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Persuasive analytical essay
The purpose of a persuasive analytical essay is to present and argue for a
particular position on a topic/issue which is under debate. When a lecturer reads
a persuasive analytical essay written by a student, they want to see evidence that
the student understands the particular topic/issue, is aware of the main
positions in the debate and has selected their own position through a process of
critically evaluating the main various perspectives. A successful essay is carefully
organised and written to demonstrate to the reader how and why the writer
came to hold their particular position. The annotated example below provides
useful guidance in how to organise information within your essay and how to
select language which helps to make your writing focussed, formal and
impersonal.
Annotated Example of a persuasive analytical essay
This is an authentic example of student writing. Therefore you should not view
this as a model – while it contains many attributes of a successful essay, it is not a
perfect piece of writing. The comments on the right hand‐side draw your
attention to both strengths and weaknesses in the essay, but these are not
comprehensive and as such you should not assume that sections of the article
review which do not have comments are without problems. Additionally, you
should not assume that the unannotated sections of the essay are without
problems. Please not that the language in this essay is not without grammatical
errors.
Please note that you are expected to write at a critical level when you are
working at a postgraduate level. Critical writing extends and develops the skills
used and displayed in persuasive evaluative writing. This essay is not an example
of critical writing. If you would like to know more about persuasive evaluative
and critical writing please contact the Learning Centre.
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Functional elements Essay: Introduction1 Language
resources
0Please note that the
use of the passive
Orientation to the 0
Civil society is understood Passive voice used to voice and other
topic: introduces the focus on a definition language strategies
reader to the broad topic
these days as a sphere of of civil society rather which allow you to
that will be explored in organised citizens that advocates than who it is that focus on the
the essay (‘civil society’) for specific issues that are defines civil society information being
relevant to communities. This in this way reported rather than
sphere is different to the realms where/who this
information comes
of governments or international
from is extremely
organisations of global useful as it allows you
governance and its aim is to to focus on ideas and
counterbalance these information and this
institutions. The concept of civil allows your writing to
be more abstract and
society refers to voluntary non-
governmental organisations of analytical.
people that do not seek to profit,
but rather to foster a wider
debate that leads to fair policies.
The framework of these groups
can be local or global, depending
on the scope of the issue.
According to Scholte (2002),
THE MODERN IDEAL OF CIVIL
NOUN GROUP used
SOCIETY is a guarantee for
to condense many
democracy because in such a ideas into a single
society, many actors “seek to complex concept
shape the rules that govern one
or the other aspect of social life”
(p. 283).
Taking this background into
Purpose statement:
tells the reader about the
account, this essay considers the
specific aspect of the roles and limitations of civil Strategy to avoid
topic that will be society, particularly in the form use of personal
explored in the essay and of Non-Governmental pronoun (‘I’)
in this way introduces Organisations (NGOs), in terms
the specific issue under of its functions of shaping policy
debate (‘the role of civil
society in furthering a and reducing democratic deficits
democratic process’) at the global level.
to identify the functional elements. Please note that these breaks do not
represent paragraph breaks.
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1This thesis position,
writer’s position is and more democratic debate and and the orientating
within the debate (that to ultimately create more statements which come
civil society – in this case before it, lead the
NGOs – has an important
representative policies in global
reader to expect the
role to play in furthering governance. writer to argue for their
a democratic process) viewpoint within in the
Contrastive context of other points
conjunction used to of view on the topic
Nevertheless, NGOs face some introduce which contradict or
Qualification of thesis significant issues that constrain information that differ from their own.
statement: adds more their effectiveness in influencing Note that the writer
contrasts with the
specific information never identifies (and
about the writer’s thesis
the creation of policies in the previous statement,
public sphere. These issues and in this way therefore never argues
position (in this case the against) any other
statement reduces the relate to their ideology, reduces (qualifies)
the strength of the viewpoint than her own
strength of the position) accountability and transparency. and this undermines
statement
the successfulness of
Statement of scope: tells To support this thesis, the essay this essay as a piece of
the reader the specific
will take as an example the case persuasive analytical,
way in which the issue
under debate will be of those groups that deal with Strategy to avoid let alone critical,
the World Trade Organisation writing.
explored (using NGOs’ use of personal
ability to further a (WTO) to challenge the pronoun (‘I’)
democratic process institution and its policies.
within the WTO as a case
study) The paper will first analyse
democratic deficits in the WTO,
Outline of essay: tells
the reader in broad then the role that civil society is
terms how the essay will playing to reduce such problems
unfold and finally the current
limitations that overshadow its
success.
Functional elements Essay: Body Language
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Section preview: lets The World Trade Organisation NOUN GROUP used
the reader know what (WTO) is AN IMPORTANT to condense many
the topic of the following ideas into a single
EXAMPLE OF A GLOBAL
section is and outlines
GOVERNANCE ORGANISATION WITH complex concept
the way in which the 2This a key concept in
2
main topic is broken SIGNIFICANT DEMOCRATIC
Semitechnical the essay and should
down into sub‐topics DEFICITS. The WTO is
terminology therefore be defined by
(the main topic is ‘the comprised of SOVEREIGN shows familiarity the writer!
democratic deficits of
COUNTRIES WHICH AIM TO REACH with important
global governance
organisations such as the AGREEMENTS OVER SPECIFIC concepts within
WTO’. This is broken SUBJECTS WHICH EXTEND the discipline
down into types of BEYOND NATIONAL FRONTIERS.
