Alicia Houth

Professor Batty

English 102

12 December 2018

Reflection #1

In my poetry essay Nightmares of the Bottom by Lil Wayne, I made changes throughout.

Some major changes would definitely be my thesis, the structure and context. I realized that my

supporting facts did not correlate back to what my thesis claims, so what I did was add more,

analyzed and connected with my statements and thesis. I went more in depth with my points and

examples, i described them more thoroughly, so connecting them with my thesis would flow

neatly. I noticed how I would include quotes and not explain the purpose of them, so I went back

to my quotes and explained the analysis behind it.

I believe the main problem of my essay was connecting how being “original gangster”

ties into an argument about the deep, real meaning of the song. By answering and fixing this

problem, these are the changes I made in my introduction paragraph with the thesis. I edited out

words and added and fixed the structure of my paragraph so it flowed smoothly. I also fixed my

conclusion paragraph, i reread it and i agreed with the revision comments, it was rushed and a

little unfinished. I completed the conclusion paragraph by summing up my thesis with the points

I’ve made and summed up the essay as whole, I tried to explain how imagery, metaphor and his

choice of words about his song -thriving as a gangster and being successful can show how he

rose and prosper. Overall, my revised essay reads better than my original one with the help of

Ms. Batty’s and my peer’s comment.s