical, especially if the opening remark is connected to
a request you are about to refuse. Saying we were very pleased to receive your request sounds insincere if you
have no intention of complying with the request.
Good o:r neutral news The'first the good news, now the bad news' approach that wins over readers, but only if the good news
is relevant and meaningful. Don't struggle to find something pleasant to say unless it is related to the
main message.
Genera'! principle or fact Outlines organizational policies or practices. For example, a memo announcing a reduction in paid release
time for corporate fundraising events can open by reminding readers of the 'big picture that won't
change as a result of the bad news: Our company has shown o long tradition of support for employees in their
fundroising activities for local charities. A message announcing the cancellation of an employee service
can be buffered by a statistic illustrating that the service is under-subscribed: Consumption of coffee in our
complimentary GraboJovo program hos dropped in the post year. More thon 90 percent of the staffnow soy
they prefer to purchase their coffee off the premises.
Chronology of past Retraces events or correspondence relevant to the current situation. In responding to a claim that must
communkations be refused, for instance, you may begin by recapping what has happened so far: When we last spoke on
October 7, I agreed to review our shipping procedures for perishable goods.
Statement of agr11ment Refers to a relevant view shared by the writer and reader. In rejecting a proposed method of expenditure
or common ground reduction, you could begin with an endorsement of the general principle that inspired the plan in the first
place: We both agree on the importance ofoperational expenditure reduction.
Apology or statement Expresses sympathy or regret for what has happened or what the reader has experienced as a result of a
of understanding decision made. An apology may be necessary in cases where the reader suffered severe or unreasonable
difficulty, inconvenience, or financial loss. Otherwise, apologies can lead to legal liability, so they should
be issued with care. It is important not to overdramatize an error. If you are in doubt about what to say,
consult your organization's legal department Tailor the apology to the situation and make sure it is sincere
and genuine, not half-hearted: Please accept our apologies for any inconvenience caused by the temporary
ma/function ofour automatic transit turnstiles.
Compliment Praises the reader'sefforts and contributions without resorting to false flattery. Avoid beginning with an
ego-booster so big that it raises hopes for good news to follow or builds a reader up only to let the person
down.The compliment should take into consideration noteworthy achievements, actions, conduct, or
overall performance, but not trivia lilies such as attire and appearance: Your attention to detail and your
thorough research are commendable. Once again, you hove prepared a complete and cogent proposal.
1. Put the bad news in a dependent clause. Dependent clauses de-emphasize what
they convey because of their grammatical incompleteness. Readers are less likely to
linger over clauses begi nning with although, as, because, if, ~ince, while, or whereas and
more likely to focus on the i11dependent clause in a complex sentence.
Although your printer could not be repaired, we would like to offer you a 15 per cent
discount and free extended warranty on your next purchase of a printer in our Laser-
best 5000 series.
Although we cannot disclose individual salaries, we can provide you with a fact sheet
listing the salary range of our senior managers.
3. Use t11e passive voice. Passive-voice verhs allow you to describe an action with-
out identifying who perfom1ed it. Facts stand out; personalities and t.heir conflicts
fade into the background. Use passive-voice constructions alone or as part of a
dependent clause.
Although a refund cannot be granted at this time, we can offer you free shipping on
your next order.
4. Use long sentences rather than short ones. Put the had news in a sentence con-
taining more than 1.5 word.Y-long sentences tend to de-emphasize content.
5. Use positive language. R,eaders are usuall y more receptive when you present
the glass as being half full rather than half empty. While it is never advisable to
make unrealistic promises or use overly effusive language, it makes sense to avoid
words and phrases that readers may perceive as harshly negative or antagonistic: we
must refuse/r~ject!deny your request/disappoint you. The stat.ement we refuse to accept
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applications after March 15 is less severe when rephrased as applications will be accepted
until March 15.
6. Avoid s potlighting the bad news. Embed the had i1ews in the middle o f a sen tence
or paragraph where it is less noticeable. Bebrinning with the had news increases its
shock value; ending with it adds to the possibility that readers will dwell on it. Try to
combine the had news with a reasonable ex-planatio11 or good news alternative. Don't
let it sit by itself in a single, high-emphasL~ paragraph.
7. Imply the refusal. For this tech nique to he effective, the explanation must he clear
and thorough. Here is an implied refusal for a request for software training for a b'Toup
o f thirty people:
Implied refusals backfire if readers don't grasp the negative information, putting you
in the awkward position of having to say no in a second letter that states the news
more directly.
GOODWILL CLOSING
The dosing is the last chance t.o repair goodwill and nonnali.ze relationships so that
business can con tinue. A goodwill closing must he consistent with the overall tone goodwill closing tho part of
and content o f your message- never so canned or mechanical that it seems unrelated a message that drawsattention
away from the bad news and
or sounds insincere. At the same time, it must refocus business re lationships and, as toward a positive and continuing
required, express confidence that those relationships will con tinue. Positive , you-cen tred mlatlonshlp with the reader.
remarks work well in closing as long as their cheerfulness doesn't encourage the reader to
think you are happy about deliveri ng bad news.
1. Don't repeat the bad news, remind the reader of past problems, or hin t at future
difficulty. Words and phrases such as problem, difficulty, error, mistake, trouble ,
unfortunate situation, or lnconvrnle11ce renew the had feelings you have worked so hard
to dispel. Instead focus on the problem's resolution and look ahead to a continuing
business relationship.
2. Do offer your good wish es to the reader. Th is step is more important when declin-
ing job applications and invi tations or writing to customers. Your comments should
sournd genuine and conciliatory, not overdone
(Thank you f<ir the interest you have shown in our
research and development program. I wish you
eve1y success in your future caree1:)
3. Don't invite further correspond ence unless
For a comparison between direct-
you si11cerely wa11t contact. If the matter isn't
approach and indirect-approach
open to debate or discussion, don't encourage messages, watch "How to Convey Bad
the reader to helieve your dec:ision isn 't final News in Your Writing by Alanis Business
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tact (pleas1: feel free to contact me if you would
like to discuss this matter). Readers who won't
take no for an answer will interpret such a
st.ate1ne11t as an invitation to pursue the matt.er
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further. A goodwill closi ng should he the rinal step in encouraging the ieader to
accept the had news and closing the door on further correspond ence.
4. Don't apologize for having to say no, especially at the end of your message. A
hrief, sincere apology may be appropriate at the outset if the situation merits it, hut
unnecessary apologies later on can undermine your perceived anthority and weaken
your explanation. Apologies can sometimes expose organizations t.o legal liability, so
exercise caution or seek legail counsel hefore L~suing them.
5. Don't take credit for helping the reader unless you have actually provided assist
ance. Even brid statements that are meant to boost the reader's mood-such as I
hope tliis information has bern useful to you- ring false if you have done nothing for
the reader.
INDIRECT-APPROACH MESSAGE
The following message announces a suhstantial increase in memhership dues for a profes-
sional association. Because highen dues could mean a substantial drop in member.ship, the
message has a strong persuasive component. It begins hy expressing appreciation to mem-
bers for their contributions and hy stressing, throngh the keyword services, the henefits of
membership. News of the increase ls minimized hy the helpful suggestion to pay immedi-
ately and save. The closing conveys goodwill with a fo rward-looking emphasis. Typical
of some had news messages, I.he purpose of this letter is also persuasive in encouraging
readers not just to note hut also to accept 1.he had news.
Our mentorship program matches young members w ith those possessing years of
experience in the industry. This program has been a success. Membership now inc ludes a
quarterly publication with the latest trade information and access to websites and online
resources, including hundreds of trade publications. Although the cost of these services has
led to an unavoidable increase in annual dues, we now offer a three-year membership for
only $230- a $50 saving over the one-year membership rate.
To take advantage of this special rate, please complete and return the attached renewal
form before December 31. We thank you for your past support and look forward to your
continued participation in our organization.
Cl Have you buffered the bad news with an opening that is relevant, focused, and neutral?
Cl Have you explained the circumstances of the situation or the facts leading to the refusal
or bad news?
Cl Have you presented reasons that will help the reader understand and accept the
negative information as a logical conclusion?
Cl Have you stated the bad news as clearly and tactfully as possible? Have you used
appropriate techniques to de-emphasize it?
Cl Have you closed by re-establishing goodwill?
Knowing when and how to apologize is fundamental to husiness interests. Saying sorry
shows you care, rights wrongs, and helps to fix problems. A poorly worded apology, how-
ever, can be misinterpreted- all the more reason to handle apologies with care. For an
apolob'Y to work, it must seem sincere and unambibruous, qi1alities that are sometim es hard
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to est.ahlish in writ.I.en texts. For instance, fo rmer British Petroleum CEO Tony Hayward );
apolob'Y for a catastrophic 2010 oil spill in the Gulf of Mexico put corporate account
ahility far behind personal conce rns: "We're sorry for the massive disruption it's caused
to [residents'] Lives. There's no one who wants I.his thing over mo re than I do. I want my
life hack. "Q
Here are two main points to rememher about apologies:
Don't apologize for minor errors that have been promptly corrected or when
there is nothing to apologize for. The reader has to he in a position to care ahout the
wrong that has been done for there to he a true need for an apology. When you have
done your absolute best to correct a problem or delay resulting from circumstances
beyond your control, provide an explanation in place of an apology. Um1ecessary
apologies-apologizing for the sake of apologizing- weaken your perceived authority
and erode confidence in your decisions.
Unnecessary Apology: Iam so sorry to have to tell you that our Get It Fresh or It's
Free policy does not apply to reduced-for-quick-sale items.
Do apologize for any serious trouble or inconvenience for which you or your
company is responsible. Issue a brief, sincere apology a.~ early in the message as you
possibly can, without overdrnmat.izing. An apology left to the end can seem like an
afterthought and remind readers of their difficulty. Acknowledge the wrong done to
the inj ured party. Be aware, however, that apologies not on ly convey regret or sym-
pathy, hut they can also be taken as admissions of responsibility or negligence. If you
think an apolob'Y could admit liability, refer the matter to an experienced colleabrue or
company-affiliated legal expert.
Apologetic: I'm sorry that the order for five hundred embossed folders won't be
ready by September 12.
The message in Figure 7.3 politely turns down a request for volunteers to participate
in a local charity's rundraising event. It opens by offering praise for the event but also sets
the stage for a refusal by setting Limits on participation. The policy on which the refusal
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will ultimately he hased is explained, rather than sim ply stated, so that readers can under-
sta nd how it is beneficial and fai r.. Rath er than hiding behind policy, the wri ter shows that
the refusal is hased on legal obstacles, not on staffs unwilli."brness to participate. A good
news alternative helps to ha lance the refusal, and the message ends with good wishes and
a forward -looking remark.
FI GU RE 7 .3
We wish you every success In your fund raising drive and look forward to seeing
Concludes with good wishes
and forward -looking remark - -1- the Alliance for Living Standards represented In our panel discussion.
Sincerely,
Ri o. S~dle-1
Rita Shelley
Communications Manager
7 I DELIVERIN G UNFAV O URA B LE N E W S
REFUSING CLAIMS
Not all claims are valid or reasonahle. Some are the result 0 an honest mistake or mis-
informati on on the part 0 the clai mant. A rare few are fraud ulent. Saying no to someone
who is anready dissatisfied enough to make a clai m can he diI6cult. Jn refusing a claim ,
you may ind yoursel in the middle of an upsetting or hostile situation that can ea.~ily
deteriora te. Using the ind irect approach all ows you t.he t.act to let the reader down gently.
Its emph.asL~ on an explanation helps you communicate the desire to he fair and encour-
ages the reader to helieve that the claim has heen given thorough and serious considera-
tion. The d ual purpose 0 a claim response, even a negative one, is to put the matt.er to rest
while retaining the goodwill and patronage of current customers.
We appreciate your taking the time to write to us regarding your purchase and we
welcome the opportunity to explain our price matching policy.
We can understand your concern when you received an invoice for an amount
substantially higher than what you had anticipated.
Your purchase of an Exacta product comes with a twenty-year record of quality assurance.
The XBJ software you purchased recently is the only software in its price range with
superior graphics capability.
I can appreciate your need for a dependable air conditioning system, especially during
the summer months.
FIGURE 7 . 4
We cannot refund the price difference on your recent purchase of an .... Opens with a direct refusal-
the mader may Mver gQt to
80-glgabyte Western Digital hard drive unit because you are mistaken about our the explanation
price-protection guarantee. This guarantee applies to boxed products only. If
Only partially explains why the
you had read the fine print of our price -guarantee agreement, as posted on our
price protection guarantee
website, I am sure you would have realized that you do not qualify under the doesn't apply
terms of your purchase. It Is Impossible for us to match the price of S107
advertised by Megabyte Computers.
The extra $73 you have paid reflects our assurances that your quality Rephrases the refusal several
times and constantly reminds
purchase Is supported by the best warranty In the business. If we were to make
the reader of the price difference
adjustments In all cases such as yours, we could no longer promise to stand that cannot be refunded
behind the products we sell.
Mechanical dosing does
I know that you must be very upset that your claim has been denied, but I am
nothing to renew goodwill
sure you can understand our desire to be fair In these situations. It Is our pleasure
to have served you and we look forward to your future business.
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FIGURE 7 . 5
This guarantee applies to all factory-sealed equipment and entitles our customers to
the lowest advertised price on identical items. In other words, we'll match the price
"-.
as long as the model number matches. To qualify for an immediate point-of-
purchase discount or a refund within thirty days, a customer need only produce
verified proof of purchase or a copy of an advertised price listing.
Because we not only sell for less but also promise to stand behind everything we
sell, we must be able to back each product's warranty. When an item comes to us
unsealed from the factory, it is sold as an OEM (original equipment manufacturer)
product. The lack of packaging means an OEM product is more susceptible to damage
during shipping. The extra care Computer Giant takes in bringing OEM products to
you is reflected in a slightly different cost structure when compared with retail boxed
products. Because we wanted our customers to be aware of this important difference,
Refusal de emphasized we adopted the slogan "Packaged Products, Better Prices."
by dependent clause and
conciliatory offer of next best - .,. The 3-terabyte Western Digital hard drive unit you purchased from us for S180
altematlve is an OEM product. It comes with a three-year warranty and our pledge to you of
high performance and reliability. This hard drive unit is, as you rightly pointed out,
available for less elsewhere. The Computer Giant price reflects our assurances to you
that your quality product comes with the best warranty in the business. Although our
price-protection guarantee does not apply in this case, we would like you to accept
the enclosed coupon redeemable for a 20 per cent discount on your next retail boxed
purchase at Computer Giant. This coupon can be used in conjunction with our price-
protection guarantee.
Closes by expressing confidence
In a continued business .,. We value your business and look forward to offering you packaged products at
relatlonshlp better prices.
Sincerely,
Ryan Tan
Communications Manager
Enc.
7 I DELIVER I NG U NFAVOURAB L E N EWS
Don't raise false hopes or mL~lead readers into believing they're entitled to something
they're n ot with a statement such as you were absolutely right in brin&l\ngyour problem to
our immediate attention.
2. Provide a concise, factual explanation. Use emotionally neutral, objective language
to review facts of a sale or dispute and explain wh y a claim must he refused. To show
a desire to he fair, acknowledge any correct assertion by the claiman t and avoid
assigning blame (e.g., avoid responses such as if you had rt:ad the instructions wrefelly
you would have realized your claim is invalid). Remind th e claimant pleasan tly about
a sta ted or unstated company policy hut don't use it as a smokescreen. Briefly show
how the policy is reasonable by emphasizing its pmpose or benefits in the current cir-
cumstances. Avoid negative language that conveys distrust- you claim that, you state
that, you Jailed to- and edi t long-winded explanations that can leave readers feeling
patronized or hoodwin ked.
3. Don't apologi ze for saying no . Apolobl\ze only if the situation truly warrants it.
Even then, a brief I'm sorry early in your letter does the job. Unnecessary apologies
can weaken your perceived authority. Hedging your refusal can give readers the false
impression that your decision isn't final. A fim1 yet help ful refusal tells a potentially
persistent claimant that the matter isn't open to further discussion . Implied refusals
are workable, hut only if the claiman t can fully grasp that the answer is no.
4. End in a friendly, confident, conciliatory way. Don't close by reminding the claim-
ant <1f the refusal o r hy using language that implies the claimant \Vill he dissatis-
fied with your decision and therefore stop being your customer. Assume the role of
proh lem-solver. When a full adjustmen t is not possible, conside r if you can offer th e
claimant the next best thing- an alternative or compromise, perhaps in the form of
a suhstitute service, minor repair, or replacement product. lf it is in your company's
best in terest to do so, provide in formation about where the claiman t can seek help
with I.he problem or go for servicing on a produ ct. If a claim has been denjed only for
lack of supporti.ng documentation , suggest that the claimant resubmit the request for
adjustment. Otherwise, do not invite the claimant to try again.
REFUSING CREDIT
Refusing cred it can cause hard feeli ngs, with consequences for future busin ess. Given the
sensitive nature o f th is type of message, most companjes prepare carefully worded, lawyer-
reviewed credit refusals (oft.en as templates) for use hy credit managers and their depart-
ments. These letters can vary in con ten t depending on I.h e source of negative in form ation.
ln all cases, the goal is to draft a sensitive, respectful refusal th at says no \vithout
criticizing applicants for their low cash reserves, debt.s, or poor credit records -and
\vithout :raising false expectations of future credit. Being careful in ha n dling third-party
information from credit agencies about an applicant's record reduces the chance of Hti
gation. It. is sometimes in a company's best interest to g ive n o reason fo r the den ial but
to simply refer the applicant to the credit agency on whose inrorrnation the decision is
based. A cour teous, respectful ton e and, if appropriate, a cheerful reminder th at orders
can still he Ailed on a cash basis help keep the letter as positive as possible despite cu r-
ren t circu mstances.
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FI GU RE 7.6
Sincerely,
Francine Dubois
1. Buffer the opening. Begin hy referring to the ci:edit application and expressing appre
ciation for the customer's business.
2. Use discretion in explaining the reason for the refusal. Be careful in d isclosing
third-party information from credit agencies. Business clients often provide financial
information directly to suppliers. Only in these ci rcumstances are you free to state
your reasons straightforward ly, and even then you must exercise tact to avoid offend-
ing anyone.
3. Soften the refusal with a passive-voice construction. A refusal such as credit cannot
b1: extended to you at this time is less Likely to cause had reelings than we wnnot extend
credit to you or your credit application has failed.
4. Offer incentives to sustain business. Point out the advantages of doing business on
a cash basis.
FIGURE 7 . 7
September27,2013
In the meantime, we wlll be happy to fill your current order on a cash basis,
with our customary 4 per cent cash discount.
Closes with forward looking
When you need high-quality computer monitors, we're glad that you think expression of confidence In
current or future business
of us. If we can do business with you now or In the future, please call us at
1-800-992-2921.
SI nc.erely,
Francine Dubois
Communications Manager
case, a joh rejecr.ion has to he courteous and respectful , suhordi nating the had news to a
message of good luck and encouragement. Ignoring r.hese general principles comes at a
cost. Insensitive rejection letters aren't only damaging to applicants' egos but al~o w the
corporate image, earning a reputation for treating applicant.~ bad ly. Effective employment
refusals, on the other hand, preserve a company's good name and leave the applicant's
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self-esteem int.act so that the rejection is less likely to be taken personally. This practice
helps t.o ensure there are ready applicants for the next job ope11ing.
Because time and resources a re often at a premhtm, form letters are a common way of
notifying a sizable applicant pool. The "merge" feature in word-processing software can be
used to personalize a standard letter, allowing each applicant to be addressed individually.
A form leu.er is an acceptable way to decHne unsolicited applications and to inform appli-
cants eliminated from the candidate pool pri or to inte rview. A personal letter is a must
for applicants selected for interview but not hired hecause these ind ividuals have already
spent much time and effo rt pursuing a position.
Here are a few things t.o remember as you prepare to comm unicate bad news t.o job
applicants:
1. Open by cushioning the refusal. To avoid breaking the bad news too harshly, thank
the applicant for applying or politely e>q1ress appreciation for his or her inte rest. A
general comment on the overall standard of applications is another common way to
begin (We were very impressed by the applications we received). A well-intentioned open-
ing should never mislead the applicant into t.hinki.ng he or she got I.he job.
2. Give reasons for the company's selection, if it is possihle to do so. Without going
into specifics or mentioning an applicant's personal deficiencies, briefly explain the
hasi..~ for your selection. Take care to protect 1.h e confidentiality of deci..~ion-makers.
Never disclose details of the select.ion process or legally sensitive information that
could embarrass your organization or invite litigation. Volunteering too mu ch infor-
mation or expressing a personal opinion (for example, if it were up to me, I'd hire you)
can he risky and hurt.fut.
FI GU RE 7.8
Ineffective Employment
Refusal (extract) Dear Applicant:
Applicant not addressed by .... I regret to Inform you that your application for the position of IT speclallst has
name; bad news doubly stated been unsuccessful and we will not be hiring you.
at beginning
Writer centred explanation I trust you will understand this was a most difficult decision for us. Our hiring
discloses confidential - -. committee was split on whether to give external applicants equal consideration
Information, giving the with those who have worked for us for many years. After much disagreement, we
Impression that lhe outcome
realized we would face legal challenges unless we hired from within. In the end,
of the )ob competition was
predetermined we offered a promotion to Anna Marla di Marco from her former position as junior
IT speclallst. The final acceptance of our offer was delayed, hence the
lateness of our notification to you.
lnlended comp IIme nt weakens
confidence In the refusal and Personally, I would have liked to have had you on staff. You are a bright young
patronizes the appll cant
thing and we can certainly use people with talents such as yours.
Good wishes Incorporate
reminder of the difficulty of We wish you success In flndlrng an equally good position In this most competitive
Ondlng suitable work fleld.
7 I DELIVER I NG UNFAVOURABLE NEWS
FIGURE 7 .9
After conducting a careful review In light of the needs of the team, our hiring
committee has now completed Its search for a senior IT specialist. Although Refusal softened by use of the
we are unable to offer you a position at this time, our decision Is In no way a passive voice and the prospect
of future consideration
reflection of your potential In the IT field. We will keep your credentials In our
confidential file for one year should you wish to apply for another advertised
posi tlon with our company.
Closes with good wishes for
Members ofthe committee join me In extending best wishes for you In your +--+- app11cant
futurre career.
P~lo Ci0-v-o(ul/o
Paolo Ciardullo
Human Resources Coordinator
3. Quickly move on to the bad news. State the had news only once, using appropriate
de-emphasizing techniques and a personal, humane tone.
4. Gen tly encourage the applicant. O ffer a positive message of good luck expressed
wi th si ncerity, not false nattery Point to future employment possibilities if you are
interested in hiring the applicant when there is a suitable opening (for example, men
tion that the application will he kept on file.)
costs, declining profits, and puhlic relations crises) and reminders of unpopular policies
or altered procedures (e.g., reduced henefits, cuthacks, and reductions in raises) have the
potential to affect employee morale and performance. Information on these issues has to
he communicated skilfully- in a way that motivates employees to comply with new meas-
ures and accept less advantageous circumstances.
From a managerial standpoint in particular, it helps
to he ahle to explain why a change is necessary and
how it relates to husiness ohjectives.
Individual organizations pass on unfavourable
Read Tim Donnelly's "How to Deliver news to their employees in diffe rent ways. Some
Bad News to Employees"for tips on organizations use a direct approach for all in ternal
handling such announcements in the messages, no matter if the news is good or had.
workplace: http://goo.gi/QMJnG Others use the indirect approach if the negative
infom1at.ion is new or surprising. Usually, the mo re
seri ous the had news is, the more reader.s benefit
from an explanation that helps them. take stock of
the situation and put it in perspective. Your know-
ledge of your organization- based on its size, val-
ues, goals, and openness of communication- can help you communicate had news more
effectively Before you wri te, you should have fim1 answers to the followi ng qi1estions:
Why has the decision forcing the announcement of bad news been made?
What is the purpose of the change?
How does the had news affect employees?
FIGURE 7. 10
To maintain the quality of disability coverage, effective May 1 all employees who are
.. . benefits and direct statement
of bad nows and when now
currently covered under Ridgeway Realty's insurance benefits plan will see an increase measure goes Into effect
in their long-term disability (LTD) premium. Since this is an employee-paid benefit, the
premium increase will be deducted from paycheques commencing with the May 15
pay period.
Marlene Tsang
Benefits Administrator
Ridgeway Realty
250 Granite Street
Toronto, ON MSW 2P1
Tel: 41 6971 4329, ext. 531
Fax: 416-971-9320
DECLINING INVITATIONS
Invitations are an integral part of business lire. They offer valuah le opportun ities to
network, learn, and promote your organization. vVhen you must decline an invitation
to speak at or attend an event, how you communicate your regrets depends on how
well you know the reader and how much your attendance is expected. For large-scale
events where your ahsence is unlikely to cause disappointment, it is possible to send
brier regrets along with an expression o r thanks for the invitation. When tuming down
an invitation from an important client or superior, you must ensure your refusal won't
seem li ke a personal rebuff. Though your refusal can still be brief, make a special effort
to maintain goodwi ll hy adopting a wam1 tone and focusing on something positive ahout
the situation.
1. Express appreciation for the invitation or pay the reader a compliment. Recognize
the sii:,rnlficance of the event, event sponsor, or organization.
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2. Express your regret at not being able to attend and, if appropriate, explain why
you are unavailable. llriefly offer a valid reason for not accepting- not a weak or
trivial excuse that might belittle the event or its hosts or organizers. Use th.e passive
voice or keep the reason V%'1.le if you need to soften a refusal that might he taken
too personally.
3. Propose a constructive alternative if one is available. Name someone to speak in
your place or exp ress interest in attending a future event.
4. End by n:newlng goodwill. Close on a friendly note with good wishes for success, a
word of thanks or praise, or a forward-looking remark. Don't backtrack to th.e refusal.
Tact and coiirtesy will earn your readers' respect and keep you on their guest lists.
FIGURE 7 . 11
Ineffective Refusal of
Invitation (extract)
Dear Ms. Gupta:
Condescending, self-Important
tone
-. As much as I would like to oblige you by speaking at your annual awards
banquet, corporate business takes me elsewhere on March 14. My company
always comes first and I have no alternative but to hold to my original schedule.
Delivers the bad news early
and repeatedly -. This of course means that I will not be speaking at your awards banquet.
Closing falls to convey good ~ I hope the event will not suffer as a result of my absence. Please contact me If
wishes or to show appreciation ~ you need help In finding another speaker.
for the Invitation
Sincerely,
Kyle Jackson
7 I DELIVER I NG UNFAV OURAB L E NEWS ~
FIGURE 7 . 12
-
Opening compliments
You have good reason to be proud of your organization's Impressive the mader and expresses
appreciation for the Invitation
achlevements this year. There Is perhaps no greater g lft to the community
than the ellmlnatlon of child poverty, and I am honoured to have been asked to
speak at your annual awards banquet. That you would consider me as a potential
keynote speaker at such a gathering Is genuinely flattering.
Offers a plausible but not
On checking my schedule, I was sorry to find that I wlll be attending the ...~1--+-- overly detailed reason for
annual general meeting of our parent company In Geneva on that date. not being available
Although your generous Invitation must be declined, I will see to It that our Uses the passive voice to
program of corporate sponsorship for your fund raising events continues In the decline the Invitation and
year ahead. attempts to compensate by
offering an alternative
As I fully support your Initiatives, I would welcome the opportunity to speak at Closes with a forward looking
a future event. I wish you well with what Is sure to be a splendid evening. remark and good wishes,
reinforced by a frlendly tone
SI ncerely,
Kyle Jackson
Vice President, Finance
COMMUNICATING FOR RESU LTS
Cl Apply the direct or indirect approach according to the type of bad news and its audience.
Cl Never mislead the reader by implying that the purpose of the message is to deliver
good news.
Cl Use an appropriate subject line.
Cl If you use a buffer, make sure it is neutral and relevant, not simply a delaying tactic.
Cl Limit the explanation of the bad news to relevant facts and details arranged in a logical
order. Make sure your reason is clear, complete, and airtight.
Cl Avoid hiding behind company policy; instead, show how the policy is reasonable by
explaining its purpose or benefits.
Cl State the bad news only once, clearly.
Cl For direct approach messages, begin with a concise statement of the bad news, followed
by a brief explanation, alternative, and goodwill closing.
Cl For indirect-approach messages, buffer, explain, and de-emphasize the bad news and
close with expressions of goodwill.
Cl Offer a counter-proposal or alternative if a good one is available and provide enough
information for the reader to act on that alternative. Taking this step shows that you care.
Cl Use neutral, respectful, and non-accusatory language to maintain goodwill. Avoid a
condescending, patronizing, know-it-all tone.
Cl End positively w ith a goodwill- building statement not related to the bad news while
avoiding cliches or remarks that suggest your decision isn't final.
Cl Don't invite further correspondence unless you truly want it.
Analyze the foll owing excerpt from a letter and list iL~ faults and weaknesses. Using the chapter review checklist as your
guide, deci de how to revise it.
I regret to Inform you that it Is Impossible for us to admit children under the age
of six to our Junior Trekker summer camp program. Our camp policy does not
allow us to make any such exceptions, no matter how precocious or mature a
child may seem. To allow children of that age to participate In full-day activities
that even a ten -year-old might find challenging would endanger all campers and
put our operation at risk.
Thank you for understanding our position. Call us when your chi Id Is older. We
take pride In offering safe and fun activities for children of many ages.
7 I DELIVER I NG U NFAVOURAB L E N EWS
1. Evaluating Subject Lines. Revise the following sub- f) Each year, our company sponsors a holiday dinner
ject lines from negative messages to make them more for employees to show our appreciation for their
reader-centred and neutral. hard work and commitment, hut th.is year severe
a) lnsurance Premiums Going Up budget cuts prevent us &om hosting such an event.
b) Layoffs Possible g) You are surely our best-dressed sales representa-
c) Suspected Theft of Equipment tive. I always look forward to receiving proposals
d) No More Personal Use of Photocopiers from well -attired staff members.
2. Writing Plans for Bad News Messages. Identify which 4. Softening the Bad News with Subordinate Clauses
writing plan-direct or indirect- you would use for and the Passive Voice. Use dependent clauses and/or
the following messages. passive-voice constructions to de-emphasize the had
a) A memo to employees announcing the cancella- news in each of the following statements.
tion of a lunchtime lecture series. a) We cannot extend credit to you at this time but
b) A let.I.er infom1ing a customer of a six-week post we invite you to fill your order on a cash basis.
ponement of on-site software training. b) We cannot waive service charges on chequing
c) A memo to an immediate subordinate deny- accounts.
ing him a requested two-day leave to partici- c) It is impossible for us to send you the informa
pate in a square-dancing competition. It is tion you requested. We can provide you only
company practice to write all internal messages with an updated price list.
straightforwardly. d) We cannot substitute a more expen sive it.em for
d) A memo from an executive rejecting a managers the one you purchased, hut we are sending you a
phased retirement plan. complimentary upgrade kit.
e) A letter from a roofing company denying a cus- S. Evaluating Bad News Statements. Discuss the weak-
tomer'.<; request to repair a roof for which the war- nesses of the following statements and revise them
ranty expired five months ago. as needed.
3. Evaluating Buffer Statements. Analyze the strengths a) It is utterly impossible for us to ship your order
and weaknesses or the following openings for had before November 10.
news messages. b) How can you honestly expect us to act on your com-
a) We were very happy to receive your recent request plaint more than three years after yoUT purchase?
for a refund or the purchase price of your new c) Since you failed to include the sales receipt, we
XJL copier, the model Consumers Annual ranked refuse to give you a refund.
tops for efficiency and customer satisfaction. d) Although we cannot offer you a position at this
b) \Ne are so son-y that we won't he repai1ing yoUT time, we wL~h you t.he best in finding employ-
poorly functioning air conditioning system. ment equal to your fine qualificat.ions.
c) Thank you for contacting Amitron about a mar- e) vVe cannot grant your request, but we can assure
keting position. l receive hundreds of appli- you that your next visit to our conference facility
cations from qualified college graduates just will not he so unpleasant.
Like you. f) To be honest, we like your resume, hut. we find
d) You honestly can't expect us to investigate a claim we must hire from within or face legal action
for a product that is no longer under warranty. from our current employees.
e) vVe at Timberline Tire and Auto make every effort g) We cannot provide you with t.he: infom1ation
to provide our customers with high-quality prod- you requested because doing so would violate
ucts at the lowest possible prices. We are com- agreements with our employees and eiqiose us to
mitted to finding ways to make shopping at OUT legal action.
stores more convenient for you. h) We don't accept credit cards.
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6. Evaluating closings. Analyze the weakn esses o r the us despite this added inconvenience.
following letter closings and revise them as needed. d) Although we must. turn down your request for a
a) We thank you for understanding o ur position refund, we usually do issue refunds if merchan-
and hope to see you in our store very soon. dise is undamaged and returned within ten days
b) I am sorry that we were forced to re fuse yo ur of the date of purchase.
application, hut l wish you the hest of luck in e) If we knew the answer to your q uestion, we
finding employment when there is so much com woi1ld he only too happy to provide you \vith the
petition ror the few jobs that are available. infom1at.ion that you are seeking. Perhaps we will
c) Please accept our apologies for discontinuing this ahle to help you with a future inquiry.
popular service. We hope you will still shop with
1. Refusing1a Request. Editors oft.he mon thly puhli- your profits have suffered as a result of it. A year ago,
cation National Busint:ss have asked you , a consult- out o r respect ror copyright law as it applies to the
ant \vith Brandwise Solutions, to wTite a hrief case recording ind ustry, you revoked your noq uestions-
study article for their magazine. In particular r.hey asked return policy. You st.ill offer refunds, hut only
are interested in your response to the rehrandi ng of on itt"1ns that haven't been opened. Write to Mr. Yee
Goliath Groce ri es, Canadas fourth-largest supermar- refusing his request.
ket chain, which com mands a 14 per cent market 3. Refusing a Claim. As manager of human resources,
share. Goliath has recently merged il~ distribution you must refuse a request ror reimhursement ro r
network, S\vitched over to large-fo rmat stores, and additio nal moving exp enses from Roger Laramie,
repositioned itself as a whole foods and express foods the new assistant manager of Information Systems.
retailer in o rder to gain a market niche distinct from When Roger transrerred divisions last mon th from
recently arrived US rivals such as Stars and Stripes Montreal t.o Calgary, he was promised the standard
of Arkansas. Although you would like to offer your relocation allowance of $5,000 to cover cartage and
opinions on the subject, you fear a possihle conflict insurance costs for a long-distance move, based on
of interest since your consulting firm advised on the estimates for the contents of a three-bedroom home.
branding and redesign of Goliath's low-price chai n, As soon as Roger received news of his transrer, he
Save-a-Ih 1ck. You are also sched uled to leave this was informed that out-of-province moves for your
evening ror a three-month ove rseas consulting job. company are handled hy Express Movers, a corporate
Write to the editors declining their req uest hut leav moving specialist offering discounted rat.es. Despite
ing the cl oor open for future writing opportunities. the existing agreement with Express Movers, Roger
2. Refusing a Claim. As owner and proprietor of instead signed a colltract with Elite Movers, a com-
Audiophile CDs and Multimedia, you must refuse pany whose rates are substantially higher because of
the claim of Jaso n Yee. Mr. Yee recently purchased their experience in shipping fragile short-wave radio
CDs valued at $750 from your downtown Vancouver equipment such as his. As a result, the claim for mov
store. A few days later, he hrought them hack \vith ing expenses he submitted exceeded $9,000. Wri te to
opened packaging and asked fo r a refund, saying that Roger explaining your reasons for the refusal while
he was disappointed \vith their sound quality. When at.tempting to retain his goodwil l.
he was refused, Mr. Yee decided to write to you in 4. Refusing a Claim. As ow11er of Cedar Country Decks
person to complain, angrily. Although you don't and Fences, you must refuse the following claim.
want to accuse Mr. Yee of wi:ongdoing, you realize Josh Starowicz, president of Animatronix Computer
that the practice of copyi ng CDs and then returning Animation, has asked you to repair his offices roof-
them is well documented and \vides pread. ln fact., top deck, which you installed eight years ago when
7 I DELIVER I NG UNFAV OURAB L E N EWS
the century-old building was owned by Caption handfuls of cookies to eat at their desks. While you
Advertising. On completion of the carpentry, you understand the necessity for these makeshift meals,
applied a generous coat of Thompsons Water Seal you feel that there is room in the budget to provide
and advL~ed Gord McNamara, Capt.ion's president, healthier ah.ernatives to these high-fat, carbohydrate
that the sealant should be reapplied regularly. To help laden snacks. In fact, the health and safety committee
him maintain the deck cheaply, you even offered him voted \vith you in favour of such a motion at a recent
a low-cost annual maintenance contract, which he meeting, hut you anticipate a high level of resistance
refused. When Animatronix purchased the prop from employees for whom the cookies are a dietary
erty and moved in a year ago, staff members were staple. Write a memo to all staff announcing that,
alam1ed at the cond ition of the deck- boards were effective next month, kitche11ettes \vill be stocked with
warped and rotten, sections of the secu rity railing a selection of fresh frui L~. whole-grain snacks, and
were mL~sing, and stai r treads were loose. Apparently, spri ng water instead of the usual coffee and cookies.
Mr. McNamaras cousin , a general contracto r, had Consider which approach would be most appropriate.
hern called in to do repairs but had ceased work afteT 7. Announcing Bad News to Employees. When yo u
sanding away the remain ing sealant, hastening the established a11 on-site fitness program a year ago, you
decks deterioration. Although you normally guaran- had no idea how popular it would be. Employees at
tee your work, you do not feel justified in repairing your small packaging plant quickly signed up for free
it at no cost, according to Mr. St.arowicz's request. lunch-hour and after-work yoga sessions and Pilat.es
The damage clearly resulted from poor maintenance classes. Enrolment soon reached capaci ty, prompting
and shoddy workmanship by other contracto rs. In you to ex11and the program at additional cost to you.
addition, the cost of materials alone for such a job After a few inquiries, however, you were upset to dis-
would exceed $.5,000, an expeme your small busi- cover that non-employees routinely breach security
ness simply can't absorb. Although you firmly helieve and take part in dasses meant solely for the bene-
that fault does not rest wi th you, you would like to fit of employees. You would prefer not to cancel the
retain the goodwill of the buildings new owner, in program because it has helped to reduce absentee
part because neighbouri ng businesses have recen tly ism and indirectly boost productivity, hut you must
been accepting bids for deck projects. Write to enforce limits on participation in order to keep costs
Mr. Starowicz refusing his claim but offering a solu- down. E-mail the staff reminding people of the pro
tion, perhaps in the form of a free inspection or a grams participation restrictions.
discount on repairs. 8. Announcing Bad News to Employees. In past years,
S. Refusing Credit. As credit manager at Concept Office your company has hosted a premier COTPOrate enter
Furniture, you must tum down a credit application tait1ment event for all employees and their spouses/
from Alan Medwell of Discount Realty. Mr. Medwell partne rs in early December. The cellebration has
has placed a sizable order for modular office fur- always featured a cocktail reception, three-course
niture, asking for 120-day cred it terms. Though dinner, live entertainment, charity rarne, and dan-
Disc.aunt Realty has been a good customer in the cing. 0 11ly days before this years even t was to t.ake
past, a review of its financial statement and infor- place, however, there has been a serious outbreak of
mation supplied by credit references has led you to salmonella at the planned venue, forcing a shutdown
conclude that the fim1 is in financi al difficulty. Refuse of the hotels food services by the regional board of
Mr. Medwells request for credit while encouraging health. Because the hotel's facilities are hooked until
h L~ business now or in the future . February, it wi.ll not be possible to reschedule the
6. Announcing Bad News to Employees. As head of the event in the immediate future. As events coordi nator
occupational health and safety committee at you r for your organization, you doubt that most people
workplace, you are concerned about the practice of would be happy wi.th a rebooking at this venue, given
stocking employee kitchenettes with free coffee and the recent health alert. Write a group e-mail mes-
cookies. Lately you have begun to notice that har- sage to employees informing them of the postpone
ried employees routi nely skip lunch a11d instead grab ment and possible cancellation of the !holiday party.
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Suggest an alternative that would stlll allow employ- development. This news was sudden and you have
ees t.o socialize and celehrate the holiday season. had to move quickly to find a new locatio n, which
9. Announcing Bad News to Customers. As chief of the hasn't heen an easy task. High property taxes and
services t.eam for a small lntemet provider, it is your corporate rental rates in downtown Toronto have
responsib ility to issue a virus alert to customers. forced you to relocate to Pickeri ng, many kilometres
Your team recently detected a virus affecting several from the downtown core. You know that several
compLtleTs in your network. Although the virus has employees may he inconve11ienced by this change,
affected only a limited numher of memhers, you feel as many live within walking distance of your cu r-
it is appropriate to assume a proactive role in control- rent location. Some staffers do not even own cars for
ling viruses by co ntacti ng members, helping them the fifty-kilometre commute. On the plus side, the
upgrade their operating systems, and providing them new low-rise building to which you are relocating is
with regular vi rus updates. Compose an e-mail mes- a state-of-the-art facility, with ample parking and easy
sage to customers, dra\ving appropriate attention to access to public transit. The increase in square foot-
this important problem. age and money saved in rental fees means there will
10. Announcing Bad News to EmployHs. As president he no layoffs as a result of the relocation. Compose
of a small insurance hrokerage firm, it is your task an e-mail message to employees informing them of
to infomt employees of the upcoming expropria- the changes. Remember to include a schedu le of the
t.ion of your office premises for a new condominium proposed changes.
,.
~ ONLINE ACTIVITIES
1. Rules for Delivering Bad News. Read Robert Gies's that alert consume rs and other stakeholders to health
'The 10 Commandments for Delivering Bad News" and personal safety dangers arisi ng from the use o r a
from foorbes online: commercial product (e.g., a brand of hottl.ed water
www.forhes.com/sites/forbesleadershipforum/ that contai ns glass frab>'lllenL~, an infant car-seat with
2012/05/30/10-cmmnandmen ts-for-de livering defective harness fasteners). Go to Health Canada's
-bad-news/ Consumer Product Safety Advisories, Warnings and
Then watch the following video of Maple Leaf Recalls site and choose a recall or alert notice for one
Foods PTesident and CEO Michael McCain as he product. What types of information are included? Use
spoke in the wake of the 2008 listeria outbreak: the link to the firms wehsite and compare the govern-
www.youtube.com/watch?v,,zlsNSAkjlAI ment advisory with the company recall information.
To what extent does McCain's speech uphold the www.hc-sc.gc.ca/cps-spdadvisories-avis/index
principles outlined in Biess article? -eng.php
2. Varieties of Bad News Messages- Product Recalls.
Product recalls are a fom1 of crisis communication
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
FINANCIAL PLANNl!R Shannon Simmons relies on her persuasive skiffs to promote her tax
seminars through carefully planned, speclflcally targeted, and customized press and media
releases. Her advice Is to "Be creative. Make sure you have a catchy header- It has to get the
reader's attention In five seconds. or less. I usually write In the tone of the media company
I'm pitching to. If It's a more playful publlcatlon, I'll keep the tone upbeat." Simmons says
that, for her, writing a press release Is similar to tweaking a cover letter for a Job appllcatlon
because the same skills and techniques are Involved. No press release Is complete without
witty video dips of Simmons presenting money-saving tips, evidence of her ability to do the
job with her own brand of humour and media savvy.'
Writing Persuasively
How do you encourage the people you work and conduct husi ness with to agree wi th you
or do what you ask? When you ask for a favour, present new ideas, promote a product,
or explain how lO solve a prohlem, you can sometimes meet with resistance. People may
hesitate to do as you say if it involves time, money, effort, or change. When you have to
convince the reader r.o adopt your point of view or take a particular action, however, you
can rely on special persuasive strategies and an ind irect approach to help you gain com pli-
ance, minimize ohj ections, and get the results you seek
persuasion the process of Persuasion (the auempt to in fl uence opinion) works at changing attitudes, beliefs,
gradually 1nnucnc1ng attltudas and and behaviours. It involves a skilful use o r words that help put ideas lnto action and make
behavioursand mouvatlng tho
audlancc to act. things happen. Persuasive comm unication motivates readers to accept recommendations
and act on requests. It grad ually hreaks down resLstance and establishes rapport with read-
ers hy appealing to thei r needs, inte rests, values, and powers o r reason. The value of per-
suasive messaging is that it achieves i.ts purpose without threats or manipulation. 1t doesn't
coerce or mahe readers do something; it makes them want to do it, in part by rt:specting
their views and intelligence. Reasonable propositions. well-framed arguments, and vivid
supporting evidence-along wi tln the effort to establish credibility and rapport in a way
that makes the message relatable- are key to convincing people.
The ability to write persuasively is a valued workplace skill, and those who master it
earn kud os ror themselves and their companies through their ability to sell prod ucts and
ideas. Needless to say, persuasion L a skill \vith endless applications. Any message that
encourages action requires persu asion: favour requests, contestable claims, collection let-
ters, sales and fundraLsing letters, and job application letters (see Chapter 9). On an inter-
pe rsonal level and in the small groups that comprise todays wo rk envi ronments, where
cross-functional and often virmal teams are the norm, persuasive skills are essential lO the
exchange of ideas, prod uctivi ty, and inn ovation because they help to make things happen
both inside and outside of trad itional hierarchies.
Know your purpose and what you want your reader to do. Your goal is not only to
make your request hut also to make it seem reasonable, appealing, and beneficial to
the reader. It L~ easier to convince your aud ience when you know exactly what your
purpose is before you begin t.o write. A good persua..ive message nrnst he in rom1ative,
8 I PERS UA SI VE ME SSA GES
FIGURE 8 . 1
Self-actualization is the highest level of need, met
when people use their talents and problem-solving Maslow's Hierarchy
skills to serve humanity and live up to their potential. of Needs
EstHm is first among what Maslow termed "growth needs:'
The need for statu s, appreciation, and recognition leads
people to strive for status symbols, work promotions,
positions of authority, or good reputations.
Love and a sense of belonging are at a slightly higher level of need.
Most people seek acceptance, companionship, and group identity.
They don't want to be alone - they need to be needed.
Safety and security represent the next level of need. People are often motivated
by the fear of not having a comfortable standard of living, a good health
insurance or pension plan, reliable investments, job security, home security,
or a pleasant work environment. They want to hold onto the money and
resources that give them a sense of security.
Physiological nHds include basics such as food, shelter, clothing, medical care,
and a safe working environment.
so collect data that will help you overcome resistance and allow readers to follow
up easily.
Understand what motivates your reader. Analyze your audience in terms of its
perceived goals and need.$. Organizational psycho logist Abraham Maslow defi ned
these motivating factors in tem1s of an ascending hierarchy of needs, from the most Maslow's hierarchy of needs
basic at the bottom to the abstract at the top (see Figure 8.1). Once basic needs, Identified by Abraham Maslow,
a spcclnc order of necds-
which take priority, have been met, individuals move on to fulfill needs at higher physlolog1cal needs, safety and
levels. Persuasive writing taps into those motivational needs; therefore, it L~ important security, social needs, esteem,
to show how your request satisfies one or more of I.hem- how a product or policy and sclfactuallzanon- that
motivate humans.
benefits readers by saving them money, solving a problem, or helping them achieve a
work objective.
Consider design and layout. Opinions are often fom1ed before a message is read,
based on its appearance alone. A proper layout-one that conveys non-verbal messa-
ges through proportioning, typography, and use of whi.te space- puts a documen t in
a positive light and makes it look hoth attract-
ive and professional.
Be positive and accurate. Plan on adopting
a since re, confident tone and using positive,
you-centred lanbruage. Match your phrasing to
your relationship with the reader and avo id
Read "Abraham Maslow and the Pyramid -~.':Iii~~
giving the impression that you are hand ing that Beguiled Business; by William
out orders. Stick to the facts--c:lon't distort Kremer and Claudia Hammond, to learn
infonllation just to get your way. more about the hierarchy of needs and
Anticipate objections and plan how to deal how it applies to business: http://goo.gi/9RzhSs.
with them. Persuasion is necessary wheneve r
you expect resL~tance or when you think read-
ers would prefer to keep things as they are. lt
is im portant to consider why readers might
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
ohject to what you have to say and to he prepared to offer clear and compelling
counter-arguments to refute the opposing view. Overcoming opposition is a deli-
cate matter best done in a non-threatening and balanced way. Readers are naturally
more receptive and more likely to change their minds when their views have heen
respected, taken into account, and not si mply lahelled wrong. Try to frame your per
suasive request as a win-win proposition. A concession statement can let you acknow-
ledge those objections in a non -judgment.al way before you offer a rehuttal th.at proves
that what you are asking for makes sense and needs to he acted on (e.g., Although the
new syst1:m may cause some disruptions at first, it will speed proces~ing dramatically and
give us access to all relevant company-wide databases).
To counter resistance and encourage readers to say yes, present your request in light
of one of the following arguments:
Short-term pain ror long-term gain: small sacrifices or inconvenie nces now will resu lt
in the achievement of greater long tem1 objectives.
The advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Money spent is money and/or time saved in the long nm.
Investment of time or money wi ll hri ng other benefits.
Deal \vith serious objections early. However, don't let trivial objections sidetrack you or
b>ive these objections a false importance hy spending time on them at the expense of your
own arb>uments.
PERSUASIVE APPEALS
Persuasive messages appeal to the reader's reasoning, emotions, or sense of what is right
and credible. The success of your comm unication depends on the strength of the case you
build. llecause not all audiences or persuasive tasks are alike, messages that must convince
appeal an attampt to pcrsuada. can rely on single or combined ap peals.
Appeal to Reason: People in business must he able to justify the decisions they
make. Therefore, they usually respond best to logical presentations of evidence- non-
numerical facts, expert opinions, statistics, examples, and analogies. Effective reason-
ing based on evidence in one or more o r these forms leads the reader to a conclusion
and to accept that the writer is right and knowledgeable. For a reader to accept a
claim or opinion as reasonahle, the persuasion that supports it must show dear,
logical development, with facts adding up like numbers in an equation . A cai1se-
effect, problem- solution , or chronological pattern can help an appeal make more
sense. ln addition to proving your point, you should also answer questions the reader
is like ly to raise and elim inate errors in logic, flaws that can roh your appeal o f its per
logical fallacy an error In suasive power. Among the most common logical fallacies are po.it lwc ergo propter hoc
logic that weakens a persuasive (m istaking coincidence for cause), circular arguments (restating an opinion instead
argumant (a.g., a pars.anal attack,
a mistaken assumption that one of hacking it up). begging the question (sidetracking the reader from an important
event causes another, or reliance issue), and raise analogy (making a comparison that doesn't apply).
on non expert testimony). Appt:al to Emotion: Emotions are powerful pe rsuasive tool~. When facts alone fail
to convince, an emotional appeal can motivate people to act and respond. A play on
emotions can create a desire to act on a request. The reader not only sees the lob>ic of
8 I PERSUASIVE MESSAGES D
doing something but also actually wants to do it. lt is worth remembering, however,
that tapping into emotions such as pride, hope, ho11 our, pkasure, respect, and fear
can he risky and seem manipulative to a reader who is not entirely on your side. For
this reason, emotional appeals have only the most limited application to business
messages and work only when they rest on a strong logical foundation . Emotional
power comes from lanb'liage, such as the use of words that evoke certain responses--
deserve, special, safe, new, free. St.ones, concrete examples, and descriptions hased on
sense im pressions (what the reader can see, feel, hear, taste, and smell) can all help
you to pe rsuade with emotion. The following are two examples of appeals to emotion:
1. A memo that asks for safer working conditions may play on a sense of respon
sibility and pride in a companys reputation (Our company has always maintained a
level of safety ablJve industry standard:;).
2. The final letter in a series of collection letters or payment-past-due notices may
arouse rear at the consequences of not paying immediately (If we d" not rr.ccive
payment immediately, we will be f"rced t" tum your account lJYer to an attorney for
collection. Such action will damage your previously good credit rating).
Appeal to Ethics. H you want to influence people, it is import.ant to est.ahlish your
credihility beforehand or to create it during a message. Credihility has to do with the
image you cultivate. lt refers to how helievahle, responsihle, and ethical you, your
com pany, and your statt'1nents are perceived to he. Personal credihility is hased on
your knowledge, reputation, position of authority, and familiarity with your reader.
Credibility has several sources:
1. Specialized knowledge. Demonstrating your expertise earns your readers confi
dence, especially when the reader doesn't already know you. Readers will evalu-
ate you and your message on t.he strength of your evidence and the logic of its
presentation. You can compensate for a lack o r expertise by ci.ting expert opin
ions or the views of someone t.he reader trusts.
2. Reputation. The better your reputation- how you are thought of according to
your character and past conduct- the more likely readers are to trust you.
3 . Authority. The built-in authority that comes with your business 1.itle can give
you added leverage and command respect as long as it isn't perceived as bullying
or coe rcion. lt is fine to project your authority but not to abuse it.
4 . Familiarity. Relationships build trust, hut if you don't know the reade1: you can
still forge a connection !by finding common ground- for example, by identifying
a mutual interest, shared problem, or com mon goal.
Finally, if you walll people to trust you, avoid image-damaging sarcasm and hostility.
Your credibility can be rurther enhanced when you focus on reader benefits, not on what
you have to gain personally.
1. Obtain interest. ln a sho rt paragraph, make a good first impression and provide
incentive ror t.he reader t.o pay attention to the rest of your message: define a problem,
identify common ground, cite reader benefits, ask a pertinent question, o r state a
related fact that stimulates interest. Use an attention-getting technique that is relevant
to your audience and purpose.
2. Prove your proposal or product can benefit the reader. Capitalize on the interest
you have generated by explaining how what. you propose o r sell meets a. particu-
lar need. Benefits may he direct, comi ng automatically from doing someth.ing (e.g.,
receiving an income tax deduction as a result of making a charitable donation) or
indirect (e.g., the satisfaction of knowing tliat your donation will help someone else).
Give readers the information they need to act on your request and deal with any
objections they might have.
3. Ask for action and link it to reader benefits .
Even a request that makes a positive im pres
sion doesn't succeed unless readers act on it.
An effective persuasive appeal ends wi.th a
Paul Jones, CEO of Magneto specific and confident request linked to incen
Communications, discusses the tives that motivate readers to act immediately
techniques of persuasive writing in this and decisively, sometimes by a set deadline
video: http://goo.gi/95ynaD. chosen for a particular reason.
1. Gain favourable attention. Because you need to entice the reader to comply, don't begin
hy phrasing your request as a question tbat can he answered with a yes or no . Instead
catch readers' attention with a genuine compliment or a fact that awakens their social
conscience. Don't encourage readers to decline your request by providing them with a
convenient exLuse or making an apology. You need to make a positive first impression.
2. Persuade the reader to accept. Readers won't feel obliged to help you unless they
know background details o r the request and understand what they have to gain . Help
read ers view the request positively by assol'iating it \vith one o r the following:
the chance to assume a leadership role or showcase talents
the chance to network , develop professional comacts, o r gain exposure for their
views
the chance to help others or bring about positive change in their workplace or
community
Specify exactly what tbe favour involves hy referri ng to dates, times, and locations.
FI GU RE 8 .2
We guarantee that this money will be put to good use. The amount we raised Falls to build Interest In the
event and doesn't provide
last year certainly was.
readers wlth details of how the
money raised wlll be spent and
If you have any questions about this event, you should phone me at who wlll benefit
519-331-8693. Remember to buy yourtlckets- the kids are counting on you.
Offers no details about the
Don't make them suffer. \
fundralslng event and doesn't
mention direct and Indirect
Hoping you'll get back to me, benefits (e.g., the chance to
have fun and help others)
Fiona Walsh
3. Ask for action. Express your request with co nfi dence and courtesy to encour-
age acceptance. Provide the information (telephone numhers, cont.act names) the
reader will need to follow u p. Encl with a reminder that you are looking forward to
a response.
FI GU RE 8 .3
Please help this very worthy cause by purchasing tickets for yourself and your
employees. Simply complete and return the enclosed ticket order form along
with your cheque, payable to The Children's Aid Foundation, marked to my
attention at Town of Finsbury. Due to the popularity of this event, we recommend
that you place your order by Friday, August 15 to avoid disappointment. For more
details, please call me at 519-331 -8693.
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FIGURE 8 .3
If you would like to support this event but are unable to attend, we will be
pleased to donate your tickets to a foster family from Lancaster Region Children's
Aid Foundation- and you will still receive a tax receipt.
Ends by summarizing the
Join us on August 30 and be a kid again. The kids In our community will be glad ,. - - request and linking It to benefits
you did.
SIMerely,
Fiona Walsh
Regional Councillor
Enc.
PERSUASIVE MEMOS
How can you successfully lohhy for safer working conditions, persuad e staff to accept
a new complller system, or justify the expense of a new probrram? A persuasive memo
describes a prohlem to management or colleab'lles, then presents a solution tbat ends in
a related proposal or request. Its indirect problem-solution strategy gains attention and
gradual support for an action required of em ployees or an idea that needs approval prior
to impl em entation. Because a persuasive mem o comm unicates facts and benefits hefore
it pushes for action, there is less chance the initiative it endorses will he misunderstood
o r rejected prematurely By hullding an honest and logical argume nt hased on fact, not
conjecture or false clai ms, an effective persuasive memo overcomes resistance and con-
vinces readers that a plan will work or that altered procedures are necessary The memo
ultimately succeeds when it puts words and ideas into action and wi ns support for a well-
defi ned prohlem. Here are the steps to follow when wri ting a prohlem-solving memo that
gives Limited chance for read ers to say no:
1. Sum marize the problem. Identify the cause or source of a problem while suggesting
that the problem is solvable. Keep readers interested hy avoiding accusations and
strongly negative lanb'l.1age. To stimulate interest, bebri n \vit h a subject line that focuses
on positive results and benefits.
2. Expbin how the problem can be solved. If a prohlem is relevant to them, readers
wi ll want r.o read on. Establish a logical found ation for your later request, citing sr.atis-
tical evidence, facts, and figures while also outlini ng henefits.
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FIGURE 8 .4
Ineffective Persuasive
Memo (extract)
Aggressive dosing .- Please get back to me as soon as possible. We will need to Ilase with Finance
Vi sion soon If we hope to use this technology for our RRSP training season.
3. Minim ize resistan ce. Anticipate ohjections readers might have (too expensive, too
ti me-consumi ng, or a threat to someone's authority, professional status, or t he status
quo). Because you may have to acknowled ge an alternative solution the reader may
prefer, you should he prepared to offer convi ncing counter-arguments that sh ow how
your solution is su perior to all others.
4. Ask for a s pecific action. Be firm hut polite. Set a deadline for readers to act o r
respond as long as it won't seem aggressive and offer incentives (time or money saved)
if you n:guire act.ion promptly.
