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Jamison Neal
Ms. Cook
Composition
30 November 2017
Wut He Do
profession because i know psychiatry deals with people's minds and their mental
state. They try to help people who cant help themselves and that sounds
intriguing to me. Plus, ive always wanted to learn about the human mind and
how in functions. Learning the ins and outs of the mind, learning how people
think and feel based on certain situations sounds like something I would love to
do. Another huge reason why i want to do this is because it has the potential to
save a lot of lives. If i try hard enough and put enough effort and work into my
job I can save people's lives. If my uncle had someone like I plan on being there
They also have other important things they must do during a typical day. They
During patient rounds the psychiatrist will check in on how each of their patients
are doing and adjust medication or treatment if need be. Patient treatments
are exactly that. Each patient will have a unique way in which you should go
about treating them. Some need medication while others need a group setting
to talk about their problems. Its up to the Doctor to find out what will be best
suitable for them. And finally we get to patient assessments. During this time the
are seeking help. Let that be with a disorder such as depression, schizophrenia,
or a substance abuse problem with things like marijuana or cocaine. The job
itself is full time emergency stand by. You're always working and when youre
not working you are on standby with an emergency contact in case one of your
cases turns dire. The job itself is stressful and takes a lot of work. Most of the time
profession so you do have to go to med school. Med school itself is another four
years of studies and most students do not become independent physicians until
the age of 30. But before that you do have to attend regular college. During
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your third year you will take an exam known as the MCAT. It basically is the test
to determine if you get into med school or not. During this time you should be
studying for this test. Volunteering wherever you can. Keeping up with actual
college classes and staying active. So how much does all of this cost? Well, Commented [1]: frag
quite a lot actually. The average debt of medical students is quite large. Add
interest and you will payback almost a quarter of a million dollars! Medical
school scholarships can help you defer some of that cost. There are many
sources of money for medical school scholarships and finding all of those
struggle through all of the schooling and spend so much money? Well my
answer is simple. I want to help people. That is what i want to do with my life. I
feel like that's my purpose and its what im supposed to do. Even if being a
psychiatrist is not what's meant for me i will end up with a profession that helps
people. A lot of that want to help stems from how i was raised but it also comes
from my late aforementioned Uncle Jim. He was a huge role model for me when
I was growing up. This fun energetic guy who everyone loved and looked up to.
My family always says that they see him in me. He was so out there and
eccentric. But no one knew what he was struggling with day to day. We still
dont know why he took his own life. No one was there for him. And I know that
there are millions of people out there, just like my uncle, that are suffering alone
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and scared. I want to be there for them. I want to be that person they can find
possibility of going to Westpoint. I will know soon if I made the cut of 2,500
Morehead, OU, The Ohio State, Michigan, and like 15 other options. Most of my
options involve pre-med and one of the best in the nation is the University of
Pennsylvania which ranks fourth on Prep Scholars list. So med school is looking
Westpoint. If that does not work out I have many backup plans with those
backup plans having backup plans of their own. Im nervous and scared but
excited.
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Works cited
Fulciniti, Francesca. SAT / ACT Prep Online Guides and Tips. The 11 Best Pre-
Med Schools to Help You Become a Doctor, blog.prepscholar.com/best-
pre-med-schools.
Pre Med 101 - Know What You Need to Get Into Medical School. The Medical
School Headquarters, medicalschoolhq.net/pre-med-101-everything-you-
need-to-know-as-a-pre-med-student/.
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Comments:
Total: 22/25 x 4 = 88/100
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