Kendall Jackson

Professor Malcolm Campbell

University Writing 1104

November 24th, 2017

Revision Six Studio: Reflection

The author of this guide has relayed some excellent points about revision. He cleverly

compared revision to one of his high school relationships. Once we get really close to our work,

we begin to forget about the flaws our work bears. We become accustomed to our work which

causes us to overlook the subtleties in our writing. This chapter, The Fifth Week, helps readers

and writers alike to dig deeper than the surface with their workto help them find the flaws in

their work so that they may move on to next step in their writing.

What was most helpful to me in this chapter was the comparison of writing to a

relationship with a woman/partner. Relationships, when we become used to them, make finding

flaws in that relationship very difficult, mostly because weve grown nose-blind and have known

nothing elsemaybe we dont know what a healthy relationship is actually supposed to be like.

Similar to writing a good essay, we write and write and become so used to hearing the same

thing over again that we forget, or maybe dont even see the flaws it bears. Revision requires

that we dig deeper than the surface and put our time and dedication into our work. A young

person, to achieve, must first get out of his mind any notion either of the ease or rapidity of

success. Nothing ever just happens in this world. (Edward William Bok)

What I found least helpful in this Chapter was the theme that its too late to go back on

your work. Its never too late to change your mind on your work (unless given a deadline).

Good writers, if their work does not go as planned with the structure they are currently using,
will completely throw away their work if they deem it necessaryif they feel theyve run into a

dead end and cannot elaborate further. This is something all writers should practice. We need to

be able to recognize all flaws in our work, whether this means correcting the work we have

produced, or trashing it and starting new with a different goal in mind.

A strategy that I learned from the assigned reading was to dig deeper into my work and

correct all the little flaws it contains. I believe I have a good backbone to my EIP, I just need to

refine it and give it a clear purpose. I need to find a way to better organize my EIP and cut out

all of the unnecessary wordage.

REVISION: The Margin Outline

Kendall Jackson

November 2nd 2017

Malcolm Campbell

UWRT 1104

Smartphones: The Age of Smarter Devices

How much faster will smartphones get? Just in the past five years, smartphones have

advanced exponentially. If we look at the statistics, we are able to double the number of

transistors in a circuit approximately every 18 months. This means that after just a couple of

years, devices increase speeds and efficiencies by more than 200%. There is one limiting

hardware feature however that prevents our devices from being as efficient as they could be.

This hardware feature is the battery. Batteries in general have not improved drastically in the

past ten years save the fast charging abilities on select android devices. Battery life however has
not improved hardly at all. While scientists and researchers have new batteries in store, ready to

be used in new devices, theyre still too expensive to build so smartphone manufacturers have

not utilized these new technologies yet.

A new hardware feature will be introduced into the smartphone industry soon. A

material so strong, it would take an elephant balanced on a pencil to break through a sheet of

graphene the thickness of Saran Wrap. James Hone. This wonder material is graphene.

Graphene is the worlds strongest man-made material. Unlike any other material on small scale,

graphene boasts unimaginable strength. On large scale, this material is nearly 200 times stronger

than structural steel. One may wonder however, how graphene could be used in the smartphone

industry. The answer is for many things. One of which is graphene resistors and integrated

circuits. Graphene is a very conductive material. Similarly conductive to graphite or pencil lead.

What distinguishes graphene from graphite is the lattice structure of the atomstheyre arranged

in a hexagonal orientation. This structure is what gives graphene its unique strength. With

graphene being conductive and very structurally sound, this makes it a perfect candidate for

integrated circuits. Graphene will allow tech conglomerates to scale down the size of their

circuit boards because of how durable the material is; theyll need less of it for more durable

circuits.

Another smartphone hardware feature in desperate need of a remodel is the battery.

Batteries are probably the most primitive hardware feature in a smart phone. The technology has

been around since 1800 (year the first modern battery was created). While the battery has seen

many improvements, its time to be completely replaced with something a lot better. Many

companies are looking into graphene super capacitors to replace their batteries. The advantage
that capacitors have over batteries is their ability to charge to maximum capacity in a minimal

amount of timea matter of only a few minutes. Capacitors are currently used for short-term

power storage and have not been used to replace batteries in the past, ever. For instance, if your

computer battery dies, and when you plug it in, it starts right back up where you left off, then this

means the capacitors in your computer have stored enough power to keep background processed

up and running while the monitor is off. As of now capacitors are used to store power for the

short term, but researchers believe with graphene super capacitors, they will be able to achieve a

much higher shelf lifeseveral weeks.