CLAIM REQUESTS
Straightforward, well-justified clai ms can he made directly. However, if a warranty has
lapsed, if a tem1 o r a contract has heen contravened, or Ha product is no longer und er b'llar-
antee, a claim may be j udged guestionable-and fail- unless pe rsuasive strategies are used .
This means you must first prove the legitimacy o r your claim wi th a clear line of reasoning
before you can ask for an adjustment. A weak or guestionahle claim can usually be strength
ened with expressions of confidence in a company's integii ty and fai rness and appeal~ to iL~
pride in its products and reputation, if only because successful husinesses want c ustomers
to he satisfied . As with other types of claims, it is important to adopt a moderate tone (i.e.,
to make a complaint without sounding like a complainer). Your challenge is to show that
the com pany o r receiver is responsihle ror the problem, not you. However, if you succumb
to anger or irrational threats and accusations, especially ahout a company's honesty, you
lose respect and ri.~k antagonizing the person handling your claim. The person in guestion
is likely not al fault for your prohlern but a claims adjuster or customer service rq 1resenta
tive with no prior 1.n owledge of the complaint or dif6culty, someone whose job it is to help
8 I PERSUAS I VE MESSAGES
FIGURE 8 . 5
Interoffice Memo
Last year, the cost to send trainers on the road and to bring employees from
across the country to training events at our national headquarters exceeded ~ Opening gains attention
by describing problem and
S1.2 million. Mounting travel costs accounted for the dramatic Increase In training quantifying It with statlstlcal
expenses. According to projections, by 2015 It will co:st over $2.5 million to evidence
maintain training programs at current levels.
2. Employees can interact with each other and share Ideas just as they
would If they were sitting side by side. They can ask questions, take
multiple-choice tests by keying responses Into Interactive handsets,
and be polled by the presenter.
you. If you present yourself as fair and easy to deal with and show your disappointment
without expressing anger, you will he taken serioi1sly and your claim will sta11d a better
chance of being granted promptly. Here are some steps to follow:
1. Gain positive attention. Establish rapport or common brround with the reader hy
beginning with a compliment, a point o f shared interest, a review of action taken
to solve the problem, or your original reason (if favourable) for buyi ng the product
or service.
2. Prove your claim is valid. Describe the problem in a calm and credible way. Give a
ch ronolob'Y to explain what happened and what you have done to resolve the prob-
lem. Provide supporting data t.o help the reader assess the situation: order numbers,
delivery dates, method of shipment, servicing locations, descriptions of the items in
quest.ion. Go with your strongest reasons t.o prove your claim is worthwhil e. Your
line o f reasoning should lead the reader to conclude that responsibility rests with his
or her company, not with you. Take steps to defend yourself against possible hlame
(I carefully revkwed the owners manual before l attempted to install the new unit). lt is a
good idea to attach supporti ng documents (sales receipts, invoices, shipping orders)
that will help the reade r investigate your claim.
3. Ask for a specific action. State how the claim can he resolved and what you expect
the company to do (make a refund, offer a replacement, or apologize). End positively,
expressi ng confldence in the company's ethical standards and willinb>ness to uphold
its reputation.
FI GU RE 8 -7
Ineffective Persuasive
Dear Manager, Claim (extract)
The !health club Industry has a poor track record when It comes to responding ~- Begins negatively and offers the
reader a reason for not granting
to membership complaints. Now I hope you will prove this perception wrong the adjustment
by allowlng me to cancel my membership even though the 10-day cooling-off
period has now elapsed. Doesn't specify the type of
membership, Indicate when It
When I took out a membership, I thought It would guarantee me full access to ~ was taken out, or refer to the
every class and faclllty. As it turned out, all the classes I went to were full and I was terms of the contract
turned away even though I had signed up In advance:. I think this Is a poor way to
treat paying members, don't you? Doesn't provide a chronology,
supporting data, or a strong
If you don't do something about this situation, I will nave no alternative but to -
reason for granting the
contact the Canadian Council of Better Business Bureaus, the Ontario Ministry of adjustment
Consumer Services, and my lawyer. Then we'll see what happens.
Ends angrily without asking
Angrily, for a refund
F'v-0'-V!ae,sao.. Auo/0-
COMMUN I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 8 .8
Personal business style letter - .,. Mr. Brian Edwards, Customer Service
Gym Masters Fitness
1285 Riverside Drive
Windsor, ON N9B 2R3
Sincerely,
Enc.
8 I PERSUAS I VE ME SSA GES
COLLECTION LETIERS
The purpose o r a collection letter is Lo collect an overdue bill (a mont.h or more past due) collection l~tters a sertes
while preserving th e customer relationship. Collection letters, usually written in a ser of Increasingly persuasive
appeals to a customer asking for
ies o f three to five letters, put poli te yet persistent pressure on readers, persuading them
payment for goods and servtces
to promptly pay debts owing for goods already received or services already rendered. already received.
Usually. r.he longer a hill remains unpaid, the more demanding and urgent the collection
letters become. Th e forcefulness of a collect.ion demand also depends on the relationsh ip
between the creditor and the debtor. When a customer usually pays on time, the chances
of collecting on a curren t hill are good, making courtesy all-import.ant Lo preserving a
friendly c ustomer relationship. For customers with records of unreliable payment or non-
payment, though, it may he necessary to adopt a fim1er approach, reinforced hy a no-n on-
sense tome that is direct but still polite. Adapting your messages to the type of debtor you
FIGURE 8 .9
February 4, 2014
We value your business very much and look forward to serving you again
... __ Closes with oppreclatlon
for business
soon.
SIMerely,
Alexander Foster
Accounts Payable
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
are dealing wi th can hel p you recover the money owed to your company faster- without
risking future hi1siness.
Collection letters generally follow three stages:
1. Reminder: First messages work on the assumption that the customer intends to pay
reminder letter a collection hut has simply forgotten and fallen hehind. Th is stage calls for a friendly reminder
letter that Informs acustomer In letter that mentions the customer~ good credit record (if there is one), alerts I.he
a friendly way that a payment has
customer to the problem, and asks for a response. In place of a personalized letter, it
not been received and emphasizes
the customor's prior good is also possible to use a Conn lette r or to send a copy of the o riginal invoice, stam ped
credit rating. "Second Notice" or "Past Due."
FIGURE 8.10
May6,2014
Makes It easy for the customer _..-- ...,.. Please use the enclosed envelope to send your cheque today. If a problem Is
Lo respond preventing you from making this payment, please call 1-800-667-8384, toll-free,
,_.,.. to discuss your account or details of a mutually satisfactory payment plan.
Closes posltlvely by expressing / " '
confidence In a solution
Sincerely,
Alexander Foster
Accounts Payable
8 I PE RSUA SI V E ME SSA GES
2. Inquiry: Messages at this stage are Amier and more di rect, hut they work on the
assumption that the customer has a legi timate reason fo r not paying- a cash-flow
problem, out-of-town ahsence, or similar circumstance. The inquiry letter summar- Inquiry letter a collection letter
izes the situation, expresses concern over non-payment, and asks ror an explanation that attempts to dNcrmlnc the
circumstances that arc preventing
or im mediate payment. This request is reinforced by positive appeals to one or more payment and asks for payment.
of the rollowing:
Fairn ess-emphasize the customer's fairness in completing a transaction by pay-
ing for goods and services already received.
Reputation- emphasize the benefits of deht payment to a company's good name.
FIGURE 8.11
We would prefer to mark your accoun t paid than to take this unpleasant - - -+-- Tone In closing Is polite yet firm
action, so please send your cheque today.
SIM erely,
Alexander Foster
Accounts Payable
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
Sales Messages
Successful sales people are usually effective communicators:
They know that sales messages help huild a husiness hy advertising a product or ser-
vice directly to individual customers or husiness accounts.
They rely on market research and use it to adapt their sales messages to the needs,
preferences, and demographi.cs o r targeted groups. They use mailing lists based Oll mis
research to ensure that sales messages reach the people most likely to he interested
in particular products and services. This practice is known as direct-mail marketing.
Direct-mail sales messages are reader-adapted, making them different [TOm other types
of promotion , such as hrochmes and catalogues, that are part of a direct-mail package.
They realize I.hat most sales messages are unsolicited and frequently ignored, so they
avoid hard-sell pitches, empty hype, and deceptive product clai ms that tum readers
off. lnst.ead, they minimize risk for buyers hy providing product information, indicat-
ing how buyers will henel'lt, and building confidence in the prod uct\; value and per-
formance. Only at t.he end do they push for a sale.
They use appropriate persuasive appeals and incentives to create desire ror products
and services. The aim is to translate that interest into sales and an ongoing relation-
ship of trust with customers.
sales letter a letter that promotes Among the types o r persuasive messages, sales letters are unique. They tend to he
a product, scNlce, or business and longer than the average husines.s letter hecause they are rich in details orchestrated to
seeks prospective customers or
make readers want the product. Sales letters can he composed one by one or as fom1 let-
additional sales.
ters, sent out in mailings of hund reds or even thousands. ln large organizations, specialisL~
oversee market research and promotional writing. Jn smaller organizations, these areas are
handled hy indi vidual employees or are outsourced .
8 I PERS UA SI VE ME SSA GES
Even if your joh doesn't involve sales and promotions, sales writing has hroad appli-
cations. Knowing how t.o do it well can help you sell not just your company's products,
mission, and values hut also your own ideas and skills so you are hetter ahle to get the joh
you want., keep it, and huild a reputation for your company. As you will see in Chapter 9,
job application letters are closely related to sales letters.
1. Study the product or service. One of your tasks will he to educate consumers about
the prodi1ct and to identify the problem the prod uct helps to solve. To do this, you
should be knowledgeable about its design, construction, composite materials, manu-
factmi ng process, and operation. Note the product's ease of use, perfom1ance, dur-
ahility, efficiency, warranty, availability of colours an.cl fi nishes, and arrangements for
servicing. Analyze its special features, especially its central selling point- the th ing
that gives your product an edge over the competi tion- and compare its price with
that of other products in its class.
2. learn as much as possible about the target audieu ce. Your message stands a better
chance of being read and generating sales if it is adapted to a specific audience. Rely
on market research to draw up a profile of intended readers hased on thei r age, sex,
ed ucation, income, lifestyle, and place of residence. Understanding potential huyers'
needs will help you predict the desirability of your product.
3. Ai m for an ethical sales pitch. There are severe penalties for false advertising. When
descrihi ng your product\; performance and capahilities, make sure you stick to the
facts and use objective, concrete language.
4. Consider other factors. The timing, visu al appeal (document design), personaliza-
tion, and tone of sales messages also in nuence readers. Delivering your message at the
Tight time, when interest is likely high, betters the odds of making sales. The same
is true of messages that are visually appealing, so consider making strategic use of
captions, headings, images, and typography. especially to emphasize a central selling
feature . A personalized letter, instead of one ad dressed "Dear Occupant" or "Attention
Householder," looks less like unwanted, mass-prod uced junk mail. Further, pe rsonal-
ization can he achieved with a tone that conveys wam1th and respect \vithout sound-
ing too chummy or informal.
You're pre-approved for the Ultra Platinum Card. This exciting credit card is yours to
help you achieve the best in life.
a quest.ion
Have you ever wondered if you paid too much for an all-inclusive resort vacation?
a story
I am pleased to write to you today to tell you an alumni success story about Janet and
Steve, who may not be very different from you. They work hard and invest their money
wisely to build a bright future for their family. Although they know they can't predict
the future, they have protected it by investing in the Alumni Term Life Insurance Plan.
With low rates for alumni, they protect themselves, their family, and everything they
have worked so hard for.
For extra emphasis, some of these devices can be holded o r underlined, in whole o r in
part, o r incorporated as captions and headli nes. Weak openings tum readers off, so avoid
obvious statements, questions with obvious answe rs, and stories that take too long to get
to the point.
expectations. Satisfy hoth goals hy providing a carefully worded product description that
combines concrete details with assurances of customer satisfaction.
Describe 1.he product from the readers point of view. lnstead of listing flat details, sug-
gest what it is like to use and benefit from the product. Rat.her than saying our vacuum has
a 6-metre cord, interpret details so they are meaningful to readers:
The Power Vac's 6-metre cord allows you to vacuum even the largest rooms from a
single outlet.
lf necessary, halance and dispel possible doubts with clea.r reminders of product benefits:
If you ever worried that a home security system might mean a loss of privacy, we want to
reassure you that our monitoring system is activated only when the alarm is triggered.
Mention it only aft.er you have created a desire for the product.
Break the price down into smaller units (monthly instalment payments, cost per day
or issue).
Make the product a bargain by calculating the cost after discount or rebate.
Show savings over a competitors product or, for su bscriptions, over the per-unit pur-
chas.e price.
link the price with benefits.
When you calculate what you could save with benefits such as Out-of-Province Travel
Medical Insurance and Auto Rental Collision Insurance, you'll be pleasantly surprised that
the fee for the Ultra Platinum Card is only $79 a year (with a current annual interest rate of
17.5%), which is actually less than $7 a month.
En courage the reader to act prom p tly wi th perks and incentives such as a time-
lirni ted offor, special o ffer, honus, or rebate. If you cannot o ffer incen tives, remind readers
that the less they delay th e soon er they will henefit from the product (As quantities are
limited, act now to avoid dL~appointment. Purchase your Zodiac watercraft today and e'njoy it all
summer long).
Postscripts
Postscrip t lines are more comm on in sales letters than in any other type of message.
Postscripts are h igh-impact senten ces, attracting attention as soon as the letter is opened.
They are use ful for spotlighting free o ffers, for summarizing th e central selling poLnt, or for
making a final ap peal to readers, u rging them to act promptly.
P.S. Accept your Ultra Platinum Card today, so you can start enjoying its benefits right awayl
P.S. Remember to cash your cheque toward your Ultra Card Registry Service before the
expiry date. You don't want to regret passing up card protection if your debit or credit cards
are ever lost or stolenl
Sales Follow-Up
Although not specifically a persu asive message, a sales follow-u p confirms to customers
the fact that they have made the right decision by purchasing a p roduct. Its expressions
o f appreciation for an ord er rein force goodwill and promote future business. A follow-up
may also confirm details of a sale or offer further services.
FI GU RE 8 . 1 2
Opening suggests the product If you think the computer system you're using now Is good, you should see
already owned Is satisfactory, - --. the desktop PCs and notebooks from Micro-Genius. We think you should check
making a replacement out our new ASO and R40 series. We think you'll be pleasantly surprised.
unnecessary
Our computers are fast, powerful, and affordable. Our customers say that
Does not specify how fast,
powerful, and affordable the
overall they are quite satisfied with their performance. Now, for a limited time,
product Is. Muted language you can get an additional gigabyte of memory and no-charge shipping when you
('quite satisfied") fall s to create purchase any system Included In our special promotion.
desire for the product
We have some real beauties In stock right now. If you think Micro-Genius
Closing action Is conditional
might have a computer for you, give us a call. Micro-Genius computers aren't
and doesn't provide enough - --.
Information for easy follow up just good, they're very good.
8 I PERSUAS I VE MESSAGES
FIGURE 8.13
Simply call us at 1-877244-5389 and place your order, and your new system will be up and
running In 3 business days-that's our guarantee. Plus, you get an additional gigabyte of memory
and shipping absolutely free. At Micro-Genius, you can get more power and convenience for less.
Sincerely,
Y tt.Wi.t tVQ.W;
Dawn Evans Postscript urges
Assistant Vice-President Immediate actions
Marketing with Incentive- a
P.S. Place your order by March 15 and you can add Microsoft Windows 8 Professional to your .,. - time limited special
package for only $199. That's a saving of S100 ovt>r the retail price. offer that makes
product a bargain
COMMUNI C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
FIGURE 8 .14
September 3, 2013
You can expect the same reliable and fully insured services you've already experienced
from Ice Busters, including the following
Bulleted list emphasizes features
of service removal of snow accumulations of as little as 3 cm within four hours
careful plowing of entire driveway surface, not just a narrow path leading
to your garage
hand-shovelling of steps and walkways, safeguarding your delicate shrubs
Introduction of price connected and evergreens
Lo customer benerlts ~ service from first to last snowfall
Sincerely,
c~ Ste-ve,vt.SIX1
Cam Stevenson
President
Enc.
8 I PER SUAS I VE ME SSA GES
FIGURE 8 . 15
May 5,2014
Sarah Anderson, our customer service speclallst, will be contacting you next week
to arrange a training schedule that Isconvenient for you. She wlll be avallable .,. Offers further assistance
throughout the Installation process to answer your questions and concerns. We
also Invite you to call our product support hotllne, which Is open 24 hours a day
to answer your technical questions and assist you In maximizing the features of
your new voice-recognition system.
Closes In friendly but
lfwe can be of help now or in the future, please call on us. professional manner
SIMerely,
Nick Papadakis
Audlotrax Sales Team
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
FUNDRAISING MESSAGES
A variation on a sales letter is the fund raising appeal. Reade rs in th is case are asked not to
spend money hut to donate it to a worthy cause. Their support and generosity depen ds
on how well you show how a problem could be solved or alleviated with a donation that
will be put to good use. A fundraising letter should make readers feel good about giving.
To writ.e an effective fundraising message, follow these steps:
1. Identify an important problem. Explain why the reader should care about it.
2. Show that the problem is solvable. If a problem seems insurm ountable, readers will
naturally feel incapable of doing anythi ng to help. Hold out hope for even a partial,
short-term solution . Lin k a need to your organization's ability to respond to i.t.
3. Expl-tin what your organization is doing to solve tJ1e problem. Prove that funds
will he going to a good cause, not ji1st t.o the cost of fundraising. Outline past accom
plislm1en ts and future goals, citing facts and statistics. If readers might find it difficult
to grasp the enormity of a problem, describe the difference your group or charity
can make in the life of one individual or a comm unity. An enclosure- a brochure or
reprint of an article about your organization- can supply potential donors with use-
ful hackgroirn d inform ation.
4. Ask for a donation. Explain deficiencies in public funding that make private dona-
tions necessary. If appropriate, suggest amounts in descending order or propose a
monthly pledge. Put t.he gift in terms that the reader will understand by indicating
8 I PERSUAS I VE ME SSA GES
what it will huy. Broaden the scope of your message by suggesting other ways (volun-
teerLng, writing lette rs) readers can lend their suppo rt.
The sample favour req uest (see Figure 8.3 on pages 240- 1) sha res certain characterL~
tics with a typical fundraL~ing letter. A fundraising package will usually include an appeal
for a donation, a reply rorm, and a postage-paid envelope.
O Have you begun your message by capturing the reader's favourable interest? Have you
made the message immediately relevant to the reader's concerns? Have you put the
request in a positive light? Have you provided enough incentive for the reader to read on?
0 Have you chosen the right appeal or persuasive strategy to help you connect with your
reader? Is the persuasive strategy an ethical one your company condones?
O Have you overcome the reader's resistance?
0 Have you built credibility with your audience?
D Have you justified the request with a clear explanation of its reasons, details, and benefits?
O Have you inspired the reader to act? When necessary, have you provided incentive for
the reader to act promptly? Have you provided sufficient information so that the reader
will know what to do next?
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
1. Identifying Types of Appeals. Review recent maga- I strongly urge you to consider donating $500,000 to
zines and newspapers and find advertisements that our well-deserving university. We need this money
fit each oft.he following categories: desperately and will put it to good use.Thank you
a) hanking and investment for your consideration. Once I settle our personnel
b) travel and leisure problems, I will be in touch with you again to
c) computers and technology remind you of this important opportunity to donate
What types of appeals are used in each case? What, $5001000 to such a worthy cause.
if any, connect.ion exL~ts hetween the type of product
b) Persuasive Memo
and t.he a ppeal that is used?
2. Analyzing Persuasive Messages. Working in small I propose that our company sponsor a contest in
groups, discuss weaknesses in the following messa- order to promote our new line of low-carbohydrate
ges and share ideas on how to revise them. Make an products. Administering a contest can be expensive,
overhead transparency or Powe rPoint slide of one of but the benefits are obvious. If you don't agree with
your revised messages and discuss the changes you me, I think you w ill be missing out on a valuable
have made with t.he rest of your class. opportunity. I will need your authorization i n order
a) Persuasive Request (Follow-Up) to proceed.
Let me first apologize for the delay. In sending this 3. Analyzing a Sales Message. Using t.he effective sales
letter. We have had a number of staff changes and messages checklist on page 258 as a guide, analyze
personnel problems recently and I realize now the strengths and weaknesses of a sales message you
that we have not yet followed up on the meeting or a friend received recently. Did t.he message grnh
we had three months ago. Please be rest assured your attention? Did it make you want to huy I.he
your interest in supporting our organization is product? Why or why not?
really appreciated, and our response to subsequent 4. Evaluating Fundraising Appeals. As a group , collect
discussions will probably be timelier in the future. three or four fundraising messages you have received
and compare the types of appeals and approaches
Gordon, as you are an extremely wealthy alumnus
they use. Evaluate opening and closing statements and
of our university, I believe that a strong case exists
decide if each message has provided you with enough
for your law firm to provide financial support at a
information to encourage you to make a donation.
leadership level. By making a leadership gift, your
Write a hrief report on your analysL~ of the letters.
firm will realize significant reputational benefits.
S. Developing a Fundrais ing Strategy. Select a regis-
We propose a pace-setting gift of $500,000. In
tered Canadian charity (listings can be found on
recognition of your support for our organization at
the websites for Canada Revenue Agency or Charity
the $500,000 level, we would be delighted to include
Village). Individually or in a group, plan a strategy
your firm's name on a small plaque in the lobby of
to convi nce your classmates to make a donation to
our offices.
the charity
1. Analyzing Subject Lines. Identify the most persuasive Suhject: Can You Spare $10 for a Good Cause?
subject 1Lne in each case. Suhject: Meeti ng Our Target for t.he United Way
a) Suhject: Donat.ions Required Campaign
8 I PERS UA SI VE MESSAGES
and, when prompted, asking for Donald. To qual- a) A letter that offers readers a premium for taking
ify fo r a 5% discount, you must quote this refer- out a memhership in an aut.omohile association.
ence numher: 9112866B. Discounts do not apply b) A letter that offers readers a 25 per cent discount
to all products. For a list of exclusions, please see ir they renew their magazine subscriptions right
our wehsite: www.easy_order.com. away.
6. Adding Postscripts. Compose postscripts for the fol- c) A letter that advertises a quality home-security
lowing sales messages. system.
llc
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1. Favour Requast. As pan of your posit.ion at Canmuir shoe designer, t.o be one of the judges. The nature
Ind ustries, you are responsihle for organizing a golf of I.he event's sponsorship means you can offer her
tournament fundraising event, with proceeds going only a small honorarium, hut you woi1ld also li ke
to the Hean and Stroke Foundation. Last year, at a to featme her newest line of footwear in the show.
similar event, your company raised over $.50,000- Wri te to Monique Rohert, encouraging her to accept
money that went toward research and educational yom invi tation.
programs. This year the even t will be hosted at 3. Favour Request. Your aerospace company has
North land Golf and Cou ntry Cluh. ln addition to recently responded to a request rTom Project Prot.ege,
a day~ go lfi ng on the award -winning links, there an educational mentorship program designed to help
will he a draw to win lessons with a golf pro, spe promising high-school students at risk of dropping
cial promotional kiosks, and a putting competition , out. Because you hire only college graduates and give
followed by a four-course dinner. You have already preference to those with post-graduate degrees, you
secured the su pport of local retail businesses, which understand I.he importance of keepi ng teenagers in
have donated items to be sold at kiosks at each of school. You would like yoiu company to participate,
the course's 18 holes. Now you need .36 committed hut you realize this wi.11 require three volunteers from
individuals from your organization to oversee the your firn1 to give up an entire Saturday to speak with
kiosks frum 10:00 a.m. to 4:00 p.m. the day of the students ahout career opportunities in the industry.
event. Compose a memo to all employees, asking for As far as you know, mentors will receive no ree hut
their assistance. \vi ll he invited to a year-end banquet in return for
2. Favour Request. As a student in the Fashion Design donating their time and se rvices. Write a memo to
and Technology Program at Saint-Laurent College, staff, asking ror their help.
you have heen appoi nted chair of the annual fashion 4. Persuasive Memo. Wri te a persuasive memo on one
show an d competition's organizing committee. The of the followi ng topics:
event features designs from the program's !,'Taduating a) Colleagues have complai ned that th e office
class and is sponsored by a famous Canadian fash- environment you share is drah and depressing.
ion retail chain that offers internships to competi Lighting is poor, filing systems are disorganized,
tion win.ners. In the past, competition judges have and office furniture is in disrepair. Visitors com-
included well-known fashion editors, designers, and plain that your office looks downright l.mprofes-
stylists whose participation attracted media atten- sional. Write a memo, presenting a plan to perk
tion and helped raise money for Fashion Helps, a up your office environment.
charity that provides support services to families b) Three years ago, your business introduced
of the tern1inall y ill. Last year, through the sale of extended hours. Although the new hours do not
$20 adm ission tickets, Saint-Laurent College raised force employees to work more than the num -
close to $10,000. This year, you would like to invite ber of hours per week set out hy labo ur laws,
Monique Robert, a Montreal boutique owner and the re have heen so me negative repercussions.
8 I PERSUAS I VE MESSAGES
Ahsenteeism L~ up, payroll costs have soared, and efforts at work. Every day, it seems, someone is
the eveni ng work hours have posed a challenge selling chocolate-covered almonds, magazine
to employees with children, especially those who suhscri.ptions, or garbage bags. Although the
must pick up preschoolers from daycare racilities. money is for a good cause, yo u feel you must
Write a persuasive memo, asking for the cancella- respond to seri ous complaints about this prac
tion of extended hours. tice. Since your hrokerage firm requires staff
c) A num her of your colleagues are co nsidering to give customers and other stakeholders their
switchi ng to part-time hours as an alternative undivided attention, you feel such fundraising
to retirement. You have developed a plan for a activities should he restricted to lunch hours and
mentorship program that would allow these indi - break times. write a persuasive memo to all staff,
viduals to provide invaluahle support to trainees. establishing limits on office ftmdraising.
Write a memo to the chid operating officer, sug- S. Parsuasiv11 Mamo. Identify a problem in need of a
gesting this idea. solution or a situation in need of improvement in
d) Your company is current.Ly without an e-mail your school or place o r employment. Write a well-
policy, which has resulted in widespread abuses researched memo, identifyi ng the benefiL~ of what you
o r the technology and a lack of unHomiity in mes- propose and making a compelling case for change.
saging. Based on your knowledge of e-mail proh- 6. Claim Raqu11st. As co-owner of a small graphics design
Lerns and abuses, WTi te a persuasive memo, asking finn, you recently hosted a one-day business retreat
for the creation of corporate e-mail guidelines. for all staff at the Ocean View lnn, a conference facility
11) You work at the head office o r a large Canadian you have long counted on for its excellent cateLing and
investment house. You and most of your col- technical services. One month in advance, you made
leagues put in exceptionally long hours. Recently, an $800 deposit on the room booking and catering
you read an article reporting that almost half of costs. The remaind er of the tot.al $4,000 cost (which
fortunt: magazine's top one hundred companies includes all applicable taxes) was to he paid after the
provide take-home meal~ for their employees. event. The retreat was a success, hut you were sur-
You r office alTeady has a we ll-staffed, state-of- prised when you received a new invoice for $3,550.
the-art catering and kitchen facility. Compose a The additional charges were for a $100 users fee
persuasive memo, suggesting that take-home din- and a $2 50 booki ng fee. You feel that these charges,
ners he made availahle at a reasonable cost. because they were not part o r the original agreement,
f) You helieve employees appreciate heing noticed are either unwarranted or erroneous. Th.e Ocean View
fo,- a joh well done OT for an idea that saves time hm, you have just discovered, is under new manage
o r money That's why you agree with the Work ment, which may account for the discrepancies. Write
Expe ri ence Study, conducted by consulting firms to manager Kaleigh Smith, requesti ng an. adjustment.
Towers Perrin and Gang&: Gang in 2003, which 7. Claim R11quast. You recently received. a $250 gift
reported that what employees really want is to card rrom your departmen t manager as a reward for
feel good about their abilities and to be recog work well done on an important contract. However,
nized for the contributions they make. You've also when you tiied to use it at Folio, the hookstore that
discovered that BBDO Canada offers an annual issued the card, you were told that it bad expired and
$500 awaTd to the employee with the best over- you would have t.o pay an inactivity fee before you
all creative idea, insight, or strategy Motivation could make your purchase. You felt that there must
among your colleat,rues is currently at an all-tinu: have heen some mL~take, as the card was L~sued only
low. Write a memo, suggesting the introduc- three months ago and not stamped with an ex11ira
tion of a similar innovation reward program in tion date. Although the reactivation charge was only
youTcompany $15, you believed that, in principle, you shouldn't
g) With recent cuts to the funding of puhlic educa- have heen penalized and the unreasonable fee should
tion, you have noticed that your staff memhers have been waived. You left the store disappointed,
a re taking on their children\; school fundraising without redeeming the card. After some research, you
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discovered that, und er provincial guideli nes, retailers the head office of Frontier Equity Mutual is located.
are not all owed to issue gift cards that have expiry Fo r the next three months, you are offering an intro
dates or 1.0 charge reactivation fees. You don't believe d uctory special to new clients, which entitles them
that the staff at Folio are intentionally breaking the to a 15 per cent discount on all envelope and small-
law, hut you want to make them aware of their ohli package courier services. Your radio-dispatched
gations and have them revise their practices in the delivery personnel are fully bonded and are experts
future. Make your case in a persuasive claim to Folio's at time-critical delivery. Online orderi ng is also one
customer service division. of the services you offer. Size up your prospect, then
8. Collection Letter Series. You are the owner of a gen- write a letter to Flori an Heinz (make up any addi-
eral contracting hi1siness that undertook extensive tional details you require).
renovations on a property owned hy Arnold Levitt. 10. Sales Letter. As a graduate of the Culinary Arts
Work valued at $17,000 was completed on sched- Program at Foothills College, you and fellow graduate
ule three months ago, and the property subsequently Tatiana Melnikov are launching your own low-carh
passed inspection. Because Mr. Levitt has always catering business, Smart Food. You have two years'
paid you on time for all previous contracts, you are experience as head chef at Food for Life, a highly
somewhat surprised that all hut the original $1,700 rated local restaurant, and have worked as a sous-
deposit remains unpaid . There is some urgency to chef at restaurants in Vancouver and Halifax. Tatiana
your request for payment because you must settle has previously worked as a registered dietitian .
your own accounts with electrical and plumbing sub- Together you plan to fine-cater intimate, casual, and
contractors who worked for you on the project. Mr. formal events, especially business-related functions.
Levitt travels frequently, so you have heen unable to Direct office-delivery of affordable, low-ca rh lunch
reach him hy phone. Your voice-mail messages have specials, ordered through your website, is another
gone unanswered. 'Write a collection se1ies. service that you will offer. You think busy profession-
9. Sales Letter. As owner of Swiftcyde Courier Services, als will he impressed hy your extensive repertoire of
write a sales message to prospective customer Florian healthy, low-carb specialties, a full listing of which
Heinz, president of Frontier Equity Mutual. Your ten- also appears on your website. To promor.e your new
year-old company provides bicycle courier services business, you have considered hosting a tasting event
at highly competitive rates to a large number of busi th.at would allow potential clientele to sample the best
nesses, including six other tenants of First Canadian of your menu. Compose a promotional letter suitable
Place in downtown Toronto's financial district, where for a direct-mail campaign aimed at local businesses.
ONLINE ACTIVITIES
1. Eliminating Fuzzy Logic. Read the foll owing article 2. Writing a Product Description. Visit Sonys online
on logical fallacies from Purdue University$ Online store and select a product you thi nk would appeal
Writing Lah: to your classmates. Read the accompanying product
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/ overview and note its features, then write yom own
resource/659/01 product description so th.at it clearly outlines benefits
Theri visit the follmving pages and idrntify weak- to the reader and creates a desire [or the product.
nesses in logic in each of the examples: Present the description to your classmates as though
www.writing.engr.psu.edu/exercises/fallacies it were an actual sales letter and ask for their reac-
.html tion. Pri m out the corresponding page from the web-
http://faculty.stevenson.edu/jsalvucci/ site and hand it in with your product descri ption .
WritingHelp/lng_exer.htm www.snnystyle.com
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Prepare for employment by assessing your 5. Create online and scannable resumes.
career objectives, Interests, and professional
6. Write solicited and unsolicited job
strengths.
application letters that strategically target
2. Use resources to network and find out about and sell your skills to prospective employers.
jobs and employers.
7. Prepare for and follow up on job Interviews.
3. Use social media tools to search for and apply
8. Write a range of messages related to
for a job and to establish a profile.
job-seeking, Including requests for
4. Compose chronological and skills-based recommendation.
resumes that provide overviews of your
professional background and capabilities.
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CRAIG WILSON , vice-president of human resources at Ocean Nutrition Canada, has tapped
Into the power of social media to move his company Into a new era of employee recruit-
ment. About half ofthe company's new positions are filled by candidates who found the job
posting on social media. Wiison says:
The benefit of social media l.s that we can take our message directly to the candidate.
When you run an advertisement, you have to wait and see. With social media, we
can cover a broad geography, be Industry- and skill-specific and process much of It
electronically. We're able to compress a lot In at the front end. For now, Llnkedln Is
something we can mine (for talent) and Facebook Is about creating conversations and
finding referrals.'
CIBC Mellon also ventured Into Twitter and Llnkedln to raise Its profile and gain an edge
over Its competition In recru iting top candidates. Sue Simone, the company's senior vice-
president of human resources, sums up the rationale:
Jobseekers today are tech-savvy and they expect that any company they are looking at
joining will have a presence on and a relationship with social media. It's a great way to
gain Insight Into a person's personal brand and their qualifications. It's also a low-cost
solution to recruiting, employer brand vlslblllty and establishing a leading-edge Image
for the brand. We are now able to connect and engage with candidates by learning
more about their accomplishments, Interests, networks and volunteer work, to name a
few examples.... The use of social media In recruiting Is just the beglnnlng.2
What drew you to your career path or program or study? Does your work allow you
to realize yom original desires and intent.ions?
What are you good at? What are you most interested in doing? Resolving troubled
situations? Developi ng ideas? Helping people? Making things happen?
Are you willing to acqui re new skills or retrain for I.he sake of advancement?
Where, realistically, do you see yourseH in five or ten years?
What trade-offs are you willi ng to make for job satisfaction (e.g., reduced salary and/
or benefits; less personal time due to travel, commuting, or overtime)? Do you live to
wo rk or work to live?
On the hasis of work you ha.ve already done, what hard and soft skills can you offer a
prospective employe r?
Enter into the joh search and application process with clear thought not only to your
qualifications and past employment hut also to your competencies and "sort skills" and
how you can demonstrate and prove them through the following means:
Having a successful and fulfilling career is not just a matter of finding a joh where you At
in hut also one of finding a career area I.hat fi.ts yom personality and qualifications. Look
for a position that allows you to play to your strengths and develop skills in those areas. Be
prepared to change johs every few years to learn from experience- Canadians change jobs
four to fi.ve times in their lives-and adapt to fluctuations in the j oh market and economy
hy huilding your marketahle skills.'
Job-Hunting
Very few job offers materialize as if by magic. Joh-hunti ng requires time, effort, and perse-
verance, but the payoffs of a successful search can be enormous. It is usually wise to work
on the assumption that the more information you have about employment opport.uni ties,
the greater your chance of getting the joh you want. A successful search campaign hebrins
with the follo\ving steps:
studyi ng the job market (hy gathering infmmation from published articles, hlogs, other
social media sources, career services offices, instructors and mentors, and joh fairs)
building professional networks that can he a source of information and insight Oiy
joining university-hased professional associations, Twitte r, o r Linked ln professional
groups; volunteering; or interning)
identifying sources of empl oyment (by paying attention to channels and platfom1s
including print, web, social media, and personal word-of-mouth communication)
leam ing ahout the organizations you would most Like to work for (hy reading indus-
try and trade puhlicat.ions, corporate and CEO hlogs, RSS feeds, company wehsit.es,
and co rporate mission statements or hy following or liking compai1 ies of interest on
social media)
estahl L~h ing an online presence l.o huild your professional brand and attract t-inploy-
ers and opportunities
matching your skills and training to the most suitahle positions
A joh search can involve several different types of activities and technologies. To get results
from this process, follow these steps:
9 I CO MM U NI C AT IN G FO R EM PLOY MEN T
L Tap into the full potential of social media. A growing trend among job-seekers is
loold ng for employment opportunities and open positions through social media plat
fom1s such as Linkedln , Twitter, Facebook, Google+, Pinterest, Instagram, Tumhlr, and
biogs. Deciding which sites to use depends on where members of your industry gather
and engage online and which sit.es are most compatible with your onli ne identity and
personal brand. For example, Linkedln is popular with marketing professionals, while
lnstagram and Pinterest have a natural alib'llment with visual artists and graphic design
ers. 6 For more on using social media in your job search , see t.he next section.
2. Mast er electronic job-search techniques. Employers often post positions on job
bank websites (such as Monster and Workopolis) and on their own company web-
sites. Many job-bank websites allow you to post your resu me on li ne and browse
through thousands of ads by occupation or geograph ic area. You can also participate
in newsgroups to get ind ustry-specific job listings.
3. Read the career pages, classified ads, and financial sections of newspapers, trade
and professional journals, and business magazines. To monitor these publica-
tions for free, check out the periodical section of your local or school library. Join
WEBSITE DESCRIPTION
Canadi anCareers.com This site covers all facets of careers and employment,
including internships for Canadians under thirty.
Eluta.ca This site lists new job announcements posted on employers'
websites across Canada.
Monster.ca This site offers more than three thousand job listings and
a full range of interactive career tools, including advice on
resumes and cover letters, job hunt strategies, salaries and
benefits, and career development.
The Riley Guide Job Listings This site offers numerous links to international joblisting
(www.rileyguide.com/internat.html) sites, including many for Canada, as well as information
on resumes and cover letters, salary guides, and how to
prepare a search and execute a campaign.
Service Canada Job Bank This site allows you to search by occupation or to search all
(www.jobbank.gc.ca) jobs posted in the last 48 hours. You can create your resume
using the free resume-builder tool.
professional and trade assodat.i.ons that will send you reb'l1lar listings and announce-
ments of job open ings. Study trends in the lahour market by reading ar ticles on
expanding companies and business sectors. This research will help you to predict
where new johs will he created based on need.
4. learn to network. Networking i_5 an essential business tool that involves meeting new
contacts and cultivating relationships that could lead to personal and husiness success.
You can develop a good network of contacL5 in the industry hy becoming involved in
comm unity activities and hy attend ing networking events or professional cm1ferences
regularly or by becoming involved in mentorship programs offered hy your college or
university Doing so will increase your num her of potential cnntacL5 and give you the
opportunity to promote yourself and your accomplishments. Don't he afraid to ask your
personal and professional contacts-professors, instruct.ors, career service advisors,
co-workers, mentors, family friends, and alumni- for advice, especially people who
are knowledgeable ahout your field. Networking may not work for everyone, hut it can
produce unexpected opportunities for those who take the trouble to follow leads.
5. Use tl1e hidd en job market. Only a small percent.age of jobs are advertised .
cold call an unsolicited telephone Unad vertised j obs are part of a hidden joh market that can he accessed via cold
call In which aJob-seeker calls and netwo rki ng with personal contacts. To find out if a company might have
Introduces himself or herself and
asks about Job openings. an opening for someone with your qualifications or might he motivated to create
such a position, you can wri te an unsolicited letter of application, othe rwise known
as a job-prospecting letter, and send it to the company along with your resume. You
can also make cold-call inquiries to companies and
set up information interviews. Such meer.ings put
you in touch with individuals who are prepared to
talk \vith you, even for a few minutes, about skill
Read "The Hidden Job Market on requirements, job duties, and hiri ng prospects.
the Government of Canada's Services These ind ividuals may very well have the power to
for Youth web page for more on hire you. Have several s pecific questions in mind
networking: http://goo.gi/9KX61W when you call so you won't waste the prospective
employer's time or make a nuisance of yourself.
Another way to scout for unadvertised johs is to
sign up for inr.erviews when com pany recruiters
visi t your school. Joh recm itmen t fairs, including
online ones, may also yidd t he big hreak you have heen looking for. When attending
recruitment events, go with a stack of resumes in hand .
6. Visit career centres or employment agenci es. Take advantage of the Joh placement
employment agency an se rvices at your college, unliversity, or government employment agencies by regis-
organization that marches Job tering early. Check out joh not.ice hoards and ask about counselli ng services offered
candidates with Jobs, somNlmcs
for a fee. hy the centres.
7. Think ahead. look into the possihility of getting a summer internship or co-op joh
while you are still a student. Non-salaried employment can help you gain valuable
experience that gives you an edge once you brrad.uate. Plan to devote as much time as
you can to your job search and he persistent..
8. Polish your interpersonal and communication skills. Brush up on telephone man-
ners and. make sure your or.al and wri tten communkation skills are first-rate. Your
ability to communicate can make or hreak your rirst contact with a company.
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Using Linked In and Twitter to Establish an
Online Presence
LINKEDIN
lat1nched in 2002, linkedln was the first social media site to all ow users "to create,
manage and share their professional identities online." 7 Although the site limits the type
of content that can be posted to a profile to one photo and some video, not having a
Linkedln profile or leveraging iL~ networking, knowledge-sharing, and business oppor-
tt1nity capabilities can he a disadvantage. Using the site pt1ts you on the soda! media map
as a husLness professional and completes this dimension of your onlLne identity. lt helps
ht1sinesses find you and, a~ a persua~ive image management tool, helps others to see you
as a leader and desired employee." ln addition, membership in Linkedln groups can give
yot1 access to discussions wi.th industry professionals ouL~ide your immediate network,
cont.acts who may have news of job postings.
Create your Linkedln proflle by following these steps and examples:
Tegan Shaw
soo+ connections
3. Provide details of your experience and education . Your expe rience and education
should be presented in mt1ch the same way as they would he in a standard resume,
hut the infom1ation should he targeted to attract employers and make it easier for
them to And you. "Experience" can encompass both employment history and other
dimensions of your profile, such as languages you speak, volunteer work you have
done, causes you support, organizations you belong to, and certifications you have
earned. You can also add specific skills to your profile, keywords that will highlight
areas of expertise. Becai1se these skills can he endorsed hy your connect.ions, make
sure that the ones you choose are accurate." Continuing \vith our example, here is
what Tegan Shaws more detailed profile looks like:
CO MMU N I C ATI N G FO R RESU LTS
Experience
Education
W11st11rn Univusity
Bachelor of Arts, Media a111d Public Interest
2004-2007
Humber College
Graduate Certificate, Public Relations
2007-2008
Additional Information
employe rs can reach you. A note on what oppo rtunities would inte rest yo u can
help employers judge if you are a likely prospect.
5. Follow steps that will enable your profi le to rank higher in search res ults. For
any wehsite you list, customize the link's anchor text. Also customize the public
profile address that directly link~ to your foll llnkedln profile with your name. You
can then add it to ot.her documents used for professional purposes, such as husiness
card s, cover letters, resumes, and hrochures. You can even include this custom URL in
your e-mail signature.
6. Enrich your profile with visual content. As of sp ring 2011, Linkedln supports vis-
ual content that can aid yoiir professional storyt.ellin g. Add media links hy uploading
a recent PowerPoint presentation or a website or video that relates to your work
Ot.her members have the option to "Like" what you have posted.
7. Solicit endorsements and recommendations. These can be drawn from a pool of
those best positioned to judge your work accomplish ments: co-workers, supervisors,
and career mentors. 11
8. Update your pmfi.le to reflect fresh achievements and professional development.
Keep in mind t.hat current employers may interpret frequent updates as a sign that
you are looking fo r a new position.
TWITI ER
Twitter is gaining in populari ty as a job-search tool. The first step in realizing its potential
is to create a complete and specific account that highlights your professional proile. Th ink
of your Twitter account as an on line busi ness card 12 and descri be yourself in concrete
terms, providing your professional tit.le or area of expenise, company/industry, and a not.a-
ble achievement or career aim (e.g., Social Media Youth Brand Marketer at Sport Chek).
In adding the maximum two profile images that represent you r account, use professional
heaclshots- not canoons or selfies. Your profile photo wiU appear next to every tweet you
send and can help you create a good impression. Make your information specific and llnk
to your blog or website, if you have one. Unless your hobbies relate directly to you r career
or soft ski!Js, create separate profiles to showcase extensive extracurricular interests. To
make your Twitt.er account more unique and to alii:,rn it v..-ith your personal brand , you can
customize the background by creating a file and upload ing it under "Design." 1:1
Once you've set up your account, stan following people and institutions, including
trade and professional organizations that are most relevant to your career. Use the "Advanced
Search" and "Who to Follow" options to find people according to industry or location.
Eiqllore new topics introduced through hashtags. If you follow many Twitter accounts, use
lists to separate them lnt.o different categories, making those lists either public or private. 1
Gain attention that can bring you news and opportunities in return by posting content and
retweeting what you find most intriguing. Connect with mentors and others you admire by
using the @ symbol to send them a private message. Finally, if you restrict your tweets to
professionally related topics, you can link your account to your Linkedln profUe
Est.ahlishing an online presence and making your professional image or brand con-
sistent over multiple platforms- with the same look and. message- has some unexpected
benefits. For example, with software such asJohvite, companies can now also identify and
source joh candidates through their employees' social networks. 1'
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Conventi onal style: I designed and coordinated two marketing campaigns that resulted
in a 15 per cent increase in sales over one year.
As much as possible, these phrases should qi1antify details and incorporate keywords
that relate your qualifications to r.hose being sought. Here are a few more tips to help you
produce a perfect final copy.
Use capitals and/or boldface for headings. Avoid hard-to-read capitals and italics in
other parts of your resume.
Use consistent indenting. lf you use columns to arrange info1lTIJltion, make sure
they are regular. Be consistent in setting off details in each section.
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Leave space between sections. Thi nJ< of your resume as a work of art, not a crowded
house or crib sheet. Use wide margins to make information stand out.
Proofread to catch errors. Ensure that your resume is free of misspelllngs, typos,
errors in mechanics, and poor grammar, elements that might disqualify you from con
siderntion. AcrnraLy can make or break a resume. lf you routinely miss errors, ask a
knowledgeable friend to give your resume an objective reading.
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Publications
Advanced Career Training
Licences and Accreditations
Language Proficiency/Foreign Languages
Presentations
Professional Affiliations/Memberships
You have some flexihility in how you arrange this infom1at.ion. Without distorti ng
facL~, you can shape your resume to relate your education, work experience, and personal
accomplishments to the needs of prospective employers. You can also emphasize your
most impressive selling point- for instance , specialized training, an advanced degree, or
strong work experience- by customizing the standard resume templates supplied by your
word -processing software. Simply vary the standard order and put important material
just aft.er the objective statement, where it commands the most attention. Your most
noteworthy qualificat.ion should come first. Any weaknesses can he de-emphasized hy
their placement.
Contact Information
No heading is needed for t.he con tact information section. Type your full name at t.he top
or the page, making it st.and out hy centring it and setting it in hold face; you could also set
it in a slightly larger point size. Below it, type yom pem1am:nt addres..- (and/or your local
campus addres..-), phone numher(s), e-mail address, and, if applicahle, your web add ress.
Your contact information has to he correct; I.he difference of one dibrit in a telephone num-
ber can cost you an interview, mayhe more.
Address until May 14, 2014 Address after May 14, 2014
Pitman Hall 52 Hawkswell Drive
160 Mutual Street OriIlia, ON
Ryerson University LV3 2J1
Toronto, ON M5B 2M2 (705)733-1 211
(416) 979-5000
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Career Objective
An optional section, your career objective is a short, assertive summary (containing one
to three lines or text) that i.dent.ifies your main qualifications and anticipated career path.
It helps you target a spedfic job by enabling you to match your qualifications with kEy
requirements. lf you decide to make your career objective part of your resume, you should
revise it for each new application. It will not help you unless i.t is relevant. Use descrip
tive phrases and minimal punctual.ion . Depending on your strategy, you can highlight the
position you desire, a professional goal, the type of field you want to work in, your main
qualifications, or a combination of all four.
Summary of Quallflcatlons/Proflle
As an alternative to the career objective section, a summary of your qualifications is a
high-impact statement that provides an overall picture of you and your qualifications as
they relate to the job you are applying for. This section, consisting of one or two sentences,
is usefol if your experi ence has been varied or accumulated over a ntm1ber of years.
Education
The education section- always of interest to employers-supplies info rmation about your
schooling and academic training, providing proor of your ability to do the job effectively.
You should list all undergraduate and graduate degrees, diplomas, and cert.Lficates you
have earned or are about to eam. Begin with your most recent o r most relevant degree.
Using commas to separate elements, li..~t the following details:
Use the same style for every degree or diploma you list. Some job applicants also
choose to list courses they have taken that are relevant to a current application. lf you
decide t.o do this, you sboi1ld list courses hy short desc.1liptive title (not course code) and
organize them under a subheading such as "Courses Relat.ed to Major" or "Courses Related
to [position for which you are applying]." If you have an exceptionally high grade point
average (3.5 or better), you might want to mention it; otlierwise, wi.tlihold this infom1ation.
Work Experience
Information about work experience is key, especially for recent graduates new to the
job market. Employment history is given in reverse chronological order (heginning with
your present or most recent joh). Jn addition to listing full-time and part-time jobs, you
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should include ullpaid johs, internships, volullteer work, and self-employment if these
work experiences contributed to your set of relevant skills. Provide only minimal details
of high-school johs, hut do indicate significant o r relevant johs concurrent with your post-
secondary studies. For each position, list the following:
Use the present tense for the job you are in now; use the past tense for a job you
no longer hold. Because each description se rves as an advertisement for your skills, deal
in specifics rather than generaIi ties-quantifying accomplishments and activities-alld
incorporate dynamic verhs that help to portray you in a positive light and accent your
most impressive qualifications.
lf there are gaps in your work history or frequent job changes, consider using a fom1at
that de-emphasizes employment dates. For example, you could place these dates after the
joh title rather than t.abt1lating them or setting them in boldface. In functional resumes,
work can be organized according to the type of work or skill rather than by positions held .
Personal Information
A resume is not the place for personal infom1ation. By law, employers are not allowed to
ask for personal inform ation relating to country of origin or religious affiliation . Human
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righl~ legislation protecl~ job applican ts from discrimination. Your resume should not
include detail~ ahout your age, marital status, or health.
References
As a job candidate you can wait unt.il a recruiter shows interest hefo re you give the names
o r references, since such information is not vital to securing an interview. Simply stating
"References will be supplied on request" should he sufficient, and it saves space on your
resume. The alternative is to prepare a separate reference list (entitled "Reference Sheet for
[Your Name!"), which can then he suhmitted to employers at the time of your interview.
However, if you do include references on your resi.1me, give each pe rson's full name and
title, professional affiliation or company, address, phone number, and e-mail add ress. List
this information in parallel form and put e-mail addresses in angle bracket~. Always con-
tact references in advance and ask pennission to use their names. Doing so wi ll ensure that
they are prepared to discuss your qualifications.
RESUME LENGTH
The debate over resume length is never-ending. Many companies insist on one page;
others find a two-page resume perrectly acceptahle. The general rule is to keep it to one
page as Long as there is enough white space and room for fom1atting to ensure that the
resume is readable and well balanced. Resumes that look crowded are hard to read. Recent
graduates can easily stay within the one-page Limit if they eliminate fille r and con.~olidate
headings; applicants with extensive work history and advanced training may require a
second page to represent thei r qualifications adequately. Before you elect 1.0 use a longer
resume, you may want to check the job adverti..~ement ror application instructions and
details on resume preferences.
Chronological Resume
The chronological resume bas been popular with employers and recruiters for a long chronological res um~ a
time and is conside red the standard style. lt tells emplloyers what you have done pro- document In which aJob
appllcan~s work expllrlonco,
fessionalily and when you did it, organizing details in chronological order. lt presents education, and personal
infonnat.im1 under categories that recruiters have come to expect and can review quickly: achievements are presented In
"Objective," "Education," "Work Ex11erience," "Special Skills," "Honm1rs and Activities," reverse time sequence, with the
most recent exper1ence In each
and "References." The chronological style works well for applicants who have work
category listed Hrst.
experience in thei r field of employment and show sustained career growth and con tinu-
ity. Because it emphasizes the jobs you have held rat.her than the skills you possess, the
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 9 . 1
Chronologica l Resume
MITRA DAS
253 Elderwood Crescent
Brampton, ON NSL 2S9
(905) B62-5540
mdas@rogers.ca
Statement emphasizes
professional goal In relation - - - +. OBJECTIVE To assist a fashion retail chain In providing superior customer service
to the advertisement for the
while managing merchandise efficiently and maximizing store sales In
position being sought
an entry-level management position
chronological style is less suited to younger applicants with limited experience. For any-
one with a negative or irregular work history, its arrangement by employment. dates has
the disadvantage of making gaps in employment more obvious.
Functional Resume
This skills-based resume style emphasizes wo rk-related skill~ and competencies rather
than work history. It markets relevant attributes and acc.omplishments and demonstrates
capahi.Hties that will he of value to the company. It works well for applicants who are
ahout to redirect their careers or for anyone who has limited work experience but untold
ability. The functional resume is a good choice for accenting skills gained through vol- functional resume a document
unteer experience. Its customizahle categories allow for greater nexihility: "Objective," In which a Job applicant's
qualifications are presented In
"Summary of Qualifications/Profile," "[Type of Work] Expe rience," "[Type oO Skills/Areas terms of notable achievements
of Expert ise," and "References." Skills can be arranged according to several types, bringing and abll~lcs rather than
to light h idden strengths. However, some recruiters may view the omission of a joh history work experience.
as a weakness.
Combination Resume
Th is cross her.ween the chronological and functional resume draws together the best of
each style. It highlights capabilities at the same time as it provides a complete record
of employment. Th is style works well for recent grad uates who may or may not have
experience hut do have the skills to gain employment. I.ts headings are borrowed from
chronolObrical and functional styles: "Objective," "Skill~ and Capabilities/S pecial Skills,"
"Experieu ce," "Education," "Honours and Activities," and "Refe rences." 13ecause a combin- combination resume a
ation resume is less traditional, it is a more risky choice for anyone applying for jobs in document that combines
characterlsncs of chronological and
traditional fields such as accounting, law, or hanking. The fo rmatting should he strategic functional res umos.
and meth odical so that I.he comhination of styles is 11ot confusing to readers.
FIGURE 9 .2
OBJECTIVE
Position as assistant manager of front desk operations with opportunity for growth and
development
Communication Skllls
Demonstrated friendly and courteous telephone etiquette In answering guest Inquiries
regarding rates, special packages, and general Information
Performed test calls to competition and Global Reservation Centre
Polished speaking skllls by giving talks to class
Completed college communication courses with an A grade
Fluent In Japanese and Mandar,ln
Interpersonal Skills
Demonstrated ability to work Independently with mlnlmal supervision and to work
co-operatively In the Interest of better guest satisfaction
Assisted front desk manager In conducting teambulldlng activities
EDUCATION
Medicine Hat College, Medicine Hat, AB
Global Tourism and Marketing Diploma, 2012
Troy Ng Page2
RE LEVANT EXPERIENCE
Mentions experience last to de
Reservations Agent (part-time), Medicine Hat Lodge, Medicine Hat, AB ~
emphasize limited work history
January 2012 to March 2012
Front Desk Clerk, Red Liiy Lodge, Regina, SK
May 2011 to August 201 1
OTHER EXPERIENCE
Sales Clerk, Hollnger Hardware, Regina, SK
Summers, 20<>8 to 2010
9 I COMMUN I CAT I NG FOR EMP LOYMENT
FIGURE 9 .3
KELLY MARACLE
Combinat ion Resu me
21 Rockycrest Drive
North Bay, ON Pl A 2H7
Home: (705) 495-9035 Cell: (705) 490-1166
E-mail: kjmaracle@gmall.com
R ef!RHCH
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COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
General Tips
1. Tell the truth. A resume is a legal document and purports to be the truth. It L~
fraudulent to lie on a resume and unethical to tell half-truths. Companies routinely
do background checks and can easily detect applicants engaging in these practices,
which are grounds for disqualification or, if discovered after hiring, dismissal. Resist
the temptation to in flate your academic honours, embellish your job titles, exaggerate
your accomplishments, or alter employment dates.
2. Keep your resum e up to date. Make sure your resume is fresh and re flects recent
accomplishments and current responsibilities and activities. When your dream job L.~
advertised, you want to be ready to seize the opportunity, so schedule regula r resume
updates. Last-minute efforts at revision can result in sloppy formatting and typos.
3. Create different versions of your resume. Have one that can he scanned into a
resume database and one that you can e-mail to company contacts. Keep in mind
that companies and recruiters often have specific preferences regarding the way your
resume should be transmitted.
4. Fine-tune your resume for each new application. Revise your career objective state-
ment to link it t.o the job for which you are currently applying.
5. Avoid gimmicks. Your resume should invite further reading hy looking well pre-
pared and professional but not necessarily flashy. Print your resume on good quality,
standard 81/l hy 11- inch white paper. Pale-coloured paper is also acceptable, hut save
your supply of Day-Glo paper for craft projecl~. Use enough white space to make
your resume easy to read, arud resist the temptation to decorate with dip art..
AppHcanL~ \vith the highest percent.age of matches are identified as good candudates for
the job and stand the best chance of being interviewed.
9 I COMMUN I CAT I NG FOR EMP LOYMENT
FIGURE 9 .4
CAM ERON TUCKER
158 Gardenvlew Blvd. Scannable, Computer-
Gander, NL A1V 2G5 Friendly Resume
Phone: 709-231 9976
Ema II: cameroo.tucker@sympatlco.ca
KEYWORDS
Public Relations. Marketing Communications. Event Marketing. Media Advertising. Sales
Promotion. Advertising Research. Visual Communication. Telemarketing. Advertising Sales.
MS Office Suite. Excel. Quark. Photoshop. Communication Skills. Organizational Skills.
Persuasive Presentation Skills. Biiinguai. Ontario College Diploma. Georgian College.
OBJECTIVE
Motivated, fastlearnlng lndlvldual seeks advertising/marketing position utilizing communication
and organlzatlonal skills.
EDUCATION
Georgian College, Barrie, ON
On ta rlo College Diploma In Advertising, 2012
RELEVANT COURSEWORK
Advertising Computer Appllcatlons
Professional Writing
Marketing on the Web
Copywrltlng
Media Planning Computer Applications
CAMERON TUCKER
158 Gardenvlew Blvd.
Gander, NL AlV 2G5
Phone: 7092319976
Emall: cameron.tucker@sympatlco.ca
Page2
EXPERIENCE
The Gander Beacon
June 2012 to present
PartTime Advertising Sales Representative
Represent the The Gander Beacon to assigned and potential advertisers.
