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English Writing Better Essays Date:

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PART 1: Writing

This is the original passage about the causes of accidents and how to reduce them.

Read and identify both the strengths and weaknesses of the passage.

Road accidents are on the increase. There are many reasons why these accidents occur,
consequently leading to injuries and loss of lives.
The main cause of road accidents is bad driving habits. Drivers and motorcyclists alike
exceed the speed limits on highways and trunk roads. This may cause their vehicles to go out of
control and accidents may occur.
Dangerous road conditions such as potholes, poorly lighted roads and sharp bends also add
to the problem. Poorly maintained vehicles with faulty brakes, lights or engines lead to accidents
too.
We need to reduce the number of road accidents. For a start, more road safety campaigns
should be organised throughout the year. These campaigns should focus on changing drivers
behaviours. In addition, road conditions should be improved. More street lights should be installed
and potholes repaired. There is also a need for vehicles to be sent for inspection regularly to
ensure that they are well-maintained.

Now, rewrite the passage by making appropriate amendments (sentence structures, the use of
words etc.) to enhance it.

PART 2: Topic Discussions

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