Documente Academic
Documente Profesional
Documente Cultură
Anna McKinney
Kelly Draper
Savannah Romein
Overall story ✓
concept and fit
Cinematography ✓
Sound ✓
Editing ✓
• Very satisfying to see how well you responded to the feedback in class. You have ended up with
a strong film.
• There is a clear 3 act structure here. The setup and confrontation is well identified. What I think
could be developed is the resolution. However for a first time documentary this is great storytelling
and you have identified a strong subject.
• Beautifully shot and I appreciate the creative use of sound.
• It is great to have silences in a film, you give us and the character space.
• What I think could have worked was returning to the race, through sound or image, something
that could finish the film neatly. I am left asking some questions. The final line just about works
but it could be better.
• At times it feels too descriptive. I think as directors you could have pushed the subject more with
the questions and/or looked at other aspects of her life than simply the running.
• Clear implementation of the technical exercises from the semester.
Strong interview about training for running, with good sound and camerawork. A little flat, with
more probing insight to her mental and emotional state would offer more depth.
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FINAL MARK:
Solid essay with strong introduction, but weakens towards the end, e.g. what lessons learned and
insights gained.
Reflective Essay
Throughout this reflective essay I will be discussing the overall research, production
processes and reflections on the making of our film Personal Best.1 The narrative revolves
around the 19-year-old athlete, Aine McKinney, whom is diagnosed with Chronic
Compartment Syndrome, and follows her physical and mental recovery process.
After researching ideas around the proposed theme of ‘margins’; known as an edge, border
or a degree of by which something is won, we brainstormed a range of ideas that were relevant
to current societal issues. Primarily, our focus was to tell a simplistic, clear narrative that would
hopefully tell an influential story. Aine’s positive outlook on her unfortunate situation
convinced us that this was a story and perspective worth sharing, with the goal to further inspire
an audience. We interviewed her for long periods of time and watched archival footage to get
a firm grasp of her story and thus decide upon a route and direction for the story to be told
Deciding upon the narrative to surround Aine’s marginalisation within her hobby helped
on the quality of our shots, in comparison to quantity. Location scouting around Mary Peters
tracks, Aine’s training area, helped us visualise sequences, thus we experimented shots and
created a practice running montage. Albeit, the montage not being included in the final film,
this enabled us to realise the story is best told without music to manipulate the emotions of the
film, thus letting the visual and interview dialogue drive it.
The concept of redirection, which revolves around the idea of ‘our need for margin,’4 and
the idea that redirection still beats regress and the abandonment of progress, became a strong
focal point. For instance, Aine’s positive thought process towards her injury helped her redirect
her goals from being the best to doing her best, which became the backbone to our structure.
Researching the ice baths, dry needling and exercise routines Aine underwent, helped us
to create an overall structure of sequences. We showed this within the documentary enabling
our audience to emphathise with the long process Aine must deal with. We watched multiple
short films to understand the pace and structure of a short documentary, helping us to decide to
let shots breathe, thus enabling the audience to feel more intimate with the protagonist.
Due to the genre being documentary, we knew we could not plan storyboards and structures
precisely, thus we began shooting early, beginning a four-week shooting process. Applying the
three-act structure to our narrative, we decided to begin interviewing Aine, to grab sound bites
on the H4N. Even though ‘light strives to push the form of nonfiction filmmaking by finding
new ways to communicate emotions,’5 we decided to use three-point lighting in this first
interview, discarding the lighting equipment for the rest of the documentary, in order to take a
more sincere approach. Shooting solely on the Canon GH5, switching between the 14mm,
35mm and 85mm throughout, helped us maintain a similar aesthetic feel to each shot. This
helped us in post-production as we felt they visually synchronised neatly, hence did not need
Throughout the edit in post-production, using Premiere Pro, we arranged our sequences
sincere and authentic atmosphere. Even though ‘light strives to push the form of nonfiction
filmmaking by finding new ways to communicate emotions,’6 we decided to only use light.
The decision to use Aine’s quote: ‘it’s not about being the best, it’s about doing your best’ to
end the film was due to it summarising the overall messages and values of the documentary.
Overall, the pacing of the film ‘can be controlled from shot to shot, scene to scene,’7 thus the
artistic decision to use minimal shots to tell the story let us create a smooth pace throughout
each sequence. Lastly, we incorporated Justin Wells’ idea that reflection is important to the
understanding of documentary,8 hence we focused on Aine’s reflection in the third act of the
narrative structure. Following Grierson’s philosophy, that ‘stories taken from the raw can be
finer,’9 we decided to finish the film on a raw, close-up in order to let the audience have the
Modern documentaries are known to deliberately distort reality through ‘patterns of light and
dark, the hypnotic sound of repetitive music’,10 and other filmic techniques. Thus, contrasting
to this, our overall sincere, raw, stylistic approach helped us maintain an authentic, more
realistic way of telling Aine’s story. This more realistic approach hopefully enabled the
audience to become further aligned with her due to being able to emphasise with her easier,
reducing any forms of manipulation; therefore driving the audience’s emotions through Aine’s
The planning of the film could have been more organised, for example, testing our film
equipment before shooting, therefore avoiding sound issues. Furthermore, if we had planned
the pre-production further in advance, we would have secured the physiotherapist scene which
would have changed the tone of the documentary. However, these complications helped us to
get a greater understanding of the challenges of the documentary filmmaking process and
Filmography
• Draper, Kelly, McKinney, Anna, Romein, Savannah, Personal Best (2019, 5mn)
Bibliography
• Aufderheide, Patricia, Documentary Film: A Very Short Introduction (Oxford University Press,
2007)
Documentary and Ethnographic Films and Videos (University of California Press, 1997)
• Stubbs, Liz, Documentary Filmmakers Speak (New York: Allworth Press, 2002)
• Swenson, Richard, Margin: Restoring Emotional, Physical, Financial, and Time Reserves to