Handle Incoming advertiser calls.
Increase advertising r,evenue and expand client base by 15% annually through cold calls and
outbound sales.
Provide clients with creative advertising solutions and Implement sales strategies for existing
clients.
SKILLS
Computer: Macintosh Appllcatlons, Microsoft Office, Web Publishing.
Interpersonal: Communicative, persuasive, team-oriented, fluent In English and French.
Able to follow through In fast-paced, deadline-driven environment.
FURTHER INFORMATION
References, university transcripts, and a portfolio of computer programs are available upon request.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
A scan nahle resume must have a plain, crisp, uncluttered appearance to guarantee its
acceptance by electronic scanning systems that cannot hand le graphics and symbols. To
create a scannahle resume, adhere to these dos and don'ts:
DO
LL~t your name and address at the top of every page of your resume.
Use white space as your main formatting tool, leaving hlank lines around headings.
Use as many pages as necessary to list your skill~ and experience- in the absence of
other formatting tools, use p lenty of white space.
Inspect your resume for letters that overlap to reduce the chances your information
will be misread; i1se a font in which letters do not touch.
Send a crisp copy of your resume, preferably one printed on a laser printer.
DONT
Use horizontal or vertical !in.es.
Use hollow hullets.
Use italics, underlines, hoxes, colum ns, graphics, borders, or shading.
Use unusual fonts and type faces (instead use sans serif fonts such as Arial in ten- to
twelve-point size).
Print your resume on coloured or textured paper.
Fold, staple, or fax your resume.
Before you send your resume, it is a good idea to first find out if the recipient uses
scanning software. You may wish to prepare two versions of your resume- one traditional
and one computer-friendly- and ask if it is acceptable to send hoth.
Joshua Cheechoo
jcheechoo@sympatico.ca
CAREER PROFILE
EXPERIENCE
WEBULTIMA INC .
January 2013 to present
Surrey, BC
eMarketing Manager
MARKSON PHARMACEUTICALS
Jul y 2009 to December 20 12
Edmonton, AB
eBusinoss Deployment Special ist
EDUCATION
FIGURE 9 .5
6. Use formatting methods that make your resume more computer-friendly. You can
easily convert a resume fom1at.t.ed in MS Word tn plain text. Avoid fancy fonn;;itti ng (no
graphics, lines, italics, hullets, or special characters). When writing your resume, sim-
plify the editing work you wi LI have to do hy keeping your resume conversion-fiiendly:
DON'T
Use special characters (characters not on your keyboard).
Use a word -wrap feature (lines can end up wrapping at awkward spots).
Use ht1llets, italics, tmderlined text, graphics, slashes (e.g., "Supervisor/Admin istra-
tor") or page numhers (you have no way of knowing where page hreaks will fall).
Use non-proportional typefaces such as Times New Roman that have different widths
for different characters (instead use a fixed-\vidth typeface such as Courier that \viii
produce a true sixty-five-character line, as accepted by most e-mail probrram~).
Opening- gets attention and clearly identifies the position for which you are applying
Body- builds in terest with a summary of your qualifications, as much as possible
matching your strengths to the requi rements of the job
Closing- asks fo r an intervi.ew and provides a contact numher
2. Get the company name right. Because most companies seek employees who are
detail-oriented and efficient, small things (such as good typography and accurate
spelling) mean a lot to the success of a cover letter.
3. Use keywords from th e job ad or posting. Show that your skills are transferable and
relevant to the job you are applying for.
4. Use the same font that you used for your resume. This gives a unified look to your
application. Print on high-quality bond paper.
5. Avoid dense, overloaded paragraphs. Your letter should he designed for ease of
readability. Long paragraphs can bury your reason for writing, blur facts, and dimin
ish the strength of your qualifications. Shorter pmagraphs make your letter quick
to review.
6. Don't plead , apologi ze, or exaggerate. Desperation usiially weakens a mes
sage's persuasive impact, especially when employers are seeki ng positive and
self-c:onfldent personnel.
7. Avoid a cookie-cutter approach. A generic, multi-purpose letter is less likely to gain
interest, so wo rk from a bulleted list of your qualifications, achievements, and edu-
cational credentials to prepare a new cover letter targeted to each job opening. Make
your letter relevant to the job you are applying for, keeping in mind the requiremenL~
out!Lnecl by the employer in the job ad.
8. Strive for a tight, clear writing style. Use your letter to introduce yourself and iden-
tify your strongest selling points- no more than a page hut no less than half a page.
9. Keep a copy of your letter and a record of jobs you have applied for. Kee ping
track of your cover letters will help you remember where you've applied and what
skills you've highlighted.
1. Introductory paragraph: Gain attention. Name the specific job for which you are
applying and indicate where you learned about the job. Include job competition or
reference numbers to ensure your application ends up in the right hands. Clearly
st.ate t.hat you are applying for the job. There are several approaches that you can use
and combLne in order to do this and at the same time gain attention fo r your applica-
tion. Briefly show that you possess the major qualifications listed as requirements in
the posting.
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
FI GU RE 9 .6
Ineffective Solicited Letter This letter Is an application for a position that was advertised In yesterday's
of Application (extract) careers section.
Does not clearly Identify the
job being sought or refer to I have worked part-time for R.J. McCormack for a few months. I am looking for
the resume ., a full-time position, preferably as a senior legal assistant. I think you will agree
Description of work experlency that my quallflcatlons are a good match forthe requirements of the job. I
Is vague and does not specify have strong practical skills that will benefit your company. I wil l receive my
skil ls or educational crodentlals
diploma soon.
Writer centred approach
reinforces what the company Is
supposedtodofortheappllcant, I think this job was made for me. If you agree that I could be the right person
not what the applicant can do ---i---'~ for the job you advertised, I could find time to meet with you to discuss my
for the company quallflcatlons. To arrange an Interview, just leave a message for me on my voice
mall, but try not to call early In the day.
Request Opening
I wish to apply for the positi on of regional sales manager, as advertised in yesterday's
National Post (competition #4368). As the attached resume suggests, my experience
in fashion retail has prepared me for the challenging and dynamic work environment
offered by this position.
Name Opening
At the suggestion of Mr. Farouk Aziz of your Accounting Department, I submit my
qualifications for the position of human resources specialist posted on Workopolis.
2. Middle paragraphs: Show that you are qualified by relating your skills to what
the company requires. Usi ng action verbs (managed, desi!,'lled, organized, upgraded),
describe the skills, schooling, achievements, and experience that would m ake you
9 I COMMUN I CAT IN G FOR EMPLOYMENT
FIGURE 9 .7
Si ncerely,
Arvty Fuliovt
Amy Fulton
Enclosure
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
val uahle to the company. Rather than trying to mention everything you have done,
summ arize aspect. of your background that. will. help you get an interview. Emphasize
your strongest skills, especially the kinds that employers generally seek: the ahility to
communkate well, take responsihility, learn quickly, and work as part of a team. You
can use hullet style to highlight your qualifications and hring them to the forefront
quickly and easily. Give one or two examples that relate what you have done to the
ways you can henefit the company.
Three years as a sous-chef at Chez Tom taught me how to work under pressure and
maintain high standards of food presentation and menu selection on a limited budget.
Show what separates you from the other applicants-your course work, summer
jobs and internships, knowledge and experience gained from skills and leadership
huilding activities. Refer the reader to your resume; a good cover letter will make the
reader want t.o know more about you.
As you w ill notice from my resume, I hold a certificate in cosmetology from Pioneer
College.
3. Closing paragraph: Ask for action. A call for action takes the form of asking the
recruiter to call you to arrange an interview or tdling the empl oyer that you will take
the initiative to call. Your request should sound courteous, appreciative, and respect
ful. Make i.t easy for the reader t.o cont.act you by supplying a telephone number and,
if you are hard lo reach, suggesting the best time to call. Here are a few suggestions for
ending your letter:
I would like the opportunity to discuss my background and qualifications with you in a
personal interview. I look forward to hearing from you and to arranging a meeting in the
near future.
I hope that this brief summary of my qualifications and the additional information on
my resume indicate my interest in putting my skills to work for Goldcrest Investments.
At your convenience, please call me at (905) 881 9776 to arrange an interview so that we
may discuss the ways in which my experience can contribute to your company.
After you have examined the details on the attached resume, please call me to arrange
an interview at your convenience.
FIGURE 9 . 8
From your letter, it should be clear why you want to work for the company, what you
are prepared to do for it, and how your assets and qualifications can bring benefits. An
unsolic:ited letter of application attempts to create an opportunity where it might not yet
exist, putting you in line for future consideration or inspiring the creation of a position
customized to your talents.
Inclu de a specific and meaningful subject line. Instead of the generic "Resi1me,"
indicate that th is is your resume by making the subject line "Resume- [Your Name]."
Alternatively, identify the job you are applying for or highlight a key point of your
background. Use abbreviations so you can fit in a detail that \\Till motivate r.he read er
to open your e-mail.
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 9 .9
Takes Initiative for follow up - .,. At your convenience, I would like to have the opportunity to meet with you to discuss
how my track record and skills could be of value to your company. I will contact your
office next week to schedule an interview.
Sincerely,
Rob Milton
Enc.
9 I COMMU NI CAT IN G FOR EMPLOYMENT
Keep it short and succinct. It may he a challenge to showca.~e all your significant
qualifications in a one-paragraph or hrief mul tiple-paragraph message, hut st.ri ve to
include your top two or three. Clearly identify the posit.ion for whkh you are apply-
ing and make an at.tempt at comm unicating your value t.o the employer. Remember to
ask for an interview.
Limit yourself to the characters on a standard keyboard. A no-rTilL~ approach
to formatting- no bullets, boldface, lines, or it.alics--helps to eliminate potential
glitches. Send the message to yourself to see how well it transmits hefore you suhmit
your document to an employer.
1. Keep track of the companies to which you have applied. Conducting a job search
mea-11s you may be applying to many companies at once. Having to ask a prospective
employer what job you're interviewing for will make you seem disorganized.
2. Enslllre future contacts remain professional. Make sure your e-mail address and
voice-mail greeting are acceptahle hy professional standards. Maintaining an unusual
e-mail ad dress such as leggysupermodel@hotmail. com or greeting callers with an
outgoing voice-mail message such a~. "Hey, dudes, the beer's chillin'!" can he a career
limiting move. If necessary, open an e-mail account specifi cally for the purpose of
your job search (you can close it when your search i.s done). Using your work e-mail
address may alert your current employer to your desire for better prospects, not to
mention the fact that you are put.ting company resources to personal use.
3. Con.sider privacy and confid entiality. Be selective about where you post your
resume, sticking 1.0 sit.es that are password-protected and accessible only to legitimate
employers. To reduce the risk of identity theft, give only an initial and su rname and
limit Lnfom1ation t.o only those details an employer rightfully needs to know. Omit
your street address and phone number when posting your resume on the web.
4. En.sure your appli cation is delivered on time, in the appropriate way. Follow
instruct.ions and submit exactly what the ad vertisement asks for. Check for further
instructions on the company's employment opportunities web page if the posting
supplies the web address.
Job Interviews
job Interview a structured, A good cover letter, resume, and portfolio can open the door t.o a job interview, hut they
face to face conversation between cannot ensure your success in the meeting. Being granted an interview is a sibrn of interest
one or more recruiters and ajob
candidate, In which th<! latter's
and encouragement. lt is up to you to meet the employer or recruit.er face-to-face and talk
quallOcatlons for a posltlon about the skills, experience, and other qualifications that make you right for the j ob.
and pot<!ntlal pcrformanc<!
arc assessed.
BEFORE THE INTERVIEW
Give an example of a time when you had to solve a challenging problem. How did you
respond to that challenge? (prohlem-solving)
Describe a situation where you had many projects due at the same t ime. (time
management and stress management)
Give an example of a time when your organizational skills really paid off. (organizational
skills)
Give an example of a time when you had to persuade other people to take action.
(leade rship)
Tell me about a time when you were part of a team and one of its members wasn't pulling
his or her weight. (teamwork and collahorative skills)
AT THE INTERVIEW
1. Arrive on time or a little early. Consult digit.al maps on company sites or Google
Maps or use a GPS to learn the interview's location. Ileing late creates a had impression
and inconveniences the people who have the power to hire you.
2. Go alone. Although you may think you need moral support, leave family and friends
at home. Unless you require physical assistance, you might hecome distracted or
seem less confident if you hri ng someone else along.
3. Bring an extra copy of your resume and a reference list. The interviewer will have
your resume on hand at the meeting, but bring a copy for your own refe rence and your
portfolio. Avoid rattling or rumpling the documents. Be prepared to produce a writing
sample during the interview a.~ on-the-spot proof of your comm unication skills.
4. Mind your manners. Be co11tgenial and courteous to everyone you meet hefore, d ur-
ing, and after the interview. From the time you ente r the building until the time you
leave, your conduct may he under scruti ny, so focus on heing the best you can he.
5. Make a poised and confiden t first impression. Greet intervi.ewers with a fi rm but
not crushing handshake. Extend your hand, make eye contact, and introd uce yourself:
9 I COMMU NI CAT IN G FOR EMPLOYMENT
I'm pleased to meet you, Ms. Radho. I'm (your name]. Smile in a gen uine, unrorced way.
Be seated when a chair is offered t.o you, and make sure that any small talk makes
sens-e and avoids controversial subjects.
6. listen carefully to the interviewer's questions, and don't interrupt. You are not
just telling the interviewe r about yourself; you are taking part in a two-way dia-
logu.e-a j ob-specific conversation that requires you to use active listening skills. Let
the inte rviewer finish asking a question before you begi n.
7. Use correct English . Answer by expressing your thoughts as clearly as you can ,
using a pleasant tone and correct diction and grammar-and no slang or mumbling.
Maintain good hut not unnerving eye cont.act and speak in a well-modulated voice,
with as few uhms, ahems, yups, and ahs as possible. Try to project some life into your
voice and avoid sim ple yes/no or one-word answers that might suggest you have little
to say or have clammed up from nerves. The way you speak is evidence o r your ability
to communicate, deal with people, and build rapport.
8. Concentrate. Remember r.he interviewer's name and be attentive rather than
appearing as though you are bored by the proceedings. Your body language should
show interest.
9. Avoid being negative. Remember that you are trying to show that you are bright,
energetic, and capable. lt is best to avoid negative comments about yourself and
others, especially fom1er employers, supervisors, and colleagues. Interviewers might
assume from such remarks that you are a difficult employee with poor in terpersonal
skill s. Keep your responses positive and informative and you r mindset relaxed
and focused.
10. Make i11telligent use of your research. Without showi ng off about I.he homework
you have done, demonstrate I.hat you understand the busi ness and its challenges by
slipping relevant tidbits into the conversation. Make sure your comments flt the con-
text. Show that you are knowledgeable and interested in the company.
11. Don't obsess over salary or benefits. An interview is not the place for excessive and
uneq uivocal demands. Ask for information you require on these top ics, hut put your
emphasis on what you can do for the company, not what. you expect. it to do for yoi1.
12. Don't expect an immediate response. Avoid ending the interview by asking if you
got ~.he j ob. Most companies want to interview all candidates and review their resu-
mes before making a flnal decision. You can ask the interviewer when you might
expect a decision. Be sure to show courtesy by thanking the interviewer.
THANK-YOU LETTER
A thank-you leu.er shows good manners and is typically sent \vithin 24 hours of an inter-
view. lt expresses appreciation to the interviewer for his or her time and the courtesy that
was extended to you. By restating your interest in t.he position and your hon est enthusi-
asm for the company, a thank-you letter can help you st.and out from other applicants,
especially those who may not bother to write. Begin by referring to the interview date and
the exact posit.ion you interviewed for. You can personalize your message hy mentioning
anyth ing that led you t.o believe you would fit t.he posit.ion well- a job-related topic that
was of particular interest to you and I.he interviewer during your conversation or a skill or
qualification that. the interviewer was especially interested in. It is usually most appropri -
ate to send a thank-you message via e-mail; you could also choose to send a printed letter
via standard mail if you think your prospective employer would appreciate the formality.
Remember to send thank-you messages to anyone who has provided a reference for you.
JOB-OFFER ACKNOWLEDGEMENT
An acknowledgement should he sent immediately on receipt of an offer, especially if you
require ti.me to make your decision. Ilrie fly state the title of the job and salary, exp ress your
thanks for the offer, and reiterate your in terest in the company. Jndicat.e the dat.e hy which
you will make your decision.
JOB-ACCEPTANCE LETTER
It is a good idea to put your acceptance in writing. Restate t.he title of the position, salary,
and starting date, and clari fy details or special conditions. If the employer has sent you
forms to complete, indicate that they are enclosed. End hy expressing appreciation and
conJi nning your accept.ance of the offer.
JOB-REFUSAL LETTER
Politely decline the posi ti on, thanking the employer for the offer and the organiza-
tions interest in you. Being courteous keeps goodwill intact and ensures that future joh
opportunities-fo r you and fel low graduates of your school- will not be adversely affocted .
9 I CO MM U N I C AT I N G FO R EM PLOY MEN T
REFERENCE-REQUEST LETIER
Always ch oose your referees with care from among people who have had sufficient oppor-
tunity to evaluate your academic, professional, or volun teer work. Seek out i nd ividual~
who thin k well o f you and can speak knowledgeably abo ut your skills and capabilities. If
you sense someone's hesitation to act as your refe rence, m ove on and ask another person
who is more willing. Ile sure to ask fo r permission before you list anyone as a refe rence. Jn
your request, be sure to d o 1.h e following:
mention the job for which you are applyi ng, iL~ requirements, and the d eadllne for
applications
upd ate I.he reader on sii:,111ificant recent accomplishm ents
review good experiences the referee might rememher you by
include a copy of your resume
D Name and Address: Does your resume supply adequate contact information, incl uding
a dayti me telephone number and a campus and/or permanent address?
O Objective: Does your resume include an employment objective? Does the objective
match the position you are applying for?
O Education: Are details of your education arranged in pa rallel form?
O Experience: Does your work experience start with your present or most recent
employment? Do you use action verbs, specific details, and parallel form to descri be
your duties, activities, and achievements? Does your resume show how you contributed
to the workplace during previous employment? Is information about your work
experi ence arranged strategically to show you are a reliable employee with a steady
work history?
O Skill:s and Activities: Does the resume include a section that descri bes your skills? Does
it emphasize your mastery of software and computer applications?
0 Overall Content: Do its skill headings and statements help to present you as well
qualified ? Is the content shaped to target a specific job?
D Format: Does your document look well balanced and tidy? Is the spacing attractive? Is
the tabulated indentation consistent? Is the format consistent throughout? Does the
resume invite someone to read it? Does it fit on one or two pages?
D Accuracy: Is your resume free of typographical errors, faulty punctuation, misspelled
words, and incorrect capitalization? Has it been proofread by someone who gave you
constructive feedback? Will it be submitted to the employer according to instructions
posted in the advertisement or on the job site?
0 Persuasive ness: Is your product persuasive? Does it market your skills and qualifications
to HR personnel? Does it accentuate positives and de-emphasize or eliminate negatives?
Does it convince a prospective employer that you can make a strong contribution?
0 Edge Factor: Will your resume stand out against the competition? Do its design and
content give it an advantage?
COMMUNICATING FOR RESULTS
Cover Letter
Opening
0 Does the letter gain attention and dearly identify the position for which you are
applying?
O Is it free of diched, overworked expressions?
O Does it give a brief summary describing how your qualifications fit the job
requirements?
Body
0 Does the letter build interest by showing how your experience and preparation filll the
requirements of the job?
O Does it emphasize reader benefits and give a brief summation of your selling points?
D Does it provide examples of your accomplishments and quantify them?
O Do action verbs accurately describe your skills?
0 Does it refer the reader to your resume?
0 Does it vary sentence structure to reduce the dominance of n
Closing
0 Does it ask for an interview? Does it supply contact information that will make it easy for
the employer to reach you?
O Does it briefly recap your main qualifications and link them to contributions you could
make to the company?
0 Does it include a forward-looking remark or mention how you will follow up?
D Does it end courteously?
Overall
D Is the letter brief enough to retain the reader's attention (not less than two paragraphs
and not more than one substantial page)?
D Is it free of typographical errors as well as errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation?
D Is it addressed correctly to the appropriate person or department?
0 Is its layout neat and balanced?
O Is its tone pleasant, positive, and professional?
D Does the typography match that of the resume in order to unify the package?
9 I COMMUN I CAT I NG FOR EMP LOYMENT
1. lden,tify Keywords. From a newspaper caree rs page weaknesses and su ggest how it could he improved.
or on line joh hank , select an advertisement for a job Working in groups of three or four, collaborate on a
you are or will soon he qualified for. Photocopy the revision that will h elp Nadia Salerno obtain an inter-
ad or print it out. Make a list of its keywords and view based on the qualifications she lists.
place an asterisk (*) heside r.he skills you possess. S. Create a Chronological Resume. Using the data you
Are you c.1.men tly missing skills that would make you developed in activity 2, create a standard chrono-
more employahle? logical resume.
2. Prepare a Professional Data Record. Eval uate yom 6. Create a Scannable Resume. Take your c u rrent
qualifications hy compiling personal data relating to resume and use its information to prepare a scan-
youi: education , work experien ce, skills, activities, nable resume.
awards, and references. Use action-oriented words to 7. Create an E-mail Resume. Follow the ins tructions
descTihe you r skills and accomplishments. given in "Preparing an E- mail Resume" (page 286- 8)
3. Research Employment Prospects. Using lihrary resour- to p repare to transmit your resume b y e-mail or
ces or the Internet, compile a list of five companies online posting. Send messages co ntaini ng your
that might present promising prospects for ernploy- resume to yourself and your instructor.
men t. Record hasic con tact information and instruc- 8. Revise Application Letters. Working in groups of
tions on how r.o apply. Take note of infom1ation (ahou.t three or four, analyze the following application let-
corporate l'l.llture, size of the company, etc.) that might ters. How coul d their tone, profession alism , and
he U..'\ed in a prospecting letter or help you compile a overall expression he improved?
li..'it of questions to ask at an in fmmational interview. a) What op inion do you form from readi ng the
4. Revi se a Resum e. The resume on page 305 con- following extract from this applicant's letter?
tains numero us faults. Analyze its strengths and Collaborate on a revision that is less I-cent.red.
I respectfully submit my strong appllcatlon for the position of regional sales man-
ager. I have attached my resum~. I have a great deal of experience In the fashion
retail Industry. I believe this position Is taller-made to my conslderable skills and
talents. I am more than ready to meet the challenges of this position. I believe
I have earned the opportunity to work for a prestigious and well-respected
employer such as Bryant McKay.
It would be a shame If you were to miss out on the opportunity to hire me. I look
forward to Interviewing with you and to the posslblllty of earning $100,000 a year
with your company.
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
Please be advised that this Is an application for the job that was advertised
recently. Although I have just part-time experience, I feel I could be the Independ-
ent sales representative your looking for.
I will graduate soon. I am sure you will recanlze that my education qualifies me for
this job. My communication skills are real good and people say I get along with
them real well.
Please telephone me and let me know when I should come In for an Interview.
Will I need to fill out an application7
9. Write Cover Letters. Using details from your resume, or in groups of four, simulate the interview process.
write sol.k ited (ad-response) and imsolidted (pros On e person should play the role of the interviewer
pecting) letters of application based on the following and another should take the role of the applicant
instruct.ions. while the other two memhers of the group evalu
a) From the classified section of a daily newspaper ate the applicant~ perfom1ance. Repeat the process
or an Internet job site, select an advertisement for until everyone has had a chance to be the applicant.
a job rdated to your current traini ng and studies. Arterward, discuss the strengths and weaknesses or
Write an application letter hased on your qualifl each applicant's int.ervie\ving skills.
cations to date. 11. Compose a Thank-You Letter. After completing I.he
b) From the list or companies you prospected in interview role-playing workshop (activity 10), write
activity 3, select the one you are most interested a letter of appreciation to the interviewer. Exchange
in and write an unsolicited letter. letters and discuss what makes a thank-you letter
10. Practise Interview Role-Playing. Working in pairs most effective.
9 I COMMUN I CAT I NG FOR EMP LOYMENT
NADIA SALERNO
E-mail: soccerglrl@hotmall.com
EDUCATION
1. Objective Statements. From a job site or Lhe careers automobile accessories. I also developed new
pages of a newspaper, select three advertisements for accounts and maintained existing customers. I
johs that dosely match your qualffi caLions. For each headed a sales team that generated orders for sales
one, wrile a one to three-lin e objective stalement of $3 million annually. In this capacity, I monitored
targeted lo the position. and trained a sales staff of seven to augment a high
2. Action Verbs for Resumes. Rewrite the foll owing standard of service and increase profitability. I also
descriptions of significant work duties and accom- travel to off-road functions to promote products.
plishments in appropriate resume style. Ehmmate
3. Descriptive, Action-Oriented Language for Resumes.
personal pronouns, begin points with strong and
Improve the following job descriptions b y usmg
specific action verbs, make points concise, apply
more precise, action-oriented lanbTUage.
parallel structure , and quantify accomp lishments
a) Gave advice to sales staff on meeting monthly
where possible.
sales quotas.
a) Adm inistrative Assistan t Position:
b) Did all bookkeepi ng runct.ions, including internal
I was responsible for the reorganization of audits, once a mo nth.
procedures and implementation of cost- c) Talked with regular clients all the time to do tech
containment policies. I also monitored the nical support.
production of all printed materials and ordered d) Did a study of cost- benefit to bring about the
supplies and maintained on- and off-site updating of PC.s to make network mtegrauon for
inventories. I also did many mass mailings. two hundred users a lot better.
e) Got together a team to train staff in new safety
b) Sales Manager/Production Assistant Posiuon:
procedures.
I did a study of automobile accessory needs of 4. Letter of Application . Using information rrom Mitra
fifty car dealerships in Victoria. I was responsible Das's resume (Pigure 9.1, page 280) , write a cove r
for marketing and sales for a manufacturer of letter that answers the advertisement on page :107
9 I COMMUN I CAT I NG FOR EMP LOYMENT
Redferns Limited
Style. Sophistication. Elegance. It Is what you expect from Red ferns, one of
Canada's leading fashion and lifestyle retailers.
This position will assist the store manager by providing team direction to ensure
the execution and achievement of corporate initiatives, projected sales goals, and
exceptional customer-service levels.
Responslbllltles:
Achieve targeted department sales goals through selling the Redferns way.
Required skills:
Supervisory/management experience
Positive attitude
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1... ONLINE ACTIVITIES
1. Complete Online Career Tests. For various online people, using keywords such as the name of your
career tests, check out Job Star Cen tral. lts "What Do industry, geogrnphk location, or job title. Find at
I Want?" section features three tests, lncluding the least 10 to 12 people relevant to your career or stud-
"Keirsey Temperament Sorter." ies to follow or connect with. Share the insights you
http://johstar.org!tools/career/career.php gain with your class members.
2. Research Companies Online. What can you flnd out h ttps://twitter.corn/
about a company through its website? Visit the fol- www.linkedln.com
lowing corporate sites and prepare a brief fact sheet 4. Rate Your Resume. Try this quiz from Proven Resumes.
on each. What distinguishes t.be companies in tem1s com and find out if you r resume measures u p by
o f size, corporate culture, products, etc.? evaluati ng all its facets on a scale of 1 to 5.
Blackberry http://ca.blackberry.com/ www.prnven resumes.com/quiz.htrnl
Bombardier www.bnmbardier.com S. eResume Tutorial. Visit the followin g site, which
Sch neider Foods www.schneiders.ca aUows you to view a sample resume as you complete
Sobeys www.sobeys.cmn the tutorial. Gain practice in listing joh titles and
3. Build a Network of CarHr and Industry Professionals. responsibilities, choosing an appropriate resume for-
Set up a Twitter account and find pundits, commen- mat, and creati ng a keyword summary.
tators, organizations, and top business profession htt.p://eresumes.com/eresum es_practi ce.html
als 1.0 follow based on your existing knowledge of a 6. Government of Canada Training and Careers Online
specific industry. Click m1 the "Who to Follow" tah Resume Builder. Click on "Resume Builder" and cre-
to find out who the people you follow are followi ng. ate a user account to create resumes for your pe rsonal
Start building relationships by retweeting the best use or to apply on line for federal government jobs.
tweets or writing to the authors. Set up a linked ln www.jobbank.gc.ca
profile and use the "Advanced Search" option to find
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LEARNING OBJECTIVES
IN 2010, TD Bank Financial Group broke from the tradition of hard-copy annual reports-
multl-page documents normally malled to Investors or posted onllne In PDF format-to
launch an onllne version that lncliuded YouTube videos, social sharing tools, and links to the
bank's Facebook and Twitter accounts (see www.td.com/annual-report/ar201 O/lndex.jsp).1
As public communication, an annual report can educate and attract Investors, potential busi-
ness partners, and prospective employees.2 TD's onllne report leveraged various platforms to
break new ground and to make corporate reporting an opportunity for Interaction, engage-
ment, and a more personal and customizable experience for shareholders, one where the
CEO can be seen explaining the company's activities and putting a face and a voice to the
banking brand. Though quite different from the reports explored In this chapter, this pion-
eering effort could become common practice In business reporting.
CONTENT
Write with your aims, objectives, and main message in mind.
Weigh information according to what is going to he done with the report and what its
future use will be.
Include information the rt:ader needs for act.ion-taking and decision-making by
extracting pertinent facts from reams of raw data and analyzing/interpreting those
facts so that they make sense to readers and relate clearly to the problem you are
solvi ng, I.he question you art: answering, and the conclusions you are drawing. Never
manipulate your facts and find ings to arrive at a predetem1ined conclusion.
10 I IN FO RMAL REPORT S
Take readers' needs into account when selecting informal.ion and con.~ider the back-
ground infom1at.ion readers may or may not already have.
Help readers understand report information by organizing it in a logical way (e.g.,
chronologically, hy level o r importance, or hy relevant categories).
CLARITY
Apply principles of good English- write in simple, straightforward, tightly con-
structed sentences with correct brrammar, punctuation, and spelling.
Guide the reader thr01.1gh your discussion- use overviews t.o forecast what you will
discuss, use transitions to show how your discussion is continuing or changing, add
headings o r various levels to help readers find inrom1at.ion, and use topic sentences to
announce what each paragraph is about.
Use text citations selectively; give fomial credit
to the sources you use or quote.
Include vL~ual elements that are explanatory,
show the significance of yom facts, match
your ohjectives, and help the reader make an Read Harvard Business Review's 'Tips
informed decision; introduce and lahel each on Writing"for more on content, clarity,
vist.ial you use. and skimmability: http://goo.gl/sxXrru
Ensure facts are introduced in the right place
hy editing your draft and deleting extraneous
material.
Use consistent evaluation crite ria when you
weigh options and draw conclusions.
SKIMMABILITY
Select a readable font to reduce eye strain and lessen reading time.
Use informative headings and lists to group similar data together, sibrnpost significant
facts, emphasize the main ideas, and show where your analysis is leading.
Use white or neutral space effectively.
Reports should he reader-centred and user-rriendly. For this reason, although reports
usually follow standard formats, i.t is really the content and your readers' needs that shape
the structure. Your ability to write good reports, hy analyzing the writing situation and
applying hasic techniques, can wi n you favourahle notice and increase your chances of
promotion. This chapter discusses ways to give im pact and professional polish to your
informal reports.
INFORMAL FORMAL
formal report a business Formal reports, hy contras t, tackle more complex and difficult prohlems and typ
documcnl of ten or mompages kally require five or six pages to do so, sometimes as many as two hundred or more.
based on extensive research and
followlng a presc~bcd format or Because formal reports must reflect the significance o r their subject matter and the profes-
pattern that Includes elements sionalism of the organizations they represent, their style is more formal and traditional,
such asa tltle page, transmittal meaning that personal pronouns and contractions are not accept.ahle. Fom1al reports are
or cover letter, table of contents,
and abstract.
typically organized into six basic parts and have to conform to standards of convention
and layout so that extensive and detailed infom1at.ion (ohm corning from met.ic:uloi1s
research) can he managed effectively. They may have some extra supporting features, such
as a separate title page or a cover letter that hriefly explains the purpose and contents of
the report. Effective visual presen.tation- in the form of well-designed and well -integrated
computer-generated graphics, t.ahles, and illustrations-lends credibility and interest,
thereby playing a vital role in the way formal reports communicate information to readers.
Formal reports are discussed in more detail in Chapter 11.
PURPOSE
A report may have one of several purposes or functions. It can pass on the following:
Although there are as many kinds of reports as there are reasons for writing them, the
purposes just mentioned define the general kinds or informal reporting: informational and
analytical/recommendation. Informational reports answer questions and provide infor- lnformatloMI report a short
mation without analysis. Writers of informational reports gather and organize data relating report that collects data related to
a routine actlVlty without offering
to routine activities, providing readers with what they need most- the facts supported
analysisor recommending actton;
hy relevant hackground details. In formational reports may look into opt.ions, outline per- Its three parts aro Introduction,
fom1ance, or investigate equipment, hut they never go so far as to offer recommendations. nndlngs, and summary/conclusion.
Readers of thLs type of report are in a neutral or receptive frame of mind: they want. to
know certain facts without being persuaded o r anything.
Analytical or recommendation reports go a step further hy interpreting data and analytical report (or
offering 1:ecomrnendations that may aid in problem-solvi11g and decision-making. Because recommendation report)
a report that Interprets and
persuasion may be required in convincing readers t.hat the proposed recommendation or analyzes Information and
conclusion is appropriate, greater thought has t.o be given to how readers might respond offers recommendations based
and to how the pros and cons of each alternative should be weighed, presented, and dis- on nndlngs.
cussed. Writers of analytical reports also need to present evidence in support of findings
and estahlish criteria for any alternatives that are evaluated. A full explanation of informa-
t.ional and analytical reports, \vith examples, is provided later in this chapter.
FREQUENCY OF SUBMISSION
Reports <.11Lso differ in terms or how often they are suhmitted.
Periodic reports are filed at regular intervals according to a schedule (wee kly, periodic report an
hiweekly, monthly, quarterly. semi-mmually, or annually) and keep readers up to date Informational report that Is flied at
regular Intervals.
on activities or operations, for instance, the ongoing work on a project, the weekly
activity of sales staff, or I.he status of monthly sales. The information supplied is rairly
routine and may simply be filed as a matter of record .
One-time reports deal with specific issues and take stock of special projects and non- one-time report a report that
recurrent situations. Often in the fom1 of analytical or recommendation reports, they presents the results of a special or
long term project
are designed to aid management decisions.
COMMON CATEGORIES
later in the chapter, you will he introduced lo common kinds of informal husiness
reports, each designed to record the details of a particular situation, activity, or occur-
rence. In some cases, their characteristics may overlap just as their purposes do. The
best-known types of informational and analytical husiness reports are periodic reports,
situation reports (lnclutling trip, progress, and activity reports), incident reports, inves-
tigative reports, compliance reports, recommendation reports, justification reports, feas-
ihility reports, and summaries.
Memorandum report: This format is appropriate for circulating data withi n an organ-
memorandum report a short, ization. Memorandum reports generally have no more than I.en pages, use an infonnal .
Internal report presented In conversational style, and are typed like typical memos, with the following features:
memo format.
1- to l '/.t-inch (2..54- to 1.18-centimetre) side margins
t.he standard guidewords TO, FROM, DATE, and SU&JECT (usually the report's pri
mary recommendation)
single-spaced paragraphs separated hy two hlank lines
Descriptive headings can he added to arrange facts and mark each new section.
Prepared-form report: Time-saving preprinted forms with standardized headings
are useful for recording repetitive data or for describing routine activities within
an organization.
Le tter report: Letter rormat is often used for short, informal reports prepared by
letter report a short, external one organization and sent to another. A letter report, prepared on company station-
report presented In letter format. ery, contains all the elements usu ally found in a letter (date, inside address, return
address. salutation, complimentary dose). Descriptive headings can he used.
PowerPoint report: A recent trend among business executives and consultanL~ L~
the use of PowerPoi nt for d eliverahle and short written reportS, especially period ic
reports such as progress rep orts. Ilecause PowerPoint does not accommodate a high
level of informative detail, it is best to use Note pages in a pri nted slide deck in order
to provide adequate explanation of the text and graphics on each slide.
Formal report: Formal reports are usually prepared in manuscript format and p1inted
on plain paper. They have headings and subheadings.
Headings
The longer a report and the more detailed its infonnation, the more readers rely on headings heading ntle or subntle, usually
to scan, skim, and navigate the document. Like signpost<;, head ings guide readers through aword or short phrase, within
the body of a document that
the t.exl. O n their own , headings provide an outline or overview, a way of showing that the ldcn!lftes Its par ts and gives clues
structure you have chosen for your report is clear and cohesive. Headi ngs break up text to Its organtzatton.
into meaningful and manageahle segments, making information easier to find and c.Teati ng
breathing spaces where readers can pause to collect their thoughts and absorb what they have
read. Different head ing levels (distingulshed by size, colour, weight, underlining, and italics)
can show which parts of the report belong together and the relative importance of each part.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
Short reports usually feature headings of the appropriate level hefore every section and sub-
section. Each heading (con..<;isting of a word, phrase, or complete sentence) nrnst descrihe all
the material that appears beneath it. Here are seven tips for using headings effectively:
functional heading each of a 1. Use either functional or descriptive headings. Functional headings are basic,
series or generic hcacJlngs that, generic headings (Introducti"n, Finding.~. Summary) that can he used in almost any
when taken together, show a
report In outline. report hut are found most commonly in routine ones. Ilecause they are general, they
also provide useful lead-offs to sensitive information to which the reader might react
descriptive head (or ta Iking negatively. Descriptive or talking heads are high-info rmation headi ngs that reflect
head) a heading that describes the actual content of a repon, summarizing its key points, telling the reader what to
the actual content or a rcpo1t and
provides more Information about It.
expect, and making the report easy to skim (e.g., Voice Mail an Tnnappropriate Medium
for Confidential lnformatirm). Functional and descriptive headings can often he com-
bined (Rt:commendatirms: New Policy on Sec:ure Messaging).
2. Keep headings short and clear. Limit headings to eight words. Headings of more
than a line are too long to he in telligible al a glance. Clarity is everything in a report.
Keep in mind that a vague heading defeats the purpose of having a heading.
3. Use parallel construction. For the sake of consist.ency and readability, use balanced
phrases and grammat.lcal structures. Under a single main heading, subheads must
he parallel to each other but not necessarily parallel to subheads listed under other
main headings.
4. Ensure headings are clearly ranked. Capitalize and underline headings consistently
depending on what they introduce. Once you have chosen a style for each heading
level, stick with it all the way through the report. Show the rank and relative import-
ance of headings by formatti ng each level systematically. Here are a few suggestions
on how lo formal three different level~ or headings:
FIRST LEVEL
First-level headings can be typed in bold with all caps, centred. Text follows on a new line.
Sec;ond Level
Second-level headings can be typed in bold and run flush with the left margin. Only the first
letter of each word is capitalized (this is also known as title case). Text follows on a new line.
Third l11v11I. Third-level headings can be typed in bold and run flush with the left margin.
Only the first letter of the first word is capitalized. The heading is followed by a period and
text follows on the same line.
5. Put beadings where they belong. Don't use a subheading unless you plan to divide
the material that follows into at least two subsections. Unless a heading or suhheading
10 I IN FO RMAL REPORT S
will be followed by at lea~t two lines of text at the bottom of a page, type it at the top
of the next page.
6. Don't enclose headings in quotation marks. Quotation marks are unnecessary in
headi ngs. Ilold type and capitalization are enough to distinbruish a head from sur-
rounding text.
7. Don't use a heading as the antecedent for a pronoun. The line of text after the
heading or subheading should not begin with this, that, thrn: , or those alone because
the reader may not know what you are referring to; instead repeat the noun from the
heading and add it to the pronoun (Tliis e-mail error . .. ).
PLANNING
Your flrst job is to look at the situation, define the boundaries of the project, and think
about any restrictions you may face in t.e1llls of time, fi nances, and personnel. While routine
informational reports do not involve considerations of this kind, fonnal reports and reporL~
offering recommendations beneftt from the time you spend considering matters such as your
deadline and what your budget will allow you t.o do in relation to the projects scope. Ask
yourself if you will require any special services or additional personnel to carry out your
work. The more extensive a report is and the more people there are involved in its produc-
tion, the more necessary it is to create a work plan that includes a timeline. A work plan
sets out the scope of the project, outlines how work will he done, identifies the amount and
type(s) of research, and divides responsibilities according to each phase of the project. lt. also
sched ules completion dates for each stage of research, writing, and production.
survey results, paying close attention to the size of the sample group. Because any report
is only as good as the infom1ation that hacks it up, it is essential to evaluate data to decide
what portion of it is usahle in 1.em1s of supporting your documents specific purpose. From
reams of raw data, it is possihle to extract pertinent facts through a process of soning and
logical sequencing. Jn analytical reports, which go a step further, infom1ation gathe1ing
goes hand in band with analysis and tabulation- spotting trends and relationships among
the facts and numerical data you have gathered, identifying logical patterns, and heing
prepared to hack them up with i.llustrations. lf you are working from raw numerical data
comprising a range of values, statistical terms for several important concepts may be of use
to you as you attempt t.o describe and make sense of what you have assembled:
Mean is the term for the ariithmetic average calculated by dividing the total sum by
the tot.al numbe r of units (e.g., the mean of 2, 5, 5, 5, and 1.3 is 6).
Median is the term for the middle value of a series (e.g., I.he median of 2, 5, 5, 5, and
13 is 5).
Mode is the tem1 for the value that appears most freq uently (e.g., the mode of
2, 5, 5, 5, and 13 is 5).
Range descrihes the span between lowest and highest values.
No matter how compelling your data is, howeve r, it won't have an impact un less it is
first stored, tabulated, and managed effectively. Be sure to record infonnation taken From
documents carefully by developing good note-taking habits, scanning and photocopying
when you need to (keeping copyright issues in mind). Always keep track of where your
data comes from and establish a system for storing the infom1ation you collect. Individual
file cards for each it.em or secure computer files are good for this purpose. For each source,
record t.he bibliographic details you will need when compiling a l i..~t of resources. You need
to note these details:
the title of the work/document/web page/article and t.he tit.le of the perlodica l or book
from which it was taken
the author's name
the publisher/web address
the publication date/weh access date
Llumhering system found ill most word -processing programs, can he written in point rom1
alphanumeric outline an
or complete sentences. The template for your system may use an alphanumeric outline outlining system that combines
(hased on a comhination o r numhers and letters) or a decimal outline. Whatever system numbers and letters to differentiate
you use, the numher helollgs hefore the head ing, with the benefit of making the heading levelsof head lngs.
easier to reference. While short, infom1al reports may not require outlines, lengthy, fom1al decimal outline (or numeric
reports d o. Aside from an outline, you may also have to decide how to balance the text outline) an outlining system that
and visuals, if you happen to use the latter. usesa combination of numbers
and dcclrnal points to differentiate
levelsof headings.
A
1
a
alphanumeric outline
ii
b
2
B
OR
1.
1.1
1.11
l.12 decimal outline
1.2
1.21
2.
Unti.l the final ed ited version is submitted, it is hest to think of yoi1r report as a work-
in -progress. Committing your facts and ideas to the printed page should not be a one-shot
process and may in fact require up to three drafts as you move grad ually from a rough idea
of what you had in mind t.o something that resembles the shape of a finished report. From
there, revising and editing your document may requi re cuts, additions, reorderings, and
rewrites, changes that can he made more efficiently if you put yourself in the readers place
and ask, Is all this detail really necessary? Are it.ems logically linked? Could entire sections
he removed without harming the report? Be prepared to make changes to any section con-
taining so much detail that it might be difficult to read and interpret.
H you have been working collaboratively, make sure each member of the group has
read the report and is satisfied with the text of the final draft before you have it edited. lt
is possible to solicit editorial suggest.ions by using a progrnm such as Adobe Acrobat or MS
Word, where annotations and changes can he made Oll screen, attached to the document,
and sibrned.
Ideally, it is best to leave as much time as possible between completi ng the final draft
and starting to edit. A day or two is optimal, hut even an hour o r so will give you the
COMM U N I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
ohjectivity you need to read your document with a critical eye. Work from a printout so
you have a record of what you wrote hefore you started to make changes or use the "track
changes" option available in many word-processing programs. Once you are satisfied with
the final version, leave time to proofread the document more than once, preferably mak-
ing several passes over the document to read for content, spelling and grammar, tone,
clarity, and coherence. Cast your eye over the report to check ror formatting errors and
prohlem.s with consistency.
INTRODUCTORY STATEMENT
The introductory statement mmounces the report, indicating what it examines and pro-
viding any necessary background information. This section of the report is called the
Introduction the flr~t section Int.rnduction (or Background). Sometimes it simply states the purpose of the report, often
In the body of a report, which in just a sentence: This report examines the disposal of documents in our workplace. ln other
provides readcis with the
cases, it may link that purpose with report recommendations: This report on document di.I
Information lh<lY need In order to
understand and evaluate the report posaJ sugge.1ts ways to protect our intellectual property and client privilege. What.ever fom1 the
Itself; It must Include alther the purpose statement takes, it should specify the prohlem or technical quest.ion you will deal
report's purpose or a statement of
with and indicate the rhetmical purpose your report is aimed at achieving. An introduc-
the problem the report addresses.
tion may also preview key poin ts (in the sequence in which they will be presen ted) or
estahlish the limits of the report . A preview of key poinL~ and a description 0 methods
used to collect data can also be included in the introduction or under separate headings
inm1ediately following it.
FINDINGS
Findings the most subst<Jntlal Also commonly called Results or Facts, I.he Findings section is the most suhstantial part of
part of a report, In wh lch a report. lt offers details and relates results to circumstances. ln a suhsequent hut related
qualitative and numeric dat<J Is
presented and organllCd by time,
section called Discussion/Analysis, findings are explained and made meaningful through
convention, order of Importance, analysis. Overall these sections reit1force logical connectiollS hetween relevant facts and
or component. any conclusions or recommendations that are ultimately made.
Because the data presented in these sections may he extensive, they can he organfaed
under several subheadings (remember to use parallel fom1) devised to fit the subject and
situation. Use an appropriate method o r organization to guide the reader th rough your
discussion: (1) present facts chronologically (when commen ting on the progress of a pro-
ject or the steps in a procedure), alphahetically, or in order of their importance (heginning
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with t.he most important item wh en you want to save t.he reader time or ending with the
most im portan t it.em when you wan t the reader to rememher it); (2) draw comparisons,
considering options one hy one or developi ng point-hy-point comparisons; and (3) divide
or classify t.he topic, hreaking it clown into its component parts or applying consistent cri-
teria in order to evaluate it.
SUMMARY/CONCLUSIONS/RECOMMENDATIONS
Optional in in romiational reports (where it is called Summary), the concluding section Summary the closing or second
is crucial t.o analytical reports, where it is called Conclusions and Recommendations. last section of a report that briefly
restiltes Its main points.
The conclusions are the part of th e report in which readers are often most interested.
Though conclusions and recommendations are often found under the same heading and Conclusions and
nu mbered fo r easy reference, they differ substantially in both purpose and phrasing. Recommendations the
closing section of an analytical
Concl usions present objective analysis directly related to the report's problem and find-
or recommendation mport In
ings (e.g., Amongfonns of two-factor authentication, biometrics L~ the best method rif emuring which specinc actions am
secure on!ine transactions) , whereas recommendations make speci fic suggestions for actions proposed to solve a problem or
aid decision-making.
that will solve the problem (Explrm: the prmibility of tL~ing biometric fingerprint readers as the
prima1y means rif two-factor authentication). These suggestions are typically phrased as com-
mands, bebrinning with a strong act.ion verb.
It is appropriate to offer recommen dations only wl1en you have been asked to do
so, in wh ich case you may also ch oose to explain h ow th ose recommendations can he
implemented. In an analytical report, the recommendations section comes after the intro-
duction (in d irect-approach reports) or toward tlie end (in indirect-approach reports).
When ch ances are good that readers will be receptive to your recommendation , it can
he included in the title of the report-Recommendation to Limit Fax Transmi.~~ions of Client
lnformati<m- m1d then repeated in the hody of tlie report itself. ln cases where t.here is
more than one recommendation, the recommendations can he listed in order o r their
import.ar1ce (from most important t.o least important).
Desi~'lled for sim plidty, most infom1al reports do not include fron t and hack matter
such as covers, title pages, tables of conten ts, or lists of must.rations. Appendices, though
rare, can he used to incorporate cha rts, supporting data, diagrams, or other documents
needed to understand the recommendations.
Any graphic or visual is o nly as good as the data it represents and the thought that
goes into its plann ing and matching of design with ohjectives. The most effective visuals
meet several criteria:
Edward R. Tufte, autho r of The Visual Display of Quantitative lnformatirm and expert in
the presentation of inrormat.ional graphics, has summed up how graphs and charts may
hest be used: "Give the viewer the greatest number of ideas in the sho rtest space o r time
with the least ink in the smallest space."3
TABLES
table a chart that presents data, The most common type of visual, a tahle, is made up of rows and columns of cells that
usually numerical, In 21 compact can be filled with exact figures mid values. Concise and compact, tables consolidate a lot
and systematic arrangement of
rows and columns.
o r data in a small space while retaining detail. They are useful ror drawi ng attention to
specific numbers and drawing comparisons between them. It is easy to create tables using
your existi ng wo rd-processing software. Here are a few tips:
Design your table so it fits on one page. lf the table is too \vide to fit this way, turn it side-
ways so the top of the table is next to the hound edge of the report. (ln MS Word, you
can do this hy selecting "landscape" rather than "Portrait" from the "Page Setup" tab.)
Apply a heading that lncl udes the table number and an appropriate title/caption.
Number your tahles sequentially as they appear in your report and separately from
figures. Only when an explanation immediately precedes the table can the headlng
he omitted.
$20 162,000
$10 159,000
$50 53,000
$100 51,000
SS 18,000
Total Value $12.7 million
l abel all parts clearly and identify units in which figures are given. Numbers and
titles/captions go above the tahle. Any other information, such as a source line identi-
fying where the data originated from , goes helow.
For long tables wi th many rows, improve readability by shading alternate lines OT hy
increasing the height of the cells.
Use N/A ("not available"), a row of dots, OT a dash to acknowledge missi ng data.
MATRIXES
A matrix is a word table that contains qualitative info rmati on rather than numerical matrhca word table that
data. Matrixes are used in reports and proposals to list instructional materials and con- pmscntsquail tatlvc Information
In a rectangular fo1mat or
solidate compl ex infom1 ation in a page OT less. For exam ple, a matrix coi1ld be used arrrangement.
to describ e the investment objectives and risks of different types of funds offered by a
securities company.
Canadian Target
Equities Weighing Manager Investment Objectives Risk
Can star True 11% Canstar Investments The fund aims to achieve long-term capital Main risk:
North Fund Canada Limited growth. It invests primarily in Canadian equity risk
equity securities.
Additional risks:
ACA Canadian ACA Exmark The fund seeks to generate long-term capital credit risk
Premier Fund Investments Inc. growth by investing in a diversified portfolio interest rate risk
of Canadian equity securities. smal I company risk
derivative risk
St. Lawrence 6% St. Lawrence The fund pursues long-term capital growth equity risk
Enterprise Fund Financial Corporation while maintaining a commitment to capital liquidity risk
protection by investing in Canadian small- securities lending risk
capitalization equity securities. smaller companies risk
equity risk
FIGURE 10. 3
Matrix
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PIE CHARTS
pie chart a circular chart divided A pie chart measures an area, sh.owing different values as proport.ions or the whole. Each
Into ~ecnons, where each soctlon slice or wedge represents a percentage (usually identified with a horizontal lahel). The
represents a numerical proportion
of thewhole.
whole circle has to he equivalent to 100 per cent for the pie chart to make sense. Values in
a typical pie chart start at twelve o'clock and with the largest. percent.age (or the percentage
of greatest interest to your report). Wedges are t.hen sequenced clockwise in progressively
smaller slices. The pie slices (ideally, four to eight or them) are given visual separation by
distinct.ive colour, shading, texture, or cros.~hat.ching. Any slice can he set out from the
rest to emphasize the value of a particular segment. Pie charts are most useful for com
paring one segment to the whole, by demonstrating, for example, a product line revenue
breakdown, how a municipal tax dollar is spen t, or how one fund compares against all
others in an agi,,rressive-growth investment portfolio.
Stocks 45%
Cash 5%
5%
22%
33%
14%
17%
BAR CHARTS
The purpose of a bar chart is to show how items compare with one another, how they bar chart a visual consisting of
compare over time, or what the relationship is between o r among them. As the name sug parallol horizontal or vertlc.11barsof
varying lengths, each representing
gests, a bar chart presents data in a series of hars or columns, drawn either horizontally a specific Item for comparison.
(when labels are long) or vertically (when labels are short). The higher or longer the bar,
the greater the value it represents. Bars have different meanings depending on their colour
OT shading, which also helps to distinguish them rTOm the background.
10
0
- 0.30%
FIGURE 10. 7
Gasoline Price per Litre (US dollars)
Horizontal Bar Chart
United Kingdom 1.20
France 1.16
Netherlands 1.16
Denmark 1.12
Japan 1.11
Italy 1.09
Norway 1.09
Canada 0.55
4,000
3,000
2,000
Asset Allocatlon
Cash
Fixed Income
50%
Stocks
45%
FIGURE 10.9
30.0
20.0
10.0
losses and gains of a dividend fund (see Figure 10.6). The data in all vari.eti.es of bar charts
should he properly scaled to fill the entire chart and not just squeezed into one comer. All
bars should he the same width and dose enough togethell' to make comparison easy.
PICTURE GRAPHS
Looking a lot like bar graphs, picture graphs (or histograms) use pictori.al symbolo;-for picture graph avisual that uses
example, stick people, pine trees, or cars-to represent quanti.ties of particular items. These pictorial symbols to represent
particular Items.
symbols or images are arranged in bars that can then be labelled with the tot.al quantity.
Picture Graph
2011 900,000
800,000
550,000
~ = 100,000
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LINE GRAPHS
line graph a visual that uses lines line graphs show the relationship between two variables on a grid, plotted by connecting
on a g~d to show bends according the dots to fom1 a continuous li.11e. They are useful for showi ng tre11ds, fluctuations, or
to the relationship between two
va~ables or sets of numbers.
progressions over a period of time. Below are some points to follow when devising a line
graph or grouped line graph.
groul>@d line graph a line graph
that makes comparisons between Show the zero point of the graph where the two axes intersect. Insert a break in the
two or more Items. scale if it is inconvenient to begin al zero.
Quantities (litres, dollars, percentages) go on the vertical y axis; time goes on t.he hori-
zontal x axis.
Mark small dots at intersection points to draw attention to values.
If you want to, shade between the li nes lo emphasize the difference between them.
Handle the proportion of t.he horizontal and vertical scales carefully so that the pres-
entat.ion of data is free of distortion and all data is distrihuted equally over the graph.
As needed, include a key that explai ns lines and symhols.
If data comes from a secondary source, put a source line at the lower left comer of
the figure .
'04 'OS '06 '07 'OB '09 '00 '1 1 ' 12 '13
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400
300
200
100 100
0
2012 2013 2008 2009 2010 201 1 2012 2013
Distorted/Compressed Distortion Free
GANTT CHARTS
Named for its inventor, Henry uurence Ga11tt., a Gantt chart is used for plmming and Gantt chart a bar chart that Is
scheduling projects. Its most useful application is blocking out periods of time to show used to show a schedule.
what stage a project has reached or when staff will be on vacation.
Gantt Chart
November December
Research
Planning
Recruit ment
Training
FLOW CHARTS
A flow chart maps out a procedure, process, or sequence of movements diagrammatically flow chart a diagram that maps
using captioned symbols of different geometrical shapes (called ISO symbols) joined by out proccduras, processes, or
sequences of movement
lined arrows (for an explanation of these symbol~. see Figme 10.17). Each shape represents
a particu lar stage in the process. Flow charts, even ones that use simple labelled blocks as
in Figure 10.18, help to clarify procedures and make complex systems unde rstandable.
FIGURE 10.17
Human Fu nction requiring
ISO Flow Ch art Symbols
operation no input
Flow Chart
Claim
Review
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ORGANIZATIONAL CHARTS
organizational chart a diagram l ooking much like a family tree, an organizational chart maps nut the structure nf a
that shows how various levels
or sectors of an organization arc com pany, showing chains of command and channels of comm unication and m aking it
related 10 one another. clear who reports to whom, from front-line employees all the way up to senior manage rs.
FIGURE 10.1!1
Board of
Organizational Chart
Directors
President
V.P. V.P.
V.P. V.P. V.P.
Research and Information
Manufacturing Marketing Finance
Development Services
Projects Publications
Director Director
Don't bury important information by overloading a graphic with too much data.
De-clutter as much as possible by limiting the number of lines you use to what is
absolutely necessary.
Use a type of graphic that is appropriate to your message and objective.
Use a scale that minimizes distortion (e.g., when points are too spread out or too close
together). Equalize the distance between points so you don't overplay or underplay
changes. Figures 10.14 and 10.15, on page 329 show that compressed data emphasizes
change while spread out data de-emphasizes change.
Unless you are expected to give exact figures, round off decimals to the nearest whole
number (38 per cent or 38.2 per cent instead of 38.2431 per cent). Dollars in the mil lions
can be simplified visually by adding (S millions) or (in millions) to a table or graph heading.
Don't distort data by omitting relevant information.
Apply consistent style for titles, numbers, and sizing of graphs and charts. Tables of
equal importance should be of equal size.
Use a source line to acknowledge the source of the data if it is from another publication
and not data you collected yourself.
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Flow Chart
: :I :
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INFORMATIONAL REPORTS
As previously stated, informatiorol repo rts have a specific purpose-to collect data and
present it clearly and directly, without analysL~. conclusions, and the need for wri ters to
persuade their readers. These factual reports deliver routine information ahout different
kinds of activities:
ongoing activities (e.g., sales calb) that need to he monitored at regula1 weekly,
hiweekly, or monthly intervals
non-routine, case-by-case situations (such as business trips or major projects) that
must he accounted for and reported to management
The topics of informational reports are ones that readers are familiar with and can
understand \vithout much background information. Instead of a lengthy introd.uction , a
brief opening can provide the riglht degree of context. Because readers are usually receptive
or neutral in their reaction to infonnation ahout routine operations and activities, a direct,
straightforward approach that gives results immediately is common for reports of this
kind. A crL~p. busi ness-like style, pared-down paragraphs, bulleted lists, and graphic
highlighting techniques (such as headings and white space) help to ensu re that important
facts are easy to find and comprehend. Informational reports can be prepared in letter,
memo, and e-mail fom1at.s; for frequently recurring situations, standardized templates and
fill-in forms, and even PowerPoi nt, are sometimes used.