‘deficit’: legitimacy, Since its creation in 1995, the
interests, equity, WTO has offered a forum to
transparency and
negotiate trade agreements with
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3This claim about the
accountability) 3
the goal to create benefits for Contrastive WTO’s goals should be
the producers, exporters and conjunction used to substantiated with
signal a logical evidence. Additionally,
consumers of goods and
relationship of there are probably
services. However, the other perspectives on
contrast between
effectiveness of this body has the WTO’s goals. These
previous and
been criticised for issues related subsequent
other perspectives
to legitimacy, interests, equity, should be
information acknowledged and
transparency and accountability
argued against.
(Conca, 2000; Dommen, 2002; Passive voice used
Castell, 2004; Kappor, 2004 and to shift focus to the
Fraser 2007). These authors criticism itself
have asserted that global rather than who
governance organisations such made the criticism
as the WTO are failing to make
decisions that positively impact
the global community.
The legitimacy of the WTO is in
Topic sentence: tells the
reader what the next doubt because the principle of
Semitechnical
paragraph/s will focus sovereign state representation terminology
on (the sub‐topic does not guarantee the shows familiarity
‘legitimacy’) representation of citizens’ with important
interests and therefore the WTO concepts within
is generally seen as a niche the discipline
4Please note that each
forum. Kapoor (2004) suggests
time you introduce a
that the 4“legitimacy chain”
semi‐technical term or
between local communities and phrase whose meaning
the forum is broken because is not clear, such as
some representatives are unable terms and phrases
to “balance diverse national coined by other
interests (citizens, communities, researchers, you need to
explain the meaning of
NGOs, labour, private, sectors, the term or phrase,
scientists, etc)” (p. 532). either in‐text or in a
footnote.
Passive voice used
Topic sentence: tells the The WTO’s own interests have to shift focus to the
reader what the next also been criticized because they
paragraph/s will focus
criticism itself -
on (the sub‐topic tend to be oriented only toward note that in this
‘interests’) economic topics and exclude instance the passive
global problems linked to human allows the writer to
rights, such as boundaries on avoid mentioning
who made the
power, environmental problems 5Note how the writer
criticism
and guarantee of health and links the quote to her
food. 5For example, as Dommen previous comment
M odal term used
odal term
(2002) argues, “the human rights and her use of ‘argues’
to reduce the indicates that she
regime protects rights, the WTO strength of the finds Dommen
protects interests. In the trade assertion being persuasive.
arena, governments are supposed made by the
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Topic sentence: tells the
reader what the next
paragraph/s will focus Finally, the lack of transparency
on (the sub‐topic and accountability in this forum
‘transparency and is evident in its communication
accountability’) approach and in decision- Conjunction of
making strategies. For example, exemplification
the unclear rules of the Green used to signal to
Room and the obstacles that the reader that
some countries face in their what follows is an
attempts to participate in an illustration of the
open dialogue. previous
generalised
Dommen (2002) explains that statement
there is also a lack of external
transparency, not only in the
way that the WTO releases its
information, but also in the rules
regarding the participation of
external stakeholders like
NGOs:
Different elements of the
transparency and civil
society participation
question have been on the
WTO agenda for several
years. The issue has taken
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- To guarantee more
participation of people in
the public debate
- To discuss issues
traditionally excluded in
the global agenda
- To raise awareness about
regulations of global
forums
- To increase the public
transparency and
accountability of such
bodies
- To promote well-
informed citizens, who
are aware of their rights
and duties
- To play an active role in
the construction of a new
global social contract
that incorporates other
voices in the debate and
counterbalances the
power of international
organisations
- To influence the agenda
setting by encouraging
the framing of issues
with different angles
besides the western
approach
- To develop solutions
based on fair rules and a
change of policies
- To implement solutions
through tactics of
persuasion that mobilise
people and build a new
network of actors in the
public sphere
- To enrich public debate
with resources, available
expertise and knowledge
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9Please note that the
conclusion should simply
developing countries, and are not author
remind the reader in
transparent in their procedures. brief of the main
9 arguments that were
Roundingoff In conclusion, the current public raised in the body. The
statement: ties up the sphere is far from perfect and the conclusion is NOT the
essay with some final ideal speech situation envisaged place to develop
remarks and points by Habermas (1989) is not a arguments or introduce
towards any further new concepts.
reality. It is clear that the public
research that may be
undertaken in relation
sphere should not be considered
to the topic under as a tool for domination and
debate should be open to the different
10
members of public opinion: 10 Make sure that your
governments, civil society, writing is clear! Your
international organisations and reader needs to be able
media. This is a part of a new to understand what you
social contract that should are trying to say. Get
regulate a different global someone else to read
your work and indicate
democracy. where your meaning is
unclear.
Public opinion has a legitimate
role in shaping global policy but
the system still privileges some
specific members. There are
efforts to enrich the debate despite
the flaws related to frame, power
and interests.
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