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Isabella Elizondo

Research Argument Essay Commented [yw1]: Professor Watson

English 1001 Commented [yw2]: English 1001

March 25, 2019

Online Dating Gone Wrong Commented [yw3]: Is this your angle on this topic? It
looks interesting!
Commented [yw4]: Too much space here.

After frustrating months or years of no relationships or interesting potential friendships,

you decide to try online dating. Slightly hesitate, you can use any online dating app; Tinder,

Match, eHarmony, etc. You use one of those apps, meet someone that matches your taste Commented [yw5]: Yes, that has happened to so many!
😊
according to the criteria provided in the application, and of course is attractive. You both decide Commented [yw6]: *is attractive

to meet at an agreed upon time and location. You’re super excited but nervous for obvious

reasons. You’re texting your parents about how you met someone on this app, he/she is so nice

etc. This is of course associated with text messages sent via the app. The last text you send them

is “I love you”. You finally meet your date, everything is fine during dinner. Finally, after dinner

the two of you decide to go for a walk. It’s dark and a little chilly. Next day you are on the news

“Young women found dead late last night…” With the sources that I chose, I will be arguing Commented [yw7]: Oh no! what happened?

about the cons of online dating and an explanation on why I think online dating shouldn’t be

allowed or at least restricted for security reasons. Commented [yw8]: Avoid announcing your thesis in your
argument. I like the topic and your angle so far!

Online dating should be eliminated or modified to increase security measures. There are

too many females, including men, that have been murdered or assaulted from any online dating

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website. There doesn’t seem to be any filtering mechanism that identifies criminal history or Commented [yw9]: This is very interesting! I don’t hear
too many of these incidents on the news.
background information that eliminates potential candidates who might be considered suspicious

of nature. When setting and defining a profile, it includes adding your first and last name, where Commented [yw10]: *of

you are from, facts about you, etc. People don’t think about what information they are adding to

their profile. That in itself, should be considered as information that might be used to identify

your resident location, and personal information. Not only do dating services use this data, but

various sale-companies who can capture your information for advertisement and marketing

purposes. That’s when you end up talking to someone that seems so nice online but turns out to

be a stalker or someone who’s purpose is to ultimately conduct a criminal act against you. If you Commented [yw11]: Yes, this is true. Some of the other
sites have this potential as well, such as Letgo.com and
Craigslist.
look at the first source down below, it will give you lists of stories about meeting people in

person but turns out to be “Online dating is far from secure, and can put you into a situation

where predators have access to your personal information and data”. Commented [yw12]: Add a period. This quote must be
cited in-text.

The cons of online dating. For those that are not in a relationship and are setting up a

profile on any online app, forget it. You are risking your life and potentially those of your family

members. Look at the stories in the link ( https://www.ranker.com/list/tinder-murder- Commented [yw13]: But that’s the thing: I don’t see
these stories. Where is the link for more information?
stories/jessika-gilbert?page=3). Do you want your life to end in a catastrophic event? Do you

want to risk your own life by meeting someone online? It isn’t worth it. Statistical data suggests

that on-line dating provides your personal data to literary thousands of potential connections,

many of which are predators. Whoever you are talking to on the other side of the screen could

be a dangerous person. It could be a female OR male. This person could be lying to you,

blackmail you, hack into your accounts, track you, etc. Its’ imperative that you carefully review

what you place on the web, and that you make sure that the information you provide on any

website, is protected and secured. Personal information cannot be retracted once the internet