General categories of informational reports include progress reports, activity reports,
trip/conference reports, and investigative report.s. Periodic reports are informational
reports written at reb'l.tlar inte rvals to describe periodic, recurring activities and to record
data and out.comes (monthly sales figures, the volume of customer service calls, etc.).
Their purpose is to assist in tlie monitoring of operations and keep management infom1ed
on t.he status quo.
Situational reports are infom1ational reports written in response to two specific
types of non-recurring situations: (1) business tri ps or conferences (see "Trip/Conference
Reports," pp. 114- 9) and (2) the progress of a con tin uing project (see "Progress Reports,"
pp. 341, 34.5- 6; ''.Job Completion Reports," pp. 341- 2, 347- 8, and "Activity Reports,"
pp. 340- 3).
Incident report a sl"lort report Incident reports document problems, unusual evenL~. changes from routine, or
that documents problems and unexpected occurrences that affect a company's day-to-day operations. This type of report
unexpected occurrences that affect
a company's day-tod ay operations.
provides complete and accurate details of an incident, answering the questions Who?
What? Where? When? Ilow? and Why? It describes only what is kn own for certain hap
pened, without speculation or inferences about supposed rault, cause, or liability. Viewed
in the long tem1, incident reports spotlight areas of weakness in policy and procedure,
helping to clear up trouble spots and prevent them from recurring.
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Investigative reports evaluate prohlems or situations and present facts ha.~ed o n that
Investigative report a report
evaluation. They are usi.1ally written in response to a one-time request for infom1ation. written In response to a request
Depend ing on their scope and topic, investigative reports can either simply supply the for lnformatton about a specific
details that need to he collected or he more analytical and offer interpretation and recom problem or situation.
mendations. There are three hasic parts in an investigative report:
Introduction: states the purpose(s) of the report and defines its scope.
Body: contains facts and findi ngs arranged into several sections with descri ptive
headings. The topic can be divided into logical units according to import.ance, time,
consLituenL elemen ts, or criteria.
Summary: may or may not offer concli.1sions and recommendations.
Compliance reports disclose information to governing bodies and government agen-
cies in compliance with laws and regulations.
Recommendation reports present information hut go a step further in evalu- recommendation report an
ating options o r existing situations and in offering recommendations about them. analytical report that recommends
action, often In response to a
Recommendation reports are commissioned- wri ters are asked to investigate situations
speclHc problem.
or actions, express their professional opinions ahoul them, and recommend appropriate
actions o r inte rventions.
Justification reports also have a problem-solvi ng function , hut they are prepared on justification report an analytical
a volun tary basis, not in response to a commission o r request. They are called justifica- report that justifies the need for
a purchase, Investment, policy
tion reports because they justify a purchase, investment, policy change, o r hiring, stating change, or hiring.
what is needed and why Both recommend ation and justification reports can be organized
directly or ind irectly, depending on how receptive readers will he to the action or solution
the report endorses:
Direct pattern
Introduce the problem hrieOy.
Present the recommend ation, action, or solution.
Justify the recommendation hy highlighting advantages and henefits and explaining
it in more detail.
End with a summary that refers to the action to he taken.
Indirect pattern
lnt.roduce the problem and provide details tliat convince readers of its seriousness
hut do not reveal the recommendation.
Discuss other measures or alternatives under descriptive headi ngs, starting witli
the least likely and ending with your recommendation.
Show that t.he advantages of your solut.ion outwei.gh the disadvantages.
Summarize the action to be taken and ask for authorization.
Feasihility reports evaluate projects o r alternatives to determine iI they are practical feaslblllty report an analytical
and advisahle-in other words, to determine their wonhiness and chances fo r success. report that evaluates whether a
project or alternative Isadvisable
They are necessary a..> a fi rst step before any new project is launched. Typically, feasibility and practical.
reports project costs, staffing needs, scheduling, and potential prohlems and dL.,cuss hene-
fits associated with a project so that readers have all the information they need to decide
whether to accept it and proceed o r opt for an alternative. The process of writ.ing a feas
ihility repo rt generally hreaks down into the following steps:
Evaluate positive and negative aspects or the project, including potential problem~.
Calculate costs and discuss the t.ime frame.
Trip/Conference Reports
Many jobs require travel to client, supplier, or branch locations, con ferences and conven-
trip report (or conference tions, or train ing and professional development seminars. A trip report or conference
report) a short report that report is an internal document that is prepared as an e-mail or memo and addressed to an
summarizes the events of a
buslnoss 1:11p or conforcncc.
immediate supervisor. It provides a permanent record of what an employee learned and
accomplished on the I.rip. A trip report th us allows an entire organfaa1.ion to hrnefit from
informati.on one employee has gained about products, services, equipment, procedures,
laws, o r pe rsonnel and operations management. Trip and confe rence reports may he lim-
ited to this basic in formation or they may go a step further in recommending or suggesting
actions based on trip events or conJerrnce participation. In this way, they may answer
such question..~ as, Sh ould our company consider purchasing equipmen t featured at the
trade show? Should other employees attend this conference next year?
Being selective is one o f the keys to writing th is type of report effectively. W h ile the
experience o r work-related travel may he saturated with ideas and activities, its reporting
should he brief and focused on major events, with a maximum of five relevan t an d inter-
esting topics. Use these topics to organize your report instead o f a ch ronological pattern
that can tempt writers to record everything I.hat happened from beginning to end and
leave readers without a dear sense of what the business traveller or conference attendee
gained from his or her ex11eriences. A WTiting plan for trip and conference reports includes
the following elements:
Subject line- identifies the event, destination, and dates of the trip.
Introduction- gives the event/destination, specifies exact dates, ex11lains the purpose
of the trip, and previews main points.
Body-devotes a sect.ion to each main topic, event, or h igh light that will he summar-
ized. Headings may he used for each section.
Conclusion- expresses appredation and may make a recommendation based on the
in formation in t.he report.
Because business travel can he expensive, managers look for proo f that company travel
dollars have been wisely spent. For this reason, an expense report is orten attached to the
trip report.
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FIGURE 10.21
I was thrilled when you told me that I could attend a conference and even ~ -- 1 Focuses on Irrelevant details
happier when you told me that the company would cover my expenses. Even
though my flight to the conference was delayed for more than four hours and
the airline lost my luggage, I think the trip was worthwhile. Now that I've
returned, I have to tell you that I couldn't believe how much I learned In just
three days. In the paragraphs below I will tell you about this event.
of the conference with you. I think other members of our team would benefit
from knowing more about this worthwhile conference. I met some people and
this could be of value to our organization. The registration fee was very high, but
I would definitely recommend this conference to anyone who would like to know
more about this fascinating subject.
The con ference report in Figure 10.21 is incomplete. In place of specific information
about even ts and accomplish ments, i.t delivers non-essential details of Ii.tr.le inr.erest to
management. What did the attendee learn? How can the knowledge he gained benefit the
organization? What was the destination?
The trip report in Figures 10.22A and 10.22B was prepared by a junior design associ-
ate at K2 Desibrn . Her task in attend ing Professional Trad e Day at the Residential Desibrn
Show in Montreal was to id entify top trends and source new products that might comple-
ment the accessory and furniture collec tions already reatured in her company's retail
space. Pmfessional Trade Day also gave her t.he opportunity to au.end an accred ited design
seminar for which she can earn points toward her professional desibrn designation. The
report is presented in two formals, mem o and abbreviated e-mail. The fi rst report offers a
recomme ndation based on the WTiter's view of the event's value.
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FIGURE 10.22A
I was pleased to attend Professional Trade Day at the Resldentlal Design Show
Provides event location
and purpose (RDS), a premiere platform for contemporary Interior design. Held In Montreal on
March 23, this one-day event showcased the newest Canadian and International
furnishings, fixtures, and accessories and featured trade presentations by
renowned designers along with accredited ASID and llDA seminars. Trade Day
gave me the opportunity to discover and source new products, make useful
Previews major topics contacts, and further my education towards ASID accreditation. This report
summarizes details of my time spent at RDS Profess Iona I Trade Day.
FIGURE 10.22A
The Orange Mosaic Console and coll lamp have touches of wit that would make
them good additions to our Loft retail collection. Attached Is a complete price list
and source guide to over 100 new products, Including the console and lamp, that
may be of Interest to you and senior buyers.
Keynote Addresses
Accredited Seminars
offered me resources I can share with members of our team to help us source an
exciting range of products for our retai l space. The exposure RDS provides for new
design firms like ours might make It beneficial for our company to be an exhibitor
at next year's show.
Attachment
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Greeting
personalizes ,.. Hello Hiiary,
e-mail
Introduces
As you requested, here Is a summary of my activities at Professional Trade Day at the
report with Residential Design Show In Montreal.
summary
statement Trending watching. After arriving In the evening of March 23, I spent the morning
~ assessing and sourcing over 100 new products In the exhibition hall. I have attached a
Heading ,,.-1
style Is simpler source guide that contains full product Information and price lists. The furnishings, fixtures,
fore mall and accessories on di splay reflected three top trends:
1. Eco-chic. Organic shapes and materials from renewable resources Inspired products
such as a bamboo console from GreenFX Studio Works <www.greenfx.ca) and a stainless
steel coll lamp by Ecobrlght Luminaries (www.ecob.!J.ght.com).
Lists facts
of Interest Bold colour. The trends towards bright colour and a palette that emphasized reds
to maders and oranges were represented by the Red Giacometti Chair from Swish Designs
(www.swlsh.ca), the Orange Mosaic Console from Antic Design (www.antlcdeslgn.ca),
and a red stool by SITT Designs (www.sUtt.com).
3. Patterns and stripes. Textiles In bold, variegated stripes and patterns reminiscent of
Pucci print designs had a graphic appeal and were available at a variety of price points.
Products such as the Summer of Love Chair by Ergo Designs (www.ergo.ca) and a striped
stainless slipper sofa by Furniture Incubator (www.furnlturelncubator.ca) were typical of
this trend.
Learning from design Innovators. At the International Speakers Program In the afternoon,
keynotes Yves Aubert and Felicia Urbano stressed the need for simplicity In good design
and the Importance of Industrial process In guiding design decisions. The residentia l design
roundtable that followed offered good networking opportunities.
FI GU RE 10.22 8
Sharing Professional Trade Day resources. With Its balance of design theory and practical
product information, RDS Profession al Trade Day gave me the opportunity to discover
and source new products, make useful contacts, and further my education towards ASID
accreditation. Moreover, Professional Trade Day provided me with valuable Industry resources
I can share with members of our team to develop new designs and help us source an exciting
range of products for our retail space.
FI GU RE 1 0.22 8
(continued)
Activity Reports
An activity report doL'1.1ments the ongoing activities or projects of a divL~ion o r depart-
ment. Because activity reports are written at regular weekly or monthly intervals, they are
sometimes also called period ic or status reports. These routlne, rentrring repo rts, t)']lically
prepared hy supervisors, help midd le and seni or managers stay informed of activities and
alert to u nusual events that might negatively affect operations and therefore require swift
solutions o r changes ln stratq,,y. Activity reporL~ can contaln a range of lnformat.i.on, from
numerical data on sales volume or prod uct sh ipments to more detailed disL'1.1ssion of key
activi ties. The story an activi ty report tells is developed through the following th ree cat-
egories o r sect.ions:
a brief yet complete summary, listing highlights of activities and projects carried out
during the reporting period
an upd ate on current prohlems and irregularities, includi ng competition news of
interest to managers of for-profit businesses
an overview of needs and forecast of plans ror the next period
he honest and forth right in d escribing the st.ate of reb'lllar activi ties, in noting p rohle1m
that might affect operations, and in tracking the competi tion. Th is type o f report repn:
sen ts a chance to ch eck in with m anagers and info rm I.hem o f p roblems that require their
at.lent.ion and, perhaps, co rrective measures so that the project can con tinue.
The report in Fi gure 10.23 is from a n on-p rofit environ men t.al ed ucatio n o rgan
ization. Among its mandates is a campaign to p romote sustainability in the travel and
touris m ind ustry. This monthly activity report from t.he Sustainable Tourism Campaign
coordinator h ighlights th e status of p rojects and documen ts a problem that requires
quick resolution to ellSure the s uccess of fu tu re commitmen ts. Because this is a non-
profit organi zation, th e writ.er p rovi des an update o n fun di ng initiatives instead o f
sales co mpetition.
FIGURE 10.23
Activity Report
ENVIROWATCH
Working for a Greener Future
Activity Summary
FIGURE 10.23
Funding News
In the latest funding round, Green Now received a $50,000 grant from the
Simcoe Foundation to raise public awareness of the fight against climate change.
Although this Is good news for the local conservation movement, the awarding
of this grant may minimize the Impact of our own grant proposal to develop
a training package on sustainable tourism. We may wish to re-eva luate our
proposal or target other funding opportunities.
Problems
Eco Print, which produces our campaign literature on acid-free, recycled ""' Describes lrregular1tles that
rnqulre the attention of
paper, will cease operation effective June 30. The closure means that the
management
scheduled September release of our Gulde to Marine Impacts may be delayed
unless we flnd a cost-effective printer with a similar commitment to
environmentally friendly practices.
Needs
Information on eco-frlendly printing businesses In the Ottawa. <11 Highlights special needs
French-language translation of Marketing Sustainable Tourism Products
workshop literature.
ldentlflcatlon of alternative foundation donors and funding sources.
COMMUN I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
Progress Reports
Progress reports monitor headway on a proj ect at various intervals from start-up to
com pletion and summarize what has been done, what is currently underway, and what
remai ns lo be clone. These reportt.s indicate if a project is on sched ule and if any m easures
need to be taken to correct prohlems o r remove obstacles. Progress and activity reports
help managers adjust sched ules, all ocate personnel and equipment, and revise budgets.
They are typically arranged in the follO\vi ng pall.em:
1. Opening summary (no heading)-comments on the status of t.he project in. 1.em1s of
the original sched ule and goals and the probrress that has been made to date.
FIGURE 10.24
2. "Work Completed" sectinn- clescrihes what ha~ hem done since the last report and
notes any problems and solutions.
3. "Work in Progress" section (optional)- lists work currently heing done.
4. "Work to he Completed" section- describes the work that remains and notes any
fo reseeable problems and likely solutions. A wo rk schedule can be included in th L~
sect.ion or under a separate heading.
5. Clos ing/Forecast (no heading)- loo ks ahead to the progress that will he made
between this and the next report and either expresses confidence that the project will
he finished on time or discusses an extension of the project deadline.
FIGURE 10.24
Other dates to be confirmed In the next week Include a reading at Harbour Books In
St. John's, tentatively scheduled for May 2, and a reading at Memorial University on
May 3.1 have forwarded advance copies of North Road to all editors and reviewers
on our contact list to expedite the reviewing process In advance of the tour.
work to be Completed"
describes work that remains
Work to be Completed: Airline and hotel bookings will be arranged pending
and mentions deadlines for
fina lization of the tour Itinerary and schedule. I wlll prepare a press release and, anticipated completion
upon your approval, have it distributed to all media contacts by February 14. I wlll
also prepare ad copy, featuring advance praise for North Road and reading-tour
dates, to appear in the April Issue of Books In Canada and In The Globe and Mall's
Saturday books section In mid-April.
Anticipated Problems' looks
ahead to conditions and
Anticipated Problems: If Ms. Seward's second novel, Boneshop of the Heart, circumstances that may
Is among the five IBISS Prize finalists to be announced next week, the Halifax alter the proposed plan
reading on April 30 will have to be postponed until May 1Oto allow her to travel
to England to attend the awards dinner In London on April 29. 1have discussed
this eventuality with Alex Betts, manager of Literati Books, and he Is agreeable to
this scheduling change should It prove necessary.
Closes with confirmation of
By February 3, you'll receive my final report confirming all details, dates, and ~ - delivery time of next report
events for the tour.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
1. Opening- provides a concise overview, naming the project and its client, confim1ing
the completion o r t.he project, hrieny iden tirying major tasks or activities, and noting
outcomes, successes, next steps, o r special circumstances.
2. Backgrnund- descrihes the job's purpose, what necessitated the project, who author-
ized o r supervL~ed it, what the original contract called for, who was involved, how
much the project was budgeted at (optional), and who carried out the work. This
sect.ion also identifies the start and completion dates (or schedule) outlined in the
contract or original work plan.
3. Project milestones- identifies all major accomplish ments (work done, targets
reached, and results achieved).
5. Action- restates the outcome and asks the reader to review the project, respond ,
sign-off, or rollow-up.
10 I INFORMAL REPORTS
FI GU RE 10 . 25
Background
The City ofToronto's Green Roof bylaw applies to all new residential
developments with a GFA of 5,000 square metres or greater. In compliance with
this bylaw and Its commitment to sustainable design, Arden Lofts Property
Development Ltd. commissioned my company, Sky Garden Design Landscape
Architects, to design and Install a 500-square-metre extenslve"green roof" at
the Arden Lofts property at 105-107 Grenville Street.
The decision to install an extensive green roof was made to maximize the
planting area without having to adjust the structural loading capacity of the
building. The plan called for the creation of three accessible pathways, a deck, a
dog-run, and two green roof plots, surrounded by approximately 1,000 square
metres of decorative hard-surface concrete pavers. Project partner Fortex Roofing
accommodated the extra weight of the green roof and rooftop recreational
facll ltles by reinforcing the entire roof with steel girders. We then proceeded
to Incorporate a drip drainage/filtering system, quality waterproofing,
root-repellency, engineered growing media, and plants.
53 Borden Street, Toronto, Ontario M74 2M9 Tel. 416 244-1480 Fax 416 244-2311
www.skygardendesign.com
continued
COMMUN I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 10. 25
Project Hlghllghts
Action
The green roof at Arden Lofts, having now passed all Inspections, supports
vegetation that helps to manage storm water, improve air quality, Increase energy
efficiency, enhance biodiversity, and provide outdoor recreational space In a
high-density urban area with limited parkland. At present, no monitoring of the
green roof has been proposed. The condominium association has the option to
create a budget for the replanting and maintenance of the green roof that will
ensure tenants enjoy this urban oasis for many years to come.
Sincerely,
Tom Battleford
Chief Landscape Engineer & Owner
53 Bordon Stroot,Toronto, Ontario M74 2M9 Tol.416 244-1480 Fax 416 244-2311
www.skygardcndcsign.com
10 I IN FO RMAL REPORT S
Incident Reports
Even the most caring and efficient wo rkplaces with the highest safety standards are not
always ahle to prevent the losses and harm that result From events such as on-site acci-
dents, equipment failure, threats to personal safety, and health emergencies. When trouble
occurs, and as soon as i.t is possible to assess the situati011 after it has stabil ized, the event
needs to be clearly and thoroughly documented. Fair and accountahle business practices,
not to mention occupational health and safety standards, demand it. An ind.dent or acci
dent report helps an organization assess the problem, correct it, and make the changes
necessary to prevent the problem from happening again.
Incident and accident reporting serves a vital purpose in effective risk management
in the workplace. It does so by capturing accidents and incidents, with the potential
to hecome claims, as they happen. Acco rding to the Insurance Iloard of Canada, inci-
dent reports "serve as the hasis ror analyzing the causes o r incidents and acciden t.~ and
for recommend ing risk improvements to help prevent si milar events in the future."
Workers' compensation claims, insurance claims, and lawsuits may hang in the bal-
ance, so it is important that reports of this kind be filed promptly, accurately, and with
due diligence.
Most of the problems that incident and acci-
dent reports document are internal matters, so this
type of report usually foll ows simple memo for-
mat. There is rarely the need ror a document as
long or as detailed as a fom1al report. More typ Many organizations, including
ically, forms or templates are used for this purpose universities, use a standard form for
so the repo rL~ can be filed quickly, with all the incident reporting. For example, see
required information. the University of Winnipeg Safety Office's"Reporting/
Recording Process for Incidents and click on the link to
Incident reports are narratives, muc h like
view its report template: http://goo.gi/U3EwSU
news sto ries, that present facts objectively and,
at the same time, avoid assigning blame. There is
usually a very short time frame for the comple-
tion and submission of an incident report (usually
between 24 and 72 hours). Any delay in reporting
the event must be disclosed and explained. At min-
imum, incident reports should contain the following infomiation:
Answering all applicable quest.ions and using a direct writing plan, careful language,
and factual details will result in a complete and thorough report. When preparing an inci-
dent report, include the following sections:
Subject line: identifies the precise prohlem o r event and t.he elate it occurred.
Opening: provides a brief summary statement noting the incident/accident, the date
it took place, who it priniarily affected, an d what the result was.
COMMUN I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 10. 26
Sample Incident/Accident
Report
National Precast Concrete
Inter-office Memo
Accident Summary
Accident Detalls
On the day of the Incident, It was windy, with Intermittent freezing rain. Mr.
D'Alessandro had taken shelter Inside the trailer as he waited for the arrival of a
contract worker he was assigned to train that day. Mr. D'Alessandro, who suffers
from a disability on the left side of his body, had just descended a set of wooden
stairs leading out of the trailer when he stepped Into the path of the skid-steer
loader as It was backing up at a speed of approximately 15 km/hr.
The contract worker, Jeremy Grant, who was just arriving at the site, shouted at
Mr. D'Alessandro and waved his arms to warn him that the skid-steer loader was
backing up. Mr. D'Alessandro, who was wearing a hood and a heavy woolen hat
and who had turned his head back towards the trailer to avoid a heavy gust of
wind, later told co-workers Jack Yip and Victor Plavzlk that he thought Mr. Grant
was greeting him. A few seconds before Impact, the sound of the skid-steer
loader's motor alerted Mr. D'Alessandro to the approaching danger, but his limited
mobility prevented him from moving out of the way completely. He was struck on
the left side and knocked to the ground. When his head struck the gravel
FIGURE 10. 26
pathway, Mr. D'Alessandro suffered facial lacerations, later requiring 20 stitches, (continued)
and lost consciousness for several minutes. The skid-steer operator, Mr. Adams,
Immediately dialed 911 and Pete Wurlitzer, a foreman equipped with a first-aid
kit and defibrillator, checked Mr. D'Alessandro's pulse and respiration. Emergency
medical services arrived at 9:20 a.m., within minutes of the phone call, and
Mr. D'Alessandro was taken to the hospital where he was kept for observation
overnight after complaining of headache and dizziness. He was diagnosed
by consulting physician Dr. Alexandra Cho at Oshawa General Hospital as
havl ng suffered a mild concussion; he was advised not to return to work for
three days.
Of the 1Oemployees and contract workers on site at the time of the accident,
Mr. Grant, Mr. Yip, and Mr. Plavzlk, whose contact Information can be found In the
company registry, were standing on the gravel pathway within 10 metres of the
accident when It occurred and had unobstructed views of the coll Isl on. The
Information contained In this report Is based on on-site Interviews conducted
with the three witnesses in the hours following the accident.
The workslte trailer sustained minor damage to Its aluminum siding when the
skid-steer loader went out of control after hitting Mr. D'Alessandro. Damage Is
estimated at under S100. On brief Inspection, the skid-steer loader did not
appear to be damaged, but It will be taken out of service until a full mechanical
eval1uatlon can be conducted. The Initial Inspection o:fthe vehicle revealed that
Its backup alarm and electronic sensor were not functioning.
The accident and Its aftermath, during which time photographs were taken of the
accident site, accounted for a work stoppage of one hour and ten minutes. During
that time, all work at the site ceased and did not resume untll 10:20 a.m., after
police who were called to the scene and EMS personnel had left.
Rcommndatlons
Problem-Investigation Reports
Problem-investigatioll repo rts are written for two reasons: (1) to provide inromiation or
research that does not result in action or recommendation, as follow-up to a request, and
(2) to document how a problem has been resolved. Investigation reports must clearly
describe an issue that is up ror .s tudy, whether that involves repairs, reorganization, the
purchase and installation of new equipment to add ress old inefficiencies, the launching
o r a new project or initiative, or the allocation of people, space, or resources. The rollow-
ing plan outlines the organization of this type of direct-approach informational report.
Descriptive headings (applied to each section except the opening summary) are most
effective in helping to preview the organizatioll o r this type of report:
Summary of Main Poin ts: defines the problem, notes its cause(s) and resolution, and
notes any further steps that should be taken.
Background or History: establishes the reports purpose and sets out the circ."l.1m-
stances in which the problem was discovered and the causes of the prob lem the
report investigates.
Approach and Findings: describes the methods and approach taken and cri-
te tia applied in resolving the problem. lt al~o reviews findings and disc1.1sses their
significance.
Conclusion: notes what has been or should be done and by whom. lt also bri eFly
outlines any disadvantages of the proposed solution and states how the co rrected
problem makes for a better o utcome.
Appendix or Attachment (optional): supplies supporting data and evidence that
cannot be easily included in the preceding sections.
10 I INFORMA L REPORTS
Unitas Shoes
To: Jill Brody, President
From: Gustavo Suarez, IT Manager
Subje ct: Eliminating Loss Resulting from Data Mobility
Date: February 10, 2014
The purpose of this report Is to explore the problem of data mobility and the risk It poses to our
intellectual property (IP), proprietary personal Information and customer data, and ultimately to
revenue and profits at Unltas Shoes.
Background
As the maker of exclusive, high-end footware and luxury leathergoods, Unltas enjoys a unique
position In the Canadian marketplace In competing with foreign brands such as Christian
Louboutln and Jimmy Cho and In having secured a niche market of discriminating buyers
throughout the country and more recently In select centres such as New York and London. Our
unique designs are showcased at Toronto Fashion Week, Montreal Fashion Week, and other
headline events In the fash ion Industry. Our beachhead Into Canadian and foreign markets has
been enhanced through extensive exposure In publications such as Elle Canada and Fashion and
a print-ad campaign In Vogue. All of these factors contribute to Unltas' remarkable 20 per cent
growth In sales In 2013 however, that growth cannot be sustained If the distinctness of our brand
Is not protected.
Instances of corporate theft are on the rise In all Industries, and the fashion Industry Is no
exception. Users find It relatively easy to take data away on a USB drive, by burning a DVD, or
even by using e-mail for this purpose. The reality of present-day data mobility In an Internet- and
network-connected world Is that any data that resides on Internal storage devices Is at risk.
At Unltas, there has been one confirmed breach to date. The centerpiece of our Fall 2013
collection, John Ruddlngton's design for an aubergine suede stiletto, was leaked via e-mail by
an Intern who had secured permanent employment with one of our competitors. The design
was then copied and mass produced using quick-to-market manufacturing techniques and
Inferior materials and fabrication. The security breach was discovered by the lntern's supervisor
two days after the Incident, but It was too late to reverse the damage that had been done. The
shoe was featured In the window display of every Rock Bottom Shoes outlet weeks before our
design made It to market. Although the discrepancy In quality was appreciable, especially to our
discriminating customers, the design had lost much of Its cache and sales were sluggish, with
projected sales for the product falling flat by slightly over $18,000.
Findings
Companies in a slmilar position to Unltas' have several options for stemming the flow of data
loss through data mobility. The first step Is to conduct a loss-prevention audit. A data-protection
FIGURE 10.2 7
audit Is a systematic and Independent examination to determine whether activities Involving the
processing of personal data are carried out In accordance with an organization's data-protection
policies and procedures.
To ensure this process runs smoothly, It will be necessary to encourage and secure the support
of all staff. The two loss-prevention auditors I contacted, J & B Associates and Tucker-Bonwlt
IT Support, estimated that an audit of this kind In a company the size of Unltas would take
approximately one week. Our company must also take steps to ensure that we are In full
compliance with the Personal Information Protection and Electronic Documents Act (PIPEDA),
which establishes laws that regulate the collection, use, and disclosure of personal Information
by private-sector organizations. For this purpose, we may need to revisit, review, and update
our company privacy policy. The audit and any measures that result from It must be In full
compliance with data-protection standards. Alms In this process are as follows:
After an audit has been conducted, companies experiencing data loss have several options
beyond this, Including disabling USB ports and having dlskless laptops. The Inconvenience and
severity of these measures, however, might create significant work-flow Issues and cost us the
goodwill and morale of Unltas employees.
Companies such as Ferrari have been able to avert losses by deploying the latest version of
security software that offers multi-factor authentication, database encryption, a secure virtual
perimeter, and disk and fi le encryption. In a well-publicized case, Ferrari was able to quickly
detect a theft of IP when a former employee lifted designs for special gases to be used In the
tires of the company's Formula One racing c.ars. New security software from Verdasys, as used by
Ferrari, and other software leaders Including McAfee and Digital Watch Dog, provides a level of
protection not offered by our current security software. To Implement a Digital WatchDog 6
security system at Unltas would cost In the range of $10,000to$15,000 a year, but those costs
would be partially offset by a reduction In lost revenue that normally resu lts from data loss.
Concluslon
Although conducting a data-loss audit can cause temporary disruption to workflow and raise
concerns among employees that they are under suspicion, this routine activity, along with the
upgrading of data-loss prevention software that secures data across the connected enterprise,
significantly reduces the threat of data loss. At this time, I ask for your authorization to Initiate
this process by conducting a search for a data-loss prevention auditor.
FIGURE 10. 27
(continued)
10 I IN FO RMAL REPORT S
Summary Reports
Managers and other decision-makers must have a full understanding of an issue hefore
they can formulate a solut.ion to the issued-related problem. To do this, they must have
access to dear, credihle, and concise information that can help them grasp the fundamen
tals of an issue quickly and easily. Without the time to review quantities of information on
their own, husy managers rely on well-prepared summa1ies that put key facts and opin-
ions at their fingert.i.ps.
Writing a summary report involves careful analysis of source documents, su ch as
journal and newspape r articles, and the ability to distinb'1.1L~h essential infonnation From
amplifying material. To write a summary report that accurately reflects the organization
and emphasis of the original article, follow these steps:
Scan, then carefully read, the source material. Scan the article for its general topic
and overall organization , then read it carefully and identify its central ideas. Underline
significant facts. Studying keywords and headings can provide important dues to the
information that may be most vital to your summary.
Decide what you can do without. Elimi nate amplifying material. Try to condense
the material to one-third to one-fifth the length of the original or less, if possihle.
Use underlined poin ts to create a draft of your summary. Hold to the structure
of the original material but use your own words and add transitional expressions to
make the sentences in your draft fit together. Do not introd uce new material that was
not in the original article o r document.
Add introductory and dosing remarks that provide context. Indicate the title and
auth.or of the source material and offer to provide futther information as needed.
ANALYTICAL REPORTS
learning to write informational reports is good preparation for the greater challenges of
analytical reports. Whereas the former emphasize the presentation of facts, the latter pass
on information with the intent of persuading readers to follow a specific course of action
or recommendation that is support.ed hy the reasoning of the report's findings and conclu-
sions. llecause analytical reports are pers1.1asive, they must be organized strategically based
on the reader's prohahle resistance or receptivity to the proposed plan. A good plan that
L~ presented too quickly- hefore the reader can see the reasoning behind it-can spark a
negative reaction. An indirect \'l'riting plan, with its more gradual approach to recommen
elation-making, can sometimes help readers see the logic of a recommendation they might
have heen ready to reject.
The "analysis" in an analytical report is focused on h ow to solve a specific organiza-
tional prohl ern.
Problem Statement: A recent breach of on line security has forced Ridgeway Products to
move from one-factor authentication to two-factor authentication
practices in order to ensure the greatest possible security of
company and customer data. Ridgeway must decide on the safest
and most convenient type of two-factor authentication.
The type of problem question th at is asked determines the type of analytical report that
must be wri tten in order to propose a solution.
The more complex a report, the more elahorate a purpose st.atemmt can he in describing
the scope, lim itations, and importance of the investigation the report documents:
Scope- What are the factors or issues to he explored? What is the amount of detail
to he presented?
Limitations- Do any special sr.andards or cond itions (hudgetary, technical, geo-
graphical, or logistical difficulties or limits on time or resources) apply to the investi-
gation? How might those conditions affect I.he findings and how hroadly they apply
to the situation?
Importance- Wh y is it import.ant that this prohlem he solved right now? Can the
prohlem be solved? How severe is the problem?
These additional factors, supported by specific, quantifiable facts (how much? when?),
contribur.e to a more detailed purpose statement:
Justification/Recommendation Reports
Justification and recommendation reporl<; are persu asive documents, submitted within
a company, that make suggestion..<; for new or improved facilities, equipment, processes,
capital appropriations, or o rganizational change. Because their purpose, like that of pro-
posals, Lo; to advocate or argue for a specific course of action, justification and recmnmen-
dation reports are sometimes known as internal proposals. Reports of this kind must first
establish that a problem exL<;ts. Then they persuasively and ohjectively huild a ca<;e based
on complete, accurate, and relevant evidence l.o show how the proposed course of act.ion
represents a viable and benefici.al solulion to the repo rt problem.
While some organizations have a prescrihed fmm for recommendation reports, in most
other cas-es writers can choose from two strategic wii ting plans depending on the sensitive-
ness of the topic and the receptiveness of the aud ience to the proposed plan. Topics that
are unl ikely to upset readers or raise objections can he approached directly. More sensitive
topics and recommendations that readers might oppose require an indirect approach Lhat
minimizes resistance by persuading readers of a plans benefitS hefore asking for action.
A direct writing plan front.loads both Lhe report problem and the recommen-
dation ror a solution to Lhat prohlem. Here are the steps in organizing a direct plan
recommendalion report:
Describe the problem and establL<ih that it needs a solution; provide any hackground
information the reader might need for decision-making.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
How far writers can go in making recommendations and ex11ressing opinions depends on
what their organizat.ions have authorized them to do in prepari ng their reports.
An indi rect writing plan can help writers win over cautious or reluctant audiences. Its
strategic approach moves more gradually towards a well-supported recommen dation-
the strongest option that has first been show11 to be logical and better thai1 all the
other alternatives:
Indicate the problem but avoid referring to your recommendat.ion in the subject line.
Open wit.h a clear, credible, and compelling description of the problem; persuasively
establish that the problem is serious, signi ficant, and in need of a solution; provide an
overview of data-collection methods and report o rganization.
Discuss altem at.ive solutions stratebrically, from least to most effective. Weigh the pros
and cons of each and provide cost comparisons when needed.
Present the most viable alternative- the option you intend to recomme nd- last.
Describe its benefits and show how its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Evidence presented should support your conclusion and recommendation.
Summarize your find ings and announce your recommendation; if appropriate, ask for
authori zation to proceed.
Figure 10.28 contains a sample direct recommendat.ion report based on the follow-
ing situation. Chain-wide sales of cosmetics, grooming products, and over-the-counter
med icines at Wellness Drug !vi.art have been sluggish over I.he past year, eve n di1ring
high-traffic periods. The assist.am market.ing manager proposes that a pilot project be
implemented at one of its under-performing pham1acies to test the use of an on-site
pagi ng system that would encourage c:ustomers who would ot.herwL~e remain in line at
the dispensary to browse the store and make additional purchases. Because the plan is
low cost and easy to implement, I.he writer expects little resistance and has decided to use
a direct writ.ing plan .
Fib'ltrt: 10.29 contains a sample indirect recommendat.ion report based on the fol-
lowing situation. The report. is m:ganized indi rectly because its purchase recomm endation
requires employees to learn about and adapt to new technology that they might not have
the training to use. The writer o! this report chooses to present a less effective alternative
first in order to build support for an option that represents a supe ri or solution to t he prob-
lem of lost contracts for short-turnaround projects.
10 I INFORMAL REPORTS
FIGURE 10. 28
A busy store is usually a sign of healthy sales. Although traffic flow throughout ... - Introduces report problem
our retail pharmacies continues to be high, In the past year the conversion of
browsing Into sales has dropped by a rate of 12 per cent. Customers pass through
the doors of our stores and wait In line by the dispensary while their prescriptions
are Aiied but do not make purchases additional to their medicine orders.
In-store polls have Indicated that customers standing In line are dissatisfied with
the amount of time spent waiting. Recent store performance reviews showed,
however, that Wellness Drug Mart customers wait no longer than 15 minutes on
average for their prescriptions to be filled. This misconception of external wait
times Is a common one. A recent retail study found that people standing In line
perceive that they spend more time waiting than they actually do. To reduce the
perception of extended wait times and to encourage customers to buy as well as
browse or wait In line, I recommend that we do the following:
Conduct a six-month pilot test on pager use and Its effect on sales In our
underperformlng Woodburn Avenue store.
This technology has recently been adopted by Bargainers Drug Mart Inc. to
encourage customers to browse more throughout the store while they wait.
Pharmacy customers at Bargainers now have greater control over how they spend
their time In the store until their medicine order Is ready.
continued
COMMUN I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 10.28
An on-site paging system, similar to ones used by restaurants and our competitors,
is a relatively low-cost and low-maintenance solution. The number of paging units
required can be determined by dividing the average wait time In minutes by 1.5.
A five-pack of pagers Is priced at $279.72. Beckon specializes In pharmacy paging
systems. Consumer guides rate Its products as the most durable on the market. The
devices operate on a UHF FM frequency (420-470 MHz) within a two-mile range. They
are powered by low-cost nickel-metal hydride batteries and battery life Is 48 hours
on a single charge. Only a limited number of pagers would have to be purchased.
1. Minimized wait times. A paging system would allow customers the freedom
to browse without the fear of losing their place In line. The time customers
would have spent waiting they can spend the way they want to, with less
potential for boredom. Time spent productively should help reduce the
perception of long wait t imes.
2. Increased customer conversion rates. Customers can shop while they wait.
In-store traffic should result In higher sales and a better browsing-to-buying
conversion rate.
Approve a six-month pilot test of the paging system In our downtown Calgary
location that provides pharmacy customers with guest pagers and tracks the
conversion rate of store traffic to sales.
Enclosure
10 I INFORMA L REPORTS
FI GURE 1 0.2 9
This report presents data documenting the severity and significance of the ... _ ,_
Previews report organization
problem, two alternative solutions, and a recommendation based on my analysis.
continued
COMMUN I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
FIGURE 10.29
DigItal capablllty allows commercial users to load a project file received via the
Internet, print a proof, run the job, and trim the sheets In under an hour. The
benefits for printers Include reduced set-up costs for small press runs and easy
customization of pieces sucht as client brochures and letterhead. Electronic
updating Is possible on demand, even In the middle of a press run. Dig Ital presses
also take the guesswork and ambiguity out of achieving colour consistency and
now offer an almost unrestricted selection of sheet sizes, Including sheets as large
as 14 x 20 Inches.
10 I INFORMAL REPORTS
FIGURE 10.29
Although digital presses may be offllne more frequently for maintenance, good
vendor support can minimize lost production time. The cost of consumable
Items such as Image drums may add to operation and unit costs, but Industry
specialists advise that digital-press purchasers should negotiate an all-Inclusive
click rate that reflects the actual cost of maintenance, parts, labour, and supplies.
Lithographers who make the transition to digital print production can expect to
spend up to six months phasing In the new technology and Integrating It with
their current workflow (Henry, 2007, p. 4).
Cost: $10,000 for Xylon's GraphX digital press, with 36 ppm colour output
and 40 ppm black-and-white output
References
Henry, P. (2007, March). Going digital, staying lithographic. American Printer, 1-8.
D COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
Feasibility Reports
Any new project, from the purchase of new equipment and consolidation of deparnnents
to the development of products and services, involves risk and the possihility that the
project may fail or not work out as expected. Before und ertaking a new project, organiza-
tions must determine the projects chances for success hased on whether it is possihle or
practical, economically wise and viahle, and consistent with internal and puhlic percep-
tion of r.he organization. Feasibility reports present evidence on the advisahility o f doing a
project or proceedjng with a specific course of action. Does it make good husiness sense?
L~ it right for the company? Is it p ractical and workable according to certain criteria? Can
the company afford the costs involved? Feasibility reports answer these types of questions
based on specific c1iteria and careful analysis. Managers rely on the evidence and advice
that feasibility reports present wben deciding whether to commit resources and go ahead
with a project. Because managers most wan t to know if a plan or project is doahle, feas-
ibility reports use a direct writing plan to announce the decision first:
Opening paragraph: identi fies the plan and reveals your decision/ recommendation
ahout it; offers an overview of the report.
Introduction/Background: descrihes the problem or circumstances that led to the
report and discusses the scope, methods, and limitations of the study and the amount
of data that could he collected to answer the feasihllity question.
Discussion: in logical sequence, presents a detailed analysis of the benefits and 1isks
of the plan along with other positive and negative factors, a calculation of costs, and a
sched ule for implementation; when appropriate, presents graphical t:lements to sup-
port data and interpret the results.
Conclusions: summarizes data and significant findings.
The report in Figure 10.JO assesses the feasibility of converting an unused side-lot
and an office st.orage room into space that employees of a puhlishlng house could use for
Background: Inadequate Lounge Facilities and Loss of Lawn Space. The construction
of our new on-site distribution centre has brought Immediate and long-term benefits, Discusses the
problem and
Including the single-site consolidation of shipping and receiving operations, Improved
background to
Inventory management, and a quadrupling of our storage capacity to 700,000 units. Because the report
this 10,000-square-metre facility now occupies a former green space where employees
gathered In good weather for lunch and coffee breaks, staff members are now without a
designated outdoor recreational space and have no option but to eat and socialize Inside.
The result has been an overcrowding of our 30-seat lunchroom. The lunchroom simply
cannot accommodate our 70-member staff during the peak noon to 2:00 p.m. period.
This problem of overcrowding will likely become more severe as the remaining 15 staff
members at our leased Saint John faclllty relocate to our main office and distribution centre
overthe next three months. These problems were factored In to an assessment carried out by
outside general contracting consultants, who Indicated that the structural soundness of our
offlc,e building would permit relatively low-cost renovations. Describes the
advantages and
Benefits of the Plan: The proposed plan calls for (1) the creation of a combined green space _ _ __,_ disadvantages
and patio space through the re-sodding and landscaping of a partially-paved, 200-square- of the proposed
plan
metre side-lot currently used for overflow parking and (2) the enlargement of the staff lunch-
room through the removal of a drywall partition that separates the lunchroom from Storage
Room B, followed by the Interior redecoration and Ilg htlng redesign of the 10 x 14 metre
space. The plan proposes practical repurposlng of under-utilized space on our premises. One
of the objectives In bringing all staff on site, Instead of having them In two locations, was
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FIGURE 10. 30
Feasibility Report
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to promote collaboration and goodwill In the workplace by alleviating the malaise and Isolation
experienced by offslte workers. Providing attractive and functional Indoor and outdoor spaces
In which staff can socialize wlll help to Improve morale and working conditions and contribute
to the maintenance of good professional relation ships between office and warehouse staff.
Problems of the Plan: Loss of Overflow Parking, Work Disruptions, and Safety Hazards.
A foreseeable problem will be compensating for the loss of three overflow parking spaces
that are generally unused, but which may be needed as more staff members are brought
on site. With the re-appropriation of ten of the current twenty spaces reserved for visitor
parking, I expect that the shortage of staff parking could be eliminated with limited
Inconvenience to our customers, suppliers, and visiting authors.
Another problem Is ensuring a safe and healthy working environment while the Indoor
remodelling Is carried out. Noise from Interior demolition and remodelling may disrupt
employees In adjacent areas while they work; fumes from paint, drywall compound, and
other chemical agents may present a hazard to office employees and resu lt In downtime.
In compliance with the Occupational Health and Safety Act, we expect to conduct periodic
environmental assessments to monitor hazard levels and confine most construction activities
to weekends and after-hours.
Presents costs
.,. Costs. Implementing this plan Involves direct, one-time costs for landscape design, Interior
and sch~ule
design, construction and landscaping material, fixtures and furnishings, building permits, and
general contracting. Barring any structural weakness In our building, the costs Involved are
within the $80,000 estimate for the project.
Time Frame. Drafting a request for proposals and Initiating the bidding on contracts for
remodelling and landscaping projects should take us about one week. With time allowed for
project development and the submission of bids, the review process wlll take another five weeks.
Once construction begins, I expect that the remodelling and landscaping work wlll take at least
two months. By July 1 the plan for expanded and upgraded Indoor and outdoor recreational
space wlll be fully Implemented, with benefits for employee morale and work environment.
FIGURE 10.30
(continued)
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lounging and recreation. The recent construction of a large distribution centre at the same
location has deprived employees of a grassy area t.hey once used as a place to eat and relax
in good weather. With additional staff returning from an off-site dis1.ribu1.io11 centre and
joining the workforce at head office, the lunchroom will no longer accommodate t.he full
staff during the busy lunchtime pe1iod. The report is presented in e-mail fo1mat.
Figu re 10.31 presents a comparison report based on the following situation. An estab-
lished telecommunications company, Instanet lnc., plans to hire an agency specializing
in the management of corporate events. To showcase the organ.izat.ion t.o maximum effect
and build relationships with employees and investors through its corporate functions,
lnstanet must first determine which among several well-respected Bm1s can deliver the
services i.t needs Ln a way that is appropriate to the company image.
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FI GURE 10.3 1
FI GURE 10.3 1
Our priority Is to find an event management firm that will perform event
strategy assessment specific to our company and tailor events to our company
Image. As our mission statement upholds a firm commitment to accountability,
accessibility, and diversity, our company events and choice of an event
management firm should reflect these standards. I have Identified three
prospective full-service event management companies In the Winnipeg that can
deliver services that meet our marketing and corporate culture needs: Boudreau
& Hodges, The Unique Event Group, and Encore Events.
The following table summarizes comparison data on the services and reputation
of each of the three firms.
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FIGURE 10.31
Table 1
Services offered by all three firms were comparable, with the exception of the
recently launched Encore Events. The companies differed in the way they
outsourced essential services and employed part-time staff.
Compares and contrasts
altematlves The Unique Event Group and Encore Events do not have resident hospitality and
catering experts or protocol officers, and they typically outsource all catering
functions to third parties. Companies that have used services of this kind report
that this catering arrangement can bring Inconsistent results, with hit-and-miss
menu selections and cost-overruns. Without a protocol officer, whom etiquette
experts agree Is essential to the success of high-profile VIP functions, any of our
company events that Include dignitaries or participation from other countries or
levels of government would be subject to embarrassing breaches of protocol in
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FIGURE 10.31
Encore Events does not currently have the resources to employ full-time event
managers. lnstanet would need assurances that Encore Events could provide a
consistent level of service and support with Its part-time staff; otherwise, Encore
Events Is better suited to producing small-scale conferences and seminars, which
It can support with Its exceptional technical services Including a dedicated
audlovlsual department, on-site graphics department, and onllne conference
registration.
Reputation
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FIGURE 10.31
Costs
The fees schedules for all three firms are summarized In Table 2, which sets out
a comparison of costs for planning and consultancy. Other fees, for catering and
venue booking, are on a sliding scale based on the type of event, location, and
number of guests or registrants.
While all three companies guarantee value-added services and respect for cl lent
budgets, Boudreau & Hodges has the highest fees but also offers the most
flexible work arrangements, Including the outsourcing of staff on a monthly
Refers to data rrom table ____,_ retainer basis. Because Boudreau & Hodges and Encore Events pass on
professional discounts to their clients, their somewhat higher consulting fees
may not necessarily translate to higher overall budgets.
Table2
Informational Report
D Does your report answer a specific question? Is the purpose of your report made clear
in the opening paragraph? Does your report begin directly? Does your report supply
sufficient background information to bring the reader up to speed?
O Is information arranged logically and methodically? ls information divided into
subtopics?
D Are the tone and style appropriate to the audience?
D Does your report include a summary or an offer of further information?
Analytical Report
D Is your report organized strategically, according to a direct or indirect writ ing plan?
If you expect readers to be receptive, are the conclusions and recommendations
summarized at the beginning? If you expect readers to be resistant, are the conclusions
and recommendations reserved for the end?
D Is the purpose of your report clear? Has the problem you are attempting to solve been
fully identified?
D Are findings presented in a thorough and logical way? Are findings supported with
evidence? Do the findings lead logically to conclusions?
D Are the conclusions supported by facts and evidence? Do they relate to the problem
identified at the beginning of the report?
O Are the recommendations, if they are required, action-specific?
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
1. An11lyze Gr11phics. Collect a sampling of graphs and enrolled in university engin eeri ng programs
cham. Good places to st.art include busines.~ puhHca- nationwide over the last five years
tions, such as the financial pages of daily newspapers b) figures showi ng an Internet auction companys
(Report mi Business or the financial Post) and husiness share price between January 2013 and January
magarilles (Canadian Business, The Ernnomist, Report (JI! 2014
Bw;iness Magazine). Try to find at least one example of c) figures showing the revenue and earnings for the
each type of graphic. Determille if each brraphk is well same company in the years 2012 and 2013 (year
desibrned and appropriate for the eiqilanation it sup- ending December J l )
ports. Critique the appeal of the graphic (Does it add d) a comparison of revenues from three divisions of
interest? Does it make data speak?) and trade opinions a company from 2008 to 2013
on any unusual graphics you may have found. 11) figures showillg the income of a national dough-
2. M11tch Gr11phics to Objedivu. In a group or individ- nut franchise hased on its three leading products
ually, identify the type of graphic you would use to f) figures comparillg the sales of those three prod-
plot the following data. Consider if more than one ucts over the past ten years
type of graph ic or illustration could he used: g) data showing cities in Callada with the highest
a) figures showing the n umher of female students rat.es of ohesity
1. Distinguishing betwHn lnform11tion11I and An11lytical reducing salt hy up to one-third and eliminating
Reports. Fo r each of the following situations, the use of MSG. Pending government approval
determine if yo u must write all informational or of t.he flavour compound, you will examine iL~
analytical report: poten tial health effects.
a) You h ave just returned from a conference you 2. M11tching Typu of Reports to Situ11tion Duc:riptions.
attended at t.he expense of your company and Identify t.he type of report you would write in each of
must advise your supervisor of the details. the following cases:
b) As you do eve ry month, you must infom1 man- a) A report addressed t.o your boss, identifying a piece
agement of the numher of customer-service calls of equipment that should he upgraded or replaced.
you have received, summarize activities and b) A report requested hy your manager, provid
events performed during the report period, and ing an overview of smartphones (a subject she
note any irregular events. knows little ahout) and how they might be used
c) Yo u have heen asked hy your employer, hy appliance sales associates.
Muskmissio n.com, to recom mend three arts- c) A report requested hy the head of your companys
relate:d charities to which the company might con- donations committee, prospecting four new char-
sider donating money on an annual hasis, to assess ities in the fields of education and community
the relative meriL~ and needs of each, and to sug- se rvice.
gest which of the three the company should select. 3. Identifying Types of Headings. From the list of head-
d) You have heen asked hy your boss, the chief of ings below, identify which are descriptive heads and
product development, to investigate the feas- wh ich are functional heads.
ihility of adding a Senomyx flavouring to you r a) Costs
company's canned minestrone soup as a means of b) Personnel
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c) Richmond Hill Costs Less per cent); writi ng a draft (5 hours/1.6.66 per
d) Findings cent); revising the dra ft (2 hours/6.66 per cent);
e) The Manufactu1i11g Process and typing and editing the repon (6 hours/20
f) Situation 1 per cent).
g) Survey Shows Support for Software Upgrade c) Figure 1 shows the percentage of students, fac-
h) Parking Recommendations: Valet Service ulty, staff, and administrators who participated
4. Making Subheads Parallel. Revise the following in the survey: students (63 per cent), faculty
subheads so that they aU use the same grammatical (22 per cent), staff (9 per cent), and administra-
st.ruc:ture. tors (6 per cent).
d) Figure 5 shows the annual ratio of sales clos
New Challenges for Human Resources Management
ings to sales calls, by sales representative: Lauren
Providing Employees with Disabilities with the
McAllister (80: 102); Rosa Santorini (76: 105);
Tools to Succeed
Jorge Diaz (95:107).
We Must Adjust to Older Employees
7. Analyzing Graphics. For each or the graphics 7a, 7b,
Can We Accommodate Employees Involved in
and 7c, write a brief explanation to support it.
Family Care?
Dealing with Intermittent Absences Caused by
Chronic Conditions 7a)
70
5. Differentiating between Conclusions and ~ 60
8. Spotting Design Flaws. [ach of the graphics 8a, 8b, have no problem with the C:NG software. An
8c, and Rd contains an error. Can you identify what experienced systems analyst is now correcting the
is wrong in each case? problem and IS expected to complete the project
la) Und.,graduate Enrolment by Faculty within the next month.
Arts and Sciences SSW. b) Your team project is to provide an expanded
Eng"-<lng 15'16
database for the IMS. Before work on the project
begins, you must seek authonzation to hire two
Business 12'16
new engineers familiar with the system.
Nursing 11'6 c) Your companys training manager has asked you
Architecture 7"' to seek information about the hasic English pro
gram that was adopted hy Rix Technologies. You
have been asked to assess whether some or all
of the Rix program elements could he applied
Bb) Loonle Dives
DAILY CLOSE, US CENTS to the produclion of an emp loyee manual at
84( your company.
10. Analyzing and revising problem questions. Revise the
follo\ving problem queslions so that they are narrow
enough and allow for solu1inns 1hat can he Investigated
and implemented within a three-month time frame.
a) What new techniques can Edgeco Indus tries use
Apr. May
to solve the prohlem o f waste disposal?
Be) Transport Truck Accidents b) How can Reverb Electronics market its products
to teens?
c) What are the best businesses to invest in in
developing countries?
d) How can the university improve student services?
) What initiatives should the municipality under-
take to huild a greener, more sustainahle com-
munity before next years election?
llllll l009 2010 lllll lOll IOU
11. Writing problem statements and purpose statements.
Bd) Computer Sales and Leasing by Year Write a prohlem statement, purpose statement, and ,
AutoSale. if applicable, a detailed purpose statement for the fol-
I! 15 lowing repon situations:
JI Auto leasing
~ a) Avatar Entertainment, which operntes and has
~
..5
10
interest in 448 theatres across Canada, relies on
-
~
5 timely access to inrormation to make cril ic:al busi-
ness decisions. rinding and sharing critical infor-
2010 2011 2012 l01l mation, howeve r, has hecome a complic:at.ed and
Year difficu lt task. Wir.hout an in1egrat.ed IT strategy,
Avatar currently runs muh iple hack-end systems,
9. Matching Reports to Situations. For each of the fol-
each with diffe re nt user interfaces. Employees
lowing si1ua1ions, iden1lfy the type of repo rt you
looking for information of1en have to employ dH-
would wriLe and discuss how lCJ organize it.
ferent search criteria hased on the system they are
a) Your team project is to provide an expanded
searching \vithin. Avatar wonders H having a sin-
da1abase for the In formation Management System
gle ponal for its IT structure might help improve
(IMS). The IMS has been delayed. The original
search functionality and make tt easier for users
schedule was based on the assumption that the
to find, use, and share critical information.
systems analysL responsible for the project would
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b) Elegance Bridal Studio has been a retail clothing the server rooms were operational, employees
specialist offering a range of bridal gowns, vells, were forbidden from entering the bi1ilding imt.il
and accessories for over forty years in a competi a full health and safety assessment had heen com-
tive market. Elegance is concerned that its trad- pleted and prohlems caused by residual smoke
itional fashion sensibility, modest online ret.ai.1 damage had heen corrected. The workforce,
presence, and conservative store image have con which included more than 200 call centre agents,
trihuted to a gradual decline in sales since 2012. could not he mobilized for two days. Arcan is
It is now Septemher, with the highest volim1e of worried that it will lose even more business if it
sales typically falling between January and June. does not take steps to put a data protection and
Elegance Bridal Studio must act quickly if it hopes disaster recovery plan (DRP) in place. Arcan won
to win back sales during this important period. ders which type of web-based dL~aster recove ry
c) Over the past year, operations at Arcan Investment system might he right for the company: a bridg-
Solutions have been compromised hy the forced ing of primary phone lines with celllular phones,
evacuation o r physical lockdown of the huild - a remote access communication system provided
Lng that houses its call centre and administrative by a disaster recovery specialist, or a sol ution
offices. At one point, an overnight elecl.rical fire that involves the use of virtual private networks
Ln 1.he buildings heating system sent thick, acrid or IP phones that could he quickly shipped to a
smoke billowing into most. parts of the facility. temporary call centre. Due to the volume of cus-
The heavy concentration of smoke made the aiT lO'rner complaints that foll owed th e fire-related
unhreat.hahle, leading to serious environmental lockdown, Arcan has decided that it needs to act
and occupatio nal health and safety concerns. quickly and budget generously for the implemen-
While the company infrastructllre was intact and tation of a disaster preparedness plan.
1. lnvH tigative Repo rt. As assistant coordi11 ator of spe- has excellent sound, despite the fact that it does not
cial events for Salk Pharmaceuticals lnc., you have reach the rated range. The Unicall GM885 has a hat
heen asked hy the coordinator of special events, Tom tery life of 25 hours compared \vith 12 hours for the
Byington, to investigate three di fferent models o f Corsair and 14 hours for the Unicall T6500 model.
