Everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs’ regardless of their

level of academic ability.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your
answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Admission into University is tough nowadays, high school students are required to take
exams to indicate their academic level. University is where everyone acknowledges the
important skills before getting a job. This essay defined the reason to why every applicant
should be accepted.

University is the final step in which students will be receiving the knowledge from the
experts. However, some people do not have opportunity to gain those experiences
regarding to their level of academic ability. Though those particular people are unable to
reach the university’s requirements, they might be able to perform good in the practice, in
fact, exams use for considering colleagues are mostly in theory. Moreover, some are better
in the practice skill rather than theory. For example, students may be able to fix each part of
the car and explain each one in details and that student will surely perform a good car
mechanism but that student could get a rejection from the company as he does not have a
university qualification. Thus, half of the university candidate did not get to enter to the
University which it has an impact on their future job position.

To conclude, studying in the University contain lots of opportunity to the students:

obtaining the useful knowledges, understanding the necessary details in their preference’s
job. From my point of view, accepting into the university should happened to everyone as it
is a way to develop the skill that each one has in order to operate well on their future life.

Comments:

Strengths Weaknesses

 A good answer with a direction but  Connections – ‘nowadays. High school..’

some unclear language.
 Uses a diverse range of lexical items.
 Information flows but ideas can be hard
to identify.
 Some appropriate language but a little
wordy in places and a need to be more
concise.
 Clearer ideas – ‘have opportunity to gain
those experiences regarding to their
level of academic ability. Though those
particular people are unable to reach
the university’s requirements, although
they might be able to perform good in
the practice, in fact, exams use for
considering colleagues are mostly in
theory’
 Grammar – ‘will be receive’; ‘exams
used’; ‘candidates’; ‘contains lots of
opportunities for’
  Inaccurate / imprecise language – ‘take
care of a good car mechanically’;
‘preferred job’; ‘in their future life’

Score – 6.0