Question: How does the environment impact rice production?

 
 
Kaku Explanation: 11/29/17 
 
Rice is a staple food in many countries. Rice is one of the most important foods in the world, feeding over 
1 billion people. Many farmers don’t take into account how important the environment is in growing rice. 
The production of rice is affected by the environment it grows in. Weather, animals, and conditions all are 
big factors in how the rice will be grown and harvested. If the rice production dies than a big source of 
food is gone in the world. Rice is grown all over the world. In some places the rice thrives, and in other 
places it doesn’t. The environment can sometimes help the rice plant grow. If the weather around the 
plant is perfect, it will grow perfectly. This is also determined by the traits of that rice plant. Many 
experiments and videos prove this. For example, a group of farmers conduct an experiment. They have 2 
plants, one that is resistant to floods, and one that isn’t. In flood conditions, the rice plant with flood 
resistibility grew much more plants. Another example is an experiment with normal rice plants and 
drought resistant rice plants. Both plants were put in drought like conditions. The results of the 
experiment proved that the drought resistant plant grew more per plant, and more tons per hectare. This 
proves that the environment can change how a rice plant will grow. Plants that are more adapted to that 
environment will grow better than others that don’t. If the rice farmer makes a wrong choice and plants 
regular rice in dry conditions, then the rice production would be low because the regular rice could not 
adapt to the environment. The regular rice can evolve and become drought resistant over a long period of 
time, but the rice cannot evolve in a short period of time, so they die out. The environmental condition 
pushes the rice to evolve and adapt to different conditions. There is a reason that some plants are 
growing more rice than others. This is from their traits. Every single organism has traits. Humans have 
many traits. Rice plants also have traits. Since the environment changes all the time, rice farmers have to 
make sure that they are planting the right rice for the climate. One of the environmental changes that the 
rice farmers have to take into consideration, while planting rice, is drought and flooding. If they predict the 
rainfall to be heavy, then they would plant flood-tolerant rice. If they expect very light rainfall, then they 
would plant the drought-resistant plant. Sometimes, the farmers cannot predict the rainfall, so they have 
to take a risk with their crops. If farmers were to make and error with their prediction, then rice production 
would be low, and, if the farmers make the right prediction than the rice production would thrive. Plants 
that are resistant to droughts have trouble growing in climates they are not fit to survive in but when the 
plants are grown in places they are fit to survive in then thy thrive. When a natural rice plant is grown in 
flood conditions or other climates it has a better chance of surviving. Plants that have traits adapted to 
the environment will survive and reproduce, while the other plants that don’t have those special traits will 
die off. This is called natural selection. That plant with the better traits will reproduce, and eventually, 
most/all of the plants will have those traits. If the environment changes again, the plants do to. This is 
called evolution. The plants with better traits survive and reproduce, while others die. This means the 
environment will change how a rice plant grows. The process of natural selection and evolution occurs. 
The environment determines whether or not the rice plant, and the population will survive, grow, and 
reproduce. 
 
My comment: 
Claim: The claim wasn't clearly stated. While the claim was addressed, additional information had 
repeated some portions of the claim and hadn't shown the claim clearly. The next step would be to 
reduce some parts of the beginning statements so the reader will focus more on the claim and 
understand what the explanation will revolve around. 
 
Evidence: There wasn't much evidence and while you did note the trend you saw in the data, there wasn't 
any data written to support the pattern you saw. The next step would be to add more information in the 
evidence and add more than one example of evidence to support your claim. 
 
Justification: The science knowledge was slipped and nicely molded into the evidence. However, some of 
the justification hadn't been discussed in class or in the readings. The next step is to make sure that the 
science knowledge is accurate and you don't confuse your what you analyzed, which might be false, from 
the text from what's actually there. 
 
Word Choice: There should be more vocabulary terms interpreted into the explanation. I saw you 
explained about evolution, but didn't further talk about selection pressure or natural selection. 
 
Craft/Organization: You had a very well constructed concluding sentence and you had a strong 
connection with your evidence and justification. However, the idea you were trying to express wasn't very 
clear and there were multiple grammar mistakes that at times confused me (but this was written under a 
pressured amount of time, so I'm not so worried about that). The next step connects back to the evidence 
and the justification, of creating stronger material for the reader to grasp your concept better. 
 
Voice: Voice was clear, no personal pronouns were used. The only next step for this would be creating 
more intricate sentences to set a more formal tone.