GMRS (General Mobile Radio Service) two-way rad ios Prepare a report in which you present your findings
with which to equip the five team leaders during your to your supervisor.
annual three-day team-building wildemess retreat. 2. Investigative Report. For a course or program in
The radios must be ahle to work within a range of which you are currently enrolled, suggest three
8 to 11 kilometres, the distance of many treks and potential field-trip destinations that tie in with course
canoe trips. Because teams may he outdoors and content: husinesses, ind ustries, financial institutions,
away from the co11ference centre for up to four hours government agencies, museums, or resource centres.
at a time, 1.he radios must have a long battery Hfe. For each excursion, note the size of group the venue
You 11ave learned of three reliable hrands: the Corsair accommodates, discuss the all ocation of time and
PR1100-2D (unit price $120), which according to resources as we ll as any special an-an.gernents that
co nsumer reports has dependable reception and may be required, and calculate the expenses involved
easy operation hut does not reach the rated range; in undertaking the field trip. Considei: the purpose
the Unicall T6500 (unit price $120), which feamres and educational value of each trip.
good outdoor reception and funky styli ng hi1t a short 3. Periodic Report. If you are currently ot molled in a
battery li fe and inadequate range; and the Unicall work-study program at your college or university, pre-
GMR85 (unit price $125), an all-round good radio pare a periodic report [or your course instmctor or
that fares well in different weather conditions and work-placement officer in which you document your
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work-related activities over the past month. Disc.'l.1ss scheduled the upgrading of the cen tral office and
any irregulaii ties on the job and highlight solutions to adjoi ning sto rage facilities to take place from Ap ril
problems you encountered and any special needs. 30 to May 15. You expect the replacement o f all dry-
4. Investigative Report. Write a short investigative wall, resurfacing of all wood noors, and installation
report that summarizes fact-finding you have done of lighting systems will take place from May 16 to
and makes recommendations toward the pmchase June 2. You see no difficulty in completing all work
of a car, a computer and/or office eguipment, a cam- by the scheduled date of June 16.
era, or a personal electronics item. Review the criteria 7. Recommendation Report. As the circular.ion manager
you used and options you considered hefore making of Allt:gm, a free monthly music magazine covering
your purchase. t.he local classical music and jazz scene (circulation
S. Progress. Report. Using the plan outlined in this 35,000), you would li ke to gain a hi gher profile
chapter, write a progress report that summarizes the for your publication and increase the advertising
status of a work , volunteer, or recreational project in revenue on which it depends. One way to achieve
which you are involved or a term report you are cur- these goals is to host and sponsor a free llllncht.ime
rently preparing. salon se ries of five jazz and classical concerts, held
6. Progress Report. As chief contractor for Grande on consecutive Sundays in April and May at a local
Construction Company, prepare a progress report for restaurant. You already know of several outstand-
Hilary Murdoch, owner of Ilest-Temp Employment ing solo art.ists and ensembles that charge nominal
Services, advising her on t.he status of renovations to performance fees and would he suitable additions to
her new downtown office, located in a heritage prop your program. The restaurant proprietor has previ-
erty. Work is progressing on schedule, perhaps even a ously let out space for free for similar events. Write
little ahead of what you had expected. Although the a memo addressed to Hal Friedman, publisher and
cost of certain materials is higher than your original editor of Allegro. Although you know Mr. Friedman
bid indicated, you expect to complete the project dislikes change of any kind, you feel the series could
without exceeding the estimated costs hecause the succeed based on similar initiatives taken by well-
speed \vit.h which the project is heing completed will regard ed music guilds and organizations in your area.
reduce labour expenses. Materials used to date have Decide whether a direct or indirect strategy would
cost $90,850 and labour costs have been $217,000 be appropriate.
(including some subcontracted electrical work). 8. Recommendation Report. Could one of the services
Your estimate for the remainder of the materials is at yom un iversity or college- the computer lab, cafe-
$85,000; remaining labour costs should not exceed teria, health services, campus bookstore, or parking
$73,000_ As of April 1.5, you had finished all plumb- system- be more efficient? Assess its quality and effi.
ing work, plus the installation of the circuit-breaker dency based on your own observations and expe ri-
panels, m eters, service outlets, and all sub-floor wir- ences and suggest appropriate changes in a report
ing. Replacement of the heating and air-condition- to the presiden t of your student council or the dean
ing syste m is in the preli minary stages. You have of students.
,,.
L.. ONl.1 NE ACTIVITIES
1. Graph Type Exercise. Complete t.he three exerdses on www.statcan.gc.ca/ed ulpower-pouvoir/ch 2/
this web page from Statistics Canada. questionnaires/5214 775-eng.btm
www.stattcan.gc.ca/edu/power-pouvoir/ch9/ Then complete the guestionnaire exercise on the
exer/5214820-eng.htm follmving Statistics Canada page.
2. Questionnaire Exercise. Read the compre hensive www.statcan.gc.ca/ed ulpower-pouvoir/ch 2/
Statistics Canada web page on important aspects of exer/5214909-eng.htm#link02
questionnaire desibrn:
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Identify elements of Informal and formal s. Apply the writing process to formal reports.
proposals.
6. Develop a report work plan for a formal
2. Distinguish between proposals and formal report.
reports.
7. Write a report as part of a team.
3. Conduct research by generating primary data
8. Identify elements of formal reports and
and collecting secondary data.
document sources.
4. Apply standards for evaluating research
9. Draw conclusions and develop
material from a variety of sources.
recommendations from report data.
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CAN THE HLOOK" of reports and other corporate communications Improve business
performance? The Society of Graphic Designers of Canada (GDC), In association with
market research firm Harrls/Declma, polled over 500 Canadian business owners and deci-
sion-makers In 2010 to answer this question. Melanie MacDonald, GDC executive director,
says It was time to take stock of Canadian businesses' commitment to design, given what
she sees as Canada's lag In understanding the economic benefits:
It has been more than a de.cade since a study focusing on design buyers has been
conducted. As the national professional association for graphic and communication
designers In Canada, we are well acquainted with the realities experienced by design-
ers promoting their services In our ever-changing economic landscape. It Is our hope
that the Information gleaned from this survey will help professional designers where
opportunities exist, and enable businesses to take advantage of design.'
The survey confirmed that nearly two-thirds of the participants saw a connection between
better design and better business performance. Respondents from central Canada were the
most likely to hire a designer to help with marketing and communications.>
Proposals
proposal a business document More than simply providing facts, proposals fill a need hy suggesting the means for solv-
that suggests a method for solving ing prnhl ems. Proposals, in otheir words, offer to do something- for example, to provide
a problem or that seeks approval
for a plan. goods or services or to assess, develop, and im plement a plan. A proposal writer's ultimate
goal Ls to persuade readers to follow or approve those plans or agree to their development.
Depending on its type, a proposal may ask for action, business, or fonding. T.t may stay
Internal proposal a persuasive within an o rganization (internal proposal), suggesting changes or improvements ln much
document that attempts to the same way that recomm end ation and justification reports do and add ressing q uestions
convince management to spend
money or to Implement plans to such as the foll owing:
Improve the organlL'Jtlon.
How can this idea save money? When will t.he savi ngs occur and how much does the
company stand to save?
How can this new proced ure boost productivity or sales?
How will this plan make the company mo re competitive?
More o rten, proposals are sent to potential clients or customers outsi de the organ-
external proposal a proposal ization (external proposal) as a means of generating income. External proposals can
Issued to governmental or he solicited or unsolicited, competitive or non-competitive, though most are written in
private Industry clients outside
an organlL1tlon as a means of response to a request for proposals (RFP) issued by com panies and government agen
generating Income. des. Essentially a sales presentation, a proposal formalizes the subm ission o r a bid for a
contract. Once entered in competition, a proposal goes up against those from other hid-
request for proposals
(RFP) a detailed document ders so that the best method and ultimately the most qualified contract.or can he found .
requesting proposals and bidson Unsolicited proposals involve a different challenge: convincing readers that a need o r
spcclHc projects. prohlem in fact exists.
Not all proposals look alike. They may be infom1al--often just several pages prepared
in memo form- o r fo rmal- dozens or even hundreds of pages divided into multiple parts
and prepared hy a team or writers . Like other romis o r persuasive \VTiting, proposals stress
reader heneHts and offer both proof and assurances that whatever is promised can he
11 I PROPOSALS AND FORMAL REPORTS
ELTON JOHN
AIDS FOUNDATION
delivered. The goal is to empha..~ize not how the project will make money for you hnt how
your project can help make money for the client and realize added henefits.
Most proposals, whether they are infom1al or fom1al, use a direct approach. Which ele-
ments are included, however, depends on the proposal's audience, purpose, and contents.
Background
The background section defines in some detail the problem you aim t.o solve or the oppor-
tunity you wish to add ress. ln addition to identifying the purpose and goals of the project,
it conveys your understanding of client needs and how the client st.ands to benefit from
the implementation of the plan you propose.
time, (4) what special materials :and resources you will use, and (5) when each phase 0
the project will he compl eted (create a ti md ine for this purpose). If the procedure you
propose is complex or lnvolves several steps, use headings to give each section impact and
definjtion. You can also walk the client through the process.
Benefits
The benefits sect.ion summarizes I.he reasons for accepting the proposal so that the client
will be motivated to action. It h elps to resell the proposed plan by highlighting the value
o r your solution, service, or product and the advantages o r your plan ove r and ahove the
competitions. This app roach sh ows that you are not just eage r for business hut a lso eager
to assist the client in maximizing hene fi ts.
Appendix
appendix a section of the back An appendix, typically found after the hotly of a proposal, is used to archive specialized
mancr of a proposalor formalreport mate ri als of interest t.o readers (e.g., graphics, statistical analyses, tables, generic resumes
In whichspecialized supplemental
materlalsare archived. of project leaders, product photographs, and examples of previous projects). Creating an
appendix allows you t.o declutter the hotly of the proposal so that its focus is purely on the
selling of products, ideas, and seTVices. Appendices labelled A, B, C, and so on can he set
up for each type of material.
References
references or works cited a The references or works cited list iden tifies the source material for ideas and information
section of the back maner ofa you have mentioned in yom proposal or consulted in its preparation. This secti011 may he
proposalor formal report that lists,
Inalphabeticalorder, the sourrn prepared in one of several referencing formats , each with its own distinguishing feamres
material cited In the text. and content req uirements. Of the two most widely used systems, the documentation sty le
of the American Psychological Association (APA style)- which uses a reference list- is
American Psychological
Association (APA) style a favoured by writers in the social and physical sciences and often in business as well. The
documentation system used documentation system of I.he Modern language Association (MLA style) features a
bywriters In the socla Iand works cited list and is used in the humal'ljties. ln hoth cases, short citations an: inserted
physical sciences. into the proposal's text., guiding readers to the l L~ts of complete bi bliographic infom1at.ion
Modern Language Association for each source. (See pp. 399-402 for more on these documentation styles.)
(MLA) style a documentation
system used by writers In
the humanities. WRITING STYLE FOR PROPOSALS
Good proposals are persuasive and use words that comm unicate strength, confidence,
know-how, and credibility Unl'l ecessarlly tentative, douht.ful, or defensive language can
undermine the reader's percept.ion of your ability to carry out the tasks you plan and get
the joh done.
It was a pleasure to talk with you several days ago and learn about the Initiatives Vanguard Property
Development's recent acquisition. lntegra Communications Services Is pleased to submit the
following proposal outlining our plan for a ten -week on -site workshop aimed at Improving the
quality of document planning and business writing In your workplace.
Our company Is prepared, upon receiving your approval, to Immediately Implement the plan outlined
below and to modify It according to the needs determined through our preliminary assessment of
writing samples submitted by your staff. We appreciate your Interest In our suggestions and your
ongoing support for our creative training solutions.
On the basis of our experience In conducting on-site workshops and writing training seminars, lntegra
Communications Services proposes the following plan to maximize benefits to your company:
On-Site Workshop. Participants In a group of not more than twenty will receive ten hours of
Instruction through an Intensive on-site workshop offered In five weekly 2-hour sessions.
FIGURE 11.1
Working from your needs, our trainers will provide practical, Interactive Instruction and
individualized attention In an environment that allows participants to learn from each other
and share their knowledge and workplace experience. The 3:30-5:30 p.m. scheduling requires
only one hour of release time per week. Trainers will remain on hand until 6:30 p.m. to take
questions and conduct consultations. The ten hours of classroom time Is significantly less than
Is now required for employees to complete a self-directed training module.
Consultation and Feedback. Each participant will undergo a preliminary skills assessment, based
on work In progress, and receive continuous evaluation that focuses on his or her Instructional
needs. Through substantial written comments and three 20-mlnute consultations, participants
will also receive Immediate and relevant feedback and Information on topics ranging from
remedial English to strategic document planning. On completing the course, each participant wlll
also receive a one-page status report containing a final assessment and concrete suggestions for
further skill development.
Course Materials. Each participant will receive a two-hundred-page manual containing learning
modules, skill-building exercises, workshop guidelines and topics, printed copies of PowerPolnt
slides, and assignments speclflcally adapted to participants' workplace writing tasks.
Ongoing Support. Course participants have unlimited access to our comprehensive on line writing
resources website containing additional writing tips, links to business-writing resources, and
self-correcting review exercises that participants can complete at their own pace and submit for
Immediate feedback. For one month a~er completing the course, participants may also telephone
our Writers' Outreach Hotline and arrange a free one-hour consultation with a course trainer.
Course Outline. Th e following outline corresponds to five primary areas of Interest and can be
adapted and modified according to the needs of Individual participants.
I
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Our unique approach to professional-writing training has been Implemented to a high degree of
client satisfaction and will enhance your efforts to Improve the quality of written communication In
your workplace. I look forward to discussing the details of this proposal with you and answering any
questions you may have. The price In this offer Is In effect until Aprll 4, 2014.
Sincerely,
Elizabeth Rocca
President
EPR:kl
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Cl If the proposal is a response to a request for proposals, does it follow the RFP exactly and
meet all specifications and requirements for the job?
Cl Does the proposal include a summary of what you propose? Is it clear why the proposal
is being made?
Cl Does the proposal show that YOU understand the significance of the problem or
challenge the client faces? If the proposal is unsolicited, does it convince the client that
the problem or need exists?
Cl Are details complete? Are the plan and its implementation fully explained? Does tlhe
proposal outline project completion dates, mention staffing needs and resources,
include a cost breakdown, and provide evidence to support your ability to do the job?
Cl Does the proposal identify the client's competition and develop a customized solution
that answers the client's needs? Does the proposal show how the project leader's
qualifications, equipment, and resources are superior to those of competitors?
Cl Does the proposal outline potential benefits to the reader?
Cl Does the conclusion reinforce a positive perception of your company and its ideas 7 Does
it include a date beyond which the bid figures are invalid?
Cl Is the proposal positive and forward-looking in its tone? Is its organization reader-friendly?
Cl If the proposal asks for authorization, can sign-off be attained easily?
Cl Does the proposal follow industry standards in its format and disclosures? For more
information on this topic, visit the Association of Proposal Management Professionals'
website: www.apmp.org.
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Primary data can sometimes he collected informally by talking with individuals who
know about a panicular topic or wit.h the target audience to whom your report is most rel-
evant. H, on the other hand, developing primary data entails the cost or interviewing large
groups OT sending out questionnaires, secondary research may prove a more cost-effective
method. For this reason , most research projects bebrin \vith the latter type.
Because it is easy to he overwhelmed by the task or locating data and sifting through
masses or material , you should begi n hy making a List of keyword -linked topics you need
to investigate and the type of data you need to support your purpose and explore your
topic. Your evidence can come in many forms: statistics, in-house organizational data,
group opinions, expe rt opinions, even historical background. Not all searches will be the
same, so keep in mind the options open to you:
1. Look for information online. Big search engines such as Google and Bing-
convenient pathways to the World Wide Web-can find current articles on virtually
any subject related to the search term you use, espedally if you do an advanced search
that combines keywords and altern atives. Besides article repri nts, you can expect
to find online databases, company news, mission statements and directories, com-
pany profiles, prod uct facts, governme nt infom1at.ion, scientific reports, sound and
video files, library resources, online newspape rs and magazines, press releases, job
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Formal Reports
Formal r eports are accounts of major projects-the development of new products o r fonnal report an accounr of a
services; reo rganization at departmental, divisional, or company-wide levels; or analysis of rnaJor projoct written according
to a prescribed structure deRned
competing products or alternative mer.hods. Much Like analytical busi ness reports, except by formal elements such as a title
in length, fom1al reports presen t orde red information to decision-makers in government, page, letter of transrnrttal, table of
business, and industry. Because the scope and complexity of long report topics L~ greater, contenrs. and executive surnrnary
or abstract.
however, there is also greater need fo r in-depth analysis and extensive research. Fom1al
reports follow a more prescribed structure in order to accommodate this complexity and
effectively deliver in rom1ation and recommendations. Tlhe hasic structure includes front
matt.er, t.he hotly of the report, and hack matter-sebrmented sections that together identify
the signi:ficance and enhance the professionalism of the document. It is not uncom mon
for organizations to have a preferred "house style," whereby certai n elements are treated a
partil1.ilar way or left in or out accord ing to the guidelines established in a report-writer's
manual. 1f your organization has no prescribed style, simply follow the wri ting plan out
li ned in t his chapter, with the i.mderst.anding t.hat there L~ wide variation in the ways to
present a report.
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Thinking about these issues will save time in the long run by helping you gai n con-
trol over your material in the time you have to develop it. One way to start planning is to
review the quest.ions in the following list.
What are you being asked to report on and why? What is the subj ect and situation 7
What is your main purpose? Are you expected to give information, information plus
analysis, recommendations? Or is your task to persuade, solve a problem, initiate
change, or just provide a record for future reference? Does your report have more than
one purpose?
What results do you hope to achieve by writing the report?
Aud ience
Whom is your report aimed at (small group, mixed readership)? Who else will read it?
What are the reader's skills, concerns, and knowledge of th e subject? How much of your
knowledge does the reader share? How much background does the reader require?
What objections might the reader have? How might the reader react?
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Status
Is your report a periodic/interim report (superseded by another report in a few weeks or
months) or is it a special-projects report (a one-time analysis of a problem or situation
written on request)?
Length
How much are you expected to write?
How much detail do readers expect?
How much time do you have to prepare the report? Wha.t is the deadline for submission?
When must each phase be completed?
Formality
How formal does your report need to be? What is the setting and audience for your report?
What will happen to the report afterward? Who else will read it?
Is it for immediate, short-term use (less formal) or will it be presented to senior
governing bodies of your organization (more formal)?
If the report is short or informal, is it appropriate to prepare the report in a memo or
letter or on a printed form?
Based on preferences and previous reports, what tone is appropriate?
Use a more impersonal tone than you would for an infom1al report.
Write using third-person pronouns, avoiding f and we a~ much as possible.
Avoid the word you. Instead, supply the company name o r department.
Do not use contractions.
Aim for a mix of sentence lengths and keep paragraphs to less than seven lines.
Use verb tenses consistently- use the past tense for completed actions (resprmdents
were asked) and for citing references, and use the present tense for current actions (the
purposes of this n'Port are, recommendations include).
Put URLs in angle brackets (e.g., <http://canada.gc.ca>) to make them easier to read.
Check organ.izational style guidelines hefore you begin t.o write to find out what style
elements are perrnissihle.
TIME MANAGEMENT
ln report writing, time is o r the essence. Few reports are assibrned without a deadline, so
effective time-management skills and np-front planning are essen tial. The higger the scale
of the repo rt, the more carefully you will have to set aside enough time to complete it.
Learn how you work best- doi ng one task after the other or juggling several respon-
sibilities at once. Design a system that works best for you by figuring out w hen you
waste time and when you work most effectively.
Set priorities (using a to-do list or a daytimer if you have to) and try your best to ignore
distractions. Give the task you .are working on the attention it deserves.
Start early. Don' t procrastinate or leave an important task or project until the last minute.
Leave room for unexpected occurrences, such as computer t rouble or power outages.
Break tasks into component parts with time for each.
Ask for additional information and resources if you need them.
Let people know as soon as possible if you are running seriously behind. Work together
to find solutions.
Statement of Problem
As a result of recent expansion, our company has outgrown Its current human resources (HR)
department. Inaccurately processed claims, Increased benefit administration costs, out-of-control
operating costs, and the need to reinvest In technology make the outsourcing of some or all of our
HR services a viable option In terms of realizing our commitment to cutting costs, Improving service
to employees, maximizing resource availability, and gaining efficiencies. Recent studies found that
outsourcing Is now firmly embedded as part of HR service delivery.
Statement of Purpose
The purpose of this report Is to determine whether consolidation of HRservices under one
outsourcing provider can control operating costs and facilitate world-class delivery with respect to
benefits, HR management, and payroll processing. The report will examine published studies, surveys,
and accounts of how other companies achieved their HR objectives.
Magazine and newspaper accounts will be examined, as well as "HR Outsourcing: Benefits, Challenges,
and Trends,"the Conference Board's second study of the benefits of human resources outsourcing
(HRO) and changes In the HR marketplace. Our accounting department will conduct an Internal audit
to determine what we do well and what we need help with and will undertake cost-benefit analysis
to estimate the strategic value of HRO to our business and the cost savings over time. Our HR depart-
ment will estimate growth In the number of employees In the next five years and the additional
number of HRand IT staff required to support that growth using the current systems.
Working Outline
FIGURE 11 . 2
Work Schedule
Agree on style points- the degree of formality and use of personal pronoims -before
you start the drafting process.
Tidy up the draft to minimize sharp con trasts in writing styles from section to section.
Make sure all members of the team are satisfied with the final draft before you begi n
to edit it.
Use a program (such as Microsoft Word) that allows each member of the group to
make signed annotations to the document onscreen.
Front Matter
Cover
Title Page
Letter of Transmittal
Table of Contents
List of Tables/Figures/Illustrations
Executive Summary
Back Matter
Appendkes
References or Works Cited
Glossary
FRONT MATTER
The front matter gives report readers a general idea of the documents purpose and offers
an overview of the types of information they can expect to find and the specifi c items that
will be covered. Because scope and audience vary every time you write a report, it may not
he necessary to include all the front-matter elements described here every single time you
generate a report.
Cover
For protection and professionalism, fom1al reports should he presented in a durable cove r
of vinyl or heavy-stock paper that can he marked \vith the company name and logo. The
title should be visible on the cover, either through a cut-out window or on a label. The
cover does not have a page number.
Title Page
The title page inc1udes the following items, centred on the page and formatted to cove r
most of it from top to botto m: (1) the full tit.le of the report, typed in boldface or uppercase
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letters hut not enclosed in quotation marks; (2) the name of the person and group or
organization for which the report was prepared, prefaced by Prepared for or Submitted to;
(3) the names of the wri1.er(s) or compiler(s). along with their job titles and the name of
their organization, prefaced by Prepared by or Submitted by; and (4) the date of submis-
sion or the date the report is to be distributed. Items 2 to 4 are typed in a combination
o r upper- and lowe rcase letters (known as title case). The ti.tie page is unnumbered hut is
considered page i.
Letter of Transmittal
A letter or memo of transmittal officially introdnces the report and provides a permanent
record of document delivery. It is wri tten on company station ery and sent in me mo fom1
to insiders or in letter fom1 to outsiders. It is usually formatted to allow for a lli~- or
H'2-inch (3.18- or 3.81-centimetre) top margin. A transmittal letter or memo (1) bebrins
>vith a statement indicating the topic of the report and I.he fact that die report is being
transmitted: Hr.re is the rt:port rm privacy issues you req1.u:sted on Novr.mbt:r .1 .. . (2) refers
to the report's purpose and authorization und er which it was written, (3) b riefly d escribes
the report and highlights its com:lusions and recommendations. (4) expresses apprecia-
tion for the assignment and ror special help received from others in its preparation, and
(5) closes with follow-up action and an offer o f assistance in answering questions or with
looking fo rward to discussing the report's details.
Table of Contents
A table of contents shows the report's overall structure, listing all the sections or headings
o r the report in order o r appearance and giving an in itial page numher for each. Prepare
your table of contents last, when the report has been completed. List sections in a column
on the left and indent subsections a few spaces, using leaders (spaced dots) to direct the
reader to the accurate page number. Use lowercase Roman nnmeral~ for front matter and
do not list Table of Contents in your table of conten ts (keep in mind that the idea is to l L~t
every item coming after the TOC) . Word-processing programs allow you to generate a tahle
of contents automatically simply by keying in your repo rt headings. Leave llh to 2 inches
(3.81 to 5.08 centimetres) at the top of 1.he page.
List of Tables/Figures/Illustrations
1f your report contains more dian five tahles, figures. and/or illustrations, they can he
listed in a separate section at the bottom of you r TOC. If the report has many brraphics and
visuals, list them on a separate page immediately following the TOC. "Ust of Illustrations"
is a label that can apply to hoth figures and tables. Ile sure to number tahles and figures
independently and consecutively wi th Arabic nu mbers (meaning that there may he both a
Table 1 and a Figure 1).
Executive Summary
Usually written after yon have completed the report, an executive summary is roughly 10
per cent die length of the report rlt summarizes. It can be read independently o f th e report
hut accurately reflects the report's most important information without using any technical
jargon. Like a well-written preci~. an effective executive summary omits examples and
instead highlights conclusions and recommendations. Sometimes it is the only part o f the
report management will read. Place it on a separate sheet of paper at the encl of the front
matt.er or at the very beginning of the hotly of the report.
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Introduction
The introd uction is both a general gui de and a road map that prepares readers for the rest
of the report. An effective introduction covers t.he follov..;ng topics, any o r which may he
assigned to a separate section.
Purpose or Problem: The purpose statement, usually not more than one or two sen-
tences, iden tifies the rhetorical purpose or the report (to explain, to recommend) as it
applies t.o the problem the report addresses. Provid ing a clear statement of goals gives
read ers a basis for judging the fi ndings and results.
Scope: Sometimes combined with the purpose statement when both are relatively
brief, the scope statement sets out the boundari es of your material and defines the
limitations of the subject. It tells readers how broad or detailed your coverage is and
defines what the report does and does not investigate. Readers may then evaluate the
report purely on the terms you establish so it is less Hkely to he faulted for incom-
pleteness or lack of thoroughness.
Background: Background information puts the report in perspective and may help
to fill in the blanks when a report is consulted years later. Avoid giving readers more
background than they really need. Instead, give a brief review of events that led to the
problem or a description of how other solutions have failed- infom1ation that allows
readers to understand the desibrn and purpose of the report they are about to read.
Organization: Th is subsection maps out the structure of the report.
Sources and methods: If you collected primary data by cond ucting interviews, sur-
veys, or focus groups, outline the procedures you followed and any related details:
who your subjects were; how you chose those subjects; what t.he sampl e size was;
when the collection of data took place; and whether the data you collected is open to
dispute. You can also describe your secondary sources.
Besides coveri ng these topics, you may also choose to say a few words ahout author-
ization (what the agreed-upon terms und er which you are writing the report authorize
you to do or suggest) or define key terms that clarify the subject. Almost unavoidahly,
an introduction will restate info rmation from the exeL1.1tive summary and preview details
from the discussion of findings, so use slightly differen t phrasing to red uce repetition
and redundancy.
Discussion of Findings
The discussion of find ings is the most substantial section of the report. With careful inter-
pretation. and analysis of significant data and research find ings, it presents a discussion of
the results on which your conclusions and recommendations are based. Choose an appro-
priate way to arrange your findings (logically, chronolobr:ically, in orde r of importance, hy
region, o r hy topic) and then use structu ral guideposts such as functional or descriptive
headings to move readers from one section to the next.
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Conclusions
conclusions the section of a report Carefully avoiding bias, use the conclusions section to tell readers what they have been
that mstates the ma1r1 points. waiting to learn- what I.he findings really mean and what the solution to the problem is.
Conclusions repeat, infer fTOm, and pull together points made in the report. In this they
differ From recommendations, which are actions the readers are advised to take. Some
reports present conclusions and recommendations in separate sections while others com
hine them, especially if the sections are short. Together or on their own, conclusions and
recommendations are no place to introduce new mate rial. In fact, every statement you
make must he justified by a point already discussed, with every result li.nked to the pur-
pose and methods of the report. Conclusions make the most seTL~e when they are b>iven
according to the order in which they are presented in the body and numbered or bulleted
for ease of refe rence.
Recommendations
recommendations a section of a The recommendations section makes specific suggestions about what action to take as a
report lhat outlines speclHc actions result of the information you have presented. Your recommendations should he fi.nancially
to be taken.
feasible and appropriate to the problem. Presented one at a time as numbered commands
beginning with a verb, they should flow logically From findings and conclusions and he
supported by the information found there. Number recommendations to make it easier for
readers to discuss them, and use the imperative voice to emphasize actions to he taken,
adding inform ation as required to tell readers how those actions can he impl t'1nent.ed.
Some reports include timetables for putting recommendations into effect.
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BACK MATTER
The had~ matter of a report contains supplementary material that accomplishes the fol-
lowing objectives:
Each pa rt o r the back matte r starts on a new page and should he given an
appropriate lahel.
Appendix
An opti011al element located at the end of a fom1al report, an append ix contai ns special-
ized, sometimes lengthy, information that clari fies and supplements the essential infor-
mation i11 the body of the report. A report can have more than one appendix (labelled
alphahetically as Appendix A, Appendix B, and so forth), hut each appendix can contain
only one type of information- tables, charts, diagrams, illustrations, raw data, computer
printouts, interviews, questionnaires, statL~tical analyses, or technical support.
Works Cited/References
To avoid charges of plagiarism, support assertions, and help readers access source
material easily, cite and document as unobtrusively as possible the sources ror any facts
o r figures you have quoted or referred to in the repo rt . Even if you have summarized
o r paraphrased an idea, you must identiry whose idea it L~ and where it comes from.
The necessity of documenting your source material app lies to any words, ideas, or data
that isn't your own- anything that is not common knowledge o r which does not come
from an internal source (such as company sales figm es and financial statements). As
discussed earlier in this chapter, the APA and MLA styles are two of the most common
documentation methods. Each method has two eleme111ts: parenthetical citations in the
hody of the report and a list (o r references in APA and of works cited in MLA) at the end
of the rep ort.
Parenthetical in-text citations are placed within the text of your report. Whenever parenthetical In-text citations
you quote, paraph ra~e. or summarize material from an external source, usi ng either words notations set within parentheses
that Identify sources of quotations
or ideas that are not yom own, you must add a citation to avoid the risk of plagiarism or Ideas that arc cited In the body
(meaning, literally, "to kidnap," plagiarism is the passing off of someone elses thoughts or of a report.
words as your own). All you have to do to avoid plagiarizing material is to inse rt the right
identifying details in parentheses hefore you close the sentence in which the borrowed
material appears. As you will see from the examples helow, slightly different lnfom1ation
goes within the parentheses depending on whether you use APA or MLA style.
A references or works cited list includes all print, electronic, and media sources cited
ln the report. Source material is listed in alphabetical order by author surname. Entries
for each work include author (or creator), title, and hihliographical detaib (including year
of puhlication).
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TYJl ically, in-text citations are inserted at the end of the clause or sentence in which
the cited infom1at.ion or quotation appears. Punctuation is placed outside the citation . ln
the following example, the citation identifies the source of a direct quotation:
Financial Past Business reported that in 2005 "Toyota produced more than 8 million vehicles,
compared to GM's 9.1 million (Greenwood, 2005, p. 34).
Arrange entries alphahetically by the author's last name or title of the wo rk (if the
author is unknown).
Ilegin each entry flush ldt (i.e., at t.he left margin). Each additional line in a11 entry is
ind ented five spaces or approximately 0.5 inch (1.27 centimetres).
Place the date of publication in parentheses following the authors name (if known).
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Capitalize (1) only the first letter of a title that is not a periodical (e.g., hooks, weh
documents, brochures) and of any prope r 11ouns in that title; (2) 011ly the first lette r of
the title and of any prope r nouns in the title of an article; (3) the first letter of a word
that follows a colon; and (4) the ti.ties of periodicals Gournals, newspapers, magazines).
Italicize the titles of books, journals, newspapers, magazi nes, reports, media produc-
tions, and videos.
Italicize the volume numher (do not use the ahhreviation Vol.) of a periodical and
include the issue number in hrackets immediately after it. Do not use the abbrevia-
tions p. or pp. for articles in scholarly journals or magazines: 15(3), 49- 58.
Include a digital ohject identifier (DOI) for electro11ic sources. If no DOI is availahle,
give the web address from which the material was retrieved: Retrieved from http://stra.t-
ei,tidc.ge.c:a.
Book by one author Author's last name, lnitial(s). (Year of publication). Title of
book. Place of publication: Publisher.
Friedman, T. (2005). The world is flat: A brief historyafthe
twenty-first century. New York: Farrar, Strauss & Giroux.
Book by two authors Author, ln itial(s), & Author, lnitial(s). (Year of publication).
Title of book. Place of publication: Publisher.
Fluegelman, A., & Hawes, J. (2004). Strategies for business and
technical writing. New York: Random House.
Blog or video hlog post Author's last name, lnitial(s) or Screen name. (Date of
publication). Title of post [Type of message or file).
Retrieved from URL
Lessig, L. (2007, November 15). The laws that choke creativity
[Video file]. Retrieved from www.youtube.com/
watch?v=7Q25-S7jzgs
already appears nearhy within the text, then it is possihle to include just the page reference
in parentheses.
Corporate leaders may intentionally obscure their meaning or they may do so out of habit
(Watson 64).
Don Watson theorizes that "corporate leaders sometimes have good reason to obscure
their meaning by twisting their language into knots, but more often they simply twist it
out of habit" (64).
Arrange entries alphabetically hy the author's last name or hy title (if the author's
name is unknown). Single-space en tries; douhlespace between them.
13egin each en try nush left (i.e., at the le~ margin). Indent each additional line in the
entry five spaces.
Type the author's last name followed hy a comma an d his or her first name.
Capitalize the first letter o f each main word in the title of a book, article, web docu-
ment, newspaper, report, magazine, media product.ion, and video.
En close the titles of art.icles h1 quotation marks.
Italicize the titles of hooks, newspapers, magazines, government puhlicat.i.ons, online
e-books, on line magazines, brochures, and journals. In some cases, u nderscoring may
he preferred, so ask your instructor.
Include the volume numher and issue numher of journal articles, inserting a period
between them an d adding the date of publication (if needed) in paren theses: Journal
of Bu.~iness Communication 14.4 (2000): 444-98. Print.
Include the date of puhlication (the volume an d issue numhers can he omitted) of
newspaper and magazine articles.
13ook by on e author Author's last name, First name. Book title. Place of publication:
Publisher, Year of publication. Format.
Watson, Joe. Death Sentences: Haw Cliches, Weasel Words, and
Management-Speak Are Strangling Public Language. Toronto:
Viking Canada, 2005. Print.
J ournal articl e Author's last name, First name. Title of Article." Journal Title
Volume number. Issue number (Year): Pages. Format.
Mohan, R. Limaye. "Some Reflections on Explanation in Negative
Messages. Journal of Business and Technical Communication
15.1 (2001):100- 11 . Print.
Online ar ticle Author's last name, First name. ritle of Article~ Title ofOnline
Periodical. Publisher or sponsor, Date of publication. Format.
Date of retrieval.
Pond, Meredith. "Sales Letters for Success~ Edmonton Smail Business.
Business Publishers, 21 June 2001. Web. 19 Apr. 2009.
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MEMORANDUM
Here Is the report, which you authorized on October 15, about the status of our Summer Arts Program In
its first year of operation. The study Involved a review of program enrolment figures, revenue variances,
staff and classroom expenses, course curriculum design, class size, and student exit evaluations, as well
as an assessment of the program mandate and the current and future educational needs of the greater
Clairmont community.
Although response to the program has been and continues to be extremely positive, the Information
gathered shows that, as a resu lt of substantial registration shortfalls In Its first year of operation, we
should In future expend considerable effort In marketing and refocusing the program to appeal to target
audiences. The action plan outlined In this report reflects the results of research within the college and
outside arts-In-education research.
I am grateful to summer staff Instructors for their Input and feedback and to members of the accounting
department for their assistance In revenue analysis.
It Is my hope that this report will provide you and the college board with the Information needed to
assess the effectiveness of the first year of the Clairmont College Summer Arts Program, to evaluate Its
implications, and to plan for the coming year. Please let me know if you have any questions about this
report or If you need any further Information. I may be reached at (705) 582-21 19 and by e-mail at
<smarceau@clalrmontcollege.ca>. l look forward to discussing the report recommendations and action
plan with you.
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TABLE OF CONTENTS
LIST OF FIGURES
EXECUTIVE SUMMARY
A substantial shortfall In registration revenues has led to this review of the Summer Arts Program at
Clairmont College. The purposes of this report are (1) to assess the continued flnanclal and educational
viability of the program based on findings related to Its first year of operation and (2) to recommend
modifications to curriculum, marketing, and financial structuring that would allow for Its sustainability
and future success.
The Summer Arts Program, encompassing the Summerworks, Danceworks, and Muslcworks divisional
programs, was launched In July 2013 after extensive market research Indicated that the greater Clairmont
community represented a ready market for arts-based educational programming where no comparable
program existed. Based on such models as The Banff Centre, the program was designed to respond to
the needs of adult learners seeking cultural enrichment and personal development In a supportive and
interactive learning environment. The program is aimed at enriching the cultural life of the community
and at providing a segue to certificate, diploma, and degree courses at the college.
The results of this assessment show that a general restructuring of finances and curriculum are needed
to reduce losses and build a market for the program, If In fact It Is to continue.
As a result of our review and assessment, we recommend the following changes to the Summer Arts
Program:
1. Reduce course overheads by Implementing changes to course delivery and eliminating support-staff
positions.
2. Increase class size and reduce the number of hours [per course.
3. Apply strategies to encourage students not to withdraw from courses In which they are enrolled.
4. Restructure course curriculum and revise course descriptions to appeal to broader audiences.
5. Implement an aggressive new marketing strategy that would Involve print and radio advertising
campaigns. Gaining an audience for the program also demands a more proactive approach to
community outreach.
6. Upgrade student services and Improve campus efficiency during the summer months.
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INTRODUCTION
The Clairmont College Summer Arts Program was established to promote standards of excellence In the
fine and applied arts and to provide a community base for personal growth and cultural enrichment In
the Greater Clairmont Area. According to Its mandate, the Summer Arts Program encompasses three
divisional programs: (1) modern and classical dance, Including ballet; (2) jazz, orchestral, and choral music;
and (3) a cross-section of special Interest courses In drama and the visual and media arts.
Inspired by such renowned programs as The Banff Centre, the Summer Arts Program at Clairmont College
Is designed as acatalyst for creativity ("About the Banff Centre; 2005). As an outgrowth of Clairmont
College academic programs, the new arts programming Is founded on established notions, voiced
by visual artists such as Herbert Read, that"the aim of education ought to be concerned with the
preparation of artists (Elsner, 2004). The Special Programs Committee, which was entrusted with the
task of developing programs to promote artists within the broader spectrum of liberal arts education,
subscribes to the view that "there are no guarantees or easy solutions to the complex challenges In
education, but an arts-rich curriculum can provide a1vehicle to self-expression, self-understanding,
self-confidence, creative problem-solving and motivation" (Elster, 2002).
The Special Programs Committee (SPC) had projected that enrolment In the program would be
substantially higher than the actual 2013 registration levels. In allowing for Initial reg istration shortfalls,
however, the SPC had also expected that the program would take several years to establish Itself In the
community and refine Its curri culum to meet the needs oftarget audiences. The purpose of this study Is
to determine how well the Summer Arts Program fulfilled Its mandate and to Investigate underlying
weaknesses In program funding and curriculum development as a basis for assessing possible changes
and the long-term viability of the program. Recommendations for the Increasing revenue and enrolment
will be made based on the results of this study.
This review was Intensive and extensive. It paid particular attention to the following concerns:
Budgetary shortfall
Underperformlng course sectors and curriculum deficiencies
Service deficiencies
Customer satisfaction
The findings of this study will be presented In four categories: (1) registration and revenue; (2) program
structure and student appraisal; (3) program marketing; and (4) summer student services.
The program had 808 registrants. The budgeted number of registrants was 937 (meaning the program
was 129 registrants short of budgeted targets). The diversified Summerworks program accounted for the
bulk of registration, at 89.2 per cent, with the smaller Danceworks and Muslcworks divisions accounting
for only 6.4 per cent and 4.3 per cent of registrations, respectively.
0 Musicworks 4.3%
Danceworks 6.4%
Summerworks 89.2%
Summerworks had 721 registrants, well exceeding Its. projections of 600. Even with the popular demand
for such courses as Canadian Gardening and Creativity In the Visual Arts that necessitated the creation
of additional sections, many courses ran below their anticipated enrolment average that was budgeted
at 12. The average enrolment per course was 10. This unexpected reduction In class size created good
classroom circumstance, but weaker-than -anticipated fiscal returns.
Danceworks had a registration level of 52 (52@ $450 = $23,400) but still fell far short of the projected
80 students. This contributed to a revenue shortfall of S12,600.
Muslcworks performed below expectations. The budget registration for Muslcworks was 251, but the
program had in total 35 registrants@$299 per registration, producing only $10,465 of revenue.
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The figure below represents budgeted vs. actual re.glstratlons by divisional program.
600
500
400
300
200
100
0
Summerworks Danceworks Musicworks
A full breakdown of revenue and expenses Is provided In Appendix A. Total revenues for the Summer Arts
Program amounted to $266,635, with a total shortfall for the program of $30,997. The most substantial
expenses were incurred through casual and overtime labour- the casual fee paid to the Individual who
later converted to the Clerk A3 position ($23,011 ). It Is possible to decrease expenses by ellmlnatlng this
position and by making necessary adjustments to salaries and benefits, particularly by ellmlnatlng the
S11,000 stipends paid to program guest speakers, for a total saving of $4,500. The cost of Marketing Services
-Including the production of brochures and a print advertising campaign-also exceeded projections.
Instead of placing expensive ads In Arts Monthly, Clairmont Life, and Arts Scene at a total cost of $1,700,
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monies could be redirected for a sing le ad In The Globe and Mall, a far more effective venue(@ $800 per
ad), for a total saving of $900.
Student feedback was extremely positive, both In the formal exit evaluation surveys and In Informal
meetings convened at the college earlier this month. Appendix B provides a tabulation of the results from
the evaluation survey Issued at the close of the Summer Arts Program. Over 75 per cent of students who
completed the survey ranked aspects of the program good or better than expected In all areas. This high
approval rating was also reflected In discussions with selected members of the registrant body. Among
former students, there was consensus on the following Issues:
1. Course descriptions and outlines were too general. As a result, the descriptions In the brochure
did not match course outlines, resulting In student withdrawals. Students complained of poor
pre-registration counselling and an unwillingness on the part of registration staff to help them
locate courses that reflected their Interests. Where customer service Is concerned, there Is much
room for Improvement.
2. Courses were too long and too expensive. At 30 contact hours, most courses were too long for
students simply studying for pleasure and personal enrichment, not to pass exams. Students
agreed that 20 hours per course would be optimal.
3. Due to popular demand, the Danceworks program could be modified and expanded to allow for
the Intake of students aged 10- 17. Since September, the Registration Office received over 100
requests for Information on the Danceworks program. Most callers were seeking Intensive
training for younger students In this demographic range.
4. Course start-ups timed to coincide with long weekends discouraged potential registrants. This In
turn led to course cancellations.
While many courses In the program met expectations, some did not. Under-subscribed courses Included
Make 'Em Laugh: Stand-Up Comedy Routines, Art II: German Expressionism, and the entire Muslcworks
program, which fai led to attract sufficient numbers of registrants to make the Intensive workshop format
viable.
Program Marketing
Survey respondents and Interview subjects commented that awareness of the program within the
comm1.1nlty Is limited. Current marketing plans allow for (1) the production of a program brochure,
(2) a limited direct-marketing campaign aimed at Clairmont College alumni, and (3) a modest print
advertising campaign.
1. A substantial number of respondents suggested that the college Increase Its efforts to reach out
to the community throughout the entire year by hosting open houses and arts-related events
that would form a logical bridge to the Summer Arts Program.
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2. Few registrants learned about the program through ads appearing In Arts Monthly, Clairmont Life,
and Arts Scene.
Although summer session degree and diploma courses run at the same time as the Summer Arts Program,
fewer student services are available In June, July, and August. Food services are available on only a very
limited basis, leaving students to depend on vending machines, most of which are located In the student
commons area far from the summer program classroom locations. Neighbouring restaurants are located
at some distance from the main campus.
Commuter students complained about the high cost of on-campus parking. Based on an hourly rate,
parking fees for students enrolled In day-long Intensive courses were prohibitive.
Dmlng the week of July 8-1 2, the physical plant received 12 complaints about the malfunctioning air
conditioning and ventilation system, which forced the cancellation of a class In one documented case.
Non-delivery of audiovisual equipment was also a problem, with five Instructors filing complaints.
These factors contributed to the lowering of student satisfaction with the overall physical environment
and created substantial dissatisfaction among course Instructors.
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During Its flrst year of operation, the Summer Arts Program fulfllled Its mandate to provide quality non-
credit arts programming to the greater Clairmont area. In exit surveys, students rated the program highly,
with more than 85 per cent saying that, on the basis of their experience In the summer 2013 program,
they would study In the Summer Arts Program again and recommend It to their friends. Based on this
feedback and earlier market research, there Is sufficient reason to conclude the program Is sustainable
and worth continuing.
Although the program succeeded In Its delivery of quality educational services, It underperformed
flnanclally. Registration levels In certain course sectors fell slgnlflcantly short of projections. The resulting
budgetary shortfall may jeopardize the future of the program unless substantial changes are made within
the next three months to address these losses. If the program Is to be viable In the future, It will
be necessary to (1) reduce overheads and (2) refocus and streamline program curriculum.
Supported by the findings and conclusions of this study, the following recommendations are offered In
the form of an action plan to Increase reven ue and Improve the marketability of the program.
Flnanclal Actions
1. Redistribute overhead allocations evenly across all summer program courses. This would provide
a more realistic picture of the profltablllty- loss status of each program.
2. Ra lse the maximum number of students per Summerworks course from 16 to 20. Althou gh this
may present challenges In the delivery of curriculum, with lmpllcatlons for customer satisfaction, It
wll I save the direct expenses associated with opening another section (approximately $1,500).
4. Avoid scheduling course start-ups on or Immediately before long weekends. Choosing other
dates would encourage higher registration.
5. Eliminate th e Clerk A3 position from th e Summer Arts Program office. A downsizing of the Special
Programs office would Implement a saving of approximately $31,000 across the three program areas
and reduce the program overhead load.
b) Improve pre-registration counselling through a checklist of questions that can be asked over the
telephone to help prospective students make appropriate course selections.
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c) Revise course descriptions to reflect the specific content and learning outcomes of each course.
d) Hold a one-day Instructors' workshop on teaching standards and Interactive learning strategies to
encourage excellence In pedagogical approaches and delivery methods.
Marketing Actions
1. Develop a more aggressive marketing campaign. Reconcentrate monies on The Globe and Mall, an
effective venue (@$800 per ad), to save $900 over the previous year's advertising costs. Run a short-
term series of strategically placed radio ads. Give the summer program prominence on the Clairmont
College website or enlist graduating students from the COMM354 Web Design course to develop a
related web page. Offer free arts-related events throughout the year to raise the profile and prestige
of the summer program, especially at key times when registration drives are In progress.
2. Become more proactive In terms of community outreach. The success of the Canon-sponsored
Clairmont Photography Contest and the positive reception of a series of free program-related summer
concerts raised the profile of both the program and the college within the community. The launching
of other Initiatives, such as a spring open house, could Increase awareness of the program during the
crucial pre-registration period.
3. Introduce a "flat rate" program for repeat registrants. Close to 20 per cent of last summer's
registrants enrolled In more than one course but were not exempt from having to pay a registration
fee for every course they took. A flat-rate program fee would allow students to take as many courses
as they wished by paying a sing le registration fee of $550.
4. Carry out further market research. Test newly revised curriculum on focus groups drawn from the
community and from among previous registrants.
2. Restructure the Danceworks program. Refocus courses to appeal to a younger audience, aged
10-1 7, through the addition of jazz and hip-hop classes.
3. Restructure the drama workshop. Dispense with the guest speakers at $150 per 90-mlnute session,
for a saving of $1,200 on the afternoon curriculum of the event. We will dispense with the afternoon
special guest speaker. This constitutes a further saving of $2,000 on afternoon curriculum.
4. Consider cunlng the length of some courses from 30 hours to 20 hours. Course-time reduction
would also help to revltallze less popular courses with marginal enrolment that proved popular In our
lnltlal market research.
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5. Offer Saturday Intensive courses and dance- drama workshops. This move would attract a
new audience, one comprising Individuals whose schedules do not ordinarily allow them to take
on-campus daytime courses.
Service-Delivery Actions
1. Improve the physical environment of college facllltles. Begin by upgrading or repairing air
conditioning and ventilation systems so that room temperatures do not exceed a comfortable
23 degrees Celsius.
2. Upgrade student services during the summer months. Issue parking passes to students enrolled
in full-day courses and waive the system of hourly rates. Relocate vending machines so that they're
adjacent to summer program classrooms and lecture halls for easy access.
3. Review equipment-delivery procedures. Implement measures to ensure A/V equipment and other
resources reach classes on time to minimize Inconvenience and loss of Instruction time.
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REFERENCES
"About the Banff Centre for the Arts. (2005). Retrieved from http://www.banffcentre.ca/abouVhlstory
Elsner, E.W. (2004, Oct. 14). What can education learn from the arts about the practice of education?
Journal oflnternatlonal Education and the Arts, 5(4), Retrieved from http://ljea.asu.edu
Elster, A. (2002, Nov. 12). Learning through the arts program goals, features and pilot results. Journal of
International Education and the Arts, 2(7), Retrieved from http://ljea.asu.edu/v2n7
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APPENDIX A
Revenue Breakdown
Student withdrawals:
Registrations
129@$337 ($43,473)
Cancellation fee
129@$32 4,128
(39,345)
Administration fee-$ 12
Relating to SW - 721 x S12 $ 8,652
Relating to MW - 35 x S12 420
Relating to DW - S2 x S12 624
Relating to other programs
($23,701 - $8,652 - $420- $624) 14,005
23,701
5,437
$266,635
Muslcworks Program
(216)@$299 ($ 64,584)
Summerworks Reg lstratlon Excess
121 @$337 40,777
Danceworks Registration Shortfall
(28)@ $4SO (12,600)
$12 Related Registration Fee Amounts
(-216+121-28) = (151)x$12 (1,812)
Unexplained (9,019)
Total ($ 46,902)
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Expenses
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APPENDIX B
Student Exit Evaluation Survey Results
Responses to this survey were provided In confldence to Clairmont College for purposes of program plan-
nlng and Instruction. This survey was administered to students upon course completion. Of a total of 820
studernts enrolled In the summer program, 760 completed the exit survey.
Classroom materials 10 15 60 15
Physical environment 11 30 35 24
Offer weekend or evening Instruction to accommodate students' work schedules and child-care
responsibilities.
Upgrade malfunctioning air conditioning system to ensure a comfortable learnIng environment for aln
students during the hottest month of the year.
Assist course Instructors through effective and efficient delivery of audiovisual equipment.
Extend opening hours of food services or relocate veindlng machines close to classroom locations.
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lntrod uction
Cl Has the problem or report situation been sufficiently analyzed? Does the purpose
statement reflect this analysis?
Cl Does the introduction set the stage for the report? Does it supply information that
brings readers up to speed and guide them through the report?
Findings
Cl Is the problem subdivided for investigation?
Cl Does each heading cover all the material under it? Are al I subheads under a heading in
parallel form?
Cl Is your analysis given in sufficient detail?
Cl Are facts and assertions supported by evidence?
Cl Have you used sources that are reliable and appropriate for the type of information you
are expected to present?
Cl Do you cite your sources using appropriate documentation style?
Cl Is your language moderate and bias-free?
Cl Do v isuals, if they are needed, support and clarify written material, without distortion?
Are they straightforward and clearly labelled?
Cl Have you created a feasible plan that w ill allow you (and, if necessary, your co-writers)
sufficient time and resources for completing the proposal or report?
Cl Have you identified the proposal or report's purpose, method, audience, and content?
Cl Does the document include all the required elements?
Cl Is the writing style appropriate? Does it adhere to your company's guidelines and the
audience's needs?
Cl Does the document use a reader-centred approach?
Cl Is research needed to support the document's content? If so, is the data reliable and
properly cited?
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Proposals and Their Crituia. ln small groups, estah- of eligibility, restrictions on what the money can he
lish r.he application criteria for a provincial gov- used for, and protocols for reporting expenditures
ernment grant that offers assistance to students in at the end of the summer. Exchange criteria with
ope rating a summer husiness. (The maidmi1m grant another group and, on the hasis or the othe r group's
availahle is $1,500.) Consider age restrictions, terms requirements, draft a winnjng proposal.
1. Analyzing Requasts for Proposals. Search business f) A safety-monitor program that relies solely on
classifieds, browse trade journal~. or vL~it company voluntee rs can be successful hecause of the avail-
websites to find an example of an RFP. Note the ahi lity of volunteer monitors and si1pp01t for the
specifications and requirements of the job and create initiative within the student hody.
an outline of the proposal you would submit. Which 4. Formatting Reference Entries. On the hasis of the fol-
headings would he appropriate for the proposal you lowing hihliograph ic information, create appropriate
would have to write? reference entries in APA style.
2. Creating a Work Plan. For any of the case study exer- a) Authors: James W Steelman, Shirley Desmond,
cises in t he next section, prepare a work plan that and LeGrand Johnson
lists the pmhlem/purpose of the report, outlines the Title: Fadng Global Limitatiom
method of conducting research, establishes a tt-i1ta PuhHsher: New York, Rockford Press
tive outline, and sets out a work schedule. Date of publication: 2000
3. Identifying Conclusions and Recommendations. b) Author: Vi rginia Galt
ldentlfy each of the following as either a conclusion Title of Ankle: "Time for some new tips for older
or a recommendation: joh seekers"
a) Begin an in-house dayca re program ope rati ng Title of journal: Globe and Mail
from 8:00 a.m. to 6:00 p.m. five days a week. Date of publication: January 29, 2005
b) Disseminate this report in some form to employ- Page: B9
ees to ensure thei r awareness of our company's c) Author: Jerry Useem
commitment to uphold iL~ ethics and procedures Title of Article: "Conquering Vertical Limits"
policy. Title of Journal: Fortune
c) Over half the respondents use public transit to Date: February 9, 2001
com L111t1te to and from campus at least three days d) Title of Article: "Eighty Percent of Comptinies that
a week. Outsource HR Ftmctions Wm1ld Do So Again"
d) Recruit student leaders to o rganize, implement, Online Source: The Conference Board
and staff a walk-safe program. Date of publication: April 15, 2004
e) The effectiveness of RPG's ethics program dur- Date of retrieval: February 2 7. 2005
ing 1.l1e fi rst year of implementation is most evi- URL: <www.conference-board.org/utilities/
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in the program and the 2,498 contact~ employees S. Distinguishing Informal and Formal Reports. Identify
made through the various channels available to the following writing situations as requiring either
them regarding et.hies concerns. informal reports or formal reports:
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a) You have heen asked to investigate the auto c) Pit Stop, a chain of 1,900 convenience stores,
mation of selected HR functions, including t.ech- is conside ring taking the fast-food trend a step
L1.ologies, training, resources, maintenance, and IT further hy incorporating several brnnds into its
support. You must report your findings and make st.rateb'Y You have heen asked hy the chief of fran-
recommend ations to the direct.or of HR. chise and marketing operations to investigate and
b) You have attended the three-day general meeting make recommendations on three quick-service
and conference of certified management account restaurant franchises with potential 1.0 share space
ants held in Edmonton , March 27- 29. Your with you r convenience-store outlets.
cleparr.ment.al manager has asked you to Hle a trip
report to update him on your activities.
your experiences and observat.ions. Were you greeted which to base a report and create an out.line I.hat con
when you an-ived? Was the st.ore clean and wdl tains functional or descriptive headings.
maintaiL'ted? Did a sales associate ask about yom a) Should online retailers complle customer profiles
clot.hing needs? Did the associate suggest ot.her items to help market t.heir products?
in which you might be interested? Was the sales asso b) Are on-site corporate daycare programs worth the
ciate polit.e, courteous, and helpful? Was t.he fit.ting cost?
room you 11sed dean and well maintained? Did the c) Can mobile telework- working from home or
sales associate return and offer to find other it.ems car- increase productivity?
or garment sizes for you? H you made a purchase, d) Do people over forty have trouble Anding jobs in
was it processed quickly and efficient.ly? You make infom1al.ion technology? Is ageism ri fe in I.he IT
several visits in order to arlive at a rair and proper industry?
assessme:nt. Consider if previous complaints about e) What coaching and development should he
customer service were j ust.ified and make recommen- provided to manage rs preparing performance
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Direct your report to Cindy Latimer, vice-president of f) What are the disadvantages of outsourcing?
in-store operations. g) Can temporary pop-up stores play a role in the
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plagiarism-resources/the-plagiarism-self-test/ www.aircanada.com/en/about/investor/reports
plagiarism.self-test/index.asp .html
8. Analyzing Annual Reports. Read Motley Fool's "How Canad ian Tire Annual Reports:
to Read Annual Reports" and r.he Annual Reports http://corp.canadiantire.ca/EN/INVESTORS/
Library "Tips ror Reading an Annual Repo rt." FINANCIALREPORTS/Pages/AnnualReports.aspx
www.fool .co.uk/school/200l/schO11205 .h tm IBM Annual Reports:
www.zpuh.com/sf/arl/arl-read.html www.ihm.com/annnalreport/
Then, in a small group, analyze one or the annual Lululemon Athletica Inc. Annual Report:
reports from the list below, using the following ques- http://files.shareholder.com/dowuloads/LULU/
tions to jump-start your analysis: 2360358439xOxSl193125-13-1 18393/1397187I
\Vhat are the identifiab le sections in the annual ftling.pdf
report? Tim Horton's Annual Report:
How do photographs, infographics, and other http://annualreport.timhortons.com/
graphical elements relate to the text or the report?
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Prepare for presentations and briefings by 5. Master effective public-speaking skills and
analyzing the occasion and profiling your apply strategies to Increase confidence.
audience.
6. Handle questions and conduct follow-up.
2. Gather material, select content, and
7. Organize, manage, and participate In
strategically structure your presentation.
meetings effectively.
3. Identify four methods of delivery.
8. Communicate by telephone productively.
4. Incorporate visual and multimedia aids,
9. Deal with the media and get your message
Including fllp charts, handouts, overhead
across.
transparencies, and PowerPolnt or Prezl slides.
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AS SMALL BUSINl!SS OWNERS taking part In The Globe and Malts networking challenge
know only too well, the secret to a great pitch Is really no secret at all. Attendees had a
chance to learn about pitch styles from the challenge's four finalists, but they also got to
share their thoughts on what makes a pitch successful. Colin Bell, managing partner at
Recyclesmart Solutions, says that the trick Is
to zoom out, pretend that you've never been In your business, and you have to explain
It to someone who has no Interest. They don't care about your business but you have
to get them Interested because the challenge Is for entrepreneurs, we're so Into our
busl1ness, we're so Inside It, so the really big trick Is to come out and pretend that you've
never heard of your business but want to become Interested In It:''
According to Cathy Miine, co-owner of Because You Said So .. . Promotions and Events,
"The Importance of a pitch Is to be clear, concise, to the point-exactly what you want to
cover and cover It off qulck." 2
The elevator pitch or speech Is among the newest arnd suddenly the most common of
business genres. The speaker has sixty seconds or so-the approximate time of an elevator
ride - to catch an Investor's attention with a concise, strategically planned description
that emphasizes how the company works. It Identifies the product or service being sold,
Its market, the revenue model (how money will be made), and the company's leaders,
competitive advantage, and competltors.3
Oral Presentations
The ability lo speak well on t.he job is as important as the ability lo write effectively.
Because so much daily work activity is carried out through speech rather than the w-rit-
ten word alone, oral communication and public-speaking skills can be critical to career
advancement, whatever your job duties may be. ln fact, successful oral presentations can oral presentation an Informative
enhance your reputation within an organization. They represent valuable opportunities to or parsuaslvc spocch delivered
using only notes and visual aids to
sell your ideas and demonstrate both your competence and your worth to your employers guide the speaker's performance.
and co-workers.
