UPM-CALC/CEL2103 WRTING ACADEMIC TEXTS/SEM 1 2019-2020/WP/TASK 4A

SEMESTER 1, 2019/2020

CEL2103 WRITING ACADEMIC TEXTS

WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 4

SUBMISSION CHECKLIST

ITEMS  Marks

CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH OUTLINE

TASK 4a 
FORM

ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY DRAFT 

TASK 4b SELF-EDITING CHECKLIST 
ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY FINAL DRAFT 

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Group: Group 1 Executive

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WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 4 – CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH

[OUTLINE]

Items marked with an asterisk ‘*’ must be written in a complete sentence.

Topic: _ Zoo_

*Debatable Statement: Zoos should be banned.

Stand: disagree

*Thesis Statement:

Supporters say that zoos have harmed the animals, despite the fact that zoos
provide a safe environment for animals and educate the public.

CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH

Restatement of the Current Issue

Reasons were given to believe that zoos enlighten society about the importance of
animals in a good way.

Restatement of the Thesis Statement

It lets people gain knowledge about wildlife and gives animals protection.

Summary of Arguments Supporting the Thesis Statement

Though it looks like animals are being tortured by bringing them to one place from
their natural habitats, they are being protected for the betterment of them and society.

Final Remarks (Call For Action)

Hence, it is our responsibility to understand that the animals have the right to live like
every one of us does and protect them.
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WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 2 – CONCLUDING FORM

[FINAL]

Using the outline that you have prepared above, write the complete concluding
paragraph for your argumentative essay. Your concluding paragraph should be
written in more than 100 words but not exceeding 200 words.

Overall, reasons were given to believe that zoos enlighten society about the
importance of animals in a good way. It lets people gain knowledge about wildlife
and gives animals protection. Though it looks like animals are being tortured by
bringing them to one place from their natural habitats, they are being protected for
the betterment of them and society. Hence, it is our responsibility to understand that
the animals have the right to live like every one of us does and protect them.

WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 4b – ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY

[DRAFT]

ESSAY TITLE: ZOOS SHOULD BE BANNED.

Zoos are almost indispensable places to visit in cities today, and going to the

zoo is a favorite activity for children and families. There is an issue of whether zoos

should be abolished has been widely debated in our community recently. It is an

important topic because the zoo is the only place where brings people and animals

together and educates the public to enhance appreciation of the animals. Opponents

think that we are not entitled to trap animals in zoos and strip their freedom.

Supporters say that zoos have harmed the animals, despite the fact that zoos

provide a safe environment for animals and educate the public.

Opponents of this idea claim that animals in captivity suffer from stress,

boredom due to confinement which makes animals in captivity do not live as long as

those in the wild. According to Rowcliffe (2008), the records of 4,500 elephants
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found that an African elephant in captivity lives on an average of 16.9 years and an

African elephant in the wild lives in an average of 56 years. However, the zoo

provides an enriched habitat in which the animals are never bored, are well cared for

and have plenty of space to roam freely. Modern zoos can offer animals a living

environment. According to researchers where zoo animals nowadays are roaming in

larger areas in the better zoos that are similar to the natural environment and

protected by moats, cliffs, not by bars (Rothfels, 2002).

Next, some argue that people can learn more about animals by watching

wildlife documentaries. There is some effectiveness of education by watching wildlife

documentaries. Wildlife documentary plays an important role in the public's

knowledge of science and environmental problems as it affects public involvement in

environmental policies and conflicts. Besides, the documentary also created views of

wildlife and nature for people (Richards, 2013). On the other hand, learning by own

experience, interacting with animals is more accurate and interesting than watching

documentaries. Moreover, we are able to know the natural behaviour of all animals.

Andersen (2003) argued that zoos do play an important educational role and that

documentaries can be misleading. The behavior of animals in zoos has become

more natural than 10–15 years ago.

Overall, reasons were given to believe that zoos enlighten society about the

importance of animals in a good way. It lets people gain knowledge about wildlife

and gives animals protection. Though it looks like animals are being tortured by

bringing them to one place from their natural habitats, they are being protected for

the betterment of them and society. Hence, it is our responsibility to understand that

the animals have the right to live like every one of us does and protect them.

REFERENCES:
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Rowcliffe, M., Clubb, R., Moss, C., Mason, G. J., Lee, P., & Mar, K. U. (2008).

