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Opinion Essay
Tasks:
Find at least three articles or news reports from newspapers or magazines on a topic
which will be given to you to choose from.
Write a 350-450 word opinion essay (about 2 pages typed) using Arial 11 or Times New
Roman 12 with 1.5 spacing where you put forward your opinion on or analysis of the topic.
Support your opinion in the essay using the selected articles. At the end of your essay,
there must be a reference section that gives the full citations of these articles.
1. The three articles you have cited and referenced in your essay.
2. Essay outline
3. Draft 1
4. Peer Feedback Form 2
5. Draft 2
6. Peer Feedback Form 2
Your draft should show proof of editing done. A CLEAN draft (without any comments
or editing done either by you or your peer) shows that you HAVE NOT DONE the
editing process. Your mark may be deducted.
7. Final draft* (This is the one that will be graded by the instructors. Please make sure it
is clean and well presented.)
Explanation
1. Outline
• Organise you main points and specific details into an outline.
• Your outline must follow the format below.
2. Drafts
Step 1: Based on your outline, write the first draft of your essay. Then ask your friend
(who is also taking this course) to read and comment on your essay. He/she
may write whatever comments or corrections on the draft itself and she/he
must also complete the Peer Feedback Form 2 provided. This checklist
must be stapled to the first draft. Write First Draft at the top of the first page.
Step 2: Based on the edited first draft, do your second draft. Again ask your friend to
edit your essay. Repeat Step 1. Staple the second Peer Feedback Form 2
to the second draft. Write Second Draft at the top of the first page.
Step 3: Write your final essay. Write Final Draft at the top of the first page.
ESSAY OUTLINE
Use complete sentences when you write the thesis statement, topic sentences and conclusion.
The rest, you may use phrases (incomplete sentences).
I. Introduction
1. Introduction
• The introduction paragraph starts with general ideas and leads to yes no
the thesis statement.
• The thesis statement is clear and presents the writer’s own view on the topic. yes no
2. Support
• The topic sentences in each paragraph support the thesis statement yes no
• Each supporting point in a paragraph is elaborated on
with details and/or examples. yes no
• The writer has incorporated ideas/information from other sources to
strengthen his/her arguments yes no
• The writer has made it clear how his/her citations of info from other sources
contribute to his/her own arguments yes no
3. Unity
• Each paragraph discusses only one main idea. yes no
• All the topic sentences support the thesis. yes no
• There are no irrelevant sentences in each paragraph. yes no
• All info/ideas cited from other sources are directly relevant
to the thesis/topic sentences yes no
4. Coherence
__________________________________________________________________
• In each paragraph, I have used transition words/repetition of key words
to show relationships among supporting points and details. yes no
______________________________________________________________________
• The writer has used consistent nouns and pronouns throughout the essay yes no
• The writer has clearly linked the ideas cited from other sources to the
thesis/topic sentences. yes no
5. Referencing
• The writer has quoted/cited from at least three articles correctly
and completely in the text of my essay. yes no
• The writer has put the complete citation of these articles in the reference section. yes no
6. Concluding paragraph
• The concluding paragraph reflects the ideas in the thesis statement yes no
• I have repeated key words/ideas from the thesis statement and
supporting ideas. yes no
OPINION ESSAY
OPINION ESSAY
SAMPLE ESSAY 1
Nowadays, a lot of sexual crimes have been reported in the mass media. They did not
only involve teenagers and women but even small babies. According to Datuk Chor Chee
Heung, Deputy Home Minister (The Star 3 April 2009, pN 30), the number of rape cases
increased by threefold since last year compared with the previous year. This alarming increase
is certainly a cause for great concern to the public. Malaysians have the tendency to depend
heavily on the police to provide protection; however, I strongly believe that this is not a job for
the police alone, but it is everyone’s responsibility to reduce sexual crimes.
The first and most important way to reduce sexual crime is that everyone especially
women should practice martial arts. In fact, schools should actively encourage students to take
up martial arts as co-curriculum activities. According to Subang MP Sivarasa Rasiah; “There
is only one policeman for 260 people,” (The Star, 3 April 2009, pM 36). This clearly shows
that the police cannot be of help when the public especially women are confronted with assaults
or other sexual crimes. If women have martial arts skills, they will have the ability to deter would
be assailants or rapists.