The prospect of speaki ng in front of others, however, can be nerve-racking. lt is
good to ..-emember that giving a presentation is in many ways similar to writing a docu-
ment and draws on the same o rganizational strategies and audience adaptations with the
same hasic purposes to inform, persuade, and promote goodwill. There are al~o some
distinct differences to keep in mind, as well as ones that differentiate live public speak-
ing from a recorded performance. In public speaking, there are no pause or playback
features. As far as the audience is concerned, a present.er has only one chance to make
a positive impression and get the message across correctly and persuasively. listeners,
after all, don't have the luxu ry of being able lo review a message as they would when
rereading printed text. Ideas and information must therefore be delivered for easy com-
prehension and retention so that listeners will not only remember what was said but also
know or believe a particular thing or be motivated to act on that infom1ation once the
presentation ls over.
Oral present.ations should (1) be simply structured, (2) be arranged around a specific
purpose, and (3) clearly identify the dominant idea listeners are meant to retain. A
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presentation will have greater impact ir supporting details are simplified and visuals are
designed fo r readahilit.y at a glance. The advantage of the spoken word is that it pro
vokes an immediate reaction and allows for instant feedhack. listeners' non-verhal cues--
their moment-hy-moment reactions--can help you gauge and modify your perfom1ance;
their com ments and questions will, in t.he end, tell you if you succeeded in getting your
message across.
Why will they he there and what will they expect from you?
What. is their attitude toward you and your suhject? Will there he resistance? How can
you counter any resist.ance?
What is your organizational role and relationship to your audience? Is yoUT rank in
the organization ahove or helow that of your listeners?
Will there he dedsion-make1s in the audience? What are their concerns?
Are there tensions o r conBicts within the audience?
How knowledgeahle will audience mt'1nhers he in the suhject area? How much should
you e>.'Plain?
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STRUCTURING PRESENTATIONS
The structure of your presen tation is important. Without t.he integration and coherence
that good organization provides, listeners can easily lose the thread of your argumen t and
miss importan t points. A simple, effective structure that accommodates th ree t.o five key
ideas is the best way to keep your listeners with you. Three common types are suitable for
an oral p resen tation:
logical structure. Any presentation worth listening to must be logical in its approach.
Listeners should be able to easily understand how each point you make relates to yotir
purpose. You can use signpost words (my first point, my next P"int) to gu ide listeners
through your presentation to show how what you have said relates to what comes next.
Narrative structure. The ability to tell an accurate:, credible, and compelling story
can innuence the acceptance o r policies, proced ures, and ideas. At the management
level especially, this skill is valued. Turn ing your information into a good story can
grab attention and make what you have to say memorable. Because statL~tics alone are
abstract and often hard to grasp, narratives provide an important way to ground the
in foi:mation. ln order for a storyline structure t.o work, however, the st.ory itself must
be well told, interesting, and relevant to your objectives.
Formal structure. Skilful handling of repetition can aid meaning and retention.
This is the idea beh ind the most common structure: for presen tations, with iL~ th ree
familiar divisions:
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Any informative presentation should contain supporting details- facts, statistics, and
other forms of evidence- to back up your main points. Visual aids help t.o show l L~teners
what you mean, worki ng on the old assumption that a picture is worth a thousan d words.
2. Body: The body of your presentation should develop your main theme and focus your
audience's thinking. Always base your content on the most recent data availahle-
fresh infom1ation usually gets the most at.tent.ion. Whether your presentation is per-
suasive or informative, you should balance information with context and analysis so
that your talk is more than just a torrent of facts. Give specific examples and offer
properly attributed quotations from respected authorities, paraphrased if necessary
in lanb'l.iage the audience will easily understand. Anticipate qnestions and incorporate
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the answers into your presentation. Depending on your material, you can present
youi: ideas and hring together facts in a varkty of ways:
chronological order (develop a timeline)
topical/logical order (relate parts t.o the whole or introd uce poinL~ in order of
importance or reverse order)
spatial order (map ideas visually)
journalistic quest.ions (ask Who? What? Where? When? Why? and How?)
prohlem- solution (demonstrate that a prohlem el'dsts and offer a solution or range
0 rsolutions)
exclusion of alternatives (arb>ue for the remaining option)
causal order (explain a series of causes and effects)
comparison/contrast (base assessment on si milarities and diffe rences)
pro-con (review the arb>uments for and against a certain thing)
process (identify a sequence of steps or stages)
No matte r which method you choose, you should dearly ann ounce each point as
it comes so that listeners will know when you have completed one point and hegun
another.
3. Conclusion: Don't simply stop talking and walk away. You should end hy helping
your audience understand the significance of your presentation and remember its
main points. Your closing comments should he a hriief summary developed in one of
the following ways:
Restate the main issues you want the audience to remember.
Rest.ate the point you started with in order to franne your presentation.
Issue a challenge or call to action (this method is suitable for persuasive
presentations).
Ask a quest.ion for I.he audience t.o think ahout.
Your conclusion should bring the presentation full circle and leave 1.he audience
with a positive impression of yon and your ideas, so never end i.t prematurely j ust
because you are rattled or nervous. Your introduction and conclusion may he the last
parts of your presentation you write, but they are also the most crucial in helping
your audience understand the value of your ideas.
Tltle - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
I. INTRODUCTION
Transition - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
II. BODY
Never allow visual aids to dominate so much that they prevent you from connecting
with your audience or getting your message across.
Use aids sparingly for maximum impacti don't confuse your audience by using more
than 12 visuals per presentation.
Make your visuals consistent in size, font, contrast, and spacing. Type should be bold-
faced and no smaller than 30-point size.
Limit the amount of information on each visual to avoid clutter and confusion: use
simple graphs and charts to show data trends and include no more than two illustra-
tions per visual, no more than five or six numbered or bulleted points, and no more than
35 words on seven lines.
Prep<ire each visual carefully and proofread it for accuracy.
Give each visual aid a title that makes a point.
Test audiovisual equipment in advance and check the optics of the room to ensure that
all participants have unobstructed views of the materials you plan to use.
Put up your visual aid only when you are ready to talk about it, and give your audience a
few moments to digest the information it supplies.
Comment on- but do not read from- what you show, and match your delivery to the
content of the visual. Remove the visual as soon as you are finished with it.
Handouts
Distrihuting handouts that summarize your presentation plan or provide a permanent rec
ord of graphs and other data can greatly enhance the audience's understanding and reten-
tion. Typical handoul<; include out.lines, articles, hrochures, summaries, speaker n.ot.es, and
even printed copies of PowerPoin t slides (featuring two, three, four, six, or nine slides per
page). It is important to time 1.he distrihution of material<; for minimal disrupt.ion. Unles.<;
participants need the handout to understand what you say, such materials should. he given
out in advance or at the end, not in the middle of your presentation , when the sound of
rattling papers can drown you out.
Overhead Transparencies
Well-planned overhead transparencies add interest and help to clarify the message
you deliver in your presentation. Effectively designed transparencies communicate
quickly and clearly. T here are several important guidelines to follow in creating
overhead transparencies.
FIGURE 12.1
Ineffective Transparency
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FIGURE 12.2
Effective Transparency
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FIGURE 12.3
har, and line charl~) . You can design slides that not only incorporate text, graphics, and
artwork hut also include audio clips, animation, and video features. PowerPoint's build
capahility enables you to add, highlight, or reposition text and incorporate visual effecl~
right up until the time you present. Once you have designed and assembled your slide
show, you can take the further step of publishing yom presentation on the In ternet,
through plat.forms such as Slideshare, or your companys int.ranet. lf you are distribut-
ing your presentation online, add a voice narration by usi ng Windows Movie Maker and
a microphone. ln Keynote, voice narration can be recorded and the file converted to a
movie.+ Converting your presentation into a PDF file will automatically embed audio and
video files in a single compressed file.
Use templates. PowerPoint comes stocked with templates for constructing slides template a stored p;ittern for
quickly and easily. These combine borders, fonts, and colours fo r optim al visual a document from which new
documents can b<! made.
effects and offer guidance on a variety of layouts. 0~1ce you gain confidence in using
PowerPoint, you can customize templates to suit your needs.
Choose a colour scheme. The colours of your slides should relate similar elements,
high.light important points (warm colours are good for this purpose), and pem1it
good visib ili.ty with available room lighting. Use dark backgrounds with light text
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only in darkened rooms. Dark text on Light hackbrrounds is hest for well-Ht rooms.
Restrict yourself to four or fi.ve colours and give thought to how colour and vihrall!:y
might change when projected .
Keep slides simple. Each slide should have a maxim um of six lines of text and six
words per line. Use holdface, sans serif type (e.g., Helvetica) in consistent point sizes
for easy readahility. Cramming too much information on a slide makes it difficult
for your audience to read and l L~ten at the same time and is an annoying source of
eye strain; interspersing or combining text with visual elements can allow vi.ewers to
ahsorh information more readily
Follow the eight-second rul e. Yoiir viewers should he able to comprehend the info r-
mation on the slide in no more than eight seconds.,
Make strategic use of images. An image, especially a well-chosen photograph (one
of at least 150 dpi), can cmwey an idea or concept better than text alone can. Use
on line photo editors (such as Pixlr or Fotoflexer) to co rrect images. If a slide contains
text and an image, you can give emphasis to the form er hy using rese rve type (e.g.,
white type on a black hackground) to b'llide the viewers eye first to the text and then
to the image. Use a photo credits slide at the end of your presentation to acknow-
ledge sources.
Make data graphics clear, concise, and easy to understan d. Seen from a distance,
the detail on data graphics and tables may he difficult to make out. To a void this
problem, do the follO\ving:
Use a dear font for the title and labels.
Sim plify data and limit the amount of detail.
Make judicious and consistent use of solid colour while avoiding distracting, busy-
looking hackgrounds that can interfe re with the design o r your slides.
Insert citations at the hottom left of the graphic to clearly identify the data\; source.
Acknowledging your sources gives you more credibility as a presenter.
Integrate m edia, such as videos and podcasts, with care. Don't include media ele-
ments for the sake of appearing tech savvy Make sure that items add to the content of
your presentation and won't distract or frustrate your audience.
Put titles on slides for easy reference. Using tides will help you find slides easily
d uring your presentation. lf you plan to save your presentation, name your files so
that you will remember what they contain.
Don't use too many slides. A slide marathon can induce boredom and put your
audience to sleep. CorL~ider the amount of information your audience can ahsorh in
the allotted time. Count on spending two or three minutes discussing each slide.
Create an agenda slide. A list of hyperlinked topics pertai ning to specific.: areas of
your presentation will help your audience grasp where you are in your presentation.
Include a conclusion and a references slide. Like a written document, your
PowerPoint presentation must contain a conclusion and citations of any information
taken from other sources.
Use uansitions and animation. Effects such as dissolve, fade, vortex, or wipeout
keep the eyes of your audience focused on the screen hetween slides. Reveal hulleted
items one at a time so that audience members won't he tempted to read ahead. You
can also dim previous items so that the audience doesn't linge r on a point for too
long. T.t is usually hest to use one transition effect consistently rather tharu to over-
stimulate viewers with an excessive use of animation.
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Proofread the slides before your presentation. lf you are printing the slides to use
as handouts, print a copy in advance to make sure there are no errors.
Use the "Slide Sorter" and "Outline View" to review your presentation. These
elemenL~ allow you to see the structure and big picture of your present.at.ion and
reorganize slides easily. Sllde Sorter can help you gauge the flow of your presenta-
tion and its brraphical elemenL~; with Outline View you can see charts on the slides
in miniature.
Produce speaker notes as reminders. Notes will help you remember what to say
ahom each slide. You can set up notes to appear on a. second monitor or you can print
them. When printed, each page will show the slide on the top half and the accom-
panying prompt notes on the bottom half. Consider using these notes as handouts.
Back up your work. Don't let your time and effort in developing a presentation go to
waste because of a system failure. Copy everything to a USB flash drive or a Zip disk o r
write your files to a recordable CD. Take printouts of your slides to your presentation
for ready reference if your equipment fails.
Rehearse the slide show. To ensure your slide show fits the allotted time, you can
do a dry run and have PowerPoint record the timing. You can then edit or eliminate
slides as needed.
Never read from a slide. Maintain eye contact with. the audience as you explain and
amplify each slide you display. Never assume that a slide is self-ei..1Jlanatory or will
compensate for weak content.
Keep the cognitive style of PowerPoint in mind. Many organization..~ now favour
PowerPoint reports over traditional hardt:apy ones. However, this preference is not
without implications, especially regarding the accuracy and reliab ility of i11fom1a-
tion presented through this channel. American statistician and Yale professor Edward
R. Tufte has studied the cognitive style of
PowerPoint and noted some potential prob-
lems in the way it shapes and foreshortens
thought and evidence. Its audience-oriented
content, low spatial resolution, deeply hier-
arch ical single-path structu re, and conspicu- For details on PowerPoint features, see
ous use of decoration reduce the analytical Microsoft's"What's New in PowerPoint
quality of presentations and can sometimes 2013": http://goo.gi/TLMQOY
corrupt statistical analysis. Savvy presen t-
ers sho uld keep these potential weaknesses
in m ind and ensure that excellent content ls
clearly presented.1
PREZI
Developed in 2008, Prezi is a cloud-based presentation software that has begun to ri val
PowerPoint in popularity. Prezi users present their ideas on a virtual canvas and, th rough
a common tool palette, have the ability to rotate images, pan and zoom, or edit an object.
Objects are plotted and connected on navigational sequences or paths, which give the
presentation its linear sequence. The software also enables presenters to show viewers the
"big picture" and to in troduce elements of surprise for a more engaging viewer expe rience
if they follow these steps:
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Reduce clutter wit11 invisible frmnes. The "Draw Invisible Frame" option helps in
organizing content without. adding a convt:nt.ional frame.
Layer text and ohjects. Objects can layered by sendi ng them backward or forward
with the "Transformation" tool.
Use rotation and siz;e to co nvey meaning. Rotation can be used to emphasize chan-
ges in perspective, thinking, or understanding about a particular topic. The size of
objects can be increased for :greater emphasis.
Draw frames in a 4:3 aspect ratio. Th is ratio allows you to see how your images will
appear when projected.
Make your transitions smoo ther. Ensi.ire contim1ity and coherence hy segueing from
one path poin t to the next, showing an overview
at rei,'Ular in te rval~, creating path points that are
not long distances apart, and exercising restraint in
using rotation-"
Watch this tutorial to learn about This program offers users enhanced storytell-
many of Prezi's features: http:// ing capabilities and audiences a somewhat more
goo.gl/cq9fY2 dynamic presentation experience than PowerPoint
does. However, Prezi has been criticized for the
somewhat diso1ienting and dizzying effect that can
result [wm overuse of the zooming user interface.
METHODS OF DELIVERY
Whkhever met.hod of delivery you choose for your presentation, it should bring out the
best in your material and not call attention to iL~elf at the expense of what you have to say.
The followi ng methods are the most common ways of deliveri ng a speech to a group:
1. Manuscdpt Method: When, you have to present extensive or complex data, with no
margin for misinterpretation, you may need to prepare a script that can be read from
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in full. Because it may he difficult to keep an audience with you a.~ you focus on the
printed page, make an extra effort to maintain as much visual contact with the audi-
ence as possible, looking up as you begin an important point or semence. The script
iL~el f should he typed in large letters and tripled-spaced for ea.~y readahili.ty at a glance.
Rem.ember that text read aloud can sound bming and expressionless due to flattened
innection, so try to inject some life into your voice hy changing your tone appropri-
ately and marking your sc1ipt to indicate where sped.al expression is reguired.
2. Memorization: While memorizing a speech can enliven the cormectio n with the
audLence, this met.hod can also backfire if you find yourself struggling to recall what
you planned to say. listeners can easi.ly detect slip-ups and ex11ressions made stale
from constant repetition . Consequently, the focus is not on what you have to say hut
on your inability to remember it. Unless you have years of acting ex11erience, you may
want to limit yoursetr to memorizing the general sh.ape o r your presentation, its key
points, and your opening remarks instead of every word you plan to deliver.
3. Impromp tu Speaking: Other situations -an info rmal gathering or celehration-
might call for a short impromptu speech, made on the spur of the moment without Impromptu speaking a delivery
the aid of prepared notes or the benefit of advance notice. Listeners will not expect method In which the speaker
makes remal1cs without the aid of
new info rmation or specialized knowledge, only the ahili.ty to put a new spin on prepared notes.
something you already know. A few pleasant, well-chosen remarks, delivered in less
than two minutes, are usually all that is required.
4. Extemporaneous Method : Most oral presentations benefit from a combination of
thoughtful preparation and a spontaneous, natural delivery style that engages the
audience and holds its interest. Somewhere betwee n ad libbing (which leaves too
much to chance) and reading aloud word for word (which can lull listeners to sleep)
L~ extemporaneous speaking- a form of delivery that sounds fresh and cmnfortahle extemporaneous speaking a
yet maintains a sense of or<ler from the planning you have done. method of delivery In which the
speaker relies on notes rather than
Worki.ng with memory aids, such as small cue cards, can boost your confidence manuscript memorization.
whe11 speaking in puhlic. They are often just enough to jog your memory, giving you
the prompting you need so you can expand on the details. You should he ah le to fit an
outline of your presentation on a single card, along wi.th any guotations or statistics,
lettered a~ large as possible i L1 hold illk and highlighted ror quick refe rmce. All addi-
tional card can he used for each main section of your prest:ntation, but don't make the
mistake of wri ting out your speech in full. The purpose of this memory tool is simply
to prompt you to your next main point. If you have had sufficient practice, you may
he ahle do without the cards altogether. The immediacy your material gai11s from
extemporaneous delivery helps to ensure your message gets across, whether your pur-
pose is to inform or pe rsuade your Listeners.
REHEARSING A PRESENTATION
Practice sessions can help you r delivery go more smoothly by red ucing nervousness,
improving perrom1ance, a11d giving you the opportunity to judge your ti me and refine
your content. Once you have drafted your presentation and prepared your visual aids, you
are ready to practise the present.ation itself.
Practise aloud on-site or set up conditions that closely resemble those in which you
will be speaking. Familia rize yourself with using your vL~ual aids, integrating them
and notillg how lollg it will take to introduce each item alld explain a particular poillt.
Time yourself. Deliver your speech aloud, staying within the time pe rmitted to you
and noting where to pause. Make any adjustments, cutting out or adding material to
ensure your presentation is the right length.
Master your topic. Know your material well enough to be able to speak confidently
wi thout relying word for word Olla script. Overp reparing by writing out your presen-
tation in full and then memorizing it can kill spontaneity. Your delivery will be livelier
if you speak from a note card that helps you familia rize yourseU wi th the sequence
of the material. Don't count on your abili ty to wing it or ad lib your way th rough an
entire presentation.
Record yourseU or ask a friend to listen to your presentation and give you feedback.
Rehearse in front of a mirror. Video yourself to detect mannerisms that might he dis-
tracting. Aim to develop a well-pitched speaking voice.
Get a feel for the room. Inspect the seating arrangement and, if you plan to use them,
make sure the sound system and audiovist.ial eqt.1ipment are working properly. Set up
or position a screen for optimal viewing.
Learn stress-reduction techniques. Because shallow hreathillg can rriake you feel dizzy,
breathe deeply several times before you begin. Visualize your success as a speaker. In
the days or hours leading up to your presentation, you may find it helpful to try
these techniques:
Practise breathing from your diaphragm (the muscular part of your respiratory sys
tem) with a simple exercise. Lie on your hack and place your hand o n your stom
ach. With your mouth closed, inhale through your nose and feel your stomach
rise; exhale slowly, and feel your stomach fall. Try to spend the same length of time
exhaling as inh aling, counting to yourself if you have to. Once you are comfort.able
\vit.h the technique, practise while sitting in a chair. You can do this exercise incon
spkuously while you are waiting to he called to speak.
Attune yourself t.o y01.1r body's tension patterns by doing a muscular relaxation
exercise. Lying on the fl oor, clench and unclench each muscle group several ti mes,
starting wi th your right and left fisL~ and progressing Lo your forearms, shoulders,
neck, and so on. Focus OT.1 the difference between tension and relaxation.
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DELIVERING A PRESENTATION
When the time comes to deliver your presen tation , make eve ry effort to be at your best
and project a poL~ed, professional image. If public speaking makes you nervous, put mi nd
over matter and focus on your material and rapport with the audience. Stay in control
o r the situation rather than allowing it to con trol you. Being confident and speaking in
an animated way, with genuine enthusiasm for your topic , can give your words staying
power. Here are a rew tips for overcoming nervousness and reaching your audience:
1. Dress appropriately. It is important to look the part if you want to have credibility
and be taken se ri ously Wear comfortable, professional-looking clothing and adjust it
in private beforehand (e.g., straightening a tie or ski rt) so you don't appear dishev-
elled. Check your brrooming for tell tale signs of sloppiness (such as stains or stray
hairs) and remove any large pieces of jewellery that might inte rfere with a micro-
phone, should you require one.
2. Arrive early. Allow time before the presentation to familiarize yourself with your sur-
roundings. Test the acoustics and decide where you can position yourself to be visible
to the entire audience.
3. Mai ntain good posture and move in a relaxed, controlled , natural way. Make an
effort not to appear stiff and mechan ical, like a robot. If you remain seated during a
presentation , sit without slumping in orde r to im prove your voice projection. H you're
on your feet to speak, stand up straight and relax your shoulders. You can take a step
or two to one side ror emphasis at key transitional points; other.vise, stand without
swaying from side to side. Avoid unnecessary hand gestures (such as waving, fidget-
ing, or jamming hands in pockets). The same goes fo r inappropriate facial expressions
(exaggerated grinning or grimacing) or anything that might he distracting.
4. Pause to collect yourself before beginning. Adjust your notes, take a breath, main-
tain your poise, and take control of the situation. Look at the audience, not at your
notes, as you make your opening remarks. Commit the first minute of your presenta-
tion to memory so you can speak unaided.
5. Maintain eye contact and use it to build rapport a11d gauge audien ce interes t. The
eyes of your audience members are a barometer of their interest, telling you if the audi-
ence is involved and understands you. Listeners stari ng at the noor and looking around
are visual cues that your aud ience has tuned out. 1t may take time to get comfort.able
\vith your audience, so start by looking for a fiiendly face and making eye cont.act for
a few seconds hefore you move on to someone else. Because scoping out an audience
all at once can make you appear nervous, establish diTect eye contact with a number of
people in your audience and occasionally glance at the whole group while speaking.
6. Avoid long sentences and polysyllabic words. Use concrete language and short,
active-voice sentences that follow natural, con versa tiona1 speech patterns.
7. Speak in a clear, audible voice, hut don 't shout. Maintain reasonable volume and
aim for good, natural voice projection , gauged to the size of the audience and venue.
Keep your head up and open your mouth slightly wider than in normal speech. Th is
is a good way to prevent yourself from mumbling. [f your voice won't he amplified,
ask "Can you hear me at the back of the room?" as you begin .
8. Pace yourself accordingly. Slow dmvn slightly ror emphasis and speed up sligh tly to
convey enthusiasm, hut always keep nervousness in check. Speak slowly enough to
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enunciate words clearly and prevent them from running together. lf you are running
out of time, don't speed up so much that listeners cannot follow what you are saying
or mistake your haste for nervousness. You can make your content flt into the time
you have left hy editing your material as you go.
9. Shape your phrasing and use inflection to give meaning and add interest. Your
pitch- o r tone of voice-should sound natural and match your content. Use a down
ward in flection, an emphasis at the end of sentences, 1.0 counteract the monotone that
results from nervousness and to empha_c;ize key poinl<;. Never phrase a statement like
a question by raising your voice at the end. This hahit can make you sound uncertain
and nervous, sapping your listeners' confid ence in what you have to say. Speak with
conviction, as though you helieve in what you are saying, to project your confidence
and credibility.
10. Never use slang or bad grammar. Your credibility is on the line- speaking in an
unprofessional way is the fastest way to lose it.
11. Pause briefly t.o collect your thoughts and creat.e emphasis. Don't resort to Allers
or verbal tics (such as um , like, and ah). Plan your transitions ahead of time so that
you can move easily from one topic to the next.
12. Remember that you are a living, breatl1ing human being, not a statue. Don't stand
as if transfixed by your audience. Rt'1Tlain calm and poised and remt'1Tiher to breathe
(from the diaphragm rather than taking small gulps of air). Animate your delivery hy
integrating voice and gestures, leavi ng one hand free to point to vLual aids. Gesture
and move your body when you need to shift to major points. Ile professional hut let
your personality shine through.
13. Bring your presentation to a close. Thank your audience and make materials avail-
able to them. Take questions and make yourself availahle for follow-up discussion,
if necessary.
HANDLING QUESTIONS
Questions from the audience can help you gauge the effect and outcome of yoiir presenta
tion and give you a second chance to get your message across. Audience members may
wan t to ohtain additional information, get clarification on a point you made, o r express
another point of view.
How you deal with questions depends on the formality of your presentation and
the rapport you have with your audience. When speaking to a large audience, you can
usually hold questions to the end. A question peri od afterwards can help to eliminate
interruptions that can reduce momentum. During infom1al presentations, you LTiay pause
for questions at intervals, allowi11g you to check that the audience is still following you.
Inviting spontaneous quest.ions keeps audience LTiembers involved and prevents them
from hecom ing too passive.
As you begin your presentation, make it clear how, if at all, you intend to hand le
questions. In taking questions, stay in control so that the interaction is productive, not j ust
a free-for-all:
1. listen carefully to the entire question. lf a question is confused or hard to hear, ask
the questioner to repeat it or repeat or paraphrase it yourself for the audience. Th L~
practice has the added heneAt of huying you time if you have to consider or formulate
your answer, hut don't automatically repeat eve ry question that is asked of you.
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TEAM-BASED PRESENTATIONS
Worki ng together in a group of two or more can enhance the scope and complexi ty of
a presen tation , but it can also make the presentation mo re di fficu lt t.o plan and execute.
When there is a lack o f coord ination , speakers might end up contrad icting or rep eating
each other o r not coven ng key topics. The p resen tation can lose i.Ls focus and clarity Such
prohl erns can be avoided with p roper p lanning and team effort.
Come to an agreement about who will cover which topic areas (conducting research,
providing visual materials and handouts) and decide how the group will be governed
(by majority rule, by consensus, or by shared leadership).
Establish ground rules for the group and give priority to presentation development
meetings.
Develop a work plan and set deadlines, working backward from the date of the
presentation.
Know what opinions each person will express to better prepare you to deal with ques-
tions and avoid controversy; agree how questions are to be handled.
Allow time for rehearsals; plan the use of visual aids and how each person can help
others use them; coordinate al I presentation parts and visuals for consistency; and iden-
tify handover cues when one person takes over from another.
Appoint a team leader to introduce speakers and help the group maintain its focus.
Use previews, transitions, and summaries to help the audience understand how parts of
the presentation interrelate. Provide a bridge to the next presenter with an introduction
such as "Vanessa will now discuss time management."
Adhere strictly to the allowed time for each speaker, but be flexible enough to accom-
modate last-minute changes and defer to the expertise of other group members.
SPECIAL-OCCASION PRESENTATIONS
From time to time, business people are in volved in award -ceremony presen tations, accep t
ances, and commemorations. Sp eaking for themselves or thei r companies, they may be
asked to do the followi ng:
in trod uce or than k speakers/award recipien ts
propose toasts
give im promptu or a fter-d in ne r speeches
deliver keynote addresses
spedaloccaslon presentation An effective special-occas ion presentation is tail ored to the specific needs of an
a speech made In appreciation, event. As a special-occasion speaker, you should anticipate what the moment requires
In acceptance of an award, In
commemoration of an even~ or by you to say and he conscious of tine impression you create . ln making an introduction, for
way of lntroductlon. example, you should focus atten tion on what is to come, n ot on yourself. If puhlic speak
ing scares you, you can follow a simple scrip t:
Show t.hat it is an actual pleasure and a privilege- not a chore- to perform the
introducl.ion. Your remarks should he congenial, graci ous, brief, and most of all genuine,
based on concrete facts rather than generalities.
O Does the opening device spark interest and engage the audience?
O Does the introduction establish credibility or provide background, as needed?
O Are ideas and approaches adapted to the audience's needs?
0 Do presentation methods involve the audience?
0 Does the degree of formality suit the situation?
O Does the conclusion provide a compelling sense of closure?
Content
0 Do facts and information relate to the presentation's purpose?
O Is the supporting material specific and relevant?
O Does the presentation fulfill its purpose and provide information the audience finds
interesting?
O Is care taken to clarify ideas that might be misconstrued or prove harmful to the speaker
or the speaker's organization?
Organization
O Is an overview of the main points provided?
O Do verbal signposts announce t ransitions to major points? Are these transitions
sufficient and logical?
Visuals
O Are visuals well designed, interesting, and appropriate for the size of the audience
and room? Does each one supply the right amount of information w ithout
over- cramming data?
O Is each visual aid legible and error-free? Is it introduced at an appropriate point in
the presentation?
O Do the visuals add to the presentation and enhance its meaning?
Delivery
O Is there direct and comfortable eye contact w ith the aud ience7
0 Are voice, non-verbal cues, and gestures used effectively? Is the right tone and level
of language used in addressing the audience?
0 Are questions fielded effectively?
O Is the presentation paced according to the audience's level of understanding and interest?
O Does the speaker communicate interest in, and enthusiasm for, the topic?
O Does the speaker project confidence and professionalism? Have signs of stage fright
been kept under control?
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1. Purpose: There should he a good reason for calling a meeting. Define the task and
make it dear to all participants. Do this at least two days in advance by distributing an
agenda or supporting materials (see point 6). Keep in mind what you want to achieve,
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hut d on't weakm your effort hy expecting to accomplish too much. Narrow the focus
o f the meeting hy limiting the numher of items on the agenda.
2. Alt.ernatives: Consider if the meeting is truly necessary or if the same work can be
accomplished without one. Don't call a meeting if the same result can be achieved
wi th a memo, group e-mail discussion, or a phone call or if you can accomplish
something on your own. Unnecessary meetings result. in lost productivity.
3. Participants: Every person at a meeting should have a reason for heing there. Li.mil
participation to people who an: most essential- those who will make the dedsion ,
implemen t it, or provide information crucial to d ecision-making. A meeting should
he called off if not enough key people will he available to attend. If a meeting goes
ahead \vithout a few key participants, they should be e-mailed in advance for their
views and con tributions.
Keep in mind that the purpose o f a meeting oft.en detem1ines its size. Problem-
solving is done most e ffectively in groups of five to fi fteen , where opinions and ideas
can he exchanged freely. Large groups of twenty-five or more are too hig for anything
more than the presen tation o f infom1at.ion or mot.iva.t.ional purposes.
4. Location: Deciding where to hold a meeting- in your office, in a hoard room, o r
off-site- depends on several fact.ors:
the kind o f environment you prefer
how well participan ts get along and in teract.
how much space you need for the grou p
h ow much you need to he seen as heing in cont.ml
Meetings are not sim ply convened; they are staged and strategized. Choosing the
right location is a matter of balancing practical concerns with the "politics" of meet-
ing. For instance, holding a meeting in your office can give you great.er perceived
control over the proceedings, especially if you keep distractions (ringing telephones,
in terruptions) to a minimum. Conducting a meeting on neutral grou nd- away from
the office-equalizes relationships. sparks creativity, and makes it easier to tackle
controversial matters. Keep in mind, though, that the en vironment has to be quiet
enough for you to carry on a normal conve rsation. Going to a clients office can show
that you are committed to his or her p rofessional needs.
Whatever location you settle on, the table and seating arrangement should
enhance I.he now of information and ideas, not create communication barriers. A seat-
ing arrangement can set the tone for a meeting and also unexpectedly shift percep
tions of who holds more power.
Small Meetings
Sitting behind a large desk plays up your status, power, and authority. Naturally, it
also makes you less approachable and can intimidate anyone on the other side of
the barrier.
Barrier-fTee seating (i.e., chairs arranged across from each other or in a circle) cre-
ates a peer relationship and promotes discussion.
Medium-Sized Meetings
Seating around a boardroom tahle has a hierarchy all its own, even though it can
promote discussion hy putting participan ts face to face. The person at the head
o f t.he table has the greatest pe rceived power. People at either side have lessening
debtrees of power t.he further away they are from the ends of I.he table.
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Seating around a circular t.ahle makes everyone more or less equal and p romotes
open discus..<;ion.
Don't leave seating arrangements to chance if relations between meeting partici-
pants are known to be difficult. Put opponents at a distance from one another.
vVhen you plan to use a boardroom, be sure lo reserve it before announcing your
location. Inform participants immediately o r any change of location.
Large Meetings
The fun.her away the speaker is from the audience, the more formal the meeting
seems. Conversely, meeti11gs where a speaker is close to, or part of, the audience
have a more intimate feel.
Speaking rrom behind a podium adds formality to the proceedings.
Chairs set up in conventional rows create a formal setting; if seating is in ;.m arched
or semicircular pattern, it results in a more casual setting.
AGENDA
Jack Pine Resort and Conference Centre
Staff Meeting, February 12, 2014
9:00 a.m. to 10:30 a.m.
Conference Room 4A
V. Old Business
VII. Announcements
FIGURE 12.4
5. Scheduling: Estahlish when the meeting will hegin and end. Ideally, the time is
convenient to key decision-makers or fits in with personal wo rking styles. Although
meetings can he scheduled at any point during the day, some times will naturally
he better than others, leaving participants primed to contrihute and not distracted
by other matters or fatigued by the workday. Unless there is an urgent rnat.ter to he
deal t with, informal meetings should be set for less husy or less stressful times, when
managers or senior staff memhers aren 't facing deadlines. Long meetings of more than
two hours usually include a short hreak (five to ten minutes) to prevent fatibrue and
information overload.
6. Agenda: An agenda is a tool for focusing the group-a written document that sets agenda a document that
the order of husiness for a meeting, briefly describing items to be covered, identifying est1bllshes the purpose and goals
of a meeting and outlines what
who is responsible for them, and allocating a time period for each agenda item. An
the mcetlng will address. thereby
agmda also gives participants the particulars: when the meeting will take place (date, helping to focus the group.
start time, end time), where it will be held, and what preparation they shoi1ld do
befo:rehand. A copy of the minutes of a previous meeting is sometimes also included
when a group meets regularly or when a meeting is a continuation of an earlier one.
Dist1ihut.ing an agenda seve ral days in advance gives participants a chance t.o pre
pare questions and formulate opinions. An agenda distributed in advance of a meet-
ing should be accompanied hy a cover memo that outlines I.he meetings purpose;
its date , time, and location; the names of people invited; and instructions on how to
prepare. Before an agenda is finalized, it is usually a good idea to get input from key
presenters and participants-people who might have useful it.ems t.o add and esti
mat.es of how much time they will need. Because everyone who attends a meeting has
a stake in its success, keeping participants infom1ed. and involved in the process can
help ensure a productive outcome.
CONDUCTING A MEETING
Under the righ t condi.tions, a meeting can spark great ideas and lasting husiness relation
ships. When bright and well-informed people are given the chance to collaborate fully,
there can he a huge payoff in the form of productive decisions and launched inj tiatives.
However, collaboration can happen only in the right en vironment-when a meeting is
well run and boosts the morale of its participants. Leading or facilitating a meeting suc
cessfuUy is therefore one of the most import.ant tests a manager faces and requires meticu-
lous preparation. While there is no bluepri nt for t.he per fect meeting or guarantee that a
few eyes won't sometimes glaze over, following certain steps can help you to achieve better
meetings that let you build consensus and accomplish what you set out to do and more.
Leading a Meeting
Distrihute a detailed agenda in advance. Doing so gives each participant time to make
a list of questions; he prepared to support and resp011d to vari ous points of view.
Assign responsihilities: appoint a minute-taker to document the proceedings in a con-
cise yet thorough way and ask someone else to wri l.e on a nip chart or comput.er to
record infom1at.ion I.hat needs t.o he viewed by everyone.
Establish ground rules (e.g., be on time, tum off your cellphone) and stick to them.
Make sure to start and adjourn on time. If time runs out for a specific it.em, decide on
it or leave it for a lat.er discussion.
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Build momentum and focus the group by keeping to the agenda. ldentHy action items
and avoid get.t.ing sidetracked by peripheral issues or ramblers-summarize what they
have said, politely direct t.hem hack to the agenda, and move on. An idea doesn't need
rehashing six or seven times for it to he considered thoroughly.
Speak up, make eye contact with others around the table, and stay relaxed. Your
behaviour sets the tone ror the entire meeting and can put others at ease and help
them remain focused and involved. Analyze non-verbal t1.1es to detem1ine if meeting
part.kipants have second thoughts or reservations about the decisions being made.
Handle dirRt1.1lt people. Keep hostile participants in check by encouraging a healthy
respect for the facts and establishing zero tolerance for name-calling, sulking, and
personal attacks. Try to remain neutral in disputes, making sure that the loudest
members of the group don't dominate the discussion.
Encourage full participat.ion. Ask group members for their input rather than sim-
ply letting people volunteer their opinions and ideas. Respect the views of others
by listening carefully and helping participants feel valued; all ow room for oppos-
ing viewpoint~ and consider ways of doing things that are dHferent from your owi1.
Acknowledge and respond to what people say.
Discourage anyone who interrupts. Instruct interrupters to let others finish before
they chime in.
Deal wit.h conflict hut realize that, because a group is composed of individuals with
different attitudes and personalities, a degree of conflict is inevitable and even valu-
groupthlnk the practice of able. lt can stimulate creative thinking and challenge passive grnupthink.
thinking or making decisionsas End with a summary in which you paraphrase all decisions and assignments and look
a group, whereby conformity Is
rewarded and dissent punished;
ahead to future actions. Raise questions, ask for feedback, and clarify any nnisunder-
the result of groupthlnk Isoften st.andings. Tell participants when they can expect to receive copies of the minutes and
poor decision making. set a time for t.he next meeth1g.
Follow up m1 action items at the next meeting.
Participating In a Meeting
Increase your profile hy making eye contact with influential people and sitting toward
the head of the table if you expect t.o have something important to say. Link your
comment to the remarks of a leader or to something that has just heen said.
Be an active listener and demonstrate that you have heard and processed what has
been said and left unsaid. Th is involves tuning into underlying feelings, perspectives,
and ideas.
Be actively interested. Body language and Facial expressions can signal attentive-
ness: lean forward, face th e speaker, and make eye contact. Nod your head when
the speaker makes a point that seems particularly important. Don't let distractions
get the hett.er of you.
Pay attention to the speaker's gestures, facial expressions, and tone o r voice; iden-
t.ify the feelings you think you hear.
Jot down the occasional note but avoid excessive note-taking and other distracting
gestures, such as looking at your watch repeatedly.
If offering a reaction on something said, repeat in your owi1 words the speaker's
point of view and feed this back to the speaker in your response.
Make a mental list of questions you have, then ask ror information or clarification.
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Interact and contribute when you have somethlng to say, and he sure to speak up.
OffeT to hdp solve problems.
Try not to dominate the discussion or get involved in arguments. Don't he defensive,
disruptive, or overly territorial-let others have their say.
Make it easy for others to take you seriously. Speal< clearly and directly, in a well-
organized way, so that others will find it easy to listen to you. Do your homework and
he prepared to support your point of view.
MEETING MINUTES
Fomial meetings adhere to a system known as Robert's Rules of Parliamentary Procedure
(from a hook of the same name). For meetings conducted in this way, a proper pro-
cess for transcribing meeting minutes has to he followed . Formal minutes record the meeting minutes a written
following infomiat.ion: record of what occurred at a
meeting, who auendcd It, and
when and where It was convened.
name of I.he group or committee holding the meeting
date , time, and place of the meeting
topic/title/kind of meeting (a regular meeting or a special meeting called to dL~cuss a
particular problem or subject)
names/number of people present (for groups of ten or fewer, list names of attendees
and absentees)
statement that the chair was present (include time at which the meeting was called
to order)
state111ent that the minutes of the previous meeting were approved
desc-ription of old business
summary of new business and announcements
recmd of reports (read and approved), discussions, r.esolut.i ons (adopted or rejected),
motions (made, carried, or defeated), votes (taken or postponed), and key decisions
list of assignments and dne dates
time the meeting was adjourned
date , time, and location of the next meeting
name and signature of the secretary (the person recording the minutes)
Templates and software programs are avai lable t.o assist you in compiling minutes. For
instance, you can use PowerPoint Meeting Minder during a slideshow to record the
mlnutes of your meetlng and print them afterward.
ln fo1rmal minutes are written for small groups and can he distributed hy e-mail
or as hard copy. They briefly summarize discussions, report decisions, and outline
proposed actions.
GROUPWARE-SUPPORTED MEETINGS
In addition to conventional face-to-face meetings, there are now numerous technologies
and computer tools, known as grnupware, that can facilitate meetings when group mem - groupware software designed to
bers cannot get together in the same place or even at the same t.inie. Weh-hased meet- facilitate group work by a number
of different users.
ings and online virtual con.ferences eliminate the inconvenience associated \vith holding
long-distance meetings and can help groups collaborate, exchange information, and reach
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decision.~. Many companies use the rollowing technologies to cond uct training p rograms
o r team-huilding seminars or to put colleagues in touch for planning o r product and
policy development.
web-conferencing synchronous Web-con ferencing is synch ronous comm un ication. lt enables sound and images
web-supported communication recorded by cameras at different locations to he sent in real t.ime to other locations.
allowing for the real-time
transmission of sound and Images Participants can view images on a large screen, television screen, or computer. Some
to other locations. web-conferencing technologies also enable participant.~ to interact.
E-mail meetings allow participant.~ lo respond at different times and make the meet
ing process more democratic hy doing away with facilitators and the interruptions
that controlli ng personalities can cause. However, e-mail meetings can suffer from the
same prohlems that e-mail in general does: there is no guarantee that messages will he
read and have enough detail to he userul.
v1rtual meeting a meeting Virtual meetings allow participants to meet over the Intern et without having to
that uses particular software or a travel and to take part from where they happen to he (e.g., at home or off-site for
website to allow partlelpants In
variouslocations to share Ideas and
business travel). As a result, they save time and travel cost.s. Participants can see and
hold discussions In real time. hear one another and share information in real time.
To get the most out of a meeting facilitated hy some fom1 of groupware, keep in mind the
strategies listed in r.he following hox.
Familiarize yourself with the te-chnology you w ill be using to participate in the meeting
or conference. Download and t est any required software or plug-ins.
Schedule time to participate. Even though you will not have to leave your office or
other location, you should set aside a block of time, j ust as you would for a face-to-face
meeting. If you plan to take pa rt in a long-distance synchronous (real-time) meeting,
double-check the time and see if it is in a different time zone.
Communicating by Telephone
The telephone is an important business tool and a link that is worth learn ing to use prop
erly. It helps, first of all, to make the distinction between types of calls. Personal calls,
o rr.en fuelled by the recreational use o r cellphones, sometimes have no other purpose than
to fill time. Ili1siness-d riven calls, on the other hand, are much more time-sensitive and
direct. Following the rules of telephone etiquette for business can help you send the right
message t.o your associates and leave a good lmpression on those you call.
MAKING CALLS
Like any comm unication channel, the telephone can both help to increase productivity
and reduce it. Make sure every call you make is necessary and offers the best way to get
your message across when compared \vith or.her channels.
Iclen.t.ify yourself. When placing a call to someone wlho does not know you, brive your
name and idmt.ify t.he organization you represent.
Gi.ve each call your full attention. Refrain from i.nt.errupting a call to carry on a con-
versation with someone in your office or laying the phone on the desk without put-
ting the call on hold. Handle interrupt.ions politely, asking permission to put someone
on hold.
Plan what you will say. Make mental or written notes of topics you intend to cover,
infor mation you need to obtain, and objections you may encounter. Forgetting a
point may result in having to call hack. Anticipate what you might say if you reach
someone's voice mail.
Be positive, courteous, and accurate. To get ready ror the call, visualize the person to
whom you will be speaking. Your voice should sound animated, not flat or canned.
Leave clear messages. When someone is unavailable to take your call, leave you r
name (including the correct spelling, if necessary), husiness title, company name,
phone numher, and a hrief message (i ncluding the best t.ime t.o reach you). Include an
extension L1umher to spare the caller the inconvenience of consulting your company's
phone directory. Don't msh your message just because you are being recorded.
Mind your telephone manners. Don't eat or chew gum while talking on the phone-
it's rude and will make it difficult for the person at the encl of the line to hear you.
Place calls when others are likely to receive t.hem. It helps to have estahlished a specific
callback time when returning a call in order to avoid telephone tag. Otherwise, return
calls promptly or redirect them el~ewhere a.~ needed.
Learn to end a conversation. As the caller, it is your r.esponsibility to close the conver-
sation and keep yourself from rambling. You can end your call professionally hy using
a closing phrase (I'm glad we resolved this wncem) and stating the action you will take.
Show courtesy and re frain from using slang.
RECEIVING CALLS
Make an effort to answer your phone within two or three rings, before the caller is
tempted to hang up.
When answering a call, identify yourself with your full name and department affilia-
tion (This is Accounts Receivable. Paul Kwon speaking.). You may also hegin your greet-
ing vi th good morning or good afternoon- just be sure ahout what time of day it is.
Avold taking calls during meetings. Each activity deserves your rull attention.
Use proper telephone language. The tone of your voice tells callers a great deal.
Without realizing it, you can signal something you did not lntend and end up sound-
ing ahrupt, indifferent, or defensive. Be aware of the negative effects certain ph rases
can sometlmes have on callers and opt for language that is positive and appropriate.
What? WHATI (when you cannot hear the I am having difficulty hearing you.
person on the other end of the phone) Can you please repeat that?
Be professional in explaining why you have answered a call intended for a colleague.
Don't give out privileged information that might embarrass a co-worker (e.g., lie'.~
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gont: to the washroom or His mrn1th is full). Instead simply say, She'.~ away from her desk at
the moment o r She is unavailable to talie your call at the moment and indicate when the
pe rson will he avai.lahle to take the call.
Excuse yourself when you have to step away from the phone for a moment to obtain
information the caller has requested.
Don't leave callers on hold indefin itely. Even a shon 1ime on hold can seem like an eter-
nity. Remember to ask the caller, May I put you on hold? before doing so and thank the
caller for waiting when you pick up again. Don't leave the caller on hold for nnore than
.10 or 4.5 seconds, about the time il takes to record a second caller's name and number. If
it is tak'ing longer to find the i.nfonnation you need, give the caller the option of continu-
ing to hold, transfer the person to another party, or offer to call hack al a specific time.
Apply active listening skills to evaluate the tone of the caller's voice and assess what
is said.
Learn to use the phone system. Lost or misdirected calls can result in Frustration and
lost business. Explain what you are doing, ask for permission when you transfe r a
caU, and give the name, department, and extension number of the person the call is
being transferred to in case the call L~ lost.
Take accurate, confidential phone messages and deliver them prom ptly. A good phone
message includes (1) the name of the person for whom the message was left, (2) the
caller's name, department, a1r1d company, (1) the date and time, (4) the message, and
(5) instructions (please call, URGENT, o r will call bac:h).
goodwill and deliver specific messages to specific audiences through the filter of a journal-
ist. Hen: are tt:n rules for getting the best out of an intuview- and not letting a reporte r
get the better of you.
1. Prepare by anticipating the questions you might be asked, especially the tough
ones. Be aware of recent events that might affect w]1at you have to say. Decide how
candi.d you will be- which facts are for public consurnpt.i.on and which facts are not.
2. Know your story, practise telling it, and sti.ck to i t. A good story, crystallized into
no more than three key points or a few hard-hitting sentences, does wonders for a
message-driven interview. Try to relate the reporter's questions to one or more of your
key points.
3. Rem ember that tone defines the impression you make. Stay calm and be positive
and helpful, never overreacting to a reporter's attitude. Avoid negative o r defensive
language, keep ing in mind that reporters find it very quotahle.
4. Assess what information will he valuahle to the ieporter. That sai.d, don't release
facts or figures that should not he made puhlk. Bebrin with a hrief position statement
that sets the tone for the interview. lf you don't know the answe r to a question, say so
and offer to follow up later; if you cannot respond, explain why (The matter is undt:r
consideration or It's in litigation).
5. Don't get too technical. Avoid buzzwords and acronyms. Instead use language that
both. the reporter and the audience \vi ll understand.
6. Speak in sound bites. Limit your answers to hetwern five and twenty words. Because
what you say may he edited, don't flood your answers with too many details. Short
answers are highly quotable and may help you get your message out more effectively.
7. Tell the truth. Rememher that nothing is off the record. ln cross-examining you, a
reporter may he tryi ng to find holes in your argument. Answer or refocus the repor-
te rs question, hut don't let him or her put words Ln your mouth. Correct, as non-
threateningly as possible, any misstatements made hy the reporter.
8. Ile al e1t and on guard. Avoid speculating, making off-hand comments, or saying
anything you don't want attributed to you. You have to he able to stand hebi.nd what
you say.
9. Make transitions to your key points as you respcmd. Keep the interview on track
and move back to what is most important, especially if you are interrupted. The fol-
lowing phrases can help you take the ini tiative:
While _ _ is important, don't forget ___.
10. look your best but be yourself. Most reporters prefe r to speak to a real person
rathe r than a slick spokesperson rehearsing the official company line. Be engaged in
the interview and show your enthusiasm, using examples to enrich your story. Let the
reporter ask questions; don't try to give all your infmmation immediately.
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Look at the camera only when instructed to do so. At all other times, look at the inter-
viewer and maintain eye contact to show your interest. Poor eye contact can denote
guilt, boredom, or fear.
Be camera-ready. Dress conservatively yet comfortably, avoiding all black, all white, and
small prints (they can create a strobe effect). Remove glittery, oversized jewellery and
take bulky pens out of your pockets. Gesture naturally and avoid fidgeting. Check your
appearance for stray hairs and so on before you go on air.
Speak clearly and distinctly, pausing strategically to avoid fillers such as ah and um.
Remain seated (even after the interview is over) and lean slightly forward in your chair to
project energy and interest.
O Before writing your presentation, have you assessed its context and audience?
O Does your presentation follow a threepart structure? Have you created an outline to
help you organize your ideas?
0 Are your visual aids the best types for your presentation? Do they enhance the
presentation's content without dominating your message or distracting your audience?
O Have you rehearsed your presentation so that you can deliver it confidently and within
the allotted time?
0 Do you project a professional, knowledgeable image when making a presentation 7
Have you given yourself time to familiarize yourself with the environment and to ensure
that any required audiovisual equipment is working? Do you have backup copies of your
presentation in case there are any technical difficulties?
O Have you answered audience questions completely while maintaining a calm and
controlled manner?
O Is everyone in your team presentation clear of the ground rules, work plan, related
deadlines, and each member's responsibilities?
O Before calling a meeting, are you sure that one is necessary? If so, have you identified its
purpose, required attendees, location, time, and agenda?
O As a meeting leader, do you circulate an agenda in a timely fashion and stick to it while
encouraging full participation and dealing with conflict?
O Are you an active listener in meetings? Do you contribute your ideas without
dominating the discussion or arguing?
O Do you follow accepted telephone etiquette when making and receiving business calls?
Is your voice-mail message clear and professional?
O Have you adequately prepared for a media interview? Have you kept to your message
and remained poised and positive?
12 I O RA L CO MM U NI C A T I ON
1. Introduce Yourself to Your Class. Give your name clear reason for incorporating each elem ent. Draw up
and some basic information. If you find this activity a prototype. At the next class, each team \vill hrieny
intimidating, you may want to rollow a simple script: present and discuss the merits o r its logo (visual aids
are recom mended). Arter reviewing each design,
Hello, my name is . I have enroll ed in
debate how we ll it achieved its purpose. Submit
(name of course) because , with the
prepared minutes of the meeting to your instruct.or.
ultimate goal of _____.
Variations: Propose a slogan or radio advenisement
Once you and your classmates have introduced your- that represents the values of the team.
selves, introd uce a cla.~smate. Pair with a partner and 6. Hold a Team Meating. Tn pairs or groups of three or
conduct a quick interview to learn as much as you mo re, work together to suggest a new law and the
can :about the other person. Complete the activity by reasons for needing i.t. Appoi nt a group leader whose
perfom1ing a hrid, professional introduction. job it wi ll he to ensure that each member contributes
2. Fae Your Public-Speaking Fears. In groups of five o r to the discussion, then write the law in unequivocal
six, d iscuss your fears about speaking in public, then language. In troduce the law t.o your class in a sho rt
share strategies you have discovered to reduce situa- presentation aided by handouts or visual~.
tional stress. 7. Hold a Team Meeting. ln pairs or brroups of three or
3. App!ly Oral Communication Skills in Your Career. mo re, identify a problem in your com munity or at
How \vill you use oral communication skil l~ in you r your school. By sharing ideas and experience, discuss
future employment? Interview a professional in your how this situation could he improved and devise a
fidd and share your fi nd ings \vith your classmates. plan fo r impl ementi ng constructive change.
Uphold ethical standards in conducting your inter- 8. Hold a Team Meeting. In groups or five OT more,
view hy asking permission to quote the interviewee. experiment with diffe rent types of seating arrange-
4. Giv. an Impromptu Talk. Give a brief talk (three to ments for meetings. Start by settin g up seats and
five minutes) on one of the following topics, selected rows, with the audience positioned to face a speaker
at random or selected for you hy your classmates: standing at the front of the room. Use this arrange-
a) The best part of my currentlfuture job/ field/ ment for infom1ar.ion shari ng, problem-solvi ng, and
ind us try is ... decision-making (a list of possible topics for each
b) The best way to find a job is ... session is in cluded below). Next try a U-shapecl
c) The person I most admire in the field or industry arrangement, with pa rti cipants facing each other
I hope to work in is/The successrul person I most and the group leader seated at the head of the table.
admire Ls ... Repeat the process of in fom1ar.ion sharing, problem-
S. Hold a Team Meeting. ln groups of five o r six, hold a solving, and decL~ion-making. Afrerward, reorganize
meeting to work out the design of a logo that rep- the seating for a round-table disL1.1ssion. What are the
resents the values and strengths of you r individual ad vantages and disadvantages of each arrangement?
team. Designate a scribe to keep minutes and a chair Share information about effective listening skil l~ or
to lead the discussion as you consider these r.opics: telephone etiquette .
what the team stands ror Solve a problem that affects campus life or your
how it wL~h es to he seen community
how the logo can help others see the team in a Agree on a new parking policy for your campus or
different way a revampi ng of the menu selection ror your school
The design can include a com bination of cafete ria.
symhols, colours, and shapes, as long as there is a
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1. Analyze Your Audience. Imagin e thaL you must 6. Prepare a Prezi Presentation. Sign-up for a Prezi
deliver a briefing to r.he management and staff of a account an<l create a haslt presentation. W hen you
small company Reread the criteria in "Analyz ing the have co mp leted yo ur presentation, share it wi1h
Si tuat ion and Audience" on pages 426- 7, then decide other members of the class and discuss what you like
how you can meet the needs of 1his diverse group. and <lislike abou1 I he software and the user/viewer
2. Prepare a Briefing. Select a fairly substantial anicle experience.
(750 words or more) from the business or national 7. Prepare a Pecha Kucha Presentation. Follow the
news section of a daily newspaper. Prepare a brief guidelines in this chapter and the sample presenta
oral presentation based on the anicle. If you require Lion in the Jones anicle on page 438 to develop a
additional information, do a keyword Internet search. Pecha Kucha presentation on a topic that is relevant
Following your presentation, submit your outline and meaningful to you.
(including an introduction, main body, and conclu- 8. Prepare a Short, Informative Presentation. Design
sion) to your instructor. a five- or ten-minute informative prese ntatio n that
3. Design a Concise Visual Aid. Write a se ri es o r bullet incorporates at least. one visual aid and explains how
points (no more than seven words per line) suitable lo do one of the rollowing:
for use on a PowerPoint slide or overhead Lranspar- deal \viLh connict at your school or workplace
ency that summarizes the following information. prepare for an interview
Remember to add a suitable title. derive a bargain or budget for your school expenses
overcome common types of telephone
We have four specific corporate goals in the
miscommunication
year ahead. The first is to introduce new product
use time more effectively in meetings
lines, including cardio equipment and weight-
balance the demands of work and school
lifting equipment. Our second goal is to see our
9. Prepare a Persuasive Presentation. Prepare a rive- or
company become a worldwide leader. However,
ten-minute present.at.ion in which you persuade your
If we are to achieve this goal, our company must
audience to buy a cons umer product you enjoy using
expand geographically. Plans are now underway to
or in which you advocate a particular act.ion yo ur
establish operations in South America and Europe.
audience can take. Focus on building credihili1y a nd
Finally, we would like to continue 20 per cent and
capturing attention lo help you make your case and
higher sales growth.
incorporate visual aids that will help you show what
4. Compose a PowerPoint Slide. Wnte a short bullet you mean.
point (or no more than seven words) suitable for use 10. Polish Your Delivery. Select a one-page article from
on a PowerPoint slide entilled "What Not to Wear on a trade journal, business publication, or newspaper
TV." The point you write should summarize the fol- and practise reading it aloud, polishing your delivery
lowi ng inrormation: so it is smooth, well pitched, and free of pauses and
fillers. H you like, reco rd your recitation and play
Unless you want to create odd optical effects,
it hack.
you should make an effort to avoid plaid, stripes,
11. Overcome Your Public-Speaking Fears. Prepare a set
herringbone, checkerboard, and white.These
of cards represeming various stages in the presen-
patterns and colours tend to photograph poorly.
tation sequence (e.g., practising your speech, being
S. Prepare a Short PowerPoint Presentation. Select one inLroduced, giving your speech). Look at each card
of PowerPoint's features or functions and teach the and visualize the corresponding stage of your pres
rest of the class about it. Afterward, submll your entation Lo determine which activity causes the most
PowerPoinl notes. stress, then try Lo combat that anxiety and calm
12 I ORAL COMMU NI CAT I ON
yourself with breathing or muscle-relaxation exer- a survey of joh sites that offer the best employment
cises. Repeat the process until you 110 longer experi- opportunities in your field
ence stress when you contemplate any aspect of PowerPoints ahllity to improve and u.ndermine the
giving a speech. quality of presentations
12. Change How You Think of Yourself asa Pub Ii<: Speaker. foreign ownership of Canadian companies
On the ldt side of a piece o r paper, write down any companies' commitment to sustainability or cor-
negative thoughts you have ahout how you speak. porate social responsihility
On the right side, write down positive thoughts that the role of social media in projectil1g charitable
counter them. Here is an example: organizations' credihllity
16. Introduce a Speaker. Imagine that you have bee n
Negative Positive given the responsibility of introducing a celehrity
The audience w ill Good preparation or husiness/community leader who has accepted an
be able to tell that will compensate for invitation to speak at your school or organization.
