Photography Argument

by Aynslee Gavey

Submission date: 11-Mar-2018 10:07PM (UT C-0400)

Submission ID: 928817297
File name: Argument_Essay_-_Photography.pdf (35.07K)
Word count: 621
Character count: 2988
Rhet Qs

Posit ion

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mult iple ex

good ct r arg

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Photography Argument
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

48
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/50

QM Rhet Qs
Ef f ective use of rhetorical questions.

QM Position
Your position is clear. And your opening is engaging.

Comment 1
I think you might have included an example here. A photographer and their "own unique style"
perhaps?

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QM multiple ex
Ef f ective use of multiple examples in this paragraph.

Comment 2
I like this sentence.

QM good ctr arg

good job of addressing counter argument

Comment 3
I wonder if you could expand on this idea. Provide an additional example or elaborate on this
idea a bit.
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Comment 4
possibly redundant. You said this in the previous sentence.

Comment 5
Make sure your punctuation gets inside the quotation unless the quote is f ollowed by a citation.

Comment 6
Nice work with this essay. I'm impressed with your sentence structure and organizational
strategy. I think putting your qualif ication of Sontag's argument in the third body paragraph
worked really well f or you. It kept the rest of your paper cohesive and clear. I think you could try
to work on using specif ic examples. In your f irst body paragraph, I would have liked to see a
specif ic photographer or photography style mentioned to strengthen what you were saying
about individual photographers and their approaches to the art f orm. I also think you want to
make sure that you elaborate enough on your own position when you return to it f rom your
counter argument. A good rule of thumb is to always be talking about your own argument at
least as much as you are the counterargument in a paragraph. Nice work!

Score: 8