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SOCIAL AND ECONOMIC IMPACTS Of SOCIAL MEDIA

An Essay written by: Muharrem Yağız Türk Student no: 200907043 /223 Words exceeding the essay
limit by 23 words. /

Social Media is a progressive tool that helps us communicate around


the globe with unfathomable speed. While it was built for
communication it has a more sinister side to it than just that.

Recently you can see that governments all around the World are
banning social media platforms that are created by a rival country,
like Tiktok getting banned from the USA. It is happening because of
some main reasons that I deal with now. Social media can help us
build our business by giving advertisements for cheap or not letting
our rival company advertise on their platform although when you
come to think of it doesn’t it create monopolies? Facebook,
Instagram; YouTube all have huge monopolies in their fields.

When you think about the social impacts of social media while it lets
us communicate with each other faster it also creates a social World
order where we are never confronted by strangers if we so desire
and we can live in isolation just like the Japanese youth does now
anti-social and deprived of relationships.

I hereby wish to conclude my words and give you a clear answer: If


we are not careful with this new advantage we got as a species it
might be our next plight over centuries to come so we must
safeguard it from corruption lest we become corrupt.
https://www.cosmopolitan.com/lifestyle/a33261844/tiktok-ban-united-states-explained/

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Suicide_in_Japan#:~:text=In%20Japan%2C%20suicide%20 (In Japan,
suicide (自殺, jisatsu) is considered a major social issue.[2][3])
Peer Review on Muharrem Yağız Türk’s Essay
Made by : Berat Sarı

1.Does The composition have these things?


A title ☑
A clear structure ☑
Appropriate punctuation ☑
Write the thesis statement here: If we are not careful with the technology which we all can
have access to, it might be our ruination.
Underline the topic sentences in each paragraph:
1-Social Media is a progressive tool that helps us communicate around the globe with
unfathomable speed.
2-Social media can help us build our business by giving advertisements for cheap or not
letting our rival company advertise on their platform although when you come to think of it
doesn’t it create monopolies?
3-When you think about the social impacts of social media while it lets us communicate with
each other faster it also creates a social World order where we are never confronted by
strangers if we so desire and we can live in isolation just like the Japanese youth does now
anti-social and deprived of relationships.
4-‘’It might be our next plight over centuries’’
Write the number of any paragraphs that don’t have a clear topic sentence here: 0
Is the author’s position on the issue/topic clear? : Yes it’s clear
Have they included any vocabulary from the unit? If so, is it used appropriately?: Yes , The
author used it appropriately.
Have they used any grammar from the unit? If so, is it used appropriately?: Yes , The
author used it appropriately.
Underline any sentences or passages you particularly like. What do you like about them?
“Facebook, Instagram; YouTube all have huge monopolies in their field“ The author is aware
of the fact that these social platforms have monopolies.
“it might be our next plight over centuries to come so we must safeguard it from corruption
lest we become corrupt. “ I like his assumption because its possibility is high also for me.
Are sources provided for factual statements? Yes, the statement about Tiktok is true
Are claims or arguments supported by evidence? Yes these are supported by evidence and
claims are also can be seen easily on any social platform
Write one question about the content for author: What should we do to impede this
corruption?

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