I don't have public t he fact t hat I don't Prepare and deliver your remarks. Make sure to
speaking experience. have public-speaking introduce yourself, the guest speaker, and the title
experience. of the speech . Include any necessary hackground
in rormation.
Make positive thoughts your public-speaking man - 17. Pradise Your Spa<:ial-Presentation Style. Assume that
tra. If you have any negative th ought~ as you pre- you have heen elected to give a short, impromptu
pare, say "stop" to yourself and suhstitute a positive speech at an event honouring a friend. or classmate
alternative. who has reached an important milestone or is receiv-
13. Speak Like a Professional. Search YouTube for a one- ing an award ror service to the commun.ity Explain
or two-minute item from a radio or television news why you admire the recipient and why the milestone
hroadcast. Note r.he way the announcer has used or award is special.
inflection and enunciation to relnforce meaning and 18. Evaluate Oral Presentations. Evaluate oral presen-
add emphasis. Write out what was said, underline tations given hy classmates. Use the criteria in the
keywords, and then read the script aloud into an check list on page 4.56.
audi.o recorder. Try to emulate the speaker's deliv- 19. Evaluate a MHting. Attend a meeting on your cam-
ery while using your natural voice and giving appro- pus, in your community, or at yom workplace. Using
priate downward emphasis at the end of sentences. the follmving checklist, assess how well the meeting
Photocopy the hroadcast transcript and read it aloud was conducted.
in front of your class. 0 ls t.he meeting held in the right place, at the right
14. Evaluate the Handling of Questions. Watch a news time, with the right people?
related interview or press conference and assess the 0 Does the meeting have and fulfill a specific pur-
performance of an interviewee. How effectively does pose? Does the agenda re nect this?
this individual handle tough qi1estions? 0 Are ground rules for the meeting properly
1S. Make a Group Oral Presentation. Working with three enforced?
or four classmates, plan and coordinate a group pres- 0 Are participants encouraged to voice their opin-
entat.ion on one of the topics listed helow (or one of ions and ideas? ls the leader fair an d does he or
your choice, with instructor approval). ln advance o f she help the group stay focused?
yoUl presentation, submit a plan to yom instructor 0 Do participants know how to prepare for the
that shows how you intend to allocate and share meeting and how to follow up? Do they know
responsibilities. what comes next?
time-management techniques 0 L~ conflict dealt with in a fair and equitable way?
the advantages and drawbacks of teleconferencing 0 lf the answer to any of these questions is no,
the advantages and drawbacks of wireless write a hrief review analyzing how the meeting
technology could have been improved.
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20. Practise Telephone Communication. With a partner, a maker of non-toxic, washah le painLo;, to find
take turns pladng and receiving telephone calls that ot1t how to safely remove large quantities of
correspond to one or more of the following scenarios: hardened paint from a child's hair. She has fol-
a) Answering for someone else. Jenny Chow, owner lowed the instructions on the packaging exactly,
of Fair Trade Coffees of the World, Lo; calling her hut. much of the paint still remains. The call is
accountant, Joseph Li, ahout a reassessment of answered hy customer-relations specialist Mari.e-
her most recent tax return . The call is answered Claire Lacasse. Because the colour in question ,
by Amanda Sharp, Mr. Li's receptionist. Mr. Li Dragon Purple, has gone on the market only
has gone to the spa for the afternoon and has recently, she must ask Ms. Rudn icki to hold while
left inst.ructions that his clients are not to he told she confim1s the removal procedure.
of his whereabouts. Ms. Chow is an important 21. Record an Outgoing Voice-Mail Message. Using the
clienr. and her call must he handled as tactfully appropriate audio device, record a friendly and pro
as possible. fessional voice-mail greeting that would be appropri -
b) Putting a caller on hold. Brenda Rudnick-i., man - ate in the field or setting in which you plan to work.
ager and coordinator of Child's Garden Daycare, Play hack the message and re-record it until you are
must place an emergenLy call to Spectrum Junior, satisfied with its tone and completeness.
r"
1. Analyze an Apple Keynote Presentation. Watch the "calculate" button to determine the cost of the meet-
following presentation, prepared \vith Keynote, and ings you hold.
discuss how it adheres to the guidelines discussed in www.effectivemeetings.com/diversions/
this chapter. meetingcost.asp
www. you tube .com/watch ?va SUOTJRLkrss S. Improve Your Active Listening Skills. Watch the short
2. Test Your Meeting IQ. Take the meeting IQ quiz, video "Listening Focus and Mode" on the idXready
offered by EffectiveMeetings.com, to help you suc- site (to access t.he video, dick on the "Next" huttm1
cessfully plan and lead your next meeting. until you get to slide numher 3). Identify the five
www.effectivemeetings.com/diversions/ approaches to listet1ing, then find an example from
meetingiq.a.sp your own Life t.o match each approach.
3. Improve Meeting Productivity. Also from www.idxlearning.com/marketinglidxready/Fl27/
EffectiveMeet.ings.com, this quiz lets you find out 6. Practise Your Listening Skills. This site from the
how t.o overcome "meeting myopia" and learn to University of Leeds offers a range of resources to
have more productive meetings. support active listening and interpersonal skills
www.effectivemeetings.com/diversions/mm/ building, including a quiz for assessing listening
index.asp skills and activities for gaining practice in watching
4. Calculate the Cost of Your Meetings. In the following and listening.
exercise, fill in the computer fields and dick on the http://library.leeds.ac.uk/skills-interpersonal
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
1. Identify key social media tools, Including 3. Identify benefits, risks, and challenges
biogs, soclaI networks, micro-biogs, and associated with social media use In business
video- and photo-sharing sites. environments.
2. Communicate using biogs and social 4 . Identify privacy Issues related to social media
networking platforms and apply best use and management.
practices and soclaI media etiquette for
5. Identify tools for social media measurement.
busIness purposes.
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people exploring the new social media landscape can tt.ake advantage of rapidly evolv-
ing avenues and tools to communicate, collaborate, disseminate new ideas, and create
lntemet content.
Active social media panicipants can assume different roles based on their online
behaviour and participation:
a computer. Other social skil l~, competencies, and "Literacies" that are hallmarks o r thL~
culture include th e followi ng:
judgmen t- the ability to evaluate the reliability and credibility o f infom1at.i011 sources
networking- the ability to search for, disseminate, and synthesize information
collective intelligence-the ability to pool knowledge and compare information for
common goals
transmedia navigation- the ability to follow the How o r stories across multiple media
plat.fom1s
appropriation- the ab ility to remix and reconcile con flicting pieces of data to form a
coherent picture
negotiation- the ability to discern and respect multiple perspectives as shaped hy the
cultural differences of diverse communj ties 10
posting and sharing information (such as status updates, responses to biogs, and
comments on videos and images)
cond ucting conversations
delivering and exchanging publicly available media content created by md-users,
including documents, prese11t:ations (SlideShare), photos (lnstagram and Pi nt.erest),
and videos (YouTube, Vimeo, and Flickr)
These technologies-most sign if1can tly, a collection o r social media websites that rank as
the most visited sites in the world- facilitate connect.ion, collahoration, and the creation
of UGC, making content readers into content publishers. Social media can therefore al~o
refer to the activity or activities that integrate technology and social interaction mid to the
con ten t and contributions to the online spaces that are created in th is way.
lmmediacy and spontaneity underlie the social media experience. Social media allow
individuals to see events and share in them as they happen. For example, a breaking news
story or headline can quickly spm responses on Twitter far ahead of the response-rate 1.hat
traditional news outlets allow for. The How of information through social media can al~o
he a strong predictor of trends and a means to list.en to and measure public opinion.
Researchers who study social media o ften focus on th e intimal')' and immediacy o f
the medium. These factors inHuence social presence, or t.he kind of contact that can he
achieved and the kind o f inHuence that commun ication partners have m1 each other. 12 For
instance, communication on Twitter happens in real-time and th e exchange of information
is immediate, much like it is in a face-to-face conversation. 1:1 Another concept th at helps
in classifying social media is richness, or the amount of information tliat can be transmit-
ted in a given time. 1 ~ Types of social media differ in terms of how rich they are and in how
nrnch social presence they pem1it.. A tweet can become richer and more informative when
links or photos are added, enhancing social presence hy allowing free- lowing, just-in-
time inte ractions.11
1! I SOCIAL MEDIA AND NE TWORK IN G
As part of a community and the social interactions that occur there, social media users
consciously or unconsciously make decisions ahoi1t how they present themselves in cyber
space and the impressions that other people will have of them. In creating a profile or
posting content, users create an on line image that is usually consistent with their personal
identity. They disclose information about themselves and! create an impression every time
they like or dislike something, "friend" another user, become a fan or follower, or post
content or ex11ress an opinion in a post. 1
Social media have changed the way ind ividuals stay current (through social news),
get creative (through video- and photo-sharing sites) and get in touch (though an array of
social networking sit.es). Just as profoundly, soc:ial media has changed the way businesses
collaborate, network, learn, market themselves, recruit employees, share ideas, and com-
municate with customers, employees, and stakeholders. Businesses implementing social
media can capitalize on the opportunity t.o achieve different goals:
generating traffic
developing a following
attracting recruits
creating hrnnd awareness
facilitating interaction and engagement
generating revenue
responding to and mitigating crises11
Improved customer care, interaction, and outreach and decreased marketing costs are
some of the benefits associated with the adopt.ion of social media for external commurii
cations. For example, TELUS rated among the worst Canadian companies for customer
service until executives were brought in on conversations that service representatives were
having with customers. 18 Companies are also capitalizing on social media to mitigate nega-
tive publicity and brand crisis, for example, in issuing product recalls.
Internally, the democratizing effect of social media has helped to alter and soft.en trad
itional husines.~ hierarchies and improve communicat.ions. 19 Companies such as Best Buy
and Canada Goose use social media to boost employee engagement. Best Buy's "Leaming
Lounge" promotes social learning by giving employees in put into the training process
and enahling them to share their experiences and ideas. Canada Goose uses Facehook
and Twitter to create a positive organizational Li.1lture that. recognizes employees for their
achievements and keeps staff updated with company news. 2 For transferees caught up in
the logistics and uncertainties of job relocations, social media (particularly Facehook and
Twitt.er b"oups) help in maintaining connections to the job and associates left behind whi le
allowing employees to settle into their new jobs. Charles Freeman, national director of cor-
porate service at Crown Relocations, says that "sometimes the small things get missed out
and they become big things. It's as simple as where to find a cake for your kl.d's hirthday." 21
With social media applications numhering in the hundreds, i.t is best for busines.~es
to be selective about the ones in which they choose to he active. Those decisions are often
hased on finding the best media for the message- the ones with the right degree of flex
ibility as well as t.he ability to reach the hroadest user-hase with the likeliest interest in the
product or service. If an organization opts to use more than one social media chann el, it
must ensure that its message is consistent and integrate these channels with more trad-
itional media to reach different content comm unities.22
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SLOGS
blog similar to a diary, a web Blogging is the earliest form of social media. 21 A blog is a special 1.-ind o f website, usually
pago on which a person posts managed by one person, \vith date-st.amped entries in reverse chronological order. A blog
his or her writings, opinions, and/
or other Information, usually on a typically represents one topical and timely content area or takes the form of a personal
regular basis. diary It allows for more social interaction, engagement, and feedback than static Web 1.0
technologies through the posting of visitor comments in response to the blog entries.
From leading-edge blogging applications such as WordPress (2003) to more recent
blogging websites such as Tumbh: (2007), the blog concept has carried over to companies
I.hat use their own applications for keeping employees. customers, and shareholders up to
date on important developments while reinforcing and building the company's image and
brand. Corporate biogs represent a shift in the way companies interact with customers and
have been shown to build trust, Liking, and involvement.24
There are three kinds of corporate biogs: intranet, event, and product-2' Intranet biogs
can be used by a company's employees on a daily basL~ to share opinions and expertL~e
on products and to launch discussions of interest to other employees. 20 Blogging can con-
nect workers with each other, even across continents; reduce communication costs; and
boost morale and employee retrntion. It has the added benefits of attracting a younger
demographic to I.he company workforce and making i.t easier for organizations to identify
and draw on their employees' special skill-sets. 13logging can also be a tool for spotlighting
work accomplishments and gaining career advancement, wi.th functions such as hashtags
helping employees to draw management's attention to their achievements.
lntranet blogging in Canadian organizations is on the rise. Five years ago, TD Ban k
revamped its internal website into a social media platform supporting biogs, chat forums,
and surveys. The site al~o includes the option for employees to leave comments both on
blog pages and at the end of news items. 21
Corporate biogs intended for public consumption can be directed either to consum-
ers or to other businesses. For even t and product- related hlogs, best practices include
these features:
While biogs tend to he mostly text-based, links can he added for image and video content.
Additionally, CEOs often maintain biogs on their company websites, in part to improve
transparency and reinforce positive perceptions o f corporate social responsibility. In
Canada, Direct Talk with Peter Aceto (http://blog.ingdirect.ca/) is among the we 11-known
CEO biogs and has won accolades for its pioneering use of the medium.
1! I SOCIAL MEDIA AND NE TWORK I NG
SOCIAL NETWORKS
A social network is a website application that facilitates communication and social inter- social network a website (such
action thrnugh one-to-one or one-to-many conversations between people. Social network- as Facobook) that facilitates
communication and lnter.1ctlon
ing sites such as Facehook (2004) and Google+ (2011) enable users to connect by sending between two or more people by
messages and by creating personal profiles featuring biogs, photos, and aud io and video allowtng them to create profiles,
files that I.hey then invite friends to access. send messages, write status
updates or posts, and share photos
Companies have been quick to capitalize and harness the power of social networking,
and Videos.
which they use for a variety of purposes:
1. Choose privacy settings with care. Default settings may not deliver the degree of pri -
vacy you are seeking.
2. Update your page rrequently.
3. Stay on topic; let the focus be your business and what makes it interesting to your
customers.
4. Keep your message brief, simple, and relevant to fans and the target audience.
5. Use links and images, but keep the design clean and limited to essentials, letting the
brand st.and out.
6. Ensure the correctness and appropriateness of content and the way it is expressed
(and. do the same for customer content).
7. Keep the tone spontaneous and infom1al.
8. Signpost your company's expertise.
9. Make it interactive and engaging--encourage feedback and relationship-building
through polls, UGC, promotions, surveys, and or.her forms of interaction.
10. Make some content exclusive to Facebook.
linkedln is another networking site that can help business professionals strategic-
ally increase their presence online and make it easier for industry partners, colleagues,
employees, and potential clients to find them. Currently the worl d's largest professional
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netwo rk,20 Lin kedln had over three million Canadian users in 201 1.3 Consider the fol-
lowing hest practices to optimize yom profile:
1. Customize your profile URL. Make your URL a single wo rd (e.g., LucindaChen) to
move it into a higher position among search results. Make your profile widely avail -
ahle hy choosing the "puhlic" option.
2. Complete the summary and experience sections of your profile. Use keywords
and phrases that correlate to your abilities and expe ri ences and to the opportunities
you are seeking. Make sure your pro file is complete by including your industry and
location, your current position and j oh descri ption, your past two posi tions, your
education, a photo, a list of at least three skills, and as many connections as possihle.
An incomplete profile can result in a lower ranking.
3. Stay active. Update your status regularly hy posting news of activit ies, new products,
publications, questions, or lin ks of professional interest. Visit Lin kedln reb'1.1Larly for
insights and updates that keep you on top of trends. Double your chances of success
hy syncing your Linkedln and Twitter accounts.31
SITE DESCRIPTION
Delicious Social bookmarking service for storing, sharing, and discovering web bookmarks
Digg Social news website and news aggregator that features a"front page"
Face book Social networking service for connecting and engaging with others via a profile page
Flickr Online photo management and sharing application
Fotki "Organic, fat-free" photo- and video-sharing site
Foursquare Location-based mobile social network that helps users share and save places they visit
Talkbiznow Web-based business community providing business services for small businesses and professionals
Twitter Microblogging service that enables users to send and read 140-character-maximum tweets
Vimeo Site for storing and distributing video content
Yammer Social networking service for collaboration and idea-sharing in the workplace
Yelp Site for reviewing and discussing local businesses
1! I SOCIAL MEDIA AND NE TWORK IN G
4. Con.nect and network. Aim fo r a minimum or flfty connection.s that include clients,
mentors, and husi ness partners. Search for and join groups related to your industry,
expertise, specialization, or location. Search out groups and individuals who share
your approach or mindset to lend support and share details ahout potential clients. 32
5. Solicit recommendations. Ask satisfied C.'1.tstomers and business professionals who
have positive things to say ahout you to recommend you and your company.
6. Stay informed. Use Unkedln t.o stay up-to-date on trendi ng t.opics and ind ustry
news relevant to your husiness.
Just as Linkedln can he a resource for joh-seekers (see Chapter 9), it can also help
recruiters. Nancy Moulday, manager o r recruitment at TD Canada Trust Banking, had
trouble finding the right candidates for certain positions when she used the banks corpor
ate website and online joh boards. However, when she started using Linkedln to advertise
job open in gs, she quickly found that she was able to search for specific qualiications and
make mo re targeted and successful hires.33 By using lnMail, the site's message se rvice,
Moulday was able to open a conversation with potential candidates who weren't actively
looking on the job hoard site by establishi ng some common ground with them and eval u-
ating their level or interest.
Besides making headhunting easier, Linkedln is being used by companies to post
open positions. The sites array of tools, incl uding a hutt.on that allows candidates to apply
using their Linkedln profiles, makes it more possible for companies r.o connect worldwide
wi th the right cand idates.3i
Human Resources divisions at Canadian companies and organizations such as Kobo
and the University of British Columbia have reported seeing positive results from social
media in.itiatives. Better brand visibility and labour saving are some or the benefits I.hat
networks can bring. Len Posynfak, vice-president of human resources at ICBC, sums it up
t.hLs way: "Immediacy and authenticity are things we can achieve by using social media."11
MICRO-BLOGS
Micro-blog.s, such as Twitter, allow users to send out short text-like bursts of infom1ation to micro-blog a blog whose
entries am shorter than those or a
a community or rollowers in real time. Tvntter combines tliis format with a news-reed func- traditional blog; Twitter posts arc
tion. In its maximum of 140 characters, a tweet has a twofold function: it is both a message examplesof micro biogs.
and a me.ans of initiating a conversation with follow-
ers, who are expected to Lweet in response.
The short, snappy, instanl.aneo us nature of
Twitter communication makes it highly suited for
sharing the latest, time-sensitive information. Th is
two-way flow of communication helps in reputa
Watch "Chris Brogan on Social Media
tion- and trust-bui lding. Business proressionals
Starter Tips to Grow Your Business"to
and their organizations can use T>vitter in a nurn learn some policies for using new media:
her 0 r ways: http://goo.gi/gVILd6. You can also follow Brogan, a media
to monitor the competition and their latest marketing expert, on Twitter (@ChrisBrogan).
projects and ini tiatives
to monitor customer satisfaction and public
perception or their organizations
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
To realize the full potential of the Twiuersphere, consider the following guidelines:
1. Create a professional-looking profile and username and strive for a genuine, likeahle
tone.
2. Ask questions and respond in real time.
3. Be selective and professionally minded in what you tweet; focus on industry news and
research, conferences, and professional development opportunities and otllcomes or a
professionally related article or question.
4. Keep it conversational and free of "marketing-speak," and make it shareahle:- inspir-
ing, intriguing, newsworthy, or appropriately witty.3
5 . Retweet what you And interesti ng, reply publicly. and encourage retweets to acknow-
ledge and show appreciation to followers.
6. Make your content exceptional and retweetahle hy incorporating li nks, photos,
quotes, or videos that provide a fuller context for a husiness story or information
hurst. (Li nks of any length will automatically he sho rtened to fi.t the 140-character
limit.) Th ink of your tweet as an invitation to the reader to learn more.3 7
7. Inse rt a hash tag(#) symbol in Front of a phrase related to a specific topic to make it
easily searchable and to let others join the conversation.
8. Be strategic in the pace and timi ng of your tweets-do not send out so many at once
that it overloads your followers' feeds.
1! I SOCIAL MEDIA AND NE TWORK I NG
Companies that have embraced the power or social media have realized sigllifi-
cant henefi t...2
Two-thirds of executives surveyed helieve that social media are critical or important
to cm11orate effons.3 In 2012, one in five Canadian consumers used social media to get
a customer service response. Of those who used Facehook or Twitt.er for this purpose,
28 per cent were likely not to make a purchase ir they thought their customer service experi-
ence was poor.+< Therefore, making the experience a positive one has dear advantages.
Companies such as McDonald's have experienced ups and downs in using social
media for marketillg and customer relations. While McDonald's US marketers prompted
company backlash and had press in inviting ci1stome rs to tell their #McDstories,
McDonald's Canada took the lead in tweaking this approach and offe ring to answer any
question, no matter how insulting, abont its rood. The approach worked so well that it
was later expanded into television ads and netted the agency that desibrned the campaign
an award at the Cannes lions International Festival o r Creativity.,
The Shorty Awards, which honour the best brands, agencies, and professionals on
social media, sum u p the social media advantage in this way: "Social media gives compan-
ies the human touch, bringing customers closer to their favorite brands while allowing
marketers t.o engage directly with followers in fun and creative ways.""' Social media have
opened up world wide markets to even t.he smallest business and made what nsed to he
word or mouth into a global stream that can he heard and seen, instantaneously a nd spon-
taneously, hy the millions.1
Among young adults aged 18 to 34, 29 per cent regret posting a photo, comment, or
other personal infom1ation of questionable or potentially compromising content over fears
of bei ng fired or not hired if the inappropriate post is seen by an employe r or prospective
employer. Ahout 74 per cent of young adults and 36 per cent or older adults have deleted
social media content to keep it from the eyes of their employers and avoid their likely dis
approval." ln Canada, labour law protects joh-seekers from employers asking for personal
infom1at.ion, includi ng social media passwords. Applicants approached for this kind of
infonnation have the right to refuse. However, it is equally within an employer's rights to
search for employee information that has not heen properly protected. 1
Social med ia also have the unexpected disadvantage of making it harder for organiza
tions to control their message and conversations about thei r product or activities. Social
media platforms not only function as chan nels for positive, business-enhancing communi-
cation hut also carry risks for impression management and reputation , especially when
disgruntled customers or employees, through comments, have easy means to voice com-
plaints in a way that can influence public opinion against an organization or its products
and services. During a layoff at H MV in the UK in 2013, the social media manager (one of
50 employees let go) live tweeted her outrage and betrayal from the fi ring session at the
expense of the company's reputation and without clear regard for infom1ation that must
remain private hefore and after employment.'1
A failed social media campaii:,rn or one that has caused a backlash is also hard to eradi-
cate, even when controversial, misleading, or offensive product ads have heen removed.
The Gap was widely criticized for seeking to capitalize on Hurricane Sandy in 2012. In the
wake of the storm, which devastated parts of the US northeast, the company tweeted: "To
all those impacted by #Sandy, stay safe. We'll he doing lots of Gap.com shopping today.
How ahout you?" Representing a nat.ural disa.~ter as an opportunity ror online shopping
was a sentiment many followers and commentators found distasteful. The year hefore,
Kenneth Cole sent out a tweet maki ng light of the political tum1oil in Egypt and using it to
promote h L~ brands e-commerce: "Millions are in uproar over #Cairo. Rumor is they heard
our new spring collec1.ion is now availa ble on line at http://bit.ly/KCairo-KC."'8 ln 2007,
the Molson Canadian National Campus Challenge Facehook photo promotion attracted
negative attention and was ulti mately pulled afr.er criticism I.hat the campaign promoted
hi nge d rinking. The ad had said "Be I.he #1 party school in Canada" and offered a prize for
a tiip for five to Cancun to the school with the most pictures uploaded. 'Q Afte rwards, at a
meeting at a national conference of students and deans, Molson debuted a policy stipulat
ing that it does not promote its products in campus dormitories.
A company can also track what people are saying about competitors and their hrands.
A few of the best-known social media measurement tools include these four:
through an analysis of lin ks and Klout scores effectiveness of their social media
strategies: http://goo.gl/UqnMB7
PostRank- the largest aggregator of social
engagement data on the Internet, a system that
tracks what users pay attention t.o and where
and how they engage ill order to show the rel-
evance of a site, story, or author.0 1
Though the practice of soc:ial media measurem ent may raise privacy concerns, the chance
for companies to know how they are doing in reaching o ut to customer comm un ities and
thus improve their si.te cont.m t and hrands is an opportuni ty few markets can easily pass
up. Michael Wong, d irector of enterprise business intell igence at RBC, envisions a practical
use of analytics: "If theres a conversation that we believe we can perhaps engage in and
provide benefit or prospects, we'll step ill to provide ad vi.ce."62
O Be selective about the social media channels you choose to use for both personal and
professional purposes.
0 Keep your social networking profiles and posts current, professional, relevant, and
engaging .
0 Be aware that social media can interfere with productivity and that what you post may
be deemed inappropriate and/or unprofessional by employers and customers.
0 Practise ethical and effective social media use and learn your organization's policies
regarding this topic.
O Use social media analytics to track the success of your campaigns and to inform your
social media plans.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESU LTS
1. Creating a Course Blog. Ask you r instructor to set discipline, or fi.it.ure career. Who/what would you
up a course-specific hlog, with the required privacy consider following? Decide who can help you learn
settings, to which you and your classmates can con- more and con nect hette r. Here are a few steps and
trihute your advice on effective social media use. considerations that may help you choose;
(Alternatively, your instructo r might choose to set up a) Browse interests and review Twitter suggestions
a Twiner page.) Each memher of the cla~s is required ahout who to follow.
to make a minimum o f two postings or tweets. b) Discover your fri ends on Twitte r; if their profes-
2. Analyzing a Facebook or Twitter Campaign. ln small sional interests are simila r to your own, check
groups, :find an example of a Facehook or Twitter who they are following.
campaig:n for a consu me r product or non- profit c) Check the profile to ensure the bio corresponds
fundraising organization. Analyze the elements of to your interests.
this campaign and prepare a hrief, Ave-minute group d) See how many tweets and followers your pros-
presentation in which you review its major features pecL~ have, review some o r their tweets, and
and approach and identify a possihle target audience. check who they are following.
How is the main message, as delivered through social Present your picks to the class, explaining why you
media, different from the message as communicated chose them.
through the organization's wehsit.e or other media? S. Defining Your Social Media Style. For t.his activity,
3. Adapting to Twitter Style. ln small groups, post wo rk in small groups o f three or four. Identify which
tweets of the following on your class's Twitter page, as o f the Ave types of social media hehaviour descrihed
set up by your instructor; on page 463 best descrihes your dally social media
a) a rule for using Twitter or social media effectively activities. Consider the follmvi ng questions:
b) a p ri111ciple, concept, or learning outcome from a) What is your favourite social media site?
today's class b) What is your frequency o f use? How many times a
c) a synopsis or description of your communica- day do you check or post to your social network-
tions course ing sit.es? Does this frequency change acco rding
d) a promotional message for your college or to the particular site?
university c) How much time per day do you spend on social
e) a summary of last week's class media?
f) a sunnmary of a news story provided to you by d) What are your primary concerns in terms of self-
your instructor or searched by you and your team presentation and self-d isclosure? Do you edit the
members photos that you post? Have you ever removed
4. Exploring the Twittersphere. Log on to your Twitter a post to avoid a negative reaction from an
account, perfom1 a search , and find th ree hasht.ags employer or to improve joh prospects?
(#) and/or users (@) con nected to your program,
1 S I SOCIAL MEDIA AND N ETWORK I NG
1. Creating a Corporate Blog Post. Create a hlog post 3. Creating a Personal Profile. Create a mock-up of
for a corporate website ahoul a recent work-related your Facebook or Linkedln profile, then revise
achievement or professional-development milestone and upgrade it to make it more professional and
related to your skills or edi1cation. business-ready.
2. Writing for Biogs. Find a news story or press release
and compose a hlog post ror a corporate website.
ONLINE ACTIVITIES
1. Writing a Social Media Message. Read a selection of 3. Reviewing Shorty Award Winners. Go to the Shorty
consumer reviews (hoth positive and negative) on Awards website and view a selection o r award win-
TripAdvisor or Yelp, paying attention to elements of ners. What traits or qualities define effective social
social media style. Write a review of a recent trip to a media use? Which ones do you judge to be most
restaurant or hotel and post it to the site or submit it effective? How could a company with a less visible
to your instruct.or. social med ia presence adapt one of the campaigns?
www.tripadvisor.ca/ h ttp://u1dustry.shortyawards.co1n/wu1ners/
www.yelp.ca/ 5th_annual
2. Tweeting a Media Release. Read I.he T\vitter Chea.l
Sheet, "Write Good Tweets: Learn How to Make 140
Characters Sing." Then read the following CNW press
release and compose a tweet that captures the read -
ers Lmabrination and attention.
https://business.twitter.com/write-good-tweets
www.newswire.ca/en/story/1279583/netflix
-dee lares-binge-watching-is-the-new-nonnal
Usage
COMMONLY CONFUSED WORDS
There are several categories of commonly conJused words: homonyms (words that sou nd
alike but have different meanjngs), non -standard words (that fall outside accepted usage),
and words whose use depends on whether the nouns th ey are paired with are cou nt n ou ns
(naming persons, places, or things that can be counted , e.g., wmputer, acwuntant) or non-
count (naming abstractions or entities that can't he coun ted, e.g., advice, luggage). The
numbe r sign (#) in entries in dicates that the rules of count and non-count usage apply.
a/an Both a and an are singular indeli.n ite articles. Use a be fore a consonant sound
(a report) and an before a vowel sound (an auditor). Special cas es: Use an before an
acronym begin ning with a vowel sound but not necessarily wit.h a vowel (cm RSP, an
MP) or before a word beginning with a silent h (an hour, an honest mistake). If the h
is pron ounced, the word therefore begins with a consonant sound and requires a
(n ot an): a hospital, a hostile talm iver.
accep t/except/expect Accept is a verb mean ing "agree to" or "receive." Exct:pt is both
a preposition an d a verb. In its more common t1se as a preposition, it means "leav-
ing o ut" or "exclu di ng." As a verb , it means "to exclude." TIP: Let the x in except be
a remi nder o r the x in exclude. Avoid the common e rror or typi ng expect ("regard as
likely,'' "suppose") instead o f except.
a in aff1:c:t as standing for its verbal act.ion and the e in 1ifect as a conven ient reminder
of the e in result.
Restructuring did not affect mora le; in the long term it will have a positive effect on
productivity.
agree to/agree with Agree to means "i,>ive consent to." Agn:e with means "hold the same
opinion" o r "he in harmony with."
The managers agreed to the changes.
The managers agree w ith him about the timeliness of the plan.
ain't Ain't L~ non-standard for gram matically co rrect equivalents such as elm not, is not,
and are not. It is unacceptable in all forms of communication for the workplace.
a lot/allot/lots A lot (never alot) is an informal way of expressing the idea of "many" or
"a great deal"- tem1s that are in fact preferable in most business documents. Allot is
a verb meaning "to distribute" or "dole out in portions." Lots is unacceptable, 11011
standard usage.
altemat.ive/altemat.e Alternative is an adjective that means "available as another choice"
or "unconventional" (as in alternative medicine). lt is also a noun meaning "one of sev-
eral possibilities" or t.he freedom to choose between them.
They optioned several alternative energy sources.
She had doubts about the plan but disliked the alternatives even more.
Alternctte is al~o
an adjective, meaning "every other," and a stand-alone noun denot-
ing a person or thing that substitutes for another. The verb alternate means "change
between two things" or describes "two things succeeding each other by turns."
Seminars were scheduled for alternate Tuesdays.
a.m./A.M./p.m./P.M. The abbreviation a.m. stands for ante meridiem ("before noon");
p.m. stands for post meridit:m ("a rter noon"). Neither should be used red undantly (as
in 8:00 a.m. in the morning o r 3:00 p.m. in the ctfternoon) nor with the adverb o'clock.
Whether the a.m. and p.m. abbreviations are typed in capital (or small capital) o r low-
ercase letters, the style you choose should he maintained consistently To ind icate the
time of day, use figures, not words (11:00 a.m.) . lf the time is on the hour, the colon
and zeros may be omitted ; otherwise, use a colon to separate the hour from the min-
utes (11 :.10 a.m.).
APPEND IX A I BUSINESS US AGE : A STY LE AND ME CH AN ICS GU I DE
among/amongs t These fom1s are inte rchangeable in all] contexts. Among is hy far more
common, especially in North American usage, whereas amongst is more closely identi
fied with British usage and has a somewhat old-fashioned or genteel quality. Amongst
was on ce used with verbs conveying movement (hr. distributed the memr1 amongst his
co-workers), hut this usage is no longer common.
amonglhetween (#) Use among with three or more people or items, betwt:en with two.
The dispute between the company and its supplier has been resolved.
Use the objective case o r persona l pronouns (me, you, him, her, u.s, them) when they
follow between.
Between you and me, I think we should reconsider the merger.
amount/numb er (#) Amount indicates an uncountable quantity. Use it with nouns that
name uncountable items (work, mail, equipment, money). Number indicates a count-
able quantity. Use it wit.h coun table nouns. TIP: Amount is never used with nouns
end i11g in plural s. Uncountab le nouns always take singular fom1.
He had a number of reports to write- a considerable amount of work for a single day.
amp ersand (&) Use the ampersand sign (&) on ly in abbreviations ( R&D ror research
and development, M&A for mergers and acquhitfrms) and in the regL~tered names of
organizations where it commonly appears (Royal & SunAlliance Canada, Procter &
Gamble Canada). The ampersand should not he suhstit.uted for and in text.
Thei r company has long made use of federal government grants to fund R&D.
lf the comparison incorporates a prepositional phrase (beginning with in, on, or at),
use as instead of like.
In France, as in Germany, the unit of currency is the euro.
She assured him that the team would meet the deadline.
averse/adverse Averse (usually followed hy to) means "opposed to ." Adverse means
"harmful" or "unfavourahle." TIP: Think o f the n oun forms of these adjectives-aver-
.~ion and adver.~ary-Lo differentiate them more ea_c;ily.
She was averse to any plan that would have an adverse effect on efficiency.
had/badly Bad L~ an adjective describing people, places, and thi ngs; also use it a fter link-
ing verbs such as feel, seem, appear, be, ~7nell, and taste .
He felt bad [not badly] about the cutbacks.
heside/hesides Bt:side is a preposition meaning "next to," "near," or "at the side o f."
I sat beside him at the annual general meeting.
Be~ides is like\vise a preposition but means "apart from" or "in addi tion to."
Besides balancing the departmental budget, the new manager improved employee
relations.
Besides is also an adverh meanin g "moreover," but this particular usage is more
colloq uial.
The fund has performed well in the past. Besides, it promises even higher returns in the
coming year.
She presented a S100 cheque to both of us to cover our expenses. [two people shared
$100]
She gave us each a $100 cheque to cover our expenses. [each person received $100]
bring/take Use bring when an object. is being transported from a dist.ant place t.o a near
place; use takt: when an object is transponed from a near place to a distant place.
Please bring the figures for the Anderson report with you to today's meeting.
Please take these files with you when you go.
can/may The once all-import.an t distinction between can and may survives in fom1al writ
ing. Can denotes ability, whereas may is reserved for requesting or granting permission.
Impressed by his credentials, she complimented him on his flu ency in three languages.
COMM U N I CATI N G FOR RESU LTS
differ frcnnldiffer with Differ from means "he unlike"; differ with means "dL~agree" and
usually suggests a disagreement between people.
The manager's recommendations differed from hers.
The task force members differed with each other over the wording of the agreement.
There was dissent among committee members over the wording of the agreement.
She packed away her laptop as the airplane made its final descent.
e.g./i.e./ex. The abbreviation e.g. stands for the Latin expression exempli gratia ("for
example"). It is often used in parentheses to introduce an example or to clarify a pre-
cedi ng statement. The abbreviation i.e. st.ands for the lat.in expression id est ("that is
to say"). Use it to expand a point or restate an idea more clearly. In fonnal writing.
replace e.g. with the English equivalent, for instance or for example. The abbreviation
ex. is non-standard.
emigrate from/immigrate to emigrate means "leave <me's own country and settle in
anotl1er." Immigrate means "come as a permanent resident to a country other than
ones own native land."
emin ent/imminent E111int:11t means "notable, distinguished"; imminent means "impend-
ing, ahout to happen."
The panel of speakers includes an eminent psychologist.
emoticons These symbols, which combine punctuation marks to convey strong emo-
tion or tone, are not recom mended for most business correspond ence. Am ong the
best lmown are:-) (happy),;-) (winking sarcasm), and :-o (shocked).
enquiry/inquiry An enquiry is "an act of asking or seeking infom1at.ion"; an inquiry is "an
investigation." Each is a variant spelling for the other.
etc.let al. Commonly used at the end of lists, et.c. is an abbreviation meaning "and the
rest" or "and other things." Use it (as sparingly as possible) to refer to things, not
people. lf etc. comes at the end of a sentence, its single period is sufficient to create a
full stop- there is no need to add another period. The abbreviation et al. stands for
the lat.i n expression et alii ("and others" or "and other people") and is used in source
citations fo r works wi th three or more authors.
explicit/im plicit Explicit means "expressed clearly, definitely, o r in detail." TIP: To
remember this meaning, think of the verb explicate, which shares explicit's word ori-
gin. Implicit, on the other hand, means "n ot plainly exp ressed but implied." less
comm only, it can also suggest a st.ate of containment (often followed by in) or an
unquestioning atti tude.
He gave explicit instructions that no one should interrupt the meeting.
farther/further Use farther t.o suggest greater physical distance; use fur ther t.o sug-
gest great.er time or a more abstract quality. Some writers prefer usi ng further to
suggest distance.
How much farther is it to the ai rport?
few/little (#) Use Jew ("not many") with countable items and little ("not much") with
uncountable items.
There were few complaints about the new procedures.
fewer/less (#) These are the comparative forms of Jew and little. Use fewer ("not as
many") with countable it.ems (fewer investments, fewer reports, fewer losses). Use less
("not as much") with uncou nr.ahle items and general amounts (less money, less time,
Im input).
He has less work to do because he has fewer calls to answer.
former/latter When referri ng to two items, use former to indicate the first and latter to
indicate the second.
APPEND IX A I BUSINESS US AGE : A STY LE AND ME CH AN ICS GU I DE
formerly/fnrimllly Formerly means "i n the pa.~t." Formally means "in a formal, struc-
tured manner."
Jill was formerly an investment counsellor with Mathers-Acheson.
He knew her to see her, but they had never been formally introduced.
forward/forwards/foreword Both frmvard an d forwards are adverhs meaning "to the
fron t," "ahead," or "into prominence." Fonvards is used to suggest conti nuous forward
motion (hadiwards andfonvards). forward is preferred in most other cases.
They decided to move forward(s] with the project.
Fonvard is also an adjective meaning "at or n ear the Front," "advanced and wi.th a view
to th e future," and "hold or presumptuous." In a specific business context, it refers to
future produce or delivery (forward contract).
Today's forward thinkers are tomorrow's CEOs.
good/we 11 Good is an adjective; well is both an adjective (meaning "h ealthy") and an
adverb (meaning "effectively").
Her interpersonal skills are good.
He is a good judge of character.
She is well today and will return to work.
He performed well in the job interview.
got/have/have got Got is a colloquial., non-standard substitute for have (l got permission
t.o proceed). lt should be avoided in formal business messages. Must. or have are more
acceptable substitutes for have got.
He must [not bas got Lo) submit a new application.
We have [not have got) a week to gather the data for the report.
hanged/hung lianged means "executed hy han ging." !lung means "supported or sus-
pended from the top" and has many informal usag,es (hung out together, hung out to
dry), most o f th em imsuitable for business correspon dence.
With the outlawing of capital punishment, no one has been hanged in Canada in more
than thirty years.
They hung their coats in the reception area before the meeting began.
hardly Hardly means "only just" or "only with difficU11ty " lt sh ou ld not he used with
negative constructions.
I could [not couldn't) hardly believe the sudden upturn in the economy.
COMM U N I C ATIN G FOR RESULTS
have/of Use have (not of) after the verhs could, should, would, might, and must.
he/his Decades ago, he was used whenever the sex of a pe rson wa..<; unspecified.
If anyone objects he will have to file a grievance.
Each accountant has his own office where he is free to meet with clients.
Today, many regard this practice, known as common gender, as sexist; h owever,
the effort to avoid discriminatory and exclusionary lanbruage oft.en leads to awk-
ward alternatives. To create gender-neutral sentences, consider using one or the
followi ng methods:
Replace the offending singular pronoun with the plural they/their. Although
this method is expedient and gaining in acceptance, it makes for incorrect gram-
mar and fuzzy logic.
If anyone objects they will have to file a grievance.
Each accountant has their own office where they are free to meet with clients.
Recast the sentence usimg plural forms. Use indefinite pronouns (always sin-
gular) that don't require: subsequent gender identification.
Anyone w ho objects w ill have to file a grievance.
All accountants have their own offices where they are free to meet with clients.
Change he and his to he/site and his/hers. Appropriate if used sparingly, thL<;
method Ls the most awkward way to avoid sexist language. The constmcti on s/he is
not generally recom mended.
headings Headings used to organize long documents should he stylistically consistent
hy level throughout in terms of capitalization , italicization, typeface, spacing, and
placement (centred or flush with left margin).
headquarters Headquarters (ahlm:viated HQ)- the administrative centre of an
organization- takes hoth si111gular and plural verhs.
homepage/hom e page A homepage (also written as home page) is the introductory page
of a website.
htt.p:// and www The protocol http:!/ may he omitted if www is part of the URL or weh
address.
I/we l (singular) and wr. (plural) are first-person pronouns that help to estahlish the
moderate informality o r a personal busi ness style. While personal pronouns are
frowned upon in academic essays, I, you, and wt: can help business writers express
themselves more directly and fluently in their daily tasking-centred messages. In each
case, usage is determined by cont.ext and readers' needs.
Use I for independent tasking or when you are the sole decision-maker.
Use we (1) for collahorative writing projects, (2) when you write on hehalf of
a group or speak for a consensus, and (J) when you have the authority to act
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as spokespe rson for the policies and decisions or your organization. We should
never im ply the loftiness of the "royal We" or I.he condescension of Ilow are we
f~eling
today?
imply/infer Imply means "to hint at, suggest, or insinuate without stating plainly." Infer
meai1s "to draw a conclusion from what is written or said." Generally, the writer o r
speaker implies; the reader or listener infers.
While he didn't say so specifically, George implied that the negotiations were going well.
The media inferred from George's comments that the strike would be settled by the end
of the week.
in regard to/in regards to/as regards/regards The expressions in regard to and with
regard to both mean "as concerns," making them interchangeable. As concerns is a
somewhat stuffier expression meaning "about or concerning." ln regards to, a misusage
resulting from a confusion of these similar phrases, is considered incorrect. A~ regards
is an. accept.able phrase. Regards is an informal complimentary close.
In ternet Though web-related words are increasingly found in lowercase, this noun is
capitalized, as is its abbreviation Net.
IPO Use this abbreviation for initial public r1ffering after the first reference.
irregardless/regardless Not to he confused with irrespectiv1: ("regardless or'), which is
acceptahle hut somewhat stiff, irregardless is non-standard and incorrect; instead, use
regardlt:ss (mean ing "without consideration for").
it's/its ft'.~ is a contraction of it is. Its is a possessive pronoun. Li ke other possessive pro-
nouns (his, hers, ours, yours, thdrs), its requires no apostrophe to denote possession.
It's possible to reduce costs.
kind/kinds Kind is singular; the nouns and demonstrar.ive pronouns (this and that) that
abree with it are also singular. Kinds is plural; use it to indicate more than one kind.
Use it with plural nouns and demonstrative pronou11s (these, those): this kind of file!
those kinds offiles.
This kind of retroactive agreement is rare.
kindly Kindly means "please" in a polite demand or re:quest (Kindly refer to the enclosed
documents) . While the courtesy kindly conveys is never out of place, some regard it as
old-fashioned o r overly gent.eel.
kind of/sort of These informal expressions mean "sonnewhat" or "to some extent" and
usually imply vagueness or looseness about the tem1 to which they are applied.
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later/latter Later means "after .a time." Latter means "the second-mentioned o r two" or
"nearer t.he end."
His responsibilities require him to travel in the latter part of the year.
lay/lie Lay is a verb meanjng "to put or place something on a surface." lt requires a direct
object to express a complete idea. Lie means "to be situated in," "to recline," or "to be
in a horizontal position." It does not require a d irect object to express a complete idea.
The present tense of lay and the past tense form of lie are o ften confused.
lay off/layoff Lay riff (written as two words) L~ a verb meaning "remove employees to cut
costs or decrease the workforce"; layoff (written as a single word) is a noun.
lead/led Lr.ad is both a n oun tbat names a type of met.al and the present-tense singular
form of a verb (pronounced leed) that means "to guid e by goi ng in front." f..ed is the
past tense and past participle of lt:ad.
Teleway Inc. leads its sector in domestic sales.
The department manager led a delegation at last year's equity conference.
lend/loan Lend is a verb meaning "to allow the use of money at interest" or "to give
someone the use of something on t.he understanding it will be returned." f..t:nt is its
past tense an d past participle ([ lent, l have lent). Loan is a noun mean ing a sum of
money lent as weU as a verb meaning "to lend," espedaUy "to lend money."
liahle/libel/likely Liable means "legally bound" or "subject to penalty or tax." Liable is also
a synonym for likely ("probable") and apt ("have a tendency"), but this usage s hould he
avoided in business messages, where it misleadingly implies legal Liability or poten-
tially impleasant results. Libel is "a false and defamatory written statemen t." (Slander, on
the other hand, refers to a "false, malidous and defamatory spoken statement.")
licence/license As a noun, lir:ence means "a permit from authority to use somethi ng,
own something, or do something ." Its varian t US spelling, license, is usiially accept
able in Canadian usage. As a verb , license (and also licence) means "grant a licence (to
a person)."
loose/lose UWSe is an adjective mean ing "not tigh t" OT "banging partly free." UISe is a
ve rb meaning "cease to have ," "become unab le to find," or "suffe r a loss."
many/much (#) Use many when referring to more than one item; use much with
uncountahk or singk items.
may be/maybe May be is a ve rh phrase expressing poss ibility. Maybe is an adverh mean
ing "perhaps" or "possihly."
There may be plans for an additional support network.
Maybe the company will be restructured next year.
media/m edium Media is a plmal noun; medium is a s ingular n oim. There is growing
acceptance for the use of media as a mass n oun with a singu lar verh.
Marshall McLuhan claimed, The medium is the message."
Myself is the reflexive form of me. It refers to or intensifies 1or me. ln all other cases,
avoid suhstituting myself for I and me in formal writing.
I gave myself credit for finishing the report on time.
NASDAQ This acron ym stands for National Association of Securities Dealers Aut11mated
Quotation System, the second- largest stock market in the United States. It is also the
ahhreviation used after an initial reference to the NASDAQ compo~ite index.
new economy/old economy New economy refers to the Internet economy; old economy
refers to the pre- Internet economy.
number See amount/number
OK/0.K.fokay These informal fonns of all right or satisfactory are accept.able in most
types of e-mail but sh ould be avoided in formal writing.
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passed/past Passed is the past tense o r the verh pass. Past means "gone hy in time" or
"recently completed."
Shares climbed 15 per cent since the company reported a $200 million profit last week.
There has been a drop in the percentage of investors who support the sell-off.
practice/practise Practice (less commonly spelled practise) is a noun meaning "a custom
or way of doing something," "a repeated exercise that develops skills," or "the profes-
sional work of a doctor, lawyer, etc." Practise (less commonly spelled practice) is a verb
meaning "perfonn habitually" o r "he engaged in a profession, religion , etc."
She will open a legal practice when she graduates with her LLB next year.
He will need to practise his French before he transfers to our Montreal office.
precede/proceed Iloth verhs, precede means "come before" and proceed means "go ahead
with an activity" or "continue."
A request for tenders precedes the selection process.
Once you receive authorization, you may proceed with the project.
principal/principle Princ:ipal is an adjective, meaning "fi rst in rank or importance" and
a noun meaning "capital sum" or "chief person" (especially the head o r a school).
Principle is a noun , meani ng "rule" or "axiom." TIPS: The pri mary school saying "the
principal is my pal" is a helpful way of remembering the distinction between these
homonyms. Both principle and rul1: have le endings and simllar meanings.
quotation/quote The noun qur1tation is "a reprinted statement made hy another person
or horrnwed from a hook or other source, usually enclosed in quotation marks." J.n
husiness, it often refers to "an estimated cost" or "the current price of a stock or com-
modity." Quote is t.he in formal abbreviated rom1 of the n oun as well as a verh. In busi-
ness, t.he verh often means "to st.ate t.he p rice o f a job ."
She began her speech with a quotation from The World Is Flat.
The quote [or quotation) for the project seemed unreasonably high.
At the close of markets today, gold was quoted at $325.
real/really Real is an adjective; really is an adverh. Do not use real as an adverb if you
want to avoid sounding folksy and colloquial.
Our finest line of desktop organizers is crafted from real Cordovan leather.
He said he was really [not real) sorry about the delay.
reason is b ecau se/reason is that The reason is because is redundant. Use either because
or the reason . . . is that.
The reason revenues grew was that [not is because] the company sold its poor-
performing lending business.
Revenues grew because the company sold its poor-performing lending business.
reason that/reason why Th e expression the rt:ason why is redundant. Use either the
reawn that or simply why.
I don't know the reason that [not the reason why] he left.
s halVwilll Shall wa..c; once commonly used as a helping ve rh with I and we t.o ex-press
future actio11 and with second a11d th ird persons to ex-press intention or detem1ina-
tion_ Will was used, conversely, to exp ress in ten tion \vith th e first person and the
future tense in the second and th ird persons. Tod ay, th ere L<; less confusion ahout
when to use shall and will. Now less common , shall L.o; still used to express a suggestion
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or pose a very polite q uestion (Shall we go?) . In legal documents, shall expresses obli-
gation o r duty (The author shall revise the work.), hut the fo rmality of the word makes it
less suitable for most husi.ness messages. Will is now used with all persons to form the
future tense and to express an assertion or a strong command.
since/because Since usually relates to time. Avoid using since as a suhstitute for br.caust: if
there is any hint of ambiguity, as in the following example: Since [mea11ing both from
that time and became) he got a promotion, he has spent more on luxuries.
He has received five job offers since his graduation last June.
sitt:/sight/cite Site is a noun referring to "a partkular place," including a single source
for files or services on the Internet. Sight is both a noun referring to the faculty of see-
ing or a thing seen and a verb meani.ng "ohserve or notice." Cite, also a verb, means
"t.o quote or mention as an authority or example."
The new site for our company offices will offer easy access to public transit.
The sight of the month-old sandwich in the cafeteria made him ill.
The committee will meet sometime in May to make its final decision.
s tationary/s tationery Stationary means "n ot moving." Stationery refers t.o wri ting mate-
rials and office supplies. TIP: the e in the ending of stationery should remind you of
the e's in envelope and letter).
s uppose to/supposed to Suppose to is non-standard for supposed to. The final d and the
precedlng verb be are essential to convey the idea of a plan, obligation, or somer.hlng
that L~ generally accepted. Suppose, without be and the final d, means "assume" or "he
inclined to think. " l suppose so is an expression of hesitant agreement.
The meeting was supposed to take place last Thursday, but was postponed indefinitely.
takeover/take over Takeover is a noun 1.hat refers to "the assumption of control or own-
ership of a husiness," especially tbe sometimes hostlle huyi.ng out of one business by
another. Take over is a verb meaning "1.0 control" or "to succeed to the management o r
ownership oP' somethlng.
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dtRn/then Than is a conjunction that indicates comparison. Then is an adverh that shows
relationships in time.
than 1/th an me The choice of a pronoun can alt.er the meaning of a sen tence. To check
that the pronoun delivers its intended meaning, temporarily add the extra words that
are implied.
Hopkins likes golf more than I. [in other words, Hopkins likes golf more than I like goln
Hopkins likes golf more than me. [in other words, Hopkins likes golf more than he likes me]
that/which/who These relative pronouns are key sentence builders because they intro-
duce clauses that limit the meaning of the word or words they refer to . Relative pro-
nouns add clarity hy defining relationships and, because of this, should he retained in
documents intended for translation. On the other hand, too many that, which, and who
clauses create a cluttered and awkward syn tax. For conciseness, especially in inform.al
documents, revise wordy clauses hy replacing them with equivalent modifiers.
Awkward: Place copies of claims that have been rejected in the tray that is red.
Awkward: The adjuster who handles small claims is the one that you should speak to.
lt is important to distinguish between that, which, and who. That refers mainly to
things or animal~ hut can also refer to a group of people (The committee that revised
the proposal received praise.). That introduces restrictive clauses adding information
essential to the meaning of the sen tence. Restrictive clauses beginning with that are
not set off with commas. Which also refers to things or animals hut introduces non-
restrictive dai1ses con taining infom1ation that is helpful hut not necessarily essential
to the meaning of a sentence. Non-restrictive clauses are set off \vith comm.as. Less
commonly, which can also he used t.o introduce restrictive clauses. Who is a relative
pronoun that refers to people.
The report that you sent me yesterday is timely and well prepared. [that yau sent me yes-
terday limits the report to a particular report]
Your report, which I received yesterday, is timely and well prepared. [which Ireceived yes-
terday just provides more infom1ation about the repon]
Analysts who recently predicted falling share prices are now optimistic about the stock's
performance. [When not set off with commas, the restrictive clause who recently pre-
dicted foiling share prices limits analysts to a particular group of analysts.)
Analysts, who recently predicted falling share prices, are now optimistic about the stock's
performance. [When followed hy a non-restrictive d:ause set off with commas, th e
meaning of analysts remains general.]
there/their/they're There refers to a posi.t.ion or place and is also used to indicate the
existence o f someth ing at the beginning o f an expletive senten ce (There i.s a new Ii.sting
011 the TSX.). Thdr is a possessive pronoun. They're is the contraction o f they are.
toward/towards As prepositions meaning "in the direction o f," toward and towards are
equal and interchangeable. It is best to pick one spelling and use it consistently within
a document.
unsolvable/insoluble/ins olvent Both unsolvable and insoluble mean "incapable of being
solved." Insolvent means "unable to pay ones debts."
u se to/used tn Used to is the only correct usage when referring tn someth ing that hap
pened in the past; the d ending in used is essen tial.
He used to work for this company but now he heads up his own business.
wait for/wait on Wait for mean s "await"; wait on can mean either "serve" or "await."
while The subordinate conjunction while means "during that time" as well as "in spite of
the fact that" and "on the contrary." If you are using it to concede a point, while must
not deliver the unintended meaning of simultaneous act.ion. Un less "during that time"
is the intended meaning, replace while with although, whaeas, or de~pite the fact that.
Ambiguous: While there are problems, I think we should proceed with caution. [ThL~
implies "proceed with caution only as long as the problems persist.")
Clear: Although there are problems, I think we should proceed with caution.
[Th is means "proceed with caution in spite of the fact that t.lnere are
prohlem..~. ")
Amhiguous: I thought we should move ahead with the project while they had other
ideas.
Clear: I thought we should move ahead with the project whereas they h ad other
ideas.
Whom did CanBizMagazine hire as its new editor? (CanBiz Magazine h ired
him , not he, as its 11ew edit.or; therefore whom is correct.)
J. Whom commonly follows prepositions such as to and for (think of the
salu tation To Whom It May Concern) .
For whom was the memo intended? (Th e memo was intended for them,
not they.)
To whom should the letter be addressed? (The letter should be addressed
to her, not she.)
who's/whos e Who'.~ is th e contraction of who is. Whose is the possessive fom1 of who.
Who's eligible for the new training program?
Our chief sales representative, whose name is Paul Sharma, will be glad to assist you.
Whose phone is this?
USAGE EXERCISE
According to context, select the correct word in each set. of parentheses:
2. Th e (ajfecl~leffecl~) of the (take over/takeover) were felt by many personnel. Th ose most
(affected/effected) blamed (bacliwardlbac:kwards) policies.
3. After (alot/allot/a lot) of consult.at.ion with printers, the vice-president approved the
new design for the company (stationary/statirme1y).
5. She was (suppose to/supposed to) settle 1.he dispute (among/between) the five committee
members.
7. ln the (pa.st/passed) year, the government has (pa.st/passed) new labour legislation.
8. The hiring committee will meet (sometime/some time/sometimes) in the next week.
10. Because the confe rence is held (biennially!biannually!semiannually), Sean has two
years to prepare his next study of investment trends.
11. (As regards/ln regard to/Regards) your request to (precede/proceed) wi th the project, l
fully support your initiative and ask that you move (foreword!forward.~lforward) with
the plan.
12. (Between you and mt:!Between you and (), I think the need for more (capital/capitol) is
justified.
13. Lise (could cif!could have) solved the problem if she had been (apprised/appraised) of the
si tuation.
14. Every (chainnanlchairperscm!chair) of the advisory (council!ccmnsel) has had (his own/
an) office.
15. Our team\; recommendations differed (from/with) (theirs/there's).
17. (Compared to/Compared with) his co-workers, Jorge performs (well/good) under pres
sure (due to/because of) his superior time-management ski.lls.
18. The cancellation of the flight was (due to/becaust: of) mechanical problems.
19. (While/A lthough) the financial officer (who/whom) he reports to is supportive, s he plans
to cut the budget for bis department.
20. The committee is looking for applicants (who/whom) they feel are best prepared to
promote our products in emerging markets.
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Abbreviated titles be fore and after names: Use ahhreviations ending in periods for
titles that precede names (Mr., Ms., Mrs., Prof., Dr., Hon.) or ahhreviations for degrees and
professional designations that follow names (CA, Ph.D., M.D., LLB., Q.C.):
../ ../ x
Ms. Maria DaSilva Maria DaSilva, CA Ms. Maria DaSilva, CA
Dr. Paul Lui Paul Lui, M.D. Dr. Paul Lui, M.D.
Hon. Peter Kent
Thomas McKay, Jr.
Rev. Ian Wilding
Prof. Iqbal Khan Iqbal Khan, Ph.D. Prof. Iqbal Khan, Ph.D.
Abhreviations of months: All months except May, J une, and July can he abbrevi
ated when the month is w1itten in text and is followed by a numeral (Oct. 5,]an. 28,
June 17). Use full spelling for the month if it appears on it.sown or if it is followed hy
a year (December; March 1998). Do not abhreviate months in lette r datelines.
