Rough Draft Proposal Argument

by Carmen Bernal

Submission date: 09-Aug-2019 11:55PM (UTC-0500)

Submission ID: 1159035227
File name: 109690_81418582_1088375377_Rough_Draft_Proposal_Argument_.docx (37.73K)
Word count: 1623
Character count: 8004
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ORIGINALITY REPORT

25 %
SIMILARITY INDEX
21%
INTERNET SOURCES
0%
PUBLICATIONS
19%
STUDENT PAPERS

PRIMARY SOURCES

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www.financialeducatorscouncil.org
Internet Source 11%
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www.daveramsey.com
Internet Source 6%
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Submitted to Lakewood High School
Student Paper 3%
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Submitted to Trinity Academy
Student Paper 2%
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Submitted to Wawasan Open University
Student Paper 1%
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Submitted to The Lawrenceville School
Student Paper 1%
7
Submitted to 21st Century Cyber Charter School
Student Paper <1%
8
Submitted to Harrells Christian Academy
Student Paper <1%
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

100
Carmen,

I think your introduction should be revised to explain the

nature of the problem that you are addressing.
Proposals first must prove that a specific problem exits
before laying out a solution.

/100 I would discuss some of the negative results of the lack

of education about finances.

Otherwise, your essay is well organized and logical.

However, the use of 2nd person is too informal for an

academic essay. In academic writing, we do not directly
address the audience in the way that is commonly
done in other types of writing and online articles.

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QM "You"
2nd person isn't appropriate for academic writing. Do not directly address your audience.

QM "You"
2nd person isn't appropriate for academic writing. Do not directly address your audience.

Comment 1
too informal for academic writing

QM Sp.
Spelling error

Comment 2
"about" not "on"

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