Criterion Undocumented 0 Minimal 1 Basic 2 Proficient 3 Advanced 4 Comments

Unacceptable Unacceptable Acceptable Acceptable Acceptable

Idea The statement Statement Statement Using Using sound From reading your
Development does not expresses the logically generally assumptions paper, it is clear to
address author’s views develops the sound and me that your
the author’s about the author’s views assumptions arguments, philosophies include
views about the purposes of about the and the statement making sure parents
purposes of education, purposes of arguments, logically have a good
education, guiding education, based in develops the relationship
guiding educational guiding practical author’s views between the school
educational principles, educational experience, about the and the parent and
principles, understanding principles, the statement purposes of that students should
understanding of of learning, understanding logically education, understand the
learning, and/or and/or the of learning, develops the guiding importance of
the most most and/or the author’s views educational school. I would
appropriate appropriate most about the principles, suggest
strategies for strategies for appropriate purposes of understanding strengthening your
teaching. The teaching, but strategies for education, of learning, thesis to reflect your
statement is is ambiguous teaching. guiding and/or the philosophies.
incoherent or or not educational most
extremely brief connected. However, the principles, appropriate
or contains statement is not understanding strategies for
major logical always consistent of learning, teaching.
inconsistencies. and/or and/or the Statement
convincing. most includes
appropriate sound ethical
strategies for or
teaching. psychological
arguments
and not just
 practical
ones.
Illustrative No illustrative Supporting Examples in Supporting Specific I gave a 3 for
Examples examples are examples are support of points examples examples illustrative examples
included. inadequate or are relevant but from the from the because you talk
of unclear general or not writer’s writer’s about performance
relevance. based in experience personal based assessment,
experience. are specific experience, S.M.A.R.T goals,
and pertinent. academic and differentiated
work, or field instruction. These
experience are all great
illustrate examples, but what
points in a is missing is the
vivid or personal
memorable experience. You
way. mention that your
philosophies stem
from personal
experience and how
they will benefit you
as a special
education teacher,
but do not
necessarily describe
how.
Quality of The statement is The The statement The In addition to The reason I gave a
Writing very difficult to statement, is statement is being clear, 2 is because there
read because of though understandable clear, well well were several
its style, usage, comprehensibl plus two of the organized, organized, misuses of
mechanics, or e, has obvious following: free from free from commas/semicolons
organization. problems in errors of errors of
 two of the 1) organized, mechanics mechanics and you used many
following and usage, and usage, contractions
areas: style, 2) free from and written in and written
usage and errors of an in an
mechanics, or mechanics appropriate appropriate
organization. and usage, academic academic
style. style, the
3) in an
statement:
appropriate
academic style. 1) has a
single,
unifying
theme
and
2) is strongly
suggestive of
the writer’s
voice.
Additional I enjoyed your
Comments quote at the
beginning of
your paper!
Overall, I think
that your paper
is well organized
and good for a
rough draft, I
would just focus
on cleaning up
the structure of
your sentences
 and the quality of
writing. Another
thing to think
about is the
personal
connection to
your examples.
Reviewee: Jilliyn
Geremonte
Evaluator: Cameron Gentile