Write an essay discussing two methods, say which one is more important and

provide reasons to suport your opinions.

Y aquí está el essay ISE III Trinity:
Students are known to be all the time playing videogames and chatting with their
friends. Notwithstanding they want to do things for themselves, they do not know Commented [A1]: A pesar de, sin embargo
what kind of things to do. Hereafter, several activities are going to be explained. Commented [A2]: De aquí en adelante
Firstly, experts strongly believe that volunteering is one of the most exciting and
wonderful activities to do, at least, once in your life. Were people to volunteering,
our society would be much better. When volunteering, students may learn a lot of
values that they will not forget in their life. For example, they learn respect,
solidarity, responsibility, tolerance and so on.
Secondly, class projects related to their interests may be developed in class. Thus,
they would work and learn more things than when they are studying on their
own. For instance, Cesar Bona created a project with their students
and did they did learn a lot. It is of utmost importance to find a good project to Commented [A3]: Máximo esfuerzo, lo máximo posible
motivate learners.
To sum up, both volunteering and class projects are an excellent opportunity to let
students do things for themselves. Nevertheless, I gather volunteering is, by and Commented [A4]: Deducir, entender
large, better owing to the fact that it helps them to grow up as a person. Commented [A5]: En líneas generales
NOTAS:
1. Este writing está muy bien para un nivel c1, como es el ISE III de Trinity. ¿Por
qué?
 La estructura es apropiada, separación en párrafos, con introducción,
conclusión y dos de body.
 El uso de conectores está muy bien empleado, con conectores nuevos, de
nivel avanzado, C1, no los típicos de siempre. Genial! Ejemplos de conectores
avanzados que has empleado: Notwithstanding, thus, for instance, it is of
utmost important to, nevertheless, by and large, owing to the fact.
 La gramática también está muy trabajada. Cosas que me gustan
especialmente: el uso de una segunda condicional con inversión (Were people
to volunteer –recueda que necesitas un infinitivo, no ing), pasivas (is going to
be explained-may be developed), el uso de may como possibility, both… and
(para decir tanto una cosa como la otra), … are known to be…, let somebody
+ infinitive without to, when + ing, etc.
 Errores de gramática casi no hay, lo cual se te valorará muy positivamente,
porque a pesar de algún pequeño error, éstos no impiden la comprensión.
 Te he subrayado “Cesar Bona” porque en mi opinión deberías hacer una
oración de relativo para explicar quién es este señor. Quizá tú lo sabes porque
te dedicas a educación, como yo, pero piensa que el lector, el examinador en
ese caso, puede no saber quién es y quedarse la idea vaga.