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gains access. It becomes the property of whoever accesses that information, including predators Commented [yw14]: Yes, this is truly scary. I don’t think I
want to be in that situation.
who might be attempting to connect with you via an online dating application. On-line dating

requires identification information that can be accessed by not only legitimate individuals

looking for relationship, but companies and corporations seeking profits from the millions of

people willing to provide personal information or from those oblivious to what they are doing

and providing. As mentioned before, information that is inputted into the internet, is subject to

retrieval from any entity that wants the information. Dating services have become more

sophisticated and have provided security measures to make it more difficult to access inputted

information, but it’s still not completely full-proof. Dating services are continuing to find ways

to improve security measures, but personal data is still being hacked or accessed by those who

have ulterior motives other than what it was intended for Commented [yw15]: I find this disturbing indeed! I wish
these sites were more secure. Do you have any information
from your sources to support this?
Unfortunately, on-line dating has replaced face-to-face interactions that have been part of

our cultural heritage. Modern technology is removing the personal connection between men and

women, a connection that has existed for centuries. Dating via the internet does have some

advantages, but it also reduces relationships to box-checking and data collection. The idea that

similar likes and concerns are more conducive to successful relationships, is not substantiated by

scientific research. Opposites have and do attract each other. On-line dating is a business created

to make money and profit. We, as consumers, need to be cognizant of this always. Commented [yw16]: Good point! yes, it is all about the
money, sometimes.

Conventional wisdom suggests that love is a fundamental human need. Most people meet

their significant others through their social circles or work/school functions. However, these

pools can be relatively shallow. In the search for a potential date, more and more people are

switching to less traditional methods. After frustrating months or years of no relationships or

interesting potential friendships, you decide to try online dating. Slightly hesitate, you can use

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any online dating app; Tinder, Match, eHarmony, etc. Using Online dating via the internet is

extremely popular. A survey conducted in 2013 found that 77% of people considered it “very

important” to have their smartphones with them at all times. With the rise and rise of apps like Commented [yw17]: Um, okay. I am not if it because of
the dating apps, though. That may be just in general.
Tinder (and the various copycat models) who could blame them. If you want to think

about dating as a number’s game (and apparently many people do), you could probably swipe

left/right between 10 – 100 times in the span of time that it would take you to interact with one

potential date in ‘real-life’. With one of those apps, meeting someone that matches your taste

according to the criteria provided in the application, and of course attractive, is doable. The

popularity of online dating is being driven by several things but a major factor is time. Online

dating presents an effective solution to a serious problem. Browsing profiles isn’t nearly as time-

consuming (or daunting) as mixing with people in a social context. Statistics suggest that about 1

in 5 relationships begin online nowadays. It’s estimated that by 2040, 70% of us will have met

our significant other online. Commented [yw18]: Very interesting! I like the
percentage here. Did it come from another source?

Before online dating came around, we just had beautiful, funny people in movies, TV

shows, and magazines with whom to compare ourselves. Now online dating is included in that

mix. You’re going to see people who seem to have better profiles than you, better pictures than

you, more accomplishments to brag about than you, more interesting interests than you, and so

on. Maybe they do; maybe they don’t. This could cause some mental anguish if you let it. In

order to get started with an online dating site any potential daters need to create a profile of

themselves. The online profile is the source of many of the online dating problems. While you

may be completely forthright with the information on your dating profile, others may not be.

Often people on dating sites may choose to use pictures or descriptions that are far from realistic. Commented [yw19]: Your analogy is interesting here! I
am thinking that this comparison creates envy and
disillusionment, however. How could it be related to online
Perhaps they make themselves sound better in their profile or a picture from twenty years ago.
dating?

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Many times these are used to increase their profile responses, but ultimately you can wind up

wasting quite a bit of time dealing with someone who is not what they present themselves as.

Additionally, many dating sites leave profiles up that have been inactive for quite a while.

Basically, an online dating site wants to make it appear that they are the best on the internet. The Commented [yw20]: Good point! I knew someone who
did this. his recipient was less than amused by him.
number of profiles on that directly impact that. However, what you may find once you commit to

one of these sites is that the multiple profiles that have been advertised are inactive leaving you

without the dating prospects that you had hoped for.

You both decide to meet at an agreed upon time and location. You’re super excited but

nervous for obvious reasons. You’re texting your parents about how you met someone on this

app, he/she is so nice etc. This is of course associated with text messages sent via the app. The

last text you send them is “I love you”. You finally meet your date, everything is fine during

dinner. Finally, after dinner the two of you decide to go for a walk. It’s dark and a little chilly.