Abhreviations of provinces and addresses: Use the two-letter postal ahhreviations
of provinces and territories (AB, BC, MB, NB, NL, NS, NT, NU, ON, PE, QC, SK, YT)
in add ress hlocks. Spell out the province'!> name in text when it is accompanied hy the
name of a town or city (the Markham, Ontario, plant will be expanded) and when the
province name appears alone (the Ontario plant will be expanded). Spell out words such
as street, boult:vard, and avenue in all inside addresses and in text wh en no numher is
part o f the address (please vhit our Ilastings Street riffke).
Jn general, make ahhreviations as clear as possih le. If necessary, add periods t.o ahhrevia-
tions that might he mistaken for words or typographical errors (e.g., a.h.a. or a.m.).
ACRONYMS
An acronym is a shortened form created from the first letters of a series o f words. It is
pron ounced either as a single word (e.g., WHO stands for the World Health Organ ization;
other examples are NATO and CANDU) or by lette r (by-letter acronyms, such as the CBC
o r RCMP, are called initialisms) and in most cases does not require periods. If an acronym
is well k111own , use it without explanation; otherwise, sp ell it out parenthetically on first
reference: CPA (Ct:rtj~ed Public Accountant), Al'P (Associatirm <if Fundraising Professionals).
Acronyms are oft.en used for the following:
MODEM (modulator/demodulator)
MS (multiple sclerosis)
Numbers
Numbers may be expressed as words or as figures. In general, numbers up to and includ-
lng ten are expressed as words; numbers above ten are expressed as figures. There are
exceptions to this rule. For example, in this text, round numbe rs (e.g., fifty, one hundred)
are expressed as words.
NUMBERS USAGE
Emphasis: Numbers under ten may be written as figures in special financial contexts
and data references (The TSX is down R point~. ).
Placement: Write the m1mher as a word if it begins a sentence (Fifteen council m~?n
bers attended the meeting.). Hyphenate words that fom1 a single number (Seventy-eight
applications have been ~11bmitted.) . lf the number consists of more than two words, con-
sider revising the sentence so that the number is not at the beginn ing (On average, 175
employees apply for thi~ program each year.).
Money: Use figures to express sums of money greater than one dollar (The deluxe
staplers wst $22.95 t:ach.). Omit the decimal and zeros when expressing whole dollar
amoimts (The starting salary is $50,000.).
Big figures: Write million or. billion as a word instead of a figure with multiple zeros.
The number that precedes million or billion is expressed as a flbri.tre (The company
committed $2 million to the pnlject.). Figures in the millions are generally rounded off
to one decimal place, but care should be taken to avoid posslble misrepresentation
(Average compensation reached almost $.5..5 million this year.).
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Ages: Use words to el<11ress ages (The preferred age for early retirement is ftftyfive.)
unless the age follows a name (Joan Bmmerman, 62, is tlie top candidate for CFO.).
Related numbers: Express related numbers (referring to items in the same category)
in the fom1 used for the larger number (Four of the five candidates have graduate degrees.
and We are prepared to retire 7 vehicles from our current Jlt:et. of 32.). Express the first
related number as a word if it falls at the beginning o f a sentence (Sew:n of hi.~tmy'.~ 10
large:st bankruptcies occurred in 2001 or 2002.).
Ccmsecutive numbers: Differentiate consecutive numbers that modify the same noun
by expressing the first as a word and the second as a fibrure (She purchased four 20-year
bonds). If the first number consists of more than two words, express it as a figure (2.50
twelve-page imerts).
Decimals and percentages: Use figures to express decimals (9. 75). For amounts less
than one, put a zero before the decimal (0.5) unJess the decimal it~elf begins with
a zern (.08). Avoid using more than two decimal points in text. AL~o use fibrures to
express percentages along with t.he word per cent (a: 10 per cent drop) or followed by
the %symbol in statistical reports (a .5% increast:). Use the% sib'll \vi th each individual
number (Tlie share-return price shrank t.o 45% from 57% the previous year.). Spell out
the percentage at the beginning of a sentence (Thirty per c:ent of area residt:11ts opposed
tlie development.) .
Simpl e fractions: Express simple fractions as words in text (Thrt:e quarters of
Canadians /Jave Internet ac:cess.) and hyphenate them when they are used as modifiers
(lie sold his one-quarter share in the company.).
Time: To express clock time (\vith a.m. or p.m.), use figures (a meeting will bt: ht:ld
on February 4 at 2:00 p.m.). To ex11ress periods of time, use words (Tlie company lias
manufactured optical instrumt:11ts for sixty-five years.) or use fibrures for emphasis of
important financial or contractual terms (a JO-day m(mey-back &'arantt:e).
Dates: Use figures when the number follows the name of the month (January 15) and
use ordinals (.!st, 2nd, Jrd) when the number precedes the name of the month (We will
meet cm tlie 15th rif January.). Do not use ordinals in European or military-style date
lin es (15 January 2014).
Weights and measurements: Use figures to express weights a nd measure
men.ts \vith flgures (each unit weighs 2.2 kg; tlie office L~ 5 kilometres from Vancouver
lntematicmal Airport).
Telephone and fax numbers: For telephone and fax numbers in Canada and the
United States, put the area code in parentheses and insert a hyphen aft.er the exchange,
for example (519) 5552167; if extensions are essential, place a comma after the tele
phone numher followed by the abbreviation Ext or ext. For internal numbers, include
only the extension, for example Please call Terry Simpson, ext. 445. Periods may also be
used in place of more conventional punctuation: 519.555.2167.
Addresses: 'vVrite street numbers in figures, except for the number one.
Chapters and sect.ions: Use figures lo designate chapter and section numbers.
Capitalize the word before the numher (Chapter 7, Sf:ction J).
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WORDS FIGURES
numbers ten and under numbers above ten
numbers that begin sentences numbers that begin sentences (3+ words)
small fractions weights and measurements
ages ages that appear after names
periods of time clock time
addresses
sections, chapters, pages
decimals, percentages
money
3. Our small electronics division had revenues of $12,900,000.00 in t.he latest fiscal
year, an increase of fifteen per cent over the previous year.
4. When the price of gasoline rose t.o one dollar and twen ty cents a litre, 1 media outlets
in the greater Halifax area reported that price gouging was to hlame.
5. The association's first confe rence on hiomedical ethics, scheduled for January the
tenth, is eiq1ected to draw more than three-h undred-and-fifty participants.
6. Our 5 Calgary-area sales centres were among the top 20 dealerships in the country for
the 4th consecutive year.
7. Pure Citrus Products was charged with false advertising when it was found that iL~
Premierrn Juice product line contained only .5 per cent real fruit ji1ice.
Capitalization
CAPITALIZATION GUIDELINES
Proper nouns: Proper nouns, which name specific people, places (geographic loca-
tions), and things, should he capitalized. References to language, c:ulture, or ethnicity
(l'rench, Indonesian) should also be capitalized. Common nouns, naming gem.era! cat-
egories, are not capitalized u nless they fall at the beginning of a sentence.
Business and proressional titles: Capitalize husiness titles only when they precede
names or appear in inside addresses, salutations, signature blocks, official documents,
and minutes of meeti ngs. Do not capitalize these titles when they follow names or
appear alone in running text.
Ms. Shauna Kovick
Director of Human Resources
Technion Enterprises, Inc.
Ottawa, ON K4W 2E9
Sincerely,
David McHenry
Corporate Travel Administrator
Note that the style b'llidelines of ind ividual organizations may have different standards.
Departm ent and division names: Capitali ze the names of com mittees, depart
ments, and divisions within your organization. lt is customary in some organizations,
however, to lowercase these names. lf in doubt about which style your organization
prefers, consult corporate style guidelines. Use lowercase for non-specific names of
committees, departments, and divisions out~ide your o rganjzation.
The package was forwarded to our Project Management Division.
Organization nam es: Capitalize all words (excluding non-initial conj unctions and
prepositions) in the names of puhlic- and private-sector industries, educational insti-
tutions, governmen t hodies, and social agencies, a_~ well as charitahle, non-profi.t,
religious, and professional organizations.
Canadian Cancer Societ y Environment Canada
Product names: Capi talize only trademarked items and manufacturers' names, not
general products.
Canon copier IBM computer
Academic degrees and courses: Capitalize specific degrees and courses as well as
names of academic degrees t.hat follow a person's name. Abbreviations for academic
degrees are always capitalized. Degrees and courses referred to more generally are
lo we rcased.
Jason Jackson, M.B.A.
Book titles: Capitalize the in itial word and all principal words (not articles, conjunc-
tions, or prepositions) in the titles of books, articles, magazines, periodicals, news
papers, reports, government documents, films, songs, plays, and poems. The titles of
major wo rks or publications (such as books, magazines, and newspapers) should be
underl ined or itaHcized. The titles of all other works should be enclosed within quo
tation marks.
Quot.at.ions and bullet points: Capitalize the fi rst word of quoted material that is a
full sentence (Debashis Chaudry said, "The c:ompcmy is remarkably different than it was
a decade ago.") , but do not capitalize the beginning of the second part if the quota-
tion is intenllpted mid-sentence. Do not capitalize the first lette r of a qi1otation if the
quotation itself is not a complete sentence (The c:hair of the advismy board said that it
was time to put an end to "fuzzy corporate accounting."). Capitalize the initial word o r a
numbered or bulleted item appearing in list fom1 if it is part of a head ing or a com
plete sentence.
E-mail and computer functions: Capitalize all e-mail and computer functions, as in
Click on Send. Copy notations in e-mail (cc:, bee) are not capitalized.
Nouns preceding letters or numbers: Capitalize nouns that precede numbers or let
ters (Flight 98, Gate 44, Room 3122, Table B).
CAPITALIZATION EXERCISE
Correct the following sentences by capitalizing words as required:
l. president siddiqui's favourite book is the world is flat by t.hornas l. fried man.
2. winnipeg-based enterprLse press plans to launch its first french-language daily news-
paper in the competitive montreal market.
3. As stated in article 5 oft.he senate report, our faculty of business will launch a new
program called entrepreneurial studies in the 2014- 2015 academic year.
4. the director o r public relations will discuss the reintroduction of the gift-card program
when she meets wi th the president next week.
5. tim hortons' famous double-double has helped the chain become the most profitable
divLsion o r the us fast-food giant wendy's.
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The university also provides a list of the best online resources for citation guides and writ-
ing help.
http://library.ucalgary.ca/research-support/citing-writingl
on line-citation-and-style-guides
Common Errors in English : This page hriefly explains homonyms, homophones, and
usage queries.
www.wsu.edu/-brians/errors/errors.html#errors
NetLingo: The Internet Dictionary: This site offers rules for the spelling and hyphena-
tion of In ternet terms and explanations of common acronyms.
www.net.lingo.com
Dictionary of English Usage: Sponsored by a European Inte rnet provide r, this site fea-
tures detailed entries to help you make your wording precL~e .
www.tiscali.eo.uk/reference/dictimtRries/english
It stands to reason that only one element in the pair- eith er subject or ver~an end ins.
If both eud ins or neither ends ins, an error in agreement has been made.
COMPOUND SUBJECTS
Subjects joined by and take a plural verb.
The company and its subsidiary manufacture appliances. (compound subject/plural
verb)
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Only subjects joined by and LhaL name a single thing Lake a singular verb.
Red beans and rice is his favourite dish. (singular subject/singular verh)
To determine verb agreement, simply ib'Tlore 1.h e nouns 1.h at follow these joining words.
The director, as well as the managers, is pleased with the sales figures.
To c larify th e idea of individual action wit.bin I.he group, add a plural noun such as
members.
The members of the committee are unhappy with each other's proposals.
An exception to the rule: the number . .. requires a singular verb; a number . .. requires a
plural verb.
The number of applicants is down this year.
When th.e subject names an amoun t thought o f in terms of individual things or persons,
the subject takes a plural verb.
One-third of the new employees have requested parking spaces.
Eighty per cent of the programmers are satisfied with the current system.
The Eight Practices is a book that explores the subject of human capital.
EITHER . .. OR SENTENCES
When subjects follow pairs of conjunctions--not only . .. but also, neither ... nor, either ...
or- the verb agrees \vi.th the subject closest to it.
Neither the employees nor the president wants to lose customers.
Neither the president nor the employees want to lose customers.
The following indefinite pronouns can he singular or plural, depending on the context:
all more none
any most some
VERB AGREEMENT AND THE PHRASES ONE OF THE ..., ONE OF THE .. .
WHO, AND THE ONLY ONE OF THE ... WHO
Treat these construct.ions as follows:
the only one of the + plural noun + who (that, which) + singular verh
John is tha only ona of our IT specialists who works part-time.
l. Pressure from investors (is, a.re) partly responsible for the plan to reduce annual costs.
2. Changes in this policy (is, a.re) not expected for at least another year.
3. More than forty acquisitions in two years (has, have) made Briarcorp a market leader.
4. The president, as well as the CEO and CFO, (anticipate, anticipates) major changes in
the year ahead.
5. Our current strategy of cutting staff in Western Canada and aggressively expanding in
the East (is, are) controversial.
6. Copies of the mam1al (is, an;) now availahle from accoun ting services.
7. Eighteen hundred dollars (is, are) a fair price ror the latest Pentium 4 model.
8. Neither the biggest hillhoards nor the most eye-catching print campaign (compensate,
cmnpensates) for a flawed strategy that (involve. involves) withdra\ving customer service.
9. Neither of the companies (favour.favours) a protracted se1ies of layoffs.
10. We have canvassed several fimis, hut Thornton, Walters, & Estes (i~, are) our first
choice for legal services.
11. Anyone who (requires, require) claiification of the new health henefits package should
contact h uman resources.
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12. He i$ the only one o r our sales representatives who (has, haw:) not completed the
course.
13. Norstar is one of the companies that (is, are) cautious about overexpansion.
14. The number of customers satisfied with our servi ces (L~. are) up sibrn ificantly this year.
15. Ninety per cent of our customers (is, art:) satisfied wi th our services.
Future (simple) that will occur 1. \viii walk; she \vill walk
Present Perfect begun in the past and continuing 1. have walked; she has
in the present or occurri ng walked
sometime in the pa..<;t
Past Perfect of duration completed before I had heen walki ng; she
Progressive others in the past had been walking
Future Perfect underway for a period of time 1. \viii have been walking;
Progressive before others in the future she will have been walking
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Use the past perfect tense (had + past participle) to show that one past action preceded
another.
He had left the office by the time we returned from our meeting.
when you use a clause hegin ning with if, as if, a.~ though, or unless to express specu-
lation rather than fact or descrihe hypothetical situations that are improhable or
unlikely:
- Subjunctive: If I wer e you, I woul d ask for assistance. (situation p urely
hypothet.ical- "J" cannot he "you")
- Subjunctive: If he were to work tonight, he would finish the report on time.
(speculation)
- Indicative: If he works tonight, he will finish the report on time. (fact rather than
speculation)
when you use a clause end ing in that to express recomm endations, wishes, or
demands:
- It is important that a company representative be [not is] present to greet the
dignitaries.
I!} If she would have telephoned me, I would have faxed the information.
~ If she had telephoned me, I would have faxed the information.
Do, does, and did are used to ask questions and are pai red with 111:ver or not to express
negative meanings.
Do you have experience in risk management?
passive voice: The budget was approved. (The prepositional phrase containing the
oribri..nal active-voice subject is often omitted.)
a form or the verb to be (am, i\ are, wa.\ were, be, bt:ing, been)
+ pa.st participle (for regular verbs, the base form o f the verb+ ed)
+ (by the agent of the action)
In h1.1siness writing, the active voice is preferred and should he used whenever pos-
sible. There are circumstances, however, in which the passive voice is rhetorically useful.
Here are some criteria for chosing between the active and passive voice:
Conciseness: The active voice is more vigorous, concise, and direct than the passive
voice. It is also less awkward and complicated. Th e higher word count of the passive
construction can, with overuse, make writing sound weak and lacklustre. ACTIVE:
011 Tuesday, ]inlLt submitted his artide to the mana!,ting editor. PASSIVE: On Tuesday, ]inlu'.~
article was submitted to the mana!,ring editor.
Emphasis and disclosure: The first element in a sentence has the most emphasis.
The active voice emphasizes t.he actor; t.he passive voice minimizes or conceals the
actOT and emphasizes the recipient of the action or tbe fact of the action itself. ACTIVE:
Fiona did not complete the report on time. PASSIVE: The report. wa.~ not completed rm time.
Readers someti mes interp ret th.is use of the passive voice as a sign of evasion or refusal
to ad mit responsibility, so exercise caution in eli minating the fi nal prepositional
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phrase. The passive voice is appropriate when the question o f who perfom1ed an
action is unim portant or irrelevant: Bids will be accepted until the ~71d of the week.
Tact and diplomacy: The active voice is di rect, often to the poillt o f hluntness,
playing up t.he personalities that fib'lm: in a refusal or denial. The passive voice mini-
mizes the unpleasantness of negative messages hy allowing for simple statements of
fact, seemi ngly free o f personal malice. ACTIVE: We cannot activate your account at tht:
present time. PASSIVE: Your account cannot be ctctivated at the present time.
Personal/Impersonal style: The passive voice minimizes or eli minates personal
pronouns in instances where overuse conveys the impression of egotism or per-
ceived personal conOkt. ACTIVE: ! created this program to reduce cost overruns. PASSIVE:
ThLs program was created to reduc:e cost ovenuns. Impersonal passive constructions-
heginning with it Ls- may sound an tiseptically official and hureaucratic: It is felt that
changes must be made.
Use the active voice when you need to do the following:
write concisely
reveal the doer of an action
d eliver positive or neutral news
Use either the reason or because, but not hoth , as this amou nts to saying the same thing
twice.
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Add words necessary for logic and completeness. ln the case of I.he first sentence
helow, has . .. pursue does not correcr.ly form the past tense:
l!l The company has and will continue to pursue aggressive growth targets.
Id The company has pursued and will continue to pursue aggressive growth targets.
l!l Alban has interned and worked for Apex Communications.
Id Alban has interned with and worked for Apex Communications.
Balanced constructions can also be created using pai.rs of conjuncr.ions: either ... or,
neither . . . nor, both .. . and , not only .. . but also. Equivalent grammatical elements
must be used for each cmijunction.
l!l She is not only developing a marketing program but the campaign will also be
overseen by her.
Iii She is not only developing a marketing program but also overseeing the campaign .
PARALLELISM EXERCISE
Correct faulty parallel structure in 1.he following sentences:
1. Respondents were asked to not only rank the importance of the recycling materials
collected hut also their preferences in the placement of recycling hins.
2. Neither the chair of the committee wants to seek bankruptcy protection nor its
members.
3. Our intention is to develop a work plan, hire suitable people to staff the operation,
and working out a schedule.
4. The team was asked to investigate where the raw materials might be available, what
the price per unit tonne is, and what the cost to transport raw mar.erials might be.
l!l Recent hires know more about instant messaging than their managers. (This
implies a faulty comparison o f instant messaging and managers.)
1!1 Recent hires know about instant messaging more than their managers do. (This
sentence compares recent h ires' knowledge wi.th managers' knowledge.)
13 Recent hires know more than their managers about instant messaging.
Scott likes instant messaging as much as me. (Scott likes inst.ant messaging as much
as he likes the writer of the sentence.)
Scott like instant messaging as much as I. (Scott likes inst.ant messaging as much as
the writer o f th e sentence does.)
Pronouns that replace subject words: I, you, he, she, it, one, we, they, who
Pronouns that replace object words: me,you, him, her, us, them, whom
Pronouns that indicate possession: mine, yours, his, hers, ours, thdrs, its
Pronouns that in dicate reflex:ive action: myself, yourself, himself, herself, itself, (}Urselves,
yourselves, themselves
Demonstrative pronouns: this, that, these, those
PRONOUN EXERCISE
Correct errors in pronoun usage ill the followillg sentences:
1. Between you and I, l think the accoun ts manager has some explain ing lo do.
4. Milos and myself were responsihle for organizing the team-huilding retreat.
5. The advan tages of laun ch ing a clicks-and-mortar operation can out.weigh its dis
advantages, which requires further consideration.
John asked only for a 2 per cent salary increase. (he asked for noth ing else)
John asked for only a 2 per cent salary increase. (the salary increase was minimal)
\hen a modifier- especially a modifying phrase- seems to helong with the phrases that
come both hefore and after it, reposition the modifier so it refers f.o only one phrase.
l!l He told her on Friday she would receive PowerPoint t raining.
l!I On Friday, he told her she would receive PowerPoint training.
l!I He told her she would receive PowerPoint training on Friday.
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l!l Specializing in finance and international business, his credentials are impeccable.
[id Specializing in finance and international business, he has impeccable credentials.
Dangling modifiers also sometimes result from unnecessary use of the passive voice. Use
the active voice in the clause following the modifier.
MODIFIER EXERCISE
Correct misplaced and dangling modifiers in the following sentences:
l. To ensure the safe operation of your vehkles, regular inspections by at1thorized mech-
anics are recommended.
2. Aft.er establishing specifications, the alternatives were weighed by the report committee.
3. To work in quiet and comfort.able surroundings, the boardroom is the best place to go.
4. Committed to establishing a career, Anna almost applied for every job that was posted
on mons ter.ca.
5. Our company was fortunate to find new headquarters in the city with two parl<ing lots.
Comma Usage
Use the rollowing chart to determine when you should use a comma and when you
shouldn't.
after a dependent clause that begins a between a111 initial independent clause
sentence and a subsequent dependent clause
Altnough his business failed, he leamed a lot. He leamed a lot although his business failed.
between coordinate modifiers that apply between modifiers that don't apply
equally to the same noun equally to the same noun
ArieI submitted a timely, thorough report. A dallclous Italian meal was enjoyed by the
conference participants.
The proposal, which took more than three The report that addressed the failure of the
months to develop, was enthusiastically Initiative did not assign blame for deficiencies.
recf!lved.
between items in a series of three or singly between a subject and its verb
more (the final comma before and is
optional)
St. John's, Halifax~) and Moncton are key The lecture will be held tomorrow.
markets for our products.
between two independent clauses joined between two independent clauses joined
by and, each with its own subject by and that share a subject
The Impact of reduced healthcare benefits on Rinaldo took responslblllty for the decline In
employee morale Is considerable, and wf! will sales and proposed a new marketing strategy.
need to discuss the longterm consequences
of this policy change at our next meeting.
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Like a comma, a semicolon can he used to separate items in a series. It is especially useful
for separating item.~ in ca.~es where one or more of those items contain internal comma.~.
Our company plans to establish operations in the following centres: Vancouver, the larg-
est market for our sporting goods line; Calgary, the fastest growing market for our prod-
ucts; and Saskatoon, an emergent and underserved market.
If an introductory statement ends in a verh (are, is, were) or a preposition (in, by, at, to,
for), use no punctuation at all instead of a colon between the incomplete in troductory
statement and the text that follows.
When proofreading a document
allow for a "cooling period" before you begin to read,
allow sufficient time to read slowly and carefully, and
make several passes over thle document.
Colons are also used after salutations (Dear Mr. Evan.~:) and memo guide words (To:) and
between titles and subtitles (Technical Writing A- Z: A Common Sense Guide to Engineering
Reports and Theses).
APOSTROPHES
Apostrophes are used for two principal reasons: (1) to show possession or own ership and
(2) to signal omissions (in contract.ions-c:an't, it\ h11't, won't, they'll). Adding an apostro
phe in comhinat.ion withs to the end of most nouns (nouns that do not already end in s or
an s sound) communicates possession.
Joanne attended the manager's meeting. (a meeting led or con vened by one manager)
I accepted the committee's decision. (committee L~ a sinf,'Ular noun)
Marcia is a friend of John's. (in other words, Marcia is a friend of his)
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Keep in mlnd, though, that there are many except.ions to this hasic rule. When a noun
ends in an s ors sound, add only an apostrophe unless an extra syllable is needed for the
sake of pronunciation.
Joanne attended the managers' meeting. (th e meeting of two or more managers)
Two months' leave of absence seems generous. (months is a plural noun)
The business's customer complaints line was deluged with calls. (extra s added so the
word business can he pronounced more easily)
Add '.~to each noun o r two or more nouns when possession is lndividual.
Paul's and Suleman's businesses have grown substantially. (Paul and Suleman each
0W11 a husiness; they do not own the huslnesses jointly.)
PERIODS
Peri ods me used at. the end of statemen ts, mild commands, polite requests (that elicit
actlons rather than verhal answers) and indirect questions (that report asked questions).
The restructuring of our central division led to a year of un precedented gains. (statement)
Return your completed application form to me by June 1. (mild command)
Will you please send me a copy of your mission statement. (polite request)
I asked if they wanted to upgrade their filing systems. (indirect question)
QUESTION MARKS
Quest.ion marks are used at the end of direct questions or after a question added to the
end of a sentence.
Have you considered telecommuting as a solution to your work-scheduling problems?
The downturn in the real estate market should help our business, shouldn't it?
PARENTHESES
Paren theses interrupt the senten ce structure, allowing you to add n on -essen tial informa
Lion or to gently introduce, almost in a whisper, an explanation, definition, reference, or
question. Whatever is enclosed within parentheses tends to he de-emphasized, very much
the opposite of dashes, which call au.ention to the set- off text. Two general rules apply:
never pmt a comma hefore an opening parenthesis, o n ly after the closing parmthesls;
and, if a complete sen tence in parentheses is part of anoth e r sen ten ce, do not add a period
to the sentence with in parentheses, hut add a question mark or exclamation mark if it
is required.
The company blamed a high incidence of flaming (the exchange of hostile on line mes-
sages) for the deterioration of employee morale.
His impressive results on the CA exam (he had ta ken a leave of absence in order to
devote himself to his studies) earned him accolades from his departmental manager.
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DASHES
Dashes are high-impact punctuation- emphasizing the text they set off- but their impact
is at its greatest only when they are used sparingly. Use dashes (1) to set off a list from an
introductory statement or (2) to emphasize information that interrupL~ a sentence. A gen
eral rule applies: don't use semicolons, commas, o r periods next to dashes.
His latest sales trip took him to the key markets in the Pacific Rim- Tokyo, Seoul, and
Taipei.
QUOTATION MARKS
Quotation marks are used primarily to enclose words copied exactly from a print source or
transcribed from overheard speech or conversation. They are also used to enclose the titles
of chapte rs or articles to give special treatment to words or letters, especially to unfamil-
iar technical terms or ironic words. Single quotation marks ('f) enclose quotations that
fall with in double quotation marks. When irL~erting a sentences punctuation adjacent to
quotation marks, place commas a nd peri ods inside the dosing quotation marks, ;.rnd place
colons and semicolons ouL~ide th e closing quotation marks.
"The advantage of online retail," the president said, "is the reduction of storefront
expenses.
The article entitled "Building a Team was among the best offerings in the most recent
issue of Business Monthly.
PUNCTUATION EXERCISE
Add c01Tect and appropriate punctuation to the following sentences:
3. Th e following individuals have been selected for the conference panel to be held in a
months time Preetasha Lai Hector Gonzalez and Vicki Nguyen
6. Although the project ran ove r budget it was considered a creative breakthrough for
the marketing team
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NOTES
Bombardier, 8 channel, .L 3; harri.ers, L5; benefits of 27- .32, .33- 34, 28; definition, 8,
Boolean logic, 388 different, 55; informal and fomial, 22; 10; environmenr.al, .L l; external, 21;
Booz & Company, 9 overload, 14 as field of study, ll-12; in glnhal
both/each, 482-8:~ Charbonneau, Sebastien, 4fi2 ecnnmny, 27; health, 11; im pnrtance
Bradbury, Danny, "Effective Social Media charts: bar, .12.5-27, .1 31; deviation bar, nf, 2-3; intergroup, 11; in temal, 21,
Analytics," 475 325; divided bar, 325, 327; now, 329, 128; interpersnnal, .LL, .l 5- 16, 270;
hrain drain, 4 :n1; Gantt, 329; organizational, :no, law, J l; mass, U, .L o; non -verhal,
hrainstmrning, 55-.56 3.31; pie, .324, ."B l; segmented bar, lb-20, 29n; organizational, 11, ln;
bring/take, 483 325 process, 12-15; skills, .3-4; small-
hullers, 208, 209, 215, 220 Cheek, Annette, 73 grou p, .lo; and technology, 11; r.heory,
hullets: capitalization and , 504; lists "Ch1is Brogan on Social Media Starter 11; timeli ness and, 2; transactional
and, 132; memos and, 129 Tips to Grow Your Business," 469 model, JJ; visual, 11; in workplaces,
business repmts, :HO; ue al10 f011nal chronemics, 19 ln, 21-23
reports; infon11al reporL~; reports chronological development, 58 compare to/compare with, 483
but, J.02 chunking, 133 com parisons, 79; sentences and ,
huzzwords, 75 ClllC, p1ivacy hreach ar., 34 515-1()
by, J.03 CIBC Mellnn, 2M mmpleme11t/complime11t, 48.3
bypassing, 15 citations, parenthetical in-text, 399, complementing, 17
400, 401- 2 completeness, 62
Canad a GMse, 465 ciiel.1ighcl.1iie, 483, 494 complirnenr.ary close, 14l), .189, 506
Canadian Advanced Technology claim adj ustment, 174 compur.er visuals, 4.32-3.5
Alliance (C.ATA), SUCCESS, 3 claims, 16.1 -n.5; refusing, 217-18; conciseness, n.3, 81-8n
Canadian Bankers Association (CllA), 72 requests, 242-46; responses, 172- 74 conclusions section: fomial reports and ,
Canadian Business for Social clarity: repons and , 311; sentences and , 398, 419; informal reports and , 321,
Respons ibili ty, ti .L 0.5 .334, 3.50, .362; present.atinns and , 429
CanadianCareers.com, 269 clauses, HH ; dependent (suhordinar.e), Conference Board of Canada, 3, 4n
Canadian Cha1ter of Righrs and 10.1., J.02, .l.05, 109, 2.1.0; embedded, connotation, 86-87
Freedoms, 34 105; independel1t, .IO J.; reducing, 85; consistency, 6.3, !On
Canadian Human RighL~ Commission relarive, 104; that/which/who, 85 constraints, 48
(CHRC), 90- 91 cliches, 7n contact infonnation, resurnes and, 276
Canadian Institute of Diversity and closing: complimenta1y, 140, 189, 505, content general.ion, 56- 58
Incl usion, 27 506; had news messages and , 204, content-organization -sr.yle (COS)
Canadian Radio-televisit1n and 207; gnnd\vi ll, 21 1-12 meth11d , 62
Telecommunications Commission clor.h ing, as non-verhal communication, co11ti11ually/co11ti11uou..1ly, 484
(CRTC), J.00 20, 296- 97, 44.L continuation page heading, 191
can/may, 483 cluste1i ng, 56 coordinate conjunctions, com pound
capiw.l/capitol, 483 cognir.ive dissonance, 22 sentences and, 102
capitalization, 133, 139, .502- 4 coherence, 62, 118; paragraphs and, copy nocation, 190
CareerBuilder.com, 297 118- 19 copyiight, BS
career centres, 2 70 cold calls, 270 c011mrate social responsihility (CSR), 4,
career goals, 2M-n7 Cnle, Kenneth , 474 6, 7
career resources, on li ne, 2ti9 collabnratinn, 8; writing and, n:~-M Corporatinn ror Natinnal and
Cauchon, Maitin, 443 collectivism, versus individualism, 29 Commu nity Smrice, 281
cause-and -effect development, 57 collnquialisms, 32 could, 512-.13
Cawley, joel, 8 colons, 132, .520 could of/could have, 484
Center for Media & Social Lmpact, 463 commas, 100, 519 mu1d!wou1dl.1hould, 84
Center for Plain Language, 7.1 comma splice, 113 council/cou11.1el, 484
Centre for Social Innovation (CSI), 5 Cmmnon Errors in English (website), courtesy, 32, 90
CEO/CFO/CIO/COO!CTO, 483 505 covers, formal repons and , 395
CEOs, hlogging and, 4M commun icarinn: advancing creative age, 4
Certified (;eneral Accountants technnlogies, 8-9; areas nf research, creative class, 4, 2 7
Associalf:ion of Canada, 6 11; harriers, 14- 15; charact.e1istics credihility, 23 7- 38
chair/chai1per.1mt!chairman, 483 of, .L2, 50; cnntexrs, 15- J.6; cross. criterio11/criceria, 484
chalkboards, 43 1 cultural (interculr.ural), 11, ln, critiquing, nthers' work, 6n
INDEX
and, 390, 391; intercultural Google Ones, 65, 66 Huherman, Esther, 128
communication and , 31 Google Drive, 66 HuhSpot lnc., 9
fonnal repmts, 389-418; hack matter got/have/have .r,ot, 487 Human Resources and Skills
and, 399-402; body l1f, 397-98; Govemment of Canada: Development Canada (HRSDC:), 3.5
definition, 389; elements of, 395-402; Communications Policy, 46; "The human rights, ti
from mall.er, 395- 96; versus informal Hidden Joh Market," 270 humour, 32
reports, 3.l l-12; length of, 390, 391; grammar, 63; enms in, 100, .l 20;
peer-reviewing and team writing, handhonk of, 507-B; lntemet I/me, .'ilf>-17
.192; preparing tn write, 390-91; resources for, .523 lime/mine, in cover letters, 288
researching and collecting data, graphics: presemations and, 436; I/me/myself, 491
.187-89; sample in Al'A style, 403-18; reports and, 321- 31; see al.10 visual I/we, 488-89
time management and, 392; wl1rk aids ICTs. See infom1ation and
plan for, 391-92, 391-94; writing graphs: grouped line, 328; line, 328- 29, communication technologies (lcTS)
style for, 39 J. 331; picture, 327 identification in itials, 189
fom1at, 63; e-mail and, 139- 40; gmups, communicar.inn and, 16 iden tity theft, 5
emphasis and , 107-8; letters and, groupth ink, 4.50 idioms, 79
185-91, 295; memos and, 129-30 groupware, 451- 52 i.e../ex.le.,i:., 48.5
.fonner/latier, 486 Gunning, Rohen, 74 illustrators, 20
.fnrmerly(formally, 487 illustrations, lists of, 382, 396
.forward!.forward.1/foreword, 487 Hadfield, Chris, 4 70 image, non-verhal communication and,
fractions, num hers and, 501 Hall, Edward T., 29; spatial znnes, 20
Freeman, Charles, 465 18-19 immigrate to/emigrate.from, 485
Freeman, Julie, 2 handnuts, 432 imminentleminenc, 485
freewritin.g, 59 ha11.r,ed/11ung, 487 implicitlexplici!, 486
Friedman., Thomasj., n1e World Is Flat, hardly, 487 Imply/infer, 489
5- 6,9 "hard skill," 3 impromptu speaking, 439
.from, 103 Harvard Business l~eview, "Tips on in, 103
frl1nt matter: fonnal reports and, Writing," .111 incidencs!incidence, 489
.195-%; proposals and, :rn1 hashtag, 470 indirect writing plans, 207, 212, 213,
fttrtd!funds, 487 Hastings, Reed, 473 238; had news and, 20.5, 207-1.'5;
fundraising messages, 258- 59 have, 84 direct w1iting plans versus, 2J3;
Future Shop, 202 havdltave got/gnt, 487 infonnal repolts and, 356
have/of, 488 individualism, versus collectivism, 29
Gap,The,474 Hayward, Tony, 214 infonnal communication networks, 22
Ganick, Roger, 2 lw, lti.1, ltim, ltimse~f. 91- 92 informal reports: analytical, 3'53- 70;
Garst, Kim, "5 Quali ties of Companies headings, .) 15, 488; continuation page, cla1ity of, 311; composing and
with Out~tand i ng Sl1cial Customer 19.l; descriptive or talking heads, revising, .118-20; content of,
Service," l M .1 16; functional, 316; infomial repnrts 3Hl- ll; direct approach to, 314-1.5;
gender, language and, 9 J.- 2 and, 315- 17; memns and, .1.29, 130; distribution of, 313- J.4; elements
general-to-specific development, 57 resumes and, 274, 276 of, 320-2.l; vs. fom1al reports,
genres, 47 lieadquarters, 488 111-12; formats nf, 3B; frequency
Georgetown University Library, he/hi.I, 488 of suhmission, :~13; graphics and
"Evaluating lnternet Resources," 388 Heins, Thorsten, 148 visuals, 32 1-31; headin gs, 315-17;
gestures, 19-20 l11?re, sentences beginning with, 509 indirect approach, 315; infonnational,
Giddens, Anthnny and Ulrich Beck, 5 hierarchy of needs, 23.5 :B2-5:~; outlines and, 318-19;
global economy, 7-8, 27 high-context cultures, 30, 157 planning, .117; purpose of, 312-13;
Globe artd Mail, I1te, 4 2.5 histograms, .12 7 researching/analyzing dar.a and
go11e/we11t, 487 HMV, 474 infonnation, .117- 18; skimmahility
,i:oodlwdl, 487 Hofstede, Geen , 29 of, 311; steps in writ.i n~ of, .117-20;
Gol1dwill Community Ft1undation, 168 homepage/home. page, 488 successful, :H0-11; types of, 313,
goodwill dosing, 211-12 Hnnt Suite, 475 332-70; writing style for, 315
e,;oogle, 4 horizontal cnmmunication fl ow, 23 infonuarion and commu1tication
Gol1gle+, 2tW, 467 house style, 389 technologies (ICTs), 4, 5
Gongle Analytics, 475 ll!lp:I/ and WWW, 488 infom1ation, fl nw of, 22-21
GI INDEX
informal, 446; intemal. 441l; leading, Monkey See, 296 oral presentations. See presentations
449- 50; oral, 31; pa1ticipating in, Monster.ca, 269 order acknowledgements, 168-70
45()-51; prepa1ing for, 446-49; months, ahhreviations, 499 order requests, .161-62
purpose of, 441l-47; sam ple agenda, Moorcroft, David, l 57 outlines, 49, .57-58; alphanumeric, :H9;
448; size of, 44 7-48; types of, 441l; Most 1imced Companies for Privar.y Study decimal, 119; infonnal reports and,
vi1tual, 452 (Ponemon Institute), 237 118-19; presentations and, 429- .30
Mehrahian, Albert, 16 Moulday, Nancy, 469 out.sourcing, 7, 8
memorization, 419 multimedia visual.s, 4.12-15, 4.11l overconfidence, 91
memorandums (memos), 128-14; multinational corporations, 2 7 overhead projectors, 4.12-34
henefits of, 55; checklist for, 134; Mum effect, 202 Oxford Adva11ced Learner'.; Dictio11ary, 79
follow-up and , 146-48; fo1111at my.1e!fll/me, 491
of, 129-10; infonnative, 142-44; MySpace, 462 paragraph cnnstmction, 6.1
insuuctional, 182-84; list~ in, paragraphs, llti- 19; coherence and,
13.1.-.31; order requesL~. J. 59, 161-62; names: company/organization, 48.1, .1.18-19; development of, 1.1. 7; length,
organization of, 130- 11; paper vs. 50.3, 509; department and division, 1!6
email, LH-.14; persuasive, 24 .L -42, 50.3; product, 50.3 paralanguage, 19
241-44; reply, 145; request, 144-45, narrative structure, 427 parallelism, .lOll-7, 5 .l 5
158-65; traits of, 129; see also e-mail; NASDAQ, 491 parentheses, .521
letters; messages National Communication Association, l .l paremhetical in-text citations, 400,
me/myself/I, 491 negative messages. See had news 401-2
messages, 12-13, .L il; claim adjusm1ent, messages participatory culture, 41l:~-M
172-74; claim requests, 242-46; negatives, multiple, 105 Pascal, Blaise, 8.L -82
confi nnation, 170-72; direct Netfli.x, 47.3 pa.1sedlpa.s1, 492
approach, 157-58, 20.5-7; favour netiquett.e, 1.36, .149 l'astor, Joan, 25
and action requests, B9-4 l; Netlingo: The Internet Dictinnaty, 50.5 Pecha Kucha presenration.s, 4.18
fund raising, 2 58- 59; good\vill, .1.45, networking, 270 per ce111/perce111/%/percencai:elperw11tle,
.L 74-80; indirect approach, 212, 218; new econnmylold economy, 49 .l 492
mixed, 1.5; negative, 202-27; order Nike Fuelhand, .LO pe1i11ds, 521
acknowledgement, lll8-70; order noise, 14 person (grammatical), 106
request, 161-62; persuasive, 216-.38, nominalizations, 82 personal infonnation: resumes and,
241-42; planning, 49-50; requests, llOr, 102 278-79; workplaces and, .32- .36
.L 58-65; see also had news messages; noun conversions, 82 Personal lnfonnation Protection and
e-mail; letters; memorandums; sales nouns, 82; ahstract, 78; capitalization Electronic Documents Act (PTPEDA),
mes.~ages and, .502, '504; collective, .508; 12,1.5
micro-hlogs, 469- 70 concrete, 78 photo-sharing sir.es, 4 71
Microsoft , "Whats New in PowerPoint numher (grammatical), l Oil ph rases, 100; empty, 8.3; foreign, 75,
20B," 417 number/amount, 481 481l; modifying, Hl4; participial,
minutes, meeting, 451 numbers, 112, 500-502 104; plain-language alternatives to
misrepres.entar.ion, 2 5, 79 standard, 506; prepositional, 84-85,
mixed c011struction, 11.5 Ocean Nutrition Canada, 266 10.1; reduci ng, 85
MU Hand}Jnnk fnr Writw nf Research offshming, 7, 8 Pinterest, 21l9, 471
Report.1, J11e, 40 l offliave, 488 plagiarism, 21l, 80, 141
mode, .318 OKJO.Klo11ay, 49.L Plain Language Associatim1
models, 4.32 old economy/11ew ec.mrnmy, 491 International (PLAIN), 74
Modem Language Association (MLA Oil, 1()3 plain language/style, 72-71
style), 182, 401-2 one of the., one of the ...who, the only one of Plain Wrtting Act (US), 7J
modifiers, lB, 5.L 7-18; dangling, the .. . who, 510 planning, message, 49-'5(); .1ee al.rn
11.3-1 4, 518; misplaced, 11.3, 517 Ontario legisla1.ure, 214 direct writing plan; indirect writing
Molson Canadian National Campus open ings: letters and, 288; info1111al plan
Challmge, 414 reports and, 144, 141, .11l2; memos p.111./P.M./a.m./AM., 480
Molson Coors, 10, 41l2 and, 110 poli teness, 12, 111
mo11eca1y!fi.1cal, 486 open-sourcing, 7 l'onemon Lnstitute, Most 7.i'usced
money, num hers and, 500 opinions, versus facts, 2 5, 80 Cnmpaniesfor Privacy Study, 237
mn11ey/m()11te.1/mo11eys, 491 or, 102 portfolios, career, 29.5-91l
GI INDEX
posters, 431 390, 397; infomial reports and, conference, 334- 39; f'easihility, 33.3-
PostRank, 475 312- 1.1; persuasive writing and, 234 34, 362- 65; fonnal vs . infonnal, 3.L l -
postscri pts, 2 '>4 purpose statements, .154-55 12; infonnational, 31.1, 314, .1 32-53;
posture, 20 investigative, :n:~; joh cmnpletion,
Posyniak, Len, 469 QI, Q2, Q:l, Q4, 492 344-4o;justification, 3.1.3, 3'5.5 -61;
power distance, 29 qualifiers, 84 letr.er, 314; memorandum, 3l4;
l'owerl'oint, 432, 4.1 5-37 question marks, 521 one-time, 313; pe1i odic, 31.3, 3.32;
practicallpraclic.ahle, 41J2 questions, 104--.5; closed, 104; PowerPoint, .1 14; prepared-fo1111,
praccicelpractL1e. 41J2 hypnthetical, .l05;jounialistic, 57; 314; problem-investigation, 3.50-.52;
precede/proceed, 492 open, 104; presentations and , 442-4.3 prohlem statements and problem
prepositions, 79, 84-85 quntation marks, 522 quest.ions in, 354; progress, 342-4.1;
presentations, 425-45; aud ience and , qunlillinnlqunre, 493 purpose statement~ in, 354--.'i5;
42ti-27; delivering, 441- 42; method.~ quotations, capitalization and, 504 recommendation, 33\ 3'54, J5.5-61;
of delivery, 438-40; outlines, 429-30; ~t.uational , .332; summary, 3'i.3; to-
questions and, 442-43; quick tips, radit1 frequency identification (RFTD) file, 3.14; tii p , 3.'H-39; see aL~o fonnal
431; special-occasion , 444-45; tags, 9-10 reports; infonnal repMts; proposals
structuring, 4 27- 28; team -based, 444; range, .118 reputation, credibili ty and, 2.38
three-part, 428-29; types of, 426; rationalizations, for ethical lapses, 24 request for proposals (RFP), 378
visual aids, 4.10-3.1, 4.1 1-35 rational/rationale, 493 research, 387-89; informal reports
prewriting, 48 , 50-.58 RBC Financial e,;rnup, 8 and, .1 17-18; in-house, 387, 388;
Prezi, 4.1 2, 437-38 readabili ty, 63 interviews, 388-89; online, :'l88;
principal/principle, 492 readabili ty index, 14 primal)'/secondary, 387
p1ivacy, .1 2-36; e-mail and, 137; social reader benefits, 53, 89- 90, 2.38 research and development (R&D), 4
med ia and, 472-73 reading, 21 respecifullylrespeccively, 493
Privacy Act, 32, 3.5 Really Simple Syndication (RSS), 9, 462 responses, lM-74; e-mail, .140-41,
problem stat.emenrs/questions, 353 real/re.ally, 49.1 145, 146; memos, 145
tm> bm10, 75 rea.1on L1 becau.;e/rea.1011 i.1 Otat, J. .I. 5, 493 resum~s. 274--88, 301; action verbs
pronouns, 73, 516-17; coherence and , reason rhc.H/rea.1on why, 493 for, 275; chronological, 279- 81;
ll8; first-person, 81J, ll l, 288, 488, receiver, 12, 14, '52-54 combination , 281, 28.1; definition ,
516-1 7; gender and, 91- 92; personal, recommendations: fon:nal reports and, 274; e-mail, 28ti-88; functional, 281,
73; plural, 92; reference, 32, 105; 398, 419; infom1al reports and, .1 2 1 282; length of, 279; parts of standard,
relative, 32, 10.1; sentence length redundancies, 83 276- 79; plain -text, 287; scannahle,
and, 85; as subjects, .501J-10; vague reference line, 188 284-86; skills and capahilities in,
references and, 5.l6 references: ler.ters requesting, .10 l ; 278; styles and layouts, 271J-84;
proofreading, 61, .l20; resum~s and, resum~s and, 2 79 writing style, 274-75
275; symbols, 61, 62 references section: APA documemation, revising, 49, 60-63
proposals, .55, 1.'H, .178-ilti; common 400-401; proposals and, .182 rhetmic, 12, 47
mistakes in writing, 38ti; definition, refusals, 203; claims and, 217-18; rhetotical situations, 4 7-48
378; external, 378; fomial, 380- 82; credit and , 219- 20 , 221; employment richness, 54
infonnal , 379-80, 382-86; internal, and, 220-23; implied, 2.l l; requests 1ich site summary, 462
378; wiiting style, 382 and, 21.5- 1fi Riley Guide jt1h Listing.~. 269
provinces, abb reviations, 41J9 regardlmlirregardlesslirmpe.aive, 481J , risk commun ication, .5
proxemics, 18-19 49.1 tisk society, 5
psychological 1eactance, 20.1 regard.1/in regard co/in regard.1 tnla.; Ronald McDonald House Charities, 2.59
Puh!lcactnn Manual nf the American regard.1, 489 Royal Insurance of Canada, 72
Psyr.hnlnp,ical A.1snciatinn, 400 regulatim1, 17; non-ve1hal
public relation.s, .l 1 communication and, 18 sales messages, 250-59; audience and,
punctuation, 6.1 , 520- 22; emphasis regulators, 20 25.l; follow-up, 254; product and ,
and, 107; lists and , 1.12-3.1; repetition, 17 2'5.l, 2'52-53; Wliting plan fo1, 2'51-54
proofread ing and, 120 report~ . .5.5, 3 10, 419; accident/incident, salurations, IJl; e-mail and , 140, .505;
Purdue Online Writing Lah , 49; 332, 347-.50; activity, .339-41; letters and, 188
"Business letters: Accentuating the analytical or recommendation, 313, samples (visual aids), 432
Positive," 209 314, .115, :H8, 3.5:~-70; compaiison/ Sandel, Michael, 9
purpose, 50-5 1; fomial reports and, yardstick, .16.5 -70; ct1mpliance, .1 33; sarcasm, .32
IN DEX
Scwartz, Mark, 7 social networks, 9, 467-69; selected tahle of contents (me): formal reports
search engines. 4. 387 sites, 468 and, 396; proposals and , 182
secrions, 11umhers and, 501 Society of Graphic Designers of Canada tahles, 322-B, 1.11; lists of, 182, .196
semantics, 12 (GDC), 178 take/bring, 48:~
w ni-amw.allbienniallbiarmual, 482 "soft skill ," 3 ta11enverltal1e over, 494
semicolnr1.,, 520 som1?timelsometime.1/some time. 494 talking (desc1iptive) head, 116
semiotics, 12 sound bites, 428. 455 Taylor, Chris, 202
wni-weelllylbi-weekly. 482 snurces, documenting. 199-402 Taylor, David, ''How to Wiir.e a Perfect
sender, .L 'l space, use of, 18- .L \l Memo," 129
sensitivity. emotional, .L S spam, 136 TD Bank, 466
sentence construction , 63 spatial zones, Hall 's, 18-19 TD Financial Group. 310
sentence fragments, l 12 speaking, intercultural communication team work, 8; writi ng and , 392-9.5
sentences, 100-llti; beginning and, :H technology: communication, 8-\l;
\vith there, 509; clarity and, 105; spell -checking software, 62-6'\, 120, collaborative writing and, 65-66
completeness and, l 03; com plex. 137.140, 484 telephone, 452-54; making calls, 55,
101. rn2. 109; compound, 101, spelli ng, 61, 120 452-.53; receiving calls, 45.1-54;
102; compound -com plex, 101, Hl2; scatio1tary/scatio11ery, 494 tLsing voice mail, 4.54
declarative, 104; de-emphasis, 109- Stephens, Doug, 202 templates: memos and, 129;
10; emphasis and, Hl7-Hl; either/or, storytelling, 10 Powerl'oint, 435
50\l; errors in, 112- 1.5; length of, 73, stress-reduction techniques, 440 tenns, a.s sub jects, 509
10.1 . .LOS-9, 2Hl; parallel structure, style: business writing and, 72; than I/than me, 495
106- 7; run-on (fused), .ll2-13; topic, conversational, i:l7; e-mail and, thanlchen, 49.5
117; types of, lOJ-2; simple, 101; .141-42; emphasis and, 108; fonnal that-clauses, 85
simple versus complex, .12; with than reporrs and, .1\11; impersonal, 88; that/which/who, 104, 105, 495, 510
and a.1, .515-ll'l informal reports and, 115; personal, the, \vith plural nouns, 81
sequential development, 57 87- 88; plain, 72-73; proposals, 182; the fact that, 11.5
Service Canada job Bank, 269 resum~s and, 274-75; word choice, themsdves/them.1e!f/their.1dves, 495
service class, 4 74-80 there L\/are, 85
shall/wtll, 4\l:~-\14 subject lines: had news and, 204; e-mail there/their/chey're. 496
Shannon, Claude, 12 and, 139; infomrnl repmts and, 314, this, 105
sh01t-tem1 mientation, 29 :347; letters and, 188; memos and, time: management, .192; numbers and,
Shorty Awards, 4 72 130; negative/neutral/positive, 204; 501; use of, 19
shnuld!would, 4\14 resumes and, 239, 28ti title pages: fomial reports and, .19.5-\lti;
"shouting," 107 subjects (grammatical), 100; amounts proposals and ..181
sight/site/cite, 483 and units of measurement a.s, 508-9; titles (hook): capitalization and, 504; as
signature block, 189 antecedents of that, which, and who subjects, 509
Simmnns, Shannnn, 2.14 as, .510; collective nouns as, 508; titles (personal): courtesy. 484. 49\l;
Simone, Sue, 2titi compound, 507-8; linking verhs and, letters and, 187; professional. 32, .5 01
Simpson, Matt D. 148 509; pronouns as. 509- 10; simple, TJX Company, privacy breach at, 34
since/because. 494 507; singular, in plural fom1, 508 to, 103
site/.llght/cite, 4\14 subject-verb agreement, 507-11, 514 Toastmasters, 4:l9
slang. 32. 77 substitution , 17 tone, 8ti-\l1; had news messages and,
Smith.Jacquelyn. "How to Ace the 50 subway constructi on in Scarborough. 203-4; confident, 92-93; definition,
Most Common lnte1view Questions," feasibility report, 362 86; denotation and connotation,
298 SUCCESS (CATA), 3 86-87; e-mail and, 141-42; fomiali ty
so, 102 summary, executive: fom1al reporls and, and, 87-88; politeness, \lO; positive
social media, 2, 462; advantages of, .196; proposals and, '18.L and negative, 88-A9; reader henefirs
465, 47 J.-72; analytics, 474-75; summa1y section, 32.L, 3.13, .150 and relevance, 89- 90
definition, 462, 464-ti5; job hunting suppose to/.mpposed to, 494 toward/toward.\, 10.1 , 496
and, 2ti9; participatory culture and, sustainahility/sustainahle development, Towson University Online Writing
463-64; performance and, 474-75; 6-7 Support, Hl2
1isks and challenges of, 472-74; roles Swales.John, 47 transitional expressions. 11.8- 19
in, 4ti.1; types of, 4Mi-7J; use hy symbols, 10, 12 transparencies, 412
organizations, 465 , 471-72, 473 Systrnm, Kevin, .14-15 transparency, 6
GI INDEX
Trudeau. Justin, 44.1 321-31; presentations and, 430-35; words: choice of, 63, 72- 80; commonly
Truscott, Tom, 462 types of, 322- 31, 431-35 confused, 4 79- 97; empty, 81;
Truss, Lynn, 120 VL1ual DLsplay of Qua11titatlve. lnfonnat.1011, ethics and , 79-80; factual, 79-80;
truth, telling, 2 5 nie (1ilfte), 122 familiar, 74-76; filler, 8.5; foreign, 75,
Tsige, Winnie, 34 vocalics, 19 486; French, 74- 75; fresh, 76- 77;
Tufte, Edward, 437; The. Visual Display of voice, paralanguage and, 19 inclusive, 90-92; meanings of, 86-87;
Qua11WaUve. l11formaU011, 122 voice (grammatical): active and passive, specific, 78-79; transitional, 118-19;
Tumhlr, 269, 4M, 471 25, 71,84, ll0-1 2, 210, 220, "weasel: 92
l\vitter, 9, 269, 273, 469-70, 471, 473 513- 14; institutional passive, 111 work expe1ience: assessing, 267- 68;
voice mail, 55, 205, 454 resurn~s and , 2 77-78
uncer1ainty avoidance, 29 WorkopnlisC:ampus.com, 269
UN c;tohal Compact (UNGr.), 6 wait for/wait 011, 4% Workopolis.com, 269
ur1interested!disi11tue.1t.ed, 485 we-attitude, 90 workplace, 4- 10; communication skills
University of Calga1y, Style Guide, 505 Weaver, Warren, 12 in, 2.l- 22; diversity in, 27- 28; privacy
Un iversity of Ottawa, Writing Centre, Weh 1.0, 461 in, 32-36
117 Weh 2.0, 9, 462-6\ 4M work plan, :~Y 1-lJ2, :~Y3-lJ4
University of St. Gallen, cSR video, 7 Weh 3.0, 9-10, 463 works cited sections: enuies, 402;
University of Winnipeg, Safety Office, weh browsers, 7 fonnal reports and, 399-402;
"Reportin!ifRecording Process for web-conferencing, 452 proposals and, 382
Incidents: 147 well, 488-89 wMkspaces, shared. 4-.5
University of Wisconsin-Madison, weights and measuremenrs, numbers World Is Flat, nie (Friedman), 5-6, 9
Writing Cent.er, 120 and, 501 World Wide Web, 9- 10
u11solvahleli11.1olu/Jle/ilt1olvent., 496 well/good, 487 would, 512-13
upload/download, 485 we.nt/gone., 487 would/should, 494
upward communication flow, 23 Westin, Alan, 32 Wtight, Nick, "Complex and Abstract
usage, 479- 98; Lntemet resources for, which-clauses, 85 Words: 75
505 which/who/that, 104, 495 Wliter's block, 59-60
Usenet, 462 while, 496 writing: cnllaborative, 63-66; cnntent
user-generated content (ucc), 462, 4ti4 whiteboards, 4.11 generation and, .55-.57; contextual
ILi? to/1t.1ed t.o, 496 who-clauses, 85 factors, 46-47; ctitiquing others', 66;
Whole Foods, resignation letter by drafting, 49, 58-60; emphasis and,
verhals, !04 employee, 128 107-10; genres and, 47; organizing,
verhs, 100; active/passive, 73, 110-12, whoVwhose, 4lJ7 49, .57-58; persuasive, 234-38;
513-14; cond itional, .512-13; who/whom, 104, 4%-97 planning and, 49-.50; under pressure,
indicative, 512; linking, 509; ph rasal, Wiens, Kyle, JOO 60- 61; prewrtting, 48, 50- 58;
73; problems with, 512-!3; resum~s Wikipedia, 64 process, 48-64; purpose of, 50-51,
and, 27.5; semences and, 106; style will/shall, 491-94 B4; revising and ed iting, 49, 60-63;
and, 84; suh_ject agreement and, Wilson, Craig, 2M see also direct writing plan; indirect
507-U , 514; subjunctive, 512; tense with, .l.03 w1iting plan
and, !06, 5.L.1-12; noun conversions wordiness, 8 .l WIVIV and http://, 488
and, 82 Wordl'ress, 4M
video conferencing, 5.5 word-processing software, 59; merge yet, 102
videos, 432 feature and fom1 letters, 222; Simple you-attitude, 89
video-sha1ing sites, 4 71 Markupfrrack Changes, 6 .I.; spell- and your/you're, 497
Vimeo, 464, 468, 47! grammar-checkers, 60, 62-63, 120, You1i.1be, 9, .110, 4M, 471
visual aids, 321; infonnal repmts and, 137, 140, 484
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engagement with the field of professional and manage1ial communication.
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project and who have since offered insightful recommendations that helped in the process
of shaping and re-shaping Communicating for Results over editions t.o meet the needs of
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support, kindness, and patience have made it possible for me to produce the first ed ition
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To my mother, Margaret
- and in memory of my father, George Homer
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