Sexual crimes can also be reduced if parents are more vigilant. They must shoulder the
responsibility of caring for their children’s safety. They should not leave the care of their children
entirely to baby-sitters or child-carers. They must give attention to their children and make the
time to know their children’s friends well. This is because sexual abuse can be perpetrated by
someone they just met, or dated a few times, or even someone to whom they are close to.
Indeed, even close relatives can commit such heinous crime. In a case related by Petaling Jaya
OCPD, a sixteen-year-old girl reported that she was allegedly raped by her father and molested
by three other men in her house (The Star, 3 April 2009, pN 10). For working parents, before
sending their children to child minders, they must check their backgrounds. A 39-year-old
mother recently reported that the Indonesian maid at her child’s kindergarten had molested her
five-year-old daughter (The Star, 3 April 2009, pN 10).
Finally, in my point of view, awareness campaigns are very effective in combating sexual
crimes. Commercials in radios and televisions depicting these crimes and how to prevent them
should be aired periodically. During these campaigns, too, the police can hold sexual crime
prevention talks with the public. Hot lines should also be set up not only to help victims but also
provide a place for the public to make reports or complaints. I believe, in this way, the public can
be made to be more aware and vigilant of these crimes. Besides that, these campaigns should
also highlight the punishments meted to those who commit these crimes. Thus, would be
assailants or molesters will think twice before looking for victims.
In short, I strongly feel that these three ways can be helpful in reducing sexual crimes.
Everyone in the community should play his/her role in preventing the number of sexual crime
cases from escalating to alarming level. We must not depend solely on the police to solve this
problem.
(490 words)
References
1. Rape cases number 4,959 last year – up 300% from 2007. (2009, April 3).
The Star, p.N30.
2. Be proactive in fighting against crime. (2009, April 3). The Star, p.N30.
3. Mother: My daughter told me kind maid molested her. (2009, April 3).
The Star, p.N30.
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SAMPLE ESSAY 2
References
Edmondson, Brad. "Life without Illegal Immigrants." American Demographics May 1996: 1.
http://www.votesmart.org/issues/Immigration/chap2/imm2itx.html.
McCarthy, Martha M. "Immigrants in Public Schools: Legal Issues."
Educational Horizons 71 (1993): 128-30.
Knutson, A. (1999). Why Educate the Children of Illegal Immigrants? Hacker Handbook
Resources. Retrieved from http://www.bedfordstmartins.com/hacker/arguing.htm)
TOPIC
ESSAY WRITING ASSIGNMENT 2
Write a five-paragraph essay of about 500 words on one of the following topics. Your paper
should have a one-paragraph introduction that engages the reader’s interest and presents
the thesis statement to be developed in your essay; three supporting paragraphs, each with
a topic sentence; and a short concluding paragraph consisting of a summary and a final
thought.
Make sure you include proper citations in your essay and at the end of it, cite the references
that you used in APA style.
1. Read the following article about obesity. What do you feel are realistic steps that
could be taken to reduce obesity among Malaysian children? Think about three things we
could do to prevent obesity, and then write an essay describing each one in detail.
ONE out of four children in the country is either overweight or obese. One out of three
teenagers is overweight, while one out of six is obese.
It's no wonder Malaysia has earned a spot in the "World Map of Obesity".
Childhood obesity levels in Malaysia are higher than in most Asian countries as well as
developed nations such as Netherlands, the United Kingdom and Germany.
And the problem is getting worse, says Universiti Kebangsaan Malaysia professor of human
nutrition Dr Mohd Ismail Noor and Universiti Malaya Medical Centre paediatric
endocrinologist Dr Muhammad Yazid Jalaludin.
Dr Ismail says obesity is on the rise among all demographic groups. However, prevalence
rates differed across gender and ethnic groups.
His studies in 2002 and 2008, which were funded by Nestle, were conducted among children
aged between 7 and 12 in Peninsular Malaysia. The survey data was calculated based on
the World Health Organisations' 2007 criteria.
