Name: Sara

Writing 2 – Winter 2020

Writing Project 1 Submission Draft Evaluation (5% of Overall Class Grade)

Essay Quality A (96%) B (86%) C (76%) D (66%)

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Thesis comments below –
Statement and statement needs
Overall Thesis some revision and
(Argument) of overall argument
Essay (50%) could be developed
further – one more
focus of
comparison, for
example the
cultural
weight/credibility
we accord to
infographics and
songs.
Mostly strong
Use of Textual moments where
Evidence (35%) explanation of the
text connects to
genre features, but
sometimes leaning
onto textual
summary/individual
features takes away
from the overall
genre analysis.
Overall
Organization organization
(15%) doesn’t always
support a genre
comparison
over text-focus.
Some topic
sentences don’t
help capture
the focus, or
the comparison
that actually
 happens in the
paragraph as
well.
Comments: Thesis statement initial impression: I like what’s being introduced (significance is
there, arguability is almost there, road map is not quite there), but what I’m wondering is if you
meant the current phrasing that makes it seem like both musicals and infographics are
emotional and analytical – if this is the case, is it worth already acknowledging they are
proportionately different in their balance of them?

Overall Grade: 85% B