Qualcomm, a leading smartphone processor company has recently tested a 5G

smartphone modem. 5G technology will allow its users to achieve unimaginable network

speeds of up to 5 gigabits/second. For reference, our current network, 4G LTE, boasts speeds of

only about 12 megabits per second. Networking speeds are not up to par with CPU and GPU

speeds. Once this technology is utilized, they will be. Luckily, this technology may debut in

smartphones as of next year.

Its truly amazing to see how far smartphones have come in the past 10 years.

Smartphones have not only become a lot smaller, thinner, and more compact, but they have also

become far faster and more powerful than ever before. Since major tech conglomerates have

been able to double the number of transistors on an integrated circuit approximately every 18

months, Every year, smartphones become exponentially faster than their previous generations.

According to Android Authority, the Cortex-A72 processor, released in 2016, at only 16

nanometers in thickness is 3.5 times faster than their Cortex-A15 processor released in 2014 at

28 nanometers in thickness. Electronics are becoming smaller and more powerfulthis is

proof!! Android Authority also included a timeline of how Android processors have evolved. In
2008, The HTC Dream launchedthe first ever smartphone to run the Android operating

system. This phones processor speeds were 582 Megahertz and the ram only had 192

megabytes of storage. Compared to a 2015 flagship device, the Samsung Galaxy S6 released a

device with a ten core, Exynos 7420 at only 14 nanometers in thickness clocked at 1552

Megahertz!! Many tech companies like Apple and Samsung have opted to get rid of physical

home buttons as well. Apple did this just last year with the release of the iPhone 7 and iPhone 7

Plus. Samsung waited until this year to accomplish the same feat. The Galaxy S8 got rid of the

physical home button as well as the two software buttons on either side of the home button on

previous devices. The home button is now integrated into the display of the phone with the

finger print sensor on the rear as opposed to having it on the front of the phone. Many

smartphone companies are also getting rid of headphone jacks so their devices can be thinner.

Samsung and many other companies however has opted to keep their headphone jacks in their

devices whereas this wouldnt really provide that much more space. The benefits of headphone

jacks far outweigh the liabilities. If companies got rid of them, someones pair of very expensive

headphones would become a white elephant. Apple however, who was the first to get rid of the

3.5mm headphone jack, did release with its devices new earbuds with a lightning connector.

While this is useful, now iPhone users cannot charge their phones and listen to music at the same

time. This is an issue for people who are always on their phones.

Smartphones not only can replace your home computer for certain tasks, but they also

replace cameras for amateurs photographers. Many photographers just use their smartphone

cameras now and can take photos with excellent detail and accurate color reproduction. Another

feature that smartphones are beginning to acquire is excellent screen resolution. It is hard to find

a smartphone nowadays that does not look better than a flagship television. Companies are able
to achieve pixel densities of up to four times the resolution of 1080p on a device no larger than

the size of your hand. Even 1080p or Full HD on a smartphone is almost indistinguishable from

4K on a device of the same size just because of how dense the pixels are on the screen. Screens

dont have a whole lot of room for improvement when it comes to detail considering we already

have smartphones with 4K displays. These screen will however become more power-efficient.

Haselton, Todd. Batteries that can charge smartphones in five minutes could launch next

year. Todd Haselton, CNBC, 12 May 2017. https://www.cnbc.com/2017/05/12/new-

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Murali, Raghu. Graphene nanoelectronics: from materials to circuits. Raghu Murali,

New York: Springer, 2012. http://uncc.worldcat.org/title/graphenenanoelectronics-from-

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Seifert, Dan. Qualcomm performs first 5G test on a mobile device, debuts 5G reference

design. https://www.theverge.com/2017/10/16/16479398/qualcomm-first-5g-mobile-test-

reference-design-snapdragon-636. Accessed 17 October 2017.

Triggs, Robert. How far were come: a look at smartphone performance over the past 7

years. Robert Triggs, Android Authority, 31 July 2015.

https://www.androidauthority.com/smartphone-performance-inprovements-timeline-626109/.

Accessed 12 October 2017