A total of 11,242 schoolchildren from 58 schools were surveyed in 2002, and 10,009
students from 69 schools in 2008.
The 2002 study found one out of every five children to be overweight or obese.
Dr Ismail says boys had a higher obesity and overweight rate with an increase of 7.1 per
cent, while the rate for girls increased by 4.4 per cent.
There was an alarming increase in the number of overweight and obese Indian children,
followed by Malay and Chinese.
"Indian schoolchildren had the highest overweight and obese rates. The increase was rather
significant at 9.9 per cent from 16.9 per cent to 26.1 per cent. Among Malay children, the
increase was 7.1 per cent from 19.1 per cent to 26.1 per cent.
"The Chinese must be doing something right as there was only a two per cent increase from
25.6 per cent to 27.6 per cent."
Another startling finding, he says, was that the increase in the overall prevalence of obese
and overweight children was in rural areas.
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"The prevalence in both urban and rural areas increased from 2002 to 2008. While the urban
setting saw an increase of 5.7 per cent, the increase was higher in the rural areas at 7.6 per
cent."
Overweight and obesity levels were also high among preschoolers, he says, as indicated by
another survey.
"A recently concluded study involving 992 preschoolers aged 5 to 6 years, randomly
selected from 72 privately-owned kindergartens in the Klang Valley, reported that the
prevalence of overweight and obese boys and girls were 9.7 per cent and 9.2 per cent
respectively," says Dr Ismail, who is also the president of the Malaysian Association for the
Study of Obesity.
Based on the survey by Dr Yazid's group, the Malaysian Paediatric Obesity Working Group
Research, at a secondary school in Petaling Jaya among 1,200 students between 12 and 17
years in 2005/2006, about one-third (28 per cent) of the students were overweight and,
among them, 16 per cent were obese.
Of this number, says Dr Yazid, 19 per cent of Malays were obese, followed by Indians (14.5
per cent) and Chinese (13 per cent).
He says that 70 per cent of overweight students were at high risk of contracting diabetes.
Another surprising finding, says Dr Yazid, was that 14 per cent of the students were
underweight.
"So in addition to the problem of Malaysians being overweight, there is also the problem of
underweight Malaysian adolescents.
"The overweight and the underweight adolescents made up almost half of the study
population in that school.
"We have to do something to address both problems."Air your comment on this issue:
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2. Read the following article. Do you think that having a rally or a demonstration is (or is
not) an effective way to get your voices or opinions heard? Think about three things in
which you think rally or a demonstration is (or is not) an effective way to get your voices or
opinions heard, and then write an essay describing each one in detail.
Police fired water cannon at protesters as about 600 Malaysians held a noisy rally outside
the US embassy after Friday prayers to demand Egyptian President Hosni Mubarak resign
immediately.
The protesters, comprising opposition political and civil rights groups led by the conservative
Pan-Malaysia Islamic Party, had marched from a nearby mosque shouting “Down, Down
Mubarak!”
Many of them carried a banner saying “We march with Egyptians”. Others held placards with
the words “Down, down Mubarak” and “Mubarak your game is over”, as a police helicopter
buzzed low over them.
Security outside the embassy in Kuala Lumpur was tight with 200 heavily armed riot police
displaying batons, shields and tear gas rifles.
“The United States of America clearly has a big influence on Hosni Mubarak. It is time for the
United States of America to state its stand, in no uncertain terms, that Mubarak must go,”
the demonstrators demanded.
“The Egyptian people deserve a regime change. Egyptians deserve their freedom, the right
to self-determination and the right to build their own future.”
S. Arulchelvan, secretary-general of the Socialist Party of Malaysia, lashed out at police for
firing the water cannon and arresting three people.
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“It was unnecessary. The people were going home after a peaceful rally when police fired
the water cannon,” he said.
Normala Daud, 52, a teacher who joined the rally, said: “We are peaceful protesters. I am
here to support the pro-democracy protesters in Egypt. Mubarak is a cruel leader. He must
go immediately.”