The line graph compares the number of male and female smokers in some land over the period

1960 to
2000. At the onset, it is clear that women were more into smoke than that of men. Commented [MM1]: Not appropriate!
Commented [MM2]: Better not to write it in the first
According to the initially initial part of graph, female smokers were 100000, however, the trend for men paragraph.
were six times more than that. After 1975, the difference was less marked. Notwithstanding, men
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always outnumbered the women.
Commented [MM4]: No needed to mention the details in
this paragraph!
On a more positive note, during the 1960 to 1975 there was a progress in the number of female
smokers. In 1960, the number of female smokers accounted for 100000, which the number doubled Commented [MM5]: Wrong usage!

over a decade. Following that, it touched the highest point in 1975 after that, it stayed almost Commented [MM6]: What ?!!?!? Here?!!? Task 1 !?!
unchanged by a period of fifteen years and then the trends went into fall in the last decade. In contrast, Commented [MM7]: What?!?!!?!
the figure for men were always declining moderately throughout the 1960 to 2000 and also in 2000 Commented [MM8]: Punctuation!
smokers number among both male and female stood almost at the same level.

Expected band:

Grammatical
Task Coherence and Lexical
range and
achievement cohesion resource
accuracy
Band 5 5 5.5 5.5
Overall 5.5
The given line graph depicts the percentage of radio and television throughout the day from October to Commented [MM9]: The percentage of radio and
December in 1992. Generally speaking, watching television is more favourable by UK audiences. television??!?!!

Before 9 am television watchers were upward while those who listen to radio their percentage stumped Commented [MM10]: What do you mean???
and reached to only 5% at the end and it expected to continue to do so until the first light. Commented [MM11]: What?!?!?!

The data unravel the fact that, after 12 am until 6 am both TV and radio audiences were almost equal
(5%). Television audiences levelled out until 9 am, despite radio audiences the trend has risen sharply
and also substantial percentage of this figure is in this hour. After 9 o’clock in the morning until noon
radio listeners have plateaued out while an upsurge occurred for TV watchers. Consequently, at 1 pm
both stayed at the same level by nearly 15%. Radio audience continued declining tendency however TV
audiences projected to peak by 45% at 9 pm. After 10 pm and near to late hours it has caused the
collapse of almost 35%. Commented [MM12]: There's no certain plan in your
writing, mostly in the last paragraph. Where's your
summary?

Expected band:

Grammatical
Task Coherence and Lexical
range and
achievement cohesion resource
accuracy
Band 5.5 5 6 5.5
Overall 5.5
The graph demonstrates the trend of bonuses paid to bankers in New York city. Generally speaking, the
trend of bonuses were always upward, however during this period rapid ups and downs could be Commented [MM13]: Fluctuations!
observed.

The amount of bonuses have been rose during fifteen initial years. But in 2000 the upward trend Commented [MM14]: ?!?!!!
stopped and after a short time declined. It again increased sharply before 2010.

A more detailed look at the graph, in the first decade, the total amount of bonuses remained almost the
same which made up 12.5 billions of dollars after that it moved up overwhelmingly and doubled in the
next five year and also touched the first highest point ,however, it starts to fall for the next 2 years.
Afterwards, the figure went up and reached the second vertex in 2007 which was roughly 2 times more
than the first peak. In this case, bankers saw their strongest growth of bonuses . Later, the amount of
bonuses given by bankers dropped and stood at the same level of the last 5 years (almost 37 billions of
dollars.)

Expected band:

Grammatical
Task Coherence and Lexical
range and
achievement cohesion resource
accuracy
Band 6 5.5 6.5 6
Overall 6