Compromised survivorship in zoo elephants. Science, 322(5908), 1649.

https://doi.org/10.1126/science.1164298

Rothfels, N.(2002). Savages and Beasts: The Birth of the Modern Zoo. Baltimore:

Johns Hopkins University Press. Retrieved September 3, 2019

Richards, M. (2013). Greening Wildlife Documentary, 96–97.

Andersen, L. (2001). Zoo education: from formal school programs to exhibit design

and interpretation. International Zoo Yearbook. 38. 75 - 81.

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WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 4B SELF-EDITING CHECKLIST

NO. CRITERIA YES NO COMMENTS

Does the essay have all three parts: introduction,


body and conclusion?

1. Does the introduction create interest that makes the


reader want to read on?

Does the essay have a clear thesis statement? 

Is each main idea clearly stated in the topic


sentence?

Are the topic sentences adequately supported with


supporting points and supporting details?

Is the information taken from related has been


paraphrased?

Are the quotation taken (if any), correctly cited or


acknowledged?

2. Are the in-text citations correctly done? 

Does each sentence flow smoothly to the next


sentence?

Are there transition signals to show relationship


between arguments?

Are the sentences clear and direct? Can they be


understood on the first reading?

Has the grammar and spelling been carefully


checked?

3. Does the essay have effective conclusion? 

Does the list of references follow the APA format? 

4.
Are the references complete? 
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WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 4b – ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY

[FINAL DRAFT]

ESSAY TITLE: ZOOS SHOULD BE BANNED.

Zoos are almost indispensable places to visit in cities today, and going to the

zoo is a favourite activity for children and families. There is an issue of whether zoos

should be abolished has been widely debated in our community recently. It is an

important topic because the zoo is the only place where brings people and animals

together and educates the public to enhance appreciation of the animals. Opponents

think that we are not entitled to trap animals in zoos and strip their freedom.

Supporters say that zoos have harmed the animals, despite the fact that zoos

provide a safe environment for animals and educate the public.

Opponents of this idea claim that animals in captivity suffer from stress,

boredom due to confinement which makes animals in captivity do not live as long as

those in the wild. According to Rowcliffe (2008), the records of 4,500 elephants

found that an African elephant in captivity lives on an average of 16.9 years and an

African elephant in the wild lives in an average of 56 years. However, the zoo

provides an enriched habitat in which the animals are never bored, are well cared for

and have plenty of space to roam freely. Modern zoos can offer animals a living

environment. According to researchers where zoo animals nowadays are roaming in

larger areas in the better zoos that are similar to the natural environment and

protected by moats, cliffs, not by bars (Rothfels, 2002).

Next, some argue that people can learn more about animals by watching

wildlife documentaries. There is some effectiveness of education by watching wildlife

documentaries. Wildlife documentary plays an important role in the public's

knowledge of science and environmental problems as it affects public involvement in

 UPM-CALC/CEL2103 WRTING ACADEMIC TEXTS/SEM 1 2019-2020/WP/TASK 4A

environmental policies and conflicts. Besides, the documentary also created views of

wildlife and nature for people (Richards, 2013). On the other hand, learning by own

experience, interacting with animals is more accurate and interesting than watching

documentaries. Moreover, we are able to know the natural behaviour of all animals.

Andersen (2003) argued that zoos do play an important educational role and that

documentaries can be misleading. The behavior of animals in zoos has become

more natural than 10–15 years ago.

Overall, reasons were given to believe that zoos enlighten society about the

importance of animals in a good way. It lets people gain knowledge about wildlife

and gives animals protection. Though it looks like animals are being tortured by

bringing them to one place from their natural habitats, they are being protected for

the betterment of them and society. Hence, it is our responsibility to understand that

the animals have the right to live like every one of us does and protect them.
 UPM-CALC/CEL2103 WRTING ACADEMIC TEXTS/SEM 1 2019-2020/WP/TASK 4A

REFERENCES:

Rowcliffe, M., Clubb, R., Moss, C., Mason, G. J., Lee, P., & Mar, K. U. (2008).

Compromised survivorship in zoo elephants. Science, 322(5908), 1649.

https://doi.org/10.1126/science.1164298

Rothfels, N.(2002). Savages and Beasts: The Birth of the Modern Zoo. Baltimore:

Johns Hopkins University Press. Retrieved September 3, 2019

Richards, M. (2013). Greening Wildlife Documentary, 96–97.

Andersen, L. (2001). Zoo education: from formal school programs to exhibit design

and interpretation. International Zoo Yearbook. 38. 75 - 81.