Next day you are on the news “Young women found dead late last night…” With the sources

that I chose, I will be arguing about the cons of online dating and an explanation on why I think

online dating shouldn’t be allowed or at least restricted for security reasons. Commented [yw21]: This paragraph is a repeat from the
introduction.

Ok this is hardly an earth-shattering revelation. People want to be appealing. Most people

probably wouldn’t be surprised to learn that it’s more common for people to lie in their online

profile than be completely honest. A study of over 1,000 online daters in the US and UK

conducted by global research agency Opinion Matters, founds some very interesting statistics. A

total of 53% of US participants admitted to having lied in their online dating profile. Women

apparently lied more than men, with the most common dishonesties being about looks. Over 20%

of women posted photos of their younger selves. But men were only marginally better. Their

most common lies revolved around their financial situation, specifically, about having a

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better job (financially) than they actually do. More than 40% of men indicated that they did this,

but the tactic was also employed by nearly a third of women. Commented [yw22]: Interesting! Why are people so
cliché?

One of the big problems with online dating for women is that, although there are genuine

relationship-seeking men on the sites, there are also plenty of guys on there simply looking

for sex. While most people would agree that on average men are more eager for sex, it seems that

many men make the assumption that if a woman has an online dating presence, she’s interested

in sleeping with relative strangers. Online dating does represent the convenience of being able to

meet others that you possibly never would have otherwise, but women should be aware that they

probably will receive rude/disgusting messages from horny guys, sexual propositions/requests,

dick-pics, and a lot of creepy vibes (https://www.kaspersky.com/blog/online-dating-report/)

Let’s be honest, the internet is really just a super elaborate and sophisticated farce

designed to distract you from having your pockets picked by greasy conmen in cheap suits,

right? Not quite, but it is full of unscrupulous vendors looking to separate you from your money Commented [yw23]: Interesting question! Not sure how
to answer that….
by whatever means possible. Scams have been around as long as the internet. Of course there are Commented [yw24]: Add a period here.

pitfalls and tripwires in every sphere of life, but this may be particularly true in the context of

online dating. There are literally hundreds (if not thousands) of online scams, and I’m not going

to run through any in detail here. As a matter of fact, you should probably be wary of any

person, group or entity asking for any kind of financial or personal information. Commented [yw25]: Interesting paragraph here but
doesn’t need to be added in this essay. It doesn’t really
serve a purpose here. So, it can be omitted.

Online dating should be eliminated or modified to increase security measures. There are

too many females, including men, that have been murdered or assaulted from any online dating

website. There doesn’t seem to be any filtering mechanism that identifies criminal history or

background information that eliminates potential candidates who might be considered suspicious

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In nature. When setting and defining a profile, it includes adding your first and last name, where Commented [yw26]: *in

you are from, facts about you, etc. People don’t think about what information they are adding to

their profile. That in itself, should be considered as information that might be used to identify

your resident location, and personal information. Not only do dating services use this data, but

various sale-companies who can capture your information for advertisement and marketing

purposes. That’s when you end up talking to someone that seems so nice online but turns out to

be a stalker or someone who’s purpose is to ultimately conduct a criminal act against you. If you

look at the first source down below, it will give you lists of stories about meeting people in

person but turns out to be “Online dating is far from secure, and can put you into a situation

where predators have access to your personal information and data.

The cons of online dating. For those that are not in a relationship and are setting up a

profile on any online app, forget it. You are risking your life and potentially those of your family

members. Look at the stories in the link. Do you want your life to end in a catastrophic event?

Do you want to risk your own life by meeting someone online? It isn’t worth it. Statistical data

suggests that on-line dating provides your personal data to literary thousands of potential

connections, many of which are predators. Whoever you are talking to on the other side of the

screen could be a dangerous person. It could be a female OR male. This person could be lying to

you, blackmail you, hack into your accounts, track you, etc. Its’ imperative that you carefully

review what you place on the web, and that you make sure that the information you provide on

any website, is protected and secured. Personal information cannot be retracted once the internet

gains access. It becomes the property of whoever accesses that information, including predators

who might be attempting to connect with you via an online dating application. On-line dating

requires identification information that can be accessed by not only legitimate individuals Commented [yw27]: Yes, all of these points are true.
Why would anyone take such a chance?

