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very good
start.
Reconsider what section this next paragraph is in: it seems to belong in a section on "Age" or maybe "New
Research"?
"while" indicates opposition, so both parts of this sentence should be about either color, or amount
shown out of eye socket.
Develop
hmmm, but don't tree-living animals communicate with eyes, too? or no?
explain.
again, don't other animals hunt in packs and
cooperate?
I love that you started with "suggests," which indicates the difficulty of
proving causation here.
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Text Comment. Two Successes: I really enjoyed reading this definition. 1) Great incorporation
of relevant, authoritative research to support the definition. 2) Great choice of secondary topics
(evolution and disease). Interesting to reader. Two Challenges: 1) You can probably reconsider the
"chunking" here. See below for more details.
QM One-Sent Def
In Markel on Definitions, we learned a strategy for writing one-sentence definition, and our prompt
requires students to begin their definitions with one. Can you add one?
Text Comment. Reconsider what section this next paragraph is in: it seems to belong in a
section on "Age" or maybe "New Research"?
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Text Comment. "while" indicates opposition, so both parts of this sentence should be about
either color, or amount shown out of eye socket.
QM Develop
Can you develop this claim or idea? Build it with more explanation, examples, or details.
Text Comment. hmmm, but don't tree-living animals communicate with eyes, too? or no?
explain.
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Text Comment. again, don't other animals hunt in packs and cooperate?
Text Comment. I love that you started with "suggests," which indicates the difficulty of proving
causation here.
Text Comment. Awesome summary, and you've now answered my questions. If you decide to
revise this for your portfolio, consider reorganizing to at least gesture toward these theories earlier.
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RUBRIC: 363 DEFINITION RUBRIC
ABSENT OR BELOW Audience's needs are often not recognized: terms and ideas need explanation and
BASIC language needs adjustment for the audience. Purpose (to define or term or concept)isn't
clear or achieved.
DEVELOPING Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes defining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to define or term or concept)
may be unclear at times, and it may not be achieved convincingly.
PROFICIENT Shows attention to audience's needs, defining necessary terms and ideas and using
audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to define or term or concept) may be implied,
but it's clear and achieved.
ADVANCED Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, defining necessary terms and ideas
and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to define a term or concept) is clear
and achieved with style.
ABSENT OR BELOW Omits or uses incorrectly quotation marks and/or MLA-, APA-, or Wikipedia-style (number
BASIC system) parenthetical citations and works cited list. Many citation errors. Does not cite
from a variety of discipline-appropriate sources. May be over-reliant on a single source.
DEVELOPING A few errors in quotation marks, MLA-, APA-, or Wikipedia-style (number system)
parenthetical citations and works cited list. May cite superficially from sources. May be
over-reliant on a single source.
PROFICIENT Correctly uses quotation marks and MLA-, APA-, or Wikipedia-style (number system)
parenthetical citations and works cited list. May have 1-2 citation errors. Cites from a
variety of discipline-appropriate sources.
ADVANCED Consistently and correctly uses quotation marks and MLA-, APA-, or Wikipedia-style
(number system) in-text (parenthetical) and end-of-text (reference list) citations for all
sources, whether quoted directly or paraphrased. Cites from a variety of discipline-
appropriate sources. Never over-reliant on a single source.
PERS/SUPPORT Advanced
SLO #3: Compare, evaluate, synthesize, and communicate carefully, objectively, and persuasively the relative
merits of alternative or opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values.
ABSENT OR BELOW Fails to support claims with specific explanations, examples, etc.. Objectivity may be
BASIC lacking.
DEVELOPING Attempts to support claims with explanations, examples, etc., but specificity and/or
objectivity may be lacking.
PROFICIENT Usually supports the definition's claims with relevant, thorough, and specific explanations,
examples, etc.. Usually maintains objectivity.
ADVANCED Supports the definition's claims with relevant, thorough, and specific explanations,
examples, etc.. Maintains objectivity.
ORGANIZATION Proficient
SLO #4: Organize, focus, and communicate one’s thoughts clearly and effectively to address a rhetorical
situation.
ABSENT OR BELOW Organizational devices (one-sentence definition; introduction; logical partitioning; topic
BASIC sentences, headings, transitions) may be absent, unrelated to the prompt, or illogically
connected. Ps contain multiple topics or are disorganized.
ABSENT OR BELOW Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability. Language may reflect a
BASIC gender or cultural bias or be too high or too low. Design may be unconventional and
ineffective.
DEVELOPING Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors often impede readability or otherwise
distract from meaning. Style may be either too high or too low. Language may occasionally
suggest a gender or cultural bias. Design may be inconventional or ineffective.
PROFICIENT Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are few and do not distract from meaning.
Middle-level-style. Language respects gender and cultural differences. Design is
conventional and effective.
ADVANCED Outstanding control of language, with middle-level style, including effective diction and
sentence variety. Language respects gender and cultural differences. Design is
conventional and effective.