Ticket Id: 230390

Wednesday,
November 27,
2019

Nowadays individuals have become more conscious about what products they consume and how they affect both their
health and environment. Current trends and research show that eliminating meat and fish actually increases lifespan and
has a positive impact on ecology.

As many nutritionists report, the protein contained in meat causes more harm than good to a human body, and my
experience approves this statement. I have noticed improvement in my own appearance after I eliminated fatty meats
such as pork, bacon and ready-to-eat products, such as sausages and salami from my meals. I have not only lost weight,
but also got rid of acnes. In addition, I felt more energized and more positive and became less anxious about my day-to-
day issues. The reason of such a marvelous effect is, in my opinion, that meat, especially the processed one, contains
dangerous additives which intoxicate the body and causes negative side effects.

Moreover, saying “no” to meat, people improve not only their health, but also environment. The production of meat is a
sizable industry, which requires a lot if various resources, including both labor and nature. In order to provide space for,
for instance, cow farms, deforestation takes place. The production lines consume electricity and emit greenhouse gases
that lead to the global warming. It seems to me that if the demand for the meat decreased, there would be no need for
such industrial facilities at all.

Overall, many people, myself included, say that elimination of meat from our dishes bring positive results to people’s
health and may become the effective solution for hazardous environmental problems of the planet.

Evaluation Report

Word Count 267

Comments An effort to accomplish the task is visible. The candidate has
presented some relevant ideas but they could be better
developed. There are instances where sentences could be
written in a better way. Moreover, there are many errors
pertaining to grammar and word choice. Overall, the essay
needs to be improved further.
Estimated Band Score 6.5
Task achievement Coherence/Cohesion Lexical resource Grammar & Accuracy
7.0 6.0 6.0 6.0
Suggestions 1. Revise grammar and improve sentences.
2. Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words.
3. Always proofread the task response after finishing it.
4. Keep practicing to improve your performance.
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