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looking for relationship, but companies and corporations seeking profits from the millions of

people willing to provide personal information or from those oblivious to what they are doing

and providing. As mentioned before, information that is inputted into the internet, is subject to

retrieval from any entity that wants the information. Dating services have become more

sophisticated and have provided security measures to make it more difficult to access inputted

information, but it’s still not completely full-proof. Dating services are continuing to find ways

to improve security measures, but personal data is still being hacked or accessed by those who

have ulterior motives other than what it was intended for.

Unfortunately, on-line dating has replaced face-to-face interactions that have been part of

our cultural heritage. Modern technology is removing the personal connection between men and

women, a connection that has existed for centuries. Dating via the internet does have some

advantages, but it also reduces relationships to box-checking and data collection. The idea that

similar likes and concerns are more conducive to successful relationships, is not substantiated by

scientific research. Opposites have and do attract each other. On-line dating is a business created

to make money and profit. We, as consumers, need to be cognizant of this always. Online dating

has not only captured the American and the European audiences with the advent of social media

and the internet, but also countries in Asia. Online dating is big business internationally and has

created a nefarious and illegal avenue that generates large amounts of profit. Commented [yw28]: That solidifies your argument and
brings it to an effect close here. Good work on your points
and particulars!

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Works Cited

“Dangerous Liaisons: Is Everyone Doing It Online?” Daily English Global Blogkasperskycom,

www.kaspersky.com/blog/online-dating-report/.

“Dangerous Liaisons: Is Everyone Doing It Online?” Daily English Global Blogkasperskycom,

www.kaspersky.com/blog/online-dating-report/.

“Common Problems with Online Dating.” SelfGrowth.com,

www.selfgrowth.com/articles/common_problems_with_online_dating/.

You bring out some very good points on the issues regarding the perils on online dating. I especially like
how you present the dangers of meeting someone who is an imposter or impersonates someone else,
and how dangerous this is. Good work! however, you don’t really cite your sources used, according to
the originality report. About 25% of your sources used are not cited in-text. Also, you don’t present
really any positives, pros, of online dating, so I don’t see a full explanation of how beneficial it can be. I
95-100 Points 85-94 Points 75-84 Points 66-74 Points 0-65 Points

Excellent Good Satisfactory Minimal Poor/Unacceptable

noted mechanical issues throughout, including the works cite page, so please see my comments on
those. Please see the rubric for your grade and let me know if you have any questions. Thanks!

English 1001 Final Research Argument Essay Rubric

Ideas__25___/30%

 Subject is appropriate: not “off-limits” or overly opinionated/emotional

 Thesis statement is well structured and presents a clear position
 Shows awareness of audience and potential counterarguments
 Readers find your argument persuasive

Details__20___ /25%

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 “Shows” rather than “tells” –specific evidence from sources supports your points
 Relies on a fair number of solid claims/reasons on your side
 Counterarguments are raised and addressed effectively if applicable
 Argument is original but supported by research
 Sources are used right away in the introduction

Organization___15___ /15%

 Argument builds from clear thesis at the beginning to persuasive ending with sources evident
 Essay stays focused on thesis until the end
 Introduction gets reader’s attention and makes him/her want to keep reading
 Paragraphs are focused and unified, with clear transitions between criteria.
 Counterarguments are logically placed and addressed
 Conclusion ties up loose ends and closes effectively

Style____15_/15%

 Interesting and correct word choice

 Good sentence variety
 Punctuation, grammar, and spelling are correct
 Writing is clear and concise
 Tone of language is objective, appropriate, and respectful – convincing to readers

Format___10__ /15%

 Uses MLA style manuscript form.

 All quotes, stats, opinions of others and little-known facts are cited with correct parenthetical citations.
 Works cited page contains complete publication data, in MLA format.

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Final Research Essay Final Draft Total points: ____85__/100 85% B

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